Debt to Society [RAINBOW FACTORY FANFIC READING] (Pony Grimdark)

[@GabiShy]

I started listening to your readings back in April of 2021, shortly after getting back into My Little Pony. That year was probably one of the lowest points of my life, and your readings of "Butterflies", "Silent Ponyville 2", "La Pomme Boutique", and "Apple Sleep Experiment", along with many more, helped me get through that period of hopelessness. You were one of the reasons why I started doing fanfic readings in the first place, and it's so surreal hearing my voice on your channel. I am so thankful you asked me to be a part of this project since this was probably the most fun I’ve ever had recording a reading. Having you in my life is something I cherish, and I hope that whenever you read this comment, you’re reminded of how much of an amazing person you are. Thank you, Lost💜

[@Magpiepony]

YOU SWEET BEAN! All the hugs

[@GabiShy]

@@Magpieponyno you lol

[@MyCloneinthewindow]

May I ask who you voiced

[@GabiShy]

@@MyCloneinthewindowI played Rumble

[@icyhotz8727]

@@MyCloneinthewindow Everything is in the description :]

[@PRariry19]

I love how Diamond Tiara was the one who was like 'bitch I'm not about to fucking die here in this broken down Factory' and bit down on that bosses leg for her life DT MVP.

[@T_E_G]

She is so real, plus, she/they literally fought everyone just for SilverSpoon, W friends fr lmao

[@vaporean_boylove.0w083]

​@@T_E_G She's a ride or die!

[@cristelromeave7414]

The only time i liked diamond tiara as a character.:b

[@Lazy_Artist129]

Holy shit....as someone with PTSD myself, the representation of memories feeling like waves and almost overtaking your mind, almost replaying right in front of your eyes, I applaud you for your narration

[@johnynoway9127]

the funny thing is that people LOVE hearing bad news and darker stories and stuff happen in real life. Unless of course it happens to or around them.

[@DarkSnowGaming1]

​@mystic_scytheI'm one of those people who love dark fiction stories, when I see it in real life I don't really say much, I watch so many videos and movies that I'm used to blood and guts, if I saw someone cut into pieces I probably wouldn't care, the difference is seeing someone being cut into pieces, that would probably give me PTSD.

[@Lazy_Artist129]

@@johnynoway9127 Listen dude, people like me like darker stories in order to cope ok? No one "likes bad news" as you put it, this world is fucked up and people have their ways of coping. For me its horror stories and metal music, for others is knitting and country music. Don't shame those who are fascinated by the darker things, shame the ones who do dark things.

[@johnynoway9127]

@@Lazy_Artist129 someone likes to rewrite other people's comment to look smart. Buddy thats exactly what i wrote.

[@Lazy_Artist129]

@@johnynoway9127 sooo, what's your saying is, you think I'm smart 😎😎

[@anamericangrizzlybear8315]

The good ending to Rainbow Factory we've always wanted

[@KevinGrooms-s8z]

The plot line reminds me of a higurashi fanfic a kinda want to make where satako survives but has mental damage and now tries to forget everything that happened from that point of time

[@Nothing-yy8en]

@@KevinGrooms-s8z that actually happend in yoigoshi-hen instead of satoko it's mion being the only Survivor

[@NobodysHere_Imalreadyinside]

"You look like a nervous Chihuahua." The funniest thing I've ever heard Scootaloo say in a fanfic ever lol

[@jeffdaniels308]

I remember years ago Losty did a Self-diss track as part of a diss-yourself challenge. In it she mentioned not being able to get through Halloween without Rainbow Factory. I consider this reading a send-up to that line.

[@itsbambino7155]

As someone with PTSD, this story reflects me so much and the structuring and visuals are so jaw dropping with how accurate and personal it feels. I love the narration and representation this gives. I'm glad to feel seen and heard in media I enjoy listening to!

[@thelostnarrator]

I'm so glad that you feel seen!

[@Trainboi1983]

I don’t have PTSD,but I do have ADHD(not saying that I think ADHD is worse,it ain’t)and sometimes I feel like how probably a PTSD person feels,even though I dont

[@angelorpheus99]

WAKE UP BABES NEW RAINBOW FACTORY FIC READING IS ABOUT TO DROP!

