C1 Advanced (CAE) PERFECT C1 Advanced essay example! | Writing Workshop

I was asked to correct this C1 Advanced (CAE) essay, but it's already perfect... I had very few things to change to this essay, making it a perfect example of a C1 Advanced Essay. Learn how to write a C1 Advanced essay by studying this example!
What would you change to this essay?
Chapters
00:00 Introduction
00:13 Assignment
01:09 First glance at the essay
01:42 Perfecting the introduction
03:38 Perfecting Argument 1
08:38 Argument 2
14:04 Opinion and Conclusion
15:27 What makes this essay perfect?!
15:48 End
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[@GiC7]

Thank you sir, I'm learning a lot.

[@TeacherZdenek]

I have to say these are becoming my favourite videos. Nice one Mr. Henriques!

[@MrHenriquez]

Thanks Zdenek! 😁

[@teodorajerinkic591]

Thank you! I've learnt a lot.

[@MrHenriquez]

Good to hear! Thank you for watching 😁

[@hempstockashley1112]

Thank you very much

[@MrHenriquez]

That's great to hear! Thank you very much for watching 😁

[@spiritualsoul4910]

Could you please make a video on wording, especially cutting down prepositions

[@MrHenriquez]

Sure! I'll try to say a bit about that in my new video.

[@spiritualsoul4910]

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[@Vi.king18]

Mr. Henriquez, thank you! And great vid. I hope you see my questions. Do the prompts need to be similar in nature? What I mean if the first prompt was negative, should be second be as well? Vice versa, when it's positive. For example, Prompt 1 idea: Work is exhausting it drains the existence of oneself. Prmopt 2: Culture denies individual identity. It tends to create a monolith approach. I understand it's compare and contrast but I'm having a time fathoming the essence of the essay. Would it be fine for the first prompt to be overwhelming whereas the second to be underwhelming? I find it easier to do it this way. First prompt is overwhelming while the second is underwhelming. I have recently learnt to use the PEEL approach towards my essays but I am concerned about the details. They're not a hundred percrent factual but there's just a little truth in it. I mean it's not fact checking right, but is that advisable? In addition, what level of being specific should I do in each example I give to the prompt? I'm now knowledgeable that experiences don't count. Also, I'm confused where to apply the compare and contrast part? Should I take it holistically? Or do I contrast prompt 1 and 2? And compare them in the conclusion with my insight?

[@MrHenriquez]

Hey! Thanks for reaching out. For your first question, I think you could approach it as you see fit, as long as you really compare and contrast the two prompts. For your PEEL (I usually use levels or TXXXC), they won't fact-check your work and if you think your work will benefit from your examples, you should definitely include it. Your examples should be as specific as possible as you don't want your readers to guess what you mean. I don't know whether the C1 essays have a very fixed structure, but I know from C2 that those essays have a fixed structure you must follow. There could be something online about this for C1 essays, and if I encounter it I'll let you know!

[@Vi.king18]

Mr. Henriquez, I've been busting my brains out for writing thinking what approach is must. I'm glad to find out that it could be negative-positive, positive-positive, negative-negative. As long as I can convey my thoughts in a cleverly well written way, and meet what Cambridge is demanding. I found the process to be excruciating but it seems to be doable than I thought it would be. You don't know how much this means. Thank you! Thank you! PS (I'm looking forward to seeing your next videos! I hope you can show us how to write one too)

[@edyly3701]

Hello appreciate your work very much. I was wondering why you change the structure of the introduction since I was thought that more advanced grammatical structures like inversions are gonna add more value to the essay?😅

[@MrHenriquez]

It depends on how inversion is used. In some cases, it could create informal structures, which is what you want to avoid.

[@nataliamakarova708]

@@MrHenriquez Would you agree that in general inversions are more suited for conclusions as opposed to introductions?

[@MrHenriquez]

@@nataliamakarova708 I haven't really thought about it that much, but I'd say that you have a point. Since you're summarising the main points of your work in a conclusion, it seems more natural to put emphasis on those elements and use inversion to add that emphasis.

[@thuvu8605]

I always struggle with writing task. Somehow I feel it’s harder than listening tasks... I’m practicing for C1 and have no idea if I can do it.

[@MrHenriquez]

Well, I have some more videos on C1 writing, and if you'd like me to make a video with one of your works, feel free to let me know! 😁

[@thuvu8605]

@@MrHenriquez how I can send you one of mine ( essay) via email?. Thank you!

[@MrHenriquez]

You can email your work to [e-mail]