Making RWBY Volume 2 Better

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[@Neon00000]

".... and let me know if you want me to do Volume 3..." Girl you know damn well we want the whole series 🙄

[@Yonokotehee]

Hell yeah

[@JoseFerreira-rb7rn]

the truth have been spoken!

[@firelizardryko]

Preach!

[@jospwasp3504]

indeed

[@powerofanime1]

We have spoken!

[@Pikachu31157]

The penny preventing ruby from getting isekai'd into an actual anime joke got me 😂

[@erikroman1880]

Now truck kun is the one who gets isekai'd poetic justice

[@catblue4690]

“I, a truck, stole a robot girl’s dream to become a real girl in another world!”

[@izaacidlartist164]

she could have land into rwby chibi or ice queendom

[@shadowclaw7210]

What about volume 9?

[@astereotypicalgamer1708]

One change Fatmanfalling suggested was having Ironwood be in charge for security for the Vytal Festival _before_ the end of the volume, so him showing up with a massive military fleet has a justification. This could cause tension between Oz and Ironwood and better foreshadow Ironwood's eventual fall.

[@Wild_Pilot]

I think that was the justification AFTER Ironwood brought his armada. Both Ozpin and Glynda seemed surprised, even upset, about the heavy military presence. It also went to show Ironwood's paranoia over Qrow's reports and his need to keep the Ozlluminate's secrets close to the chest. Finally, it hinted at his distrust of Ozpin and his opposition to how the Headmaster was handling everything.

[@sev1120]

Maybe he brought the entire armada with him, but he states that it was because of this year's contendors being high priorities for protection (Penny is an experimental robot, Weiss is the heiress of the Schnee Dust Company, Ruby is the last known person on the planet to possess silver eyes and Pyrrha is a massive celebrity). Have him state it's because of these extenuating circumstances he's making a show of force to dissuade anyone who would think of attacking the tournament. He rationalises it as the logical answer, but really he's viewing the situation in terms of absolutes. Maybe have his semblance be the ability that he can just shut off emotions to view things in their most logical way, but he receives frequent criticism for using inhumane methods whenever he uses his semblance as a leader.

[@konstellashon1364]

@@sev1120 also, it's publicly known that Dust robberies are on the rise in Vale. That's Roman. And as a member of 'Oz-luminati' James knew that the Vale Maiden was attacked. Conclusion: something bad happening in Vale. Ironwood haters just love to ignore how his need for might kinda makes sense when you consider what he does and doesn't know.

[@willburt7716]

The character voiced by Kerry asking out the character voiced by Miles would be cinema

[@erikroman1880]

Martin Scorsese: finally true cinema

[@Scaring-Crows]

What people don't know is Ice Queendom is actually the result of Penny not saving Ruby from the truck

[@cutiepie120048]

🤣🤣🤣

[@troperhghar9898]

12:17 honestly the shallow answers the girls give to the "why are you a huntress" question is my favorite part of the mountain glen arc because it leans into the character flaw all the girls had; short sightedness, none of them have any real idea what they want and until now had never questioned it Blake fights because people told her its for a good reason even if she doesnt know the reason Wiess fights to be a great huntress for supposed honor to her family but really its just to make herself the most important person in the room Yang fights just because she like to scrap regaurdless of consiquences

[@excell211]

This one is a really good suggestion for character development. up

[@lonelyislandgames8945]

Would be kind of cool that the reason Neptune refuses Weiss's advances is because he is rich as well, and resents his family's wealth when he found out how they got it. He can tell Weiss either doesn't care that she knows or hasn't done the due diligence to care to find out.

[@Mrgamedu31]

Honestly, if there's one thing I really appreciate here is your idea of introducing characters way sooner aswell as creating teams that give us cool dynamic or better threat. It help to not feel like the new characters are just fillers and gave them more active roles.

[@gokbay3057]

Adding the characters earlier is very cool and makes sense thought to be fair to actual RWBY they probably hadn't come up with most of these characters at the time of Volume 2. Thought it could have certainly actually included rest of Sun's team or reused the characters it did introduce at the time better later on instead of adding yet more characters.

[@axo-infinity2217]

Pretty Weird Duck? Nah, that name should be Pretty Cool Duck.

[@000Dragon50000]

Did you just make a whole team comprised entirely of Blake's Exes? PFFFFFT

[@Mrgamedu31]

Scott Pilgrim plot

[@erikroman1880]

The league of evil exes

[@ArcstoneBionicle]

Yang's gonna have to fight all of them to date her, isn't she?

