Your narration is literally killing me, and not in a good way. You seem to have potential but you are not even trying. There's no emotion in your voice. And what's with the wrong English and pronunciation? It's killing the mood. The story is good but! I was so looking forward to a good narration. Halfway through, you sounded tired and as if you are not enjoying your job. I have heart burn hearing this. It's a constructive criticism. I hope you take it positively, and work on it.