5 College Essays That Suck

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[@lemondude6174]

“Get specific...get down to detail...” -> Has 650 word limit

[@greenapple6404]

Actually, if you are at capable of writing college level essays or you are writing above average for your grade or whatever you want to classify yourself in, you should be able to respond to most prompts with at least 500 words.

[@CheezyEnsaymada]

Green Apple You mean _at most?_

[@matt10y27]

@@CheezyEnsaymada "I disagree with you" *Gives response that supports him*

[@susanzhu6265]

look at ucs with that 350 word limit 👀

[@jetx2599]

My UC colleges are only allowing 350 :0

[@lemonflavouredbleach2677]

Damn she really isnt sugarcoating ANYTHING

[@ivi122]

Lemon Flavoured Bleach And that’s why I am so glad I found her channel because she’s so honest and her videos are so interesting. I’m not even going to college LOL my son is a junior in high school and I’m trying to gather a few videos for him to watch

[@lemonflavouredbleach2677]

@@ivi122 awww goodluckk💖

[@ivi122]

Lemon Flavoured Bleach thank you so much 😊 you’re very kind!!!!

[@__________________4241]

College counselors do that💀 I got a 36 on the ACT and my counselor was like that’s cool now do more activities or you won’t get into any ivies

[@joelmata273]

@@__________________4241 dang better start founding some clubs haha. Jk

[@inkbery4473]

I love how your super-generic-and-cliched-college-essays list practically describes 90% of teen movies

[@aduzzz3322]

TheInklet lol true

[@OneDerscoreOneder]

Haha

[@hannakunatowska7956]

Sooo true

[@samgallic9464]

@Haoyon Kim oh please dont worry about college admissions yet

[@pinkrose10yt]

@@samgallic9464 I'm in 9th and I'm already worrying about college applications

[@shanenanigans27]

"Write about your activities!" Me: *is a senior and hasn't done any extra curriculars*

[@peachtea2003]

Shane Doyle MEEEE

[@zareenaahmed1423]

o o f

[@Amanda-sn4ii]

meeeeee

[@gold4963]

Boy, I’m in trouble... XD

[@kiahdale3858]

me as a senior now doing 4 because all I've done in the past is 1

[@aikopeterson4509]

Summary 🦋 1. ‘Here’s my resume’ essay 1:25 2. ‘I got an A’ essay 2:45 3. ‘The mission trip’ essay 5:11 4. ‘The generic answer’ essay 6:45 5. ‘The Jesus’ essay 9:00

[@manusastry6177]

you are a blessing

[@aikopeterson4509]

Manu Sastry thank you :’)

[@varshitharamakumar9431]

You're the hero nobody deserved

[@aikopeterson4509]

Varshitha Ramakumar you’re too kind x

[@itmeruby4117]

Our lord and saviour

[@SelfMadeMillennial]

We all need truth bombs like these in our lives. I can tell you've read WAY too many bad essays haha.

[@chipwhips]

I’ve got 6 years to write the best essay I can 😂.

[@saptab1344]

@@chipwhips IVE GOT SIX WEEKS

[@m_abou]

@@saptab1344 I've got one week hahahahahaplzhelpmeomghahahahahahaha :)) good luck to y'all tho

[@danianisar6324]

Lol can we read each other's essays cuz I got 3 weeks😭

[@JustAnotherLokiStan]

I've got ten months, and I'm really relieved because I keep watching videos about people who are going nuts cuz they've got a week left

[@rachel.7598]

Your cynicism about the mission trip essay is on point.

[@youngchop7]

nah it ain’t…

[@solitaryfrowns]

Thank you for including the mission trip ones... they're so privileged.

[@piratecandy6310]

Sunnam as a person who wishes to be a missionary the way she described a generic mission tip essay sounded so selfish in my opinion even though you talk about the minority it's still about you.

[@jorgemendez6658]

Pirate Candy Ok, I'm not gonna say much, but I don't disappreciate the idea of giving your time to less privilidged people. But, please look up service tourism. Do it, research it, then please come back to talk. No I won't take a response in 1-2 days.

[@piratecandy6310]

@@jorgemendez6658 (sorry if this seems offensive? Or maybe too defensive I dunno) the reason why I want to be a missionary is to build churches and tell the gospels of Jesus. Not do service. Being a missionary to me is a career that I want to do as my way to walk the path of Jesus Christ. Missionary isn't about class or social hierarchy and it shouldn't be. Its about giving everyone the choice to become a follower of christ to grow his church. That's my mission that I've wanted since a little girl. That's the mission God has given me. Of course I will love to build schools, send clothes out who needs them. Make fundraisers. I'm making a traveling church. That's my end goal. It isn't what the lady in the video is talking about. Even if you believe in God or not as long as you heard the gospel of jesus I would feel like I've done my job. Now it's your choice to pick the path you wish to take. That's my definition of me wanting to become a missionary. (sorry if this seems offensive? Or maybe too defensive I dunno)

[@jorgemendez6658]

Pirate Candy Pirate Candy no actually that was amazing to read. I liked how you defended your stance. I see how this could mean a lot to you and if you aim to make it your career I can more than respect that, rather I admire it because of how you aim to dedicate your life to the betterment of people. I only made said comment as it has become a matter of social commentary. However, you are not at all partaking in that rather you are holding up to the ideals said programs say they are portraying. I wish you luck in your pursuits. Also, thank you for being kind and understanding with your response.

