FNAF: SB REWRITTEN - CH 8 (AO3 WRITTEN VERSION AVAILABLE!)

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[@kiwiqueen138]

Yay, Gregory gets a snack break. I’m really excited for what I have planned for Monty, it’s the point where the rewrite really starts to get off the rails lol. Link to next episode: kzbin.info/www/bejne/l4GTm6GhfL6Ioac Link to previous episode: kzbin.info/www/bejne/pqabpWCaaMh9fLs Link to full playlist: kzbin.info/aero/PLKMzqZUiHWUjzZj0jfJym1CTORp4rdEDD LINK TO WRITTEN VERSION: archiveofourown.org/works/45445291?view_full_work=true

[@LIZZANIMA1]

Ypur amazing!

[@icyferaligatr9908]

Hey hey hey its me back again. Oh my I wasn't expecting this episode to be as big as it was considering the last bresk between animatronics was only a bit eventful. But Gregory's parent/s being abusive isn't a suprise considering how he acts around any kind of authority figure. And James being his friend that was either killed or taken is heartbreaking. Also him and Freddy's relationship is adorable. So happy that they are finally becoming a duo. And gosh Freddy and Bonnie's past is just so so sad. And the fact that Monty is just a replacement for Bonnie due to an event that happened with him not being useful enough is just so awful. And clearly his remains went missing after something happened, so thered sn interesting mystery. And finally, i'm glad that guy got fired for putting Bonnie through that. Monty's chapter is probably going to be the scariest, with him being actively aggressive and currently wrecking shit. Can't wait till next week! -Icy

[@TheAwesomeFellas]

Do poppy Playtime chapter 2 l

[@cycloneabsol9405]

"Her generic evil plan" wow, ok Gregory, going straight for the insults I see

[@WizardTrains]

I got a bad feeling about Monty. Already getting a JAWS vibe from that water comment. This was a great video! So far this has improved on every gripe that I’ve had with the game’s story. That and I also want to take the time to mention how amazing your redesigns for the animatronics are. You made Chica somewhat look like a chicken to the point that I doubt people would mistake her for a duck this time around. Making Roxy have black fur and run the laser tag was genius as that provides another source to her ego. And giving Freddy’s stomach hatch a different purpose as a ride along attraction really adds to his dad/himbo vibe.

[@squiddyflip3039]

I like imagining this as an animated show, scary bits and everything.

[@squiddyflip3039]

In your art style, to be specific-

[@UniLandyt]

I really like how we get to see more of Freddy's and Gregorys dynamic and how Freddy really cares for him, it's really sweet

[@cycloneabsol9405]

I just realized something: 44 chapters. That is EXACTLY as many as there were in SU Rewritten. I assume that's just a little happy accident, but I still think it's fun.

[@nottknormal]

"Whatever you do, stay out of the water.Ooooooo~~ I can't wait to see what Monty's section will be like!! I am loving this rewrite, it is so good!

[@mythicaldrawer7072]

I couldn't help but notice something. If Vanessa (The White Rabbit) wanted to kill Gregory, wouldn't she have done it as soon as they got to Lost & Found? but after thinking a bit and remembering what she said after she tossed Gregory into Lost & Found? "Congratulations, you just nominated yourself to be the second test subject." At first, I didn't get it, then I realized she might be talking about testing for Renment, possibly for rebuilding Afton. But the back of my mind keeps nagging me about something that moon had said Gregory was a robot of Aftons and being concerned with him hurting Vanessa (The person who is being mind controlled by Glitchtrap/William Afton/Burntrap). Maybe Moon doesn't know that Vanessa was working with William, but I can't help there's something more here than was is led to believe. Well Done KiwiQueen, you make the narrative as confusing as Fnaf, and in a good way.

[@kiwiqueen138]

I can make things a little easier by explaining: in the story, there’s no glitchtrap stuff, Vanessa has her own motives. But I’m glad that you picked up on “congratulations, you just nominated yourself to be the second test subject”, I haven’t seen anyone point it out yet lol

[@RudyTheCannibal]

I wonder once you've finished this rewrite, I could try and come up with a rewrite for Ruin. I have a couple of ideas on how to make it work.

[@axolotlqueen4812]

44 CHAPTERS!?!?!?! And here I thought it wouldn’t be long till we were close to the end😅

[@SPG69]

THIS WILL TAKE A WHILE….

