Morty's screenplay criticism | Rick and Morty | Adult Swim

[@Kira1Lawliet]

The only thing worse than a writer who can't accept criticism, is a writer who can't accept criticism but begs people to criticize them anyway.

[@tailuigi]

I.e. "Tell me how flawless and beyond criticism it is!"

[@DrunkenCoward1]

“Get out!“

[@hadbetterdays8118]

He needs to build tough skin if there is no tough skin than there is no success

[@zibusisonkomo8715]

Cough Rian Johnson cough

[@Hypercube1729]

Right?! It's the same with people in general, most often women. They ask questions they don't wanna hear the honest answers to.

[@karga23]

After saying "The End", he adds "question mark". As if he's already working on a sequel... That alone was enough reason to kill him...

[@trainofaaron]

kaytagi get out.

[@Wtahc]

kaytagi comment this some more times please

[@crispyjuice2110]

Nah the adding of the question mark to "The End ... ?" is NOT to say he's working on a sequel. He certainly could have been, but that's not what the was going for with the addition of the question mark. Adding a question mark to "The End" or adding "The end... OR IS IT?" or any other variation you see in stories is the writer using a cheap, lazy, and amateurish way to try an add the suggestion of a twist ending, or a shock/surprise taking place after the ending. The problem is that using this device is lazy, cliched, and pointless. If there is more to the story, just say so. You could add a question mark to the end of EVERY book, movie, TV show finale, etc, and it wouldn't change anything at all. It's a weak, cheap, lame, and honestly cringe-inducing way to try and add melodrama to your stories ending. The old man was a bad writer, on top of being a dick.

[@MayaMaya-si3nw]

@@crispyjuice2110 get out

[@hollywoodshopaholic]

kaytagi Hahaha I’m rolling

[@juanjuri6127]

lmao I love how Morty doesn't recoil in horror at what he's done right away, he just needs to lay that sick burn before he's done

[@Tigerman1138]

Juan Juri He is purgin’!

[@justADeni]

@@Tigerman1138 on this planet? more like purrr-ging i couldn't resist the pun, sorry. i am leaving now

[@urbyn6466]

Congrats boyo im ur 1000th sub

[@mr.intruder1536]

@@justADeni "Get out"

[@killinghawkz]

@@PeruvianPotato dayum hahahaha

[@danshakulawrence983]

This unnamed character is inspiring, because he is the best example of how not to be a writer.

[@Outlaw7263]

Ayn Rand, nuff said

[@mikemarauder9256]

Agree

[@gonegirl000]

true!!

[@wpown7564]

To be fair he was actually right about his criticism of Morty, ironically.

[@kakapofan6542]

@@wpown7564 how?

[@CountCocofang]

1:55 I love this script dialogue. It's the epitome of pretentious writers thinking they are being extraordinarily clever but they just end up writing nonsensical garbage that is so stilted that it utterly ruins any immersion or even sympathy for the characters because no real human talks like that.

[@tinman96]

My problem with Sorkin right there

[@bobbyhill4118]

What he did there was a very boring way of introducing the character’s love for one other. If it’s a fictitious tale why not give some sort of scenario that introduces the love in a way that can actually interest a reader? Why is there a need for their love? It sounds like the introduction to a boring porn film made in the 1970’s once they get to the “she’s a woman he’s a man it’s clear one has what the other needs” part.

[@antibull4869]

Meh. It makes good movie material, but its been done so many times its overdone at this point. Mildly expected.

[@thiagodeandrade7081]

The diferença, I think, and, I might be wrong, is that Sorkin's characters are (or are trying to be/seem) with. Most of them are not normal people in a normal time of there lives. They are usually people who are expected to be clever or try to be (politicians, pundits, jornalists, lawyers, etc.) duscussing público matters, fighting for a cause, facing a big suite, etc. Their witty or pseudo-witty is to be expected. It is about people who behave like show characters because their lives are or became a kind of show, a part of the 24-hour news cycle line-up.

[@alanbareiro6806]

@@thiagodeandrade7081 Not sure if I gained or lost braincells reading that.

[@ARG7856]

"You like that? You want me to cut to 3 weeks earlier, when you were alive?" is my favorite Morty line tbh 😂😂

[@pplayer666]

pure gold! =)

[@guineandstitch]

XD My favorite, too!

[@77mpickett]

reneanduray wow I went into the comments to quote that line also ur right that was the best Morty line ever

[@catsaregreat79]

totally agree

[@Aenygma_]

A pissed-off Morty is way more intense than any Rick hahahaha

[@spodybanjack8800]

The second you hear 'hot, but doesn't know it', you know it's gonna be bad

[@chatty_writer666]

Reminds me of my college creative writing courses. Right up there with this gem, "I don't read the works of others because I wanna be original."

[@andrewscott7728]

It took humanity thousands of years to go from writing to creating the concept of a "novel." If a writer isn't willing to read the works of others then they are doomed to a few million years of crap writing before they get up to Don Quixote. And that's if they're really good.

[@otaku3OBSESSION]

“Is gifted with mysterious powers far beyond anyone else, and can use them perfectly with no training, and has no moral dilemma on how or when to use them, and is practically perfect in everyway- their only flaw? Being horribly naive and childlike, unaware of wants of the flesh, and chaste to the point of stupidity”.