[@selena44842]

Look at critter establishing all these fun characters, so much cooler than all the randos that show up and never appear again. Also the only thing I would also add would be establish that the bombs were made using the stolen dust otherwise it felt like they just dropped that plot point in the show, unless you plan to do something else with it later

[@CoralPallet]

SSSN, JNPR and RWBY having a card game hangout with PENNY AND CIEL would have been the dream. Now that's something I want to see.

[@pickyphysicsstudent201]

Team PATC is interesting. I imagine they were chosen around the idea of having very controlling semblences, to keep Penny on strings. Marrow can stop time and Fiona has the pocket dimension. My headcannon was Ciel having semblence around precise timekeeping & pinpoint precision. She can count seconds perfectly and has that weird Josuk8 quirk of knowing how far something away is in cm. Perhaps Marrow and Ciel can play a hand in teaching Weiss time dilation? Some personal physics & philopshy around time being relative and being able to break it open in order to best use time dilation.

[@williamwilson1348]

I love the idea of them helping Weiss hone one of her semblances. I’m picturing it a bit like atla when toph is teaching aang earthbending, where it’s more of Weiss’s mindset that’s holding her back. Maybe even relating to her being uptight about the law and stuff, like breaking the laws of time and stuff

[@rocksdworld]

Don't think I missed it, you're reusing your old Ruby theory that team CFVY were faunus. I see you don't think you can sneak past the old fans.

[@thejudgmentalcritter6584]

;) I was wondering if anyone was going to notice!

[@ghostcraft9343]

Glad I wasn’t the only one

[@magmaspacer1967]

This is probably a bad idea, but I would find it hilarious that because Vacuo would be an all Faunus school for Tyrian to be like a normal poetry teacher there or something. XD

[@thomasraines1396]

That’s what he was doing before he became a psychopathic serial killer.

[@shadowclaw7210]

@@thomasraines1396 honestly that be really interesting. Imagine him having Toad Faunus college.

[@evrint]

Like Indiana Jones. Teacher by day, adventurer by other days.

[@anthonymini-gun5542]

I actually really do like the idea of Penny's team consisting of Ciel, Marrow and Fiona. Ciel since her design is cute and overall character is interesting to dive into, and Marrow and Fiona being fun characters in their own right. I also like the idea of Marrow and Fiona for instance becoming a part of the Ace Ops'/Happy Huntresses later on in V7. Maybe it could show how the Fall of Beacon split the team apart, fun side stories here or there, all that jazz

[@MP-qj1wp]

Ok but now that youve mentioned the idea of penny, marrow, fiona and ciel all doing the robot dance at the prom makes me think of a scenario in which after the fall of beacon and penny dying fiona joins the happy huntresses and marrow joins the ace ops and then in volume 7 when they go to that one party for the vote counting, fiona and marrow like take a break and do the robot dance with penny (and ciel(id imagine she wouldnt be a happy huntress or an ace op not bc she isnt good, but bc shed rather be around penny)) its all great and good, the gangs back together and marrow and fiona get to talk to each other again and then the when attack happens and fiona gets hurt like proper volume 7, and angst of the whole team ahshdbjsjssb Youve introduced team PATC into my life and now they give me brain worms (in a good way)😔😔

[@shadowclaw7210]

There gotta be story about Sheep and Hound.

[@Wild_Pilot]

Damn, now I can't decide whether I like Team PATC (Patch) or Team PCVS (Pisces) more! Both have very interesting team dynamics, but one has the bonus of greater team drama in later Volumes. One minor gripe I have, and I mean minor, is that Vacuo has the Faunus only school. Shade seems too limited in its student base to keep out any and all humans. If there was a school like that, my pick would be in Mistral. Mistral has always been on the eccentric/ creative side, so why not lean into that with their academy? Their proximity to Menagerie is ideal to reel in new students and It also keeps Lionheart as the Headmaster like the original AU. Still a wonderful video. I can't wait to see how your Patchwork AU will turn out! Have a nice day. P.s. Yeah, I know Team PSVC (Pacific) is a bit more popular, but I just like the exotic sound of Pisces. P.p.s. I can't get the image of Marrow pulling a disco move and shouting "Dance" instead of "Stay," leading everyone into the choregraphed dance routine from the original Volume.

