Sci-Fi Horror Story | The Lagrange Structure | Space Creepypasta

[@jamesmorgan3032]

Goes to show that although vision is 80 percent of our perception, sound and imagination is often under appreciated but is just as riveting. Great podcast.

[@d3AdLyf3]

Speech is said to be 30 percent 9f communication which is also wild

[@ThePrimordialJunction]

@@d3AdLyf3 I agree. This is a great little story. The writer is much better than most on THIS platform. Seem's like most creators doing content like this are writing in 1st person. As soon as dialogue is needed in those stories, the perspective usually shifts. Going from 1st person narration to a muddled and broken 3rd person perspective. Which ruins the story completely. The problem I see with 1st person, is if your narrator is using I, Me, We, statements. If you introduce characters, that have dialogue. Those characters need to speak in a realistic manner. So, you can't have a character speaking in 2nd or 3rd person because real world people all talk in 1st person. Often listening to stories written in the 1st person, I think to myself... Why didn't they go back and fix, the 1st person beginning once they realized it wasn't working in the later parts of the story they're trying to tell.

[@kevincaruthers5412]

They sure are enthusiastic about destroying portions of an alien structure they have next to no information regarding.

[@ThePrimordialJunction]

Nice story! I really like the fact that it is not narrated in 1st person. Meaning you understand that 1st person becomes a problem if you have multiple characters. This shows you know how to write a fictional narrative. Most content creators on KZbin seem to be telling stories in 1st person. So, as soon as dialogue comes into play the perspective shifts to third person, which breaks the story completely. Making it unlistenable. You don't have that problem⭐⭐⭐'s for you!👍

[@darklight79797]

The best narrator for sci fi hands down

[@MagnetarYT]

♥️ 👾 Thank you

[@roguegunfighter9194]

Most definitely!

[@juliansearcie1758]

If not the best definitely second to none

[@underdoggoethe8971]

Nah, I know the best. He just doesn't want to do it. :)

[@travismiller6076]

I listen to a few…. He’s in my top 5

[@jamesrogers1554]

I can’t say this story was particularly well written. The characters seem to have gone to the Prometheus Astronauts school when it came to anything mechanical or scientific. It also feels like the author had just watched the movie Splinter and decided to put it in a sci-fi setting.

[@georgejones3526]

Sounded that way to me also. That was a good movie.

[@jamesrogers1554]

@@georgejones3526 I hope you mean Splinter. 😄

[@georgejones3526]

@@jamesrogers1554 I do.

[@ebomb1133]

Agreed 100%. Cool concept but sloppy/rushed execution.

[@anusblaster8671]

Yeah, I appreciate the effort, but feels like I have heard almost the same story 20 times.

[@glovere2]

Reminds me a little of Arthur C. Clarke’s story, Rendezvous with Rama. Terrific storytelling.

[@TheWiseOnceSaid]

The re-listenability of your channel is unmatched. This is another classic. Thanks Mags! 🙏💪🏼

[@Brukner841]

I can't tolerate his terrible accents anymore.

[@ET-lf7cw]

Getting poked by something on an alien ship is never good

[@glovere2]

It’s more likely a mission to a blocked entryway would drill a hole big enough to send a tube through with a camera and diagnostic equipment. Better yet a dozen tiny drones that could survey beyond the breach. You would have a detailed scan of every reachable area to plan the next phase of the mission. They would have been prepared for that in this scenario to minimize risk and prevent any accidents. Robots go in first before you would send humans in to investigate. We have that technology now and we would definitely use it in this situation. You wouldn’t even need humans to risk their lives if your machines were sophisticated enough. It’s such an incredibly dangerous environment for our frail biology. Anything that hazardous and unknown should be reconned first before anyone sets foot in there. Having said all that, it’s an awesome story just as it is. It just got me thinking more deeply about the idea and activated my imagination and my emotions, which is what makes it a great story. It inspired me to comment. Machines will be better than us at everything eventually. Humans being the risk takers in this story is part of its charm. The risk is key to the storytelling. High stakes and greater dramatic tension. Superb narration.

