When the Dystopia Sounds too Normal | Terrible Writing Advice

[@matityaloran9157]

2:32, Terrible Writing Advice used to recommend love triangles almost every episode as a running gag

[@Pylo-ry6ff]

Don't worry. He gets to the werewolves and sparklepires later.

[@Five_filling_feasts]

Has he seen half life? I think its a good story

[@matityaloran9157]

5:26, Jack London wrote a dystopian short story called The Scarlet Plague in the 1910s. It was about a pandemic causing the apocalypse. The Influenza virus had just killed more people than the First World War so it made sense he was concerned about it.

[@thomaswetzel6796]

Disney sued a child’s grave for being Spider-Man themed

[@Airier]

Not surprised. Just disappointed. 😑

[@Just_A._Tablespoon]

Imagine having to be the judge in that scenario 💀

[@kenblazewargame4707]

​@@Airierdon't even get me started on the most recent story I've heard

[@WokeandProud]

That didn't actually happen they denied a father of a boy who expired from cancer putting Spiderman on his grave because of a policy created long ago by Walt Disney himself.

[@masqueraid988]

Yeah shooting is actually hard. I am considered a decent shoot, when i have a scope, stand, and the time to line up. Most people need that to be anything near hitting what they want. Adding on to that, imagine trying to hit people who can react to bullets, are trained in complex acrobatices, have telepathy, and have ridiculous perception speed. Do you think most could actually hit that? Also, yeah, sometimes I do want an interesting romance, but sometimes, i miss my long distance boyfriend and i want some easy to read simple bl.

[@aokhoinguyenang3992]

The thing about mystery is that you must already have an answer already in your head before you put pen to paper. This way you know what details to show which to hide to stimulated audience's curiosity & all of the details fits together. A lot of mystery writers seem to have come up with the answer or changing their answer midway through the story, resulting in all of the clues contradicting each other or that the supposed great mastermind making dumb decisions(before the reveal they seemed mysterious & smart but when their plan is revealed. It has more holes than Swiss cheese)

[@masqueraid988]

Except for the case in that the point is the mastermind is actually dumb.

[@aokhoinguyenang3992]

@@masqueraid988 A hilarious example of writers changing the answer to a mystery midway is DC comic Armageddon (2001). There was a leak that Monarch is Captain Atom so they quickly changed it to Hawk _ For context: The story is about Waverider going back from the future to the present to learn the secret identity of the tyrant Monarch that rule his future(because in the future there is none that can defeat him, the only way to do so is to go back in time to foil his plan thus Monarch always wears a mask to prevent people from knowing who he is & was). The writers changing his identity to Hawk & totally forgot about the issue where Hawk saved his future daughter from being forced to be Monarch's new queen

[@ashnanadesan]

This! I read a mystery book at university that I found in the library and the plot twist... was that the main character did it. Why? The clues don't add up and it still pisses me off six years later!

[@Megamanlanprime]

You’ve finally fallen for the greatest trap of Terrible Writing Advice! Excellent! Welcome to our world! I can’t wait till you get to his ad reads… (ignore the first few)

[@matityaloran9157]

29:41, L. Frank Baum created his fair share of interesting fantasy races (the Nomes, the Horners, the Orcs of Orcland, et cetera) for the Oz books before Tolkien even wrote the Hobbit

[@scorchedland]

"...none of them neither a sparcle vampire nor a werwolf..." All i can say - just wait for it😂

[@anitanielsen1061]

“being original is hard” TWA actually has a vid on Being Original!

[@helicopterharry5101]

Welcome to the TWA cinematic universe

[@blueteller]

FINALLY! I've been a fan of this channel for years! So happy that other people now will get to see it too!

[@matityaloran9157]

22:51, he brings up on his website, in his commentary on these videos, that he doesn’t consider Harry Potter to be an example of this trope despite having some similarities to it.

[@anitanielsen1061]

TWA has a website????

