I Rewrote the FNAF Movie

[@theinsightfulllama]

Hello everyone!! I have a Patreon now!! This video has honestly been a nightmare with copyright (literally right now it's in a dispute and I can't make any money from the ads on it) so if you like what I do and want to support me this is one of the best ways to do it! You'll get your name at the end of videos, first look at what I'm working on, and more! If you're at all interested, please take a look, it would mean the world to me💕 patreon.com/InsightfulLlama?Link Thank you all so much for the support, I'll do my best to keep making awesome videos! SPOILERS FOR VIDEO: Also the reason I didn't include the springlock scene was because I felt it happened too early. It's such an iconic moment in the games because we had several games for the mystery of the killer to be built up, so the final karmic punishment of him being doomed to the same fate as his victims felt really good and cool. It's such a defining moment for the franchise and I was a bit surprised that the first movie jumped to use it so early. So I decided to focus on establishing William as an active and horrific villain outside of the suit and save the iconic scene for a possible future installment. I enjoy reading suggestions for how it could have been in this version, but since removing the scene was one of the earliest decisions I made in the writing process, I genuinely don't think it would work in this version of the story. TLDR: The springlock scene is a surprise tool that will help us later! ;)

[@MrVideo-dj7dl]

Is your avatar a giraffe?

[@mishapp4439]

I love how you've rewritten Aunt Jane to be an actual person instead of a cartoon villain

[@Jadinite-2006]

Probably the most realistic take by far.

[@SuperSonicbros4]

She wasn't really a cartoon villain tho?

[@SuperSonicbros4]

@ytgetsonmynwrvera ah ok

[@BurntLad]

@@mishapp4439 So bloody true, it’s sadly pathetic really about how much of a Disney Villain she was.

[@philardo]

For a movie, with a setup so down to earth, she was kind of a really bad character. I'm not far into the video yet, but so far I absolutely love how she's written. This feels like a real conflict, with two sides, rather than the one sided conflict, the movie gave us

[@Frankies_Pizza_Planet]

I LOVE how you made aunt Jane more of a character, even though she isn’t a great guardian she clearly still cares for Abby and just wants what’s best, this rewrite is fantastic

[@NeuritisMakesVideos]

This like deserves more comments.

[@themysterfox8695]

The SCENE of William talking to Abby during recess is so well-written in how unnerving it is.

[@ThaCataBoi]

The scene with the club with MatPat, Dawko, Corey and Mark is peak.

[@PandaSlothProductions]

This finna be top comment when this video inevitably blows up

[@Granados07]

Wasn’t mark filming the iron lung movie while the fnaf movie was also filming?

[@bluebear1993]

@@Granados07yes but this is a rewrite

[@halfmettlealchemist8076]

That and the Immortal and the Restless reference were some top-tier fanservice moments, this rewrite knows what the people want

[@elizabethhuntley6056]

The scene of William talking to Abby at school is genuinely bone chilling. Something about how casually he is trying to get personal interest to use against her shakes me to my core, because you can tell he's done this song and dance to all the other children who fell into his traps. Also, I'm not sure if it was intentional, but they way you draw Vanessa's noses makes it look like a rabbit nose, clever.

[@KMBA526]

This is something actual predators do so this person clearly knows their stuff

[@bellslimes]

@@KMBA526

[@KMBA526]

@@bellslimes it legit is

[@bellslimes]

@@KMBA526 no i know i just thought u meant something implied by them being up to snuff on the predator tactics, i was like ayo?

[@chrispy3369]

I will admit, the only reason I really felt fear seeing Afton in the film, is because I am a fan and I already know Afton means trouble. This version gives you a reason to fear William.

[@AnnaMayStudios]

I WISH the actual movie was this intense/scary. It was so good. I kept saying 'noo dont leave the office' lmao. Amazing work! I feel like this version made alot more sense to newer audiences who might not understand. 🎉

[@theinsightfulllama]

It makes me really happy to hear that, one of the big things I wanted to do was make a version that could be enjoyed by fans AND people who had never heard of the franchise. Really happy you enjoyed the video! :D

[@Hobster64]

You say you're not a professional writer and you made THIS?? I'm not even halfway through this yet and I'm already stunned. This is severely underrated for the amount of effort put into this! Edit: Wow. I just finished it and I'm utterly speechless. I didnt expect it to make me so emotional. This is why I love this fandom so much, Thank you for making this masterpiece.

[@theinsightfulllama]

I'm so happy you liked it, thank you!!

[@SeaMollusk]

This is the best movie I've seen in years, it is a credit to your talent and dedication, I wouldn't be surprised to see anything you write be picked up by a studio.

[@FNaF_Fan_4yd3n]

I’m ironically more invested in the family parts instead of the pizzeria parts

[@wheresthecandy2019]

Me too bru 😭

[@Spookyweasel99]

I honestly forget this was supposed to be fnaf I was to interested in the drama 💀

[@bluebear8741]

The Movie should be called: FNaF Mike Shmit

[@voxii42]

the immortal and the restless cameo brought tears to my eyes

[@voxii42]

OH MY GOSH PSYCHIC FRIEND FREDBOY

[@dumbly-stupid]

Especially the detail of Mike relating to Clara which is something in the survival logbook

[@VisMovo]

@@voxii42 He's here, He's There's, He's everywhere, who ya gonna call?, Psychic Friend Fredboy

[@PaintSplashProductions]

Okay but the image of Josh Hutcherson as Mike in the same room as Markiplier, Dawko, MatPat and Coryxkenshin as they’re fighting about FNAF lore is not an image I realised I needed until today 🤣

[@theclownlyimp]

Mathew Lillard was criminally underutilized in the official movie 😭 I don't think I can express in simple terms just how much I appreciate this rewrite!

