IELTS Essay - How to Write an Introduction (Using Paraphrasing)

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[@davidaycardo5012]

Stumbled upon this video 2 days before my exam and all the while being taught by the review center I go to, to paraphrase. I had to make last minute changes to the way I write. Effective paraphrasing is the best tip here and an answer should start from the 1st sentence. I got an 8 in my writing. Thanks, guys.

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

That's great news, David! Congratulations!

[@drali003]

Finally a video that actually clarifies the mystery of paraphrase.

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You are just outstanding! You have explained all what exactly we need to write an introduction. Thanks a lot.

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[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Thanks for the support, Gurwinder! Well done on your IELTS result!

[@ratneshkhurana7228]

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[@asmamsalih4601]

Great work . Thanks alot actually paraphrazing is so difficult but you do good explanation and the rest of the work up to ourself .👍👍

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Thanks for the support, Asma! You're right--it is hard to do it well. The most important point is to realise that it's not about words; it's about ideas.

[@jkpoorathil]

Until I watch this video , I was under the belief that we need to repeat the question in diffrent ways to convince the examiner .

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[@Alex-zx7gh]

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[@preyeibulu23]

thanks alot, paraphrasing has always been my major challenge

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

You're welcome, Preye! Glad it was helpful for you.

[@bunnyroy3373]

Traffic jams in urban areas lead to severe health issues such as lung cancer, asthma, and other respiratory diseases. In general, this affects people’s quality of life, including dissatisfaction of people regarding living their life in order. The solution to these problems is fast and comfortable public transportation. To begin with, traffic congestion contributes significantly to adverse health issues. The major cause of traffic congestion is the enormous counting of the moving vehicles on the roads so that people have to wait more hours during rush hours. As a result, vehicles emit a large number of chemical gases such as carbon dioxide and monoxide, which are the main cause of air pollution and degrade air quality. Therefore, asthma is not an uncommon disease among people. For instance, my cousin's brother has to go to Delhi for his further studies, although he did not have any health problems in his village before going to Delhi, now he is facing respiratory issues for 2 years. Therefore, he said to his parents,” he will come back as soon as possible. Similarly, traffic jams affect people’s quality of life. The quality of life is the perceived satisfaction of people regarding living their life in order so that increasing dissatisfaction among people is caused by traffic congestion. To exemplify, people get more frustrated and annoyed, whenever they are stuck in traffic jams during the day. Thus, it not only disrupts the people’s daily routines but also their lifestyles. Consequently, people face problems like wastage of time, when they spent more hours on the roads and they have to delay to reach their destinations such as workplace, meeting,s, and activities. For example, I recently missed my government exam because of a traffic jam, which I had to face in Ludhiana city where my exam venue was, the exam was conducted by government officials. Furthermore, to eradicate this problem government should take a concrete step. This step can be for the condition of public transportation as public transportation is time-consuming and uncomfortable. People have to travel by their vehicle when the public transportation does not match their expectations. Government should promote public transportation by making it fast and comfortable. For example, in Delhi, the traffic congestion has improved after launching the metro. Everybody prefers to go by this now because it is not only providing fast and comfortable services but also giving air conditioning service. In conclusion, traffic congestion in towns not only increases acute health issues, and lung cancer but also influences people’s quality of life. I explain in the above paragraphs that I certainly agree with this notion. The solution to this issue can be removed by promoting public transportation

[@godservant6450]

Awesome explanation

[@palmtreepalmtree4921]

Thanks a bunch both of you

[@madhurichakraborty1254]

Thanks a lot for your video as it will definitely help to grab high score. I feel it seems very challenging while watching these videos but with practice it comes out automatically.

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[@prawashasingh9242]

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[@PankajMagan]

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[@rupindermahal9526]

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[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Thanks for the support, Mantasha!

[@ankhisingha4004]

It was nice video,but I understand clearly.

[@zainnarb_3699]

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[@tractorlovers1092]

is it important to use connectors in the starting of all sentences ? and is it important to write at least 2 reasons in every body paragraph or explaining one reason clearly ?

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Good questions. If you're aiming for a score above 6.0, I would ignore any advice that says, "Always do X" or "Always do Y," unless it's specifically mentioned in the IELTS scoring scheme. You can't write a good essay from a template! Use connectors where it makes sense to do so in order to show the connections between your ideas. In your body paragraphs, make sure you have one central focus, which you justify with your supporting ideas. It's not about having a fixed number of reasons.

[@daphnehatitye2808]

thank you for properly explaining about paraphrasing

[@sabiasulthana1104]

At first thank you for effective video.you explain the cause very clearly. I hope it will help me

[@lalarush]

very useful explanation, now let's see how it works on my ielts in November :)

[@santoshsantu4159]

how did it worked for you?

