Writing a PIRATE SLASHER MOVIE in 48 Hours Except it Takes a Week Oops (feat. Turner) | Documentary

TURNER'S SPOTIFY:
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TURNER'S CHANNEL:
/ @turner1
ALL MY STUFF:
linktr.ee/localscriptman
RIDE OR DIE INTEREST FORM:
chng.it/d7xKkdRYNZ
READ THE FIRST DRAFT:
drive.google.com/file/d/1NPIu...
CONTENTS:
0:00 - roight wots all this then?
2:57 - components
11:07 - outline (act I)
22:48 - outline (act II)
26:55 - on stakes
29:22 - outline (act III)
33:21 - execution
34:40 - genre talk
38:28 - the final countdown
41:21 - reflection + outro

[@turnerburton]

🤔

[@scurvy7766]

hi turner

[@turnerburton]

@@scurvy7766 hi scurvy7766

[@hungryforheinz9207]

What the hell man you showed up like under a year ago and then just started making the most engaging and well made content on the platform. Love seeing your stuff.

[@ianbyrne465]

Kinda sad the sludge monster in a mall idea was overlooked. A creature born from forgotten, toxic waste, wreaking havoc on the unsuspecting employees of a dying, empty mall, just as overlooked and ignored as the environmental horror that’s now literally out to get them.

[@localscriptman]

There’s an alternate universe where we do each of the other prompts

[@eggknob]

reminds me of this short horror film called “The Rolling Giant” i highly recommend it

[@ianbyrne465]

@@localscriptman Now that I have your attention, gotta say I'm disappointed your Avatar videos are gone. I can understand choosing to take them down since they dont really fit the theme of the channel, but you made some really good points in them about the writing process and the movies themselves, and I'd love to see them back up somewhere (maybe on the Global channel, idk)

[@godofthecripples1237]

@@localscriptman Have you considered just putting the unlisted videos on a second channel? Maybe one specifically for discussing fiction you have feelings on, so you still can without tying it to you ever-changing advice channel? There's no obligation to make content for it more often than you want to, so it couldn't hurt.

[@Hell_O7]

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[@elk45]

"I don't want healthy people" - Writers and Doctors

[@CatalystOfChaosReal]

exactly, nothing healthy is engaging. love is unhealthy.

[@munashemhungu3219]

I always thought Bonnie was a warning of what happens if you don't let go of the past and if you don't embrace you future, the fate which may or may not awaits the gang of teens. Bonnie is afraid to move on in the same way the gang is afraid to move on. In fact this whole amusement park is seemingly on its last legs and its owners aren't willing to moving on, the theme of the movie is everywhere. I think

[@rajjosenpai]

You do infact...... think.

[@Echo-tl7wh]

Therefore I am

[@CeeJayThe13th]

My brain is going another direction with hedonism and excess just for the sake of it. There's 2 very different movies I can see where one embraces entropy and everything is falling apart because that's the way the universe works and one embraces extremes and that's the way society works v

[@onemoreminute0543]

I just want to say Earlier this year, I was nearly at the point of throwing my writing hopes and dreams in the bin. For almost two years, I'd been struggling to weave together the character ideas I had in my mind into a thematically coherent plot, literally throwing them into any genre I could, hoping something would stick. Nothing did, and I was at a loss with what to do, frustrated that no matter how much time I had to sit down and write, nothing properly stuck. You're writing advice (specifically having characters be a specific perspective on a theme) has single handedly rejuvenated my passion for writing and brought me to a place and progress point I never thought I'd actually reach. Having your channel videos pop into my recommended back in June of this year was like having the stars align in my writing after a literal dark night of the soul lol So er... Thank you!

[@localscriptman]

Whoa I’m so glad to hear that! Good to know my stuff helps, best of luck

[@onemoreminute0543]

@@localscriptman Thanks! 😁 Look forward to seeing what else you talk about down the pipeline!

[@mike_sauce]

The way I feel more hype towards your vids than for most movies I walk into nowadays. Peak youtube.

[@localscriptman]

Thanks dude, I appreciate the support!

[@Bizarro69]

colossal sad.

[@wasthataflute]

The sticky notes segment was like a bath in pure creativity.

