Human Mechanic rescued two abandoned Alien puppy twins who wouldn't stop shaking! SCI-FI Story HFY

[@antsquirly7654]

Great story, still gotta work on the delivery.

[@FictionalReimagined]

Thanks

[@teridaniel9001]

I liked the story but how did Nathen get of the asteroid?

[@wandapease-gi8yo]

Things in a Space Station cause groans from their Weight? Turn the gravity down.

[@FictionalReimagined]

🤣🖖🏽🚿

[@kathdudek1673]

Hee!

[@Killianwsh]

Ngl this story was a waste of time. Huge mess of holes. The station automation was supposedly still talking to the mechanic , even after he was aboard the puppies ship and away from the station? Why where they firing on the ship in the first place if they were trying to save them? What were the sentient crystals about? Why didn't the "dog" people take the fancy box when they left? Why did they destroy the station and the ship & leave the mechanic there on a crippled ship to die? Pretty messed up.

[@FictionalReimagined]

ok

[@Killianwsh]

@@FictionalReimagined Not trying to crap on you personally though. If you really are writing these yourself, just keep at it, with practice you'll get better. Maybe have some friends or family read through & help nit pick the story apart a bit to help you find the continuity breaks, etc. Direct posting stuff to YT can be real rough & discouraging. Take the time to polish your work. It'll save you from some of the brutality of internet critics. Keep writing and trying!

[@wandapease-gi8yo]

The choppy narration is off putting, tiring. The voice is great, and it is so nice to hear it pronouncing all the words correctly! Now smooth out the narration to typical reading aloud.

[@terryhayward7905]

This story made no sense at all.

[@FictionalReimagined]

ok

[@betsybattles2696]

not an inspiring story

[@FictionalReimagined]

very bad?