[@sernoddicusthegallant6986]

@@otaku3OBSESSION Well that worked really well with Daenerys in SoIaF (Not D&D's fanfic though)

[@homer_thompson5090]

I know it's going to be written by a bad writer who doesn't know it

[@ravelrm]

"You're a petty person, you're insecure and you're taking it out on me." Gold

[@hollywoodshopaholic]

Ravel Ramirez Classic case of projection

[@uniquechannelnames]

He might as well have pulled out a projector at that point lol. So good but insanely frustrating irl too

[@maxichristl3187]

Accusing him of being what he is Haha

[@BobPantsSpongeSquare97]

No joke one time I met some dude and became friends with him and found out later that he was gay which I didnt mind. But he would make weird flirty comments and when i said that i was his friend but wasnt gay he literally said the same thing as this cat person lmao

[@MrShabindigo]

Not AT ALL realizing the irony in what he said

[@hope.1503]

Interesting detail- at 3:20 you can see the lighthouse light is using a Lens Rotation method that requires a mercury bath as seen by the float and basin. A lot of lighthouse keepers went mad due to mercury poisoning as it was not known that it had so many adverse health affects.

[@CatchTheMarmosets]

Nerd

[@theveryhateableowl1991]

Nerd

[@A-Warthog-cc1wm]

makes sense, only someone that has gone fucking insane would come up with a story so bland and unrealistic as well as not take criticism to kindly

[@TheDragonMasterChannel]

I think that's a pretty cool detail :D

[@CatchTheMarmosets]

@@Alias79555 clearly, after all you are smart enough to hear letters as how else would you hear me speak?

[@BrandonKShorties]

“Whoa! Morty, we’re guests here...” Rick being uncharacteristically reasonable

[@trequor]

Rick seems to have some kind of morality around people's homes. It's a primal kind of morality. He puts up with Jerry because he is a guest in Jerry's home

[@thearchitectofthehounds9815]

@@trequor Technically, it was his house first. He and Beth's mom lived there.

[@cyantile5490]

@@thearchitectofthehounds9815 Which I guess is one reason why Rick treats Jerry like shit but still doesn't outright kill him or something

[@TotalGAMIX]

@@trequor im too high

[@matthewriley7826]

Meanwhile the lighthouse owner/piss poor screenplay writer was being totally unreasonable lol

[@raminybhatti5740]

I lost it at, "Hot but doesn't know it."

[@ncorva]

Hahaha me too. And when he says "You're a petty person and you're insecure and you're taking out on me. That was a good script!"

[@samfilmkid]

Another cliche would be "She's broken but beautiful."

[@neomcdoom]

ncorva No he says "that's a good script" as in that's a good idea for a script.

[@Wi11zyx]

Lost it at "tittle. 3 weeks earlier"

[@chatty_writer666]

It's either looks or serial killer tendencies..... Aww writing courses in college

[@Kjobbit]

Blaine: Maybe I don't need a new friend. Jasey: Maybe you're the only friend I need. Blaine: Need, or want? Jasey: Never been much for wanting. Blaine: Spoken like someone with needs...

[@jonathank9648]

oh geez......

[@Tabbimura]

Worst part of every bad movie.

[@keownthomas9090]

I mentally cringed

[@johnhein2539]

It works better as reading instead of being spoken aloud. I suppose that’s the joke but you writing it down helped me process the second joke, it’s bad either way you process it.

[@FangOfDrknss]

Rename Blaine as Jasey and have her look in a mirror.

[@joshjones9749]

Morty got some of the funniest lines in this episode. Between this whole scene and his "holy shit dad shut the f**k up!" I was floored.

[@titsarmageddon]

"oh geeze"

[@haileybrown871]

Josh Jones agreed XD

[@WaterParkGuy]

Josh Jones Or, "Screw you you, *RICKETY* piece of crap!"

[@tylerrenfroe6059]

"I DON'T HAVE ANY!" "Spoken like a person with repressed rage"

[@conntoons_4848]

Josh Jones Jerry: Okay! I guess I’m just this entire family’s toilet paper

[@Tigerman1138]

I like Morty’s realization that the “tale” is not in fact a tale, but movie script!!! 00:55

[@charlieniven6558]

O shit

[@hugoxo3546]

😩

[@Hexsmasher2099]

Oh shit

[@BellNova]

I’m confused

[@BellNova]

@Meaning What so was it that it was made terrible enough for Morty to not like it or was it the narrative?

[@7eunice7]

"you're a petty person, you're insecure" oh the irony

[@SubSimpich]

This guy is just the worst. He gives them a deal, they follow up on the deal inherently, he asks morty for constructive criticism, morty gives him it in the most polite way possible, then he gets salty and tells him to get out, even judging him as a person simply for giving him what he asked for.

[@JackTheripper911]

@@luke.p1535 We got an edgy 8 year old here folks. Everyone look the edgy 8 year old is trying hard..

[@luke.p1535]

Yeah not quite. Was just making a douchey comment for a laugh there bud. So stop taking yourself so seriously and trying to be the 'edgy police'. You look ridiculous.

