"Mayhem Mountain" Creepypasta

[@drablord448]

The video suddenly was unable to play once they decided to go on Mayhem Mountain and then eat, as if that were the exact point that KZbin is warning me to get out while the story is still happy in some way.

[@drablord448]

Finally finished listening holy shit I am glad I didn’t take the warning. A bit confused by a few things that happened at the end but I loved it! Keep up the good work man!

[@andyrodriguez2654]

Drablord that literaly jus happend to me😂

[@VictorianCatLady]

*do do do do, do do do do*

[@asexyparamedic3459]

Andy Rodriguez this is my eleventh time listening! It's so worth it! Best out there!

[@matthewtregaskis1761]

Brandon: "pull it" Internet lag "GET OUT WE'LL YOU STILL CAN"

[@tiffanybenefield1980]

This is 1 of those stories that you can hear 100Xs & it never gets old.

[@tiffanybenefield1980]

Angel Mist 👍👌

[@willyada5997]

I personally would recommend the harbinger experiment if you haven't already kzbin.info/www/bejne/jXTak2etmcplr6c Creeps narration

[@cosplaydreams4136]

Another one would probably be Normal Pr*n For Normal People lol

[@infinitybomb53]

Yo guys I know I’m late to this but , I’m up at 5 am right now just finished listening to this story , and if somehow you guys see this reply , I just wanted to ask what other stories from creeps do you guys recommend , thanks bros

[@cosplaydreams4136]

Your Mom Probably “I taught creative writing and two stories stood out” and “the Ronald McDonald house” are pretty good ;D

[@amandahuddleston7070]

Common last words: “What could go wrong?”

[@Gamergeek56]

what about " Fuck it, let's do it"

[@fckyoutube9605]

That's how you jinx yourself.

[@connorv.9337]

they should get a T-shirt that says "I Survived Mayhem Mountain"

[@bearbear4296]

Seriously I would so rock it

[@buzznbunn]

"and all I got was a lousy t-shirt"

[@howwyrdstudios7548]

I'm on it, to CustomInk I go

[@howwyrdstudios7548]

@Blunt Boy you good chief

[@fckyoutube9605]

@Blunt Boy same

[@justinarthur1451]

So this is basically what you would get if someone had their Rollercoaster Tycoon kill-ride made in real life. If only the options in that game allowed for messing with the restraints and multiple tracks like this. Also noticed a LOT of lines getting repeated or stumbled over at roughly 50 minutes in, yet oddly enough there was almost none of that throughout the rest.

[@RighteousJ]

Pretty sure that's how it was written originally.

[@stee1curtain341]

@@RighteousJ nah, just parts he forgot to cut out

[@yfi6841]

These narrations have to be repeated per line so when editing the narrator can pick the best sound.

[@Mygg_Jeager]

@@RighteousJ lol

[@sparkysurvivalist9507]

Pardon the pun but i guess you can say they had the ride of their lives. P.S. im a father now so i have to pratice these bad jokes.

[@JakNekon]

You are well on your way, Grasshopper...

[@casimirkulikowski5949]

does it just happen right away or is it a gradual increase

[@mooncake9954]

Congrats man

[@yfi6841]

What do you call a bear in the woods with no teeth??? A gummy bear. 😁you're welcome.

[@Whitedark1093]

The ride was to die for.

[@philzeo]

If it were me, i definitely would've run an empty car on each ride before i went on it. Including track B. The stupidity of these people, not testing before they ride it themselves, makes it no great loss. Great story!

[@classic.madeleina]

Phil Zeo well I m sure thats what the contractors do when they test them. And they were told the ride was cleared. So i don't think they are acting stupid

[@deadaccount3342]

Newbie at Newhouse Well who cleared track B then?

