Bài 6: Cách viết Mở Bài | INTRODUCTION IELTS Writing Task 2 đơn giản và hiệu quả | IELTS Thanh Loan

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• Bài 1: Giới thiệu về I...
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• Bài 3: Bốn dạng câu hỏ...
• Bài 4: Tiêu chí chấm đ...
• Bài 5: Bố cục bài viết...
• Bài 6: Cách viết Mở Bà...
• Bài 7: Cách viết Thân ...
• Bài 8: Hướng dẫn viết ...
• Bài 9: Cách viết Thân ...
• Bài 10: Cách viết đoạn...
• Bài 11: Hướng dẫn viết...
• Bài 12: Cách viết IELT...
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[@IELTSThanhLoan2014]

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[@Hinie1508]

Series của cô rất hay ạ. Em xin góp bài của em, mong cô chữa giúp em ạ Example 1: It is belived that medical services should not be established by companies which just only focus on finance, because having robustness is fundamental human requirements. Whereas there are many benefits of non-state healthcare, I must admit that the drawbacks is more important. Example: It is argue that dress code should not essential play a role for workplace overseers, because of the significant their work output. I partially agree with this perspective with this view.

[@Quynhanhh-j2c]

Em cảm ơn cô vì một series bài giảng siêu bổ ích. Em xin gửi bài của em, mong cô chữa giúp em ạ VD1: Some individuals believe that healthcare services should not be managed by companies whose aim is to make a profit because good health is a fundamental human requirement. While private healthcare may exert some benefits, there are far more drawbacks. VD2: Certain individuals argue that performance at work should be prioritized by employers, rather than the dressing style of staff. While acknowledging the benefits of dress code at work, I believe that one's output should be given importance by the managers and superiors.

[@KiranHo-e4h]

e cám ơn cô rất nhiều vì những bài giảng của cô giúp e học dễ dàng hơn, mong cô check giúp em với ạ: VD1: Certain individuals contend that well-being is a fundamental human necessity, and therefore medical services should not be managed by profit-oriented corporations. While I acknowledge the profound benefits of privatized healthcare, I believe that this healthcare system offers more drawbacks, particularly in terms of affordability and equal access, which outweigh the advantages.

[@Hey_Studywithme]

Question 1: it is believed by some individuals that well-being plays an important and necessary role in human, and therefore, medical services should not be organized by private companies. In my opinion, this has both advantages and disadvantages, this essay will answer it. Question 2: there is a belief held by some that the attire of employers is not necessary and they should just care about the quality of work. This answer will give a balanced view on the matter. Mong cô chữa giúp e ạ

[@ducng7075]

VD 1 : It is believed that optimal well-being plays a crucial role as a fundamental human need. Therefore, medical services should not be managed by private companies whose primary aim is profit. While there are several potential negative effects, I believe that people can derive more benefits from private medical services VD 2: Some argue that job performance holds paramount importance, leading company representatives to permit employees to dress according to their preferences. I partially agree with this perspective for several reasons Cô chữa giúp em ạ

[@IELTSThanhLoan2014]

very nice introductions

[@linhlam9931]

hay quá cô ơi

[@IELTSThanhLoan2014]

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[@DungNguyen-kk7qr]

Em cám ơn cô nhiều ạ

[@IELTSThanhLoan2014]

E có thể tham khảo rất nhiều tài liệu hay mình soạn ở đây fchat.vn/a/4f910663

[@KiranHo-e4h]

VD2: Some argue that professional appearance is less important than employee performance, and therefore managers should not prioritize their staff’s choice of clothing. However, I advocate a strict dress code, suggesting that it contributes significantly to fostering a professional and cohesive workplace atmosphere.

[@Duynn-tj7mp]

It is acknowledged that employees' attire must not be as overly concerned about by organizational authorities as work productivity which is the most fundamental prerequisite. From my own perspective, I partially agree with prioritizing staff's clothing style. em cảm ơn ạ!