[@splintercell320]

I like your idea for mistral being the fauns only school except isn’t Mistral one of the two kingdoms(the other being atlas) that don’t treat fanus well? Unless we’re going with haven being different from the rest of mistral and being a safe haven(get it 😂) for fanus.

[@evrint]

Team Pisces? The Penny Sun Velvet Cardin team Critter suggested in her cast bloat critique?

[@Wild_Pilot]

@@evrint Yeah.

[@leokingh6472]

How many characters do you want to introduce in volume 2? Judgmental Critter: YES!!!

[@rixarts14]

I legit like the Neptune twist. I'm not a fan of love triangles but teaching Jaune and viewers that no means no, through Neptune is an important lesson. I also dig the CFVY inspiration changes. They fit so well with the designs, especially Yatsuhashi's. Cool idea Pretty Weird Duck. Love the idea of an all Faunus academy. What I'll rewrite in V2 would not be so little. An idea I had was that Sun & Neptune weren't students but unlincensed Huntsmen. They're hired by criminal organisations for profit and that way we learn more about the crime families, the Huntsman who 'stray from their righteous paths', and foreshadowing RNJR's unofficial status during V4-V6. They hang around Vale working odd jobs after helping Team RWBY, helping out during the Vytal Festival next volume. Just one of the changes I would do.

[@yersonpanqueba9263]

10:28 So, let's make Weiss has a little crush on Pyhrra too; Why would we accept only having a love triangle when we could have two love triangles?

[@pickyphysicsstudent201]

Like that one Chibi episode.

[@falconeshield]

Let's give the fans two love triangles as a treat

[@evrint]

@@falconeshield A love diamond.

[@gokbay3057]

We could expand it into a whole love hexagon (one person in the center, six in the corners. Weiss or Jaune as the center, the other in one corner and Pyhrra and Neptune are the corners adjacent to that corner, which leaves three corners empty). The question is who should be in center, Weiss or Jaune... Either way Ruby is another obvious one to add.

[@pickyphysicsstudent201]

I would have an episode where team RWBY plays their board game in the library. A combination of Risk & Yugioh, where each girl controls one of the four kingdoms. Ruby plays Mistral, Weiss plays Atlas, Blake plays Vacuo and Yang plays Vale. Each playing resources thematic the kingdom but with tactics representing each girl's personality. This would be good for establishing the fighting style and culture of the four kingdoms with all the exchange students coming to town. There's just a lot of little stuff you could do.

[@KaiserShounen]

Going into this you really don't need to do a whole lot in order to fix volume 2. Honestly, my solution wither be A. Give it more episodes or B. make the episodes longer so that all the characters would interact with one another. This would make the eventual shitstorm of v3 worth it because these characters would actually have well earned bonds that were broken too soon. Liking having all of team JNPR interact, actually fleshing out blake and yangs friendship, make the pyrrha romance less forced, etc. Happy thanksgiving btw

[@dylanlynch9859]

As someone who low key shipped Jaune and Neptune precisely because of the scene of them talking alone on the balcony, I absolutely adore the idea of Neptune crushing on Jaune there (Plus it’s rare to see actually complete love triangles rather than love bent lines). Like, Jaune not reciprocating at that point in time makes absolute sense, so I don’t mind the idea of it just making them better friends, oralternatively maybe once Jaune has fully worked through his grief over Pyrrha’s loss, maybe Jaune and Neptune end up getting together in a subplot once they all make it to Vacuo,though I’m not sure how that could be handled without it seeming like Neptune is holding onto his feelings for far too long.

[@gokbay3057]

Jaune could also just be straight. I don't mean this in a homophobic way, Neptune being gay or bi is completely cool to me, just saying that the reason for Jaune not reciprocating could be as simple as he's just not into dudes.

[@dylanlynch9859]

@@gokbay3057 You’re not wrong, it’s mainly just my personal preference coming into play with that. Plus it’d be cool to have one of the few male characters who could be considered one of the main characters be canonically not straight, though it wouldn’t have to be Jaune, we also could’ve gotten it with Qrow, though his potential status as part of the main cast fluctuates more from season to season compared to Jaune and like Ren.

[@acoolnameemm]

@@gokbay3057 That'd work great in this love triangle. Weiss is straight and into Neptune. Neptune is gay/bi and into Jaune. Jaune is straight but into Weiss. NOBODY WORKS WITH EACH OTHER. THEY'RE ALL INCOMPATIBLE. IT'D BE GREAT!