[@i_am_a_human5549]

sometimes you just need to remember that only one person wins the oscar for best screenplay so it’s okay to make something fun. thanks for inspiring me to make something a little stupid that actually makes me happy to write ☺️😘

[@localscriptman]

Also Oscars whack as hell anyway

[@i_am_a_human5549]

don’t think anyone needs this update but i just finished that screenplay in question. :) thanks for the inspiration ❤❤

[@localscriptman]

@@i_am_a_human5549 YES

[@cura_annonae]

“Yeah, but, John, if The Pirates of the Caribbean breaks down, the pirates don't eat the tourists.”

[@localscriptman]

Erm we didn’t think of that

[@cura_annonae]

@@localscriptman lol honestly a great premise still and from what we see here sounds like it’d be fun to watch. Super valuable to see the writers’ process in action like this

[@Zerox_Z21]

If this gets made, this clip needs to be snuck in the background somewhere or some other reference because that's funny as hell.

[@rottensquid]

@@localscriptman The incredible power of the unconscious. That line rattled around in your brain for years, until one day...

[@vicentearnabal]

I like this new type of video because it demonstrates some of the concepts you've talked about in previous videos and goes through the whole process of making a screenplay. It really helps you understand better

[@DTux5249]

Crowbones: "Why is no one having fun? I specifically requested it!"

[@mics361]

What a bait and switch but I’m not even mad. This is the most informative and entertaining video on creative process and story building I have ever seen and I’m a content raccoon that watches everything made on creative process because my brain is all mangled from academic trauma. Not only do I know how to finally build the story I have been stuck with, I want to make a video like this for Visual Development in Animation. You have my deepest respect and a minor crush. Please procreate

[@localscriptman]

I don’t see how it was a bait and switch, but thank you!

[@mics361]

@@localscriptman ah my bad, I completely skipped over the “except it takes a week” in the title You’re good

[@flowerbloom5782]

Yes please do!!

[@e1221]

Please do! I’m working on a visdev project as well and this video has been super helpful in that process

[@paddyq3235]

Babe wake up. New Local video just dropped.

[@triskoto]

I’m sat.

[@MageBurger]

Read this as “local news just dropped” which… close enough.

[@EphemeraEssays]

I think a lot of people (me) feel like every plot beat idea needs to immediately be a genius Oscar winner with six layers of themes It's really refreshing to see you guys come up with something simple off-handedly, say "Oh that's cool, let's throw that in", and only over time see it become something really special

[@thefriendlydefault9684]

One of the few channels I know I will love whatever it puts out; keep up the great work. We are here for it.

[@localscriptman]

Thanks for the support dawg

[@amusedcuriosity3370]

These character dynamics go crazy 10/10 would write melodramatic fanfiction for them. In all seriousness I struggle a lot with the actual EVENTS of a story (themes, check. character arcs, check. specific situations? hard to commit to) and watching you guys puzzle this one out together was really insightful. You guys don't fuck around!!! You throw out ideas until one sticks with no insecure hesitancy and you end up with a really fun, engaging story. I've been binging your videos all day and I feel so seen by/connected to the ideas you're presenting. It's heartening to know that there are so many people with a dedication to good, satisfying, clear-cut storytelling. I'll be looking forward to every new project from you!

[@picklejelly26]

your channel is such a beacon of inspiration to aspiring writers like me man keep up the great work

[@localscriptman]

Thank you!

[@emilyackland2911]

I wish I could watch 30 more videos of this kind of process in action

[@tendyboiz1046]

As someone trying to write something by myself im jealous of how well you work together and bounce off ideas without taking anuthing personal

[@cocoabear_art]

As a horror enthusiast and storyteller, the fun thing about horror is that its not just a bow tie over a bad movie script, but it’s completely dependent on the viewer. A documentary on birds can be just as scary to someone with a bird phobia as “It” might be to a lot of people. In my opinion, the bigger the audience, the better the horror (audience meaning whoever finds the theme/subject scary). For example, “Talk to Me” is so good cuz not only does it have scary demons, but it also shows self degradation, the main character knows what she’s doing is bad, but she does it anyway. Like, i know eating too much sugar is bad but i still eat it. It’s the fear of what happens to her will happen to me (coming from someone who doesn’t get scared easily from horror movies anymore).