[@classic.madeleina]

Phil Zeo well what kind of developer clears a coaster that has a switch to a second track which is A) easy to find and B) obviously does something because it makes a loud noise through the entire park. Obviously this is a GIANT plot hole in the story because it makes no sense the company didn't find it. But from their perspective they would have no reason to believe the company would be that dumb

[@RockyOtter]

It could be they did find it, and were told by the same people at the end to never mention it. But it's still weird that they didn't test it themselves. Seriously, a track no one's been told about, in a park that's been abandoned for years, not going to say "You know, wouldn't hurt to test it really"?

[@Disatiere]

@Robert Phillips Yeah i know how paranormal works. However the fuck you want it to since its all just fiction. Just saying "hurr durr mugic" is called lazy writing.

[@garyt.s.368]

This is the saddest creepypasta I’ve ever seen. The author did such a good job of making lovable characters, and I had my fingers crossed for them to live the whole time, just to be let down at the very end. Not a lot of these stories are able to get me so attached to the characters, but this one succeeded. I’ll have to look at more of this author’s work because the level of dread this story filled me with was indescribable. I enjoyed the story still, despite being disappointed and terrified, and your narration helped with that. You can really set the mood of the story with the tone you use, and the slow, soothing way you talk just makes it even more chilling. This video was successful in giving me the creeps. Thank you.

[@lilfruitbat]

Well said! I would say the same myself but I don't need to, I feel the same way you do about this. The author and Creeps are so talented.

[@garyt.s.368]

@@lilfruitbat Yep! Thank you!

[@bimbunnny]

The way the narrator described Brandon's death when Brandon had been the one who was the most eager to go with Mark on the ride... it really broke my heart

[@RedDotInABlueState91]

Have you read or listened to Penpal by Dathan Auerbach? That's the saddest creepypasta, and it was turned into a novel and sold in stores and Amazon.

[@maddsmikkelsen7188]

take a look at Borrasca by C.K. If you got attached to these characters, that’ll get you far worse. C.K Walker does a phenomenal job at humanizing a character rather than just putting pieces to a puzzle.

[@miserydark1299]

See, they teased her! Charlotte listened to her instincts; she was right! Mayhem mountain was just code name for torture trail!

[@caraj5054]

yesss stan charlotte

[@nathannever7209]

Mayhem Mountain could be a great band name

[@elliesaint1984]

Nathan Never I agree, a speed metal band kind of like Ministry

[@Yaboikvk]

Mayhem mountain is the name of my dick

[@lyalya6822]

There is actually a band named "Mayhem". You totally should google it since, I assume, you like creepy stuff. Believe me, that band has fucked up and gruesome history.

[@Yaboikvk]

Ellie Saint :(

[@Yaboikvk]

Ellie Saint :( still not good enough

[@maxksksksksks7803]

“She wouldn’t say much abiut that day although- she wouldn’t say much about that day, although she dive-she wouldn’t say much about that day, although she finally did tell me something..”

[@Ela.elizabeth]

It's not his fault - he developed a terrible stutter after the trauma of the f--after the trauma of the-- he developed a terrible stutter after the trauma of the fall. Of the fall.

[@ArtByCole]

It sounded like he took sleeping pills before starting this recording, and they kicked in right at the end. Ha! XD

[@cherridwan]

Nah. It’s impossible to read perfectly for 50 minutes straight. Creeps probably repeats lines all the time because he messes up or used the wrong tone. But he usually edits the repeats out. In every video there’s at least one or two repeats that he forgets to edit out but this one definitely had a lot more.

[@snoop_doge616]

Yep. That's what happened... thanks captain dumbass

[@dawnmidnightsun2521]

As someone who narrates myself, we repeat the lines if we have made a mistake so we can edit the full section out more easily. He just missed it in editing.

[@creacherfeacher8232]

So basically a rich man built his kid an amusement park and his kid's reaction was: "Well sure, this is cool, but what if we added a track to one of the rides that kills people?"

[@Deathbatman]

Pretty much, seems weird he would make that happen

[@PungiFungi]

@@Deathbatman the entire premise was stupid when you think about the logistics involved to create the underground portion of the ride. A billionaire built it. Yeah, sure. So many creepy pastas are just badly written.