[@tylerlong5112]

William getting spring locked could still happen in a sequel to this video.

[@pedronevesurias2318]

Yeah, it being a fixed comment just confirms it

[@PandaSlothProductions]

Thats what i’m hoping

[@bellslimes]

Can’t wait for FNAF 2 Movie’s plot and storytelling by this amazing amazing AMAZING creative mind!!!

[@TheIntelligentBear]

Honestly I like the build up in this one, and I think the springlocks happening in the 2nd makes way more sense. Don't want to use all your fireworks in the first act.

[@BurntLad]

@@TheIntelligentBear Makes me wonder what huge events will be happening in the second movie, besides the Bite that won’t be occurring in 1987 in the movie timeline, because there’s no good way to make it a prequel instead of a sequel to the first movie.

[@literalruleslawyer]

this might be favourite FNAF movie re-write. im such a sucker for the found-family trope, and though that technically doesn't apply to mike, jane and abbey here as theyre related, oh my gosh its written so well. william is, rightfully, so creepy in a way the games never really explore. they mostly focus on creepy undead rabbit guy, not local guy that lures kids into backrooms of spaces where theyre supposed to be safe. please please please continue to make videos, you are clearly very talented.

[@theinsightfulllama]

Thank you so much!! I had a ton of fun writing the dynamic between them and I'm really glad you liked it. I'll do my best to keep making fun stuff people can enjoy! Thank you again 😊

[@PandaSlothProductions]

I’ve commented like five times but i can’t get over how great this is. It feels so much more human and real. Afton’s presence throughout it is just perfect and the story flows so well somehow

[@KMBA526]

I do lightly hate the purple car tho Why get conspicuous ass car like that And honestly Afton having the only black car in the dream sells the death imagery of Garrett being taken better than plum purple

[@PandaSlothProductions]

@ That’s fair. Think they only changed it for this so it’s more game accurate. Fan service 🗣️🔥🔥🔥🔥

[@d0peaminec0m1x8]

you say you're not a pro writer and yet this video is peak

[@Luokeyo]

I'm so glad that it's an actually good rewrite that doesn't just remove Abby from the story. William is probably the scariest I have ever seen him in anything, official or otherwise ever, so huge props to that too. It does suck that you got rid of the Springlock failure (I mean, c'mon, it's a Canon Event) and I still think it could've still worked well in your rewrite but everything else is literal perfection, from the dream sequences to Vanessa's personality to Psychic Friend Fredboi (or it's probably Fredboy). But c'mon, you could've some other reference to Sparky then just the restaurant. But again, this is amazing work, keep at it!

[@Granados07]

Wait there've been rewrites that don’t have Abby in them?!? Why?

[@KMBA526]

@@Granados07like every single one just erased Abby from the plot

[@Granados07]

@@KMBA526 🤷‍♂️ that’s the thing, I don’t know.

[@ElBasureroDeMinty]

​@@KMBA526 people really have beef with abby 💀

[@KMBA526]

Especially with the predator tactics he uses on Abby UGHHH

[@jasonl.1959]

"Hippos can kill you easily." (Looks at Mr. Hippo).

[@alfiewhitestone8676]

Shhh!! Don’t say his name!! You’ll summon him and he’ll ramble again!!

[@Octolithic]

​@@alfiewhitestone8676Ah... It seems that your journey has ended. Very sorry about that - It was always going to end this way, of course. If it weren't by me, it would've just been by some other.. y'know, terrible thing just... You could not imagine how terrible it would be. Just... I get scared thinking about it! Glad it's not me. Reminds me of a.. of a time I was speaking to my good friend Orville. We were... we were sitting on a park bench watching the pigeons. I was on the left, he was on the... oh wait. Was I on the right?.. or left? Anyways, it doesn't matter. We were sitting on there, watching the pigeons, and I.. uh.. I said to Orville: "Friend, those birds are frozen!" He... kinda looked at me like I'd lost my mind. But I reminded him that it was winter, y'know? And often birds will sit in a tree until they'd freeze... Then they'd, they'd, you know, sort of fall to the ground until the sun warms up, an- and they can, y'know, move around again. So I said to Orville "You'd might as well save those breadcrumbs until the birds thaw, because they can't very well enjoy them in the condition they're in." To which he asked what I meant, and asking what condition the crumbs should be in before he threw them to the birds, assuming that I had meant the birds couldn't enjoy the breadcrumbs in the condition that the crumbs were in, when in fact I had meant the birds couldn't enjoy them in the condition that the birds were in, considering the birds were frozen, y'know? So he took a moment and then threw his last handful onto the ground. I said to him "Orville, why did you throw the breadcrumbs to the birds when I just told you they're frozen?" To which he responded "The breadcrumbs are not frozen," again misunderstanding my words. I didn't mean to say that the breadcrumbs were frozen when I told you they're frozen. I've been referring to the birds. You know, in hindsight, what I - what I should've said was - and this would make perfect sense: "Why did you throw the breadcrumbs to the birds when the birds are frozen?" He misunderstood upon my correction, stating that he didn't know what else to do with the breadcrumbs, and that perhaps, y'know, when the birds thawed they'd still be able to eat the crumbs. So I...I..I said to Orville - I said - This is what I said to him - I said: "Orville, the birds may be dead."