[@niccatipay]

Drones lose coms inside the ship as indicated by radio loss by the 2 crew. Wiring it will need wires with shielding, too heavy for a space mission.

[@grunty144]

​@niccatipay if they're advanced enough to make it to that structure, by then they'd have drones that could operate on basic programming or artifical intelligence to map and record the interior. No need for any kind of signal.

[@laurelsilberman5705]

Amazing story. So well narrated, loved the effects on the voices and the different characters’ accents.

[@MagnetarYT]

Thank you! I'm so glad people are enjoying it

[@darenmcaninch242]

So this is where the organism in the Splinter movie came from…. Nice!

[@arievena19744]

It's always a great day when I'm notified that Magnetar has a new story. Thank you so much! Your hard work is very much appreciated.

[@JeremyRDavis]

The movie Splinter is a clear inspiration for this. Very cool.

[@c-m902]

Imagine making this the prequel to Splinter as a live action

[@hollygolightly2777]

I couldn't to get home and listen to this narration!!! Missed you 👾 Happy you're back!!!🌛🧑‍🚀🥰

[@LoitersWithIntent]

Sweet, been waiting for a new one. Thanks for the great work 👍 😀

[@nickwest1337]

When you cross the Proto-molecule from The Expanse with the Oil from Splinter.

[@georgejones3526]

Amazing how many people who watched this also saw the movie “Splinter” (2008).

[@brianmcmillan1240]

We appreciate your great work, you are a top dawg narrator,magnetar,Mr creeps,creepy ghost stories,the dark sonium,nature's temper are top 5 n no particular order

[@MagnetarYT]

A wonderful list, honored to be part of it ♥️

[@brianmcmillan1240]

I feel starstruck,hehe, but I wanted to let you know, your talent and hard work shows through your narrations,and give you the recognition you deserve,wish there was a better way to spread your work other than views n likes, but thank you for great content

[@MagnetarYT]

🙏 👾 thanks so much

[@spaceinvader68]

Dark cosmos is also worth a listen.

[@obscure4847]

you gotta love how stupid astronauts are in fiction. Spoiler adhead, they find themselves exposed to a parasite that killed a hyper advanced civilization and their first thoughts is how they need to go back to earth. The selfishness is crazy.

[@SmortSquirtle]

“Gets poked by mysterious extraterrestrial biological agent” “Ehhh I’ll be fine”

[@cgreenland05]

Good to see you thriving bro

[@Sacksquatchs]

Love your narration. Do you have any crazy body horror stories? I've been searching for good amalgamation of creatures with descriptive gruesome aspects. Thanks!

[@MagnetarYT]

All Tomorrows is less horror, but discusses dozens of ways an alien race experimented on humans and created different species some very crazy and gross.

[@oddiocurtiss]

All Tomorrows is one of my favorites and I would call it body horror, especially the colonials. Other than that, Flesh Rainbow may be a good listen. Not quite body horror, but it's a damn good story.

[@georgejones3526]

It sounds like the creature from the movie “Splinter” (2008).

[@ajstyles8550]

Yess exactly 💯

[@aaronweaver9751]

Lagrange Stranger Danger Kudos to the narrator and author 🎉

[@neilkendrick4976]

this was/is a fifties style horror scifi story, well-written and, well narrated.

[@MrsCaranAmy]

This was an an amazing science fiction space story tonight. It was suspenseful. Great narration as always. Thank you. Have a wonderful day 💖 🤗🌟🌌

[@karadaniels1125]

I just dozed off to this 😂, best sleep I've had in months!!! There's something so whimsical about falling asleep with great science fiction playing!! 😊❤❤❤ .. last time I slept so soundly was too Firefly lol your doing something magical kid!!