[@McBean1331]

What some popcorn.

[@nnononono-c7y]

FRRR SCREAMS

[@pandaworks]

IM AWAKE..

[@charjohn2468]

Yes Dear.

[@pissapocalypse]

Im awoken

[@catchatboxanimation]

credit to the author for making a super good representation of ptsd its crazy how real it felt

[@UmbraticStickerz]

As someone with ptsd i love this so much, its such a perfect and realistic representation of PTSD (and repressed memories). Its just so good. I also really love the concept itself

[@Archiver_Studio]

Holy...Hell THIS STORY IS ABSOLUTELY HORRIFIC AND I LOVE IT! It feels so damn unbelievable to actually FEEL the stress and emotions in their voices and in the situations Also the whole PTSD thing was done SO WELL that it feels so damn real I cannot believe this managed to turn Rainbow Factory into an even more amazing storyline with this lil addition to the story

[@vladivoices]

Ooh! I love how you show the PTSD as static distortions and ear ringing! X3

[@elisasatge748]

I reallyyyyyy love the idea of Scootaloo being a survivor, the final girl, the eternal thorn in the side who whoever would want the factory to restart

[@reynnar6585]

Oh I can already tell this is going to stick with me for at least a couple of days. One, because of the content. Two, the implication of Pony magic simply being spread too thin. Blank Flanks persisting into adulthood and becoming more commonplace. The tug of gravity through the cloud layers. The Boss making mention of how it's gotten harder for pegsi to even get off of the ground. Oh my brain is trying to analyze all of it, how exciting!

[@ss_shroom871]

i have PTSD myself, and this story represents it so well. the visuals and audio are so relatable and accurate to how i feel sometimes. i frequently have panic attacks and flashbacks due to it, and this is a very good representation is it. thank you for yet another incredible story :]

[@auroradawnrf]

That cover art is sick as hell. Cannot wait to listen to the assuredly kickass voice work that went into this!

[@carolinecheney]

They did a great job writing this! I was anticipating what happened at the school until it revealed Scootaloo had an episode resulting in her accidentally hitting a kid. Also love the outro!

[@mushroomjawn9474]

Oh. My. Gosh. Where do I even start?! This was *phenomenal*. I am completely in awe of the talent and dedication on display in this performance. Lost - your editing and sound design (the flashbacks especially - holy CRAP!!) is superb, as is your narration of course! All of the voice acting was incredible - it's mindboggling to hear these lines brought to life in precisely the way I imagined them. I'm honestly at a loss for words. This is without a doubt one of the coolest things I've gotten to experience in this fandom! I feel so lucky to be amongst such creative, talented, amazing people. Cheers to the legend that started it all, and thanks to the amazing cast and crew for putting this together! It was a blast, and I know I'll be revisiting it many, many times! with love and gratitude, mushroompone

[@eggtoastcrunch]

@@mushroomjawn9474 dude your fic is AWESOME!! You should be very proud of yourself!!

[@rukiakuchki1591]

I want to know who saved her I wanna say it was the worker from Awoken that was having second thoughts and started questioning Rainbow he saved Scootaloo before the cube closed off and everyone else got trapped himself included . What happened to Dash was she found out and arrested ? Rainbowdash was the only one allowed outside she would react normal if she saw that Scootaloo out of the factory to hide the fact of what she has done over the years .

[@peleanimationcomics3263]

I woke up at 4-5 AM to listen to this story and now it’s 7 AM…what a perfect way to start my morning off with a start!

[@MinersLovePonies]

Rainbow Factory stories are always welcome, especially from you, Lost. The fandom's creativity continuins to churn out novels and horror stories alike will always be impressive to me, and AuroraDawn returning to continue the sage of the Factory means there will be plenty more stories to tell.