[@ObsoletePerson]

Pretty Weird Duck is a Pretty Cool Duck. :D I like pretty much all of these ideas! I should've been taking notes throughout the video but I'll keep it more in mind next time. If only Rooster Teeth planned out these characters earlier themselves; we wouldn't be backfilling with them. But I especially love how Penny's minders are now her whole team. It makes more sense with how Ironwood wants to sign Penny up for the tournament. Making Yatsuhashi a turtle is a great idea; he's got the colourisation and the armour for it.

[@williamwilson1348]

I’m actually getting giddy and kicking my feet listening to these. I’m really loving your fixing of rwby and I really hope you keep it gojng

[@vicentetemes5793]

It's interesting how in normal RWBY the massive amount of characters introduced is generally considered a weakness, but here you're introducing a lot of characters and it is a clear strength. It's largely, of course, because these characters _do_ something; you even gave Neptune a thing he can do to be anything other than useless. Like, I actually personally like the Lieutenant in a onenote midboss kind of way, but I will kick that bastard out of a window for a similar onenote midboss like Yuma that can actually do other stuff on the side.

[@Shojoboy]

I liked your last one and i like this one too. Introducing all these characters early on and have them doing stuff and allowing us to get to know them is a good move, especially because all the characters you introduced us too were all blank slates, yet have such a following behind them. Team PATC is a real good idea, seriously Penny having an actual team is such a good idea. And all of them dancing and doing the robot would be so cute and fun. Having Ozpin, Ironwood, and Lionhart together is genius. Ozpin and the others were meant to be a whole crew based on the Wizard of OZ, yet Lionhart wasn't all that involved, it only makes sense they all work together by having regular meetings or something. Team CFVY being all faunus is a nice and fun idea, and an all faunus school................why didn't we have that yet? I can't wait to see your take on Volume 3

[@enviousgaming3250]

5 minutes in and im already loving this especially with adding lionhart and fiona and the dog guy as pennys team

[@spencermalley10]

I for one would love to see you continue with these, They're really fun.

[@jettisonedjet6905]

I like the team name for PATC still keeps to the PC computer theme

[@sev1120]

An add-on I'd make to Penny preventing Ruby's isekai would be a single line of encouragement. "Just because you're metal doesn't mean you're not real" It reinforces that Ruby sees Penny as a real person, not just a robot, and it reinforces the tragedy of Penny's death in volume 3, which could have an addition as follows: Ruby rushed from the stands to the Arena, devil may care about the consequences, semblance deactivating as she got to Penny's side. Through the glitches and twitches of Penny's body and voice, she can choke out a single sentence. "I don't want to die..." The rest if teams RWBY and JNPR appear in the arena, most in the stands frozen in shock, but as the teams try to help, Jaune noticed a faint smirk from one of the vacuo students, and pointed it out to the others. After all is said and done, Yang has to practically pry Ruby off of Penny, the black-and-crimson-haired girl refusing to leave her friend's side.

[@CoralPallet]

9:35 : 👀👀👀👀👀👀👀 There are way too many good ideas here, someone has to stop Critter. This is torture, we were robbed I tell you. ROBBED!

[@GeneralBolas]

Oh, *finally,* I found someone doing a rewrite of Volume 2 where they realize that Jaune constantly asking Weiss out is actually kind of shitty and maybe that should be called out. I mean, in my personal headcanon, Weiss eventually got sick of it and called him out in a sparing session, where she held him down with a gravity glyph and literally spanked him with the flat of her sword to the laughter of the crowd. But hey, your idea works too ;)

[@konstellashon1364]

yeah, kinda. Weiss already said she rejects him because she wrongly thinks he's after the family money. This ties into what we learn later in V5, that her father pursued her mother for the Schnee name and company. So probably Weiss grew up hearing her mom tell sweet stories about her dad's constant attempts, which then shattered when they all learned the truth.

[@blueberryoatmeal4009]

Yeah, that was a good change. The original Jaune-Neptune dialogue is very eyeroll-worthy.

[@dumowl697]

please continue this serries I know its probably a lot of work but its super fun to see your ideas and how RWBY could have been improved with the powers of character efficiencies and hindsight

[@TheTolnoc]

Oobleck's line of questioning coming back in Volume 9 was a nice call back.

