MBA Essay Review Ep. 2: DOUBLE EPISODE - MBA Consultants React To REAL Oxford Saïd Application Essay

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Hi, You've mentioned that the word "impact" is kind of like a buzzword. In my essays, I mentioned my long-term goal is to become a Finance Director or CFO of a tech company. Is that too vague? I gave some context before this to show the reader why I chose to move from IB to Corporate Finance, so will that be okay? I didn't state any entrepreneurial vision like starting a Company