I remember less each day Your laugh Your smile Your gentle way. I search my brain Then entertain The thought of you With me again. And for a while I wear a smile But then once more You start to fade. I try and try To only find That you’re not here And I remain.
@terraneansub2456 жыл бұрын
Gabe Thornes this is beautiful
@thepurpleflute97406 жыл бұрын
This is wonderful, actually I really felt this one. Thank you.
@novemberoscar986 жыл бұрын
This is simple yet so amazing. Beautiful.
@alexdiamond39876 жыл бұрын
Bars
@faithdavis35036 жыл бұрын
this touched me. thank you
@Valentina-zj5ct4 жыл бұрын
When you already write poetry but you just come here to make you sure you are doing it ok
@kayenjee4 жыл бұрын
Same, girl, same.
@micaholadiji35583 жыл бұрын
Make that 3 of us
@cormorantcolors3 жыл бұрын
Mood
@fritzinielavoile25213 жыл бұрын
Omg me😂
@moonlightstargem10063 жыл бұрын
Mee too :”)
@monkeysfly138 жыл бұрын
aw look at all these cute poems in the comment section. Follow your heart everyone, and may light shine in the darkest corners of your life. Peace x love
@tpj24ever547 жыл бұрын
Fire Power he/she never said it was theirs...
@Slynell14 жыл бұрын
you too bro
@AtharvP074 жыл бұрын
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@lll251492 жыл бұрын
You too thanks so much
@theheartofmusic76632 жыл бұрын
@@zubairkhan-jv1mh the least broken one .
@josephinemateo25533 жыл бұрын
I love how this comment section is full of poetry, as some one who loves poems I often struggle on how to write one.
@randyestrada62242 жыл бұрын
Now this I can agree but in poetry its “Agreed”
@aster74822 жыл бұрын
same lmao
@ngoinam256 жыл бұрын
When pain is involved, Poetry is evolved. ~Old Soul~
@candycanestripes13058 жыл бұрын
Poems do not need to rhyme. Rhyming is a waste of time.
@ChristopherAndTheLostBinoculer8 жыл бұрын
+Candycane Stripes I saw what you did there
@okaypinkplays98938 жыл бұрын
+Christopher Rasmussen lmao me too
@jerryseinfeld1098 жыл бұрын
For the time one takes to rhyme, must be spent on something more sublime. Like a watching the ships from the dock go by, to rhyme is but a waste of time
@jerryseinfeld1098 жыл бұрын
For the time one takes to rhyme, must be spent on something more sublime. Like a watching the ships from the dock go by, to rhyme is but a waste of time
@jerryseinfeld1098 жыл бұрын
For the time one takes to rhyme, must be spent on something more sublime. Like a watching the ships from the dock go by, to rhyme is but a waste of time
@angelicayeleshwarapu4 жыл бұрын
the woman I fear to be is the one I already am don't want to grow into my misery but she's the only one who holds my hand
@ramyatripathi67973 жыл бұрын
Good one❤️
@waitingodsgrace3 жыл бұрын
That was lovely
@shazil.62013 жыл бұрын
Well written
@mumu-we1ge3 жыл бұрын
I especially like the last line
@rubyxrodriguez2 жыл бұрын
WHOA
@fullmetalfoley90586 жыл бұрын
Like a broken record, you just repeat. Missing lines, skipping beats Your notes are random Your meaning blurred You sing a song to me But I don’t hear any words. I've seen your heart, I’ve felt the beat With each note you play, you draw me in Enticing strings call my name Distorted chords you wrote in pain They harmonize in sweet accord And combine to form a perfect melody. The song you sing cries out to me Distorted chords in harmony Composed from pain; a melodic sympathy Perfect symmetry; vivid imagery Forged in fire; my affinity You are my song; a beautiful eccentricity
@autumnnn.1 Жыл бұрын
This one gave me chills, thanks for sharing
@Th3BigBoy Жыл бұрын
Okay, I usually can't stand these, but this was somehow really well done. This reaches you 5 years later. Maybe it comes as a reminder for you to write again.
@lilkakas2 ай бұрын
🔥🔥🔥🔥
@Vasu_Maan2 ай бұрын
One of the best poems I ever read!❤
@tinasnow596625 күн бұрын
@@Th3BigBoyi'm curious, what do you meab by "these"?
@DeemyDolly8 жыл бұрын
I fell in love with you after you died Into deep brown Mona Lisa eyes That followed us around the room From the last taken portrait of you I held your sister as she cried Dressed in your favourite clothes The liveliest of your household now silenced And drifting through rooms as a ghost I listened to your mother as she tried Tried to thank me for coming to - to - "He would've liked that you're here I'm sure he really liked you." I flinched when your father lied He smiled, said he was fine He played us your favourite song But... didn't sing along.
@DanielScottTysdal8 жыл бұрын
Great piece, Dima.
@ratking64788 жыл бұрын
I applaud you.
@edawhg7 жыл бұрын
this is beautiful, do you publish you poems online anywhere?
@rhiisabean81447 жыл бұрын
This is beautiful 💕 may I please have your permission to perform this piece for my speech and debate class? I am supposed to choose a poem that I like and perform it in front of a crowd. I would give you credit
@karnika24047 жыл бұрын
This is beautiful
@trobinsond7 жыл бұрын
I pushed a cat: I pushed a cat That was bad I pushed a cat The cat is mad I pushed a cat He bit me That hurt Now I'm sad The end. **many snaps**
@berlinocelot6 жыл бұрын
I think the cat was a metaphor for 9/11.