[@MyXyle666]

​@PungiFungi I hate it when horror stories aren't based in reality. I read one about an ice cream truck that kids die in (which is totally unbelievable, there's no profit to killing customers), or one about a skinwalker (also unreal since monsters don't exist). I mean, personally I expect all fictional horror stories and movies to be 100% real. I was shocked when I found out that all creepypasta stories are totally fake. It was almost too much to handle

[@creacherfeacher8232]

@@MyXyle666 Eh, I don't necessarily think horror has to be based in reality - I mean, one of my favorite horror films involves people going into the Paris catacombs and winding up in hell - but the extent to which I'm willing to suspend my disbelief depends on what the story's about, you know? Monster stories or stories set in hell? Yeah, sure, whatever. An amusement park with a secret roller coaster track that kills people? Just doesn't make a lot of sense to me, no matter how far I suspend my disbelief.

[@JasonDashnaw]

​@PungiFungi I try to leave the "Logistics" to the writer. Can't wait for your story to read by Creeps

[@ceesmol3348]

I think a better title would be "track B"

[@cloedavenport]

Cees Mol no that spoils it

@@cloedavenport agreed. It gives too much info.

[@SamanthaSmith-mw7hi]

i literally just thought of that when it ended lol

[@bearbear4296]

Awee well at least I know now what to expect lol

[@Hentaiprotagonist]

Cees Mol ye

[@lexcithewizard876]

this was amazing, and hearing it unedited almost made me smile- the basic mess ups someone does when reading aloud is so rare to hear in these readings, your voice is so calming, so being able to hear those little stutters was a bit of a welcome surprise? just to know, yea, you stutter and mess up, we all do,

[@Nagatem]

"Who wants to go to a Theme park?" Me: see's creepy clown image, you thats no theme park!, thats a scream park!!!

[@Joshwillmakeamovieaboutyou]

@@KitDarlene LoL

[@spectreseed6029]

"Besides, half of them are married." "Really? Which half?" Oh my God I fucking love Charlotte.

[@benballman2832]

He mention 1999 being the last year he went there as a kid and then he said that a bunch of kids went missing in the 1980’s and 1990’s and I got so exited that it was a reference to 1999 but it was much much worse...

[@alexandermay861]

If the loan for the park gives you nightmares you don't know true terror... *STUDENT LOANS*

[@Ron4885]

@Blind Eye - I been there......

[@DJ-LD]

*ASDF'S VERSION OF DUN DUN DUN PLAYS*

[@lyleskinner1914]

AAAAAHHHH!!! NOOOO!!!

[@grandpastellingyou]

Blind Eye the horror!!!!! 😭

[@ashurean]

I'm sorry, but student loans in the 100's of millions of dollars range is several powers less intense than a business loan for several million.

[@jeaneddy8922]

*father has uploaded*

[@chrollobeast4915]

Sheesh now that all of his friends are dead. He has to pay off that multi million dollar loan to the bank all by himself 🤣🤣🤣

[@ijornhribrudkrvir]

Maybe they have life insurance lmao

[@TrollWalterWhite]

The horror

[@dadbot8480]

Thats the scariest part!

[@yungmandeux1729]

Thts a fate worse than death

[@jessemartin2685]

If student loans were made into a rollercoaster

[@Tina_95]

This reminds me of a more messed up version of Final Destination 3 where all the people die on the roller coaster.

[@morganwest7605]

Tina yeah. It's awful

[@snowdropsnowstar7612]

Tina I liked final destination

[@9nineofdiamonds]

This is a combination of the subway scene and the rollercoaster scene

[@iylarutherford7972]

God, your voice is the most amazing this I've ever heard, I think I may be addicted to listening to you. Thank you for the amazing content and posting so often!

