It doesn't even call itself a warrior, Ending | HFY | A Short Sci-Fi Story

[@robertvirnig638]

After listening to quite a few sci-fi stories on KZbin I was glad to find one that didn't use the words "deathworlder" or "resilience." It is much better storytelling to show such qualities in actions rather than excessive use of adjectives.

[@ArchangelLucifer0]

Those were written by AI, when you have a real writer it's immediately noticeable.

[@JulioMo]

How about "bristling with weapons" or "his fingers danced over the panel"

[@armadillotoe]

This was a large step above most of these stories. Thank you.

[@Mufin_dadeh21]

Love it im happy with both endings

[@sluggishruggish]

I enjoyed the explanation as much as the story. That was your original twist, incorporate the explanation behind your thought processes.

[@markfergerson2145]

I prefer the first ending because it leaves a huge opening for future stories in this universe with, to my mind, more options than the second. The human leadership now knows for certain that there is a hostile alien polity that considers humans to be potential slaves. In the second ending, all they would know is that a hostile force had destroyed the colony- that force might have been pirates, corporate/institutional competitors or whatever depending on what could be deduced from examining the wreckage and corpses. The protagonist is not told (in our hearing, that is) whether there were any other similar incidents in the two years since he was captured. That could mean that his interrogators did not want him to know of them (assuming they had occurred) or that there weren’t any. If there were, there could already be a war going on and the information James brought back, along with the ship and the two aliens, could be pivotal in that war. If not, then his information (and the ship and aliens) could provide diplomatic leverage to prevent such a war or worst case allow for better preparation for a war by analyzing the alien biology, psychology and technology. We are also not told if this was the first First Contact humanity has had with aliens, just that it is the first First Contact this particular alien species had with humanity. We do know that it was the first inkling that species even had that humans existed, suggesting the absence of the Galactic UN trope (which I personally despise) or at least that if one does exist, that its knowledge and influence either do not reach as far as human space yet, that the attack was not sanctioned by the Council, or that it was and there is strong anti-human sent on the Council. Enough rambling. Great story whichever ending you finally decide is canon. I just wanted to point out that what you didn’t write is at least as important as what you did write.

[@zacharygold9483]

I preferred the first ending. It was more upbeat and positive. James patience and intelligence was again demonstrated. Instead of simple revenge, he accomplished notifying humanity of the threat and supplying invaluable intelligence. Including a VIP prisoner, who could reveal even more than James. The finally family reunion was a good ending.

[@eblkii6314]

Either ending, works for me.

[@soldierscotty1959]

Scenes change! No forced close captioning! Love it.

[@mariuszsz5986]

Cool thought process. Should have included that in the story as a conversation between someone, maybe two guards or James and the guard he got familiar with. Good story! Make more!

[@anthonywall5227]

Thank you and the first version 😊

[@rejej200c]

Well done I enjoyed your story and explanation

[@noahkasper9387]

It's great only a few other channels I know that will change the voice for characters, and even less that change with the story. Amazing!

[@ThomasAlexander-nu8pp]

The first ending was my favorite because he got away.

[@JuniorGonzalez-dp8sj]

The First ending good

[@oldskool235]

A black IT guy 😂 I weep for the network.

[@royisherwood910]

always better when the good guy survives

[@erikjrn4080]

Well written. A sequel to would be very nice, not necessarily focused on the same character, but set in the same universe. There's so much that's unexplored.

[@mariuszsz5986]

One thing: if they fight they're combatants. Noncombatants are when they don't take part in fighting. Correct me if I'm wrong. That one irked me. Otherwise great story! 👍

[@denniscashell2407]

It's a good story

[@otakarsulc4686]

I like it, first version is better

[@RustyEcks]

Loving it!

[@guy_autordie]

Last part: james psychology: I'm sure that when you go deep space, you will have a weapon training. Also, survival and revenge are a good reason to fight. You are either soon to be dead if you do nothing, or you could try to defend yourself. The deeper and less protected a colony is, the more you will put the defense type of people in place. When the place become a protected place, you then can put anybody. And if you put a bunch of skilled on a tpoic but also survivalist kind of guy, then you could have a good team to setup any colony.