[@gma_x4lucky91]

I agree. Some people just read as if they are reading an encyclopedia out loud.... It's like listening to nails on the chalkboard. No thanks. Keep up the amazing work.🎉🎉🎉

[@VeiledInsider]

Interesting concept, but clear and easily identifiable references to Halo in Jacob M. Keys, Alien in the derelict ship/structure, and as others have pointed out, the movie Splinter. To me, this was a really neat idea, but the writer executed it poorly. There was so much you could've done with this, especially with the Spirit AI that was controlling the structure which, for whatever reason, seemed to be in a state of 'rampancy,' another reference from Halo. It was telling them it couldn't answer questions due to classification, but was also willing to answer questions. Not only that, but the biggest issue I had was with how unimportant our protagonists made interacting with an intelligence that has been ACTIVE on a ship/station for thousands of years. They asked it a handful of questions at best, none scientific in scope, and then ran off. To me, this is exactly like what happened with certain characters and how they reacted to situations in Prometheus. Also, what is up with every Sci-Fi story seemingly never prioritizing high quality, advanced gear that allows their astronauts to survive against hard-surface objects, like penetrative splinters or knives? It is strange that, by the time we have actually invented a ship capable of traversing our solar-system efficiently, that we haven't created some sort of suit capable of withstanding risks such as these. Human hubris, I suppose, but still a strange decision from my perspective. My only bit of feedback for the editing would be regarding the ambience you used. I'm not sure if it's accurate, but I could have sworn I heard rain and thunder, which for me, was unexpected and took me out slightly. Overall, great job Magnetar, been looking for more folks who touch on the Sci-Fi horror genre with solid narration, really appreciate your editing and individualistic characterization. It made the world feel alive.

[@mjskinner9288]

Thanks Magnetar 👾👽

[@dartmart9263]

Perhaps the writer doesn’t know … that you need to be immersed in air or water for sound to travel and be heard. Astronauts floating around in a fully decompressed spacecraft wouldn’t hear a thing. :) Good story nonetheless. And very well read.

[@Snapper314]

This could serve as an excellent Prequel to the Movie Splinter 2008. Amazing and well made story!

[@georgejones3526]

I also thought of that movie.

[@MGJDMNJ]

Same..first thing came to mind

[@insertjjs]

Thought the same thing as soon as the guy pricked his finger

[@EmeraldEdge72]

I was just going to say that someone got inspired by Splinter.

[@stilltlrforlife]

Hooked on this channel, soon as I heard the first story I came across I instantly subbed, great work!!

[@MagnetarYT]

Which story was that? :)

[@stilltlrforlife]

@@MagnetarYT The title is "Ive Traveled to Parelell Universes".

[@MrBlue-qx8de]

Finds crazy pointy stuff, gets himself pricked like a fool..

[@vinitkshirsagar4304]

Remarkable presentation of the story👌👌👌 Special and unique content 💯💯💯 Notable and calm narration skills 👍👌👌

[@StoneyAcres1926]

Great job! I love how it turned out!

[@MagnetarYT]

Thanks for letting me share your work!

[@david7458]

Good to see you back.

[@MagnetarYT]

♥️ good to be back

[@O_look_a_names_should_be_here]

Can't wait to hear more of this story

[@harrygrimley4352]

Thanks for sharing this with us. This was cool but many times protocol was ignored or blatantly bypassed ! Any training will drill that into the astronauts heads. And NEVER return to the original craft once infection is possible. NEVER return to earth.

[@tyeadel]

Lagrange was a renowned mathematician and is remembered by the Lagrange Points (JWST at a Lagrange point) and the Lagrangian (T - V) and Lagrange's Equation of theoretical dynamics.

[@darthjarwood7943]

Great listen...the rain in the background kinda ruins the space feel but still very good

[@blackouting]

Awesome i was just looking for something to put me to sleep. Thank you

[@MagnetarYT]

Hope you enjoy! 👾

[@isaiahsalazar9476]

This has a lot of subtle references to halo

[@manasbose8817]

Another great story and narration. Thanks🚀🚀😛😛

[@Meniscus6]

That ancient spaceship should have destroyed their ship

[@foon-the-gremlin]

What an incredible story and a fantastic narration to boot! Great work magnetar :)

[@dollarcostbackpacker1226]

Good story... would make a good movie. Thinking both teams are going to contribute, you invest in both and then....