[@Yonokotehee]

Since we're on the topic of redos, I wanna talk about my own RWBY au :D, cuz why not: The main change is that Weiss and Whitley are twins, I enjoy sibling parallels and especially since the two are the same age now it might compel them(or at least Weiss) to be more competitive over becoming heir. As for fairytales I did decide to make Whitley Kai from the Snow Queen, this ties into my next point, Grandma Schnee. I thought to myself, if Weiss has her grandfather, Whitley could have his grandmother and so now we gave Santa Claus and the Snow Queen as a couple. This lead to me doing a redesign for Whitley, which you may have seen before I don’t know, one was designed a few years ago and one was made this year.

[@rainbowphoenix1363]

I would absolutley love to see you do more of the bandaid series. I also would love to see the stuff you had to cut out, because you seem like such a creative person and I imagine plenty of ideas were scrapped because they couldnt fit/it would change too much. I just think that'd be alot of fun to see more of your creative process!

[@PaytonPaw124]

I swear just minor changes like this I love not to mention you're putting in theories that you and others have had in the past really great details and like you said you don't care bring all these characters we hardly know and giving them some character development is fantastic also ducks idea being put in there is a nice touch I'm not really sure because it's been awhile since I've seen this volume so not really much I can think about it said some of the things you touch on but other than some really good points also yes I would like to see how you do with the volume 3

[@mnmnotaskittleindisguise1939]

im about to breakdance from how much i love this

[@mateolopez6291]

Please Band-aid Volume 3

[@DigiDestined55X]

Hell yeah I wanna see you band-aid Volume 3! I absolutely love all your ideas. If RWBY ever gets adapted into live action (or some other medium). I really hope they use your ideas. They are SO MUCH BETTER than the series proper. 😁

[@carbodude5414]

Removing anything Jaune related and showing how Team RWBY became friends with Velvet is one way of improving it

[@Quartz_111]

YES!!! YOU BUILDING MY NEPTUNE HEAD CANON✨ UNREQUITED LOVE

[@BraveLilTiger]

I am LOVING these rewrite ideas cuz they're just so much more fun and interesting. I'm excited to see how you'd fix volume 3!

[@monokuma2104]

The true question: are the girls volume 2 outfits going to be in for the rest of volume 2 and not only for two episodes

[@klutzyalice3952]

I like this so much because it fixes the diversity issue Rwby have. It cool that we hav LGBTQIA+ main characters but not a lot of poc as main or secondary characters. And when they do they get push aside, a villain, or very poorly written

[@dreamydarling5803]

I loved so much of this, the little details can really make all the difference! I love the whole thing about Neptune actually wanting to ask Jaune out and having it be what snaps Jaune out of his pushy ways. And the way characters are introduced early without throwing Team RWBY out of the front seat of their own show makes me so so happy. And the idea of an all-faunus school?? That totally rocks!! If you do plan on sticking with this series then I'm gonna be so thrilled to see your take on V3!

[@OneTaker]

Like the idea of introducing more of the side characters and setting them up for bigger impact when they get in story proper but velvet and Yatsuhashi I don't like your change. But that is probably cos I have listened to After the fall and Before the dawn, we're they do end up enrolling in shade academy. I know it's supplemental material, but I have listened to them so I'm a little bit baised by it. Been thinking again ( I know twice in one year!? Things getting really scary XD) but Leo being there could add so much! Like him Not bringing an army, showing that it really is iron wood going overboard and flexing. Leo could be against it visually but dose state he feels more secure with the army there, indicating his cowardly nature. Plus him being either being near the evacuation point or completely absent from the battle in volume 3 could show that too. Plus being there at the fall of Becon makes you wonder if that was his turning point or if he was already a traitor and turned to Salem. Cos being there to see that in person is more credible a reason to turn than hearing about it. Personly in this scenario I would go for he was totally loyal to Oz but after seeing fall of bacon with the Atlas military involved, shook him.enough to think its hopeless and best thing to do is make a deal now to save himself, while he can. Just random thoughts from 1 am at night XD

[@soft.crunch]

This is silly but I'd turn Zwei into a robot dog (ZW31) not only to make his delivery through the mail a bit less ridiculous (even though it's fun) but also because his name is Deutsche, like Weiss. So his model could be from the Schnee company to demonstrate that they distribute all kinds of products that run on dust energy.

[@Wild_Pilot]

And he would also be a gun thanks to Ruby.