[@arintheseatsesh6242]

Swallow a barrel

[@lilyjayrobertson5309]

Iyla Rutherford I’ve been listening to him eve since middle school . I love his soothing voice I’m freaking old now and I’m still stuck on here

[@GCPJD98]

I could literally picture this whole story in my head so creepy!

[@psychoticjedi4853]

AWESOME story man! WOW I had my hands clenched and my teeth grinding through the whole thing!

[@Cia_M1986]

C.K. Walker actually worked in the writing team of The Haunting of Hill House. She's extremely talented and NEEDS more recognition than she gets. I'd suggest the Deepwood trilogy to start. You're in for a treat. GREAT, absolutely amazing narration. Suscribing!

[@The_Duval]

Deepwood 1 is good, 2 and 3 are fan fiction

[@NathanRS28]

Also, pretty sure Charlotte is glad she didn't go on the ride that day.

[@Echs_D33]

This is my favorite creepypasta! Yes!

[@pamelaraney4654]

I have a Clever Name I Swear mine too 💖💖

[@gamebearart7675]

*I hate this for physically making me sick and feel like I’m on a roller coast, but god damn it do I love this*

[@sageironshooter2442]

Love slow burn horror stories

[@santiacoarmy6483]

Bro....this is actually extremely depressing. Finally going back to the place you loved as a child and riding your favorite ride with your best friends and your main friend. But you are tricked into a death trap and forced to watch helplessly as your main best friend slips from the ride with fear in his eyes,staring back into yours,as he slams against the rusted metal track. As he stares back at his you with his cold,lifeless eyes laying there dead,as you run his body over knowing you couldn’t have done anything. Then knowing that you friends fell through multi thousand foot hole to their dark,horrible,death. As you,and only you and your sister, walk away alive ,with the guilt of knowing there was nothing you could do after your friend lifelessly stares into your eyes.

[@cannotfindcreativename7210]

*spoiler* What was up with the chair? Would the rich guy's son sit there and watch the kids dying?

[@AntiFaGoat]

JustAnime ForMe Yes.

[@Sahgee]

That's exactly it. He was a man of simple pleasures, one of them being the impending death and terror of children

[@maxineschultze922]

The second they said track b I was literally whispering shouting MURDER DEN MURDER DEN

[@frizzykitty8655]

i feel like they made a lot of unreasonable decisions, but i dont know exactly how im supposed to be picturing the room. why didnt they get up and walk along the tracks when it got slow and the shoulder bars released? there was nothing stopping them was there? it was perfectly reasonable for them to get up and climb back across the cars right?

[@LizzyThePirate]

The shoulder bars were only unlocked during the most dangerous parts. Other than that, they were always locked.

[@EvadeDragon]

When it was slowed and unlocked they were high up and upside down

[@cardb0ard471]

All my friends are dead

[@cameroncagan2396]

CARDB0ARD push me to the edge

[@yetimstillfabulous2951]

CARDB0ARD 😏

[@davidmorningway6025]

Turbonegro

[@Indigo1514]

This one literally had me shaking. This one was really well written and well read. I have never reacted this way towards a Creepypasta.

[@gois3r]

i listen to creepypastas a lot and i can easily recognize the voices of all these youtubers and your voice by far is the best one to listen to and i always prefer to listen to the creepypastas you narrated.

[@jamesadams814]

This story makes great use of adjectives, especially during the "track B" experience. It's almost like I'm actually there. Pretty gripping stuff.

[@aaronray3891]

I listen to EVERY video when I sleep and this is BY FAR the best one so far. I want a video made for mayhem mountain I can’t imagine that cavern.

