The Best Personal Statements Begin with These 2 Sentences (Oxbridge Examples)

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2 simple but powerful sentences to start your personal statement. This style of introduction is what I’ve seen across personal statements from students who’ve gotten into both Oxbridge and other top ranking medical schools. Use these to inspire your own introduction! #examplepersonalstatements #howtostartyourpersonalstatement #ucas2020 #medicine #cambridge #oxford
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For a lot of us, the personal statement is often the most important thing that we'll ever write. It's the thing that'll determine the next 4-6 years of our lives. So it's easy to see the importance of making sure it's the best it can be. And that's exactly what I'm going to be helping you with.
In the first few lessons, we're first going to be looking at the expertly designed 8 pillar framework based on personal statements of students who were accepted into Oxbridge and other top ranking universities. These 8 pillars will form the basis of you thought process and help you decide what to include in the personal statement.
We're going to spend some time learning how best to reflect on experiences in ways that show the reader that you are someone who is capable of extracting lessons and developing for the better as a result of it.
We're going to learn about strategies like the personality pillar and writing style to help your personal statement stand out and shine.
Importantly, we're going to be linking all this theory to carefully analysed real life examples from past successful personal statements.
Then once we've decided what to include, we're going to go through the structure.
We're going to be looking at proven syntax and paragraph formulas that will ensure that every sentence you write has a purpose.
We'll also be learning how to structure the overall personal statement so that it flows beautifully and tells a story.
We'll also learn new strategies for cutting down your personal statement to fit the character count and how you can maximise what you say in the fewest words possible.
One of the biggest strengths of this video course, is that we provide several example personal statements each carefully broken down and analysed. And as each has come from students, now doctors, who have been accepted into Oxbridge and other top ranking unis, you can be confident that everything you learn has been tried, tested and shown to work every time.
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[@olusolaogunrinde3235]

I am presently drafting my personal statement for a postgraduate degree course, very helpful information throughout!!! Thank you very much.

[@aliyajulia5104]

This video and your content in general has helped me so much during this stressful time of writing my own personal statement! Thank you so much, keep it up Doctor Shaene

[@DoctorShaene]

You're so welcome!

[@vidyarthtiwari1367]

I've been writing my ps now and ur videos are a blessing in disguise

[@AbosedeTowoju]

Waoh!!! Waoh!!! Writing a personal statement for Human Resources Management and this guidelines really are helpful. Thank you ❤️

[@devyanwar7465]

You have incredible content! It inspire me and if I successfully getting LoA, it is because of you. I will work hard for it and I will tell you once I did it 💪💪

[@yusuf.5680]

rewatched this at minimum 10 times and i'm not even writing a medicine personal statement (yet included a medical work experience in my statement loool)

[@DoctorShaene]

haha thanks 🙏

[@angiesplash20]

currently watching and writing my personal statement. Helpful infomations

[@rahmahmohamed1598]

The quality just keeps getting better!!! Great tips and editing👌🏽

[@DoctorShaene]

Thanks so much 🙌

[@theprofessor103]

For applicants in 2022, we do not have the abundance and variety of work experiences that previous medical students may have possessed. Virtual work experiences, online courses are at least what we have, so how do we incorporate it in a way that still gives the message that we have learnt something valuable from it (like a real experience)?

[@WriteYourAcceptance]

This is definitely an issue for this cycle’s applicants and you’ll have a COVID box to explain your challenges probably like last year. The DO app has it alt least for sure this cycle. For the ps I would definitely still Showcase foundational/ formative moments that offered you varied lessons along the way so not quantity there as much as quality. Good luck!

[@romeoalaric4946]

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[@avagrace747]

@@romeoalaric4946 You can log in through your fb account. Hope this helps.

[@ayahere5105]

very helpful and clear thank you very much

[@meharabchoudhury38]

Editing on point with this one!

[@DoctorShaene]

Thanks bro 🙌

[@Krisharma_0306]

VERY HELPFUL VIDEO!!! Thanks a lot :)

[@stardreamix786]

Thank you very very much!

[@abigailtrejo7255]

Brilliant !

[@edwardperez7124]

Is it cool if I use the joke about starting with “ever since I’ve been a child”

[@DoctorShaene]

BOLD but tbh I'd try to keep it a bit more pro than a bit too jokey if ygm

[@mistermandem5530]

Maybe if your applying for clown school

[@zariaf-b7423]

@@mistermandem5530HELP

[@AL-jt6hv]

I think your beggining is more natural and has more appealing to someone reading it.Ghis guy academic and boring statement will not get a pass.Be yourself and be natural.Copying some academics models is a no no for me.start with your sentence.

[@martas3144]

Introduction 1 motivation 2 engagement

[@user-we5pk8eg7c]

I'm going to apply this year ❤

[@millygibson9950]

Hi, great video thank you. Do you have any tips for including a bit about the gap year (what i plan to do as its only just started lol) :)

[@Kc-gu5er]

Thanks bro this helped a lot.