[@thomasraines1396]

Have him outfitted like Blade Wolf from Metal Gear Rising Revengeance. It would also make the dog grenade he’s turned into by Oobleck and the Grimm he hops onto and takes out less absurd and also removes the pathetic image of a Grimm being taken down by a dog.

[@thomasraines1396]

@@Wild_Pilotthat’s awesome.

[@soft.crunch]

​@@thomasraines1396 that's the thing, ZW31 could be the byproduct of Atlas military technology repurposed to be a domestic companion. So I imagine he'd be very unassuming and not necessarily have weapons programmed in, but still be resilient and borderline indestructible.

[@thomasraines1396]

@@soft.crunch so he would basically be a mini tank? Even then have what the other person suggested where Ruby tinkers with and gives him weapons, so not only would he be basically indestructible but he would also be a walking armory.

[@peterclaymore2239]

Neptune being gay is no joke the BEST rewrite decision I’ve seen so far. I would LOVE to see a fixing season 3 just to see how crazy the domino effect in the last two season effect season 3

[@terrantitanium6441]

looking forward to the rest of this series!

[@rhast57]

I love the friendship between Juane, Wiess and Neptune! What a great way to change things.

[@genv02]

I can't wait to see volume 9 have a thumbnail that's just a zoomed in picture of a bandaid

[@ZehOverseer]

Pretty Weird Duck is best duck!

[@vinling2767]

Keep going. This is already better than 50% of canon.

[@johnking9943]

13:40. This might just be because I keep re-watching the train scene from Spiderman 2, but I would've loved if the 'No Brakes' segment rounded out with the girls finding a way to stop the train from crashing, which admittedly traps them with the Grimm, but then JNPR, CFVY, SSSN and Ironwood's forces save them. Still working out how the teams would know RWBY was down in those tunnels, but I feel it would've given the girls an actual win and a reason to deserve the praise they get at the end of the volume, since - as mentioned in previous videos - they technically failed since the train still crashed and Grimm still got into the city. Having them actually stop the train would make them feel more like the heroes they're supposed to be.

[@Dragiare]

Pretty Weird Duck, you're awesome

[@TheTolnoc]

Jacques a dick, but I can't fault him for the round ice cube in the booze. He's got SOME class.

[@lordvexacus6011]

I want you to do volume 3, please.

[@theanimekid7839]

I'd think Penny's team name should be PACT, like a promise broken once they split.

[@shama1239]

I'm losing it over the Neptune change because it is so good. Who doesn't like mathematically correct love triangles?

[@neilburns448]

I like this Please continue As for Vacuo being all Faunus we could have a backstory where Tyrian was the Combat instructor but was fired for injuring too many students I look forward to how you deal with the Maidens among other things Keep it up 😊😊

[@Yonokotehee]

9:34 CRITTERRR, THE WAY YOU MADE ME GASP Ooooooooo

[@kaialexander6806]

Queer Neptune 👏 Queer Neptune 👏 Queer Neptune 👏 Queer Neptune 👏 Queer Neptune

[@leachimgod13]

Wow this rewrite is pretty good- "Im axing the lieutenant." Boooooooo!! 0/10 faceless goons deserve love too! Can't wait to see what you do for volume 3

[@ZackTheGiant]

would love a volume 3 band aid!!!

[@happylove9502]

Can’t wait for the next part

[@cartoonxcinemacriticx1252]

I love this!!!!! It would be great to see you improve all the volumen ❤️❤️❤️

[@Jordan-gp3mj]

Honeslty for the classroom training fights, I think Pyrrah’s should remain the same, just in a different setting. But, hers could’ve been a more redemption fight for Cardin and his later in the volume, where he thanks her for helping them train. As for everyone else, others would fight in the class, and then Glynda also says to pair up with others not on your team so they can get to know each other better, forcing Cinder and her team to mingle as they plot. Cause I seriously wanna see how she kept her powers a secret the entire time, AND got Neo into the school for the festival.

[@s0up3]

omg, the love triagle makes sooo much sense, I really hate Jaune trying so hard with Wiess, but she just not into jaune

[@TheOneTrueErica]

I love your bandaids to no end, especially the team change-ups and the expansion of team SSSN.