[@pixiefrequencydnasublimina8307]

Paraphrase is best trick to show that we got the topic correctly.. If we start without paraphrase it feels like we are starting from the middle so does the examiner.. Paraphrase is not there in the criteria but better strategy to begin an essay.

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

You're right in that paraphrase is the most common starting strategy, so in many cases it's what the examiner expects to see. However, the points from the video still stand: paraphrase is not strictly necessary, and it can do more harm than good if you do a bad job.

[@ayeshakhan1051]

Excellent presentation , well organized content ❤ thank you so very much for this .

[@RupakBarua]

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[@dbslices]

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[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Thanks for the comment! Glad you found it useful!

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[@vkcg100]

I don't know about your English speaking efficiency but you need to improve your writing far better. 'it helps to improve my English speaking' (or 'spoken English' ) not as you wrote.

[@ainnajmi7178]

12.00 - 12.36 I find this very helpful. Thank you very much.

[@hemachandrasekaran2535]

please provide the complete essay with the body paragraphs and a conclusion so that i get an idea of a standard essay to score more than 7 band

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Hi Hema, we have some lessons that might help you: www.oxfordonlineenglish.com/?s=ielts+writing.

[@roseykisha9982]

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[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Thanks for watching, Rosey!

[@jalaltaghavian]

hey Rosey

[@tjemma2131]

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[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Thanks for watching, Tianjiao!

[@robelgebresilasie3497]

Thats great thank you

[@barsalama6944]

awesome tips...really helpful...

[@hariharasudan8389]

It was very useful...Please upload how to conclude the paragraph...

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Thanks for the comment and the suggestion, Harihara!

[@fateme4015]

this video is so useful

[@aamerkhubaib]

…therefore,“ begin with the end in mind, and essay has to be an integrated whole”.

[@sainulabid8661]

What about the structure of an IELTS introduction?? Hook Body Thesis

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Your introduction doesn't really need a structure. It should only be 2-3 sentences. A high-scoring introduction needs an intelligent paraphrase and a clear thesis statement. If you're a good writer and you have spare time, adding a hook can help you to use some interesting language, but it's not necessary, even for high scores.

[@moneypatialvi8246]

Thanks sir and ma'am

[@mathewjoseph6849]

Your words at 6:51 minutes of video, "No paraphrase is better than bad paraphrase" or is it " No paraphrase is worst than bad paraphrase". Was that a mistake? I got confused..please clarify.

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

"No paraphrase is better than a bad paraphrase."

[@mathewjoseph6849]

@@Oxfordonlineenglish1 Thank you.

[@mohamedithriesm9669]

Hello guys, First of all I would like to express my sincere gratitude for making this useful video. You have just shown only the paraphrasing part but the ways to solve the problems was not covered. Outline and thesis are missing in your video. Please do add outline and thesis sentences as well so that the video will be completely useful. Regards, Mohamed

[@issameharchane3009]

What about the solutions part ? shouldn't it be mentioned too along with the problems in the introduction ?

[@dabbiana1999]

I grasped all that you explained. I learned the methods of writing good essay but the problem is I dont have any idea to every question lol. So how to give good and effective answer to a hard question. Its taking you to study around whats happening, whats going on, and ideas needs to be supported with facts. That sample question already gave me a hard time to think for an answer 😂😂😂

[@KSTEPS]

Hi , can I get more examples for introduction as well conclusion?

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Hi Kinjal, our other lessons might help you: www.oxfordonlineenglish.com/?s=ielts+essay.

[@aryankazal8754]

Watch this video at 1.25 speed for more focus...!✌️

[@jayamathew5355]

What about the ' how can you solve it' part in the introduction

[@cicbarclub1729]

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[@ratulbasak8864]

Introduction has given a clear picture of automation being a soaring concern to mankind; however, in conclusion can someone differ to the idea and support the fact that there is no other solution but accepting the prolification of technology?

[@lanphong9534]

Thank you

[@sinistergeek]

bad parahase huh!! good one thankx for the viedo....i got clear!!

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Glad we could help! Thanks for watching!

[@lobsangyonten9414]

Thanks you every one and it's really helpful to us

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Thanks, Lobsang! Glad you found it helpful!

[@leonardoaquino2387]

Amazing lesson!!! Thank you very much!!!

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Thanks for watching, Leonardo! Glad it helped you!

[@akashsaini7894]

Hii sir please give me some tips to improve IELTS reading module?

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

HI Akash. Sure. We have some IELTS reading preparation lessons to help you. You can find them here: www.oxfordonlineenglish.com/free-ielts-preparation-lessons.

[@solap7096]

What about the part that mention 'how can this problem be solved'. I believe it should be part of your thesis statement.