[@JeffreyNadolny]

Please don't take this as an insult but at around 49 minutes when you stalled that was actually very inspiration as a Creator myself I only have about 1,600 subscribers that I love dearly and a second Channel with about 50 but that made me realize that even the best of us, you!! Sometimes make mistakes this whole time I was asking myself he never makes a mistake he's perfect how does he do it so once again not an insult but I think you for showing me that mistakes happen and we can work through them while I'm creating our videos

[@MahouKat]

Jeffrey Nadolny I think some of those stalls were on purpose to make the narrator seem afraid

[@Huero-1]

He messes up on multiple occasions, just not as much as he did on this one so it’s less noticeable

[@JeffreyNadolny]

Katastrophic Arts no it doesn't fit it it doesn't make any sense he clearly messed up there is no reason to make yourself look sad or upset during that part and then stall that long

[@JeffreyNadolny]

Taps fan I was not at all saying that he sucks or that people don't make mistakes I just thought that it was uplifting for me as a new creator I have 1600 subscribers and growing that someone as well known in this genre still makes mistakes sometimes

[@finnthefinn]

Katastrophic Arts probably an editing error

[@chrisrose323]

This is my ASMR or whatever its called. Cant sleep without your stories

[@XIXIWORLD]

i feel like i'll never finish listening to this story because i listen to creeps to fall asleep and i fall asleep so easily to this pasta everytime i try to finish it

[@pliff3813]

Well Charlotte, your an adult now, I think you can take on the viper. I’m dead

[@sadworld.bskrdo4943]

Pliff j

[@MissSunnyF42]

I actually searched this one to listen to again. I don't uaually repeat stories, but this one stuck with me and inspired a number of nightmares.

[@50percentGrey]

There should be a steel roller coaster called "Life". Not only would it be named after the familiar simile, but it would be designed to look like a strand of DNA spiraling and then separating. You know?

[@wesleyology]

53 minutes, hell yes. thank you for being extra amazing, Creeps ♥️ relieving to have a creepypasta account that has varied story times, and honestly your readings just help me when I’m on arist/writer’s block

[@cursedteacup1431]

Also thank god that he doesn’t have a bunch of adds

[@macariathewolf9493]

hyperspace are you a furry to I am

[@wesleyology]

macaria the husky eh I just like drawing them, so I mean sure

[@lolasum_sumi_san]

Oh great now I'm upset. Why didn't they just send an empty car into the track B? Whoever built that damn ride was a sick psychopath.

[@Wandergirl108]

That was the idea. The park was built by a billionaire for his son, who was a sick psychopath. It wasn't the rides that were meant to amuse the kid, it was Track B, so he could watch people die in a long, convoluted way every day, from the viewing room described at the end. What's so disturbing is how that could, in theory, happen, with enough money and enough lack of caring.

[@sonnycorleone8529]

@@Wandergirl108 wandergirl, Hello. Thanks for explaining it to people who are a little slow in getting this story. I loved it. One of the best creepypastas in my opinion.

[@Diana-dd4dt]

GURLLLLL!!!! WE LOVE A GOOD ADVENTUREPASTA!!!! I’m actually living for this story. I really enjoyed it.

[@ImSoToastie]

Whats with all the "paranormal" talk and the engineer was dumb talk. Okay. Obviously the owner was a sadistic rich man that built the "Death Track" and liked hearing the screams of the victims (ride and room was specifically built for acoustics). The man also made a special room with a panoramic view and a single chair for him to sit in and watch as he watched the final survivors get to pick their own death (SAVAGE!!) The massive amount of money that the bank couldnt figure out being transfered to other parties was "Hush Money" for the engineers and inspectors.

[@Wandergirl108]

Oh, that's right, I forgot about the money that kept going somewhere weird! That fills in the last plot hole, frankly. Now the only valid point is that the friends didn't bother sending an empty car through…and also that opening Track B caused such a loud noise that no one ever noticed…but those are pretty tiny plot holes, with the rest filled in. And yeah anyone who thinks there's any paranormal element to this pasta is incredibly dumb or has heard too many paranormal pastas to think otherwise.

