Thank you! I'll be resuming soon, just had to take a hiatus after my show premiered.

They should be visible on the video :) They are typed out in full in a post for my patrons on Patreon that'll be going up in the next few days, with a full analysis of what works and what doesn't.

@@cashcomposer I might do a response video if I don’t get bored.🥱

Once more, there's no development of emotion- it's very stagnant. And, the chorus is still repetitive; and perhaps worst of all are the imperfect rhymes. Sondheim was a stickler for the perfect rhyme, I can dig up the quote here: “A perfect rhymes snaps the word, and with it the thought, vigorously into place, rendering it easily intelligible: a near rhyme blunts it.” To open with an imperfect rhyme and call it Sondheim, it's just upsetting lol! And besides all that, it doesn't really talk about anything that she's actually being accused of, nor does it discuss her identity as a black woman. It's just kind of complaining that things are being said that aren't true, it isn't talking about what's being said, nor what the truth is. Every single stanza is essentially saying the exact same thing. Static. I'm interested to hear, what do you think makes this better than my first go-round? Not only did this take at least 3 minutes of writing a prompt, as per your previous comments, nullifying any claim of efficiency, it took my criticism to get it to this point, which is still failing on nearly every front, and to boot, now lacks any sense of dialect as well, and talks about color in terms of art and painting, completely missing the double meaning of race and newsprint both.

@@cashcomposer the chorus is repetitive because I asked it to be, as was the case with the near rhymes (I guess I prefer Dylan to Sondheim). Thats my mistake, not ChatGPT’s. Comparing it to your 3 minute version, I have to disagree on the emotional development. The Sondheim version is more emotionally rich than yours. Relax and accept that it might actually be better. A Section 1: John, they’ve inked my name in bold, stark black, As if the truth’s a simple fact. They’ve sketched my face in shadows deep, Ignoring all the light I keep. Chorus 1: They’ve drawn the lines so sharp and clear, But can’t discern what’s really here. They see a world of dark and bright, And leave no room for shades of light. A Section 2: They take their quill, they press it hard, Erase the truth, and leave me scarred. They craft their tale with no regard, For who I am beneath the guard. Chorus 2: They’ve fixed the story, carved in stone, And left me here to stand alone. They judge by what their eyes can see, But miss the truth inside of me. B Section (Bridge): But John, how do I break the spell? They’ve sealed me in this fragile shell. Their minds are closed, the verdict’s set, They’ll never see the truth-and yet… Chorus 3: They’ve boxed me in with what they know, But can’t explain what lies below. They see the surface, stark and plain, But never touch the hidden pain. A Section 3: John, they paint with brushes broad and crude, And miss the colors in my mood. They think they know the wrong and right, But fail to see the softer light. Chorus 4: They’ve drawn the lines they choose to see, But never asked what’s true to me. They frame me in their black and white, But I’m much more than what they write.

Once again, you began with an imperfect rhyme- and again, there's no discussion of her identity, nor what she's being accused of, nor any change in her emotion from the start to the finish. And my other points still stand (including talking about colors as in art, and still completely missing both sides of the double meaning of newsprint and race), and I still have to ask- what makes you think this (which has now taken several hours, versus 3 minutes 😂) is better than my first attempt? EDIT: I can't believe I almost completely forgot about the mention of quills- that makes no sense, considering the metal nib became more common at this time, and the printing press clearly would have been used for newspaper! 😂 EDIT 2: And the eraser wouldn't be attached to the end of a pencil for another 40 years, lol. Btw, I wanted to thank you for the continued engagement on this video- that really helps the KZbin algorithm promote my channel further! 😊

@@cashcomposer my pleasure. I kind of imagined this as a climax show tune in a musical where some exposition had already taken place. I actually really like the demo. I’m not an educated composer. If I had to write the music myself, it would be in the form of an 8 or 12 bar blues or some NOLA jazz or soul. Anyhow, best of luck with your project.

@@cashcomposer erasing doesn’t require an eraser (first use of “erased” in 1605). Quills were replaced in the 1830’s, but this is set in 1820. Surely reporters wouldn’t write their copy with a printing press.

Yes, on the surface it looks better, but in reading it for an extra moment, it's no better than what mine came up with: What sticks out to me is that the fundamental element of the song is missing- the play on words of 'black and white'. The second is that the generated lyrics here are insanely repetitive, in form (4 choruses!), in meter, and in rhyme, with no variation. Not only that, but even despite the dialect, it's quite wordy- as an example, 'locked up with the stories they tell' could very easily be simplified to 'locked up by stories', or a similar phrasing that allows for more dramatic melody in the line. Lastly, the great failing of this and every other generated set of lyrics is the stagnant nature of the character. She's angry and frustrated and resigned to it all from the first phrase, and that emotion stays the same until the last. There's no dynamic change, it's only a static thing- and that is something that I haven't seen any generated lyric get past. The best attempts I've seen have been purely superficial in their character development, with no actual motion at its core, and thereby lacking such a core.

