Reading MY Book - "The Fate of Shadows" [ASMR Fantasy Audiobook]

[@NoMcChickenNuggiesLanieuh]

keep working on your book and we’ll all love it 💜💜

[@okamiamaterasu535]

I just started listening but I already love it the sounds in the background together with your voice reading the story? Amazing When its finished I hope Ill be able to get the book and read it myself I love fantasy storys Edit: OK the audio ended and now Im certain....this book is gonna be great! Definitely something I wanna read

[@ForTheDreamersASMR]

Thanks so much! So glad you enjoyed it!! 🥰

[@skynight671]

I missed his voice so much🥺 and yes! Writing your own book! AND READING IT😵 So happy and proud!!!

[@ForTheDreamersASMR]

Thanks so much! 😊

[@theogbunny6585]

I liked what you’ve shared so far. My advice to you is: 1. Try to avoid using adverbs (verb descriptors like quietly or patiently). While these are necessary sometimes, a lot of the power is given by the context and the word itself. If you already said something like “the hunter knew the forest well and relished in keeping its peace”, even a simple verb like walked or stepped now carries that connotation of the quiet. You could also use a strong verb like “he slipped between the trees” or “the hunter stalked through the forest”. This is especially true when it comes to dialogue. The situation and the actual words spoken give us the tone of voice of the character. If someone says something “calmly” or “angrily”, chances are a reader already inferred that without having to say it. 2. Check over your details. True, detail is the essence of showing your reader a scene or a character, but it can also go overboard sometimes. Make sure every detail is necessary and adds something important to the story. Once we know the bandits are scruffy and vulgar, it doesn’t add anything to keep giving them more adjectives. Or how many times are we told Ralis (the prince, I don’t know how you chose to spell his name since this is an audiobook) isn’t like his father, he’s reserved and prefers strategy? You also introduce characters that, at least in the context of the chapters we have, have no bearing on the story. Why do we need to know about the old sage or the guardsmen if they’re not being used yet except for passing glances by the prince? These examples were examples of character descriptions, but it can be applied to setting too. Of course, it’s important to give the reader some sort of picture, but detail becomes extraneous at some point. That is one I can’t describe well, but if you again consider if a detail is important and adds something meaningful to the story, you may find places you could cut back. Like I said, I really liked this story so far and I look forward to you possibly uploading more chapters. Keep in mind with what I’ve said here that any advice you get on writing is subjective and it’s up to your opinions, your personal likes and dislikes, if you should take them into account. These aren’t rules you have to follow or “problems” with a story; if you’re happy with what you’ve written, that’s all that matters at the end of the day. Good luck, and may your pen (or pencil or keyboard or whatever) take you far.

[@ForTheDreamersASMR]

Thanks so much! That advice was very helpful! Particularly 1, as I am often so worried of the most common fatal flaw of telling, not showing, that I go too far the other way. With the second segment, I know it seemed like a lot of characters were introduced, possibly too many feeling overwhelming, but I actually already reduced that number to only those that have bearing on the story. All will come into play significantly later

[@makayladeceault4925]

I really love this and I would love to hear more and this really surprised me because most books don’t hold my attention past the first few minutes and this really held attention the entire time. Great job👏🏻

[@chaos_phoenix2760]

Just hearing your voice really make my day and the story is interesting, exciting and it really triggers my curiosity

[@kellyparra6264]

I loved it, I am glad that you have encouraged to show us your book, it is very interesting: 3 👏🏻👏🏻😸

[@jennalouie9887]

IT'S NICE! NO SCRATCH THAT, IT'S BEAUTIFUL! MAGNIFACENT! WONDERFUL! basically every heckin positive adjective in the whole world 💖💖💖💯✨

[@ForTheDreamersASMR]

Aw thank you so much! So glad you enjoy it so far 🥰

[@reubenleslie4693]

I really like the characters and really enjoyed the fight scene in chapter 1, you're really talented, can't wait to see more!

[@ForTheDreamersASMR]

Thanks so much! It's come a long way since then, working on the revisions now

[@sophiadamico9212]

It’s super cool to see the story that the facetious assassin is from, keep up the great work 👍🏻

[@winterpuppet2523]

Yasss it's so good plz keep it upppp💐💐💐💐💐💐💐

[@enidan_]

That was absolutely fantastic! I only discovered your channel yesterday, but love your work so far. I really hope you go through with finishing and publishing your book. I'd love to read the full story!