[@cocoabear_art]

That’s also why zombies and body horror works so well for most people

[@localscriptman]

⁠@@cocoabear_artYeah I try to never make statements like “WE are afraid of ____” because it feels pretentious, but personally I would say you’re right on the money

[@alexspace9878]

7 minutes in and I can tell this is a banger. Love seeing the localscriptman process come to life. Been applying ideas I learned from this channel into my own work and it’s been really rewarding.

[@doovstoover9703]

Love watching your process man, this was a really enjoyable vid! A couple of ideas, if i may be so bold... 1- Since the movie is called Ride or Die it would make sense that Nat's big internal conflict (that the events of the movie will solve) is whether to stick with her small-town loser boyfriend or take a leap and start a new post-college life without him. So maybe she starts the movie with a job offer in the big city on the table, and is on the cusp of breaking up with Reed, but can't bring herself to do it out of for fear of hurting him, and also out of fear for the future, and so she bottles it and agrees to go to the dumb funfair instead. That way her flaw is responsible for getting her into the whole mess in the first place. It would be a nice mirror of Tim/Cas's relationship too. Like all the characters, Nat needs to learn the courage to make decisions for herself that may be painful in the moment but will ultimately be good for herself and everyone. So maybe you could have Reed's character arc be that he's firmly in denial of the changes that are happening in their lives and wants everything to stay the same, maybe even telling Nat that she's his ride-or-die in an attempt to get her to stay with him, but when it comes to the crunch he learns to let the past go and let Nat go on to live her life and fulfil her potential without him, and he sacrifices himself to Crowbones to save her. And she in turn will learn from this and achieve her potential for the final fight with Crowbones, making a short-term painful decision that has the long-term effect of successfully defeating him. 2- Don't these rides often end with a big drop, like a log flume? Like, a real symbolic 'take the plunge' moment? How about the whole ride's on fire and the rails are collapsing, and she decides to send the cart over the drop with herself and Crowbones in it, killing him but miraculously surviving herself - some kind of 'lucky pack' twist that was set up earlier.

[@godofthecripples1237]

I really wanna thank you for these. I've wanted to break into writing for ages but my ADHD ass could never settle on an idea, sit down, and write. Now I have a rough outline for a novel and I'm working on Act I.

[@unicornofthesun4639]

Was literally scrolling your channel to rewatch a video. Very glad I refreshed the page.

[@localscriptman]

I was waiting for you 😈

[@eternitytech9079]

my (rough) idea for a good prologue could be Bonnie and Corny (or whatever the pirate guy's name was), and someone does something that parralels Nat's conflict, kind of seeing how Nat's death would go if she hadn't evolved, along with setting up a good mentor role for Bonnie. This would then come back around during the mentor scene between Nat and Bonnie, where the viewer would see her referencing the prologue, and we figure it all out while developing Bonnie, Corny and most important Nat, through the parralel given to her in the prologue.

[@mario98730]

This is such a great video showing how the writing process can be so fluid but also with a clear direction. And how great it can be to write with someone else to bounce ideas off of! It's such a stereotype that writing is this solemn lonely process and it was awesome to see you two working so well together. I hope you guys make a sequel documentary that show you guys continuing to workshop this! It really is insane how quickly this has become one of the best channels about writing.

[@elliotcustoms1408]

Bro you’re the only KZbinr I’m actually hyped for when he drops a new video

[@BlartFanExplains]

As someone who is currently attempting to write a rewrite of the Five Nights at Freddy’s movie for my channel, your channel has been an AMAZING learning tool, and this video specifically covered the one thing I was hoping you would touch on at some point: horror. With your tips, I finally feel confident in starting my draft. Cannot wait to read that screenplay draft for Ride of Die, it’ll be cool+I’ll get to see some proper formatting.

[@JoeFermaint]

wow that sticky note method looks fun! totally using it for my next story project

[@MeydeiJss]

If you made this type of content as a series every so often, it would be one, informative and two, entertaining, it would be great, please think about it.

[@browniebear]

27:08 Lucas bursting cliche writers' bubbles with this one and rightfully so!

