A Poem about Society: "I am Uncorruptable"

[@playlistaccount]

Carpo The Uncorruptable. Nice medieval name there

[@robertboyd1467]

At times, I feel totally the same. To me ( * mid 1974 ), to be a Gen X'er means: Aware of, Comfortable with, Desire for, Being, Lost, And Found. -- Yet, to be a 50 yr young human, father and grandfather, means also to me i'll put it as a sort of a poem, thanx for the inspiration 😀: 's (

[@ajw3833]

"Goddamit! I used the wrong button and it took me all the way back to the beginning. Back to a time where my hair wasn´t thinning, and a world; bursting and brimming with youngsters running and winning!"

[@LiSa-oc7gv]

Amazing poem❤

[@irishguyjg_2ndchancerecovery]

As a poem guy myself, i think it's great!

[@carpo719]

Appreciate it, I used to write a lot of poetry when I was younger but I haven't done any in quite a while

[@alohm]

I loved the poem, but that is just my opinion, so I asked AI. ;) You rock sir. This poem is an intense, raw expression of frustration, self-reflection, and societal critique. It grapples with themes of power, wisdom, individuality, and the struggle to maintain authenticity in a world that often seems to encourage conformity and complacency. Here’s a breakdown of its key elements: ### **Structure and Flow** - **Stream of Consciousness**: The poem reads like a stream of consciousness, with a free-flowing, almost unstructured format that mirrors the chaotic and impassioned thoughts of the speaker. The timestamps and interruptions add to this feeling, making it seem like a spontaneous outpouring of emotion. - **Repetition and Rhythm**: The poem uses repetition ("we stand for it," "nothing left to hate") to emphasize key points and create a rhythmic cadence. This repetition underscores the poem’s central themes and keeps the reader engaged. - **Interrupted Narrative**: The interruptions, such as technical difficulties with the computer, add a layer of realism and frustration, enhancing the poem’s raw, unfiltered nature. It reflects the messiness of life and the challenges of expressing oneself in the face of external obstacles. ### **Themes** - **Power and Corruption**: The poem critiques the powerful ("those with power sitting in their Ivory Tower") and the systems they create, suggesting that these systems are fragile ("Paper Walls and marble halls become cliche") and built on illusions rather than truth. - **Wisdom and Age**: The poem challenges the traditional association of wisdom with age, suggesting that wisdom comes from finding balance and learning from experience rather than simply growing older ("wisdom does not come with age... he's merely found the balance needed"). - **Social Media and Modern Communication**: The reference to "digital Warriors screaming through text on X" and "social media Madness" critiques the superficiality of modern communication and the way people use technology to express half-baked opinions without genuine understanding or empathy. - **Individuality vs. Conformity**: The poem expresses a deep frustration with societal pressure to conform ("we stand for it... why do we not seek a balance in our life") and the difficulty of maintaining one's own identity and values in a world that often rewards conformity. - **Existential Reflection**: The poem delves into existential questions about purpose, suffering, and the meaning of life. It touches on the idea that life is fleeting and that we must make the most of it, confronting our own demons and fears rather than being consumed by them ("conquer my own demons defeat my fear of death"). ### **Imagery and Language** - **Vivid Imagery**: The poem uses vivid and sometimes dark imagery ("blistered black and charred," "hot coals of The Inferno") to convey the intensity of the speaker’s emotions and the harsh realities they perceive in the world around them. - **Metaphors and Symbolism**: The poem is rich in metaphor, such as the "blind man" who sees more than those with sight, symbolizing the idea that true understanding often comes from within rather than through external appearances. - **Juxtaposition**: The poem juxtaposes different ideas and images, such as the noble potential of humanity against the pettiness and greed that often dominate society. This contrast creates a tension that drives the poem forward. ### **Overall Evaluation** This poem is a powerful, emotionally charged piece that effectively captures the speaker's disillusionment with society and their struggle to find meaning and authenticity in a world that often seems superficial and corrupt. The poem’s freeform structure, raw language, and use of repetition and vivid imagery all contribute to its impact, making it a compelling reflection on the human condition. The interruptions and technical difficulties, while they might seem like distractions, actually add to the poem’s authenticity, emphasizing the chaotic and imperfect nature of life and communication. The poem leaves the reader with a sense of urgency and a call to action to seek truth, embrace individuality, and strive for balance in a world that often discourages such pursuits.

[@carpo719]

@@alohm holy shit man AI is starting to creep me out

[@alohm]

@@carpo719 that last line is perfect. Almost like the AI can understand the human condition, better than many of us?

[@wendyg8536]

@@alohm lol. the only sense of urgency AI offers, is a bolt to the loo

[@carpo719]

trips me out every time, how eerily accurate many of the AI responses are

[@CrowsThunder]

Wonderful poem brother, and even better overall message in the video - from one 50 year old to another: I once believed I was born in the wrong time, until I realized I was sent here to keep our "old ways" alive and pass them on. I've never voted and never will.