[@piratecandy6310]

@@jorgemendez6658 thank you for understanding me. Sometimes I wonder if my voice is too harsh when I'm typing. Thank you very much I actually appreciate your comment.

[@missmaddiemakeup6577]

Also sports essays 99.9% of the time are just lame.

[@kenm2595]

MissMaddieMakeup U wont be saying that when they get into ucla witha 3.4 gpa

[@pandafaze6780]

Ken M LOL 😂

[@elc2140]

The mission trip essay reeks of entitlement

[@fatbunny606]

I'd really love a video about scholarships, like how to get the best ones etc.

[@gabirodriguez1818]

Megan ^^

[@SupertutorTV]

Coming soon

[@ojalm3515]

That would be helpful

[@oliviaborie]

Is that heath?

[@aaron.0303]

The most important tips are that your essay needs to tell a story (with sights, sounds, smells, emotions, etc.) and it needs to be specific. You either need to try to pull the heart strings of your reader, talk about intellectual ideas that excite you, or your essay needs to be genuinely funny. That's one reason why it's so important to get other people to read your essays, to see how they react to them. The essay can also be a chance to find out very important information that isn't coming through elsewhere. if you're working 30 hours a week to support your family because your dad died unexpectedly, I want to know that to put your academic performance in context. Personally, I think "pull the heart strings" essays work the best for elite schools because they care so much about looking for kids who overcame adversity. Try to make the admissions committee cry, seriously. At least one of your essays should be about how you overcame adversity in your life, but should be a *story* about a specific moment/event/struggle/disability (in your personal life) and how it changed you/made you mature as a person. The main purpose of the "overcoming adversity" essay is to show how you *grew* or *matured* as a person, not simply to highlight a struggle. I wouldn't recommend writing about a mental illness you had/have though because (unfortunately) colleges are kind of uncomfortable about having mentally ill students on campus. The other essay can be about intellectual ideas, be funny, or another "heart strings" story (maybe a story, with sights, sounds, etc., about your family and a bad event/moment in your family and how you relate to your family members and such, or maybe an inspiring story involving you and a family member). "Family" essays work well, although essays where you write about your ethnicity/culture are very common, so try to make it unique and "pulling the heart strings" if you go the ethnicity/culture route. Another type of essay that can be really good is where you mention a *very specific* thing about the school and why that specific thing makes the school a great fit for you. For example, you could mention the university's motto and talk about how it relates to your own beliefs. This shows that you have genuine interest in the university, that you bothered to read up on the university's history. It literally takes 5 minutes to Google information like that, but makes a really big difference.

[@danathurnell5177]

Thanks mine is going to be the easiest ever my mom died. Done it’s very easy

[@israhasan2425]

Justin C This is such a relief to read! My college essay was centered around an adverse event that happened during my childhood, but I didn’t turn it into a “sob story”. I turned the story around to discuss how that event had matured me and even benefited me in many ways in my future. I‘m hoping colleges don’t think it is generic🤣

[@AppleBottomJ]

Justin C yes, I was preached in middle school to use sensory and make a story inseparable. Thank you teachers, hello essays. It does help if you like to write, too.. lol

[@serendipity1021]

Can u give me some examples of like what you would talk about? I understand what you mean about really speaking to someone, but specifically what would u talk about?

[@christinawalker6356]

@@serendipity1021 I wrote my essay about getting stabbed and everyone loved it

[@jvcelynn]

"Are you applying to college soon?" me: *sweating bullets* _YES_ also me: *hasn't even entered the eighth grade yet*

[@serigotskrila6712]

jacelynn thought I was the only one 😂😂😂

[@eza3655]

SAME!

[@BlahBlah-iu6si]

jacelynn lmao sameeeee

[@tasheanatom3867]

Start early, kid! Oh my God! I WOULD LOVE TO GO BACK TO 8TH!!! This is coming from a LEGIT SENIOR WHO HAS COLLEGE APPLICATION DEADLINE NEXT MONTH

[@audreywhalen5141]

jacelynn I’m nervous about my gpa. I’m in 8th and I start high school next year.

[@devondoran4310]

Me: Hopes she doesn’t say my essay topic Her: says my essay topic Me: *picks different topic and cries inside*

[@aliceglorian1427]

Lemme guess its Igot an A or heres my resume

[@mohammedabdulkareem8475]

@@aliceglorian1427 Nope I guess it was the mission type

[@Aryan-bs5ne]

It's okay. But I came here before deciding anything hahah

[@powerful-panda00]

😂😂 me

[@maxbreault4942]

Where my class of 2020 at??

[@avatarwan5824]

Right here boi.

[@dreamsdeep1076]

2020

[@matt10y27]

@@setht1194 You're lucky you're looking at this early. Do NOT wait until Senior year to do this. It's so stressful, and a lot of it should be done by/before Junior year because colleges general care about those GPA grades and the standardized test scores you took then (although you should always take it more than once, it's best if you do those retakes Junior year).