[@Papyrus9027wastaken]

​@alfiewhitestone8676 Ah, it seems that you have met your end. Ah, what a pity. You know I, I don’t feel too bad about it though, after all if it weren’t me, it would’ve just been one of the others I guess… I’m honestly just glad to be out of those air ducts. You know it’s… it’s not easy for a hippopotamus to fit up there… and… not easy to get down either. I’m not as young as I used to be as you can see, I used to be able to do all sorts of things, you’re young, you’re vibrant, you have that sort of pep in your step. Ah, it reminds me of a conversation I was having with one of my good friends Orville. We were having a nice picnic one day. I believe it was summer? Oh, perhaps it was… was it the fall? Yes, yes, it was the fall because the leaves had turned already. But I said to Orville, I- I says, “Orville, I have a story to tell you.” And Orville looked at me, you know, kind of odd and- and said, “Well what’s it about?” I- I said to him, “Not every story has to be about something Orville. Sometimes a person just wants to talk, why does it have to be a story?” I said to him. He just looked at me and he said, “Well y-y-you said you had a story.” You know, he was quite right, I did in fact. I told him I had a story. I suppose if a person just wants to talk, it’s best to not announce that you’re tellin’ a story. Tellin’ a story does come with its own pressures and expectations I- I suppose. After all, if you’re just talking to a friend then, there’s no more expectations then if you were talking into the wind. Words… by themselves are not expected to carry… aren’t expected to stick. But if, you know if you announce that you’re tellin’ a story well then… there better be a point to it all. No one wants to sit and listen to someone ramble on and on and on with absolutely no end in sight. So, you know, it’s- it’s good to be mindful that when you tell someone that you’re about to tell a story, that you have something to say. Tellin’ someone that you’re gonna tell a story is tantamount to asking them to stop what they’re doing, and pay attention. You’re basically saying “hey, hey, hey buddy, stop everything, stop what you’re thinking, I have a solution to everything.” And well, I didn’t really have any story to tell. In- in hindsight I probably just misspoke when I said that I had a story. I think it would’ve just been better to tell Orville that I had something to tell him rather than tell him that I had a story, but you know e- even then it might’ve put too much importance on the whole thing. Either way it was quite a nice day. I remember, I remember that we were drinking tea.

[@ghostgoji9532]

@@Octolithicthank you.

[@ghostgoji9532]

@@Papyrus9027wastakenthank you too.

[@griffinfoote1148]

This is a 3 1/2 hour MASTERPEICE. One of my biggest critiques from the original was that it wasn't a great MOVIE, but it was a fantastic FNAF MOVIE. In this, you somehow made a movie enjoyable for people who are new to the franchise and at the same time make a movie that fans can respect and giggle at all the goofy references. I probably would have kept the springlock failure ( even though you've probably got a billion other comments saying the exact same thing) with William Afton telling abby to wait in the pizzaria so he can dawn the yellow rabbit suit that was put in the trunk of his car before he went to pick up Abby. Then, I would have him try to escape the fire, going into the back room Abby had escaped to call 911 right after Mike leaves (in this scenario Chica wasn't breaking in). He finds there in no way out (not noticing the vent) and eventually is cornered by the kids, starts insulting, starts laughing, and the springlock failure commences. In my version I would have much more screaming, as in reality this would be a pain like no other. I would also put some camera shots from the inside of the suit but still showing William's face, if that makes sense. Theses shots would show the animatronic eyes replacing the human eyes, and the animatronic teeth crushing William's jaw. Another issue I had with the original was when Vanessa says the VERY unnecessary line; "It was there bodies." I think it would be better off without it to show that the writers actually trust there audience to put the very obvious pieces together. I very much liked how you made an objectively better answer to the question "BuT WhY WOuLD He GO BaCk ANOthEr NigHT?" Really liked how you fleshed out Aunt Jane's character to not be a "cartoon villain" (@mishapp4439 captured this perfectly). At first I was very sad that you removed the MatiousPatious' cameo in the Sparky's scene, but then you whipped out the library scene. CHEFS KISS! This is, in my correct opinion, 10x better than the original FNaF Movie. Sorry about my college essay revue. As you can probably tell, I'm very passionate. Fantastic job! Keep it up!

[@BurntLad]

@@griffinfoote1148 Props to you for not being afraid to make a huge comment about something you’re passionate about. Even though most people (usually kids and pre-teens and even some actual teens) these days will go "i AiN’t rEaDiNg aLl tHaT dUUuuUuUh" because their attention spans and brain cell counts are lower than a rock’s (which doesn’t even have a brain), I for one actually read your entire comment and am impressed by the amount of detail you went into here. ^-^

[@griffinfoote1148]

@@BurntLad Thank you for reading! I totally agree that kids these days have goldfish brains 😅

[@theinsightfulllama]

I'm glad you liked it! One of my main goals was to make something enjoyable to the general public as well as fans, I'm glad that came across!

[@BurntLad]

@@griffinfoote1148 You’re welcome ^-^ Nah, it’s worse than that with them, goldfish are at least able to remember things from a few months ago. Children of this era are probably going to have barely existent memory by their 40s.

[@sweetsmoores]

This is really great! I love how Aunt Jane is rewritten to be more of person, Mike and Abby's relationship, and Vanessa's character. Also, I like how you written William, he felt more like a villain. There's so much other things I like aswell like the cameo scene, the soap opera, and Mike's dreams!

[@blueblurstudio]

This was the best rewrite I've seen for the fnaf movie. Every change made is for the better in my opinion. The story boards also look amazing. Truly great stuff right here !

[@theinsightfulllama]

Thank you!!

[@Frankies_Pizza_Planet]

3:06:15 the kitchen supplies in the background meant to look like devil horns is so genius oh my god

[@Mysteryz-li2pw]

I remember canceling my rewrite a while ago cause i thought it was just too late to do that stuff, and everybody had already started moving on to theorizing about the second movie. But seeing a fnaf movie rewrite as recent as this has made me realize it can still be done.