[@carpo719]

@@CrowsThunder I'm right there with you my brother

[@ShouldaWaved]

The poem is so true, excllent job

[@DRO_710]

Beautiful poem Josh 🤍🪬

[@carpo719]

Thank you my friend it's been awhile I hope you're doing well out there

[@DopamineSchizo]

loved the poem and can relate to your standpoint in life and society me being a 33 year old thinking the 90s were the last good decade. i like to rhyme a lot and at times make poems too

[@carpo719]

You are right about the age I started learning to cope with stress. My 30s were a whirlwind of emotions.

[@alohm]

We are incorruptible at our essence, but all of the 'add-ons and beliefs' we consider our being, are often very corrupted when we adopt them.

[@carpo719]

@@alohm true . But it is subjective no?

[@alohm]

@@carpo719 Very much so. The journey is subjective, but the destination is shared: being better than our previous self, and good to each other...

[@carpo719]

@@alohm often I refer back to the original source, the monad.... and I question whether our previous self or even anima mundi, means as much as we think it does.... in other words I'm still trying to figure out what we are improving on

[@alohm]

@@carpo719 it is letting go of the adornment and seeing our true nature. Nietzsche said we think so little of ourselves that when we achieve a breakthrough or insight: we attribute it to an external source. We are knowers but the last person we will know is ourselves. A story from Kabbalah that says the angels were jealous of us so they hid our true nature where we would never look: inside ourselves....

[@alohm]

@@carpo719 AI: This story is a well-known tale from Kabbalistic tradition. It illustrates the idea that the essence of our true nature is hidden deep within us, where we are least likely to search. The story goes that when God created humanity, the angels became jealous of the special gifts bestowed upon humans, particularly the divine spark or the potential for spiritual greatness. The angels feared that if humans discovered their true nature, they might surpass even the angels in wisdom and power. To prevent this, the angels sought to hide the divine spark somewhere humans would never find it. The angels considered various hiding places: in the highest heavens, at the depths of the oceans, or on the farthest mountaintops. But each time, God advised them that humans, in their curiosity and ingenuity, would eventually discover these places. Finally, the angels decided to hide it within humans themselves, believing that they would never think to look inward. Thus, the divine spark, or the essence of our true nature, was hidden within our own hearts and souls. The moral of the story is that the answers we seek, and the true nature of our being, are not found in external pursuits but within ourselves. This story emphasizes the importance of self-discovery, introspection, and the inner journey as key aspects of spiritual growth.

[@peeniewalli]

To read one's own work/poetry to others , it's not easy. For some maybe it is just :ok here we go. I like that. My own experience got a boost once when my poet was picked out by the DJ on Dutch national radio (i was 17 back than and never wrote a poem before) and had mixed feelings about it of sending it in at all. Later i figured out that my poem wasn't that good at all, just the few others probably just written also 'not that good' ones...😂! With pen on paper i like to write, occasionally even type. I picked upsome pencils and started to draw on scrap pieces of cartboard lately. Don't know why. Just happened . Oh and Carpo, i suppose you know but when your tech stuff is just like mine ( older ) please make a backup of your poem a.o. or photograph the screen. (lost a lot that way). 1️⃣❤,

[@AmyAlways]

I’m a hippie too but your hair is much nicer haha :))))

[@wandergyeagerm]

LOVE iT!

[@mmblaake]

Hello again, my friend.

[@Jason-rt5cb]

You know what blew my mind the other night... I somehow stumbled onto some videos where a guy took a video camera into 7-11's and such in the 80's, just for a lark I suppose. Having a video camera back then was pretty substantial anyway...but looking at how the people speak with each other, how they interacted...it was like there was this light in their face that isn't there in peoples faces today. Nevermind the .69 cent big gulp and getting change back for $1 or that they're smoking in the store...lol...

[@carpo719]

@@Jason-rt5cb I've seen that one too. ❤

[@g-man9684]

I've also seen that 7-11 video lol

[@ShouldaWaved]

And I'm OCD as hell, the dispensary is always mental battle, good Lord I'm like no that one, wait...yes no, listen I'm sorry, no, wait yes! Hahaha 🤣

[@carpo719]

@@ShouldaWaved LOL me too, I have a solution for that. I go in there and I focus on one of the cases, I say I want something in the mid-range, that's available in the ounce. Then when they give me the choice of the bags I picked the one on the right

[@ShouldaWaved]

​@@carpo719sounds like some strategy ide use. Orange zkittles is the strain. We'll see yet to try. Then there's a strain called blue haze I might go splurge today. I think I'm going to learn to paint. The clock is ticking, creativity shall set us free

[@MrKossik]

carpo for president

[@bittasweetsymphony726]

i know u think u know everything, but, did u know that blue eyes are not liked by other people

[@g-man9684]

Where'd you hear that?

[@carpo719]

@@bittasweetsymphony726 I know you know you think I think I know everything, but I think you don't know that I don't think I know everything but now you know that I think that. Never met a person who didn't like blue eyes unless they are hung up on some race thing, that's their problem not mine

[@carpo719]

@@g-man9684 they didn't hear it anywhere they just made it up. For some reason dude is hung up on my physical appearance.... he (or she) often comments on my beard and how I should shave it. It's weird and creepy, not to mention very shallow, when people are hung up on other people's looks. 😄 so I just assumed they were young