[@ForTheDreamersASMR]

Thanks so much! I have actually been working on it constantly since I posted this. I've since finished a first draft and now working on revisions, it has improved a lot since this reading. I am on the lookout for beta readers too 👀

[@taliaatkinson266]

the book is so good so far! Keep up the good work :)

[@ForTheDreamersASMR]

Thanks! 😊

[@taliaatkinson266]

@@ForTheDreamersASMR your welcome!!

[@UnavoidableASMR]

love this!!

[@Kyriofan1]

OMG! That was great! Please release the next one soon

[@ForTheDreamersASMR]

Actually haven't kept up on these because I've been working furiously on writing more and even what was read in this part has been improved drastically. Focusing on getting done so I can (hopefully, as is my dream) get it on real bookshelves 😊

[@Iihbiybubuggvyfctex]

Me: Accidentally screams in excitement while listening to this with headphones, in the living room Parents: stares at me in fear.

[@ForTheDreamersASMR]

Haha glad to hear you're excited! (Maybe your parents not so much 😆) hope you enjoyed it ☺️

[@Iihbiybubuggvyfctex]

ForTheDreamers ASMR I loved it! My parents chilled out when they figured it was me being overly excited over a new story 😅

[@mirageangel9378]

I love it!

[@ForTheDreamersASMR]

It's come a long way since then! Getting close to having a first draft done finally!

[@mirageangel9378]

@@ForTheDreamersASMR That's wonderful! I'm so glad you've kept at it. Writing is such a long process I think a lot of people get discouraged and don't keep at it, or they get busy with more pressing matters and one day they realize it's been years since they've written. As a reader and writer myself, I feel sad for all the stories that are never "born." I'm really happy you're still working on this one and I look forward to being able to buy the book someday!

[@stevephrench5839]

This is so fucking cool

[@lorimeg8133]

❤️

[@llawliet8109]

I think interested

[@ForTheDreamersASMR]

Glad to hear! I'm working on it several hours a day, a lot has actually been changed and made better since this recording

[@llawliet8109]

@@ForTheDreamersASMR we should talk some day 😊 there should be a part 5 for the shapsifter story i also like your accent I sound like you would be from the phillpin

[@ForTheDreamersASMR]

I'm from Australia actually 👍

[@AnimeGirl4891]

Are you going to do any ASMR videos for Halloween?

[@charminhime5995]

He will

[@AnimeGirl4891]

Yes!

[@n0tbuttergurlsis641]

When your 3 hours late* well..REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE Also the video was amazing keep up the work

[@misschalon7357]

Hello. I really enjoyed this, and your assassin videos are my favourites of your content, so this was especially interesting. Thank you for sharing with us. I know I'm late here and you might not read this comment, but I'd like to make you an offer. I want to be a novel editor once I get my degree (which should be next year, if all goes well), and I would love to do a beta-read and basic edit (spelling, grammar, punctuation, etc..) for your manuscript, if that's something you'd be interested in. It can be in the future, if you aren't ready to share your written work with anyone. I really like your narrative voice, and I'm fine with gore (not so with explicit sex scenes), so if your whole book matches this content, I think I could work really well with you. I'm not professional yet, so I wouldn't charge or anything, but I do have the requisite language skills to put you on a querying level if you want to publish traditionally. (Self-publishing would need a copy edit, which is not something I'd do on a first pass.) Whatever you decide, keep up the good work. I really hope I'll get to read this book someday. Good luck, Mate! :)

[@ForTheDreamersASMR]

Hey I'm actually always super interested in feedback for my writing, I love hearing thoughts and can always talk about writing for ages. If you have discord, come join the server (link in vid description) there's a copy of my story on there but it's an old one so I can send you a newer version. Love to hear what you think and glad your interested enough to actually read it!

[@misschalon7357]

@@ForTheDreamersASMR That's great! I actually don't have discord. Would you be open to Facebook or email instead?

[@ForTheDreamersASMR]

Do you have Instagram? instagram.com/charmin_foryu/ If not email will be fine. [e-mail] Thanks 😊

[@misschalon7357]

@@ForTheDreamersASMR My pleasure! I've messaged you on both, and I look forward to hearing back from you.