[@BurntLad]

@@Mysteryz-li2pw I’m sure yours will be great too ^^

[@TheSameGoobyGuy]

12:00 *Abby:* No matter what I do, nobody at school wants to be friends with me! *Mike:* I literally don’t have that problem at all but you know who no one likes? Hey Jane! *Aunt Jane:* First of all, how dare you.

[@Axocatanimation]

Yes

[@BurntLad]

@@TheSameGoobyGuy *Aunt June:* And second of all, *Ligma.*

[@sharynharvey2917]

What's Ligma?

[@BurntLad]

@ *Ligma Balls*

[@BunkerghustVA]

I miss Mao Mao so much 😭

[@imnotkota]

I love everything abut this video, this could have easily been a 10 minute video with not that much effort put into it. But you went out of your way to make an entire plot, storyboard, and have the viewers feel immersed, as if they're watching a literal movie. Are you sure you're not a professional writer? I just love how you managed to make each character not feel bland with the amount of depth they have and really went along with the dream sequences mike had in the original movie, was really invested. All while still feeling like a film from FNAF, letting you know that all the hard work on this project genuinely paid off.

[@thedrslimbo]

This is really good! While I do love the actual FNAF movie and think it’s a solid adaptation, I do understand that it has its obvious flaws. I loved how you kept that ominous horror from the first game that the movie lacked in, and I really like how you improved aunt Jane as a character. Really awesome stuff!

[@lolchipperson11person12]

This version of aunt Jane in the film ACTUALLY makes her getting hit by a car feel undeserved, it feels like she actually matters to the film now. Instead of just being a cardboard cutout of an obstacle. Good job! The only problem I think with this rewrite is the fact the script hinges on the narrator explaining characters feelings. Which isn’t to horrible most the time but some scenes are down right painful.

[@JJammy-od4qg]

They did write this (as far I know) with the context of it being a storyboard and not a actual performance. So them explicitly explaining how a character feels makes sense in that context

[@lolchipperson11person12]

@ true, but it really detracts from the whole ‘movie’ aspect of it.

[@thejurassicwonder2307]

This was very well written. I know you said you wouldn't do something like this for a VERY long time (and completely understandable, lol) but I do hope one day you'll do a sequel. But for now, what we got is awesome!

[@meowime5403]

THIS IS REALLY COOL!!! I honestly wish the og movie had a lot of these new plot points you brought in, I especially liked when Mike saw the day when each of the kids got kidnapped, it really was a way for us to become more familliar with them and springbonnie before the final confrontation

[@philardo]

This was actually insane storytelling. The gameplay is beautifully integrated into the story, something I'd have thought was impossible and every character feels so realistic and down to earth, which in the original movie, I only felt with Mike. Aunt Jane is probably my favorite character in this. She's flawed, she's difficult, but she tries so hard and the more time passed, the more I was actually rooting for her. I feel like you made all of the characters be active with something that makes sense, while removing less relevant elements, like the sitter and her friends, who broke into Freddy's. (Not that that would have worked in your story to begin with) Vanessa going to prison makes so much sense too, cause she obviously has to face consequences for what she did, but at the same time, it's so explicit that she has a future regardless and that's important too. Anyone who's not purely led by emotions knows that criminal justice should primarily be rehabilitative. Although that raises the question of what will you do with William, who could never be fixed. On that note, I'm literally at the edge of my seat, wondering what happened to him. I'm also wondering, what'll happen to everyone else. Even though the ending is great, I literally wish, we'd have gotten to see more and that's the mark of a great story. The purple car? Great touch too. I still call Afton purple guy, after all this time, cause I just associate him with that color. Lovely visuals in general! What an absolute blast to watch.

[@DuckyThree8]

You handled Dave so well I actually jumped at the sudden pan to him behind the school fence his conversations with Abby were soooo creepy I hope you continue to make more of these the story was absolutely amazing and I’d love to see it continue

[@JabariVenson]

I'm not going to lie that whole showdown between Vanessa and William is better than the one we got. Good job hope this gets a sequel 👍

[@exalpergames90]

Wow. I’m like, honestly genuinely impressed with the final fight scene. I can see how it can be controversial, but I think removing the spring Bonnie suit for the final fight was honestly a very good call. Because it’s always kinda bothered me that the final fight felt so… empty. And maybe the reason was that Afton pretty much could not move very much, making it feel a little awkward. Besides, he only wore the actual head for a very short time, so the majority of his screen time was just him in a comically oversized suit.

[@theinsightfulllama]

Thank you so much! I worked really hard on reworking the climax, I'm so glad you enjoyed it. The Spring Bonnie suit might make an appearance if I make another one of these, but in this story it would have felt a little goofy to suddenly have him in a rabbit suit, so we went with fire instead! :D

[@exalpergames90]

@ absolutely understandable! What you ended up with was amazing. You did a really good job and, hey, William doesn’t have to die… in the first movie.

[@BlartFanExplains]

Just finished this after 2 days, and I just wanted to say that this was phenomenal. The entire cast is reshaped to be so much more human and William is a FAR better and scarier threat than he was in the movie. I especially love how you handled the family conflict, it was so much more satisfying than what the movie did.

[@theinsightfulllama]

Tysm!!

[@JamesMakesFilms15]

I love this take on the film! it feels fresh yet familiar, scary yet comforting, realistic yet fantastical. The core elements of Five Nights at Freddy's are built upon. also, the amount of time it must have taken to put together the storyboard is truly inspiring to me. love the video, love the work! keep it up!