[@nabeelnayyar6111]

McDonald's class of 2024

[@curingthenaivete1642]

Jimmy Bro yessir

[@easton9583]

I wonder how many college essays are going to be about "how covid-19 affected my life" in the next few years haha

[@anglaspicycabbage790]

its actually going to be so hard to avoid covid in my topic TT0TT

[@KM-wb1yd]

Any '21s starting their essay early this summer? SOO nervous especially with our situation :////

[@spyinsecret0075]

K Mundra ayy

[@aaryamankhanna5951]

Aye thicc facc

[@erikapineda7964]

DUDE same :( Good luck with your application !

[@KM-wb1yd]

Good luck to you too :) we got this my dudes

[@briannawestmoreland4230]

“Starting” “Early” 😢

[@graysonelliott6115]

My essay was kind of a subversion of the "I Got an A Essay". On my transcripts I had a lot of great grades and then a few honestly terrible ones. I knew they'd wonder what happened and the grades embarrassed me so I kinda just bit the bullet and went into why I got those grades, why it's not an excuse, and why I'll never do it again. I talked about the pressure my family put on me and how I crumbled under it due to my depression that started to flare up in high school. How I just lost all motivation to work in those classes. How much I regret that and how I've grown from it. And apparently it was good enough to get me into my first choice college! I move in on the 7th ☺️

[@e.j.a.z]

Where did you get into if you don’t mind me asking?

[@thebeatingcow595]

Same. I had messed up badly freshman year and felt kind of obligated to write about. Worked out with one of my top schools!

[@blazereho811]

I want to do a creative essay but I also need to explain why I went from extremely good grades with honors in freshman year to failing every single class sophomore year (depression unfortunately and I decided online school and depression would be a great pair??). I’m not sure how I’m gonna do this but I hope it works out for me like it did you, as I really want to be at a college near my boyfriend that has a great program for what I’m already going for. Anyway, I hope you’re doing well now and congrats on being accepted :)

[@caelenbehm2977]

The K-Criti

[@everythingisa3some659]

Sylvia Rose oh so there is still hope for me then that’s a relief 😅 thanks!

[@talulahsafir]

"You're gonna help those children in cities by singing with them *sigh*" I laughed so hard

[@discogoth]

@Treestump Congratulations, it's still irritating and cliche.

[@AAliyahMya]

Lmaoooo I was scrolling while listening to the video and saw your comment and I started dying laughing omg😂😂😂😭😭😭😭

[@TorysSideQuests]

God she was so accurate about the mission trip. Kids with rich parents who haven’t had to work for anything are “so shocked” to learn people are struggling. And then they think they deserve a medal for doing posting on Instagram about how they shoveled dirt in Brazil for 2 weeks👁

[@iNoodl3s]

Honestly the thought of reading about mission trips make me roll my eyes so hard. You literally said it it's like "oh cool so you're unaware that you're privileged now you're aware of that fact" bravo what an accomplishment. Not to mention that it's gonna be at least 500 words

[@aarongould3538]

fuck i need to start studying

[@sasha2060]

Aaron Gould HAHAHAHA you made me laugh

[@audreyandremington5265]

Is this good? How Iron Man's death inspired me to be a hero (I saved thousands of -ant- lives by stealing all of the pesticides in my neighborhood)

[@AAliyahMya]

please tell me about this I say, you could start out like a funny essay and then turn it around and be like you're like an animal rights activist

[@audreyandremington5265]

@@AAliyahMya I didn't actually save ants, though. Plus, I just ate a chicken sandwich. The closest I've come to saving animals is picking up worms who are drying up on the sidewalk. I don't even always pick them up.

[@themadladx5687]

That'd actually be an awesome topic

[@unicornlover2659]

Yes

[@koechkaren1856]

Aaliyah Mya 😂😂😂😂daaamn

[@officialnicholas1]

My heart was literally pounding hoping that she wouldn't say my essay topic 💀💀💀

[@JavierGarcia-se8kc]

Nicholas Music SAME

[@yushoo]

Nicholas Music how did college apps go for you. Where did you get in

[@Pad2Paper]

Brooke is always so helpful. I love the fact that she always explains her methodology behind what she finds useful or not so useful. Thanks once again, Brooke.

[@danielawe9996]

I just realized how cringy some of this stuff is.

[@surabhichavan2365]

Daniel Awe I think you mean 'cringe worthy '

[@useryeahgoodbye]

who’s here for #classof2019 🦋💫😊

[@useryeahgoodbye]

we can start applying to colleges in less than a month!😨

[@mychaeltorres2436]

#classof2019 ME. Yo. I’m so confused. WHAT DO I WRITE ABOUT?!

[@restfulcube-notyet]

dunno, but we better get writing soon cause i heard a lot of people end up cramming it

[@baddenboctot9679]

🙋🏻‍♂️

[@yameatinwolf]

I'm here. Send help

[@madscientist8627]

Hey supertutortv can you do the opposite of this video please.

[@SupertutorTV]

Just do the opposite of these things.