[@zaaknicolas7638]

i like how mentioned torch wick might use the dust for and army of bombs i'm thinking its foreshadowing for the fall of beacon

[@excell211]

The only thing that I don't know how to feel is that you will still make the white fang some kind of villain. I mean, making the parallels between minorities of RWBY-verse and real life I would say they are supposed to be the Black Panthers "gone wrong" somehow. The best I could suggest (so my comment isn't just complaining about your ideas) would be to make a clear critique that Adam/bad white fang are trying to focus only on war against the system instead of actually helping and protecting the minorities. After all, if you want a system to protect the opressed, you need to help the opressed. A good parallel would be communities of enslaved people that scaped, they didn't only focused on fighting, but help each other, growing food, learning things like medicine, history, law and even creating schools/universities on these communities. Maybe they could be _"hey, you need to help people first if you want to _*_actually_*_ help the faunus people"_, maybe it is just too nuanced, unlike in the show, but... Maybe something simpler, like _"it was a misunderstood, we aren't evil and all that stuff, we are simply trying to be equal, but what we could do when they point guns towards us?"_

[@JonanaBanana4]

This series is so much fun! I really hope you keep going with it!

[@laraprisma6381]

If there is anything to change in Volume 2, it is to make the inclusion of teams in the opening make sense! More CFHV team, more Penny, more character development, etc!

[@mysteryxio9957]

Might as well do all the volumes now

[@Orurandokun]

Volume 3, please. By the way, would you be able to explain more about the huntsmen? Like, how did they get their missions? Do they need to go to the closest academy? Do they need to check police reports? Do they put themselves on hire like mercenaries? Or someone from the government assigned them their missions?

[@thejudgmentalcritter6584]

In volume 5 we see Qrow looking at a board with named on it, so I'm assuming it's kind of like a "fore hire" type of deal. Where people can post missions publicly somewhere and a Huntsmen can get in contact with that person if they want to help carry it out? Perhaps it's ran by the government because it's explained Lionheart sent all the local Haven Huntsmen off on missions that would end up getting them killed?

[@ambika69]

Nice bandaiding, but having heard it, I'm kinda more interested in how you'd cleansweep fix the series? Personally, I'd make each season 8 hours, so we actually have TIME to explore things, find someone who can actually replace Monty as fight coreographer because everything post 2.5 was ass, have Dust be a much bigger thing, largely be acquired from Grimm bone, be acknowledged as humanities stolen magic and rather than ditching the maidens outright have them be rare figures who can dust-cast without needing dust as resources and be the primary resource Salem and Ozpin fight over. Setting details aside, I'd extend the first three seasons several more and have it take on a more little witch academia/my hero academia vibe. Your character interactions are more solid than my ideas, so I'll not talk about that.

[@CoralPallet]

5:05 WOOOOH Marrow AND FIONA!!!!

[@BobBob-up8fz]

Even if Monty was still alive today. I feel Rwby would have suffered from shiz behind the scenes. But the shear passion from the fan base, keeps Rwby alive. That inspires me. :)

[@missstyle5737]

Plasse Making RWBY Volume 3 Better do it soon I really want to see what you change and what you keep.

[@catblue4690]

I can just envision if you’re keeping Yang and Blake together Black meeting Sun after that and being like “I’m dating a women now.”and then Sun being like “No way, me too! Wait, I mean, I’m dating a man now!”and it’s Neptune

[@Hepheat75]

This is a much better change.

[@Ribena-s9x]

My main issue with v2 is that it's least memorable.

[@vinn3983]

I actually had the idea of Jaune having an aura related disability. 1. To further expand on aura and make his whole thing about aura make more sense. 2. Give him a reason to WANT to be a huntsmen but also a how/why he had to forge his transcripts. The disability would have disqualified him from ever attended a huntsmen academy due to it being too dangerous. Not much is known about the condition, and so it's better safe than sorry. Jaune grows up still loving the idea of being a huntsmen so he studies semblances. This will give him more in common with Ruby since she likes weapons. THEN when he becomes the strategist, it's because he's already learned so much about semblances and how they might mesh together! Since his aura is irregular, it compensates by having far too much. That could have various downsides but also explain why he has so much. ALSO ALSO being physically disabled plus not knowing what your semblance is yet would allow him to relate more to characters like Yang and Oscar (Oscar may not be disabled, but he's on a completely different level than everyone else, putting him in a similar position. So Jaune actually becomes that mentor figure to him making it hurt more when they fight, sort of) Disabled kids are also very common targets of bullying as well and I think it'd be nice to have different characters with different disabilities in the show to display how wide of a spectrum it truly is. ONE MORE THING: Penny also knows a lot about semblances, so imagine them geeking out over it and building that friendship which ultimately pays off when Jaune kills Penny. I'm so normal about this I swear.

