Rhyming Picture Book Critique: DOWN ON THE FARM: Iambs Revisited | Peek & Critique

[@heatherkinser4931]

Renee, it's lovely to be featured, to hear you read the piece with dramatic flair, to benefit from your sage advice--and to think my example might instruct/inspire other rhymers. Also, I can't get over the barn-board font and CUTE little Iamb on the title page! Mille grazie!

[@LyricalLanguageLab]

I couldn't let the opportunity pass to use a sheep! :D Thank you again for loaning your wonderful work to the cause!

[@JackieRobinson-i3l]

@heatherkinser - was this ever published? It’s adorable! So fun.

[@TheMilwaukieDan]

OMG…. WOW… I have discovered a VBLOG. that I can recognize as the way I write. I’m 75, and have written many of these stories over my life. Always ending up filing them in a drawer… only to throw them away later. My sister read one and then a few others. She then said my pieces were much Sauk Silverstein, Whom I had no clue about. Six months later, I read through some of his work and felt the similarity. I would love to have some critique of these writings. However I have no clue on how to go about submitting them. I will listen, and take notes and try to figure this out. Thank you. Dan

[@hifiunicorn]

I'm a little lost and confused because this piece feels a bit clumky. I'm not an expert at rhyming by any means, but I don't understand how this works. What would u recommend for an entry level way to learn rhyming basics? Thanks!

[@LyricalLanguageLab]

Have you watched my meter tutorials for iambic, anapestic, and trochaic meter? I break it down to the basics in those. Click on Playlists to find the Meter & Rhyme in Poetry playlist. Other resources: See if you can find this out-of-print book in your library: Poem-Making by Myra Cohn Livingston. If not, get Writing Picture Books by Ann Whitford Paul. Both books explain the basics of meter and rhyme. Or you can take my self-study course: Lyrical Language Lab Rhyme & Meter Crash Course (self-study). Hope that helps!

[@hifiunicorn]

@@LyricalLanguageLab thank u so much! I will start there ☺️