[@matityaloran9157]

@@anitanielsen1061 J.P. Beaubien has a website. He used to link every TWA video to a piece on his site with his honest thoughts

[@Pylo-ry6ff]

@anitanielsen1061 yep, he doesn't do it anymore, but he used to post his honest thoughts on each episode there.

[@SilverHairedFreak25]

19:42 I can think of one example that does use "cares too much" as an effective flaw: Taiki Kudo from Digimon Xros Wars. He's a helpful soul who has a hard time saying no to others... to the point where he frequently drives himself to exhaustion in the pursuit of others.

[@Phleacean-DS]

23:45 the hobbit is from earlier in the video where Mary healed/cared for that orphan boy (the hobbit) while he was talking about Sue's interview flaw being that she's too kind

[@InvasionAnimation]

Disney recently refused to pay for a guy's wifes funeral since she got killed at a disney park. They did this because he signed up for a disney plus trial.

[@Airier]

Worse, they flat out claimed he couldn't sue them because he signed up in 2019.

[@InvasionAnimation]

​@@Airier I know right. Stories of big companies being that bad really makes me worried about so many legal agreements. And other aspects of life.

[@Pylo-ry6ff]

@InvasionAnimation i am probably going to get flack for this, but that isn't entirely a fair characterization of that event. See, the event didn't happen at a Disney park. It happened at a restaurant that is on Disney owned land. But the lawsuit includes Disney because they listed the restaurant as allergen friendly on their app. Disney is moving for dismissal because of the terms of service for the App (which was part of the disney plus bundle. At least in this guy's case) say he needs to go through arbitration for this kind of thing. So, basically Disney is saying "if you say the app makes us part of this then you have to play by the app's rules". Basically it's all legal bullshit with both sides throwing out every arguement they can right now. Don't get me wrong, I am all for hating on Disney, but only for stuff they actually did.

[@arthurmoore9488]

The interesting thing is much of the environmentalism seems to be referencing Avatar, but Avatar explicitly has nature as deadly to Humans. A note on Recycling. It does work, but only for specific products and often only if those are properly separated. Aluminum, scrap metal, and glass are prefect examples. As a rule, if people will pay for it in bulk then recycling can be worth it.

[@tekdaystar345]

In my opinion, a dystopian society should best be described by fish that don’t understand that they’re in water. Real world societies don’t have the cartoonishly evil without any practical, practicable or enforceable policies. Reluctant acceptance and fear pf change counteract any grievances.

[@DavidRichardson153]

22:04 One of the best examples for this comes from the ending ad segment of his Rebels video. Something to bear in mind, he voices _every_ character presented in his skits, so if anyone would know how to properly pronounce his name, it's him.

[@matityaloran9157]

15:24, no, Brave New World is a different dystopian novel

[@Bezaliel13]

I am so surprised he never heard of this before.

[@DesmondWainaina-fm6kj]

to be fair 50 shades is a dramatically low bar

[@Airier]

It should be. 😶

[@mistingwolf]

Okay, after a while he'll start doing this bit at the end for his sponsors. You need to watch them; they spiral into some kind of freaky plot thing that exemplifies all the bad writing advice and tropes he talks about. It's honestly really interesting and I'm weirdly invested.

[@massomouse1556]

I love this channel and he did a face-cam bad KZbinr apology advice video which was pretty amusing.

[@thomaswetzel6796]

Lady Katrina claes the perfect character

[@blunderingnerd]

I see you're a person of culture, dear sir

[@sharklazerboy9529]

Yess we need more of this!

[@Airier]

I'll try to check more out in Friday's stream if chat is interested. 🤔😁👍

[@sharklazerboy9529]

Do you stream on KZbin or Twitch?

