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Agro Squirrel Narrates

Agro Squirrel Narrates

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00:00 Intro
00:28 Calling Upon Sentiment by daeomec
#ScienceFiction #Storytime #scifi
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Cosmic Nightmares - Jimena Contreras
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Podcast is Called : ASN Humans Are Space Orcs , HFY and other stories
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This Story is Classified as HFY or Humanity Feck, Yea , but what does the Mean?
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HFY is a story/series that takes a “human element” in either humanity or an “other” (race/species or object) that exists in a “setting” (future or other world/universe) with varying levels of culture, technology, society and history that help show in some shape or form the potential good or bad for humanity’s race/culture. In These stories Humans are often referred to as Human, Humanity, Deathworlder, Hellwolder in reference to the human planet of origin , Earth. This planet is seen by most of the universe as a place where only death and chaos can survive.
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Taken from the FAQ of the r/HFY subreddit.
Humans Are Space Orcs (HASO) or Humans Are (Fantasy Race) Are used as a guide when writing.
In these Stories we normally View humans like the other races view orcs in a Fantasy Novel. We (Humans) share the same characteristics and personalities as orcs. Humans are normally treated as the outsiders and barbarians. Humans tend to be underestimated as well in these stories. Unlike Humanity Feck Yea , these don't always put a positive spin on humans\humanity sometimes looking at the darker side of human and humanity from the perspective of aliens.
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@MrGoesBoom
@MrGoesBoom 2 ай бұрын
Virtue's reaction to what happened is proof enough that they are indeed Human
@christopherg2347
@christopherg2347 3 ай бұрын
That time the Chelvans accidentally blew up their moon...
@derekstein6193
@derekstein6193 3 ай бұрын
And their favorite one at that.
@JamesSavik
@JamesSavik 21 күн бұрын
Yeah, that was great. Their version of a drunk redneck said - somebody hold my beer and watch this.
@TheLastRhapsody
@TheLastRhapsody 3 ай бұрын
It took me from the time it happened to the end of the story to figure out just why Another Virtue was so pissed. The chelvians fucked around, and they found out. Honestly the amount of restraint is enough to prove Virtue’s godly status outright.
@lrmackmcbride7498
@lrmackmcbride7498 3 ай бұрын
Worse they killed one her favorite humans. They killed a human's family.
@TheLastRhapsody
@TheLastRhapsody 3 ай бұрын
@@lrmackmcbride7498 Oh yes, that's what I meant. I just didn't say outright for some inscrutable reason.
@lrmackmcbride7498
@lrmackmcbride7498 3 ай бұрын
@@TheLastRhapsody they triggered a mech human with the f word.
@dinguswad452
@dinguswad452 3 ай бұрын
​@@lrmackmcbride7498, even worse is that Virtue is the one who pressed her to evacuate. Otherwise, she'd have still been on the planet when the attack occurred. Perhaps "bad luck" wasn't a faulty recognition of pattern after all.
@wildwikedwanderer1208
@wildwikedwanderer1208 3 ай бұрын
I like that. Didn’t kill the planet but sure as hell didn’t let them go without immediate punishment.
@billcook7285
@billcook7285 3 ай бұрын
I may not kill you. But in the words of the immortal poet, Marshall Mathers, "I'll burn your house down, circle around, and run over the hydrant, so you can't put your burning furniture out". 😅
@quatre1559
@quatre1559 3 ай бұрын
i have never wanted a one shot to be turned into a series harder than i do for this!
@mejustme8138
@mejustme8138 3 ай бұрын
Read the culture novels of Ian M Banks
@brianhochhausen2757
@brianhochhausen2757 3 ай бұрын
Another good selection would be "I am Bob"
@trevorthieme5157
@trevorthieme5157 3 ай бұрын
​@@brianhochhausen2757That was an awesome one! Praise be the omnipotent omniscient black hole who serves the space bar!
@Whitetyger0090
@Whitetyger0090 2 ай бұрын
@@brianhochhausen2757 what is 'I am BOB'? book or short story or what?
