do you make *irrelevant* comparisons in a line graph? - ielts writing task 1

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IELTS Writing Task 1 asks us to make comparisons where relevant. But do you make irrelevant comparisons? Watch the video to find out!
Here's the line graph used in this video:
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
▬ Contents of this video ▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬
0:00 overview paragraph
03:04 details paragraph 1
07:44 details paragraph 2
08:33 details paragraph 3
09:47 introductory paragraph
11:17 entire essay+key takeaways

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@@LilieIELTS Look how careless I was😅I spelt your name wrong:)) The task 2 question is(am just paraphrasing cause I can’t remember the exactly same words) : Many people think nowadays students no longer need to finish school before 18. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this.

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i wouldn't remember new knowledge the next day either. i practice a lot, i wrote all the essays on my website.

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[@anhthuluuthi2566]

Thanks for your sharing, but I have a wonder. When you described about the figures of refrigerators, why did you omit the data from 2000. I think it should be included. I hope that you respond me soon.

[@oantuanphong9941]

Thanks for your video. I have learned at school that I must not omit the word "the percentage" throughtout the essay like you did and replace by "the proportion" or "the rate". After watching this video, I was confused. Please help me how to use these words flexibly or how we can omit it in a better way. Thank you once again ^^

[@LilieIELTS]

Hi, I used ownership. It can mean the percentage of people owning something. Check out here: ludwig.guru/s/ownership+increased+%25

[@patelheet4380]

Hey lilie, nice to see you again. In the graph below - household = washing clothes, preparing meals, cleaning, is it important or not?

[@LilieIELTS]

No, that's not important. They're just explaining what "housework" means, in case you don't know the word.

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[@tuanphong8366]

Such a great and helpful lesson again. But I do wonder why you use past simple not past perfect with "By 2019". Looking forward your detailed response ❤

[@LilieIELTS]

You're welcome. Both can be used with "by 2019", but I wanted my tenses to be consistent. That's why I used the past simple throughout the entire essay. 😊

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[@LilieIELTS]

Haha, thanks for letting me know.

[@xihuichen9146]

The chart below shows the changes in the ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent during housework in households in one country between 1920 and 1990. The chart illustrates the proportions of households with electrical devices and the number of weekly hours spent on household chores per household in a specific country from 1920 to 2019. 对吗

[@meegrace599]

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[@omjwad2661]

Can I say that, the numbers of hours spent on housework Hovered between 1960 and 2019. but of course I cannot say that the number essentially unchanged at this period?

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That's great news. You did an amazing job. What was your task 2 question?

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@@LilieIELTS some people think only certain wild animals should be protected, while others say all wild animals need protection. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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@@or05012 That's a hard one. Thanks for sharing.

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you explained everything so simply! how can we manage our time in the writing part, between task 1 and task 2????????

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Hi, I'm not sure what you mean by "between task 1 and task 2" but I spend 15 min on task 1.

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[@rossita6688]

Hi lilie, id like to ask about the words usage “with that of” on the overview paragraph. Why do we use “that of”? Why dont we write “with refrigerators having the greatest growth”. Thank you

[@LilieIELTS]

Hi, "that" refers to ownership. refrigerators didn't have the greatest growth. Ownership of refrigerators did.

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[@user-bh1mw4dp1r]

What band score may I get if I follow your tips and write a line graph in this pattern ( also please say about the rest of the graphs and essays)? I am sorry if it sounds rude.

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[@deryabalkc9706]

Hi Lilie, thanks for your videos, they're great help. In one of your video you mentioned that we should use past perfect tense with "by"(by 2019) but in this video you used with past simple tense. "This number then rose to about 75% by 2019". I am little bit confused. Could you please explain the difference? Thanks.

[@LilieIELTS]

Both are correct but 'by' is better.

