''I Created a Homunculus'' | PHENOMENAL ‘MONSTER’ CREEPYPASTA

[@NJ079]

Just before the hour mark, you snapped your fingers and said "oh come on!" I think twice. Was that like a.. blooper? If so, don't be so hard on yourself. Your narration is always amazing. This story was great too.

[@lisadgingersnaps9843]

He's done that before. I thought maybe his cat was up to no good.😂

[@NJ079]

@@lisadgingersnaps9843 Ahh I see, lol. This was the first time I actually noticed. Didn't change the quality though. I was just like??? Is this part of the story? 😄 nope.

[@thatindiandude4602]

@@NJ079 good ear :D I usually sleep to these so never make the 20 minute mark of these l9ng stories 😄

[@seanlanier5077]

duuude I dropped my tools bc it scared the shit outta me

[@NJ079]

@@thatindiandude4602 ohh, I love the long stories! If I ever fall asleep during them, I have to go back and listen later.

[@atmuu]

*cop randomly punches civilian in the throat for denying murder accusations* Ah, yes, the long arm of the law...

[@mastercharlesdiltardino8058]

Technically speaking, the cop was right and the homunculus creator guy deserved alot worse.

[@bubblybubblegum9209]

The homonculus creator smiled about his ex girlfriend crying and his best friend getting actually murdered, I think he deserves a throat punch. .... That's not counting the countless people he got killed.

[@spookieboogi6161]

We call that the 5 finger down south negotiator

[@Ela.elizabeth]

DEViNOWL - Cops beating citizens? At least the author went for realism with the story.

[@colemarie9262]

All that cop knows is that in an admittedly small town, a guy passed out in front of the scene of a crime (obviously the person gassing people wouldn't be passing out too right?), and that driving to the store a woman ran up to him for help (which the woman would have corroborated by that time already). So basically nothing to beat the hell out if a random person for right? We know he deserves it, but the officer doesnt know anything of the sort.

[@kasinokaiser1319]

Guy: *says he made a huge mistake* Also him: *describes the process in detail*

[@fosterhales1287]

And didn't get a gas mask after the first encounter.

[@brittanypanda9348]

@@fosterhales1287 yes! The first thing i would have gotten is a gas mask. Horror story/movie characters are always idiots lol.

[@erikmckoul2478]

Man if I ever got that creature under my control it wouldn't be in for a fun time.

[@arelymunoz3484]

Bloopers: 59:34. 59:50 Love it!!

[@StoneCorazon]

Bloopers don’t make it into the final production. When you leave mistakes in the final product they’re just called fuck ups.

[@sirbootybob4194]

@@StoneCorazon me

[@taith2]

Finger snap was meant to be used as marker in post, however narrator's irritated voice during snap made it hard to catch. It would be nice if we would to see production process and studio itself, maybe on anniversary? Mistakes happen, without someone listening to everything you would not be able to catch all. There also was audio encoding problem earlier. I'll assume whole 1h story production process takes him about 5 hours, from reading the story to decide if it's good enough, recording voice track and editing things together with music and video.

[@durgadivinewrath8879]

@@taith2 I did wonder about the finger snap, this is the first time I have caught a story with mistakes before they were edited out. Given how long he spends narrating, then the long drawn out process of editing, I figure he can be forgiven for a blip here and there. After all, doc's human...

[@TheQuequera]

I live for this bloopers!!!

[@CREEPYxFACE]

YES I'm so glad this finally got narrated I read this on the vault and was blown away. Great work as always!

[@alicefly3198]

I knew when the narrative switched to 3rd person in the last part that "Josh" was doomed.

[@leadedbison1997]

I was really confused at first then caught on myself lmao.