[@Spherical_cat]

This is genuinely amazing work. Writing a whole 3 1/2 hour long movie is just crazy

[@satsujin-shathewitchkingof6185]

This is amazing! Literally the only change I'd make is have "Dave" play Mike's voicemail to Abby so he can prove that he knows Mike,earning her trust. Scott should hire you to help him right the second movie. JK,unless? I mean,if you're old enough to be married then you're old enough to co-write a film

[@theinsightfulllama]

That's an interesting idea! I couldn't figure out how to properly integrate the phone guy/phone message aspect into the film, that could have been a good way to do it. Thank you for watching! :D

[@satsujin-shathewitchkingof6185]

@@theinsightfulllama No problem! Thank you for making this

[@CloudMouth27]

the fnaf movie but peak mike looks so handsome in your drawings he's so kissable

[@PhantomGato-v-]

So, so kissable.

[@imachair4681]

"Spectacular give me 14 more of them!" Seriously this was so good. The acting, the writing, the editing, the art, everything. I loved all the references (inmate number 987?). The parts with Afton and Abby were delightfully creepy, and I love how you portrayed aunt Kate. I can tell how much effort it took and it came together beautifully! If you ever make something like this (hell any video really, doesn't have to be 3.5 hours) I would watch it day one! This was such a fun way to spend my sick day lol!

[@theinsightfulllama]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Hopefully you feel better soon and I can see you on my future vids! :D

[@SeaSphynx]

Every 5-10 minutes throughout watching this, I could not help but sigh from frustration and disappointment because of the fact that we will never have a second chance at getting a fresh original fnaf movie that the general public could have had a good first impression with. We will forever have a mediocre fnaf 1 movie that, instead of being a great standalone movie, is really only enjoyable to super fans. Props to you for writing a masterful adaptation for fans and general audiences alike without watering down what makes fnaf such an amazing world. I hope Scott, Emma, Jason, and everyone involved in the sequel sees this video and is aware of how overly safe and flat they went about making the first movie. I really hope they paid attention to how many people were disappointed with the movie and work their butts off to make a movie that makes the first look like a joke by comparison

[@daviszdirector]

haven't finished this yet but i like how aunt jane isn't an evil, and is just kind of stuck up lmao. EDIT: Also I see alot of ppl asking why you didn't include the springlock scene, but im guessing if you ever made a sequel, thats where the springlock scene would be, right? plus there is the loose end with mike and abby's dad (who ig is henry)

[@Ashen_02]

Someone should animate this, with permission of course, this is one of the best story’s I’ve heard, not in the sense of fnaf related but the BEST, fantastic job!

[@-AAA-147]

A bunch of other people are saying they wished the springlock scene was in this but I'm actually super glad it wasn't! In the games, there was a build up of finding out the animatronics are possessed by kids, finding out who k[KZbin]ed them, and then seeing purple guy get his. Having all that in one movie diminishes the build up and mystery, so having Afton escape is a very smart choice (plus, in-game springlock failure>>>>>movie springlock failure).

[@theinsightfulllama]

Thank you! The big reason I held off on the springlock scene was that I felt it needed more buildup, I'm glad that came across! Thank you for watching, I'm glad you enjoyed!

[@-AAA-147]

@@theinsightfulllama No problem! Writer to writer, I see the work you put in to make all the characters tie back into the central themes. The relationships in this rewrite feel so much more real and relatable.

[@alphamarine4784]

This was fantastic! This was a 3 hour long animated fanfic and I loved it! The family stuff was way more interesting than the FNAF stuff, had the right blend of awesome moments, funny moments, scary moments, and heartwarming moments. I absolutely want more of this stuff in the future. I am looking forward to whatever you come up with next! Keep up the good work and I hope you have a great day!

[@Capivaragamer0907]

Wow. Just wow. This is 10X better than the actual movie. I really like How you changed the Characters. Mike and Abby have a better relashionship. Mike isnt changed a Lot, but its still a great character. Vanessa is way better than in the Movie. That ending battle was amazing. Aunt Jen, like the other characters, is very realistic. You can actually understand her motivations. William is fantastic. He's actually a constant treat and terryfing. You improved this Movie A LOT. The dream sequences, the "Gameplay" section in the office, everything is amazing. I'd like to see stuff that happened in the Movie back, like the First guard Death, the criminals getting killed, and the cupcake being a menace. Of course, there was no Springlock scene and "I'll always come back", but that can happen in the future it you did one of these for the third Movie. Solid 9/10. Id kill to see this as an actual movie.

[@theboywonderlol]

This is one of those rewrites that's so good that you gaslight yourself into think some of it actually happened in the movie, great work. Also it's funny that this video is 3 hours long because before the actual fnaf movie released some places were listing it as being around that length.

[@cyber5304]

this is beautiful why hasnt this exploded yet?

[@CaptainFordoCanonizingCommitee]

Because it hasn't been even a day

[@angeloh1704]

because long videos never get attention sadly :(

[@railfandepotproductions]

​@@angeloh1704sure...

[@Paris-q8l]

It’s so freaking amazing, I sat through the whole 3 and a half hours (don’t forget the end credits scene)

[@rosepedalproductions8467]

I watched this to the end, and this is genuinely a masterpiece. While I love the original movie to no end, this is GENUINELY a great film, while also being a great Fnaf movie. However, without the satisfaction of William getting springlocked, the climax is just a bit underwhelming. Don’t get me wrong, it’s still an amazing ending, but I feel the irony and narrative finesse of William being locked away in the very thing he used to kill the children would’ve just been the cherry on top. Still amazing, and an actual crime that this doesn’t have millions of views. Fantastic job!

[@pomelo9518]

Well, it leaves us hanging for the sequel since William got away.

[@RaulerRambles]

2:38:22 Left me fucking speechless, the little details like Michael and Abby talking about Hippos as a nods to the animatronics, Fritz running towards William reminding me of the GO GO GO minigame from Fnaf 2, the way that as another commenter said "Aunt Jane becomes an actual character" I love everything about this rewriting of the movie, and it is criminal that it doesn't get the attention it deserves. While others have said that the springlock scene not appearing might be bad, it can still be done in the future.

