Either get voice training or hire someone who has.

Your background music is very strange. It sounds like it's nothing but the intros to different songs. It reminds me of someone that keeps hitting next song on their music player over and over. For the most part the volume of the background music was good, but at one point it was a bit too loud, where it was difficult to hear the narration.

The intruders were scalped and eat alive from what my people say. Which is good because all the caucasian settlers are still mot welcome here in Turtle Island.