[@katlahay6285]

@@Wandergirl108 It's also possible that when track B was run, a new car would be run in from a separate line onto the main track to make it appear as if it had run properly. That would easily trick anyone who tested the track, since you can't see the entire track run. It WAS built to put on a show, after all

[@impyrobot]

@@katlahay6285 like you'd own a whole ass amusement park and could grab a go pro to figure it out or call you're engineer guy on you're payroll up or just shrug and say it's prolly not safe

[@katlahay6285]

@@impyrobot Still possible the engineers didn't ride in the cars when they ran it through. And the engineers did clear the ride. They likely would have said something if the one track hadn't been tested. I'm still with my theory that there were backup cars run into the main track to stop suspicion. They absolutely SHOULD have used some kind of camera to see the whole track run, but you have to have suspension of belief for some of these stories, just a little bit

[@duckmeat4674]

@@katlahay6285 running a camera for the whole thing seems so niche to me that most people wouldn't bother

[@wally8469]

I listened to this story when it first came out, years ago. I had never listened to it since then yet it has always stuck with me. It has given me a perpetual fear of roller coasters. I come back today to hear it one last time, before I make my way to Six Flags. The way you get so attached to the characters, just to have all but two of them ripped from you at the end of the story, is unlike any other creepypasta iv ever listened to or read. This is truly one of the greatest creepypastas ever written, and I will most likely remember it, time and time again, until the day I have to take my journey down the dreaded, track B.

[@kjetilmikkelsen1156]

This was a pretty good one. I often end up disappointed and skip to tje next one. This was worth my time. Now Im going to watch another one.

[@midnightmistress406]

well I now hate theme parks

[@elliott1996jsr]

Just don’t go on a ride with track b 😂

[@wildharpy6076]

I already dont like them lol

[@katelynbodiford5680]

Wild Harpy I bet they found Horrorland.

[@unfortunatewitnessX]

Not me, I still love them, especially Walt Disney World.

[@asexyparamedic3459]

You have the best Mayhem Mountain story out of everyone! Your voice is just that much superior 💜 Also, this ride needs to exist!

[@Wandergirl108]

Why does this ride need to exist? It needs to NOT exist… >.>

[@Blasfamous8]

Creeps is definitely my favorite narrator on any of these spooky story sites- he gets so animated and into the stories, I love it- he also sounds EXACTLY like the narrator of Winnie the Pooh... which makes it a tad creepier still. Other than some weird audio fumbling at the very end, this story was by far the most suspenseful I’ve heard in a really long time. The moral of the story- Charlotte knew not to ride some untested, unknown ride in an old abandoned amusement park. Charlotte is smart. Be like Charlotte.

[@unversedfoil3862]

ARE YOU SURE ABOUT THAT

[@Chudwick-Inc]

The creepypastas like this and 1999 are the best when they have long times

[@damianmozier7275]

This is probably my new favorite creepy pasta.

[@williamh8445]

Along side the harbinger experiment

[@idolhandz3946]

One of my favorite stories ever from KZbin. I’m an Action park veteran. I felt how they felt going back to that place.

[@thedregking9410]

I was so happy listening to this when this started. Then I remembered this was a creepypasta.

[@drkne]

The day this video came out, it became my favorite creepy pasta and it still remains so to this day!

[@esterbun9356]

wait, wait wait wait wait, i have a theory charlotte..? if thats how you spell it, was behind the whole thing. at the start when you realized her 'bully' was her freinds girl, she seemed horrified at first, but then replaced that with a 'sly smile', and the sentence 'fine by me', that seemed overly enthusiastic. she never went on the ride, even though she said she would at the start, proclaiming that it gave her the chills. she somehow new what happened to her brother, and where he was. despite the police having 'no idea' where the other missing children where. in the end, she was 'convinced' to beg her brother to not tell anyone what happened, when, if the news hit the media, the police would have no control over what happened, the rides would be destroyed, and they'd be safe.

[@katiesongbird9726]

【Esterbun】 nope there’s no way. She didn’t even know Danny would be there and she was shocked. And those people were her friends and her brother. She’s have no reason to kill them.

