I liked it, but the repeating stuff over and over had to stop

Here's my add-on: Years later, another ship lands on Veritas Prime. Professor Alexander Drake Jnr., accompanied by his elderly father, has come to study the fauna of the planet. He was reared on the story of how his dad saved the Tyrant & wished to see the animal if it was still thriving, his wish is granted when he sees said beast resting in a forest glade. But that is not all he gets to see, he sees he is not alone, the Tyrant is surrounded by more of his kind! He had taken a harem of females & bred young with them! The young have now reached adulthood & started breeding with mates they themselves have found, our tyrant is now a proud grandpa! When he catches sight of the father - son duo he immediately recognises them! He has never forgotten, he makes his way over to the old captain & nuzzles him in greeting, his snorting & the glint in his eyes gives the impression of a smirk. "We both did well my friend." The old captain wheezes, touching the tyrant on the snout, "This is my boy & he's got young of his own as well, his oldest kids has begun to start families too!" The Tyrant snorted in what seemed like surprise, "DAD! Did you have to tell him that?" Junior replies, "Well, it's clear he seems to understand son," his father answers, "this universe has much to reveal, much indeed." The Tyrant's family crowds around to meet the 2 humans, eager to get familliar with their patriarch's saviour & his son.

What's so regrettable?

If only some of this story wasn't repeated, i'd have liked it better.

Nice one!

Let’s hope they don’t kill this world like the old world.

So they were going along checking systems. Next another ship contacts them offering help. Help for what? You skipped any problems happening. And then the next thing. They lift off from a pad? Going in circles is not a story, it's a mess.

Cadet? He's the freaking Captin now

why, why, why, why, why, why, why does every one of these damned channels with sci-fi have a retard running things. what's with the damned restart, reboot, repeat, and so on of these damned stories as you get into them your suddenly doing sh*t again and again and again and again and etc!!!!!!!!

Excellent story

I am still trying to get past "Interstellar Studies....White Ass" Wait...First let me get my mind out of the gutter........OK, now I am ready

In the first minute jack becomes jacket! Can't the author remember the story he is writing

Found love then were exiled for the love

Good story

Look at the size of that Frankenstein hand on the side of the guys face... Yikes !!!

haules baules

great story, but i thought scaroth was killed earlier.

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Good one

It gave me shades of that 80's film. Red Dawn

Good story, but it needed better proofreading. By the third time Liam sat by the fire I already knew that Rust's head was "resting in his lap and while stroking the dog's fur he felt a deep sense of" something - contentment, pride, whatever. There were quite a few repeated sections like this. Also, the title is misleading. I kept expecting one of the adults to ask who Rust was or for the enemies to say something about hearing but not seeing a dog. All in all, a decent and enjoyable AI story, even if it did need a bit more tweaking imo.

Well done!

Very good. Could've been a bit longer

so, trio from Harry Potter, and Chamber of secrets. :D

why do not make a live movie out of these stories

Stay alert the universe needs more Lerts!

By 13:10 Jacob has spilled his drink 3 times, went to the observation deck for the first time twice, and done many things multiple times. This story is a mess, disjointed, and a great example of a lazy wanna be author using to much AI to crank out poor stories to get paid for views. I stopped at 14:00 minutes. Don't waste 35:30 minutes of your life trying to get through this word salad maze as it doubles back on it self.

History is a great teacher

No mention of a Christorian embassy on Earth? I know at the beginning they mentioned the fall of Earth, but then she got a directive from Earth, so there must be an Earth government, yet again no explanation There are glaring holes in this story.

It was okey...

Why did the earth ship not take Jacob in?

How many times did Jacob spill his glass?

Why does Jack sound like a female? And, why are those in leadership always female? Feminist don't want equality they want to be superior to men. "Not going to happen"

Nice story!!!

Nice

this would make a great sci fi series for tv

You're a writer, and all you can come up with is "Mark reins"? I'm really tired , no novelist, and no animators. , none not one is willing to tell even a story of the complexity of earth, everything has to be Whiteman ??????????????why I'm tired of every book , tv show, video game , we're the only way we survive is mark reins. Brazil can't even show their own truth. Asian hide from the sun, stop policing and start raising life.

Good GRIEF this story is like a mills and Boone romantic only boy didn't get alien and alien didn't the boy.

so where is the night of love making !!!are you going to leave the girl hanging???

Dr. Foster "discovered that the alien DNA belonged to a race known as the Zolorians." She didn't know where the DNA came from before she injected him with it? DUH!

Sorry Pal, This Simulator only does Quicksand and Bears

Why is it that the 'Aliens Tortured a Human Child' always features a boy and they always make the boys age known. But all the 'Aliens Rescued a Human Child' Stories always feature a girl, age never stated - who is treated with kindness. Getting a hint of bias or sexism or something from you HFY Writers.

not bad

Makes me think of what we could do as just a planet if we could get along with each other.

These collaboration story's are getting same as same as,

Written by AI. Not good at all. The repetitive language and terrible lack of imagination. Repetitive attacks, described so superficially that I didn't care about the outcome. Please do better.

I too found the repetition of the battle scenes a bit disconcerting. Try varying the descriptive wording of each battle to alleviate the repitition. Refrain from using the same phrasing too often. This is basically a good story.😊

The air was thick with whatever over and over

To the people who criticize the writing. Shut up!!!! Are you trying to demoralize young or new writers? Or are you upset because their writing is better than yours?

This COULD HAVE been a good story, but the robo-reader kept reading the same things over and over. Try editing these things before you post them. Got to give you a thumbs-down on this one. It's a shame, I really liked the concept.