[@DoctorShaene]

Gotchu 💕

Thank you

[@ailsacameron6116]

hi, how would you get around adapting work experience/engagement paragraph for non-clinical experiences (i.e.online)? I'm struggling to phrase my engagement in such a way that allows for things you would usually learn on a work experience placement!

[@ailsacameron6116]

also (sorry!!), how would you go about including engagement within times of covid-19, or the topic in general, as I don't want to exclude it nor waste space on mentioning something worthless either!

[@liveloveleh]

how do i write one personal statement for two courses if I chose two different courses in my application? I chose business administration as my first priority and I chose global studies as my second priority.

[@khushiirastogi]

hey thanks a lot of this video , its quite helpful but what if I don't have any work experience or volunteering related to my field?

[@megabuzz3621]

What would you say the personal statement should be structured? So a paragraph for intro, motivation, engagement and suitability aswell as showing passion throughout?

[@DoctorShaene]

Checkout the previous video!

[@cloudythinker8794]

Can u do a sop for mba students or marketing based courses

[@-jaan6943]

I am using tips from your videos for my personal statement, even tho im year 11 going to sixth form, it still helps.

[@DoctorShaene]

Best of luck for the future!

[@-jaan6943]

@@DoctorShaene thx

[@JimingotnoJAMS]

I want to study accounting and finance but didn't had this sub in my A'levels how should I write it?

[@parziva163]

Hi, I would like to know , if you've chosen two different courses (computer science and electronic engineering). How would you go about blending your personal statement and talking about each one? PS: Thank you for this video

[@DML686]

I have a similar question. I just finish my first degree in electrical engineering and I'm now planning to study computer science. Any advice on how to approach my introduction? Thanks for your videos!

[@mbalingcobo5795]

@@DML686 hii mind me asking how electrical engineering is, what does it mostly consist of? Is it nice

[@yasiiic7890]

Greatttt

[@toriesout8692]

Great video. 3:08 Not sure about this example as it is missing punctuation. If you run out of breath, the sentence is too long.

[@Imhawas]

i was about to start mine with ever since i was a child The way you started made me feel guilty😂

[@Bridgetugochi]

Just Incase the school didn't state the number of words for personal statement ,what should then be the word limit?

[@verneylmavt]

Hey bro, I want to make a personal statement as an undergraduate student. What aspect should I insert to replace the work experience?

[@jacobkenney5646]

maybe part time work ?

[@falconetichd4652]

Do you have tips for what to change for a secondary boarding school application personal statement?

[@DoctorShaene]

Honestly, the core components are all the same!

[@leeHilary-fs7dd]

great

[@sandraachaia9585]

Hi bro, this is Sandra from Egypt. I am writing my personal statement to apply for masters program in economic development in the UK. Would really appreciate it if you could read my personal statement. Let me know if I can send it to you. Cheers

[@dreamers...1705]

Will you check my personal statement..i have written it for a program??how I send u

[@gghgg1000]

can someone help me re-estate the first sentence but for computer since field instead of Medicine?

[@DoctorShaene]

replace medical stuff with computer stuff!

[@noemiolti3621]

@@DoctorShaene would that be enough for it to not count as plagiarism?

[@sharanjitkaur3206]

I have written my personal statement but I need someone who has done medicine to check it? No one in my school has gone to medicine so I don’t know what to do

[@bagelho1e205]

Does this apply to masters applications as well?

[@WriteYourAcceptance]

If you don’t have like a why us essay for them, I would consider ending with how you see yourself fitting at that program. Be specific about their resources, a class even a research initiative you could see yourself in or something you’d focus on. Good luck!

[@jt4225]

What could i write in the engagement section if I havent done work experience?

[@juansebastianperilla1819]

Man, this is the ENORMOUS issue that I've come across at the moment to write this statement, and It makes me upset not having all those experiences and learnings that they all have :''''(, Do not know what to do

[@juansebastianperilla1819]

@Faith Hill Yes man, I have thought about it, but I don't know how to related to those academics subjects. I mean, I don't know how "being in a group of music" "being on a band" or "playing volleyball" will help me to show how I am looking forward to entering into the pharmaceutical faculty of some university. HAHA any piece of advice :D? thanks

[@guganesan.ilavarasan]

@Faith Hill LOL same here mate, writing an SOP to Oxbridge, and still don't know what to fill up in the work experience section.

[@meda04]

I’m so scared because I didn’t have much work experience except online because of covid :/

[@christophwaltz4793]

Uh lucky I literally have no work experience not even online

[@haydenforbes2966]

Could you please make a video on making a personal statement for a levels (for medicine subjects)

[@DoctorShaene]

Not sure what you mean?

[@haydenforbes2966]

Doctor Shaene Like a video for GCSE students on a good personal statement/CV for trying to get into a good sixth form to study medicine based lessons; I am trying to get into Hills Road in Cambridge.

