Super Mario Maker 2: So I got a bad level, and tried to fix it

I recently played a pretty bad Mario Maker 2 level, to where I decided to take the task of making an improved version. In this video I show the original version, explain a bit of what it did wrong, then showcase my improved version of the level. Did I do a good job?
LEVEL CODE FOR MY IMPROVED LEVEL: R1V-GJL-DPG
Please be kind to the original level creator. This is a learning experience for all. Lord knows I've made some bad levels in Mario Maker myself!

[@Tetsaiken]

Not gonna lie. I miss Super Crappy World.

[@TheGameDisplay]

Milesluigi has played enough ancient SMW rom hacks to understand the difference between good and bad level design. Newbies take note!

[@theyankeegal13]

I think it's cute, also Miles you must make a level with piranha plants on flagpoles to throw us off. Yes I'm aware I'm asking for piranha plants on flagpoles. Also do bowser on a flagpole if you really wanna troll us

[@theyankeegal13]

i agree we need super crappy world 2.