@sirah98526 жыл бұрын
@@berlinocelot my english teacher is quacking
@Gabriel-se9el6 жыл бұрын
many claps is genuis.u just dont realise it
@mouse37515 жыл бұрын
@@sirah9852 quack quack!
@은희이-s3p5 жыл бұрын
Lol
@owwsdingatlaga86335 жыл бұрын
The comment section is gold ❤🔥
@jessenceq32503 жыл бұрын
Reveals how human responses could be transformed. Raising our words and what unites us all in our human condition, rather than just raising our ego shields and arrows.
@laadidaadidoo2 жыл бұрын
His eyes were like a kaleidoscope, Changing colors when he was happy, Or when he was sad. Changing colours when he cried, Or when he smiled. They danced between shades, And I could never decide What colour they really were. But one day, I found out. They were blank, Staring up at the sky One last time With nothing left in them. The sparkle was gone, And so was he.
@buddymahoney63282 жыл бұрын
This really stood out to me. It's just really good 😄 Edit: Your name as well, seems all too familiar
@laadidaadidoo2 жыл бұрын
@@buddymahoney6328 oh?? Thanks haha
@grace-nm3hk2 жыл бұрын
This is so beautiful, so so moving
@elpelonchido84452 жыл бұрын
The first line was amazing and what followed fit beautifully
@leahennebelleismail9349 Жыл бұрын
this might be the best thing i've ever read. thank you for writing this
@Friendly_Boo5 жыл бұрын
Don’t want to go Don’t want to stay But here I am Wasting away
@xatiter3 жыл бұрын
Simple yet powerful, a beautiful poem.
@Franksocoo7 жыл бұрын
I'm a poet who's lost motivation due to recent events in my life. But watching this just gave me a much needed spark! Thank you for sharing!
@whatnameshallitake20332 жыл бұрын
4 years late just wanted to say I sincerely hope things are better for you now!
@professionalyapperrr Жыл бұрын
5 years late just wanted to say i sincerely hope things are better for you now pt²
@notjoel2315 Жыл бұрын
5 years late just wanted to say I sincerely hope things are better for you now!
@lisaaaron55646 ай бұрын
I am experiencing this right now. I am praying I haven't lost my ability to write. I hope you found yours!!
@shivalisfoodlab31804 жыл бұрын
Poems come from the the deepest part of our heart The darkest secrets The scars and the hurt The pains we couldn't Enunciate to no one We are carrying them In our bleeding heart
@ausnapproductions7384 Жыл бұрын
Boom, poem right there
@professionalyapperrr Жыл бұрын
wanna be this talented gawd
@johndepark9127 Жыл бұрын
Great Poem👍
@AidingIsKey9 ай бұрын
Nice
@otelo38685 жыл бұрын
Coconut in my desk Well you know Man, i have to rest Window
@marianaschwartz80194 жыл бұрын
So moving
@senza45914 жыл бұрын
So deep
@Moon-zv4sb4 жыл бұрын
Beautifully written
@smellydonut50884 жыл бұрын
so incredibly impactiful, passionate, and emotion invoking
@jerryyi33434 жыл бұрын
publish this
@faithmeek79367 жыл бұрын
Never started crying in under 5 minutes while eating cookies before.... What an amazing talk
@whisperingdragon41944 жыл бұрын
faith meek Same! My cookies tasted great
@scoobydoo72202 жыл бұрын
Eating cookies... I should do that! Thank you for your inspiring words 🥺
@ethinke Жыл бұрын
The shadow behind The bright and light outside The clinching and grinding inside The scratching and the binding The tears and wears But left with a happy smile and despairs (My first attempt at poems)
@richards_greatman Жыл бұрын
Beautiful
@tpj24ever547 жыл бұрын
My first poem ever, ballad, wrote it when i was 13, Ever since she drew her last breath, She took away my soul. And forgot to gave me back my heart, And parts of me she stole. I asked her just the day before, Am i forgiven yet? With makeup running down her eyes, I just cannot forget. I should've begged, I should've cried, Shouldn't have let her go, Without atleast, a goodbye hug. I was as cold as snow. How dare you leave me all alone? How dare you walk away? I lost my excuse for living, Congrats, you made me pay.
@afo88046 жыл бұрын
U literally made me cry and happy at the same time . I mean wow . . I hope you dont mind me sharing it .
@adnanalam20066 жыл бұрын
Omg
@adnanalam20066 жыл бұрын
Don't ever f.king stop. Work more you'll be a great human. Did you really did it when you was 13...? Just wow.
@mayarm69245 жыл бұрын
That is SO good omfg
@beyourself49965 жыл бұрын
TØP & J2 4EVER I hear it this heard the 5sos song move one.
@kalvincarld4 жыл бұрын
Leonora I remember the way The sun lights up your eyes As we laugh, cry, listen Sigh under summer skies You make my day. The light breeze breathes Upon your hair And your fair face. Now I lay down On the meadow Smiling, laughing Crying and sighing But all alone You are just another memory Just another rose But alas, the rose is plucked And laid on a stone.
@chahed69704 жыл бұрын
That's sad. I'm sorry if that's true.
@philcu24066 ай бұрын
Pain with beauty…powerful, yet gentle!
@neko30764 жыл бұрын
Here is my amateur poetry even if this video is years old You call yourself useless Not needed in a world like this you just never really listened To the people who're glad you exist You dont know their perspective Of how you saved their life That in their room of darkness You came by and stayed as light You came to their wasteland and made flowers grow and bloom You never really knew Their world needed someone like you
@iyonnahrandle5920 Жыл бұрын
Simple but so powerful I have chills thanks for this beautiful piece !