[@TetrahedronDash]

This was a really amazing modern Rainbow Factory story in the way we return to the Factory after lots of years and see how much it's deteriorated over the years! I just hope the boss wasn't an old Factory Dash because that would mean she either died at the end when Diamond Tiara ripped off a chunk of her flesh, and that she at least just went unconscious... Poor Factory Dash dies in lots of alternate endings of the original Rainbow Factory, and also in stories of Absentia getting revenge... My mind thinks it was her though... I can always recognize that sort of raspy voice..

[@Chronicle_MV]

The boss wasn't Rainbow. It was the cop who dismissed Scootaloo at the morning.

[@TetrahedronDash]

@@Chronicle_MV Phew, thank god...

[@CageBlack1443]

Something I've been curious about, since you mentioned Dash... Where is she?! If this is during the time of the School of Friendship, this must be LONG after the original. So where IS Dash?

[@Dusk_Mightyena]

@@CageBlack1443I think she got arrested after the incident

[@mineash2945]

@@Dusk_Mightyena Adding on, i think she was the one who let scoot go that first time. Was probably either Grinded™ or ran to the police, which lead to the factory being abandoned

[@thenewadventuresofhenry6998]

It's ironic cause I JUST saw a Rainbow in the sky outside an hour before I saw the video!

[@redballoon9007]

Ah hell naw- That’s a bad sign-

[@figgysmezzo]

Wow! That was extremely well written and i really appritiate the disability representation here. That whole "You're an inpiration" thing is very real. And very annoying however well intended. ❤❤❤❤❤ Excellent job to Lost, the cast and to Mushroompone, the author. Very well done and congrats!

[@Danero1919]

You did it. You have transcended from mere readings. This was truly an immersive auditory experience that had me on my seat the entire time, and afraid of what was to come. You could say I am nervous-cited to experience the rest of this grueling tale.

[@Icheasea_T]

Honestly, as much as the original is an absolute classic. I gotta say this one is my favorite Rainbow Factory fic ever!

[@CageBlack1443]

It's a fanfic of a fanfic... If I write a sequel to THIS, it will be a fanfic of a fanfic... OF A FANFIC.

[@mistystudios1163]

It's been 10 years...? DAMN. On another note, I love your voice so much! You inspired me to start voiceacting when I was younger. Keep it up!

[@Gresekjr122]

40:35 Everyone involved did an amazing job. I really enjoyed this continuing of The Rainbow Factory. I had a blast in listening to the Live Reading. Keep up the good work. Have a wonderful spooky day Lost Magpie & Friends.

[@AriaGrill]

"You're such an inspiration" "Always pegasi" FUCK YEAH ADDRESSING THE ABLEISM SCOOTALOO DEALS WITH. Ally Rumble comforting scoots without speaking over her gives me life

[@raven3067]

I've been listening to Lost Narrator for years. I remmember Rainbow Factory being one of my most favorite of her readings. Here I am today and I'm happy that she's still contuing her work.

[@RiraitoSonikku1570]

Wow, I’m still reeling from that reading of “Debt to Society.” The way the story ties in themes of sacrifice and the grim reality of the Rainbow Factory is just chilling! It's fascinating to see how many layers the author included, especially when it comes to the Lord of It. I love how the story doesn't shy away from showing the darker side of the pony world. The Lord of It character feels like a manifest representation of all the societal pressures put on the ponies. What do you guys think about how he embodies the concept of obligation versus personal desires?

[@MultiMegaman64]

Losty, you and the others really outdid yourselves here! This story was just ghoulishly fantastic, and with your voice doing the reading, it makes it all the more haunting! I LOVE IT! The connection to the OG grimdark, and my personal favorite, Rainbow Factory, was spot-on! Keep these spooktacular stories coming! I'm bloodthirsty for the sequel to An Apple Sleep Experiment!

[@razielthedemonicninja2003]

Escaping death and forced to relive it is a fate even worse than its great escape

[@Danyem]

HELL YES, a NEW ONE! 🎉 as always, you did amazing! Edit: the feeling you give with PTSD (as someone with C-PTSD) it was just so well depicted

[@RedSpiritVR]

24:58 "Wet sign floor" 😎

[@TheRPGNerd]

i really like the idea that pony blood is rainbow. something so beautiful for us, the sight of a pool of rainbow liquid, would bring nothing but horror to a pony. also is it just me or does this story imply rainbow dash mightve been the one to help scootaloo? or was it someone else?