[@adamfox1669]

Coffee, cigarettes and scary stories. The best after work relaxation

[@HarryandSlabs]

Nice

[@omarthebeatboxer8510]

Even better whit a hash cig

[@bellacavender8999]

You sound like my kind of person because this is exactly how I run things

[@timmyturner7121]

Omar The beatboxer Beat me to it

[@allenjames122]

I was a bit later then you but same exact vibe

[@slipknotenthusiast6541]

Not going to make a time stamp, but Dr. Creepen, I live for the little bloopers!! Also, I prefer these longer stories

[@ajaxthegreatest2191]

So i guess he forgot to "initiate the blood bond" while the thing was busy munching that racoon Oh, and every other time he comes into contact with the thing afterwards

[@royaltyfagalar3381]

That's what I'm saying has many times it made contact he never did the blood bond😑

[@GennipherKrabzree]

That what I kept saying every damn time he was within close proximity 🤦‍♀️ Also I think we can all agree choosing a glass container vs. a lead one was a very poor choice. Can afford an ancient 2000 year old book, but couldn't get a hold of a lead box because it's expensive. No wonder what's her face shacked up with Thomas.

[@erikmckoul2478]

Also it uses gas to knock people out it would be extremely easy to counter.

[@Hamza-rd6jk]

YUP. I was annoyed that the author didn't follow the rules of his own universe and the characters didn't act like real people: they were just props to move the plot along

[@comradeneedham1480]

Nice cup of tea and a spliff n a good scary story. Keep up the good work!

[@thatsnodildo1974]

This dude really loves brain damage if he is always breathing in a nerve agent lmaooo

[@kimg6911]

The break of character makes this even better. You can tell the difference I. The narrator natural voice vs character voices. LOVE IT!! ♥️♥️😆

[@kishaa819]

Seriously Edward, did you learn nothing?

[@harry-pg5ki]

Well to be fair those seven have nothing on this homunculous

[@JINX-The-Writer]

Nope lol

[@Daddy_Skeletor]

I hoped to see a comment like this

[@Ondroth]

Doc your voice helped me to study i would listen to your voice and solve math problems and guess what i got 97 out 100 Thanks

[@loanianderson1978]

Congratulations!!!

[@Ondroth]

@@loanianderson1978 thanks

[@squeaktheswan2007]

Nice job.

[@Brophistophelez]

Gota say I love when the outtakes slip past so we can see all the hard work you do. Just before the 1hour mark is two mis takes. Love ya Doctor.

[@theCidisIn]

Poor Doc haha. His snapping fingers must be tired. Thanks for all the hard work for us! 🙏

[@bloodycupcake219]

You're doing great, Doctor. I personally adore the bloopers.

[@troysimon9933]

Seeing as how this fella is getting "gassed" and rendered UN-concious...like, every 10 minutes, at SOME point..."if it'd been ME..after seeing what happened with it's FIRST..Racoon dinner",..shouldn't it have occurred to him..that maybe..just MAYBE...a friggin n.b.c. rated GAS MASK, "nuclear biological chemical"...would be a GOOD idea???

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

You know I didn't think of it till later that a gas mask would have saved his ass a few times. But I threw one in on the last chapter as kind of a duhhh moment.

[@troysimon9933]

@@welcometoluxaria5363 Hey..no worries..I still thought it was a great story. Good work there..keep it up..& keep on .keep'in on.,👍👍

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

Thank you sir. I really appreciate you giving it a chance.

[@COctagons]

Might need a full BC or NBC suit. It seems like the homunculus uses nerve agent (specifically, it sounds like a stinky version of sarin), and that stuff takes effect on contact, so anything less than a total hermetic seal may not be enough.

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

@@COctagons I like the way you think. That's awesome.

[@mykaelnyx8821]

Fantastic narration and excellent pronunciation

[@durgadivinewrath8879]

Well it went a bit mad towards the end, but what else would you expect in this situation?🤣 And the two "oh come on" with accompanying finger snaps gave me nothing but joy as moments like that just strengthen the bond between narrator and us mere mortals in my opinion. Thank you once again Doc, as always, it was a pleasure 🖤

[@Teknofobe]

Man... Another long story. Ur really treating us well lately Doctor. Gratitude to u, as usual. 👌

[@dylanmorris7357]

Great job on this one Doc. This was the perfect way to end my night.