[@samuraipizzaman]

Something that I feel you may have overlooked was Bonnie's attachment to the theme, as the elderly person, she is the future they could all be frightened of in some manner. Idk just something I thought of when hearing your bit at the end about bonnie being a bit role

[@localscriptman]

True yeah we’re reworking a lot of stuff, and that’s a great idea

[@dsburton]

How did this video only end up with 26k views? This is brilliant, creative and genuine. Loved this don’t be afraid to do more like this in the future, I for one would 100% watch it

[@bannles]

This video gave me exactly the kind of motivation I needed to get my wits together and figure out my story. Watching you two plot out with the sticky notes is exactly the kind of thing me and my best bud do when we’re got an idea to figure out.

[@onemoreminute0543]

This looks like it'll be a fantastic way of seeing all your writing advice in action all at once :D

[@debrachambers1304]

Throughout this, I noticed that you don't actually talk about Nat very much. She's supposed to be the final girl, but I didn't hear almost anything about what her emotional hangups are.

[@elaicatubag8191]

Right?? felt like Tim was the main character and that should be the final man standing

[@bye1551]

This is a trap a lot of horror movies have tbh. The final girl is written to be the final girl at the beginning and making their death tragic isn't a factor... Cause they won't die. Not dying is their whole personality. Personally, I prefer to write all the characters first then randomly select a percentage to survive and then who that percentage is. It makes me need to write all the characters fully as though I needed to get everything about them out before they die and as a result you have to be more efficient with characterisation.

[@kiaranecessary7972]

My headcanon is that the gradually increasing leis are the ghost of Crowbones absorbing you into the jaunty cast of Caribbean pirates

[@zetjet9901]

It’s pretty interesting how Reed and Cornelius kind of parallel each other

[@fakenamebunchonumbers]

This. And I am equally delighted and frustrated by them cutting off their discussion about Bonnie’s character because you know it ended up with her being an older version of Nat. Or, rather, a version of Nat that never took control of her life and never detached herself from Reed.

[@triskoto]

You’re magnetic, bro. Delicious energy 💃💃💃

[@localscriptman]

Thanks dawg 👹

[@hazelthomas1146]

This has quickly become my favorite writing channel on KZbin. I agree thoroughly with the logic-ization of emotional beats and themes and character arcs. Everything can be rationalized, and once you have your roadmap of character motivation you can pretty much wing dialogue and scene structure. My biggest problem now is that I am pretty awful at coming up with characterization/personailties beyond basic disposition and temperament. That's what I'm working on currently.

[@chesspiece4257]

what i do is steal from people i know and characters i like (or who i think are ALMOST THERE). you don’t steal all the character, just the bit that you keep coming back to

[@haxmode6935]

Some glaring problems in this script: 1: You don't have a theme There is no theme that ties this whole story. I know I harp about how characters can carry a story, but this just isn't it. These characters are just not interesting enough to carry a story with such a weak opposing force (story wise). They need more pushing them to create drama. You're on the right track with giving them higher motives than just survive, but you need a bigger push. You need to do more than what you're doing. Have the characters have different wants and push that drama to the max. Have one character want to have everyone else be safe, even at the cost of themselve while another only cares about themself, have a character who doesn't care about self preservation and just wants revenge, ect. Have group conflict be the reason that leads to character death. As is, only Reed dies because of his own character in the script. Anyone else could be the "finnal girl" and nothing really changes. Tldr: character either need their charaterization pushed futher so thier own failure and success comes from them, or remade to fit a theme so the "finnal girl" survives cause she evoled with the theme. 2: Villian is lazy, slasher trash Remeber how you said horror flicks don't get a pass just because they're horror? You did that here with this villain. He's pretty much a force of nature instead of a character. Sure in making the movie he could look really cool or have a really charasmiatic actor and be made into a star, but in writing he sucks. 3: You do not put characters deaths far enough apart Out of the 5 deaths, 2 happen right after another. This leads to it feeling like only 3 deaths scenes happen. You can do this multipal ways, maybe nerf bones so he can only really kill one person at a time. (I had a big theosis about this rule I made called "villain can't squad wipe" but I couldn't for the life of me word it well.) 4: Ending just needs a rework It just sounds unwheleming as hell, not much to say. There isn't character growth, a perticular reason for the girl living besides being lucky, and fuck I can't think of something big enough to go with those 2 to complete rule of three.