[@PurpleStarling]

Pony eugenics is crazy as a fan fic concept, I never realized that's what RF was

[@CrazyGreenFluff]

awesome story and narration! if this fic was handpicked by aurora dawn, does that mean it's the canon ending to rainbow factory? i think its epic either way, but that would certainly be interesting! as soon as that leader pony started talking, i thought "is that the cop?" that's an excellent example of how much narrations like this really add to fanfics! i dont wanna ramble, but obligatory i've been enjoying your readings since i was 14 and every time you release one you impress me all over again!!

[@MAGGOTONSILS]

At first, I thought this fic was gonna be a clever, my bloody valentine spinoff BUT THAT TWIST AT THE END WAS SO GOOD!!!!!! Love this fic reading so much!

[@thesupernaturalhouse]

So essentially this is an au of rainbow dash letting scootoloo escape

[@CrazyGreenFluff]

i think that is what happened, yes :0

[@TheCommenterDragon]

Another very marvelous and incredible fanfic reading this is, I absolutely love it! Everyone did a positively spectacular and brilliant job on this gem of a reading make no mistake about it, Thank you Lost for once again entertaining us with top quality spooky content! A very Happy Month of Macabre to you all!!!

[@blossomingflowers4116]

"All they could do was lie and murder tied up foals." for some reason this line stuck with me and gave me chills.. omg this was so good

[@antonrueda1044]

This is a great reading! I don't know how to properly put it into words, but the thing I find so interesting about the evil in Rainbow Factory stories is how it comes from a philosophy. They're not killing weak fliers just because they like killing, they're doing it because it's part of their ideaology. Rid the weak and keep the strong. They believe in it so much that they think that what they're doing is right.

[@thatcherrycat1198]

That was so smart,tiding in the rainbow factory, and the next generation, with twilight happening to hide the magic because the magic was fading due to the rainbow factory, not being active anymore. That’s so cool the writer did so good and you guys did so well on everything.❤❤

[@queeniedramanicole9427]

Holy shit! I didn't notice you were uploading this until now! This is so cool! I'm so happy you and Magpiepony are back! I hope you guys are doing well! Edit:Just finished the audio adaptation and man was this really good!

[@magicalpasta5462]

Scoots now how has her own rocket to Insanity

[@ace_of_cups4096]

Omg an hour long Losty Rainbow Factory fanfic eith Scoot as the Protag????? Hell yes. Love you, Lost, your amazing.

[@kethamined7129]

BABE WAKE UP THE LOST NARRATOR POSTED A GRIMDARK

[@Ayame.Spicer]

I completely forgot that Rumble was an actual character and just imagined some Oc. 💀

[@arnoldmws6330]

What a great story!!!! Kudos to the author, and great reading as always Lost!!! ❤❤❤❤❤

[@mrmlpvideogerman]

Interesting to see what other people have done with the Rainbow Factory idea. This fanfic was good.

[@joshku7488]

LOVED THIS LOST! Also hearing you use the classic "Something's Wrong" by Myuu.....god I loved it...

[@IZabellaArtZ]

I didn’t ask for that jump scare at 15:00 My whole body tensed and I nearly through my work equipment thinking something was crashing around me dx Good job xD

[@RadRedStudios]

Awesome Reading like always Lost. Keep on doing what you do and never stop being your awesomely spooky self. Hope you and Mag are well, and hope you guys are having a decent evening.

[@coolcosmic4351]

I've read this fanfic before and it was good, I liked the ending of it.

[@mecharaptor8.535]

These fanfics, especially, unofficial continuations and the like just keep getting better and better. Keep on doing what you’re doing, Lost!

[@IceCreamMonster1366]

Love it when y’all post a new vid! Bored at work and need something spooky to listen too. 🎃🖤

[@primroseprime9533]

You never cease to amaze me

[@katrinas2083]

I remember reading RF back in highschool like 2013. But im so glad i came back to RF in 2024 to see someone put in so much great effort into reading the stories i fell in love with.

