Arakis Prime? Isn't that the sand planet from "Dune"? Nice!

It has a story, but JEEEZZZZZZZZZ you don't need to RE-describe each character every other paragraph! It Isn't Listenable!

the AI sounds like Chester the molester

Sustainable and equitable? No science or technology ever advanced through an over abundance of caution. This is like a DEI joke. All the buzzwords are in place.

sick

Where is the human fleet ?

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why no comments yet?

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Hmm, so one of the expedition engineers figures out the Quantum Communications and sends a message to earth with it getting a response in a few minutes. How did Earth recieve the message and transmit a reply when the only people with the tech were the expedition crew? I would take over a year for a message of how to make a quantum communicator to reach Earth then time to build it. So much dont make sense in this story. It is a decent story and the premise is good though it has nothing to do with the title.

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HFY Stiry, You're fantastic! Let's be friends and have fun!

The first 3-4 "chapters" of the story are mixed up badly. It goes from the protagonist waking up and preparing to try contacting other humans to being at outpost 23 working with the people from there to wake up more people in cryo pods(no idea where the pods came from) to him traveling across the ice alone and being met by people from outpost 23 for the first time. The idea that a hidden base with humanities last hope of survival after the Earth is destroyed by the "galactic council" being built on Earth and being able to last half a million years is impossible. Even if that was somehow to become possible, someone in cryo sleep in that base would not survive that long. Humanity building a last resort base and only putting a single person inside it would also be stupidity incarnate. I guess if he was the last human to survive, they would expect him to multiply by cellular division and recreate the species. Upon waking up he found settlements of humanity across the world via the bases map. Those were human settlements. In half a million years since the destruction of the planet, humanity has only been able to grow a few settlements that dont communicate wit each other. Those same people, after half a million years, still speak the same language as the protagonist of the story. Ill try listening to tge rest but its already hard to listen to just from the first 16 minutes.

First thing i noticed was the Climate Change notification at the bottom of the video. Why would the algorithm put that on a fictional sci fy video?

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A bit much on unity, equity, and a bunch of pandemics. Kind of heavy on "the message".

Humanity at its worst-best Edit: also first suckers

Easy background listening

Repeated content. No one has bothered to check the script

I found your story interesting.

Title totally miss leading

"BUT" ??? Now I know that there's a part #2 ??? Ya just got me interested and then Gone... Lessons yet UnLearned !!!

Maybe you could work on some original names, you might end up thinking that the entire human population are suburban Americans.

Yeah right. Alien high school, Alpha Centauri A, now accepting new students. 😂😂😂

That title tho...

HAHAHAHA... Tomato bisque... essentially tomatoes, heavy cream, and almost no spices or such... Beef wellington, beef coated in mushrooms, wrapped in pastry... may or may not contain mustard.. They went for dishes that had little to know "pop" and limited ingredient...

i thought it was something else

Keep trying

The story repeats itself it was good until the repeat

Nice story, I'd buy your work.

I love the stories but just some constructive criticism you might want to refrain from using some of the same statements after each meal and the repetitive statements describing what the station has become

That's repeating

The story repeats multiple times

30 seconds and I am bored. When is this AI supposed to happen?

Wow, hah. I'm first But this is so interesting. Maybe next time, match the story with the AI art.

At minute 38 there seems to be a different story going on all of the sudden. What was that all about? For a short story this was pretty good. I tend to write long stories because there is always so much to flesh out, so I understand the bare bones story telling style. The over-the-top narrative praise of the Odyssey and it's mission gets a bit heavy handed. A lot of the writing in those examples was great, but you don't have to beat the reader over the head with it That kind of feeling is evoked in the reader when our protagonists makes that happen through action and dialogue. I actually stopped the video at that weirdness at minute 38. All-in-all it was a good short story that has a lot of potential to become a really great long form tale. Given the topic, with enough work and thought it could easily be the draft of a future epic.

As future spacers , these guys would NEVER have left the salvage behind!!

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Ever see Heavy Metal?

Billie Eilish!

Is this based on the comic book? “John Carter”.?

ya learned a new word cacophony its in every story. and If I wanted flowery, I would read a spring poem. Your stories have a great backbone. if you are doing your own editing read it backwards, you will catch a lot of mistakes,,,,I do the blue highlights drive me nuts, I find myself watching then and not listening

Copy paste story. No thought, no soul, no intrigue.

I had stop the video. How they survive an explosion? That was big enough too destroy nuclear engines. They ran back too the sentinel? I know it Science Fiction !!! BUT!!!!

The A.I. did the thing again, you now, where it repeats itself and overwrites some of the story and then continues not where it left off but later in the the story as if the story continued while the A.I. repeated itself? So ya, down vote. At least give these stories a once through before posting! End up going from pretty good to trash real fast.

This is a pretty good story to hear about.

Air was thick with an unfamiliar scent............ that you can smell through your pressure suit in the vacuum of space? TOTAL CRAP, that's where I stopped listening.

Keep reapting same things and same words over and over! Story should be over in 3 minutes or less!

Good start. Simple quick story. more though should be taken for each short story.