[@punkyreggaeparty8786]

Truly fantastic. Nothing like a great read and a spot of Whiskey to ease into sleep. Thank you, Dr.C. Stay well.

[@abonynge]

59:32 This is the professionalism I subscribe for.

[@COctagons]

At least you didn't attempt human transmutation. It could be so much worse...!

[@discoverwhatsnext9835]

Dude don't be hard on yourself your bloopers at the hour mark are funny but don't beat yourself up and relax you deserve to relax as much as you help us to.

[@christophermeeks329]

Ahhh a nice Long story for my trip to work ! It's gunna be a good day. : )

[@sirenetyx792]

Awesomeness!!! Thank you so much Doc! 😊

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

Once again DOC thank you so much for using my work. You are the best

[@ksolaris]

lol i admit i giggled at the "oh come on!"s no worries, doc, you got this

[@randallthescandal515]

interesting adaption of the material, I have not seen the idea of the homunculus as energy for a hunt based story explored before. You have an amazing pool of sources for unique takes on the imaginations of a darker world. Thank you for bringing them into the light to comfort and intrigue us.

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

Thank you. I really wanted to do something original really crazy. I honestly appreciate you taking the time to give it a chance.

[@jacquelinevrooman7755]

Ahhhh I absolutely love your narrations!! ❤

[@absinthealice]

Perfect timing, after supper and having sorted the household. Ready to sit back, relax with my wine, and listen to the Doctor. 🍷❤

[@ГеоргиБранкованов]

One of the best stories lately.

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

Thank you so much for that. I really appreciate the kind words. I had a lot of fun writing this one. Thanks again for giving it a chance

[@badgercrafts2915]

59:55 cheer up Dr. You're doing great!! Another wonderfully read story. Thank you :)

[@patburrell496]

This was the best. I had to stop cooking Thanksgiving dinner to make sure I didn't miss anything.

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

Thank you so much for checking it out

[@jackalina91]

Yay! I can stay in bed this morning until I hear the whole thing. ♥️

[@HarryandSlabs]

Glorious

[@neilburns9149]

This is like Victor Frankenstein and the Monster He ran away and the Monster proceeds to kill his loved ones Awesome job

[@warfightersanonymous7760]

51:49 "until I came to a gas station..." The audience: "Uh oh..."

[@anitacharron9153]

I loved it what a great story and the narriation was spot on. I LOVE IT when it feels like I'm right there in the story when you bring it to life I hope this author makes a part 2 or another story like it.

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

Thank you so much. Im happy that you enjoyed it. I greatly appreciate you taking the time to give it a chance and yes the Homunculus will be back

[@coreygrayson5908]

I have no clue how anyone could not like this one. Getyaisha(sorry if i missed spelled your name) dropped some amazing writing down with creativity that was descriptive & original. Then my two favorite narrators topped this baby off with their amazing voices. Thanks guys

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. And yes you spelled it right

[@coreygrayson5908]

@@welcometoluxaria5363 you're welcome & i get excited as an artist when I come across work like this. I'm aldo glad that I got your name right as well

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

@@coreygrayson5908 is there anywhere i could check out your work

[@coreygrayson5908]

@@welcometoluxaria5363 sure, I don't have any written work out but I do have visual work you can see. Email me at [e-mail] so I can share my work with you

[@thedoruk6324]

Great! Whose remember the *Original* Homunculi videos of KZbin ({RIP to the original creator of those weird videos})

[@daygoncornhole2395]

link pls ?

[@thedoruk6324]

@@daygoncornhole2395 just search it on yt it was a russian individual

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

I remember them. That was part of what gave me the idea. It's also why I tossed a word in about him

[@MamaLauren523]

Those videos were actually my introduction to KZbin 😄 As a boomer, they also started my first trip...down a "rabbit hole" that is😉

[@MamaLauren523]

@Hannibal Hyde Yeah, I know what a boomer is! I was born in 1961, so a boomer😉 Some try to use it as an insult, but not all boomers are old cranky people. Some of us try to keep up with the world and actually have respect for the fact that younger generations are growing up in a world that is so crazy and sometimes down right terrifying! Learn from our mistakes, make your own mistakes and try to use your time on earth to leave it better than we did! Stay safe and well😊

[@marksullivan6319]

I feel like after the first time you got sprayed by that stuff the second time going in, you should have wore a gas mask and then sealed up all the vents that would be able to stop the homunculus gases from getting the outside of the containment center which should had already been done but I don't know.