[@camerkiddo]

SupertutorTV lol

[@brookifyd]

Kidding aside, yes we can :)

[@popkahchin]

Brooke Hanson how can I send you an email? I need to ask you more about SAT

[@SupertutorTV]

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[@Bexa-]

I did the mission trip essay😅 But I got into my dream school into one of the most competitive majors. I guess what I did differently was that it was a service camp and I did it multiple years instead of just one and done. If u choose to write about a service project, don’t just say u learned something. Say HOW you took what you learned and applied it to your life. Maybe u started helping out more often, or started advocating for change. That shows that when you learn something you don’t just throw it away, but apply it to your life, and I believe that will help make ur essay stronger. If you haven’t really done anything since that service project, then maybe it’s not that strong of a topic to write about. But at the end of the day... write whatever u want.

[@hihii1956]

I think the problem is in school we are taught that essays shouldn’t be personal

[@Ella-gb7no]

righhhhhht all i learn in school is how to write these formal sounding essays analyzing literary devices or whatever

[@amberj3816]

5:37 Omg I could literally feel the weight of all the mission trip essays that you've read just by the look in your eyes 😂😂

[@aaronratnayeke9169]

Can you do a video on the application process for international students.

[@sakshiacharya8290]

yes please.

[@rafidfayaz2007]

Aaron Ratnayeke I second this.

[@delainegneco7352]

PLEASE!

[@isal9185]

Kinda late here, but it's the same, But you need take the Toelf test and for finacional aid u have to send only CSS profile and not FASFA as domestic students do.

[@clover6779]

Yes please

[@princessmarlena1359]

Essay Topics guaranteed to keep you out of college: -Ring and Run: The Scientific Study of Doorbells -Caps I Have Worn: Forwards VS. Backwards, A Show and Tell Project -Field Guide To Growing Locker Pot -Huffing Paint aaaannnd iiitttss aaaffffeeeect on the brrrrrrraaaaiiinnn

[@ryanlee354]

I kind of get where the Jesus essay people are coming from though. I attended a Christian school my whole life and we are taught that the day we accept Christ is the best day of our entire lives and the most important thing that will ever happen to us. As a non Christian I totally get why it all sounds like bullshit an most people don't want to hear about that, but on the other hand, I also see why someone would feel so inclined to write that as it is very acceptable to write a college essay about the best day of your life.

[@skatergrl13]

it was an incredibly hard time for me questioning whether there is a god. Ultimately though, I looked at the evidence, and found the truth and as hard as that time was, I came out the other side even better than ever. God and Jesus truly change people so yea people do want to write about that stuff.

[@jj-vf7wm]

@@skatergrl13 Exactly! I’m writing an essay for college and I had a moment in my life where it really hurt me and what not. However I see where Jesus used that for good and ultimately led me to salvation and made me realize how desperately I need him to save me from hell! Something I didn’t put much thought into until I went through what I did and realized the sins I was committing. Life is not easy at all but now I found the truth and hope all because of God’s grace! I look back and I see how sinful my heart is and how selfish it is and I see things in a new light all because of Jesus. Definitely did change me.

[@danielapolo7346]

Amen🙏🏽

[@missyhunny7674]

idk why im watching this im already in college

[@RichKilla86ers]

Missy Hunny same here idk why I’m watching this. I decided not to transfer from community college to a university. I ended up working in the trades. I don’t see how typing essays will better me in using hand & power tools at my job 😐

[@areebahmed7354]

Richard Castromayor As long as you fill fulfilled and happy with what you’re doing, you might as well enjoy life haha

[@alexiaatheducc]

Idk why I’m watching this cuz I’m an incoming high school freshman lmao

[@arthurmorgan3111]

Literally you can write any essay, just make sure it shows ur personality

[@sandyramirez3218]

I want to talk about losing one of my old best friends to suicide during the middle of my junior year. It took me a very long time to comprehend what had happened and due to that, a few aspects of my academic life suffered. Of course I would go into detail about not only my academic life but also my personal life and how that affected me (a few of my close friends stopped talking to me after it happened) and how I eventually found a way to push myself back up to a happier place surrounded by people who love me and support me. Would that be a good idea?

[@emilyalton7416]

it's always good to choose a topic about overcoming adversity. it would be helpful to include the impact that the event had on your academics as a way to explain any lower grades you may have received. i am sorry for your loss

[@vedanthganesh4323]

same thing happened to me during the middle of my junior yr too. I'm going to be a senior in a few month, we're in this together man. I'm sorry for your loss fr rip to ur friend

[@bangtanlegends9415]

Sorry for your loss but it's a good thing you grew out of it and came back up colleges mostly wanna see that I hope you get selected

[@Keepedia99]

Wrote applications last year. The whole time I was like "let this not be me". Borderline traumatic.

[@dolecrash5802]

Keerthana Gurushankar Did you get into a good school?

[@elizabeth1927]

Class of 2021, anyone?

[@destinyk8031]

Meeeee if your talking about high school and not college

[@vanessawoyome]

Hii

[@davidcrawford7011]

Our time has come

[@LightningBottle9352]

Let us assemble

[@jessielin3149]

the sarcasm in this is exactly my kind of humor. :)

[@madmoose7667]

Wow I should not be watching this AFTER submitting all my essays 😬😭

[@aceris5874]

What do you guys think of an essay regarding how my ~5 years of volunteer work with rescued/boarded horses taught me that animals are individual personalities (along a vegan ideology without necessarily mentioning veganism), and how I want to share this with the world through the career that I choose?