[@kimberlyboles3737]

The after credits scene was so cute. I loved this rewrite, it fleshed out the story and the pace was much better. I loved the actual movie but it did feel rushed. This was so good!!

[@klausing8]

I’m pretending that this was the real movie, what a great story and great visuals too! Aunt Jane’s character was amazing and the characterization of William Afton and the animatronics were just prefect.

[@Shadowdev5055]

This needs a sequel

[@Granados07]

Depends on how the actual sequel's gonna do.

[@JabariVenson]

​@@Granados07your right

[@buffoello]

this is WONDERFULLY DONE omg. you capture the tension and stakes that were missing in the movie and added layers upon layers of character development too! if this were the movie, it would have won so many awards. you definitely struck a balance in making it fun for new and old fans. i'm so excited to see what other projects you tackle! 💖

[@anthonygonzalez7712]

Damn, I love this way more than what we got! I’ll give the original credit tho, at times it did get some of those horror beats right. But at times the movie felt too kid friendly. This rewrite hits just right and feels more horror focused rather than the kid friendly vibes and I love that about this take on the movie. This is just me but one thing I would’ve loved to have seen in here and the original movie was the animatronics speaking. Those Creepypasta videos back in the day were some of the craziest FNAF media I found at the time and loved how the animatronics sounded as well as the atmosphere those videos gave, especially the series, “My Summer Job.” Every time they spoke I got a feeling of dread as to what would happen next. Overall, this is an amazing take on the movie. Hope for the best in future projects👍👌

[@theravehour]

I felt like i was watching a genuine movie. It was so investing and the character growth and the story is amazing. I feel someone should make this into a real movie Edit: This movie had me so invested I finished the entire thing in one sitting without noticing

[@KamikazeGames]

This whole video is on another level honestly. 3 and a half hours and i was gripped the whole time and couldn't look away. Its amazing how you managed to not only treat the source material with respect but also treat the audience with respect. You even managed to integrate pure fan service seamlessly into the overall narrative like that alone is impressive. I love everything about this and want you to be on staff for the next movie. I know its probably the last thing you want to hear after working on this for months but i really hope to see more content like this.

[@supermario-vt2rg]

Very well done on this, I really loved it and it was the kind of thing I wanted from the movie. It does stick to the source material and the vibe I'd always of imagined a fnaf movie to have but it also does what it has to do to be a good movie on its own, which is what I thought would have worked best for the real movie. I always had in my mind that they didn't have as much personal life stuff in it and that the movie would have been better off without aunt jane, but you reworked the character to make her a much better, fleshed out and more human/understandable character opposed to just a plot device. Same with the dream sequences, something which I thought the movie would have been better off with less of, but I like how you had it in between each night to make more room for animatronic action, and how you actually involved freddys in these sequences, and made it feel really creepy/more nightmarish opposed to the generic mess the dream sequences were in the movie. Aftons character, not much to be said here that hasn't already been said but it was done very well. Much more i could say but i probably dont even have the space here to It honestly really surprises me how you aren't a screen writer. This is the best rewrite I've seen so far and it depresses me how we didn't actually get this. If this pitch was used by a script writer who understood it well, it definitely would have been close to a 10/10. The one bit of criticism I have, which I guess comes down to my opinion is that I wish the springlock scene was there. Not only is it the end of the third game (seen as the main end for the trilogy) but I feel for the movie, it was the perfect closing point as it shows the villain being defeated. This, again, is down to my opinion but I hate when movies leave cliffhangers/things unanswered until the sequel, as they assume that it's going to be built into a trilogy, especially seeing as it might not be. I think that they should treat most movies, more namely the first one like it will be the last. Not only does it prevent disappointment if there's no sequel but it also means that all the best ideas will be used for that one movie and it will stand alone on its own. I feel there was opportunity for that as william was in the pizzeria, as that was a chance for him to put the spring bonnie costume on. Overall, absolutely amazing job though.

[@ericlepley1742]

Dude... sincerely, the highest props to you for this screenplay. I know im probably repeating everyone else's sentiments, but this isnt just fanfiction; This is CINEMA. What a way to breathe more life into the story and add so much depth to the characters as a whole. I've now stayed up to 3am to finish listening to this and it was well worth it from start to finish. The eerie suspense from night 1 onward made me squirm every time Mike left the office. The Nightmare Freddy sequence especially had my jaw on the floor. The incorporation of classic gameplay - flipping through cameras, Chica glaring through the window, Foxy LUNGING at Mike - proves that it CAN work and still make for a gripping story. I do agree with some commentor's ideas for possible changes near the ending, but I look forward to seeing your vision pan out. You kept it close enough to the original film while upgrading the muddy parts to the nth degree, and this has become probably one of my favorite film critiques or video essays of all time. I hope none of the negativity detracts you from knowing what a great job you've done. I hope you'll continue making more banger content going forward, and that you recieve the exposure and praise a work of art like this deserves. Amazing work, Llama.

[@AY8ROOK]

14:47 Can already tell you've knocked it out of the park by how good this scene is that's totally devoid of the murderbot gimmick and any fanservice. Afton preying on Abby is an incredible idea; and using the dreams as a stand-in for the minigames. It's a wonder they didn't make Aunt Jane more like your version seeing as Mike genuinely isn't fit to be a parental guardian. It must have been out of a desire to make us root for Mike to succeed even though we would've anyway just on account of him being down on his luck. Yeah, this is better than the one we got. It feels a lot more like it's trying to be a definitive Five Nights at Freddy's movie and as good as it can be rather than holding back for the sake of it being a potential franchise. Albeit, it seems like a lot-probably too much-content for the runtime of a single movie.