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

Makes sense. But I didn't want to drag out more details considering how long the story already was. Plus if he'd have covered all his bases the story would have gone completely different.

[@marksullivan6319]

True..... well that's why your the writer who inturn let's Dr. Creepen narrate to me the listener. So I believe everything you say cause, I can't imagine for a second what type of spins and flips would have been involved if you had changed anything in the slightest. Soo hat's off to you the writer and Dr. Creepen.

[@stevennorthcut9860]

"Coffee is on me folks" Great story....you really got descriptive with the gas... Made me feel like vomiting

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

Thanks. I feel like I might have stressed the gas description a little too often

[@darylphipps890]

You pronounced it just right Doc! But....this one like many beckons for a sequel.

[@AntaresTwo6]

"I created a homunculus." FGO Fandom: Nani!?

[@jackdurden466]

“The cop throat punched me and then kicked me” And? Welcome to America bro

[@dgage1776]

Been arrested over 20 times, without incident

[@Bjorick]

and how many times has a cop assaulted you, Jack? None? But yeah, bitch about shit that you don't understand, and spread further lies and hate, good job man. Feel proud of yourself for being a useful idiot, but remember, they're the first of the herd to be culled.

[@mastercharlesdiltardino8058]

I've had old ladies threaten me while I was looking for my car, I just shrug my shoulders and live my life. There isnt one group of people that doesnt have it's own share of psychos. If anyone ever broke into Jack's home he would call the cops and be glad to see them.

[@catharineredacted4931]

So many people mad in these comments jesus 💀 ive had a bad indecent with a cop at 14 over a fight on the school bus good for yall having good cop experiences not everyone does get over yourselves.

[@mastercharlesdiltardino8058]

@@catharineredacted4931 lol dumb girl fought a cop instead of acting nice. Big brain on this one.

[@WALKUREX]

Loved it. Thank you for the wonderful content

[@LordBitememan]

Well, THAT definitely wasn't an endearingly innocent talking set of armor.

[@grayskindablue]

I just got to the part where it switched to third person and went from “wtf? I gotta re-listen, why did this happen? Interesting choice...” to “damn, wait, if Josh isn’t telling the story - this probably isn’t going to go well.” I’ve got pizza and vodka, let’s goooo! What happens to Josh?

[@red_catharsis]

This was so good! Always love your stories :) keeps me company on my breaks at work! Also Hermès asked mentioned to josh that he created the homunculus to kill someone specific when in the beginning Josh just stated that he had always been obsessed with creating one. Did I miss something? Great story either way!!

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

thank you so much for giving it a chance, and yeah your right he'd been obsessed with the idea but when his girlfriend left him for his best friend it gave him a reason to do it.

[@red_catharsis]

Welcome to Luxaria ah! I guess I missed that connection, I did really like the subtlety in the Homunculus constantly choosing Thomas’ form just as way to further mentally torture Josh. This was a very unique story and I really enjoyed it. I also liked that you included the weird Russian chicken egg Homunculus reference in there. Those videos are so weird and I came across them about 5 or 6 years ago and they really creeped me out. That realism really helped me connect with the main character and temporary narrator, Josh! Thanks so much and I look forward to reading and listening to more from you :)

[@gregchaney2004]

Thank you Doctor for the GREAT narration and please thank the VERY talented author. You have so many wonderful authors and I cannot believe many of the stories that you narrate are not books or movies. Greg Chaney in coastal NC

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

Thanks for the kind words. I had a lot of fun with it. This story was actually one of my first that I went back and rewrote.

[@gregchaney2004]

@@welcometoluxaria5363 it's an outstanding piece of work and you're very talented. Greg

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

@@gregchaney2004 I really appreciate that.