[@musalamalmahri253]

Man I was wondering when you were going to watch this series! Also congrats on getting 100k love from Yemen ❤

[@Airier]

Thanks. 😊👍

[@musalamalmahri253]

​​@@Airierquick question are you going to react to more monster hunter? If so I would recommend monster hunter ecology by oceanz he has a entire series dedicated to explaining the ecology of both the monsters and environments

[@spl420]

24:16 Yeah, but counterpoint: by doing it this way you lose a lot more of comedic potential by doing final fight ridiculous like fight against Devil King in KonoSuba(Not in anime yet, I can only imagine how awesome it would be in anime).

[@silverdust4197]

Oh. Yeah . He redid Urban Fantasy some time ago

[@annekeener4119]

For dystopias, the complaints are mainly accurate for the numerous Hunger Games copycats like the Divergent Trilogy, etc. To be fair to the Hinger Games, it avoids most of the tropes except the love triangle. Even there, its love triangle is more of a subversion of the typical love triangles you see in typical YA novels.

[@Pylo-ry6ff]

Just noticed that you were looking away when the Captain Planet Cinematic Universe popped up

[@OnewhoconsumesMedia]

You watched peak Villainess Bakarina's anime, nice!

[@lachlanmc2335]

wow the first reaction to this channel i have ever seen amazing!!!!

[@GregPrice-ep2dk]

8:43 insert "are you sure about that" meme here...

[@Anna-B]

Ooh, I love this channel!

[@Randommaður-w4z]

24:35 lets hope no one blackmails you with that

[@Airier]

[Completely Innocent Whistling] 😮

[@dragnus12]

20:23 well now i know why i almost never got hired before i found a churner company.

[@Mamorufumio]

You know man watching this video just reminded me how my parents sometimes sound, (their ghost writers who are pretty good at their job and really hate stupid plots,)

[@snforde4603]

53:49 I agree. Granted being a Re: Zero fan has made me never look at rabbits the same way again. Look up the rabbit scene. Worst death Subaru ever goes through.

[@silverdust4197]

TWA , video on "Nature of clichés" is amazing .

[@agamemnonofmycenae5258]

12:10 The fast food of reading

[@matityaloran9157]

6:56, true though Napoleon from Animal Farm is a much better villain than Big Brother from 1984. 1984 had the dictator be an abstract concept but Animal Farm had him be a character

[@bareakon]

In fairness, the vagueness of Big Brother reinforces the question of whether he even exists as a human person, or if he's just an imaginary figurehead created by a propaganda state. In this framing, Big Brother isn't the villain, the villain is just the concept and shape of a fascist bureaucracy. Which is different but I feel just as interesting as a villain being an individual character like Napoleon.

[@matityaloran9157]

@@bareakon I’m not suggesting that 1984 had a bad villain by any stretch but the secret policeman O’Brien played more of that role than the Ingsoc dictator did.

[@bareakon]

@@matityaloran9157 That's kind of my point. O'Brien, the surveillance, the newspeak, the ministries, the propaganda, the two-minute hate, Room 101, they all form the gestalt villain of 1984. They are all Big Brother. It's a sociological villain. Take out O'Brien, and the system still keeps chugging along as normal.

[@MySerpentine]

@@matityaloran9157 "Does he exist as you or I exist?" "You do not exist."

[@matityaloran9157]

@@MySerpentine That was a good villainous scene but it was an O’Brien scene rather than a Big Brother scene.

[@robinschicha4712]

Very good reaction! We want to see more in the near future. You know? For the Love-Triangel!

[@Airier]

Wait, they cover love triangles!!? 😮

[@christopherjohnson9057]

if I had money, dude, I would donate to you, lol. God, the only difference between us is that you have the ability to communicate well and I think my brain broke that part of me years ago. I enjoy this too much.

[@annekeener4119]

The Bechdel test is if there are two or more named female characters that have a conversation with each other that isn’t about a guy. It’s amazing how many movies and tv shows fail this simple test.

[@MasterZeus94]

YES! LET"S GO! FULL SPEED AHEAD!