@vishnupriyavishvanadhan43852 ай бұрын
This is so powerful 🌟♥️
@keeganbarboza2074 жыл бұрын
She said do you love me, I told her only partly, I only love my bed and my mama, I'm sorry🙏.
@colemichalski53614 жыл бұрын
2010's Poet of the decade right there 🔥
@abhinavkamboj37984 жыл бұрын
Drake’s god’s plan 😑
@therealkanyewest15153 жыл бұрын
its "mahbed" as in his sons middle name
@varunpande70153 жыл бұрын
What?
@rahstara3 жыл бұрын
That's good poetry right there 👏🏾
@jervoskitzin3 жыл бұрын
Professor Tysdal taught my POETRY 101/INTRODUCTION class. The man was a true gem who really tried his best to bring poetry to life for us. He made class entertaining while still teaching real lessons. I've been blessed with amazing teacher my entire life, but Tysdal is easily a top 5...and I had him in UNI, not high school! I went to his office hours once for an assignment proposal, and he was so impressed by my idea that he said he would grade the paper himself rather than his T.A...only after being a high school teacher for a few years did I realize that he tricked me. He wasn't impressed by my idea. But he knew that the personalized attention he gave me would make me work harder on the paper, and I did. Things like that are what make this man a treasure. That, and so, so much more!
@richards_greatman Жыл бұрын
Wisdom
@jryce Жыл бұрын
thanks for sharing!
@megamilk1855 жыл бұрын
The silence in my room Accompanied by sobs that my lungs drew The night I dreamt of you Is another slit That lies on my wrist. I have not yet Nor do i plan to forget The day you made me cry Tears that have now gone dry.
@cameliad3683 жыл бұрын
Most beautiful poem I have read in the comments yet❤👏👍
@cameliad3683 жыл бұрын
But seriously, I hope evrythings okay with you❤
@sasbttrr3 жыл бұрын
Omg this is sooo strong. Wow!!!
@mohammad19062 жыл бұрын
As I'm reading this poem of yours My eyes are already filled with tears Her separation is what my soul fears I love her so much,but she never cares.
@bubblegummy162811 ай бұрын
This is what I wrote as he spoke and guided: Cold winters return, took my breath away Where that laughter once held me anchored Despite knowing the truth I fought to stay Just so I know you loved my scent everyday Now everytime I taste your favourite ice-cream Bittersweet tears roll down my face Your touched me like my favourite blanket on a rainy night I miss your shiny honey eyes, vibrant and bright Like the star of hope I hold in my heart I wish you return to me like a comet you are
@iAMJaws8 жыл бұрын
I am her Earth and she is my water no matter where she goes even if I can't see her anymore Even if she vanishes out of thin air No matter where she goes She always comes back to me because she is my water and I, her Earth
@iAMJaws8 жыл бұрын
it's decent I guess
@juliensays7 жыл бұрын
I really like this one
@Kerm885 жыл бұрын
Not even decent. At least make it rhyme
@saturn42375 жыл бұрын
@@Kerm88 poems don't have to rhyme
@LennonCobain4565 жыл бұрын
Sucks. Git gud
@sistergloomy20638 жыл бұрын
Also my first attempt of a poem: Empty: Without thought exiled from passion days spent distraught living with a life-less fashion It doesn't burn I don't know what is real Life doesnt always take the right turn It lacks the right feel The cold seeping through the window sill Oh the burn in my fingers, do it I cry Or just take a damn pill, When people say their okay, its really just a bitter lie.
@DanielScottTysdal8 жыл бұрын
Great start, Neddyface.
@AikiraBeats5 жыл бұрын
Man that touched my soul with the last line
@ayushii-yg2kk11 ай бұрын
your laugh like spring blissing with the autumn captivating my soul as a time-worn whisper being told
@DarkNight801548 жыл бұрын
Very raw but I am open to criticism. As long as it will help. please be kinda I've never done this before. "So Long Love Song" Your touch was soft like a light wave on the beach your blonde hair was as golden as the sunset skyline. My hand is empty like the desert after a sandstorm dry, empty, and lonely. Like a safe with no content my hand is bare. The warmth of your touch brought chills down my body a soft fire during winter bringing me comfort. Now cold to the touch bringing feelings of pain and sorrow. The haunting image of my tears on your shoulder brings salty streams down my cheek. Our last hug, our last kiss, our last goodbye, frozen in time. The lasting memories leaving a feeling of longing inside.
@DanielScottTysdal8 жыл бұрын
Nice work, Carlo.
@shaylaalviter66472 жыл бұрын
Leap onto me with all you’ve got Don’t make me wait for tomorrow Find me a cage to shed my anger To lose my insanity And make the wolves look for me In this foreign society Where everybody loses their mind Go flee and run Throughout the jungle of worry Grasp my soul so tightly Where your hands grip and slide With a burn echoing through skin and bones Hold in your envy and spite Until the currents wave back And crash by the ocean base During the glistening night of stars Cheers to the hollow moon Witness of war and heroism Once present every night During the wrong and the right
@stalinbarath46266 жыл бұрын
*The Nokia Poem* You don’t need an iPhone XS, For calling and Some random text, Not so costly With little specs, Nokia Is just few bucks.