@user-tr3py5nz2j
@user-tr3py5nz2j 3 ай бұрын
What an impact! How could they be so stupid to attack the humans with superior human ships in orbit overhead? That was simply insane! How much “greed” could they have been tempted by to start an interstellar war against a superior foe? Great story.
@Dracolych69
@Dracolych69 3 ай бұрын
The Japanese sought to decapitate the American Navy at Pearl Harbor. That is why the Chaavin thought they could do it with a superior ship over head.
@Fuxy22
@Fuxy22 3 ай бұрын
More like what did they expect to gain from this? I mean if they piss them off the planet would be destroyed along with their race so what is the actual gain here?
@jonnypena7651
@jonnypena7651 3 ай бұрын
You would be surprise how many times it happens in real life.
@SilverMKI
@SilverMKI 3 ай бұрын
I mean human governments are bought and sold all the time by interests that are quite happy to destroy millions of lives and perhaps cause a mass extinction of life on the planet for shareholder value and personal ambition.
@frogsshadow4189
@frogsshadow4189 2 ай бұрын
I'd guess they were offered tech rivaling humans and given the missiles to shoot the ship down. I doubt they were actually going to get the tech but if you're told you'd get tech from thousands of years in the future, probably help from the empire giving it to you, and all you had to do was shoot some missiles at one ship. I don't think many would say no.
@jeanannd
@jeanannd 3 ай бұрын
Ai as humanities friend, and former enemies as friends. But there are still baddies out in this universe.
@davidvincent5701
@davidvincent5701 3 ай бұрын
It would be interesting to see a conversation between Virtue of this universe and Omega from the other universe. They mite become friends.
@emilykelly2498
@emilykelly2498 2 ай бұрын
Hell yeah
@TheRealInscrutable
@TheRealInscrutable 3 ай бұрын
When a cyberpunk story cosplays as science fiction... Most excellent! Wintermute and Continuity would be proud.
@randomstranger9674
@randomstranger9674 3 ай бұрын
Clearly, Another Virtue is a Culture Mind. Nicely done sage_thrasher, you caught Iain's style perfectly.
@kjg1953
@kjg1953 3 ай бұрын
I liked this story very much. More, I am continuously impressed with the care and thought that is taken in selecting these stories from the many many out there. And, of course, with the entertaining narration that brings it all home. Well done.
@mejustme8138
@mejustme8138 3 ай бұрын
Strongly reminiscent of the culture novels
@venoltar
@venoltar 3 ай бұрын
I got the same impression. I was just waiting for the ship to rename itself.
@mejustme8138
@mejustme8138 3 ай бұрын
@@venoltar yes, something like " gcu urgent patience"
@venoltar
@venoltar 3 ай бұрын
@@mejustme8138 oh perhaps a little more on the nose "GCU Aggressive Diplomacy". Or heaven forbid, a designation change to ROU.
@mejustme8138
@mejustme8138 3 ай бұрын
@@venoltar once in Contact, always in Contact
@deussalt4479
@deussalt4479 2 ай бұрын
Virtue seems pretty human to me. For the Agro-rythm!
@williambishop2384
@williambishop2384 2 ай бұрын
The Sword of Forebearance in action.
@lazrustosadow5880
@lazrustosadow5880 3 ай бұрын
Tsundere military ships
@einyv
@einyv 3 ай бұрын
That was good. Would love the author you do a short part 2 from the perspective of the Chellvian people now their moon is gone.
@Wastelandman7000
@Wastelandman7000 3 ай бұрын
Grrrrrreatings O Noble Narrator!
@sakon5147
@sakon5147 3 ай бұрын
Its not unusual for the onion ninjas to visit while listening to awesome narrations provided by Agro of great stories. This one lit that small flame of wrath that lives inside all of us. That flame that says gods, demons, stars, the void itself wont stop the reckoning. As great as it is with the feel good and bitter sweet feelings these stories usually bring, this one reminded me of prolly the most important thing about us humans. There is a monster so terrible asleep inside that gods will weep when it wakes. Pity those who break its slumber. Virtue lives up to his name, and is more human for being able to reign in a modicum of restraint, and is a better human than I or many.