[@exhibente6803]

This is the first creepypasta that’s scared me... for over a year. Beautiful execution, creeps!

[@shiomicchi7247]

This is one of my favourite CreepyPastas out there, and one of my first ones that I ever listened to, thanks for narrating this one!!!

[@sonnycorleone8529]

SUPER ! One of the best written, imaginative and ambitious Creepypastas I have ever heard. Could make a great movie with the right stars and Director. Well Narrated too ! 4 Stars all around ! A CreepyPasta classic !

[@Wandergirl108]

…I have questions, but I feel like they have answers. I just feel…confused. Stunned, even, I guess. This was a good and very effective pasta, that's about all I can say for sure.

[@shjenn16]

Yay!!!! Love new uploads! Have a good day everyone!! Also super stoked it’s a long one! Hell yessssss

[@dark_optix4437]

i heard that piano sweet dreams are made of this in the background

[@mashylol5309]

This is one of the scariest stories I've listened to in a LONG time. How you read it made it even better, keep up the nice work man!

[@bigwillie4365]

Shoulda called Allstate, you could have avoided Mayhem Mountain like me

[@justssmonika3232]

I really love creepypastas like this. Idk what it is but it brings true goosebumps and chills and makes you feel anxiety.

[@puppet9689]

DUDE. This was SO good and SO awful!!

[@DSSeraph]

Got a bit concerned you were having a stroke or something there toward the end

[@randyreaper1852]

dear god its so *long*

[@abbyjohnson5071]

Skeleton _w that's what she said

[@o1starchild1o60]

*l o n g*

[@Dullsonic3]

Long as long long man?

[@randyreaper1852]

l o n g

[@Twiggy_Branch]

Abby Johnson Good One

[@hawkeyepalooka7832]

Old vid so you won’t see this, but have been watching for what seems like forever, live the videos please never stop

[@kingrod7910]

Wow my guy It's been a minute since I heard a spook noodle tale. You have one of the best voices for this. I love it

[@raymondfilyau7500]

Hahaha....you said "spooky noodle"!! Lmao!

[@raymondfilyau7500]

"Spooky noodle"!! HAHAHAHA!! I dont know why that is so damn funny to me! But it is! Lmao!

[@gotstungbyabee]

You're good at this, I listen to these creepypastas whilst playing games.

[@SarayaSkulls]

CK Walker dude you need to either write a prologue to this or a sequel. About what happened to those other kids and the evil owner!

[@SarayaSkulls]

Jaden Dobbs oh believe me pal...Ive listened to it like 5 times or more

[@anse001]

if you don't know where it goes strap a goddamn camera with a long distance monitor to something and send it off! better to be safe than sorry....

[@fruitfly7858]

Thank you for this wonderful gift dad

[@shavedparmesanprosciuttoan4317]

C.K. Walker will forever be the king of horror stories Edit: ohh snap just found out she’s a female! That’s badass!

[@arthurmorgan6335]

Wanna here a story full of mistakes ready...... My life

[@catherinearmstrong322]

Dont worry I have a plan Morgan!

[@jwall2365]

**hear

[@littlescarieone8610]

Great job! Awesome story and awesome narrative! This has made it to my favorite CP list. Stay spooky.

[@paranoid5881]

So this would turn out to a be a C movie. A group of stupid people buy their favorite park. They want to ride all the rides, they find a crappy hidden track No care for safety, then they all the die. The end. Thanks for the narration tho, creeps.

[@FusRoDont]

So kind of a pov from a GrayStillPlays planet coaster ride

[@mskiarma2u1]

This is gonna be a good one

[@ReqLeBeax]

Makes me miss Astroworld. It always felt like a death trap, but that was part of the fun. The Cyclone, a wooden coaster that you could feel the lean in the timber’s. Barnstormer, picture a giant swing set and you get strapped into a sling as you get pulled back. The pucker moment was always that first free fall from release. What a rush!

[@TheEvilAngel_8]

Always gonna look at the control panel when I ride roller coasters. Anything with a track b losses my business.