[@ne0n202]

Aceris i love it!!

[@ananya8232]

Sounds good

[@gameperson5]

I've been freaking out about where to start with these essays, thank you so much

[@Tgro444]

wow, you posted this at the right time! i'm about to start my senior year and these college app essays have me stressed.

[@morgansykes511]

my father died when I was 12 years old, on Christmas of all days. I would like to explain how it impacted me/how it made me choose my passion/early career choice in the field of medicine. It has impacted my life so much and still does to this day. Would this be a good option?

[@aaron.0303]

That would be an awesome essay.

[@davidapperson4309]

Yea

[@bigbanknewyork3655]

who gaf. lol. gr8 topic

[@anaj835]

Incredible essay if well-handled

[@cristian-bull]

If your father died from a medically preventable illness...

[@reme3111]

Anyone from Class of #2020? 🌸👩🏻‍🎓👨🏽‍🎓👩🏾‍🎓👨🏻‍🎓

[@TheEpikBubble]

What if the religion you were a part of, created a struggle for you growing up? Is it okay to write how you got through beliefs you didn’t necessarily believe but you overcame the situation?

[@nostalgiafactor733]

I think that's a great idea if you go into detail about your feelings of isolation and how you struggled with coming out to your parents and what not

[@angelathomas6773]

NostalgiaFactor what if you don't plan on telling your parents what new religion you converted to until you're financially stable, like can I make that a secret between me, teachers, my college essay, and the colleges I'm applying to? I do not want to tell my parents just yet.

[@angelathomas6773]

NostalgiaFactor but I did experience struggles because my parents kept forcing their religion on me, so now I see religion as something that divides moreso than bring together

[@gabz09_]

Just what I needed! Currently in the process of writing my essays! #classof2018

[@gabz09_]

btw, lovin your look in this vid brooke!

[@estheriyilw6890]

Gabby Agustin ayyeee 2k18

[@bill3487]

Gabby Agustin 2k18 woohoo! Where are you guys interested in going?

[@swiftieria]

Same!!! :')

[@marissasinger-rosenberg9372]

Gabby Agustin Same here! Good luck!!!

[@melaninqueen3349]

so basically don’t reiterate stuff that ur grades already show go deeper than that

[@halicusnguyen8864]

I love how she's so down-to-earth and realistic, explaining every single detail of why she wouldn't recommend this and that and would recommend doing this instead. Keep up the good work :D

[@kevinrevans2853]

I wrote about a controversial subject , and I stated my opinions. I knew they wouldn’t care about what my opinions were but rather WHY. And throughly telling them why, they saw the kind of person I am.

[@maddiekuhl2957]

So...I'm the only girl on my football team, and I decided to kick once varsity season came bc my parents wouldn't let me play contact anymore. Would an essay highlighting how at first, my coach would only let me kick when we were loosing by a lot, to him trusting me to kick the first field goal of homecoming game when it was close? I would talk about how I and others went from not believing in me, to truly having faith in me. And how I grew along the way and what I'll take away from playing football for 6 years. Good idea or nah??

[@cathy921ontheradio]

Maybe talk more about the process of getting him to trust you and what it meant to you. Like, was it hard for him to trust you and why.

[@mandyads]

This was so funny and so true. I was looking for videos for graduate school, but high school videos are helpful too when looking for things to avoid. I've found that being completely genuine is the best way to go. As long as I feel like the letter represents me and sounds like my story - it always works for me. Being genuine (and an individual) really comes across well to anyone reading it.

[@benjamer200]

This is extremely broad and helpful to me while working on my college essay, thank you!

[@cheyenneOpheliabutler]

The “I got an A” essay can be pulled off with enough humility and crafting. If the focus is not solely on the “A” but rather you overcoming some type of adversity that results in you getting the A in the end, It can be done well. You want the reader to leave knowing more about you as a person. Not just the A. It’s all in how you present your narrative and tie everything in. However, I do believe since it’s a cliché it’s an essay topic that separates the vapid, one dimensional from the well rounded 3D student.

[@lilifreeman7015]

Hey class of 2020 gang rise up

[@obedyilajnr]

Eyyy🔥🔥!!

[@saintbeatss]

Lili Freeman have fun graduating on a Group FaceTime

[@kaitlynbrady8255]

Lili Freeman LILI I FOUND YOU HAHAHAHAHAH LOVE U GIRLY

[@jessicazeller8060]

The “I got an A/work hard-->succeed” essay is not always cliche. I worked really hard this past semester, but my grades only reflect the result of the hard work. I’m a college senior, but I’d still write this kind of essay if I were pursuing another degree because of the challenges stacked against me, which you don’t see on my transcript. I suffered a death in the family the first day of class in the spring, dealt with grief, working, singing in a demanding chorus, preparing for a competition in the summer, and a summer internship. In the fall, I missed the first week of class because I was out of town to compete in a national pageant, sprained my ankle at the pageant, competed on crutches, and came back to do two weeks worth of work in one. I was bedridden for half the semester, and made a lot of sacrifices to focus on my grades. For me, it was about so much more than working hard to achieve a goal. The sacrifices I made to succeed were more important because they changed who I was as a person. I wasn’t dealt the easiest hand in life, which is another story, but it was this past year and especially the last semester that I fully realized what it means to rise above challenges.