@lastsonshine5 жыл бұрын
thanks ill think about buying nokia
@ziberroo41575 жыл бұрын
it is also indestructible
@anada474 жыл бұрын
at the end it said "show less" because of the youtube formatting, and for some reason for a second I thought it was part of the poem because it rhymed slightly lol. But nice poem, it's very true
@sophierosekarpowicz5 жыл бұрын
you said you love me with your red, full lips you said you were here to stay you were never going to quit you held me as the sun arose and the moon said goodbye you kissed me in the morning light and it made me feel like i could fly now i’m here all alone as the minutes tick away you told me that you love me but it doesnt feel that way *ahhhh that was the first poem i wrote! i wrote it in 6th grade, obviously i’ve never been in love lol*
@Mari-bq9ce4 жыл бұрын
"just write, and let your imaginations move freely"
@rasmachris94 Жыл бұрын
Calls deadened by the distance. Sequestered by the bustling busy bodies. Waterfalls of audio burst into a steady stream of tranquillity. Calm, yet turbulent.
@Username-ww2cd5 жыл бұрын
This is my first poem, I’m 14 and only wrote it the other day- I’m becoming interested in poetry: Every night I lay in bed, A storm begins to grow inside my head, Crashing against the walls of my brain, My thoughts are the thunder and life is the rain. The illusion of time decides to pass, as lightning strikes my world: from the sky to the grass, starting destructive yet beautiful fires of anger and sadness, I realise that again I am alone with my mind and its madness. Every single water droplet becomes heavier, as I reflect over the terrible day that has come to an end, I think about the people who have agrivated me and stirred up my hate, the storm is becoming devastating- suffocating the animals that represent my hope Is it really worth it? Why do I bother? Why do I get up and deal with the pain of life, When I could stay here, In a world of my own.
@weneden38234 жыл бұрын
I’m 14 as well, and I just wanted to mention that this poem beautifully portrays a metaphor. Great work! I hope you’re still working on poetry.
@cavemanarthurwalongbeard73954 жыл бұрын
now, kiss 😳
@NOOBCRASTINATOR692 жыл бұрын
How many poems you've written now?
@mahsoomashareef2 жыл бұрын
Good work!! Loved it
@lovedianne3612 жыл бұрын
love it
@Angela-w9g9c11 ай бұрын
This is so inspirational! Here is my poem, after his prompts
@aaichan40084 жыл бұрын
Comment section filled with best poem i have read. First time i didnt curse myself after pausing video to read comments.
@SafetyMentalstАй бұрын
"I can do this" Tell myself all the time I can do this Fell off a cliff into the waters abyss Told myself swim or give life a kiss Told myself I can do this with bliss I tell myself I shall never be remiss
@subcutie54795 жыл бұрын
When the darkness falls And I’m just here Alone The thoughts keep me up I miss the warmth of the sun Your presence I’m not sure if I like you Or your existence
@samrathtully69092 жыл бұрын
His smile Warming even the moon Smiling to show his affection Warming himself and us Not even crying when we all were He embodied control self control Not blinking twice to smile But when it was time for us to cry he couldn’t blink
@davidandrew18888 жыл бұрын
You are the reason You are the reason I can't sleep A restless dance with mind body and soul A trophy-less goal You are the reason I can't sleep. You are the reason I breath They way you move A beauty you do not have to prove You are the reason I can't sleep You are the reason I still believe A love so full god himself could not smother A reason to live, or why bother? You are the reason I will bleed.
@azbycxcxyba93505 жыл бұрын
Great, this is one I made that might fit the you're the reason: You're the worst of traitors Since you came by my side You came up like a friend But now you torture me at night You're made me forget everything Or skip anything I used to do also I still cut me up And you're the reason for that too I now never accept invites Because I lost the trust in people They just always backstab me So my heart became a hole I've had enough I'm not a fighter So for now I'll say goodbye I've lost my love and interests Now I only want to die
@LifefulLife3 жыл бұрын
Beautiful and cleverly written, great job!
@naturally_dreaa90513 жыл бұрын
🙌🏽
@tala58027 жыл бұрын
I wasn’t supposed to be here It all feels so surreal Beating hearts that's all I hear I wonder if I'll ever get out of here A door once opened but now closed Just like our hearts they stay unknown Consume my illness but not my soul Don't be afraid just come close Darling I know anxiety it takes control But I promise you I won't let go Hold on tight and stay up close Promise me you'll never leave me alone -
@novemberoscar986 жыл бұрын
Tala / this is beautiful
@mysticmiserly77325 жыл бұрын
Wow such eloquent words Tala
@cottoncandy._.50252 жыл бұрын
This touched me :(((
@happymaskedguy19437 жыл бұрын
His conclusion caught me off guard with how emotionally powerful it was. I realised I can recapture a little piece of my grandmothers treasured time with her family. Thank you for sharing that. Great work.
@emilywanjiru15074 жыл бұрын
I REMEMBER LESS EACH DAY, FOR WHAT YOU TAKE ABOUT. I START CRYING
@miremmy2 жыл бұрын
this is my first poem, i really tried Your presence was candy to a child Indulging in love was nothing but sweet How my heart was drawn in Yet beat faster in your absence Obsession became a friend And distrust became a habit My eyes could never meet yours My words could never reach you The mirror spoke to me with the image of you staring Thinking of every picture led closer to the glass shattering Inevitability took refuge in my thoughts And went away along with you
@mohammad19062 жыл бұрын
Immaculate mate
@normalperson1130 Жыл бұрын
Really awesome
@TheLinguistsLibrary7 ай бұрын
Poetry has kept me sober. It continues to be the healthiest form to deal with overwhelming emotions. This applies to both reading and writing poetry.