[@georgejones3526]

Think so? Then watch the movie “Splinter” (2008).

[@gigmaresh8772]

Do you really think a toilet seat for the Air Force cost $10,000

[@JC57515]

Great story!

[@superluminalprobabilityclo6884]

Excellent!

[@duelaelalma3428]

So this is basically a mix of Halo and Alien/Prometheus/Splinter, it was nice.

[@ETOILEPHANTOME]

Reminds me of that movie, Splinters if i remember correctly

[@Pewpro]

FLIR- forward looking infrared

[@seiboldtadelbertsmiter3735]

These people sounds like they're corporate and not actual astronauts. The amount of things they did wrong screams of taking risks att the expense of safety.

[@deant6361]

I like this one. Thanks for sharing

[@AlphaPro21]

Great narration- would love drawing- animation's to go along with this one

[@mattymayhem1232]

Dead Space but with deadly alien pathogens instead of Necromorphs.

[@DrGray-qh6ow]

Cool!

[@Meisha-san]

That opening animation was sick! Awesome story, thank you 👍

[@waynehewett4017]

Just because something is it not nature Doesn't mean it's man-made We humans aren't the only species in the galaxy or universe

[@dartmart9263]

Could’ve have called it “manufactured”, assuming the aliens have “hands” and not tentacles or some such. :)

[@dollartooth5616]

Spaaaaace pastaaaa....

[@Krigarkaj]

Bloody unprofessional crew

[@deeplorepat1113]

Something about someone named Jacob Keyes finding an unknown space structure seems…ominous lol

[@perrymathis4557]

Great story

[@tinfoilskullcap7034]

Good 1.

[@captainsensiblejr.]

Something 900 to 2200 km long is not three times the size of the ISS. That:s in yje order of thoudands. You need to get the dimensions right and then stick with them.

[@OShackHennessy]

Great narration 👍

[@ScullyPop]

Incredible SciFi Narration.

[@MagnetarYT]

Thanks!

[@gretchenmyers1279]

ooooo, good one!

[@biohazardmadness1155]

This story is just the space version of the movie splinter

[@MagnetarYT]

Haven't seen it. Do you recommend?

[@StoneyAcres1926]

Splinter was one of my big inspirations for the parasite! I was going for a hybrid between splinter and the flood, but something that could metabolize practically any energy source--radiation, photosynthesis, digestion, etc

[@ANGRYWOLVERINE2060-ft2nc]

well Dean is infected. I thought it was silly to handle spine on an unknown ship with your hands. I do agree they should have had miniprobes to launch into the ship first. But Fean should have told Oram the obvious. There was an infection on the other ship.The other crew that went over there were infected and going back there would expose him and Oram to more infection. However he should have remembered he was infected . So there are some plot holes. Still one of the more realistic sounding stories I have seen thus far on youtube, Finding an unknown ship or probe at a LaGrange point is certainly possible..

[@thomasblose644]

Next story title: "we found what lies beyond the cosmos..and wish we hadn't..

[@TheStuart-of-Cosby]

Almost time my Friends for tonight's entertainment. Introducing the One and only. The Man, The Myth. The Magnetar. Lol

[@limabravo6065]

If this is taking place in 2089 why would they remark about the ship being launched in the 20th century? And who builds a ship that sounds like a troop transport with an air lock that can only accommodate 1 person

[@eltigrepeleador]

Woooooo

[@Pound-Town]

Ni Gurlips this guy i know loved this story

[@datastorm75]

Reminds me of the movie Splinter.

[@eliasmartinez6284]

Rule number one don't touch anything.