[@luke.p1535]

Nah, I just have more important things to do than check this account lol. Looks like I really wound you up ;)

[@luke.p1535]

“Incredibly jubilant” - that’s cringe dude, please tell me you said it ironically 😂

[@luke.p1535]

I don’t know what it means man! I guess you’re just too smart for me 😅

[@Lehtolaproductions]

"You want me to cut to three weeks earlier!? When you were alive!?" Best quote of the episode IMO

[@zahar027]

@@1SKB it's "were alive" watch it again

[@RRRRRRRRR33]

One of the best quotes of the entire series, lol this is the best Morty moment. Fuck you, fuck nature, fuck trees is the close second.

[@spaghettifries5204]

Made it 666

[@QuanBrown27]

Lmfao

[@cianfarrell9992]

" I masturbated to an extra curvy piece of driftwood" is another favourite of mine lol

[@Laserbeak316]

Morty: You like that? You want me to cut to 3 weeks earlier, when you were alive? XD

[@JessArtStar]

That was savage lmfao 😂😂

[@colinjames5407]

savage af!

[@victoriatube159]

Laserbeak316 omg yah i fucking jate that shit its a cheep tactic to hook viewrs in to two hours of bs with 30 seconds of actually entertaining shit

[@Rucker1980]

Laserbeak316 i completely lost it at that point

[@nitrostorm470]

Yazomighty with a hat A freaking monster killing an old man

[@ChickenBond2]

"You're unemployed and bored." "Stop saying I'm unemployed!" That really hits home in 2020.

[@vishnuprasad2884]

How are you doing now man? All good?

[@DeltaDanner]

@@vishnuprasad2884I’m still in my house. Did we get the go ahead to leave yet?

[@Lepidopray]

His broken, lifeless body lay at the bottom of the staircase. _title: 30 Seconds Earlier_ "You don't have to molly coddle me..."

[@australium7374]

_Later, he was pushed down the stairs of the light house and killed, with the perpetrator exclaiming “you want me to go back 3 weeks earlier to when you were alive”, clearly talking about the abhorrent writing._

[@gonegirl000]

"He's an asshole, but doesn't know it"

[@jessediaz9724]

@@australium7374 Yeah you ruined it

[@bat6684]

@@jessediaz9724 eh, it isn’t bad

[@amandal1488]

Damn underrated comment lmao

[@Bensen669]

I like to imagine that even though there are "an infinite number of realities" that in every single possible version of this encounter there was just nothing Morty could have said or done that would have ultimately resulted in a different outcome. Like, imagine that this scene is groundhog's day. Morty could repeat this moment over and over again but no matter how he tries to go about complimenting, criticizing, insulting, ect this fucking guy would have taken it the wrong way and freaked the fuck out.

[@mercurial2194]

Bensen669 Especially when Morty doesn't think a nonlinear narrative in this story is a good approach and this writer had to be hypersensitive about his work. Each and almost every single one of us can grasp that perfection is not an objectively feasible concept - it focuses on how we interpret and apply our perspectives in almost every prospect mankind is dealing with. In fact, none of us should take criticism this way partly because he made the error of judgement on his work in progress. I understood that he wrote an entire draft for his screenplay but we all could listen to some words and watch Morty struggling to enjoy the draft itself. It's only funny because this is akin to how others handle criticism improperly; especially at a very time where a planet starts purging itself from within. Not to mention the fact that the writer's more concerned about criticism of his own work than his own survival - followed by his lack of grasping change like almost everyone else on that planet.

[@insertcoolnamelater9334]

Maybe in some dimensions Morty laughed at the bar scene and everything was fine.

[@someone-tg2dc]

shiiit this is some rick and morty fanbase thing

[@wesleywallace4426]

W. L. Then he would just complain that his laughter wasn't sincere. Some people just can't take criticism even when they asked for it.

[@BiggestAzzHoleEver]

@@wesleywallace4426 5 months late but... I don't know, laughing seems like he more genuinely enjoyed then just a 'good' though he could somehow got pissed away assuming Morty can do a genuine sounding non sarcastic laugh

[@Yoxiv]

Sad thing is, a lot of people are like that on places like Deviantart and various fanfiction sites; so unused to even the slightest bit of criticism that they'll snap even after directly requesting some commentary.

[@Matthimeo]

Darkman9000 IT'S PART OF MY STYLE!

[@EmptyMan000]

Hmph. They're all full of crap crying for constructive criticism when really they just want people to kiss their ass and those that have a problem with what they helped make or what they like just get labeled as "haters". Artists. If it wasn't for the fact they can produce entertaining stuff, I'd hate them all.

[@srbrant5391]

Unbelievable.

[@lambmaster27]

Wait people actually are like this?

[@chatty_writer666]

There's a difference between critisisim and constructive criticism. I enjoy the later, as it provides a challenge. But if all you're gonna tell me is that it sucked, I will destroy you.

[@mrcritical6751]

This guy is the cat representation of Amy of Amy's Baking Company off kitchen nightmares a crazy person who can't take criticism to save their life

[@robwatkins6218]

thank you for that reference

[@supernerd5781]

Sounds like Amy Juergens to me. (if you don't get the reference good for you don't waste your life with secret life of the American teenager.)

[@lmd2550]

Can we cut back to 1 year ago, when they were open?