@achimdemus-holzhaeuser1233
@achimdemus-holzhaeuser1233 3 ай бұрын
The true world revealed / Weaknesses now known to me / Time to go to work.
@AliceDeBois
@AliceDeBois 4 күн бұрын
This was so well written.
@robinbeattie3404
@robinbeattie3404 2 ай бұрын
You have an excellent ability to choose a great story and bring it to life.
@Alex.H.B.1970something
@Alex.H.B.1970something 3 ай бұрын
Bravo Sir Encore! Edit, that ai was Far more merciful than I'd have been.
@SpiritWolf1966
@SpiritWolf1966 3 ай бұрын
I enjoy all of Agro Squirrel Narrates videos
@ralphmueller3725
@ralphmueller3725 3 ай бұрын
gave the like button a big ol' hug.
@hawk947
@hawk947 3 ай бұрын
For the algorithm!! Also your awesome !!!
@schwadevivre4158
@schwadevivre4158 Күн бұрын
Excellent story from a similar universe to that of The Culture
@Acirno
@Acirno 3 ай бұрын
I have no idea if there is a continuation to this, I really hope there is. I hate being left hanging.
@erickamekonapeper4007
@erickamekonapeper4007 3 ай бұрын
Excellent thanks for doing it 😊! One mention if you would be so kind to afford a minor adjustment - correction I noticed it before too. Ngyuen Nguyen and any Ng is pronounced wynn.😅❤ I Just wanted to say for all the ones that have it said incorrectly and are polite and don't want to say anything. The one who truly cares about you will say something that's me Brother and I love you thank you so much for the hours and hours of excellent stories!❣️🖖
@julesmasseffectmusic
@julesmasseffectmusic 3 ай бұрын
In OZ you hear more of the nu yin pronounced because how aussie break up syllables a little differently and can't get it right for love nor money. Kinda like how a Scots brain breaks when saying purple burglar alarm ozzie can't get our accent around certain words.
@Fearose
@Fearose 3 ай бұрын
loved that story
@lynntenney4851
@lynntenney4851 3 ай бұрын
well that was amazing
@timothyfreeby1031
@timothyfreeby1031 3 ай бұрын
I loved this story... i hope the thread continues with the real villains getting their hash settled.
@earlbergener4405
@earlbergener4405 3 ай бұрын
A 55,year old growler doesn't mind a bedtime story
@bryanengland2466
@bryanengland2466 3 ай бұрын
Awesome 👌
@erushi5503
@erushi5503 3 ай бұрын
Man, it hurts to see a good guy be forced to do violence, they killed his people for greed, no one would blame Virtue if he just cracked the planet but man Virtue just like his name virtuous Virtue is like a lonely god... this story reminded me of the time when the 12th Doctor really REALLY want to shoot someone but cant
@victortahlor4038
@victortahlor4038 3 ай бұрын
Thank you for the reading
@mikethurman3147
@mikethurman3147 3 ай бұрын
That. That was awesome.
@allenmorgan1007
@allenmorgan1007 3 ай бұрын
For the Algorithm, for the Author(s), for the Holographic Voice!
@666stonewall
@666stonewall 3 ай бұрын
Amazing story! And the image really does Virtue’s inner feelings justice. Thank you Squirl!
@ravenouself4181
@ravenouself4181 Ай бұрын
Virtue is definetly Human. Time to crack a couple of planets :D
@redakroma1
@redakroma1 3 ай бұрын
Love your work and ALWAYS press that Like button. Seems to me they need to quit screwing with the algorithm.
@joosyjulie
@joosyjulie 3 ай бұрын
23:09 UK 3rd May 2024. That AI deserved his godlike status. A balanced god, neither a namby pamby one (crikey, I haven't used that saying for at least two decades) , or a despotic cruel one, or the overbearing 'father will punish you ' types. Just balanced.
@silverbird425
@silverbird425 3 ай бұрын
needs a movie script!
@junderbox
@junderbox 3 ай бұрын
WITH ENERGY!!!
@stevemiller8032
@stevemiller8032 3 ай бұрын
@Dirtyspork78
@Dirtyspork78 3 ай бұрын
i really liked this one.