[@Airier]

... Epic the Musical has destroyed the phrase "full speed ahead" for me. 😅

[@MasterZeus94]

@@Airier *happy Winion noises* That was the intention :3

[@silverdust4197]

TWA , Great channel .

[@Airier]

Definitely seems like it so far 😁

[@ren_suzugamori1427]

12:32 que Steve Howard singing "It just works".

[@BruhMomento96]

50:40 as a brazillian, you could not be more right 💀

[@rodon265]

8:29 "XandY chromosomes, ARE INSUFFICIENT!!" -Neil degrass Tyson. 18:06 "well it can work" There is anime called Medaka Box, there the Main character is literally an in universe acknowledged Mary Suu. The way they deal with it is by pitting her up against a bunch of other Mary Suus. Mary Suu Vs Mary Suu, place your bets now, it will be a wild ride.

[@brandicorell2493]

The robot people in dnd are a thing, then you have pathfinder with actual artificial synthetic lifeforms coming from a crashed alien ship

[@Pan_Tran_DnDfan]

Hey, while I really enjoy your videos, I sometimes disagree with your opinions- OH GOD IM EVIL AHHHHH

[@Airier]

Say it ain't so! 😁👍

[@DragoSonicMile]

So... Gale wasn't a werewolf and Peeta Bread wasn't a vampire that never got enough sunlight?

[@horstherbert35]

Too detailed worldbuilding in fantasy is a real issue though, for example if each fantasy story has its own entire world complete with different religions at some point the lore/exposition bits just start reading/sounding like word salad. An example for this: The sequences in the temple of urath from the game summoner in which an entire "creation myth" with multiple gods is made up from scratch and it really just makes your eyes glaze over and think "aint nobody got time for that, who wants to memorize 50 made-up words that will never be relevant again"

[@aokhoinguyenang3992]

Remind me of Jupiter Ascending, which focused so much on creating a great(long & detailed) worldbuilding that both plot & characters suffered(the plot got repeated, the characters are just mouthpiece to ask & answer question about the world). If you don't care about the characters or the story, you won't want to see their world through their eyes. At that point, the worldbuilding stop being a fun journey & become homework for a subject that will never be relevant after you leaves the theater

[@christosgiannopoulos828]

Remember when we used to laugh at those videos ? Good times

[@Airier]

I'm going to pretend I don't understand what you're talking about. 😅

[@luketheslayer1047]

2:30 isn't that basically hunger games, and like half other dystopian movies

[@rubyknights5885]

Oh dude I love twa super you reacting to it

[@aokhoinguyenang3992]

My favorite environmental story are Ultraman Gaia & Princess Mononoke. They actually made the point that human is a part of nature & nature isn't always nice + likable people with legit concerns & priorities that somertime conflict with going all out protecting the environment. This should be the standard for these kind of stories but it isn't

[@IncredibleWerekitty]

It's the Time Machine.

[@cobraglatiator]

y'know there's a grimdark episode.

[@Airier]

He covered reality tv? 😮

[@cobraglatiator]

@@Airier HA!

[@L_______]

i dont know about america but where i come from recycling does help but it doesnt sove it while its not as effective as some people think as not everything can be recycled and some thing can only be recycled so many times so alot goes to burning which can be used for energy

[@Airier]

A lot of the issue is how the American system turned out to be "ship it to a landfil in China," with extra steps involved. 😑

[@L_______]

@@Airier one of the many ways america is great like their health care system

[@tadeolaguarda6965]

29:38 i´m confident it is the other way around, fantasy is were you can go wild and create whatever you imagine while sience fiction need at least some vague science based reason as to why or at least how what you create exist, the ganra is not guilty of the audience expectations and should not be limited by it, even if it isn´t money making

[@PurpleFire18]

If you watch more of these, you'll be in for a treat. Hoping you do, really.