[@TheSeaofScience]

oh my god, yes

[@zodiacleo11212]

Mr Critical wow that's a GREAT reference lol

[@FiddlinWithYourCerebellum]

The “were you expecting to weep with joy? It’s terrible!” Gets me every time.

[@princekyle4132]

As an aspiring writer, I can tell you with absolute certainty that reading a script is *BORING*. You're not supposed to read it, you're supposed to see it. If it was meant to be read, make it a novel. Some stories need to be visualized. Others don't.

[@alexanderthegreat1270]

Yeah... but think about the practicality of that. A screenplay, in essence, is a shooting document, how to shoot this movie that's been written. However, are you seriously expecting screenwriters to write a first draft, then make that into a full length feature movie for millions of dollars and then show it to people to get feedback?

[@norbertsreignofterror9418]

A screenplay absolutely needs to get read, why do you think table reads are a thing?

[@henrynelson9301]

How do you think movies get pitched

[@theorangeoof926]

Yup, a script is just a few boring pieces of paper with organised ink blobs until some voice actors (or more) can breathe some life into it, giving it a whole another layer where it was meant to be enjoyed.

[@aubreypressley1450]

I mean screenplays aren't books but they should still be interesting to read. People still have to actually read them before making them. If the screenplay doesn't properly layout a good idea then it's worthless. It is not just a shooting document, it's a story with characters, structure, dialogue, and sometimes the entire aesthetic the movie might rest on.

[@hiphopotamus69]

When he was telling his tale I bet you envisioned the characters in the story as humans despite the fact that he is a cat-person and doesn't know life outside his planet exists so those characters in the story must also be cat-people

[@konamoo]

Hiphopotomus or... you know... we didn’t imagine anything

[@TheGreenTaco999]

I did try, but i couldn't invision any human delivering such terrible lines, so i ended up imagining multiples of the same cat person,

[@ajaxjs]

That's because he was referencing infamous screenplay mistakes, which have turned up countless times in pop culture. No doubt everyone has dozens of bad movies lurking in their subconscious to fill in the imagery.

[@robinvik1]

I bet you thought this screenplay was bad, but considering the technology of his civilization this is probably one of the first movies ever written. The fact the he uses modern story telling devices such as non-linear story telling will probably make his movie a classic on his planet for all time.

[@AngryGeekling]

I couldn’t imagine much since it was a shit script. That was the point though.

[@inuyashasmells]

morty is right, I hate it when stories start JUST WHEN, the whole series gets interesting

[@briankentpirrie5228]

+inuyashasmells this his screenplay get turn into a movie?

[@inuyashasmells]

Brian Kent Pirrie I hope not it sounded boring

[@MrLethalShots]

I don't understand why that's bad? Isn't that why you read a story, because it's interesting?

[@KarstenOkk]

In medias res is the cancer of screenwriting and it needs to die.

[@jarv7441]

Yeah one of the only people who has done it right is Quentin Tarantino, otherwise it's usually just there to make up for a boring and lazily written start.

[@craxnor]

Criticism and praise are something many writers and artist need to know the difference of.

[@AD-wg8ik]

What

[@craxnor]

Xen dude asked for criticism when he wanted morty to just praise his writing.

[@Dave.Mustaine.Is.Genius]

@@craxnor criticism can be positive

[@timberd1513]

@@Dave.Mustaine.Is.Genius He was giving constructive criticism until the guy was being a prick

[@metalspinda9594]

@@Dave.Mustaine.Is.Genius *When MERRITTED! That's how a critique works.

[@DorkJedi96]

"If we're gonna survive tonight, you need to harness some of your repressed rage." "I don't have any!" "Spoken like a person with repressed rage." Gotta love Rick xD

[@michaelcolfin8464]

Morty did eat the candy bar during this scene.

[@WatekFox]

"I feel like, you know, we should start our stories where they begin, not start them when they get interesting." That's words of wisdom, guys. The kind of words so many screenwriters should live by.

[@Ben-rz9cf]

Starting in medias res is not a bad technique he just did it terribly

[@hubguy]

It can work but you have to already be great at telling it in chronological order to be good at telling it out of order

[@katamas832]

It's not an inherently bad way of telling a story, this way you can hook a viewer/reader very easily as they want to find out how the situation came to be. I remember a game, Uncharted 2, which begins with you, in a snowy place, with a wound in your side, on a collapsing train. And after you get out of that situation, it cuts back, and slowly reveals how you got there. I remember getting hooked by it. So, it's a pretty good story telling technique, IF utilized correctly.

[@hubguy]

@@katamas832 Absolutely. Tho “if utilized correctly” can’t be stressed enough. Have to be able to tell a story well in chronological order before you can play around with in media res. Just adds to the work you have to do to make that storytelling effective aside from it just being an attention grabber from the start

[@conmattang8492]

Breaking Bad did it right, though. I can't imagine most people would've sat through the entire Pilot without that initial hook

[@vertex1933]

"We're not so different: we're both corn of action." "Yeah but one of us is DEAD CORN!"

[@abdullahqureshi1404]

😂😂😂😂😂😂

[@gruntythefinestwench]

I know this is old but I purposely avoided clicking out of this when I saw the corn snippet and I was not disappointed 😂

[@moneymonquille7261]

"You SAT Through It?" LMAO. He Was So Offended By Any Criticism. Like Most Writers I Know. Had To Be Written From Experience.