@wmtcas39702 жыл бұрын
My first proper poem I've written, age 16. (intended to be read/sang like a lullaby) She’s been heading for the sky He’ll blatantly just keep her down Upon the clouds she will fly He’ll chase her dream but fall and drown She easily saw past his eyes He failed to see, became a clown But when the time came for goodbyes Expressed emotion without sound Such catharsis he would find Contained entirely on the ground Forced apart by waking eyes He wished they never opened now Her words were betrayed by her eyes And the scratches he had found Although he’s glad to see her fly My fantasy you stayed around.
@kira33646 Жыл бұрын
Reading that sounded really smooth, great poem! I like how you create the bittersweet lullaby effect with your poem, keep going!
@nate417 Жыл бұрын
Lost my dad a few months ago. Been playing the guitar more and learning some songs he liked and used to play. He liked Mr. Tambourine Man by Bob Dylan, so while learning this song and the lyrics, I got to experience the poetry of Dylan's lyrics which has inspired me to write better. Here's the poem I created while watching this talk, recalling a memory of my dad playing guitar quietly in the morning so as not to wake me up. Sonrise Soft strumming in the summers morning. Like a roosters scream but silenced and somber. No sleeping eyes can stay so still. Succumb to the sequence of the subdued sounds. Song only to the sun, and his slumbering son.
@akshit109 Жыл бұрын
May his soul rest in peace. More power to you my brother He is there for you always in your heart.
@pcpxbotendorastermace9948 Жыл бұрын
Good alliteration
@paulreason64859 жыл бұрын
very eye opening. i'm a poet but I had hit a dry spell where it seemed I couldn't write anymore. I think I can get back into it
@edwarddundon-smith90599 жыл бұрын
Would i be able to see ur work anywhere? I want to get into poetry.
@paulreason64859 жыл бұрын
Edward Dundoned smith I have not posted my work anywhere at this time. But if you would like I can see about posting a few on Google plus or something like that. I would love to share my work with you if you think it will help you get started. Let me know.
@DanielScottTysdal9 жыл бұрын
+Paul Reason Thank you, Paul.
@paulreason64858 жыл бұрын
yep, I have learned to do just that
@onlinewritingcourse7 жыл бұрын
If you hit a dry spell. write about something happening, when someone brought something in the room, or finding something, related to the after math of an event so it is the end resolve. as your physical response to it as well, or pick a word and see what memory brings to u and write about one part of the experience
@rockbellstormcloud73655 жыл бұрын
let see how this goes, today is a beautiful day, i see all my friends at the park. today is a beautiful day i see not her at the park. Today is beautiful day, and i realized at the park, that i won't see her forever I still haven't seen her as the decades goes on. wow that's actually cathartic. Edit:thank you whoever gave me a like, im glad you liked my poem^^!!
@propheticadmirer17014 жыл бұрын
Keep working boy
@sromonasengupta9-c5122 жыл бұрын
This video teaches us- Why poetry mends our mind; The moments that you spend weaving rhythm Are enough to bring back your lost life. I truly loved this video♥️
@richards_greatman Жыл бұрын
Accurate
@talsteiner36105 жыл бұрын
for the first time in a long time i felt happy. laughter echoed against empty fields only the four of us there to hear it. pure utter happiness revealed itself to me as i saw my friends dance, and look up at the stars, and roll down hills. we all fell into a pile and watched the sunset, exhausted and inspired at the same time. - "the sky was dark but our minds were not"
@birupeteribrahim50392 жыл бұрын
Your teaching has set fire in me..... My passion for poetry has waxed up ... God bless you 🙏🏿🙏🏿🙏🏿
@patricianiebrzydowski38524 жыл бұрын
Trauma: My tangerine sneakers, never having touched the soiled concrete, as fresh as perfectly ripened fruit, are bruised and spoiled by sour memories that grow tainted with confrontation; when my sweet joy was peeled away, leaving behind a soft mass of fearful, rotting pulp.
@LifefulLife3 жыл бұрын
ooh I really like this, the continual use of fruit related imagery. The poem really shows how a traumatic event can taint something that used to feel untouched and new.
@novepipps3 жыл бұрын
Gorgeous, vivid, underrated.. reminds me of halseys poetry, who also uses fruit imagery.
@mariamelkholy85673 жыл бұрын
Love this, an idea tied from beginning to end
@TorieeThou3 жыл бұрын
You used to play piano for me and I always said I will see you on billboard’s one day But to this day The stillness still gives me chills I remember our shadows dancing underneath the traffic lights Over the freeway overlooking the mountains You said you were gonna show me the 🌎 now you haunt my sleep this world hasn’t deserved beautiful incredible you...
@craftideas3507 ай бұрын
Your thoughts welcomed me once again Then I looked for you in all faces again Your presence lacks and my heart cracks But the love remains intact I never knew emotions were too fragile Until one day I saw a teary pile I climbed up the hill again just to see you in a chaotic maze I felt dizzy too as there was a haze But I am not complaining just observing my growth As invisioning a future without you is becoming a reality I know, I just know it hurts and the heart breaks But to heal this is what it takes
@summer_serranose4 жыл бұрын
As I stood afar from the scene to hear my loved ones and your cries before they closed the window screen In futility, I screamed my last goodbye yet to this time I cannot decide what i miss the most the softness of your touch as it stroked mine or the musty scent of your cologne
@amall.16553 жыл бұрын
y must u make me cry 😭💔 but that was actually a very good poem. I'm inspired 🥺
@summer_serranose3 жыл бұрын
@@amall.1655 awww thank you very much!