@@cashcomposer I didn’t specify a title. 😁 ### **A Section 1:** *John, they see it all in dark and light, Sayin’ I’m wrong, don’t matter what’s right. They got their minds made up so tight, Ain’t no room for what’s outta sight.* ### **Chorus:** *They got me caught between wrong and right, Ain’t no space for what’s outta sight. They don’t see the truth that’s hid, And here I am, just like they said.* ### **A Section 2:** *Them folks takin’ stories, makin’ ‘em stark, Don’t care ‘bout what’s in the dark. They don’t look for what’s in between, Ain’t no room for what’s unseen.* ### **Chorus:** *They got me caught between wrong and right, Ain’t no space for what’s outta sight. They don’t see the truth that’s hid, And here I am, just like they said.* ### **B Section (Bridge):** *But John, what can I do from here? They done fixed their minds, made it clear. They don’t care ‘bout what’s true and bright, Just wanna see me fade from sight.* ### **Chorus:** *They got me caught between wrong and right, Ain’t no space for what’s outta sight. They don’t see the truth that’s hid, And here I am, just like they said.* ### **A Section 3:** *John, they see me how they wanna see, Ain’t no way they’ll set me free. They think they know what’s black and white, But they don’t see what’s in the light.* ### **Chorus:** *They got me caught between wrong and right, Ain’t no space for what’s outta sight. They don’t see the truth that’s hid, And here I am, just like they said.*

I get what you're saying- however, the idea was to give the engine the same amount of input that I had, and trust it to work with its bank of knowledge. Spending the same amount of time it took for me to write a very basic form of the lyrics to simply describe to it what to do in the form of a long prompt simply demonstrates that not only is it less effective at writing evocative lyrics, it's also less efficient, and relies far too much on human input. It is, after all, just a really advanced algorithm, not a creative partner.

@@cashcomposer You misunderstand how an LLM works. The more time you spend on the prompt, the better the result. A better comparison would be a 3 minute prompt, a 3 hour prompt, etc. That doesn’t necessarily mean giving it more biographical information. Here is a version in the style of Stephen Sondheim (mind you, this is just scratching the surface): ### **A Section 1:** *John, they’ve penned it all in clear contrast, Decided I’m guilty-no questions asked. They see the world in simple shades, No space for shadows where truth fades.* ### **Chorus:** *They’ve trapped me between their lines of black and white, No room to argue, no shades of light. They can’t perceive what’s left unseen, And here I am, caught in between.* ### **A Section 2:** *They twist the tales until they fit, Facts erased, every detail split. They don’t discern the hues that hide, Just brush the strokes to the darkest side.* ### **Chorus:** *They’ve trapped me between their lines of black and white, No room to argue, no shades of light. They can’t perceive what’s left unseen, And here I am, caught in between.* ### **B Section (Bridge):** *But John, what chance do I have to sway? Their minds are made, they’ve had their say. They disregard the subtle grays, And push me deeper into their maze.* ### **Chorus:** *They’ve trapped me between their lines of black and white, No room to argue, no shades of light. They can’t perceive what’s left unseen, And here I am, caught in between.* ### **A Section 3:** *John, they’ve drawn me as they’ve wished to see, Ignoring the spectrum that makes me free. They think they know what’s wrong and right, But miss the colors beyond their sight.* ### **Chorus:** *They’ve trapped me between their lines of black and white, No room to argue, no shades of light. They can’t perceive what’s left unseen, And here I am, caught in between.*

@@cashcomposerthat’s not how an LLM works.

Glad to hear it! It's how I've always approached the medium, I'm happy to share a different perspective.

It sticks to a regular form with no deviation or variation; versus writing a song that just ebbs and flows according to vibes, as I tend to do 😂

Thank you so much- I'm hoping my upcoming work will demonstrate a follow through on this. :)

Tbh it didn't bother me too much- especially since Grady got up to tell them off! I'm always just happy to share my work, there will always be disrespectful people, I just have to keep moving forward regardless. ❤

I'm very honored that Carlyn so graciously let me into her home- it truly was an extraordinary day, and put into perspective that Lavinia was a real person, just as human as you or me!

Hey, glad to have you here! 🥰

I'm not sure why you're presenting this as though it's an argument- if you watch the video, the guy I'm interviewing (Bruce is AWESOME) is THE GUY who definitively showed in his book that she wasn't just innocent of murder (in fact never even accused), but also most likely innocent of the highway robbery of which she was factually accused! I have another video lined up that will fully cover all aspects of the myth, and trace their origins- I have a feeling you'll like that one, be sure to subscribe so you don't miss when it's posted! ❤️

I have- but that update will come in a future video! 😉

Fingers crossed! 🤞

Even though I'm still in the research phase of this process, I have several ideas I'm tossing around for songs, so they'll be coming soon enough!