[@cheeseboi588]

You’re not supposed to capitalize every word.

[@exodus_3958]

@@cheeseboi588 that's a fact,indeed.

[@shady8045]

Well. The cartoon is written by you know... writers

[@TheHispanicPanic_]

Money Monquille I gotta ask a

[@bat6684]

Why are you capitalising every word, who are you, Timothy Dexter?

[@MegaFafnir]

"Did you want me to weep with joy?! It's TERRIBLE!" XD

[@briarmason8737]

"Woah, Morty! We're guests here!"

[@muhibaqeel5380]

@@briarmason8737 i tried to be a good guest,but he dragged it out of me!!!!

[@fckinfruit6776]

Muhib Aqeel im taking down this beacon

[@MegaFafnir]

"No! Stop! That's not fair! Just because you hate your own writing doesn't make me a bad person!"

[@fckinfruit6776]

MegaFafnir *falls down the stairs* “you like that? You want me to cut to three weeks earlier? When you were alive!”

[@homer_thompson5090]

The scene with Morty pushing the guy down the stairs should've happened at the beginning, then cut to three minutes earlier

[@kevinmclaughlin2594]

Mediocre writers are the worst. They ask for your notes and constructive criticism and when you give your honest opinion then they throw a big tantrum. When the lighthouse keeper says "You're a petty person and you're insecure." I think he was referring to himself. He knows that his writing is terrible but refuses to admit it.

[@andrewcantor480]

I watch this almost every day. The look on Morty's face after the cat says "3 weeks earlier" is brilliant

[@django7762]

One of the best episodes of the season, although every episode was great

[@MrDarkAkari]

alll the episode was awesome

[@omairbhore]

yeah its hard to single one out...

[@magicman3163]

Django 776 except for season 3

[@TheSagaContinuesWu]

rick and morty is so good

[@Arsenal8999]

My favourite episode

[@seanmurphy5583]

Did anyone notice that this planet doesn't appear to have electricity, but the lighthouse keeper is writing a screenplay?

[@petronecosmetics9230]

A screenplay is a play. It can be acted out on a stage.

[@catke590]

@@petronecosmetics9230 You're right, but things like "The end?" and fade outs are pretty much a thing for movies. It seems more like a error made by the writers or they just really wanted this joke done.

[@mohammadalbader3538]

I just assumed it was like early industrial times when electricity did exist just not for everyone

[@eduardopupucon]

In the 1910s from what i recall only half of the USA had electricity, and it was mostly in urban places and public venues in rural places, yet films existed, so this could be an late industrial period

[@tazay4253]

*Author clears throat* "Fade in, exterior, unnamed city, day, the hustle and bustle is the symphony of progress..." Morty was thinking "N*gga what??"

[@robertrosales.23]

Taza I thought I was hearing a Brian story 🥱

[@mamba7160]

💀💀💀

[@snakes6248]

Love this scene. In my experience, most people who want feedback on their writing don't want criticism, even if it's constructive. They really just want to be told they did a good job.

[@ameykulkarni7491]

Worst thing is, that's not what he wanted. Even after Morty praised him he made Morty say something

[@KW-de9sc]

I’m actually the opposite and when i get people to read and they don’t have anything negative, constructive or otherwise, to add, it actually stresses me out a bit because i wanna know what’s wrong with it. Usually there’s still nothing wrong but it gets to me a touch sometimes and i try not to let it.

[@chankljp]

As someone that writes fan fiction, every time I have an urge to reply to a negative or sarcastic comment.... I think of this video, and calm down first before replying. Don't want to get pushed down a flight of stairs, after all!

[@thisisanoriginalname6085]

chankljp Good thing, you're reasonable person.

[@trainofaaron]

Let's not cut back to 3 weeks earlier ok..

[@exodus_3958]

Well you don't live in a lighthouse I guess.

[@Angel-O369]

Terribly written comment... Jeez!!

[@heebieggs]

Why do you write fanfiction and not your own ideas? I never understood fanfiction writers/readers :(

[@scorpion67890]

"your grandson is a shitty person. Leave now." One of my all-time favorite Rick and Morty quotes , the way it is delivered is great

[@GentlemanJay111]

0:55 that face Morty makes as soon as he realizes what he's gotten himself into..

[@conntoons_4848]

2:22 the way he said “Yeah.” 😂

[@Jinx5495]

LMFAOOOOOOOO RIGHTTTT

[@diamatas]

As a teen writer myself, this is the EXACT the type of writer I don't wanna be.

[@diamatas]

@@michals2351 You SAT through it!? (lol)

[@derekcheesball1248]

So long as you can take criticism, you’ll be fine. But also consume a lot of media, good and bad. Figuring out what separates the two is what makes you sure of your work’s quality.

[@DaConnoiseur]

"You want me to cut to three weeks earlier!?!?!? WHEN YOU WERE ALIVE?!?!" omg one of the best lines i've ever heard

[@LudwigsBoneCollection]

I always wondered if the inability to handle criticism had anything to do with the whole Purge society thing. If you can't plan to kill anybody who pisses you off you'd probably develop a thicker skin, and this show isn't the kind to indulge in unconnected randomness.