@kbrightheart5 ай бұрын
I love all the poetry in these comments and I wish these were on every comment section instead of all the bullying, trolling and fighting.
@strangerrrrrrr6 жыл бұрын
how many times do you have to rehearse all of your crimes and crying verse? stop checking if the coast is clear- because the only thing you should fear is fear
@bogaziciliceohaluk6 жыл бұрын
straight fire dude respect
@adityamhatre46844 жыл бұрын
Respect 🔥
@sloced47414 жыл бұрын
VV
@limnpeach96404 жыл бұрын
that last line!! aah
@TrampConnoisseur3 жыл бұрын
Not one second shall pass through the day According to the natural way, Tired and lonely an aged willow weeps Under the gray sky the soul is weak, Running from shadows the animal stumbles A soft hum of a creek so shallow, Loud with silence and rich with sorrow In the woods a sad wail of a sparrow Sharp the crimson colors of fall remain, May they ever see their struggle’s fade? This is my first poem I wrote for my creative writing class in high school... I don’t think I’m very good at it 😅
@cottoncandy._.50252 жыл бұрын
One of my favourites here :))) I hope you still write poetry!
@mohammad19062 жыл бұрын
Immaculate bro, I wish I could write like this!
@ShellshockedDog2 жыл бұрын
I have been feeling very low recently, your words and advice have saved me from the depths of despair. Thank you.
@FAFash-wo9yg4 жыл бұрын
Thank you Daniel for giving me the inspiration I needed. Because of you - I had a real go at constructing a personal poem based on my experiences/observations. I now believe I'm writing a poetry book that will be released in the near future. I hope to make the New York Times bestsellers list. 🙂😬🤞🏽🎉
@shreyaverma70155 жыл бұрын
No one thinks about me As I am alone No one trust me As I was not wrong No one thinks that I was not mistaken No one thinks that As what I have taken No one thinks that What type of problems I have face No one thinks that What I was felling during this case ... No one trust me When I screamed through my heart No one with me When I was crying through my heart As yesterday I was alone As today I am alone Seriously now I didn't want anyone ...... I want be alone
@NerdyGuy38876 ай бұрын
I started writing poetry a few years ago, but fell out of it for a time. I'm trying to write some more now, whenever I get an idea. Here's a new one that I'm proud of: Roses are red Sprouting another head in spring's flower bed Looking up at the sky A clear blue Watch birds fly away like they fear you Spot a grazing herd and stop to watch the deer chew All in memories made as this time's career flew It's been a whole year too That I now peer through with the lens of a rear-view Twenty-twenty, pure hue See them all but hear few Wish I could still hear you In a memory that appears new But all I have is this season's grass Coated in my tear's dew
@easycook46254 жыл бұрын
your grinning smile When i look at you Is like a marigold that requires warmth No matter how much warmth it seeks It will always grow in midwinter's bleak!
@divishajain116 ай бұрын
Amazed to see how everyone finds a way to comment section, To discover their true reflection. Soul searching for a connection. Born in new body after resurrection. Words tie us close They tear us apart. Thats why we write prose And fill words into our cart. Cause they find way to our heart. If you like this poem Leave a comment It wont cost a cent. Now i will vent. Now this is the end. 😊❤
@tiax22114 жыл бұрын
this is a really old video but i've been getting into writing poetry recently! i decided to follow his lil lesson hehe, and here's what i came up with: title: You Left Me in the Winter Picturing your face is becoming difficult, the memory of you is sun softened snow. -t.n
@cameliad3683 жыл бұрын
Beautifully done 👏❤👍
@tiax22113 жыл бұрын
@@cameliad368 ah thank you!
@tobyhiscuttyear10223 жыл бұрын
i love that poem
@tiax22113 жыл бұрын
@@tobyhiscuttyear1022 aw thank you ^^
@tobyhiscuttyear10223 жыл бұрын
@@tiax2211 that is okay also i have see your chanle i have sub
@kassst23 Жыл бұрын
I’m 14 and have always liked to write, and since ppl are putting poems they wrote I thought I’d drop this here :D I wish people could see me how I see me. Outside I’m loud, quiet sometimes, unremarkable. But I find, if pulled back, I am much greater than my persona. I am forced behind a great wall, hidden from view. Those who poke or prod climb it. Peel back the bricks of seeming content and coolness. And you’ll see the pain, my kingdom, my Atlantis of beauty. My tears carving ponds and oceans with each drop. My laughter causing flowers to fill meadows. A palace built by one’s concern and pure emotion, it shall never fall. For this place is raw, purposeful and sweet. Every color a brushstroke, every bud a new interest. Those outside don’t realize how much they mock. For this land is beautiful, ever changing and moving. Its impurities sculpted into statues molded gracefully. Pillars, an acropolis of thought. Simplicity cherished, love nourished. If people visited this home of mine, they’d see just how precious it is. Ever changing and moving.
@SasapessoS8 жыл бұрын
this video inspired me to write a poem on ISIS: when you are alone and silence is in the room from far into your heart terror whispers your doom
@yahiawaleed34288 жыл бұрын
+Sasapesso S thus, everybody can be ISIS for their obsession
@DanielScottTysdal8 жыл бұрын
Great work, Sasapesso.