@MidnightSmoke
@MidnightSmoke 3 ай бұрын
Here is a like and comment for the awesome story, for entertaining me, to help your channel grow, to appease the great and powerful KZbin algorithm demon, and get you the recognition you deserve.
@mikecoatsworth6048
@mikecoatsworth6048 3 ай бұрын
For the nest for the algo, for the best voive on the net...imo
@johnnyrotten3175
@johnnyrotten3175 2 ай бұрын
4 D algorithm 4 D 🐿️ ❗ ❗
@Snipergoat1
@Snipergoat1 3 ай бұрын
What are the Angenitors thinking? The Chelvians made a stupid gamble based on not understanding who they were betraying. For this they lost their Goddess. There will undoubtedly be further payments in blood extracted as the exact people involved are tracked down. Human mercy spared them as a species. But some government and/or business higher ups are going to pay a much higher price. The Angenitors however would have a much better idea of who they were dealing with and while the Chelivans are spared the worst of humanities wrath, they will not be. We don't know much about the society other than both the humans and their allies are death optional species. Thus even 4 deaths was enough to inspire planet destroying rage. As to the complement of that whole ship I'm guessing vastly smaller than what we would think on a ship that size even with science fiction standards put in. Let's call it a couple hundred people and one top line multi use warship. That is certainly enough to enrage a society but not enough to cripple one. Even one as casualty avoidant as they would be. The only way it makes sense is if it is part of massive numbers of strikes elsewhere. Of course since little is known about them other than they place value only on themselves,and they see all others as only tools to be used and discarded. That could just be their way of declaring war and a massive first strike is dishonerable in their thinking not that anyone deserved such honor be granted them but due to it would make themselves lesser in their own eyes. The zero care for others was certainly shown by their seemingly casual willingness to expose the Cheldian to instant xenocide with a slap dash plan that was not of any particular (apparent) importance. Good story, really could use a follow up just to answer a few questions. It's a credit to the story when people are interested enough to try to put it all together. It promises of a full picture ahead a universe with it's own internally consistent rules. Much of the best sci fi takes human society and adds a few fantastical elements and then lets things fall where they may with those elements fitted in. A society of nigh immortals where humans and AI are not just friendly but simply don't see their differences as important even though on a fundamental level they are huge. This sounds like a fascinating society to visit. with or without the brewing war story. The war story it seems is almost just the backdrop to watch this wonderful little universe unfold. Excellent writing.
@louistarnsman6330
@louistarnsman6330 2 ай бұрын
May I suggest listening to the start of the story again. From my point of view the Agenitors luring of the Chelivans into attacking humanity was enough to send them to war. The destruction of the moon was not due to humanity’s loss of four humans. It was destroyed because they killed one, Virtue’s favorite, Neha.
@Keith_WB2VUO
@Keith_WB2VUO 3 ай бұрын
I sense the AI equivalent of Jamie Retief of the CDT, the original Diplomat At Arms!
@francoisbeauregard1739
@francoisbeauregard1739 3 ай бұрын
Wow, that was a nice one !!!
@davidplemmons9467
@davidplemmons9467 3 ай бұрын
Great story. Professional quality
@davex3747
@davex3747 3 ай бұрын
Awesome story & recitation. Good jobs!
@Shadow.Dragon
@Shadow.Dragon 3 ай бұрын
Great story; Excellent narration! Like button is such a good boi!!!
@a10psycho
@a10psycho 3 ай бұрын
For the algorithm
@t.p.3456
@t.p.3456 3 ай бұрын
For the algorithm 👽👾🤖🌌🛰🚀🛸🌠
@bobjones8440
@bobjones8440 3 ай бұрын
Poor little like button.
@luzifershadres
@luzifershadres 3 ай бұрын
In my opinion, would it had been the better reaction to steal the moon. As a cruel reminder how easy humanity could take their celestial bodys, as easely as they could make all their gods vannish.