[@pedrokantor3997]

That's actually a really good point. The cat people clearly lack diplomatic skills and the ability to peacefully cooperate over something as simple as getting a loaf of bread. For them it isn't even so much about releasing repressed rage, it just seems like they just don't know any other way to resolve conflict and that might even be a biological thing for the cat people. After all, you can't herd cats right?

[@HypercatZ]

@@pedrokantor3997 And what excuse do humans have to kill each others over imaginary friends created by dead people?

[@VulpeculaJoy]

@@HypercatZ Because we're basically higher evolution level bacteria that have one purpose: to exist and to spread that existence with whatever means necessary.

[@pandogstudios1512]

Daniel Gilfillan This show isn’t the kind to indulge in unconnected randomness? A clip from Interdimensional Cable is shown at the end of this video.

[@TheHaters112]

@@HypercatZ Technically it has never been about "imaginary friend". It was just greedy people doing what they do best. Take Modern North Korea, pre 20th Century China and Japan. No imagery friends. Still Does/Did many atrocious things. Imaginary friend is an escape goat

[@AaronHujibob]

I learned a lot about criticism when I was in a creative writing class with my university. Because I knew the people I was working with helped a lot and I trusted them to be honest with me. The best thing to remember is that whenever your work is criticised it's coming from a good place - even if the work is very sub par. I like to think my work has become a lot better because I've overcome that obstacle of fearing criticism.

[@mark-jensbarton8363]

Aaron Fraser I've learned in my workshops that there are two types of classmates: the first is there to genuinely improve the quality of the piece (whether it's poetry, prose, drama, or film) and actually want the piece to be great, the others are people who feel superior to everyone in the workshop and shit on it for no reason.

[@TurkeyProphet]

My impression from the feedback I got in writing workshops was that most people were skim-reading the thing on the toilet before they came to class and then jotting down a few vague comments and platitudes.

[@gotgunpowder]

"The best thing to remember is that whenever your work is criticised it's coming from a good place" This is so wistfully naive I actually envy you. You realize people on the internet love dressing up their unconstructive bile-slinging as "criticism" as a smokescreen to be immune from rebuke when they say the story was so bad that the author should drink bleach.

[@dylanrivera2244]

2:05 Words cannot describe how much I love that face.

[@metalspinda9594]

Ren and Stimpy was the best. It has its history mind you, But damned if IT'S laughs, shocked faces, inspired reflection, and pop culture influence wasn't EARNED! ^_^

[@OmniversalInsect]

Finn also made that face a lot

[@bluehealer81]

With that quality of script, you just know the song "I'm Walking on Sunshine" will be featured prominently in trailer.

[@koatam]

This society doesn't seem to have electricity, but it has motion pictures for which screen plays are needed?

[@palemanus7747]

+Koatam or really elaborate and high budget stage plays.

[@pognillat2833]

pale manus ugh I don't wanna be that guy, but motion pictures don't necessitate electricity.

[@elliottuberbacher3804]

0:17

[@brycewakefield6565]

Koatam um did shake sphere have electricity no

[@criticalbil1]

Er big fucking lighthouse maybe? With a big electric bulb?

[@kfc28371ify]

"Whoa, Morty! You just purged." I love how Morty was this shy kid lacking confidence, and he just kept on doing things he/I didn't think he would be capable of doing. 😂

[@thewanderingcreative7173]

*points to Brian Griffin* You two should get to know each other!!!!! You'd get along swimmingly.

[@milkyjuice646]

Yeah they are both bad writers and they both died at some point

[@Tigerman1138]

Henrique Ferreira Yeah, but each of them thinks they are great writers.

[@milkyjuice646]

@@Tigerman1138 and they're both wrong

[@milkyjuice646]

@gillecroisd 92 I have to stop you right there. What do you mean "hardworking conservative family"? They're not hardworking at all! Peter barely shows up for work, and Lois doesn't have a job! I do agree that Brian sucks, don't get me wrong, I just thought that was a weird thing to say.

[@milkyjuice646]

@gillecroisd 92 yeah, but as I said, Peter barely works, has an alcohol problem, and is to be abusive towards his family in multiple circumstances, honestly they're all terrible. But you're right about Brian, he should be working, and he doesn't have the right to complain.

[@mickeygeeky1560]

I love how he takes out the candy at “hot, but doesn’t know it” from then on he knew it was gonna be some bullshit

[@kimphan5148]

And two seasons later, Morty wrote a heist script. Hopefully he did not include the “ three weeks earlier” part..

[@lightsideendings5815]

Speaking as someone who is trying to write his first screenplay right now (and still learning as he goes along): One of the biggest problems with this guy's script is he is trying to include things the audience can't 'see.' Lines like 'hot but doesn't know it' and 'she's a woman, he's a man,' aside from being terrible cliches, belong in a bad novel, not a blueprint for a purely visual medium. "You didn't laugh at the scene in the bar" hit home for me, though. I've had that problem before too, where I wondered why the person I gave the pages to didn't laugh. The problem there is "the scene in the bar" is only funny in the cat-man's head, but it's a great example of how he refuses to let go of his own ego. Anyway, TLDR; there are too many reasons this scene is brilliant (and cautionary.)

[@linus5314]

I don't know why, but I love "You want me to cut to three weeks earlier when you were alive?" so much.