[@shangothunder1055]

Your readings are the best as always! Another banger! Here’s to more frequent stories in the future. 🎉

[@GlitchecalKatt]

These are always really fun to listen to. Great work.👏

[@OriginalMariAnnaWolf]

11:00 Whatever D-.. oooh! DIamond got short as.. 😵 Diieee uhm! Whatever bad joke.. Wow.. this?.. this was cool. Idk what to say 😮

[@purplepartytigerd1598]

I kid you not, I had a few minutes right before the premiere and decided to listen to Rainbow Factory Waltz. As I was listening and waiting I thought "hehe how cool would it be if this was actually in the reading" AND YOU FUCKIN USED IT IN THE END CREDITS 🤣🤣🤣

[@crypticanexe7385]

Story, quietly ominous: Me, dozing: Story: As if it had been dropped into- ROWS OF ALTERNATING BLADES TALK ABOUT A JUMPSCARE

[@littleowl22778]

Haven't listened in years, opps sorry, but never unsubbed though, ( even though a hollow unwatcher subscriber is worst for a channels algorithm performance) I just stayed subbed because I knew, at some point that I'll get back into listening to pony fan fic stories and lost, your voice is just so saltery and smooth, its so pleasant to listen too.) I have a particular liking to the rainbow factory story, not because it reflects who i am as a person obviously, but I just like true crime podcasts, documentaries, ghost shows, horror movies ect, and of course I'm a brony, through and through for life! I also have this pesky thing called adhd, so yeah... but just been I stop listening for long periods, "cough cough, years" doesn't lessen or mean my love for the art form is gone!

[@Pawz_Thee_Meowth]

HERE I COME!!! (I love the rainbow factory series!! I'm excited to listen rn)

[@Little_NightLight_Oreo]

I need a sequel I NEED ANSWERS!!! Who helped scotaloo escape? Did Tiara and Sliver die or escape? What happened to RainbowDash? Can or can’t Scotaloo remember what happened last time? Why was the Factory abandoned????

[@chandandlovu8404]

I NEED QUESTIONS TOO😢😢

[@GabiShy]

47:52 I can’t help but laugh since my Sonic The Hedgehog voice just comes out.

[@luciencartervo5356]

Man, is this gonna be the one to make me venture from VA work to actually wanting to do pony fic readings?

[@BingoToGo]

14:57 GEEZ I JUMPED

[@Jerjen999]

Same 🤣

[@SpecialInterestShow]

Very good! No wonder this one won! The descriptions of everything are great, and the hints at what's going on behind the scenes in society is interesting too. Adult blank flanks on the rise or something? Probably a lot of talk over whether to consider it a disability or not. Maybe it's akin to autism where it's just some ponies are just wired differently or don't have a specialization for their magic? Or perhaps the talk is "we shouldn't be putting so much pressure on people to find their talents, we should let it come naturally, all this pressure just leads to bullying and othering" The implication that jail isn't a reformatory system but just jail still... Cmon twilight, hit us with that prison reform! Eugh the implication of that splat on the ground being a sort of test run, or that they've gotten away with secretly running the factory again for a while now little by little... I found the thing with Scootaloo's hooves sinking lower into the clouds due to her not having as much pegasi magic to be a bit extra interesting because I think the idea there is that her disability isn't just physical, but magical too. It's not that she necessarily has less magic than other ponies overall, but rather that for some reason her pegasi magic is lower in her body than for others. The buck wild implication that magic is lessening overall. More blank flanks, less easy flight, Scootaloo sinking maybe... Somehow because magic is being stretched thin? Could it be because more types of creatures are learning magic, thus putting more of a strain on magic as a whole? Or maybe there's an overpopulation issue? Or maybe it's a natural thing that happens in cycles - magic lessening/dying out then returning? Or maybe something sinister is at work to lessen the magic... Or it could be due to people being just plain ableist lol

[@zanyreptiles]

So hyped for this!!!! I can’t wait!

[@lilymuncy2365]

This is my top 5 favorite creepypasta and my top 3 favorite rainbow factory story.