[@localscriptman]

You are routinely my biggest hater but thank you for the feedback. I certainly don’t agree with all of it, but this is a first draft so yes there is a lot of room for improvement

[@haxmode6935]

@@localscriptman It's a hard job, but someone has to do it. On the down low tho your channel is amazing, I've sent so many small time story makers to watch it and seen them improve instantly

[@localscriptman]

@@haxmode6935 Whoa that’s awesome, good to hear I’ve had an impact. Thanks again

[@dbrooke3629]

​@localscriptman wow an actual mature response to criticism. Bravo

[@tsunamiscientist568]

"John, as we all know, when Pirates of the Caribbean breaks down, the pirates eat the tourists."

[@Nal-Nation]

John Hammond: All major theme parks have delays. When they opened Disneyland in 1956, nothing worked! Ian Malcolm: Yeah, but, John, if The Pirates of the Caribbean breaks down, the pirates don't eat the tourists. Lucas: Not anymore! Great video! I loved seeing the process!

[@dylaninthemovies]

Reminds me of Dr Malcolm's line in Jurassic Park: "But, John, If The Pirates Of The Caribbean Breaks Down, The Pirates Don't Eat The Tourists."

[@DarkDefender1024]

OMG the Home Depot music during the map sequence killed me.

[@D-Lott]

Congrats on graduating. I really enjoyed this episode. I listened to it podcast style and I personally love the long format. Seeing the process of creating and solving problems. keep up the good work.

[@abdulmalikadeola]

I love the Bonnie realization towards the end. That's awesome.

[@ignaciomendozagonzalez6067]

So cool to see some of the behind the scenes of writing a script and your method for it, also the 40 minutes flew by, very engaging vid man Congrats 👍

[@wabbitseason80085]

If you haven’t already figured out how to do the mentor scene with Nat, maybe make it so she explains to Nat how she just went along with whatever Corny wanted and helped him with everything, in a way facilitating his death. Nat could then use this story to help push herself to make her own decisions instead of just following along, so she doesn’t end up getting herself killed. Just a thought. I might have forgotten Nat’s characterization so sorry if it did.

[@bluescales6454]

My man, you're literally going to drag me through my bachelor in screen arts with this banger content, thank you very much

[@defenestrationstation8051]

this video really reminds me of the podcast Story Break because this is literally what they do, it’s a group of screenwriters and every episode they write a movie outline based on a prompt, they have a couple longer series where they write a full script draft too, and things usually get silly and stupid while retaining some seriousness just like this did :)

[@fizzipop]

I love videos like this, they’ve helped me so much in my filmmaking, and now i’ve got a short going through festivals (even tho they’re small, its a first for me) Keep it up man, there will never be a day i miss a Local upload

[@paddyq3235]

Ok post video comment: I feel like I say this about all of your videos but once again this is such an amazing video. Your style continues to develop and makes for incredibly informational and entertaining content. I've been around since the Avatar video and have watched and rewatched the entirety of your content. (Side note I understand why you chose to delete some of the older videos including the Avatr videos but I miss them) This video really made me wish I didn't already have so many other creative interests cause now I really want to write a movie. But alas I am a music major with far too many creative hobbies already. I am currently working on a short story and as with the rest of your videos I am going to take a step back and see if I can apply some of your processes from this video and your other videos to tighten up my story. Once again, thank you so much for the amazing content and congratulations on your upcoming graduation!! 🎉

[@localscriptman]

Thanks again, good luck on your multidimensional creative grind 😵‍💫

[@visencere]

This is so good! Love how you outline the whole process, start to finish. Would love this to be a reciting format, where you write movies in certain time constraints.

[@Zephirite.]

I feel like the punch of horror comes from its *existential* terror. We’re not scared by death, we’re scared by the annihilation of the self, and that in trying to preserve our selves, our selves doom ourselves. As in, the reason we want to live- to sate our curiosity, bond with people, etc-could be the reason we run back into the fire, and ultimately perish.