@charlesashton6273
@charlesashton6273 3 ай бұрын
🤠
@JosePerez-xv8im
@JosePerez-xv8im 3 ай бұрын
😅😁
@SilverMKI
@SilverMKI 3 ай бұрын
Need specifications for the amount of force that constitutes "tap just a little bit" for like button pressing machine.
@louistarnsman6330
@louistarnsman6330 2 ай бұрын
It’s a simple formula: .3 micro Newtons above planetary gravity, corrected for localized variations, tangentially horizontal to Earth, adjusted for the current roll, pitch, and yaw of your input device. 🧐🧮
@eyllyssaunders5345
@eyllyssaunders5345 2 ай бұрын
I really like the aspect of the human and the weird bioluminescent aliens respect for one another a warriors respect makes sense wed be friends with him we like a good scrap
@williamberry9013
@williamberry9013 27 күн бұрын
Foralgorythm
@TheRealInscrutable
@TheRealInscrutable 3 ай бұрын
200K
@robinchwan
@robinchwan 3 ай бұрын
oh you dare destroying the moon ? i don't think people would take that sitting down. now how am i gonna make jokes about mooning people ???
@mmorris2830
@mmorris2830 2 ай бұрын
They still have the two ugly ones.
@osanieslana960
@osanieslana960 3 ай бұрын
Na, I'd have cracked all the moons so that it would rain fire and death upon the tomb world surface for millennia.
@jessoliver2955
@jessoliver2955 3 ай бұрын
The name Nguyen is pronounced: new- wen. I know this because I did a few real estate deals with a Korean woman by that name
@RustyEcks
@RustyEcks Ай бұрын
CLICKETY CLICK!!! WITH ENERGY!!!
@kerry.........
@kerry......... 3 ай бұрын
So I have a pronunciation question: Nguyen, I want to say it like Agro did here when I see it written out, but characters in The Expanse pronounced it more lik "win" so it has left me wondering which is accurate?
@merlinwizard1000
@merlinwizard1000 3 ай бұрын
4th, 3 May 2024
@JimmyJoeBob
@JimmyJoeBob 2 ай бұрын
Nguyen is pronounced kind of like "win".
@shadowfoxarchon5021
@shadowfoxarchon5021 3 ай бұрын
Was ther a second Channel that you do series on?
@gorasul12
@gorasul12 3 ай бұрын
There was a story he told about a young king looking for an advisor, he gets trial with a human one that tells a story with 3 lessons for the king, anyone knowing the name of that video? I just cant find it again 😆
@bigjay875
@bigjay875 3 ай бұрын
67👍up people we can do better, narrator is excellent
@Jason-sm4oc
@Jason-sm4oc 3 ай бұрын
At the thirty minute mark there are 56 extra views and 102 likes. :))
@bigjay875
@bigjay875 3 ай бұрын
@@Jason-sm4oc excellent 👍
@stevemcclendon9297
@stevemcclendon9297 3 ай бұрын
I've kind of wanted to do some narration myself, I've listened for a while and sorry I couldn't donate but I subscribe and like videos on KZbin, do you have any advice or tips that might help me get into narration or voice acting. I have had quite a few friends and family tell me my voice is almost entrancing and I would like to use that for educational entertainment purposes. I feel you would give some decent advice at the least even if you couldn't guide directly.
@earmunchermuncher7639
@earmunchermuncher7639 2 ай бұрын
Fta
@giin97
@giin97 2 ай бұрын
Heh, considering a machine to be "human;" while utterly preposterous, makes for an amusing story premise.
@techristopher8077
@techristopher8077 2 ай бұрын
Where do you get you backdrop art?
@user-sq6hc6if9f
@user-sq6hc6if9f 3 ай бұрын
Truck driver here, I enjoy the audio book, BUT only at home... where the ROAR of a Diesel engine at 2,000 RPM hauling 105,500 pounds of crushed rock. Could you turn UP the volume or avoid reducing volume... mmmm Like a sine wave- you speak very well but the cadence has point in which the volume of your speech drops into the range of the audio emission of the ROARING Diesel engine which cancels OUT anything said. DO apologize, as a Truck Driver my life is what it is and the engine dialed up to full POWER ROAR with a 18 speed transmission is LOUD. Company does not allow headphones. Love the stories. try running back ground noise of a Diesel engine and then try to hear anything else.... NOISE can be a weapon.