[@theinsightfulllama]

A lot of the runtime is due to me describing things, if this were a film that would all be conveyed just visually so the actual film version would theoretically be much shorter! Of course, it might also theoretically still be too long even then lol. I'm glad you liked it, thanks for watching! :D

[@davinasaur73]

Ohhhhhh the dreams are minigames that’s fantastic

[@SmokeyMarshmallows]

This is so much better than what we got. Honestly the character development the impending doom of the animatronic the flashback scenes. Mike not sleeping on the job making him look terrible...

[@Pygargue00fr]

I really like this version of the story. All of the characters have really been improved upon especially Vanessa, Jane and William. Vanessa's whole confrontation with her father and her implicit role as his reluctant follower are such an improvement! It's so much potential for a sequal!

[@connieflorey4288]

I absolutely loved your writing for this. You gave the characters more fleshed out personalities, you gave the plot a lot more exposition, and you the shock factor you added to give the story more horror filled that the original lacked. 10/10 in my book. If you're planning on doing other rewrites in the future I will be super excited to view them!

[@armancegelaude]

What a great video! What a job! William who we see putting predatory techniques in place. The discovery of the story of the missing children via dreams and newspaper clippings. The family dynamic between Mike and his aunt that makes sense. The mystery surrounding their father. Oh my, it was absolutely brilliant, thank you very much for sharing your vision with us!

[@theinsightfulllama]

You're welcome, and thank you for watching and enjoying! 😊

[@SammyRobinson62232]

1:40:52 I’m this far in. And man is this amazing compare to the actual movie. As the actual Fnaf movie feels very shallow and undeveloped. I also really love how you did the aunt character. As while she isn’t “the aunt of the year” she’s still trying and just want the best for Abby. Which I believe raises the stakes even more than the original. As both Mike and the audience shows how much of a better fit the aunt is in taking care of Abby. Along with explaining why Mike keeps going to the place

[@SR_Helios]

I don't know if id have this instead of what we got, but id definetally want this as like a seperate book/graphic novel. I love the changes to Aunt Jane. She went from my least favorite character to second favorite. Only thing that left me a little disapointed is the lack of a spring bonnie final boss battle like the movie had. But its not like the lack of it is a big deal. Over all, this was really good. Definetally coming back to your channel after this one.

[@SR_Helios]

Also, at first i was mad that there wasnt a matpat chameo in the diner but the library scene more than paid up for it xb

[@sunnykaddatz285]

I think I actually like this version a bit better honestly!! This was so excellently done. Someone NEEDS to tag Scott in this! You should be writing for the second movie!

[@patelurvisa]

I really love the detail with the chica kid and as they were about to enter the parts and service she pointed to the chica poster on the wall to signify that chica is her favorite charecter and therefore is the charecter she possess great stuff

[@reacher3535]

I actually ended up watching through this whole thing, i quite enjoyed this. This entire project was time well spent, i approve.

[@EthanTheRenegade1313]

I don't usually comment, but in this case I have to make an exception. Your version is incredible. It feels like a more cohesive plot, the characters act like actual people (especially Aunt Jane who goes from a hate sink into a relatable human), the shit with Dave and Abby is absolutely CHILLING, and combines elements from the original games and lore into the version of the film we got. Kudos to you.

[@thefawfulexpress9617]

I really liked how William got more screen time in this than the original movie.

[@soupsansyt]

Dude I hated aunt Jane in the actual movie, so having her be kinder is a amazing change of pace! Having Abby with aunt Jane keeps things interesting, and the animatronics are actual threats! The best part is mike pieces together what happened to the kids himself along with why the animatronics are moving. Phenomenal story!

[@EdwinShy3200]

I liked the OG FNAF movie but I prefered this take on it and honestly think it was better

[@aricks7286]

I've waited for this for a year and you did not disappoint!!!!!!! I'm so impressed to see this video format and your analysis ❤❤

[@creekkid42]

really well done! I liked the added relationship dynamics between jane, abbey, and mike; the increased afton screen time and his creepiness, and I especially liked the "it's me" moment and the climactic scenes.

[@ZebraDragon21]

This has got to be one of my favorite fan-creations I've ever seen come from the fnaf community. I cannot express how amazing this is, and I would LOVE some kind of sequel script or at least follow-up, because I'm genuinely invested and intrigued with the way you took the plot. Also, because nobody's mentioned it yet; The thing about Mike's dad being involved. My first impulse was to think that Afton had killed the father after convincing him to leave his family, but now I'm almost sure his father must be Henry, which is such a brilliant plot idea and it makes so much sense. I know it's a theory for the actual movie, but it feels so much more natural in this re-write. The foreshadowing is immaculate. Also, I know a lot of people in here are upset that you didn't write in a springlock scene, and I, too, was disappointed at first, but after that ending I think it works better this way. I feel like the added springlock failure stuff would make the already tense ending cluttered. And it gives fans something more solid to look forward to in the next movie. Overall, great work! As an artist, the fact you storyboarded most of this was particularly impressive. I put this on in the background while I played Stardew Valley, it was absolutely transcendent. Great visuals, great narration, great storytelling. 10/10

[@bella_daze3092]

Once again, I’m just gonna say this because I just spent three hours watching this entire video, easily one of the best videos and best rewrites I’ve ever sat down to watch.❤❤❤ it’s 1 AM as I’m typing this, but goddamnit it was worth it

[@TriplicateTrey]

“Not a professional storyboard artist” Proceeds to draw incredibly detailed storyboards that perfectly conveys what you’re saying

[@momerizer9317]

I would’ve added a end credit scene of William turning the news channel off and with him talking as the screen faded out showing him in a brand new fixed spring Bonnie outfit and with him ending his talking with his phrase “I always come back”.