[@deryabalkc9706]

Thanks for your answer@@LilieIELTS But I think I couldn’t explain well. In one video you used ‘by+date’ with ‘PAST PERFECT TENSE’ => “ The way families spent their income had changed significantly by 2018” In same video you also mention that if we want to use “PAST SIMPLE TENSE” then we should change by to in. => “ The way families spent their income changed significantly IN 2018” In this video ‘by+date’ used with ‘PAST SIMPLE TENSE’ => “This number then rose to about 75% by 2019”. So the question is which TENSE should be used with “by + date”? Thanks in advance :)

[@LilieIELTS]

@@deryabalkc9706 You can use "by" with either the past simple or the past perfect but the past perfect is better. That is to say, the two sentences below are both correct but the second one is better. 1. The way families spent their income CHANGED significantly BY 2018. 2. The way families spent their income HAD CHANGED significantly BY 2018.

[@maisarahbahari1352]

Hi Lilie I'd like to ask about why "in a country" should be beside households for the introduction? Im not quite sure. Thank you btw:))

[@LilieIELTS]

Hi, this is because, in the original text, "in one country" modifies "households".

[@maisarahbahari1352]

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[@omjwad2661]

Can I say that "with ownership reaching 40% of total house holds"

[@omjwad2661]

Relating to the washing machine can I describe increase from 1920 to 1960 and then say that the number reached a plateau that lasted from 1960 to 2010 except for one small dip in 1980

[@LilieIELTS]

You can but don't you think it's important to point out that washing machines were the most common appliances in 1920?

[@omjwad2661]

@@LilieIELTS first, thanks alot for your time. second, yes of course I want to point out that point and then describe the increase from 1960 to 2010

[@adamphung]

Hi, I have a question 'amount' is also uncountable noun, why should we use 'the' before it.

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'Amount' is countable.

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[@DeepakSingh-dl6tm]

Ma'am in introduction you told not to write (in a country) after electrical appliances but in final paragraph of introduction it is again written there . Can you pls confirm whether it is correct or not

[@LilieIELTS]

Hi Deepak, where did I use "in a country" after "electrical appliances"? Time stamp please.

[@DeepakSingh-dl6tm]

Ma'am time=11:17, second line of introduction. But if I am writing something wrong then may be I am confused somewhere but pls correct me because your video are amazing and I am understanding very clearly each and every point 😍

[@LilieIELTS]

@@DeepakSingh-dl6tm Sorry about the error. Here's the correct version: www.ieltsessaybank.com/changes-in-ownership-of-electrical-appliances/

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[@godblessyou4245]

The video is just brilliant , but I think not THE average , but AN average family

[@LilieIELTS]

Hi, both the average family and an average family are correct expressions but it's better to use the average family here because the average family is a statistical concept, something we read about when journalists and statisticians wish to talk about typical characteristics.

[@atosee23]

what band did you get in your writings?

[@LilieIELTS]

7

[@user-gi3cn1nx3w]

why did you put plural on washing machines instead of washing machine of 3 .... I am confused

[@LilieIELTS]

You need to use 'washing machines' or 'the wash machine' because 'machine' is countable.

[@Mode249]

Vacuum cleaner is touching the line of 100% right ?can you pls clear me on that line.

[@LilieIELTS]

Ownership of vacuum cleaners reached 100%. what's your concern?

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What many words does it contain ??

[@LilieIELTS]

193. www.ieltsessaybank.com/changes-in-ownership-of-electrical-appliances/

[@aashritharaosankineni9513]

Shouldn’t we write conclusion?

[@LilieIELTS]

No, in task 1 we write an overview instead.

[@macross.-.]

in one video you emphasize that we should not use '' the proportion of..V, while that of...V'', instead we should use '' the proportion of...V, while the proportion of...V''( paralell) but in this video you use'' overall, ownership of...V, with that of...V''. Can you explain the difference...

[@LilieIELTS]

'ownership' and 'proportion' are two different words

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[@user-ov8jm5id5p]

how did you knew that there is no causal relationship between the two graphs. I don't agree with you.

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