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Hi Sola, yes! We've included that part in the thesis statement with the following sentence: 'This is a serious problem, and I will discuss how we can solve it'. If it helps, feel free to visit the lesson's webpage and you can see the full script: www.oxfordonlineenglish.com/ielts-essay-paraphrasing.

[@jackwangbao]

But you didn't tell me how to solve it. You just say I will discuss how to solve it. Is that enough? Should I include specific solutions in the introduction?

[@rehanyousaf9761]

It's easy to write an introduction of Problem/solution essay. Can you Please make a video or guide us how to write the introduction of other types of essays. For instance, Discussion essays, Opinion essays particularly the essay which doesn't require your opinion. Thanks

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Hi Rehan, thanks for watching. We might be able to do that in the future, so keep watching! In the mean time, we have other helpful writing lessons you might enjoy: kzbin.info/aero/PLD6t6ckHsrubRV7Wb42ggOhVNrBRAte13.

[@renatahellarad5046]

Actually I'm a doing an a essay right now omg it's the destiny lol

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Thanks for watching, Renata! Hope it helped with your essay!

[@malizganimhango]

Something I am not getting from your vedio is 1 you started by saying there is no need to paraphrase but you ended up describing paraphrasing instead of helping on how to answer the IELTS question

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Exactly! The lesson was about paraphrasing. If you'd like a lesson on how to answer the question, please see our other lessons: www.oxfordonlineenglish.com/ielts-writing-task-2-essay.

[@jonsnow4335]

Sounds a bit risky. Anyone tried this way in exam and let me know how the result was?

[@srmback]

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[@mohanadmohanad2523]

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[@bhargavpatel1936]

Thank u sir and ma’m

[@ahmadhamdan9496]

But the introduction doesnt include second part of the task, which is how to solve the problem.

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Good point, but this isn't meant to be a complete introduction; the lesson is focused on paraphrasing and how to start your introduction. You're correct that you should add a second sentence clearly indicating the overall direction of your essay, with reference to all key points in the task.

[@ahmadhamdan9496]

Oxford Online English thanks

[@jayamathew5355]

Is the example you showed for a band 7 and above complete? I mean, what about the solutions? Please be more clear ..,.

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Hi Jaya. These were examples of paraphrasing throughout an essay. We have other lessons that explain the development of a full essay. Have you seen them yet? You can find them on our website: www.oxfordonlineenglish.com/write-band-9-ielts-essay, www.oxfordonlineenglish.com/ielts-writing-task-2-essay.

[@gurindersingh5800]

tell me from where I can learn true synonyms of words?

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

A thesaurus is a great place to start, Gurinder!

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[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Thanks for watching, Safar!

[@hariharasudan8389]

It is due technological development , instead of man every work is done by machines such as robots, and computers. In this context, the important causes and appropriate solutions are examined here. Can I write this way?

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Hi Harihara. Here are a few suggestions for you: 1) 'Technological development has caused...' not, 'It is due technological development'. 2) '...work to be done by machines such as robots and computers, instead of humans,' not, '...work is done by machines such as robots, and computers'. Hope this helps!

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[@RajwinderSingh-um7hr]

What is the meaning of register here.you said register and collocation are equally important.plz reply

[@jayamathew5355]

Register means the type of words that you use that is suitable for a formal setting and informal setting.. By that I mean, for academic essays we should use academic words only.

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[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Thanks for the comment, Gilberto!

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[@ajeeshnair1927]

It would be better if you come up with writing an easy step by step, how to develop each sentence. How do you stop a body paragraph? How to connect the last sentence of the body paragraph to the first sentence of the second body paragraph. How to write a conclusion. If you really want to help the viewers, you have to think about it.

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Thanks for watching, Ajeesh! This lesson is specifically about paraphrasing. We have other lessons about writing an essay, step-by-step! You can browse through more of our lessons here: www.oxfordonlineenglish.com/ielts-writing-linking-words-phrases, www.oxfordonlineenglish.com/ielts-writing-task-2-essay.

[@paslawarashish8774]

Vedio starts:7:15

[@feroz1212011]

Robots and computers can now perform any task a humans does. They are capable enough to be replaced with them in our jobs. This kind of technology improvement can bring many serious issues. In the below essay, we are going to see the potential problems and how to avoid them.

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Nice, Feroz! Here are a few tips: 1) 'They are capable to be replaced with them...'. This is a little confusing, what do 'they' and 'them' refer to? 2) 'We are going to see' is not bad, but it is better to use something like 'I am going to discuss' to explain that it is your own argument. Hopefully that helps!

[@zhrwabaz6604]

Hi first of all thank u for your helpful videos Then i have questions can i paraphrase in this way : She accused me of breaking her glass Changes to : She made an accusation of breaking her glass against me or she made an accusation that I broke her glass

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Hi there. Your second example sentence would be good.