[@leahdavis7330]

"if you work hard, your grades and test scores are gonna show it. End of story." This is not true. There are many situations in which hard work would not be reflected in test scores or grades. Working a job outside of school to support your family, raising your siblings predominantly on your own, or constantly moving like many military families do are three examples of how life outside of school may detract from grades. I think an essay that shows how your life circumstances forced you to work hard outside of school can be extremely compelling. They can also serve to explain that you are a hard working person even if your grades and tests make it seem as if you aren't.

[@SupertutorTV]

Then write a story about working a job, supporting your sibling, or moving--- those are all GREAT topics-- don't write about studying and then getting an A. :)

[@amatiara]

i want to do an essay about my experience in a mental hospital but i don't want to come off as whiny/corny/irresponsible/pompous. any tips? or should i nix it all together

[@emmar1646]

Rachel Billington I would say no, you don't want colleges to think you are mentally unstable

[@gina333]

Rachel Billington I wanted to do the same and I totally canned it. I was going to do a piece on my depression and then realized that they do unfortunately discriminate against mentally ill people at college. Rather don’t.

[@emmasegerman6831]

If you’re writing the “I got an A” essay and now changing it, remember to use that story to pick your teacher for rec letters!!! They may tell that story in your letter so it’s still in your application!!

[@田木泰]

Harvard 2022

[@田木泰]

Saransh Verma future classmate hopefully

[@kingsenorali8139]

Good luck

[@田木泰]

LaVar Ball Thanks

[@田木泰]

Thank you

[@NicholasGreen451]

KIPTOO CALVIN eyyy same graduating year

[@kiotsutsuki6682]

9:48. Her hair like... moved and it wasn’t the video editor showing when she fixed it. I was so frightened yo. I just happened to be looking there as it happened.

[@BethelA-x7c]

Ki Otsutsuki lol Yh I just saw that

[@Cassandra-fq4eo]

It’s a simulation 🤭

[@hanlulyu6460]

I feel so happy about this video. I just turned in my college essay and there is nothing you mentioned in the video in my college essay. Now I feel I am so ready to be in the college!!

[@jordanfarrell1450]

does anybody have any tips for cutting down your overall essay? I wrote my essay but it's already over 700 words :/

[@priyanshipatel7297]

ya I wrote my essay and it was more than 800 words. I got it to 650 by cutting down words or phrases that either aren't needed or are too repetitive. The first time I went over my essay I didn't notice any problems. But just give it some time, and don't look at your essay for a day or two and when you go back you'll see many mistakes you overlooked before

[@jordanfarrell1450]

Thanks! I just wrote it on a whim a couple of days ago and I was thinking about giving it time before I looked at it again

[@swiftieria]

If you need help cutting it down, feel free to message me and I can help you!

[@jordanfarrell1450]

what's your email? and forewarning you're getting my very first draft!

[@swiftieria]

[e-mail]!

[@trinitycoll8627]

Why am I watching this after sending in all my college apps

[@estherjung7191]

Hi SuperTutor TV. It would be awesome and completely helpful if you make a video about students getting into their dream school with low gpa' s. Nonetheless, i would like to thank you for making great quality contents focusing on how to survive high school. It is truly needed in my life.

[@SupertutorTV]

You realize these stories would profile admits who are A) Famous B) Recruited Athletes or C) Children of wealthy donors? Not sure this would offer much hope :(

[@ifeellikeiwasborntoloveya6547]

how are you doing today

[@mariar.4893]

my original essay topic I was thinking of wasn’t any of these BUT in the process of watching this and reading comments I came up with a way better one so thanks lol

[@aksharlal5204]

I am a freshman and I am just freaking out by just watching these videos

[@sorenaleo]

You have 3.5 years to figure something out so don't stress to much. Remember that the staff have likely seen many a college essay and can help you come out with ideas and provide feedback.

[@cececory3217]

thank you so much i have really good idea about something big that has happened in my life and i can give details you helped so much

[@amandaleigh4516]

Could you do a video possibly for adult moms going back to school? I enrolled and start classes 8-7-17 and Im a mom of 2 full time job and commute back and forth to work about 1.5 hours a day. I've been looking for tips and advice from other adults and hard to find anything that isn't from a high school student. Been out of school for 10 years(can't believe Im old enough to say that now) and Im super nervous. Thanks for the consideration.

[@amandaleigh4516]

And I just left a lot of grammar errors. Sorry. In a rush.. Lol

[@christiansosa8189]

@@amandaleigh4516 So hows it going?

[@manip4216]

It is always good to say what's required than what's not.. really good pointers on need for originality and straight speak... as against playing to galleries in a typical manner

[@abdualipa1584]

could you please clean up your laptop?)

[@SupertutorTV]

Bring the Clorox wipes, we'll put you to work

[@emmar1646]

Lol

[@millankhalifa7458]

Abduali Ondasy

[@ifratjahan7050]

SupertutorTV 😂😂

[@josephquinto5812]

SupertutorTV Damn 😂

[@emmasegerman6831]

If you’re doing the “I got an A” essay, use that to pick a teacher for your rec letter!

