IELTS-Simon-Writing-Task2-Lesson-7 Discussion essays

Writing task 2, lesson 7: Discussion essay
Here’s the question and the full essay that you saw in the lesson:
Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged.
Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete
become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
People have different views about whether children should be taught to be competitive or
co-operative. While a spirit of competition can sometimes be useful in life, I believe that the
ability to co-operate is more important.
On the one hand, competition can be a great source of motivation for children. When
teachers use games or prizes to introduce an element of competitiveness into lessons, it
can encourage children to work harder to outdo the other pupils in the class. This kind of
healthy rivalry may help to build children’s self confidence, while pushing them to work
independently and progress more quickly. When these children leave school, their
confidence and determination will help them in competitive situations such as job
interviews. It can therefore be argued that competition should be encouraged in order to
prepare children for adult life.
On the other hand, it is perhaps even more important to prepare children for the many
aspects of adult life that require co-operation. In the workplace, adults are expected to
work in teams, follow instructions given by their superiors, or supervise and support the
more junior members of staff. Team collaboration skills are much more useful than a
competitive determination to win. This is the attitude that I believe schools should foster in
young people. Instead of promoting the idea that people are either winners or losers,
teachers could show children that they gain more from working together.
In conclusion, I can understand why people might want to encourage competitiveness in
children, but it seems to me that a co-operative attitude is much more desirable in adult
life.
(270 words, band 9)
Analyse the essay by completing the following tasks:
1. Count the sentences in each paragraph. Did I use my normal approach, writing 2
sentences for the introduction, 5 sentences for each main paragraph and 1 sentence
for the conclusion?
2. Highlight the linking words in each main paragraph. Which method did I use in each
one: ‘firstly, secondly, finally’ or ‘idea, explain, example’?
3. Underline the good vocabulary that I mentioned at the end of the video lesson.
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People have different views about whether children should be taught to be competitive or cooperative. While there are several benefits to a spirit of competition, I think that the ability to cooperate has more importance in adult life.

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Humans have variety views about whether youngstar ought to be taught to be competitive or co - operative. while competition can give them a little bit useful in life, I belive that the ability to co- operate more essential.

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