[@kylecorbinmusic]

3:31 Hands down the best Morty line in the ENTIRE series😂

[@SkillBill1000.]

😂😂

[@jordythecat7181]

What I like best is how Morty critiques the most benign part about the “tale” that could easily be cut out and not change a thing, and that’s the thing the guy flips out over. Kind of feels like he just wanted to get upset over any critique because of the purge thing.

[@bilsid]

"you are a petty person and insecure, and you're taking it out on me" the irony haha

[@SamTheSubSaharan]

This Morty is the morty i wanna see in every episode!!!!

[@ErdnußRiegel6969]

RILEY FREEMAN NO! it would get boring

[@SmartAlec1]

*season 3 enters*

[@juicycartoons]

@@SmartAlec1 he wasnt really like this in season 3

[@aletanook]

Why?

[@yourfriendlyneighbourhoods8202]

Welp, now you do, kinda. I feel like this was the episode that turned him like that

[@snowyz2496]

Rick: Morty if we’re gonna survive tonight you need to harness your suppressed rage” Morty: “I don’t have any” Rick: “Spoken like a person with suppressed rage” GOLD

[@gordonschnick12]

"You want me to cut to 3 weeks earlier, when you were alive" best part.

[@statycwave101]

"Ya didn't laugh at the scene in the bar" LMFAOOOO

[@StefanSaba]

This is one of the few scenes in the show where it feels like the roles are switched. Where Morty actually sounds really smart and Rick is actually considerate of others

[@RishiShahSays]

i love how rick rang the bell with the sword as if he is already in the mood to purge!!

[@Narmatonia]

“Want me to flashback to three weeks earlier, when you were still alive?” Love that line

[@Roman-ko1jy]

“Did you want me to weep with joy?” “It’s terrible.” 😂😂😂

[@RabiesVariant01]

"You like that? You want me to cut to three weeks earlier, when you were alive?" That should've been the intro to this episode.

[@LandelRey]

"You want me to cut to three weeks earlier, when you were alive?" Damn that salt

[@TwelvetreeZ]

0:54 Definitely my favourite Morty expression :'D

[@slope.2469]

You mean quote. He didn’t express himself

[@jhonnymark7581]

2:05

[@tizianovalicenti8432]

😐

[@Waiting4thaWroms]

This episode is violent from front to back, yet this is always the hardest scene for me to watch.

[@theAngryscotman]

I felt the same. I think it's because although the guys an ass-hole he's still this kind of frail old man. There's something unsettling in just how Morty pushes him.

[@NyQuilDonut]

@@theAngryscotman Yeah they could've both overpowered him without killing him, and then used the beacon. When Rick purged he was doing it in self defense, but Morty was just murdering people in cold blood.

[@brucelston]

I'm sure it would've been another memory removed from Morty had it not been on a Purge Day.

[@Slutty4Sully]

it’s literally a cartoon

[@literallygaston2489]

TSully And your point is? Cartoons, like all fiction, should evoke feelings and impact us in some way. Nobody here is saying it really happened so you *literally* made an useless and dumb comment that brings nothing to discussion.

[@Raparanoiko]

seriously, the 'cut 3 weeks earlier' can easily be the best line I've ever heard in a comedy show. 10/10

[@sgdolt]

"just because you hate your own writing doesn't make me a bad person" damn dude he straight put weight behind that by shoving the cat down the stairs 🤔😓

[@yeah_i_likeCartoons]

Listen I’m a writer and I’ve had my share of criticism and honestly it’s a part of the job. Don’t like it? Don’t write. The only criticism I don’t like is the one that doesn’t help. It’s one thing for someone to say you need to work on pacing or all your characters are flat, and another entirely for someone to tell you “I don’t know, I just think it’s boring.”

[@Ben-rz9cf]

I put my script on the blacklist and got the absolute worst writing feedback of my life. They said some vague shit like "it needs to be grounded for mass audience comprehension"... Fucking made up nonsense to try to get me to buy another script coverage. Since then I've only gotten glowing 5 star reviews from paying screenwriting clients... My worst feedback ever was from someone I literally paid to give me feedback. I love harsh feedback... If its specific. I'd rather a scathing breakdown picking apart my screenplay piece by piece than a cosigning yes man.

[@tomnorton4277]

@@Ben-rz9cf I entered ScriptHop's Gauntlet recently. The best parts of the feedback were the parts that pointed out something specific. Things like telling me to shorten a description, specify character ages or state that the story takes place in the UK, not America. Even the occasional question, despite being rhetorical, could nudge me in the right direction. The worst parts were complaints that the dialogue was "contrived" and "artificial" because they never specify what MAKES it contrived and artificial. In fact, they often use QuickNotes that could apply to many different lines of dialogue from many different writers instead of specifically stating what's wrong with mine in particular. I know for a fact that there are people in real life, usually on the autism spectrum, who speak in ways that seem "wooden" and lacking in subtext. Plus, the quality of dialogue is clearly subjective. The most notable example is that 2 people really liked the last line on page 1 while a third said it was overly sentimental. One of the same people who liked that line also reiterated at the end of his review that he still found the dialogue credible. Some of the stuff written by the Gauntlet analysts was genuinely helpful. They're clearly good at what they do but the vagueness of their criticisms about the dialogue was frustrating.