[@aetherlight_melody]

Hekking phenomenal reading. And accurate af portrayal of a pts attack. Hit deep there.

[@aetherlight_melody]

Ive not been told by a doctor that I have ptsd, and dont like to call it that cuz dont have official confirmation thats what it is, But ive had episodes exactly like that before, tho they are more rare than a standard anxiety attack. Where only way to describe was pts. So as someone whos had both anxiety based panic attacks and I wanna say pts attacks, am speechless how real that felt. How accurate.

[@thenewadventuresofhenry6998]

I'm already terrified.

[@DasherStormrider]

I know I might be late, but I just wanted to say I listened to this recently and I really loved it. The voice actors did a really amazing job and then visuals went along with it were just great. Wish I had more to say, but that's it.

[@SinclairDuGore]

YESSSSSS SO EXCITED‼️‼️

[@quinnhouk5369]

And now to watch it from the beginning and you’re welcome Lost for the super chat. Also I tagged you and mags in posts on Twitter yesterday and today hoping you one of you would reply to my question

[@arielortiz3548]

the thumbnail means that this is going to be so good 😊

[@MidnightDawn24]

Oh she's smelling blood

[@LucaIsTheBest]

OMG I'M SO EXCITED YES YES YESS

[@x.mxlti.editxr.x]

so does it turn out that the cop was the boss pony? that's how it sounds with how she has gauze around her leg

[@DelvonCharles-f8f]

Love the story!

[@katelynthewhitewerewolf6376]

Cool a sequel to Rainbow Factory

[@tootired4thisbs]

Im so excited for this !

[@WolfX1120]

Dark as hell... So love it,,, /)

[@aldenaoc8847]

This is SOOOO good, the part at 14:56 really got me Until I heard the pvz scream. I'm sorry but that killed it OTHERWISE PEAK

[@Smokeyink]

I don’t know why, but I get massive Emesis Blu vibes. Mainly the factory setting, but the flashbacks also.

[@Rulerofgoblins]

Yessss, amazing job Lost!!!

[@CyreeTWPF]

FIRST, RAINBOW DASH AND NOW, SCOOTALOO?!?!?!?!?!

[@rev4fun1]

14:57 holu shit! It's Crazy Dave!

[@dariustucker1690]

I love the storyline. I have enjoyed so thank you i am so excited to be your subscribe! Lost😊

[@sheepgrass500]

I new I recognized dark somniums music! Cool to see you using it lol

[@AMirrorCat]

Absolutely amazing dear Narrator!

[@ClassicalGlimmer]

My suspicion went from 50 to 30 to 100 real quick after replaying that conversation with that cop. I was about to shrug it off, but I mean come on, scoots was dropping some valid facts and showed actual proof so for the cop to just deem it a prank is beyond suspicious, then trying to blame it on something completely unrelated? . . .If I didn't know any better, I ought to think the cop was tryna frame, scoots. Then when silver was marked absent my first thought was live blackmail. Then scoots would sacrifice herself or something like that. . . Honestly, the end threw me off track and left me rolling in the dirt. . . . But with all that aside, The well written story, the voice actors that did a spectacular job, the narration sharply on point, and the visual effects. . . This. is. Brilliant! it's been a while since I heard or read a grimdark so this was honestly refreshing! You guys did a flawless job on this!

[@zanyreptiles]

This was amazing!! Incredibly done!

[@alexanderdelongchamps7594]

Well I'm intrigued but also confused I'm pretty sure scootaloo died at the end of the rainbow factory or at least was heavily implied to

[@Twinklethefox9022]

I think it depends on what version you read because others made non cannon versions of it. One has scootaloo coming back to life and she ends up taking the whole rainbow factory down with her. I'm not sure if awoken was written by the same author or not but it takes place after that.

[@alexanderdelongchamps7594]

Good point fox

[@danielybarra8664]

I missed going to blockbuster everyday after school I'm happy this story takes place at a video store

[@JaxJayden]

Diamond tiara really maraudered her way lol diamond really is that girl

[@quintonjones2699]

That was absolutely amazing well done Lost