[@ram0n_h]

College essay recommendations for NYU?

[@laurendonofrio5957]

ramon ^^

[@keelybutler3612]

ramon ^^

[@RainSnowHail]

Write something adjacent to creativity and culture, but not about NYC

[@dannyguzman5171]

^^

[@oceansbliss]

I would suggest that you should aim for an essay that would appeal to any school. I got into NYU, but with the same essay that was sent to all of my schools (it was more about a maturing experience/adversity than showing my creative side, although a lot of people have a lot of success with more creative essays! Everyone that I talked to that got into elite colleges seemed to have a very unique essay.) Also, keep in mind that with schools that receive as many applications as NYU, they may put more pressure on GPA and test scores than essays (may depend on the program, though 🤷‍♂️)

[@emilygrace6081]

man im glad she didn't say anything about writing about recovering from depression

[@shivaniparepally]

Hey do you think I could email my college essays to you? I would love some feedback! Love this vid btw

[@isaackorchenko9609]

Do you think an essay topic about a personal passion for the Glee TV series would be considered unique?

[@isaackorchenko9609]

Dylan Chou thank you so much for your quick feedback!!! I'll be sure to try my best!!!!

[@isaackorchenko9609]

Dylan Chou okie 👌👍

[@aaron.0303]

It could be if it's genuinely funny. Get others to read it and see if they laugh :).

[@michaeljordan1613]

if I were reading it I would be entertained but then again I'm not a professor

[@caligal1090]

lol unique but dumb

[@melissachesnoski3603]

What if it's an essay about overcoming a struggle and or a few struggles in your life? Of course they'd be unique and descriptive to the circumstance but is it too cliché

[@aaron.0303]

Not at all, that's one of the best types of essays for elite schools. Make it a story with sights, sounds, etc. and really specific. I wouldn't write about a mental illness you had though.

[@berryplaysuno4125]

@@aaron.0303 hi! could you advise me on my idea of writing application essay? is there any other platform to talk to you?

[@jflyersfan5951]

So basically if you're a normal everyday kid, that didn't have any life changing experiences to write about or some awesome story to tell which majority of the time is fabricated B.S. you might as well just keep going to practice everyday, work hard at your grades make it through high school as a normal everyday kid then just skip the essay portion of your application because according to this no one wants to hear how boring your high school life can be keeping your nose clean, thanks for all your help babe

[@jennahilton8259]

Yes! This is the problem that I had when I was writing essays for college applications!

[@haruthebear6880]

Well, luckily i had a "interesting" life

[@Maaad-maaan]

jflyers fan It's not about some life changing experience it's about how you see your life and the opportunities that you've had. If you see that your parents marriage/relationship has shaped you and how the parents of your friends effected them differently then write about it. "When my best friend sought comfort during her parent's divorce I realized just how much of an impact parents' relationships have on their children. I appreciate the hard work my parents put in to manage their lives, finances, and care for me. I can see now how many times my parents wanted to scream and cry or even leave one another but stuck it out. I feel this has made me a more careful yet considerate person when it comes to choosing friends and partners". If you can't see how little things change and effect you then that's on you.

[@oliviaborie]

jflyers fan nobody has a perfect life and just because you never had a hard life doesn’t mean that the other people that did, are faking it. I think that you need to be careful when saying these things online because you don’t know everyone’s experiences. You might really make someone angry. And I know you probably don’t care about people’s feelings but you should. These things effect people greatly. It effects their view of their life and experiences and that can be devastating to someone’s mental health.

[@autumntennison2815]

Do colleges want to hear about depression/anxiety and how you overcame it? Or is it best not to mention that and stay on a happier topic?

[@yeonmily]

I think that if you’re willing to go like super detailed and deep then yeah

[@afreensworld786]

Amazing, Nice video, I've try to find about Essays but never got like this

[@tomiwaolasoko7291]

Brooke, I love what you've done with your hair!!

[@nkwari]

I like how you are so conversational, not reading or jokey.

[@molly3116]

What is I wrote about hurricane irene and how it destroyed my dads entire business and town and how I witnessed the entire town working together?

[@jamesbedukodjograham5508]

This video is a must watch for all the students in the nation of Ghana and also abroad.

[@MastigosAtLarge]

I'm an academic. I work in a history department at a university (I know I'm not being specific, but truly, I wouldn't be that hard to find). I think learners should keep in mind that other learners who are not Christian are always instructed not to put any religious experiences and even volunteer work on resumes and CVs, much less write essays about them. I cannot tell you how many times in Speech and Debate I was told not to wear my Jewish star necklace (and I was ranked as one of the top ten debaters in the nation when I graduated). I was told not to include anything at all about temple volunteer work on my resume, despite the volume of the volunteer work I did. We need to move in the direction of solidarity with those who can't include these activities in the first place without worrying who's reading their essays. It's very telling to me that 2/5 topics discussed here are 1) religious in nature 2) clearly from Christians, because nearly anyone else would be afraid to write about being Muslim/Jewish/Sikh/etc. Christians have the privilege of not having to think about it.