@tarrantwolf
@tarrantwolf 3 ай бұрын
I watch MrBallen, the Like button has a restraining order on me.
@tedball8677
@tedball8677 3 ай бұрын
Using the plural pronoun for a singular AI, "...as _a_ Caretaker AI, closer to _a_ god than a calculator, _they_ had options" is unnecessarily clumsy. Perhaps the author is suggesting the AI is both one and many. I can see the argument. I don't buy it since the story doesn't use that as a critical technique to further the storyline. The result is that the spoken story and the text scroll are not facilitating a sense of an AI that is one and many simultaneously. It's clunky writing. This is a *good story*. Pronoun confusion makes it less enjoyable IMV. [edit] TL;DR Playing around with breaking conventional grammar rules for the purpose of the story is great. I mean that. _Flowers_ _for_ _Algernon_ is an excellent example of doing just that throughout the entire story. It makes the story, in fact. Throughout the story the AI is referred to by "biologicals" in the singular. The AI itself refers to itself (when we're inside its mind) as a single individual. Yes, the AI is carrying on many conversations about all sorts of topics simultaneously and doing many other things as well, yet that does not make this AI a "them." Again, if the story centered on the one-as-many notion, I could see it. It doesn't. Please note, this story comes right out of the gate Using the plural pronoun for a singular AI, "...as _a_ Caretaker AI, closer to _a_ god than a calculator, _they_ had options." That's clunky y'all. It is unnecessarily clumsy. OK, maybe IATA and there's a critical storyline angle to this tale that explores the singular/plural notion within one artificial being. Awright, I'll keep an eye out for it. Well, that was not the case. These pronoun gymnastics appear repeatedly as the reader's POV is moved from inside the mind of the AI, to the words of a conversation it has with Neha, then inside Neha's mind and back to the AI's internal POV. Each time the AI *self describes* as a singular individual. Neha also thinks of and refers to the AI in the singular. Perhaps the author is suggesting the AI is both one and many. I can see that argument. I don't buy it since the story doesn't use that as a critical technique to further the storyline. The result is that the spoken story and the text scroll are not facilitating a sense of an AI that is one and many simultaneously and that duality is a critical element to the story. Rather, it's clunky writing (to my eyes and ears). A writing convention departing from the closed loop of grammar rules need not make the story harder to listen to or harder to read _if_ a critical story element served by doing so. Put another way, a poor writing choice without the point of the story being served is, well, a poor choice. This author can write, yet chooses this whack-a-mole pronoun business on purpose and IMO does so without it being a necessary part of storytelling. A non-writing example of unnecessarily vague terms... The phrase "Operation Just Cause" was used IRL as the name of a US military mission into Panama and to arrest Manuel Noriega decades ago. Uh.. does that phrase mean "our cause is just" --OR-- does it mean "operation seemed like a good idea at the time?" The choice of words there is unnecessarily vague. Hell, call the mission "Operation Get Noriega." Sounds less like a focus group outcome and is more descriptive while also being bluntly accurate. Less panache, maybe, but not confusing. In this story "Calling Upon Sentiment," if there was a unique storyline point being made, the reader/listener can shift around it. IF. After a couple of minutes with this story, It's the square peg/round hole mismatch -- again, without a critical story point being made by that choice. And made over and over and over, like watching a kid playing whack-a-mole at a county fair, missing each time. I'm not commenting on the contemporary US foofooraw about pronouns; I'm commenting on readability and listen-ability of a science fiction story. I considered that this might be me. So I watched the text scroll while listening to the VO. Got the square peg/round hole sense. Tried it two other ways -- I muted the audio and just read the text, then looked away from the text scroll and just listened to the VO. Square peg round hole. It inhibits understanding. Communication, I thought, is about successfully transferring ideas & thoughts from one to another (or to a group). Anything that makes that transfer less smooth, less organic is just throwing sand in the gears. It'll work if the story cannot work without doing that. This story would work very well without doing that.
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