[@ladyginger1701]

All your thoughts at the end, incorporated into the story would make a great novel.

[@stonereaper1157]

I like both the first is a happy ending the second is most likely except it's vengeance not revenge Never under estimate a man on a mission A man with nothing to lose is extremely dangerous

[@johnc6738]

Great story. Much better than AI. The first version had more probability of happening. An IT guy would most likely think of getting information back to Earth. And taking the elder hostage makes much more sense than out right killing him. Great story, keep it up

[@ThomasAlexander-nu8pp]

What a joy. I have been working on a similar idea. Mainly more voices and not so much lost animals and stuff we are all tired of.🎉🎉

[@groverchw]

Like the first 1 better. No wife.

[@erikjrn4080]

Soldiers are warriors. Warriors aren't necessarily soldiers. A soldier must be member of an army, or, at least, a military force, and is generally associated with command structures, discipline, professionalism, and standardized equipment and training. However, even ragtag, untrained, ill equipped, and undisciplined armies have been described as having soldiers. A warrior must either be qualified and willing to fight in armed conflict, or actually fighting in armed conflict. However, Vikings fighting in the Great Heathen Army are often referred to as "warriors", while members of small rebel groups are often referred to as "soldiers". 'Warrior' has some connotation to the concept of the 'Noble Savage'; individualistic and proud, but also inherently violent and savage. Anyone trying to enforce a strict distinction between the two, is either just confused, or mistaking a specialized terminology for colloquial English. Using them as synonyms will generally be fine, but, for an author, awareness of linguistic nuances is even better.

[@bryanshoemaker6120]

I literally just asked about the story yesterday.

[@zzing]

There were a lot of repeated sections. I liked the first version best. I feel this could be expanded upon as what happens after, from other perspectives.

[@kevincinnamontoast3669]

Version 3 is the most cromulent.

[@WilliamSmith-zk4tj]

With the first scenario I would like to see that go on this is a good storyline and we all know that the reports that the elders will get aren't going to be the story they should hear they will send somebody after that Elder and they will send somebody after the people they sent and then there will be War and I'm sure there's internal politics and struggles and there'll be one that will try to recover the Elder to gain recognition and Power and then we have the Society of the aliens so much to build on I hope you take this opportunity to make a Space Opera trilogy but please something that's not geared for 13 year old boys just entering puberty

[@kangdeplo5179]

I like version 2 better. I like the dramatic revenge.☠

[@PsionicDummy]

solid story

[@geofthompson3844]

Interesting approach 👍.

[@stevemckay3094]

the first version of the end is much better. more thoughtful.

[@innovationinaction5406]

Good

[@JoeyYoungg]

Huh… I did not expect you to keep in the preamble... Wait, you put in part of the comment chain?

[@Kappa760]

I like the preamble . The author writing style is so unique and captivating.

[@JoeyYoungg]

@ thanks :)

[@Kappa760]

Thank? I'm talking about author JoChemjong 😂

[@Kappa760]

Sound like James Young 🤭

[@JoeyYoungg]

@@Kappa760 I'm curious if you figured it out yet :)

[@JohnTheRaeder-xf5sh]

I read this already.

[@JoeyYoungg]

Me too man, me too…;)

[@williamrudolph1791]

Version 2 get serious

[@JohnTheRaeder-xf5sh]

Noice!!!!

[@jerrywalker6074]

Version one i liked the best .

[@hillbillyhippipe]

greetings storyteller i would choose the first option to go to war that way i can get some vengeance but mostly seek justice for my dead friend are you going to continue this story into a war thank you for the story for awhile...

[@meikegutmann9725]

❤ i definitely like version 1 better. 👍 version 2 is ugly and without any hope. 😐

[@NguyễnAnh-w9x]

❤

[@bernieozzie7480]

Bad people using Star Trek insignia on human uniform. Very bad form to steal that design, lazy and disrespectful. Your story is not in their class.😢😢🤬

[@innovationinaction5406]

Good