Thanks! I'm very excited to see the sketches. :)

Thank you! I'm hard at work compiling everything together into a cohesive narrative.

Thanks! I do have to say though, there's a lot more to this story than meets the eye. You should check out my video on 'Lavinia and Laura'- where a ghost tour guide goes into more detail on the story!

@@cashcomposer Then I shall.

I'd love to hear it sometime! :)

Thank you! Laura is indeed a fantastic performer, I'm very happy to have had her on the channel.

Thank you! I'll be sure to pass the word along to Laura 😁

Thank you so much! I'm glad to have you along for the journey. The next video will be up in under a week- it's a fun one, I hope you'll enjoy it!

That's amazing, I'm so happy to hear that you've been inspired! If you ever post the song, shoot me a link, I'd love to hear it!

@@cashcomposerI will if I do! :)

Great to have you here! I hope you might be able to find something interesting in this new project of mine! 😁

I'm happy to have you along for the ride! The creation of musicals normally happens very much behind closed doors, and isn't really shared very much; I want to open those doors, and make it accessible to anyone interested! 😄

Oh, all of those ideas are still very much on the table for the future! I'm excited to do Lavinia's story in the meantime, and I'm glad you're enthused too! 😄 (And you better BELIEVE I'll be writing some demented love songs!)

I love this concept! You know, even just seventy years ago, that might not have been impossible- the Ring Cycle is still performed now, and that's about 15 hours of music!

Glad you appreciate it- I didn't realize what the actual word was until well into high school 😂

Libraries are the best resources- no matter who you are, there's a place for you in the stacks. ❤️

Yes, it is! It's a solo for Byron, yes. The musical hasn't premiered yet, but once it does, I'll try to get a solid recording of the full soundtrack. In the meantime, I'll have a performance in May of a selection of songs, and that may end up being posted here! I know it's a while to wait, but I've been waiting even longer 😅

@@cashcomposerOooh, I can't wait!! I'm chucking that on my calendar so I'll be sure to check back :)

@@emilyrln I'll give you more exact dates to help: I'll be at Atomacon, on May 5!

Aw, thank you! I'm far from a professional singer so that means a lot. The original song is actually a fifth lower, and accompanied by a string orchestra- I just didn't want to worry about recording that, so I used a MIDI instead. The dynamic changes are a trademark of my writing; I like drama, and I feel that one of the greatest ways to manufacture intensity is through focused dynamic control. This is probably the single best example of that particular idea in anything I've written so far.

@@cashcomposer You're welcome! Re transposing and orchestration, that makes total sense. Honestly, I think the piano works really well for the spooky atmosphere, but I'm excited to hear it how you originally conceived it. Man, I've got to try writing something story-based! I usually just write folk-esque songs, and I've done one that may be some subspecies of rock or metal, but I'm unfamiliar with the taxonomy.

@@emilyrln please send me a link to one of your songs, I'd love to listen! Also, I added subtitles so you can better know the lyrics 👻

@@cashcomposerHere's the rock-adjacent one: docs.google.com/document/d/1k7IdWpweAu66GdTeqFATFpb6n9Nfw6jyzsu10Qx3H3U/edit?usp=sharing And here's one in my more usual style XD : docs.google.com/document/d/1PmC1_xe4Ni5Z-4IoQJz-t-gHiKFvhCJV3DS73UZ3UlI/edit?usp=sharing Thanks for the subtitles!

That creative spirit is so important! After inspiration strikes, maintaining a strong work ethic is tough for even the most seasoned writer- Sondheim famously procrastinated on everything he wrote, heck, even Mozart wrote an overture for an opera on the way to the premiere! It just takes time, focus, and ignoring those doubting voices- or better yet, writing in spite of them.

Thanks! I never understood why people tend to frame the story around Nick and Gatsby- Daisy is so much more interesting, conflicted, and devastating. She's one of those characters that has stuck in my mind for years, and I feel like she's never gotten the attention she so desperately deserves.

I hope you mean the point that you should definitely write if you feel that compulsion, that love for the art. And not the one about critics being the worst. I'm going to assume you meant the former, and say, yay, glad to hear you can relate! I hope we're both able to overcome all those trials that come with our calling ❤️

@@cashcomposer Yes I meant that love for art! And I’m with you, hopefully we get our art out there one day and people actually enjoy it!

Now you've got to convince the rock music people to come to a theatre, and the theatre people to let you bring rock music into their theatre- and the market is very much saturated, everyone is starting to use those more modern sounds now.

It is one of my favorite historical queer stories, and I do love vampires!

I love the story and mystery of Jack the Ripper and focusing on the victims for once. Also, amazing job!

@@tmntfanreview Thank you! I recommend checking out the book "The Five" by historian Hallie Rubenhold, it's all about their various stories.