@havasa15177 жыл бұрын
Sasapesso S if you took away the part sayig its about ISIS thats actually p good tbh
@Moon-zv4sb4 жыл бұрын
Havasa yep lol 😂
@Meghisht7 Жыл бұрын
Tomorrow is my poetry competition, we got the update just today. Also, poetry is never been taught to us, I was so damn nervous, I was just sliding through some videos, while I saw this. I can say that I clicked this vid expecting something, and it led me to something. It was like a personal therapy session. Hats off man , hats off
@sibusisoshuze39033 жыл бұрын
My body injuries do I control anything My movement my breath my speech You took all my beliefs Walking through darkness lead by something I thought poetry was all about honesty What is this words singing? Higher power to mind words bringing Emasculating horribly moral lifechanging after all You just tore all my beliefs apart Samson after the fall She looked happier in her coffin I think I gave her The Covid that killed her... How do I live with myself, you still delight in me How can you do this? So much purity love such a horrid creature?
@julian_frazer6 жыл бұрын
a splendid talk. as with literature, poetry suffers because of the air of superiority associated with it, the idea that only a handful of people (all dead, of course) can make good poems, the 'exclusivity' of it -- but all poems are made simply of letters, and of feelings, and of expression. a hat tip to Daniel for breaking down the oft-opaque walls of poetry
@ridhanridhu28126 жыл бұрын
The poetry is a great weapon .... Sir, You are really someone who helps the little poets living around world
@cartierdev13206 жыл бұрын
I remember the last day I saw you You were old and fragile You came to my game You were proud of me The next week you passed I was torn apart I did not cry It was a week later You passed my mind My eyes drenched like the ocean My mind only saw your face
@chidtaputai10949 жыл бұрын
I'm a begginer so anyways this is what I came up with... Your old age Priceless Smile, bright as a sun that'll always make my day bright, always giving me that warm season Feeling
@DanielScottTysdal9 жыл бұрын
+Chid Taputai Thank you for sharing your words, Chid.
@pravneetkaur20103 жыл бұрын
Where are those genuine big smiles That stretched from cheeks to eyes And like sunrays filled the world with light ?
@ibrahimemmanuel47804 жыл бұрын
Here's mine : Him sitting on his chair In silence, with no despair Taking baked bananas to eat Together with a cup tea Chewing his food tenderly and slowly With no stress in his mind
@LifefulLife3 жыл бұрын
aww this paints such a sweet image
@potatowarrior7473 жыл бұрын
I can literally imagine somebody's dad. How cute.
@Terradiva4 жыл бұрын
Give this guy a public series to teach poetry & writing. Because writing, just like poetry, saves lives. Thank u for sharing.
@najeebaqadir65348 жыл бұрын
im a beginner..i havnt written anything before so this is what i came up with....there is no specific topic for this but temme what you guys think... "Sacrifices she made Mistakes she forgave Your love was all she wanted But you were just too bonded She left her passions she left her dreams Just to see how your eyes gleam She stayed by your side, alone you never cried Her love was too much her love was too wide She was a fool, she trusted you A big mistake that was she never knew She bore the pain she took the blame But you were just never the same".
@DanielScottTysdal8 жыл бұрын
Great start, Najeeba. Keep at it.
@poe3man3947 жыл бұрын
Very good start!
@Thomas_Geist6 жыл бұрын
All first attempts are said to be autobiographical...and confessional. Of more importance than telling us is: have you told her?
@noopursinghabhi5 жыл бұрын
Keep goiy Najeeba
@annajonske65662 жыл бұрын
This is amazing! made me tear up, thank you so much for sharing
@velcucoaching-velcuoy95914 жыл бұрын
Why is the October sky, this sidewalk, this chair, this home, especially meaningful? Experiences once shared. Missing you
@meihalo3 жыл бұрын
(This is my first time writing poetry. Idk how to at all so I hope this even counts--) People surround me Hearts full of love Smiles full of harmony I sit here, turning my head to them The misery cannot spread The void cannot grow If I stay here forever I will be the only one to know If I reach for the stars If I open up to love “Will it ever reach them?” Is a thought to rest When I fall below the stars When I reach the ground when I was already so high “Running away” Is what they say What do I run from? What is there to run from? Questions silenced Sirens louder I lay here alone The floor so cold The heart I hold It all leaves me as I fall below the ground Covered in a warm embrace of death itself Then I realise before my eyes shut “This was my home” The end.
@Riurelia4 жыл бұрын
13:29 I was lying down on my bed while watching this video but the rhymes at the end cause me to get up. I'm really amazed by the rhythm and rhymes.
@caterinaa9544 жыл бұрын
To walk on water you may choose. Whether the currents carry its not up to you. But when you choose to walk on water, you either swim or drown when the currents pull you under
@cameliad3683 жыл бұрын
One of the most beautiful poems I have yet read
@Nansieeed Жыл бұрын
That night when nothing was alright You were dying , i couldn't think of a sight where i could have smiled Your memories flood back as i go by to that night Your teary eyes And you struggling to be alive Your presence was like home which I never really got Your arms hugging me so tight I can never hold back my smile The day you fled away, a part of me died, I don't think I'll ever get it right without you, your smile, your warm hugs, which always brought me back to life
@wintermcqueen69337 жыл бұрын
Just a sad poem i wrote earlier: And I'll bet you've had bad dreams, Or maybe youve been fine. But while you sleep my heart and break has been working over-time. I just don't. Know. What. To. Do. I can only tell you- but what? When you're just so covered in this blanket of mistrust. I love you. I love you. And i hope I've not lost.