[@IELTSThanhLoan2014]

bỏ cái đuôi which is ... đi rạ, nó khiến ngữ pháp câu khó hiểu bỏ from my perspective vì I ... đã thể hiện quan điểm cá nhân r

[@Duynn-tj7mp]

@@IELTSThanhLoan2014 dạ vâng ạ

[@_Marissa06]

Question 01: It is believed by some people that commercial corporations shouldn’t operate medical services due to the fact that healthiness is an essential necessity. While there are some drawbacks caused by this, my viewpoint is that the benefits of non-public healthcare completely outweigh the disadvantages. Question 02: There is a consensus of some individuals that employees’ working outfit is not important in comparison to their work quality. Therefore, managers and superiors shouldn’t pay attention to how they dress. In my perspective, I completely disagree with the aforementioned belief. Mong cô chữa bài giúp ạ

[@HungNguyen-yi9gn]

It is argued that managers and superiors should give importance to the caliber of their employees' work instead of being overly concerned about what they wear. This essay will examine both merits of each perspective and then present my balanced view on the matter.

[@IELTSThanhLoan2014]

merits of both perspectives

[@HungNguyen-yi9gn]

@@IELTSThanhLoan2014 thank you! Teacher

[@jikipham7084]

It is a common belief that healthiness is a core huma prerequisite , and therefore , medical services should not be operated by non-governmental corporations. In spite of many enormous profits of privatized healthcare, it is entered my mind that its demerits eclipse .

[@IELTSThanhLoan2014]

unnecessary comma before "and therefore" "it is entered my mind that its demerits eclipse" is awkward and unclear. A more formal way to express this would be "I believe that ..."

[@MaiHongdayne]

em cảm ơn cô nhiều lắm ạ:3

[@IELTSThanhLoan2014]

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[@tipxinhhh26]

ra thêm nhiều wrinting task 2 đi ạ

[@IELTSThanhLoan2014]

mình đang trong quá trình nha em

[@pakum1234]

trong writing có đc viết tắt kiểu don't shouldn't mustn't không cô 😬😬

[@IELTSThanhLoan2014]

dạ ko được phép e nhé

[@lươngtriet-n1b]

The opinion is held by some that managers and superiors mustn't be overly concerned about the clothing style of their staff due to the caliber of work. In my opinion, however, I do not see to eye with that notion

[@JuliaJeon-de7ce]

Dạ cho e mình viết intro theo từ đồng nghĩa thì band mình đc bao nhiêu ạ

[@IELTSThanhLoan2014]

ko thể chỉ nhìn vào intro để đánh giá bandscore. Càng ko thể chỉ nhìn vào phương pháp ở đây là dùng từ đồng nghĩa :D Có quá nhiều yếu tố như chất lượng từ, sự chính xác trong dùng từ, ngữ pháp .... > Câu hỏi của em ko phù hợp nhé ạ

[@nguyenmailinh1907]

The opinion is held by certain individuals that fundamental human requirement for all individuals , and as such medical servives should not be controlled by profit-driven corporations . This answer will elanorate on both upsides and downsides of non-govermental healthcare before presenting my stance Em cảm ơn ạ!

[@IELTSThanhLoan2014]

"Elaborate" instead of "elanorate" and "medical services" instead of "medical servives." The phrase "fundamental human requirement for all individuals" is repetitive >> "fundamental human requirement" is okie

[@mainguyenphanthanh6846]

Certain individuals contend that healthiness is a fundamental human requirement. Therefore, medical services should not be operated by non-state healthcare. While there are several benefits of non-public healthcare, I firmly believe that individuals can receive more drawbacks from this healthcare systems. Nhờ cô xem ạ

[@IELTSThanhLoan2014]

individuals can receive more drawbacks from this healthcare systems. > diễn đạt này weird quá

[@linhcao9322]

The opinion is held by certain individuals that good heath is an crucial human necessity, and thus, medical services should not be conducted by corporations making profit. Despite several profound benifits of non-govermental heath care, I believe that the drawbacks of it eclipse

[@IELTSThanhLoan2014]

The opinion held by certain individuals is that good heath is an crucial human necessity sai spelling từ benefits,

[@linhcao9322]

@@IELTSThanhLoan2014 thank you teacher

[@urah_cand]

@@IELTSThanhLoan2014 dạ cô ơi sao lại is an crucial human necessity thế ạ , crucial bắt đầu bằng phụ âm mà ạ

[@IELTSThanhLoan2014]

@@linhcao9322 a crucial necessity mình có thể type nhầm lúc đó