[@kingcamelot1395]

You see people, there are two kinds of people. People who can accept criticism, and people who ask for criticism, but can't take it.

[@bat6684]

There’s 3 actually

[@palmerlp]

I’ve been in writing classes. It’s tough when someone brings in something that’s unsalvageably bad. Nobody wants to be the one to tell someone that their thing is hacky and riddled with cliches. Morty did the best he could, offering what was basically a mild note on structure. I kind of want to hear what he would have said next lol

[@Carlos-ln8fd]

"hot but doesn't know it" that had me laughing so hard

[@diegomartinez9785]

Well, flashbacks and time jumps can make a story very interesting, but you gotta know how to use it

[@conntoons_4848]

*_”Three weeks earlier.”_* gets me every time 😂

[@Olodus]

That first look on Morty's face when he starts the story! Gets me every time. So perfect

[@alexander5.1]

"You like that? You want me to cut to three weeks earlier when you were alive?" Damn Morty, chill.

[@_anomalocaris_]

“You like that? You want me to cut to three weeks earlier, when you were alive?” Favorite line from this show ever

[@rahulrt6396]

"Only one of us is dead corn!!" I want to watch the rest of that !!

[@rafadirector7449]

The "this is NOT her day" part is what really gets me. He put it intentionally so that it gives the scene more style, knowing that it doesn't translate to anything visually and therefore shouldn't be in a screenplay. And he not only puts it, but actually relies on it for the effect he wants, instead of trying to make his writing more engaging and adding depth to it, and as a result he wrote the most monotone sentences that a human could ever create where it's actually possible to make it into a real scene. It's like a sliver of what the scene should feel like, that was rejected from the scene itself. Having said that, I can only pity the director that would transform it into a film, if that could actually happen, since he should make it as he read, as monotone as possible, but he also has the original feel that it should have, diluted out like it's an impurity. That sentence on its own is a sin worthy of 1000 death rows. Justin Roiland is just incredible at making something sound bad, a true malefic genius. And thank you Morty.

[@Synthwave89]

Poor morty, I could feel his pain when he uttered "aw jeez". That burn at the end tho lmfao

[@MrSoup-zs4rd]

does anyone else wish Jerry would stop trying to get involved? Like he should understand that he'd never comprehend everything that's going on but he does anyway to try to be the 'man of the house' but fucks up anyway

[@Botar48]

Yes he is most useless and anoying character but this is what writers tried to do with his character and they damn well succeeded.

[@koatam]

+John Campbell Taddy? Taddy Mason is that you?

[@MrSoup-zs4rd]

***** wut

[@koatam]

John Campbell Rick? What are you doing with Taddy, Let me talk to Taddy.

[@homosexualitymydearwatson4109]

I actually really like Jerry's character, I feel like he adds something

[@rockoperajon]

“You want me to cut to 3 weeks earlier? When you were alive?” Damn, Morty could give an 80s action hero a run for their money when it comes to brutal one liners.

[@masterzombie161]

Kind of reminds of Butterscotch Horseman’s fate. He wrote a book, someone didn’t like it so he challenged them to a duel only to ask in the end if they ever read the damn thing but asking that while walking he tripped and bashed his head on a rock.

[@johnolivas6918]

As a guy trying to make screenwriting into a job, I get really excited when I get criticism. All these ideas come shooting out of me. Criticism should inspire the writer, not make them feel insecure.

[@Olodus]

Haha this is so good. All faces Morty makes during this is sooo spot on. I don't know what it is but that storytelling voice always gets me.

[@DahTruf]

Every other episode just adds evidence to the theory that, in the future, Morty becomes a smarter version of Rick.

[@mr.randomgamer3855]

He also is dependent on the parasites Rick gave him to be smarter

[@iconocast]

rick is prolly old morty

[@FirstLast-cw3fe]

+iconocast I think so too

[@andre20026]

in the game pocket morties there is a morty which is named ( old morty) he has the morty body and ricks face well kibd of

[@SOIBand]

the rickest morty is still out there, somewhere. He left is eyepatch behind.

[@aysawa5673]

Hot but doesnt know it ~every wattpad story

[@juanmanuelpenaloza9264]

**smacks head on wall** GODDAMN TWILIGHT COPYCATS!!

[@literallygaston2489]

Juan Manuel Penaloza Believe it or not, Twilight didn’t start this trope, romance and YA novels were full of it since the beginning and most tweens aren’t big fans of Twilight either, it’s not their thing.

[@senseispud2197]

When I used to write, I always shat myself at the prospect that I might be like that guy.

[@nickimillennium]

Just realized the "spoken like a person with repressed rage" line is just like the "spoken like someone with needs" line from the screenplay. 😂

[@jonnysith]

3:06 that entire lighthouse scene was beautifully animated

[@hoouos2]

" want me to cut to 3 weeks earlier when you were alive"? I DIED LMAO

[@tony-k]

Morty's face at 2:04 is priceless 😂

[@dexterhobbs6258]

Morty's expression when he first realizes what the "tale" is, is priceless.

[@Rabs352]

"Rick I didn't do anything, I sat through his entire screenplay." "You SAT THROUGH IT?!" 🤣🤣🤣 Kills me everytime.