[@ronwatford7331]

Sounds a bit like protomolecule...

[@pinklightninggacha]

Send shepard if it's a reaper she'll know how to deal with it

[@jrr7031]

Lol this is why ya cant trust A.i. In my opinion since it "knows" its smarter....it will make the best "choice" for you. Sometimes it may think ignorance is best for humanity. So instead of being honesty, it would lie by omission, or just deflect and re-direct questions. What i have never seen a movie ai do...is...take people on an individual case by case basis, except Eagle eye and maybe Mother. Again though they fulfilled their directives through misdirection and omission of truth.

[@X_WAS_HERE]

OMG YES YES YES SCI-FI SPACE OMFG YES!!!

[@MagnetarYT]

😆

[@neger7717]

Some expectations going into this. Hoping for some Dead Space vibes

[@jjskimbrell]

Is there a part 2

[@captainsensiblejr.]

Reminds me of the horror films Splinterb. Same horrific parasite.

[@aricchio7222]

YA'LL NEED TO DO SOMETHING ABOUT THE BLANK SCREEN PLEASE. IT JUST SEEMS WEIRD. AND MY PHONE KEEPS TRYING TO TURN OFF , EVEN THOUGH YA'LL ARE TALKING. I MEAN ANYTHING WOULD WORK HOW ABOUT A STAR CHART.

[@jamesdreads7828]

Open the god damn doors, Hal.

[@Explorator_101]

Woohoo!

[@jonathanhensley6141]

This story can show u how an epidemic can be transferred from space to earth because a part 2 would be Interesting when he is in quarantine and the parasites spread.

[@andreaso8886]

Does any of your story not end with the death of the protagonist or humanity as a whole? While filled with a really deep atmosphere, your stories are really depressing. I'll pass them from now on. Don't take this the wrong way, your stories aren't simply for me. But you have enough who enjoy it. All is well. And YOU stay well. Take care

[@captainsensiblejr.]

Sediment and silt in a spaceship ? Doubt it. In a river, maybe.

[@dirtypaws6328]

It's welded shut.......what's wrong with you?😶

[@alanfisk9166]

Ty vm

[@kellysavage7073]

youtube shows that the subtitles are usable but we cannot even use the subtitles and the screen is blank WHY ???

[@iamperplexed4695]

This reads like a high school english project from someone whose only exposure to sci fi is that of the video game variety.

[@jrr7031]

Not really. Way to down the author, though. Where are your publications?

[@iamperplexed4695]

@jrr7031 Not every author nor every story deserves praise. The act of simply placing a story on a reddit board does not entitle someone to be treated with kid gloves. Without criticism their is no growth. I am not an author, I am an editor and my opinion stands. Offering criticism to a work does not equal criticism to the person. Stop being so juvenile.

[@jrr7031]

@iamperplexed4695 no, you're right. But, unless an actual high school student wrote it.....come on now fam. Your comment wasn't so much as critical, as it was denigrating. I do understand that once you publicly release something, it becomes open to critique. Just saying tho, you can dismantle someone's work without insulting them.

[@iamperplexed4695]

@jrr7031 You're still doing it. Just because I don't like A Picaso painting or A Stephen King novel doesn't mean I don't like them or their art. If I opine on a work of art that doesn't equate to an attack on the creator themselves. I did not attack or insult the creator. The piece reads like high school level writing, from my experience. I don't care about the author.

[@jrr7031]

@iamperplexed4695 well dang! If you have more experience with writing assessment, i guess ill just have to defer to your more educated opinion.

[@Joshmo1234]

Spoiler***** Its always the one you think will die first that ends up surviving

[@richardabraham8313]

Why is it raining in space?

[@owensthilaire8189]

Neither nor not neither or. FLIR is infrared. Forward Looking Infra Red. Meh sounds like a high school kids writing.

[@illistfloo]

This is the unofficial Prequel to the movie Splinter:)

[@robert-zg8or]

Ah a audio book lol

[@AG-en5y]

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