[@avat2715]

The way my jaw dropped MULTIPLE TIMES while watching this is insane!! ITS JUST SO GOOD

[@vinkyartz7472]

This was VERY impressive. Sometimes I struggle to watch longer videos but with this I was invested the entire time. No shade to the actual movie because I liked it (despite it's many flaws), but this was 10x more interesting and well written. It still captures the feel from the movie, but builds on and fixes so many things that the story overall feels more cohesive. The references to the game were expertly utilized too. So much to say still, but overall, incredible work!!

[@theclownlyimp]

I had to stop after that intense dream sequence. The sharp cut to Abby in her fort was immaculate. Just stellar writing 🥹

[@ikuragamr7345]

I’m writing my own FNaF story currently, and for what I’ve been working on, and tearing apart the lore and story piece by piece, this is really awesome. Keep up the great work!

[@ikuragamr7345]

Certain aspects of this are eerily similar😂 I’m not committing plagiarism I promise

[@Frodrigo_Spurrit]

W pfp

[@that_faint_melody]

guys this could be the next best animated fan movie aughh i'm so invested...i've been watching this on and off for the past day and i just can't get enough!! this is just so well done! i love love love how you draw the animatronics, too...they're just stylized enough to really bring the uncanny factor the movie had!!

[@theinsightfulllama]

Tysm!!

[@blocc_nova746]

I loved this version of the story, i think it'd more realistically become a novel than a theatrical release but I absolutely love how you made the characters compelling all in their own way. You're a great storyteller.

[@bungler3000]

this is an amazing video!! I love how williams springbonnie suit is held off for a much more intense and engaging final fight. it's incredible! I think if you were to ever make another having william be springlocked there would be perfect!

[@G.N.F462]

man I loved every second of this, it feel so ground yet fit so well with room open for a more in the story. I love how you made more deeper connection with Michal and his aunt instead of the aunt being more of cartoonishly evil character in the film. seriously this like on of the best rewrite for the film, and does great job of building on horror. great work

[@alfiewhitestone8676]

With the opening, I like the idea that we don’t see the animatronics fully,. For example, for Foxy in the opening, where we see his silhouette or shadow. (P.S. this is incredible!! I would really love to see your own /faithful take on the Slender-Man movie, mainly because it’s 6ft under from the start.)

[@jeedoh]

UGH im so glad you rewrote aunt jane. when she was hit by william i was genuinely upset and afraid that she died so hats off to you :]

[@kikiqt2442]

I've been spending the past few days watching this bit by bit and let me just say it’s AMAZING!! I love what you did with the story! Especially with the characters like William and aunt Jane giving them more flushed out personality’s! It was so good! I’d love to hear your thought process behind some of the changes and things you added! 😁😁

[@omegaproductions23]

this is an amazing rewrite love the artwork and I LOVE how you made Aunt Jane a good decent character instead a character where supposed to hate, and i love the relationship between Aunt Jane and Mike sure they don't like each other but they do somewhat show a mutual respect with each other, again amazing work!😁

[@TheIntelligentBear]

This is really cool! I can’t wait to see more!

[@Loganisagamer2005]

FANTASTIC! 10/10! SO WHOLESOME! SO SATISFYING! Perfect work! I get Scott and BlumHouse had their own plans for how they wanted this to go and they probably didn’t have that big of a budget but… WHY WASN’T THIS THE DIRECTION THAT THE MOVIE WENT IN?!?!?!

[@Seth_And_Co.]

This was AMAZING! You did such an amazing job on this

[@Vanderboom97]

THIS IS SO AMAZING!!!! I would honestly love to see it play out as a show (similar to Chucky) rather than a movie, as the detail and story could be amazing!

[@andrewblissett2211]

This is so much better. Like, genuinely. This is the version of the movie we should've gotten.

[@eggnite4144]

only thing I wouldve changed is having William in the suit at the end just because that was kinda the highlight of the actual movie. He doesnt even have to get springlocked or anything I wouldve just preferred if he had it on

[@sparksaturn1731]

man this was hype, i really hope you make a sequel to this rewrite or maybe even a rewrite of the fnaf2 movie after it comes out either way this was fantastic

[@wzrdwill]

THE CAMEO INCLUDED IN EVEN THE REWRITE IS ABSOLUTELY BEAUTIFUL

[@sabianthemovieandgamelover229]

I just finished watching it. To be honest here, I actually really enjoyed this. I wasn’t expecting 3 and a half hours long. I started last night and finished it throughout the day. It made me wonder what would happen next, and i was thinking about it all day. I was a little dumb to think Dave was an ordinary guy, but with the purple car. That should have been a red flag, when I saw him hit Jane and kidnap Abby. That sudden feeling hit that he was evil, and when Vanessa said his real name was William Afton i was like ‘I knew it!’. And I actually liked Jane in this one more than i did in the other one, she was a lot nicer to Mike and Abby, and her whole personality was a lot better. Plus my favourite part was the final battle towards the end with the pizzeria on fire. Mike, Vanessa were badly hurt, and Abby made it out just fine, and now with Freddy’s gone, no one has anything to worry about. But i was quite surprised at the end when we saw Vanessa in jail. I thought she was a recovering guard, but when i saw what she was wearing, I discovered she was an inmate. But this film was really good. For 3 and a half hours, you deserve a reward. So The Insightful Llama. Well done for your hard work, and I’m going to give this film an 8.5/10.

[@theinsightfulllama]

Haha, I'm glad you enjoyed!

[@SeBaStIanaToR_101]

I like how Vanessa acts like she’s trying to get on Mikes nerves