[@gregchaney2004]

@@welcometoluxaria5363 I'm almost 70 years old and have been listening to horror since I was 5 or so years old. So, I recognize talent. Keep up the great work and Dr Creepn as a narrator is a GREAT choice. To me hes the best.

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

@@gregchaney2004 you'll get no argument from me on that one he's by far one of the best around. And thanks again

[@axeluchiha5831]

The person in the story created a homunculus and had to stop his creation. It has nothing on thw vattle between Creepen and his cat though. That is an eternal struggle and always hard fought. Rought with danger and ever present challenges, but one day, he will prevail!

[@tomatoknuckles]

Just in time for bed, thanks doc as always much appreciated 🤙

[@keex1000]

Love it when you make mistakes and click and say ‘oh come on!’ 😂😂😂

[@werewally3156]

59:50 Dont be so hard on yourself Doc, youre doin a good job.

[@phantasticgame1189]

What's with the ending on this one?! An hour and a half almost and just ... THAT ending? Wtheck! I want to say more but dont want to spoil anything for those that haven't listened yet (what are you doing in the comments, go listen!) Lol. Great job once again! I love hearing your stories

[@jonathanporter5223]

I feel the same way. The story was good, but the ending sucked. Huge waste of time and it pissed me off.

[@kintero27]

You would think he would carry a military grade gas mask by now.

[@Vandolleyez]

Anyone else feel sorry for the hypothetical cow??😂😢

[@Mad.Edd.702]

Lmao "CMON MAN" love you left that in the struggle is real

[@paulcritchfield6958]

I made one from wild wood duck egg. The most crazy part of it all is when it was 6 months and 6 days old. A rat came into basement and chew threw the wire top of aquarium and killer it. Did not eat it but tore it into pieces. The rat had something wrong with it after to point it could not hop back out of cage. Then dies 11 hours later. I then put lighter fluid in aquarium and burn entire project and rat.

[@rav3n339]

Seriously, you remind me of a certain british actor but I can't remember who is he. Your voice is 100% the same, in a good way! EDIT: Benedict Cumberbatch, exactly... without help of your channel info I wouldn't have guessed :)

[@WinterElznic]

I love the sleep medicine thanks!

[@loanianderson1978]

Oohhhhhh soooo goood, the eternal debate if it possible or not, but this story is over the top!

[@davidofglenbrook4487]

I fear demons are chewing on my kidneys. I am spitting blood as I take a spoon to eat my brains.

[@CS-hu5be]

53:30 head banger, sounds like some one who'd came back from a metal concert.

[@0331machinegunman]

It sucks that they never invented gas masks in this reality 😕

[@dawnhughes1707]

Hahahahaha love you Dr. Creepen it's still great!!👻👻

[@hiiiiflyin92]

"I zipped up, narrowly avoiding disaster" hahaha that made me laugh out loud. dr creepen ftw

[@jfrederick77]

Want more on this subject!!

[@blakewelker7139]

Josh looked over the, "Come on!"

[@nunyabiz8887]

Home run Doc. Near as I can recall your pronounciation was spot on

[@xigbarmasters3337]

All you need is at the halfway mark is a man saying FULL METAL ALCHEMIST... twice.

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

Loved that show. I threw in the transmutation circles to pay homage.

[@jeremyporter5540]

Time to kick back an hear my Dr. with my favorite drink.

[@TheQuequera]

I loooove this!! 😍

[@NebulousArray]

I find it amusing that you snap , with your fingers, at yourself when you screw up.