[@baresrs7367]

Love the videos. Been watching for a couple years now, its my daily sleep stories, keep it up brother

[@mrblueImnotfakeMichael]

Awesome video man your cool and your voice sound spooky you should work for reading scary books who agree with me

[@helentelehowski9800]

Andrew bunny I agree wholeheartedly. His voice is awesome. He really lets the emotions come through. I listen to these kinds of things to help me fall asleep and his voice is perfect.

[@50percentGrey]

Creeps also tries to avoid heavy curse words, which Mr. Creepypasta is known better for in contrast.

[@syrupsimon3522]

I agree he has a great voice but I think hes got his own thing going on hes making enough money and so forth but keep doing u and maybe you will have 1mil subs too

[@Delyxtra]

Me and my friends: *at six flags* my friends: "Oh, c'mon, the Viper ain't that bad!" The Viper to me:

[@coolman321ism]

I fell asleep when this started and I dreamed 75 percent of this story... Terrifying...

[@Tom_Conan]

Poor you😳

[@peepeepoopoo2710]

Nice

[@nadiabubar23]

Joe hawley enjoyer?

[@ThatGuyIsDoomed]

How are the disappearances a mystery? Your kids/gf/bf go on the ride, and then they never come back.

[@gcilidales8651]

Yo so for the longer ones could you do an upload that's an all black video with just audio? It makes it better to listen at night. Thanks fam

[@misdafireinfexus5828]

not here to cater to you :D

[@bananobot]

hands down one of the best stories I have heard so far. great job!

[@Flux333]

The Rides And Names Of the Rides Seem Very Similar To Minnesota's Valley Fair

[@MindLayer]

Señior Rubio I WAS LOOKING FOR THIS COMMENT

[@Flux333]

It Also Helps That The Road that Valley Fair Is Named "Valley Park Drive"

[@robertadamsx2]

I once went on a roller coaster and almost died. The seat I was in had no seat belt. At the hill at last second, I went down where the feat usually go. It was large enough to fit my (at the time) young kid body. There was a bar in the middle that separated the the area for each seats, so I hung on to that. It was pretty bumpy, but it became very easy to keep living at that point. Eventually the ride ended, and I lived. P.S. 666th comment.

[@elizabethfolk1928]

honestly ruined theme parks for me... best creepy pasta I’ve ever heard. was on splash mountain today and noticed it had changed somewhat from when i went awhile ago. it seemed darker. instead of thinking like a normal person I just assumed Walt Disney had built a track b and these were my final moments lol.

[@patrickboian8545]

This was a really good one.

[@tophatmetagross1497]

What happened with the audio at 50:00

[@Yaboikvk]

Tophat Metagross lol he messed up and didn't edit it out

[@rutefrag]

WhaT

[@cannotfindcreativename7210]

I think its hard for the character to talk about it, i dont think uts an editing mistake.

[@adouhoiad]

I think its because the character cracked his head and cant speak properly anymore, but it might be a mistake

[@Seryx7]

When content creators read stories like this, they're often times one take, in which they sit down and read the story they found... It sounded like Creeps simply started a sentence with the wrong tone of voice and decided to read ahead, and then try for a second time... However, because he's recording, he can't pause his voice for too long, so he most likely messed up those few times for that reason, he simply couldn't read ahead to know how he's supposed to talk.. Sure he reads the stories ahead of time, but you can't remember every line! Some parts of stories are quite hard to read at times, especially out loud when you have to convey the emotions of the characters; just ask any theatre geek!

[@serenavoice66]

This is such a good story, one of my favourites, it's just so creepy, great narration too 💫

[@yeahokkkay]

Did kingspook do this? No hate i listed again but i think he did. Each of their styles brings a different vibe. Love it.

[@sheed3700]

Markus Barrett Love your channel ❤

[@yeahokkkay]

Sheed S. Thanks!!!! you like the comedy or the music? Lol