@DrePlenty17724 күн бұрын
Rest in Heavenly Peace Blair🙏🏾 I Love Ted Talks, Thanks for this One! ❤
@azariahmoore31015 жыл бұрын
My little sister always cries When she finds out our daddy's little lies He says "I'm sorry" and "it's ok" But again and again he fades away The disappointment in her eyes The lack of readiness towered by surprise I wish to wipe away these feelings from her mind She doesn't know he all but loves That our mothers stories aren't made up And when she does it will ubrupt This maturity and this nothing less gain And she'll wonder why she wailed with pain Over a man she simply entertained Over a man who was never there Over a man that always vanished Through Thin Air
@drewjimenez15616 жыл бұрын
His voice was deep like the ocean His touch was as soft and gentle as a mother’s touch
@anyssaperez95476 жыл бұрын
It tears you apart from the inside out you feel it in your heart ripping
@layaldergham38243 жыл бұрын
I listened to this talk and then wrote this poem about my middle school guitar teacher who passed away suddenly when I was 12. I’ve kept playing and I’m 20 now: unrequited buzz of the e string lays rampant from my tender youth technique swift as autumns breeze to be entranced in the force of your melody fleeting notes, passive chord switches between us feels like a deep breath sighing.... your music becomes mine
@wybiecore8 жыл бұрын
i want to write a poem but I have never been in love, I have never suffered a terrible life. I have food on my table and a roof over my head. what can I write about?
@vxx1718 жыл бұрын
Write about normal daily experiences. There'll always be people who can relate to it.
@DanielScottTysdal8 жыл бұрын
I agree with Vikraman 10. You can write more meditative, philosophical works on your everyday experience.
@dustiny.3348 жыл бұрын
Thats even worse. Write about that.
@rounakbhamra27708 жыл бұрын
You can write about gratitude then :)
@wybiecore8 жыл бұрын
Rounak Bhamra ahaha😂 but update: i have had my first crush. im going to write about that
@liii36223 жыл бұрын
Your handwritten letter Is like the morning chirps of birds in spring. I recite every word and let them burn me purposely as a form of punishment. The pictures that covered every surface of your home help me recall that familiar warmth that used to hug me. Everything you were, now reduced to the size of something, I store away in boxes.
@ethanthompson31988 жыл бұрын
my attempt at a villanelle: my love is playing dead she thinks she's fooling me but I'll fool her instead she lays there still in bed she wants to have me scream my love is playing dead upon her lips no red I almost did believe but I'll fool her instead I kissed her on her head and tasted chilly dreams my love is playing dead some worry she had bred no smile I did see but I'll fool her instead she thinks she's fooling me she wants to have me scream she's only playing dead oh god please let that be
@DanielScottTysdal8 жыл бұрын
Well done, Ethan.
@Omarabighosn8 жыл бұрын
Aww man. This hits home.
@comcat19087 жыл бұрын
Ethan Thompson Ethan bradbeary
@aliceren82587 жыл бұрын
Wonderful piece, I especially loved the lines "I kissed her on her head/and tasted chilly dreams"
@danielyourestillachad55427 жыл бұрын
DAMN
@Jenny-mo1be2 жыл бұрын
My first ever poem that I wrote for my school magazine. Lol I was 15 The modern Sisyphus The race of human being In the pursuit to make ends meet Man is like a sheep in a flock; His time on earth is insignificant unless it's tied on the clock For this is what the world thinks; A notion terribly entrenched The hunger for money And the thirst for significance cannot be quenched
@annajonske65662 жыл бұрын
i love this, thank you so much for sharing!!
@telecowboy02443 жыл бұрын
You called my name, blossomed pink through a screen Red face, heart race, bewitched I fell sick in bed A rusting rose emerged from my slivered soul Before I slept, I remembered the first time I wished we met The laugh, that made my days glitch I'm here again, wondering what happened there There were times, I yearned to see you again.
@solli23304 жыл бұрын
... and that's the beauty of poetry. it is vague, has a different meaning for every reader. it is beautiful just to be beautiful. it is so simple, yet so complex. it can mean nothing and everything, all at once. it hides emptiness behind big words and meaning between the lines.
@natcat40232 жыл бұрын
Thank you for making this video! It has been a dream of mine to write a real poem. You helped me so! My condolences for your lost!
@stereotype_p3 ай бұрын
In shadows, cast by the moon's soft glow. I weep, emotions in tow. For once, I cry let me be the art, a tear stained verse.. a beautiful shattered heart. silent echoes in my mind, Yearing to me, look in behind. but this time I won't go, just to see my deceased past. Because I've learnt to smile, just like a melody that heals scars. My tears may fall, but love remains, a bond with myself is nothing, but can ever restrain. Even in my sadness, I'll find a way, to bring sunshine and make my day. My beauty shines in every hue, from my blushing cheeks, to my eyes so true. For every line, etched in disappear, reflects a heart that is laid bare. No more tragedies, no more tear, in my own arms there's no fear. so I'll cherish my soul, hold her tight, Cuz she's a rare gem, a true delight. Priya-
@g-rex85138 жыл бұрын
It's good to see so many new poets in the comments!
@DanielScottTysdal8 жыл бұрын
I agree!
@garbags96102 ай бұрын
Grilled toast tinged with melted butter, like the golden spread that the sun shines across the sky on its first alarm New day arising with milky tea and disco biccys offered to me with charm Not long goes by, you enter again asking if I need fed. Was too young then, but now I see why my mother was full of dread. First it was keys, then it was names, then nothing was ever the same. Stumbling, fumbling, tough to see to you tumble down the hill of pain. But when singing a song it wouldn't be long before everyone else was singing along. Lyrics and melody are the things that remained deeply ingrained inside your dying brain. We don't get to decide what we forget and what we remember most. But when I think of you, I think of kindness, And your perfect slice of toast