[@ollehkacb]

Its a common edit thing. Its placed their so its easier to find later

[@sshahariar]

We need movies based on these stories. But not by fucking Hollywood and their degenerated cronies

[@arkham705]

Great story! Bad ending.. Still enjoyed it

[@cutenose38]

Hiya doc its jenny and the cats. We have been out with friends and ive just got in and its 5am ish. Im now sat in my chair with the cats we have our favorite drinks ready to listen 😸😸😸😸😸

[@candydaisydunlopa9403]

Lol that snap and oh come on instantly tells me cat owner xD

[@tiffanybenefield1980]

1:24:54 minutes of our dear Doctor Creepen's heavenly angelic musical voice. Sorry for being so late to listening Doctor, I've been kinda busy the past few days. I kept you til last but I think it was for different reasons than what this story was about.😜🤩😜 Anyway I hope that you have a wonderful day Doctor Creepen.👌😍😇😘😇🤩👍

[@sarashakeri6561]

It never occurred to this man - or the town - to buy a damn gas mask?!? This guy was so frustrating - he screwed up countless opportunities to either finish his original objective or kill the damn thing, all while learning nothing for the longest time, then little to nothing. 🤬 there should def be an emoji for pulling your hair out CONFUSING ENDING, or maybe it’s just me 🤷🏻‍♀️

[@mr.bigbean4105]

Your voice is great I hope your cash money and feeling great

[@GraveyardShades]

Occultist here. Story isn't far off.

[@practicaloccultist231]

Yeah, thoroughly enjoyed the accuracy.

[@GraveyardShades]

@@practicaloccultist231 Actually somewhat similar to experiments the OTO (allegedly) preformed out in California back in the 80s.

[@practicaloccultist231]

@@GraveyardShades I can't attest to that but there was a book I read a few years ago that talked about them doing that in the middle ages.

[@Hitstix420]

you should try finding a production company and pitch for a T.V series on premium TV thiugh like showtime or HBO or Amazon prime. 10 episode seasons hour long episodes. It would be a hit. Your detail is so visualizing I can see it as if I am watching it in my mind. call it Mr. Creepen: Tails with your favorite drink. it would be like a 2020 version of tails from the crip from the old HBO show when I was a kid.

[@CTCAC2000]

That was super twisted!!!!

[@kimlambert159]

I never even heard if a Hermunculis before! So I have no idea how it's pronounced anyhow Doc! Great story I guess the lesson for today is not to bite off more than you can chew ew!

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

Really glad you enjoyed it.

[@CartersKidsSteveInTheEve]

The Thing meets Predator meets the Fly meets Stranger Things.

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

Never thought about it that way but you're kinda right. Hmm.

[@PetushCherrySwirl]

There was a LOT of vomiting in this story. xD

[@damonx99]

Poor trash panda. Haha. Another great story.

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

Thanks Im glad you enjoyed it. I really appreciate you giving it a listen

[@damonx99]

@@welcometoluxaria5363 Definitely. It gave me ideas for other stories I want to write. Some creepy concepts here in execution. Keep it coming.

[@helsetasatornemesisackerma6593]

"Im saving you for last"*runs of laughing. Imma do that to someone

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

bwahahaha. thank you so much for giving it a chance

[@thSubliminalCriminal]

If I sat back with my favorite drink to enjoy these I would have a touch of jaundice by now 😏

[@cunchxcowboy]

Why did you have so many breakdowns during this recording lol you're doing great Doc 👍

[@businessweasel9425]

Moscow Mule tonight, ginger beer, tequila and lime

[@sexygrandmadarkness2722]

Nice 🤟🏼🖤🤟🏼.. Cheers 🥃 be safe okay 😊 much love Sexy Grandma Darkness ✌️💋

[@AraCod]

Isnt that a Mexican Mule Salute! :))

[@businessweasel9425]

@@AraCod different names for different locales

[@wittyithink9109]

@@businessweasel9425 nah, think they meant that it's a "Mexican Mule" because a Moscow Mule is made with vodka, not tequila.

[@TheWillvoss]

I'm a simple man. I see 1hr. I grab my favorite drink

[@lidiyaheyheyhey3387]

Throat punch. 👊 lol loved it

[@michaelmcdowell7096]

I love this take on a homunculus

[@welcometoluxaria5363]

Thank you. I'm really glad you liked it. I wanted to do something different

[@wildfire317]

You would think that after so many times of getting gassed this guy would become immune at some point

[@19453218]

Lord Creepen and his secret obsession. Horror!

[@bertramgunn]

Love this stuff