[@SchneeflockeMonsoon]

Neptune has always seemed so freaking bland to me, and I’ve always hated both him and Jaune for Weiss, given they don’t really compliment one another. In my rewrite I’m working on: I have Weiss be a useless lesbian, but she desperately doesn’t want to be. She’s rooming with a bunch of cute girls who she doesn’t think would work out (Ruby is young and she doesn’t even know if she’ll be the same person in a few years, Blake and her have had it really rough, and Yang is just… grating to her), and she’s got like a million other things that’ll make her life tough, being seen different because of that too is just another hassle she doesn’t want. That is until she meets Neptune: the first boy she’s ever had a crush on. *Weiss* will be fawning over him (completely out of character) and Neptune will be kind of receptive, because she’s relieved she can finally be “normal.” However, whenever she isn’t directly around him: she seems like normal and when he’s brought up she’s very aloof. The gang think she might be being blackmailed and look into it. Neptune’s semblance instead of being water control (moving away from semblances that can just be dust) is a connection to animals (referencing Aquaman). Not mind control, more pheromones and impressions. He says it doesn’t work on humans, unless they happen to be incredibly socially deprived or something. The team realizes he’s been unintentionally influencing Weiss to be enamored with him, and Neptune is horrified (because he’s not a scumbag), turning it off and going to talk to her about it. This would lead to her being outed to her team and realizing she’s okay to be who she is, it would have her team make more of an effort to actually get to know her and be her friend, and Neptune would get a small arc where he would get some characterization beyond his liking girls. But I’m crazy and don’t have a microphone, so no one will ever see that story beyond Ao3 where nobody reads my stuff. 🤪

[@MultiBoxingKid]

Pretty Weird Duck is pretty cool.

[@Ribena-s9x]

Maybe instead of Yuma and Treefa i would asd Cordac and Fennec.

[@wagkayongano5264]

"Omg i am actually just throwing all of the characters together arent i?" Ma'am i feel spoiled🥹🥹🥹

[@KudaGeatsune3821]

Please do all the volumes i love your ideas

[@m1zz613]

this is so fun!! i love the idea of an all fanus school (thanks pretty weird duck) and the idea of changing team cfvy (especially coco, ive been thinking for a while of how id change her for my own kind of au as well) into being fanus. having more fanus is something i think the story should have had (would have also helped blakes character imo). adding everyone really just makes more sense. hope you do the rest of the series!

[@Orurandokun]

5:54 are you sure? I think that current RWBY is a AU. While the real Ruby Rose was "isekaied" to Ice queendom.

[@iamrolly411]

Pretty Weird Duck is cool

[@superbatzbatazr7723]

Can't wait until you Is due volume three

[@evrint]

Adam Taurus, Ilia Amitola, Yuma, Trifa. Team- TYTA Titanium TYIT Twilight AAYT Amethyst

[@evrint]

Pretty Cool Duck

[@catblue4690]

I’m happy that you gave us an actual love triangle and not a love corner

[@acoolnameemm]

13:09 Oh my god, why doesnt the villains have 4 person teams like this in canon?? Just, no explanation needed, they just happened to be teaming up in 4's. Obviously not the same as the schools, they just happened to figure that 4 person teams works well and stuff. Maybe have the guard patrol be 4 grunts as well just to build up that little detail?

[@evrint]

Adam Taurus, Ilia Amitola, Yuma, Trifa. Team- TYTA Titanium TYIT Twilight AAYT Amethyst

[@thedualitysystem]

I feel like the dance would've been a good time to establish a love triangle between Blake, Yang and Sun instead. Confirming that Yang and Sun have romantic feelings for Blake and giving Blake a choice to struggle with. Maybe we can have a cute scene where they're juggling partners in a slow dance. I also always wondered where Jaune got his dress from so my idea is that Ruby and Jaune wander off cause they're both socially awkward and then decide to trade clothes after witnessing Weiss' rejection as a way to try to cheer everyone up. Maybe Weiss had a strong reaction to the rejection and ran off crying so Ruby has to comfort her and Weiss confides in her about not even liking Neptune and just wanting a boyfriend cause she was never allowed to have one at Atlas. Idk the dance would be a really organic time to have characters actually talk about their feelings for each other and maybe figure something out about themselves or something.