[@Crazyinsanemonsterofkittens]

Freddy missing his boyfriend 😢

[@spiritofchaos58]

GOODNESS. So they basically performed surgery on Bonnie without any medication. No WONDER he can't sleep! Imagine how terrifying it would be to the others, seeing Bonnie be decommissioned because he had a natural reaction to that sort of event. Knowing that if they step out of line, they could be next. No wonder Chica sounded so terrified. I really like your decision to forgo the mystery of Bonnie's fate. Having him be decommissioned really highlights the brutality of the company, and having the reason be over a mental breakdown really highlights how the humanity of the animatronics is denied. I'm super excited for the Monty area. It's pretty interesting that this is the first time Freddy's actually willing to admit his friends can be dangerous. Maybe Monty's actually been dangerous in the past, maybe Freddy's just biased against him for being Bonnie's replacement. It'd be pretty hard to fit in when you're introduced as "the replacement for the friend your bosses murdered"

[@Wowz8]

Was rewatching this, and in retrospect, this is terrifying! 👍

[@lexxblep-groundzero1369]

😊 I really love this episode having Gregory trapped in the lost and found seeing that sense of Gregory's anger frustration Gregory is sick of feeling powerless I love this episode also the way you describe Gregory getting caught by vanny was absolutely beautiful Gregory feeling helpless under her strength it was amazing phenomenal I loved it

[@lexxblep-groundzero1369]

i love how you have done enhancments in freddy and gregorys relationship they feel so cute like a father and son I LOVE FOUND FAIMLY CONTENT

[@Epicplayz10101]

As someone who has just found this series and is incredibly upset, I just found it.

[@astrumcat64.mp4]

Kiwi you help get me through the week with the rewrites TYSM ^_^

[@wildwinter1971]

20:51 A crazy turkey and an insurance dog😂

[@jacobjacob607]

And a knock off Easter bunny!

[@Polished-Edge]

Bro we gonna save me 15% on my kart insurance?

[@PearlBlaze]

YES - Woah that was awesome! 44 chapters oh my banana-

[@RobloxKaren420]

You never disappoint! Can’t wait for next Friday!! :)

[@starriimoon]

whenever James is mentioned I can only imagine James from pokemon and honestly? same.

[@BaneOfMyExistence1929]

Been drained from school this week and I am so glad I can come home to watch this :D P.s.: YIPPEE

[@connieflorey4288]

OMG MY FNAF PHASE IS BACK OMG SDJFHJEHAGFURHU

[@Demon-egg-roll]

Aww poor bonnie how dare that mechanic do that to him😭

[@cycloneabsol9405]

More SB Rewritten! Drop everything!

[@sunflowerkc]

HEY umm I watched all of the steven universe stuffy out made literally I watched EVERYTHING and I was wondering if you can make more I know it's hard to make this stuff believe me I make this kind of content too well I was on my old channel and BTW your so talented xoxo

[@mythicaldrawer7072]

WHAT WAS THAT HEART BEAT!? WHO WAS IT!? AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA-

[@Analog_Anarchist]

Idk if it will happen in the rewrite...but The Blob in the original game *did* have a heartbeat and could breathe...

[@Mr.encore]

Wow 44 chapters that's awesome

[@rowdymac4707]

hamburger :)

[@clownpal697]

I only sub to this because of your art style

[@gnarlyagent594]

Tee hee lets go

[@Sageknot]

YAAAA

[@Poseidonjd]

Your content is really nice, but please, pleaaaase, the past tense of cast is cast, not casted, and that of grind is ground, not grinded.

[@kiwiqueen138]

Is it OK if you point out which sentences I messed that up with? I’m not trying to be passive aggressive or anything, I’m just unsure which parts I did wrong and which parts I did right, I don’t want to make mistakes like that again. Thanks :)

[@Poseidonjd]

@@kiwiqueen138 Concerning grind, I'd have to listen to this chapter once more to pinpoint the exact moment. I'll do that when I have a moment for it. Concerning cast, it's something I've been consistently noticing since the very first chapter; I did not mention it in previous comments because I thought that, for sure, someone had to have already told you by now, since I'm always noticing it as a non-native speaker, but apparently not. 😅

[@cycloneabsol9405]

Hey, fellow lore fans! I have a document compiling all the lore for the series! docs.google.com/document/d/13cv5vH3MLErtsKX_7d_D6WB4ZJBWIHDYqvvpW-eNXkg/edit?usp=sharing