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[@anandajayalathfernando5118]

But all the "IELTS" publications by Cambridge University indicates the paraphrasing is a good way to start the writing. Why is that?

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

The point isn't whether paraphrasing is a good way to start or not. The point is that it's not always necessary, and that it's better not to do it than to do it badly. A lot of IELTS students get very fixated on the introduction, which is a less important part of the essay, and then have less time for other, more important things (e.g. planning, writing well-developed body paragraphs, etc.).

[@anandajayalathfernando5118]

@@Oxfordonlineenglish1 If paraphrasing is not the way to start what should be included in the first paragraph?

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

The whole video is an answer to your question :)

[@ruksanagill586]

wao it's an amazing idea..actually I was demotivated due to 5 band in writing but I got 6.5 in reading 7 in listening and 6 in speaking but I can't understand how I get 6.5 in writing 😔😔i hope this idea will helpful for me

[@sumitragyawali1577]

Did it??

[@yamenaawan3576]

why this paraphrasing doesn't contain anything regarding solution to the problems, Question clearly asked how it could be solved?

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Hi Yamena, when you 'paraphrase', that means you re-phrase what is already written or said somewhere. This is a lesson in correctly re-phrasing items, not actually solving the problem.

[@ramzsheno6209]

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[@amjadshall225]

What about more than 7 I'm intending to get 7.5 band

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Even for higher scores, remember that the introduction is the least important part of your essay. Plan carefully and write a coherent answer, and it's possible to get higher scores if your language skills are adequate. If you need help, our teachers can help you to prepare; try a demo class here: www.oxfordonlineenglish.com/book-first-class

[@sahar-os2cy]

This video does something very irresponsible. It starts off by emphasizing how you should NOT paraphrase at all, but then in the second half of the video goes about HOW to PARAPHRASE. The proper way this video should have been framed was: You should NOT paraphrase IN THIS SPECIFIC WAY, or HERE IS A BAD PARAPHRASE. But to make a blanket statement and say "DONT PARAPHRASE AT ALL" will only confuse many students and leave them clueless. Bad presentation

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Thanks for the comment, Sahar. Maybe it could be clearer, but what you say is not actually what we say in the video. We're not saying 'Don't paraphrase ever.' The point is conditional: if your target score is

[@sahar-os2cy]

@@Oxfordonlineenglish1 at minute 1:13 you make a clear and direct statement "You DONT need to paraphrase," and you built on to that, without ever saying, "IF you are band 6 and below student," this conditional clause makes a HUGE difference to your statement. I understand the point you were trying to make, but my confusion lies within that initial general statement in not needing to paraphrase at all. So if in the essay scoring scheme they do not ask the students to paraphrase at all, then why go on about teaching the proper paraphrasing throughout the video? Thanks :)

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

@@sahar-os2cy I see! Those are good points, and I agree that it could have been clearer. Once again, I do appreciate the feedback. I'd like to add three things here: 1) The score scheme says nothing about paraphrasing; it's not a direct requirement for any band score. 2) The introduction is not generally a big factor in your band score unless you get something wrong (which many IELTS candidates do, unfortunately). To look at it another way, a bad introduction can hurt your score, but a good introduction won't help it much. BUT: 3) IELTS essays are generally taught in a certain way, and IELTS examiners, who read the essays *very* fast when scoring them, expect essays to follow certain patterns. Since so many sources say 'paraphrase the question', examiners may expect you to do this and may not take the time to understand what you're doing if you take a different approach. Plus, paraphrasing is not useless; it can demonstrate range of vocabulary and also show the examiner that you understand the nuances of the question. (3) is a difficult point to deal with, for both IELTS candidates and teachers. IELTS examiners (based on conversations I've had) are not entirely consistent with how they interpret scoring criteria.

[@sahar-os2cy]

@@Oxfordonlineenglish1 My bad, once I watched the entire video, it all made sense, I guess I rushed to a conclusion before watching the full video, and your explanation also helped me see where I went wrong. Sorry about that, and great video!

[@jalaltaghavian]

again i'm confused, my teacher says it's better to paraphrase the topic and here says dont. when I compare, I prefer to follow your path

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Hi Jalal, some people will say it's better but in reality it's better not to. Thanks for watching!

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Maybe one day in the future, Adarsh! Thanks for watching.

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[@wilsione]

So how to write introduction without using paraphrasing?

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

Hi there, we have other lessons that can give you more guidance on this: www.oxfordonlineenglish.com/?s=ielts+essay.

[@rguney34]

Hi, what is IELTS essays?

[@Oxfordonlineenglish1]

IELTS is an exam people take to study or work abroad. You can find more information here: www.ielts.org/en-us/.

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