[@marsiah8112]

huh? Muslims are the most open with their religion it may not be as known or prominent here in the US but the majority is defiantly not "afraid". Christians are the majority religion here in the US so of course it is something brought up a lot but im not sure how that correlates with "privilege"... When i lived in california, the jewish religion was very much spoken about and seen. Dont make comparisons and down play the struggle of being one religion compared to another , its a contradiction.

[@quaintabyss5696]

super useful tips thanks for helping me being aware of some unintended consequences

[@viktorkhan8518]

This is extremely helpful!!! Thank you so much for making these videos! ;D

[@kelseycarvajal2041]

why do I feel so attacked this whole video

[@zeon_cipher5799]

your essay is trash girl

[@alaa-eldin_hamdan]

You deserve it.

[@LuvThyMind29]

What about an explanation for poor grades? What type of essay should you write if you had poor grades?

[@thisisntlindsey5869]

I’ll be a freshman next year and I’m already wanting to prepare for college. Im too young I shouldn’t be worrying about this. 😂

[@morganhunter3994]

Dead InsideTM no, you’re not too young. If you have an elite college in mind you should be figuring it out in middle school, at least that’s what I was doing.

[@natalie-xc7hz]

Morgan Hunter did you go to an elite college?

[@kulsoomnadeem3238]

Same sksks

[@mychaeltorres2436]

You think you’re too young? I’m probably the same age as you and I actually AM a senior worrying about this.

[@TheBoomstickBros]

I'm currently in a transfer program after being deferred from my first choice university. The first time I applied I gave myself WAY too little time to write my essays. After watching this video I can tell why they didn't accept me the first time lol. I'm giving myself a whole month this time and doing as much research as I can. There is NO way I'm gonna screw up twice

[@EyeLean5280]

I beg to differ about the "mission essay." I think it does say something about who the person is, it's just saying something terribly unflattering about them.

[@discogoth]

Agreed.

[@forever9314]

1. Here's my Resume Essay 1:24 2. I Got an A Essay 2:43 3. The Mission Trip Essay 5:12 4. The Generic Answer Essay 6:44 5. The Jesus Essay 9:00

[@coralaisly]

I wish they'd just get rid of the essay. I don't like to share personal things with people I don't know. It's incredibly uncomfortable, and honestly I don't think it's terribly relevant. It just seems like I'm being asked to be vulnerable with a big, cold, faceless institution, and it's just... offputting. I don't really have much difficulty sharing my transcripts or virtually anything else applications ask for, but if I'm going to pay someone to listen to part of my life story, I feel like that should be a therapist, not some guy at a desk who honestly couldn't care less about me and has no reason to.

[@sakshiacharya8290]

I think it is because they want to see a part of you behind the GPA and test scores. I also have mixed feelings for college essaYS.

[@HoratioAccel]

You're gonna have to learn how to sell yourself eventually, so why not start with college applications?

[@goldboyjr]

lmao kids these days omg

[@lucaslemonholm5492]

Then don't apply to a school that requires an essay. Simple as that.

[@dipanshiagarwal5205]

There are a lot of people out there that don't have great gpas and scores so for them, I think essays pave the way to hopefully getting into a college they want to. My country has the system of "just scores" and it's absolutely horrible. Over time, kids have practically been stripped of personalities and it's like they're being manufactured by schools to be one generic person who scores 99% on all their exams.

[@tidankaycherif244]

I appreciate how honesty she is!!

[@RacleandRaHill]

i want to do an essay ab my love for video games and animation and story telling but i feel like my writing is i boring and that it wont be personal enough :((

[@swiftieria]

It absolutely can!! If you write it in story form and discuss how video games / animation have affected you or made your life more exciting, it'll stand out!

[@RacleandRaHill]

Ria Bhagwat thanks for the vote of confidence! i have some time but they say start your essays early in the summer so ive been trying to brain storm

[@SupertutorTV]

I wrote about my love for video games on my college application (many years ago)... I wrote about how my grandmother, who died when I was 9 years old, was actually the first person to buy me a video game, and how much that meant to me. I also wrote about not just enjoying the playing, but the stories that these games told me and how I got to be a part of those stories. You should definitely do this, by exploring how video games specifically relate to your life, especially if that's a field you want to get into. - Dave (SupertutorTV Producer)

[@TheEndernal]

I applied to a private high school an when you first mentioned a mistake I was thinking did I do that? And then you explain more and I realize my essay was good. For example, you said try to avoid academics that’s part of what I was talking about. Then you said if it was about academic passion it’s good which is what I was talking about in my essay.

[@officialnicholas1]

My heart was literally pounding hoping that she wouldn't say my essay topic 💀💀💀

[@LordLoldemort7]

lmfao same

[@xyzw10]

Nicholas Music Same. Mainly because I have already applied.

[@jeremynewcombe3422]

If you're worried about that, then maybe you should change your topic.

[@pammy3139]

Keep in mind that this is her opinion. I did one of the things on here (lmao) because I stayed true to my heart and got into places I never imagined. Just do you boo 💗

[@xyzw10]

pammy Congratulations! I got rejected from 9/9 universities.

[@torchictamer1865]

Can yu please make more top 5 or 5 about topics