Grade 9 Student Essay Power and Conflict (Mr Salles) ft. Bayonet Charge and Exposure

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0:00 Essay question
0:22 How to plan
1:06 Which poem to compare
2:50 Thesis statement
3:40 How to start
4:31 How to STRUCTURE your essay
6:00 What CONTEXT gets marks
7:20 Form and structure in the mark scheme
12:17 Conflict in NATURE
17:44 SYMBOLISM and how to analyse it
19:30 What CONTEXT doesn't get marks
24:00 Examiner's advice on SYMBOLISM
25:09 ALTERNATIVE INTERPRETATION and how to do it
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[@aidanprentice1807]

Thank you for another grade 9 essay example I recently did a comparison between bayonet charge and exposure in a mini mock in class so this is quite convenient for me.

[@stardreamix786]

I remember doing this in the exam - I chose exposure!

[@RD-ho4tv]

Great video! Big up Isum great piece of work!

[@roadflames]

Wow what coincidence.I got this question this friday when i sat my mock. Hoping i do well

[@SalvationMATT1]

same, and i did exposure too!

[@vfxgenie983]

Thank you

[@user-gw5md3wk3q]

When we are revising, would you recommend to have flashcards with the quote on one side and then the analysis on the other side? If I have memorised ideas for some quotes from one poem, how do I then make a thoughtful comparison with another poem ?

[@MrSallesTeachesEnglish]

Yes to flashcards. Anything about the poet’s ideas or methods is thoughtful

[@samtl]

13:05 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣

[@plobexican5609]

Sir i dont know if you know this but at around 4:40 the screen blacks out and we cannot see the essay

[@MrSallesTeachesEnglish]

Thanks, I’ll take a look

[@MrSallesTeachesEnglish]

Yes, this is where I am trying to explain the structure to any essay. I've put in chapters so you can skip this bit if you want to

[@Hellocacita]

Hello Mr Salle does your power conflict books long and short essays are they all grade 9 full essays?

[@MrSallesTeachesEnglish]

Yes

[@Hellocacita]

@@MrSallesTeachesEnglishbut there is no theisis or conclusions

[@oliviatomato3512]

which 4 poems do you recommend to learn?

[@adel8616]

poopy pants, poopy pants poopy pants

[@kinozolte]

I’d personally say ozymandias, prelude, exposure, remains But that’s just me tbh

[@harisqadeer7002]

I'm a slow writer and can write max 700 words in the alloted time for eng lit essays. How can I maximise my time to ensure that i can reach the grade 9?

[@josuke8612]

Do more papers under times condition until you improve

[@19ayittahj76]

7:30 was CRAZY (JOKING ABT COTTON PICKING ON PLANTATIONS )

[@MrSallesTeachesEnglish]

www.quora.com/Is-wait-a-cotton-pickin-minute-a-racist-saying?top_ans=271235693

[@najmallayl]

Hello sir, I do not mind what you do with this essay, I just would like you to correct it, if you may, especially structure and PEE sentences, because I know that I struggle with structuring my answer, writing conclusions and theses, and writing short sentences, including embedding quotes, as I can memorise quotations and do PEE paragraphs, but I take very long. This took me 1 hour 15 mins. The question is "Explore how Shakespeare presents the consequences of unchecked ambition." (in Macbeth) Shakespeare presents the consequences of unchecked ambition through it causing the devolution of Macbeth's valorous, loyal and regal status to a nihilistic and tyrannical ruler that has disobeyed the Natural Order and has abandoned God, and Lady Macbeth's presentation as a ruthless and unnatural temptress that yearns for power, vicariously through her husband. Macbeth states in a soliloquy that "I have no spur / To prick the sides of my intent, but only Vaulting ambition, which / o'erleaps itself / And falls on the other", which is Macbeth admitting that he has no rational, logical argument that can justify his desire for murdering King Duncan, apart from his "Vaulting ambition, which o'erleaps itself / And falls on the other", which has connotations of being uncontained and erratic, "o'erleap[ing] itself" and causing Macbeth to thin the ice between a lust for power and eternal damnation in Hell, demonstrating how Macbeth's mental faculties have been corrupted by his hamartia of an unchecked ambition, and foreshadows how this "Vaulting ambition" will soon condemn the Macbeths. Furthermore, in Act 2, Scene 1, Macbeth sees a dagger and confusingly asks, "Is this a dagger which I see before me [...] I have thee not, and yet I see thee still", which directly contrasts the epitomic description of "His brandish'd steel, which smoked with bloody execution", as daggers symbolises assassination and subsequently, cowardice and timidity, which reflects Macbeth's current state of mind and attitude to the regicide his about to commit upon King Duncan, whereas a "brandish'd steel" has connotations of courage and bravery, demonstrating how Macbeth's "vaulting ambition" to gain power has led him to fall to cowardice and regicide. Similarly, Lady Macbeth says, In Act 1, Scene 5, "Come, you spirits / That tend on mortal thoughts, unsex me here, / And fill me from the crown to the toe topful / Of direst cruelty!" Lady Macbeth is calling upon beings whom aren't God, which was seen as a heinous and heretical crime by the contemporary Jacobean audience, as it was seen as idolatry and sharing partners with the Christian God, demonstrating how Lady Macbeth's ambition to be "unsex[ed]" has caused her to indirectly abandon God and her chances of redemption in the afterlife by sharing partners with Him. Furthermore, she asks them to "fill me from the crown to the toe topful / of direst cruelty", which demonstrates how she has strayed from her womanly traits of kindness and tenderness, and has further strayed from God and her salvation to Heaven. Furthermore, Lady Macbeth commands her husband to "look like the innocent flower, / But be the serpent under't", which shows how she has further subverted the gender stereotypes for a woman in the Jacobean Era and instead of being submissive to her husband, she has commanded him, demonstrating how her vicious desire to kill the King and to gain power has caused her to further stray away from her womanly nature and Christian values, as she has been ordered in the Bible: "Wives, submit yourselves unto your own husbands, as unto the Lord." The clear biblical allusion to the Garden of Eden and to how Eve, after eating from the Tree of the Knowledge of Good and Evil, convinced Adam to do the same, after being tempted by the "serpent", who is the devil, demonstrates how Lady Macbeth symbolises Eve and the "serpent", who is trying to tempt and convince Macbeth, who is 'Adam', to murder the King. Macbeth's nihilistic dialogue further cements the harrowing effects of his "Vaulting ambition", causing him to become disinterested in living any longer, and to lament upon how "Life's but a walking shadow, a poor player," the words "shadow" and "poor" signifying how the light has been lifted, as he has said "Out, out, brief candle"; there is no hope nor salvation any longer for Macbeth, as he has went against the Divine Right of Kings and the Natural Order. He further laments upon how life is " [...] Told by an idiot,", which is an insulting blow and a heretical distrust in God, demonstrating how Macbeth sees his life as a satirical joke, one "Told by an idiot", whom has predestined it for him, therefore "Signifying nothing", and being completely void of meaning and purpose, demonstrating how Macbeth's pursuit and ambition for power has caused him to lose his purpose in life, to abandon God and all hopes of deliverance from his situation. In conclusion, the subsequential and gradual fall from royalty, loyalty and stability in their pre-destined positions as regal members high in the Natural Order, to lowly, tyrannical and insane heretics, due to their unchecked and uncontained ambition, which is arguably both of their hamartias.

[@SalvationMATT1]

26 to 28 marks