[@stephanielecroix8623]

The explanation of the sticky note system was gold. 🤣 I love your work man. Every second was informative but hella entertaining. I genuinely needed this. 🖤

[@aspenroth2748]

This helped me figure out how I want to outline a story i'm working on. I've been struggling for a week or so and your video helped me break down the walls I had been building about actually working on it. I adore your videos dude, they're so well made and interesting

[@iker2333]

I really love your videos, i have listened to your advice on characterization way too many times And now seeing the process, or at least part of it, is just amazing

[@b_a_hockema]

gosh dude, this channel just gives me joy with every video. you break open the box every time with great stuff. makes me thankful for my writer buddies who are also super good at "yes that's good, but why are we doing it this way?"

[@authorbrittanyrosebutler]

This was so creatively encouraging. Thanks for sharing the process!

[@CanyonF]

I also graduate in December, very soon actually. It seems like you have the same disease I do, where you take on huge editing projects during the hardest part of the semester lol. At least i'm an editor and I can psudo-justify it, but you're a madlad. Trust me I understand the pain and accomplishment of chopping the shit out of a project's length (and not being ready to let go of the 8 hour version that you upload unlisted)

[@sethlongoria7526]

Your videos have given me so much to think about when it comes to my writing, thank you.

[@averydee5328]

Found you and I keep rewatching your videos, it was a treat to realize you added new stuff to your older videos.

[@casterknot5094]

Gonna run this idea as a dnd one shot

[@LoSDockForBoats]

I love this so much. For a while now, you have made videos about specific ideas in regards to story creation, which have been absolutely awesome. This channel is a great resource for deep dives into specific ideas. Now, we see a full script creation where those ideas are integrated. It’s awesome! Edit: if this ever makes a fundraiser to produce, I will chip in

[@meximan282]

Congrats on predicting my criticism haha I was going to say I hoped some intuitive esoteric frosting would end up on top of the practical, justified framework. It's probably just for film nerds but sometimes a film that is continuous plot devices begins to wear on you and you crave some curveballs, something you've never quite seen etc Love what you've done so far

[@myntchyp8844]

Really good stuff! I'm in my freshman year of college and looking at the creative process from someone who knows more than me is really insightful! I'm also just really impressed by how quickly you made all of these characters feel like characters and not cardboard cutouts of stereotypes. Keep up the great stuff man :]

[@beans9288]

Would absolutely love to see more of this. Fantastic watching you work in real(ish) time

[@dylanevans9785]

This is such a great video and I love seeing the whole writing process behind something. Would love more behind the scenes content like this.

[@_phantomprincess_7327]

I love this channel so much. My skills have gotten like 10x better from watching your videos and now I’m actually outlining my projects. Thank you so much !!

[@roseville412]

Omg this is about to be the best 45 minutes of my lifeeee i haven't watched a good long vid in a while 😩

[@localscriptman]

Sorry to disappoint it’s horrible 😈

[@gingergilfillan9452]

I loved this type of content! It’s so motivating, I’ve watched it at least 10 times now 😅. I enjoy all your videos but this is my favorite. I hope to see more like this in the future.

[@a.rad_music]

been waiting for you to post forever, love your honesty and insights

[@rapscallion8350]

This was the most entertaining and interesting KZbin video I have watched for months. I would love to see more content like this - the creative process in action!

[@phoeni3902]

I wanna watch that Avatar video :( I know you've mentioned you don't want those videos in circulation, so could you have links to unlisted versions of them in a plsylist as a form of archival or something? Please? Your work is good dude :(

[@zaidlacksalastname4905]

The sticky note song made me cry 😿

[@tylerbradfield9981]

This video is a banger. As an aside, it's been really cool seeing this channel mature and grow. Most obviously in your comfort in front of the camera

[@hayleyhistorynerd2211]

This is great Lucas. I love to see people working together to make something. Stories are my favorite and one of the creations I relate to making the most, so this was a lovely treat. I really like your sticky noting outline process. It pleases the tactile learner in me. Definitely want to try it when I'm in the editing stage of my novel. It was cool to "meet" Turner, you guys make a great creative team. Congratulations on your graduations! That is fantastic. Enjoy some time off! I will totally check out the google doc for Ride or Die, and will give you a big ol' yes please on more Ride or Die content when you're both ready. Hayley ^_^

[@localscriptman]

Hey thanks for the support I’m really proud of this vid

[@demonqueenazazel5352]

The outlining process with the sticky notes was really cool to see. Seeing the theme, all the characters in service of it, and how each of their scenes realized the theme inspired me. I opened a spreadsheet that same night I watched this video. I may not have finished it, but it was the most excited I was to write a new story instead of the “I’ve been thinking about and improving this story for 5 years” story.