[@DoctorShaene]

Ah I see - Yh absolutely all the principles that work for uni personal Statements will work for anything, I recommend checking out the Skillshare class when it’s out 🙌

[@haydenforbes2966]

Doctor Shaene Okay thank you will do - once I have completed it would it be okay to send it to you for just some feedback? This will probably be a while away but it would be helpful.

[@DoctorShaene]

Sure email me [e-mail]

[@ganeshmistry4458]

How would you advise getting medical work experience in lock down. I've already done the virtual work experience but I'm looking for more hands on work experience in a hospital or care home. How would you advise I go about this in these circumstances?

[@DoctorShaene]

Hmm no way currently I know off. The best options are the virtual experiences and joining these: 1. BSMS Virtual work Experience - Brighton and Sussex medical school has put together an incredible online package giving to an insight into the NHS which walks you through different medical specialities. 2. Observe GP - interactive video platform has been put together by the Royal College of GPs designed to give medical school applicants an insight into General Practice and primary care. 3. The NHS Explained Online Course - a free 8 hour online course by the King’s Fund giving you an insight into the structure of the NHS and challenges of working in the NHS. 1.Re-engage - a charity looking for volunteers to join their call companion service to provide some friendship to lonely and isolated older people 2.Covid-19 Mutual Aid - a service connecting people in the local area to help others who are more vulnerable or self-isolating. 3.The Sliver Line - a confidential helpline that provides advice, friendship and information to older people. They currently have an emergency appeal for volunteers. 4.Age UK - lots of different opportunities to volunteer to become a digital buddy, a campaigner or fundraiser for the Age UK charity.

[@ganeshmistry4458]

Woah this is the best - I'm telling my whole school about you now!!!!

[@DoctorShaene]

Haha legend 🙏🏽🙌 Best of luck!

[@TheIpswichResilienceCenter]

I need some help with my personal statement, help somebody anybody or just a body lol.seriously help please

[@LilKenuthia]

im 14 and i have to write a personal statement for a school for some reason i literally have no idea where to start i dont know how much to include the instructions they gave me are so vague can anyone help???

[@haneopi]

tbh 14 is a bit young to be writing a personal statement, is this for an assignment or do you need it to apply for a certain secondary level institution?

[@LilKenuthia]

@@haneopi yea, i needed it to apply for a secondary level instituation, exactly. but it's alright i've already done it 👍. thank you though

[@bulinda767]

How can I contact you through the social media.?

[@gordonbrown1773]

I have submitted my personal statement, and I just watched this video and realised I did this lol.

[@shanna853]

Please keep us updated!

[@gordonbrown1773]

@@shanna853 I got accepted into University of Stirling (last choice) and now waiting on Warwick, Exeter, Sheffield and RHUL. My course is PPE.

[@gordonbrown1773]

@@shanna853 Got accepted everywhere I applied except Warwick, still waiting on them!

[@shanna853]

@@gordonbrown1773 Wow, good for you? Did you also have an interview? If so, how did it go?

[@gordonbrown1773]

@@shanna853 no interview

[@wowo1005]

4:17 wouldnt the place you are applying to already know this information?? How would you saying this make you different to anybody else?

[@performslive]

Great tips but I think this approach is a little reductive. The statements you highlight do indeed show motivation and engagement, but additionally relay emotional intelligence, empathy and get-go to do something original. If you're going to be accepting students for medicine, you want them to talk about more than just what they themselves get out of it. You want them to show that they are interested in other people - what they want to contribute - and the statements you highlight show this very ably.

[@nawalbabar4492]

Can you please review my personal statement?

[@muhammadabdullah7556]

Can I use acronyms or abbreviations in my personal statement?

[@mywaterfountain]

Avoid if possible

[@user-lb6nh7or4r]

I was thinking that my personal statement is great since I watched this video; now my personal statement looks like trash

[@DoctorShaene]

Still time to make it even better!!

[@tfg_fareed8660]

What type of doctor are u

[@DoctorShaene]

Medical junior doc

[@tfg_fareed8660]

Thanks

[@manz007]

Kya hal hen bhai

[@sutharshinithileepan1032]

Do you check personal statements ?

[@DoctorShaene]

Send it to me [e-mail] and I’ll have a look when I get the time 😊

[@ganeshmistry4458]

are you from leicester?

[@ganeshmistry4458]

i subbed

[@DoctorShaene]

Derby haha

[@m.adhiyaksaaryawisesa2491]

nice kitchen

[@bvincesf]

wonderful structure. no soul. robotic and antiseptic.

[@Miquelalalaa]

Fuck I said “as a child”

[@tfg_fareed8660]

Yo

[@DoctorShaene]

wag1

[@1981Anood]

Thank you. You need to articulate more clearly and slow the speed of talk.

[@JB-tj7er]

What if I have no experience?😂

[@dancingnachos3634]

He is the guy the example every parent gives while torturing their kids😅 just kidding. Great work