[@bryanmcclure2220]

This is a great channel

[@dhararry7929]

Brave New World is one of the greatest dystopian novels of all time

[@CoffeeAcorn]

have you seen tale foundry? they do writing/ story things as well

[@massomouse1556]

I think JP has also jumped to Nebula and has a long ongoing ad partnership w/I believe World Anvil, but it could be one of yhe other big world/ttrpg campaign building membership sites.

[@diegonayahernandez6801]

YES THANK YOU

[@robinschicha4712]

Dystopia is often about what could be happen in the future, not what people want to happen. No wonder its very good in describing the future. Don‘t worry, a warning ‼️ ⚠️ is better then nothing!! 😆😄😆😄😉

[@tadeolaguarda6965]

whit this advice i may even finish the story abaut how i hate a world that can´t be save before it ends and there is no one left to read it.. Just kiding, no one would read it anyway

[@gamerzilla6113]

I hope that you wiil gonna watch Jake Doubleyoo

[@Elseba921]

20:16 I hate you. I hate you so much for saying this

[@mollywantshugs5944]

I don’t typically like dystopian stories due to how upset I am with the nightmare of late stage capitalism, but there’s a dystopian setting I really like: Warhammer 40k, in part because it’s a bunch of cartoonishly dystopian societies beating the shit out of each other. We have: -the fascist theocracy that rules with an iron fist and uses cyborg slavery to avoid ai -the rebels against the empire because of its sins who have lost their way and become a less organized version of what they hated at best and are a bunch of sadistic psychopaths at worst -a bunch of horny frat bros except they’re horny for violence rather than sex -literal demons from Space Hell -slaver pirates who love to torture victims and prolong their lives by doing so -a society that murder orgied an evil god into existence and deem any who interfere with their attempts to recover unworthy to live, even when that’s really unnecessary to achieve their goals

[@Beamer1969]

You need watch Planet of hats from OSP

[@CGomm-le7gv]

Yo again Airier still think you would enjoy Zimaut animated fights, star kid's Nerdy prudes must die musical which i found a animatic play list for as the actual musical 2 and a half hour long,again would like to see your opinion to noochy boi choice for warhammer theme song,and still putting watch hauntlich review on the 80s d&d cartoon

[@CGomm-le7gv]

13:53 hang on doesn't a triangle mean both bad boys also are in love with each other also not just the girl?

[@hugocastillo5612]

Jujujujujujujtsu kaisen abridged

[@CGomm-le7gv]

Hay Airier you watch 80s and 90s anime? so if i said hinca p done the cell saga in 80s style ie like fist of north star would it be something you may like?

[@leechowning2712]

And they wonder why storytellers make terrible viewers. If you are not able to predict, or at least understand, most of these points, do not bother publishing.

[@leechowning2712]

52:00 Airier is not that depressed, he is in fine health, he has no reason to suddenly self-select for Darwin... Right?

[@countdeville4146]

ghibli movies. thats all i have to say about the environment vidéo

[@jellojiei6061]

I am going to disagree with you at 27:25 you said that you failed as a writer when you have to show the villain as extra evil. Counter point Fans Thar whiler

[@andriuvlasuk3966]

😂

[@HornAndHaloEntertainment]

Day 6 of asking you to react to BHultra's retrospective on Bray Wyatt (if it turns out he doesn't allow reactions I'll stop doing this)

[@Rolandbattlevideos]

Can you pls react to Arlechino vs Sakuna its made by VFXboys its 02:21 min

[@rylanbrewer3320]

I love the channel I always wanted you to react to this channel

[@janehrahan5116]

43:00 compared to seasons 1-2 of tng there is no "morality play" element at all to tos, seasons 1-2 of tng are the star trek (paramount era, all of modern trek is this) ruined by morality play. At least despite his perversions both metaphorical and literal gene was a good director/writer overall so it was tolerable, the modern ones combine that with just overall awful writing. 49:00 the tribbles are literally not this though, they are a prey species (like rabbits) portrayed correctly as an invasive species with their population instantly going out of control (until they were poisoned that is)

[@matityaloran9157]

Good point