[@addman1952]

I usually dont care for slasher films but this prompt & 'execution' (of the plot) is super interesting. Great video as always 👍

[@talbrun]

“Literal witch in a literal bog ” oh you mean a documentary about me?

[@elchiponr1]

elevator movie was already made here in holland, its called "De Lift"

[@MAUD_IFY]

sadistic elevator exists! its an 1980s dutch horror film titles "De Lift"

[@localscriptman]

Omg you are right

[@sabersight908]

this is awesome and so helpful for writing for the first time :P im working on a 1800s cosmic horror show about a archivist who has collect magical items and plans to use them, to make the world realize that magic is real but he keeps getting investigated by a detective that discovers strange mystical murders (who suspects it has somehow to do with the archivist ofc) but i want this to be a good show so i decided to first make a simple short film to dive in the first time writing, because i realized that i just need to make something and change it over and over instead of thinking to hard, it will be about two characters in a post apocalyptic world where the main character has barely any emotions (because he is a genetically engineer born human) and the side character is a very emotional woman, so over time one finds out how to use emotions and the other how to contain them. im quite proud of making this up, i think this is a very good way to train some writing and get a short film going at the same time, this has made me think however about characters and needing a resolve/arc, i will give this short film a resolve for both characters but would you need to give all your characters a resolved ending or would only the MC be enough? PS having found your channel has been a delight you have talked about all the things i strongly agree with or needed and love your voice btw xD

[@intricate__insanity3708]

This is like a podcast and I love it so much💗

[@actualturtle2421]

Bro how do you constantly post pure gold? You deserve every one of your subs. You a real one ong

[@samanthatopia]

I’ve never wanted to make films. I have no interest in script writing. I barely even like watching movies. 10/10 vid.

[@wtfaiwpodcast]

The "sadistic elevator" idea's already been done, twice. First in a Dutch film called The Lift (1983) and then again in the American remake The Shaft (2001), AKA: Down.

[@lucyursa]

YOOO I WAS JUST REWATCHING UR VIDEOS TODAY THIS IS A GIFT 💥💥💥

[@keaton5101]

i havent had much to say in the way of comments on this channel but ive probably watched every video at least twice at this point. the advice really clicks with me even though im mostly interested in video game writing instead of screenplay writing

[@d-maproductions9175]

I don’t know what the prologue ended up looking like but i think if you guys wanted to do more with Bonnie, she could have been one of the people in the prologue and something could happen there that could set up her character for the rest of the story

[@lamp4791]

can we get the sticky note song uploaded by itself

[@NemoNoomin]

this channel is one of the VERY few where I actually hit the bell

[@sno7599]

bro this video is so insightfull and facinating awesome work

[@amabitsapiens]

Excellent video & no small feat to edit this process down to something watchable & digestible. Would have been even better if you'd gone through the kinds of revisions you made in the final passes / finishing touches on the script draft toward the end, but I know how fiddly that can be; would have probably been quite a nightmare to distill down into worthwhile moments. As it stands, I second the other comments which say anything this channel produces is gold. There are no bad videos. Thanks as ever for the quality control; recognizing how much work it must take to consistently crank out this tier of useful, high-impact videos. Signed the petition. Hope the movie gets made & that graduation represents the radiant nascency of grand new undertakings. Knock em dead.

[@ellabrady9504]

I absolutely love what you do. The sticky note song was perfect

[@gavinmoya3398]

I want to watch this movie so much, great video!

[@maxlee2675]

That was very interesting to watch, particulary the outline phase, thank you, of course I`m gonna sighn the petition

[@AndrewWilson-ol6jb]

Love the video, and you should either separate the section where you explain the sticky note outline or make a full video on outlining in addition to your video about theme.