Pokémon Creepypasta: Innocence by Youth

[@MyL10Productions]

Hey I'm the author of the story :) I'm so happy that this was included. I apologize for the grammar it took away a lot from the story. I'm glad to hear that it was good aside from my mistakes. But I appreciate the feedback and comments they made me happy. Hopefully soon i'll write another story better, less grammar mistakes and hopefully it'll appear on the show again. Thank you medraut567 for the feedback! It means a lot

[@krystalthesquirrel4973]

I hate to admit it, but he has a valid series of points: the actions are in present tense instead of past tense and there are run on sentences.

[@GloomyFish]

This one wasn't really that bad. I like the idea that someone came up with a story about the ghosts in the Old Chateau...

[@growingoaks]

Dude. The word choice, the grammar, it's awful lol. Maybe I just know too much about English and written syntax, but the story itself its great, the execution is terrible though.

[@growingoaks]

Yeah the fact that they avoided so many of the cliches is impressive tbh. That creativity is missing in a lot of pokemon creepypastas

[@jingerdelno4591]

Whenever I heard the butler's name, the words "Hello Pewdie" plays in my mind.

[@JigglyBooties]

I like how he called pearl his favorite pokemon game then kept calling the main character Red when in reality thats actually LUCAS... it actually really bothers me when people do that :p

[@echoscreams1775]

Asbel Flann well thats what he calls himself, I called Dawn Yellow once, she was one of the main people in one of the Manga's :P

[@JigglyBooties]

Possibly, but still, the reader should've specified that he called his character that instead of bringing the name out the blue. :p

[@Shadethewolfy]

@@JigglyBooties He did, though? He literally says "my character; I like to use the traditional Pokemon trainer names" Also RISE FROM YOUR GRAVE!! THE GRATE NECROPOSTER EVELYN COMMANDS YOU!!

[@ssgtwraith095]

I really liked this story, besides the mentioned mistakes. It was very in-depth, compared to so many other stories I've seen on your channel. Thanks MyL10, and medraut567! I hope to see more improvements as the readings continue! =)

[@Marane8]

This would function better as a tragedy than it would as a creepypasta.

[@chelseysimons4067]

This is how the story is suppose to go: a father got to chose how got it be the gym leader. Gardenia wanted to be the gym leader but her sister got to be the leader. Gardenia wanted to be to be the gym leader. Gardenia poisend her faimly so she can be the gym leader. Creepy right the gym leader is a murder.

[@readintimely2517]

its nice to look back at the videos that made up most of my 13 year old life. XD Worth every minute then and now.

[@River_Betty]

I’m two years late to replying but I’m glad I’m not the only one still watching these lol

[@thatboi1140]

There is a difference between not knowing any better and abuse, the writer of this should really learn the difference

[@MahDryBread]

Well, that's kinda part of the story. I don't think you can insinuate that the author doesn't know the difference just because the author wrote a character who thought of it as abuse. It was abusive. The abuse came from an innocent place where the kid didn't know any better, but it's up to the butler if he cares or not where it came from. To say that the author doesn't understand the difference is a pretty massive leap in logic.

[@thatboi1140]

Mah-Dry-Bread okay, i have misinterpreted the story and what the author was saying, after going back and reading and rewatching the video i did realize my mistake however i forgot to delete the comment, sorry

[@thatboi1140]

Mah-Dry-Bread As a form of apology to the author and to make sure i do not make the same mistake in the future I've recently started writing a creepypasta and oh my it is the worst thing I've ever seen anyone write. yet again the mindset i went in with was that it would be done in 10-20 minutes and well its been a couple weeks, actually since I posted that comment is when I started.

[@beltyro5303]

I keep wondering if that's how MDB say color or if he doesn't know color and colour are both proper spellings of the word.

[@MahDryBread]

I was aware, I was just an asshole like, 7 or so years ago when I made this. I was a moody teenager

[@kazuichisoudaman]

I almost fell off the toilet when he said the butler has the same name as me

[@jonvievepelino5937]

Why is it whenever I watch/ listen to horror vids and creepypastas it's always n the middle if the night?

[@emeraldtheskit2207]

n? ñ? N?Ñ!!!!!!!!!

[@jesterjoshtheshyguy4544]

The old chatu story isnt bad! Even though suicide is a cliche it actually used it at the right moment, Mr Herison was depressed and well what he said before the already matching and right timeing suicide broke my heart a little bit, To the creator of the story and to Mah dry bread I thank the creator for useing a cliche when its actually needed and I thank Mah dry bread for covering that amazeing heart wrenching story. I will now carry The story of old chatu as my headcannon, Not the pasta but the story of the deaths of the family. What also makes it unique is that The Timing for certain events where just right. Sorry for whoevers reading this comment for wasteing your time. I hope to see more pastas like this covered...

[@Hboy247]

This was the Gym leaders old home she poisend her butler and sister and tried to heal them but she couldent so Thats why she said she hated it in the game she killed those people

[@lieutenantnitewolf3337]

I found it pretty good. It kindof explains what has happened, the worst part so much bad grammar. I liked the story I give it a B- or at best a B+ for the details and the story over all. The grammar I would give it a C- possibly a D+ due to all the bad grammar other than the bad grammar the story was ok.

[@chrisbeck7014]

I remember the butler and the little girl in the Old Chateau, that fucking terrified me! XD

[@retsamekop10]

I remember the gen4 haunted mansion. I loved gen4

[@isaiahdooley5953]

The story behind the girl in the chateau is that she was gardenia's daughter and she got poisoned and she tried an antidote but it didnt work so it was thrown in the trash and the girl sadly died.

[@StevenSWolfXV]

Ah. Wall of texts!. So i watch TV while listening.

[@shadowcat323]

Gosh...I'm writing a Pokemon Creepypasta and I'm sort of scared that if I were to publish it....it would be hated on...well...then that leaves room for improvement!

[@tristantinethegreat]

Fun Fact: Stephano did nothing wrong.

[@Pudcup]

Evidence

[@Abcdefghijklmnopqrstuvwxyz1024]

9:13 that's why I used a action replay to get every Pokemon at level 1 for a new challenge it took a while to level 1 up since they were all level ones

[@uuu12343]

One can definitely improve their english after watching videos like these :D

[@whitethunder1800]

I like the way, Mah dry bread, you pronounce color. It sounds great

[@syd22dar]

This 'pasta had a really good plot; I just wish there was more of a climatic ending. Like maybe he still had the antidote in his bag or something.

[@Avethis]

I know this is from a while ago, but just had to put this out there. When writing essays and referring to stories that were written in the present tense, you have to refer to the story in present tense. I know that this is a pasta and not an essay, but the likeness of the two (referring to a story) might have confused the writer. I'm not saying that you're wrong, I'm just justifying. It's my thang.

[@DesolateMood]

lol

[@sosansational]

what mazagine was that? nintendo wouldn't have approved that. besides, the story most people talk about is WAY FUCKIN DIFFERENT.

[@essancefay2824]

sans What's a mazagine?

[@Archer_]

How creepy is this: listening to this creepy pasta at night, and after Winter's father jumps of the roof it said: 'There has been a mistake.' o_o

[@prettycarrizales3788]

I love the story just really bad typos

[@Sponglor]

I have written one called 'Curse of the Day-care Man.' It is a traumatic story about a player who is forced to pay the ultimate price in order to escape the wrath of the the Day Care man, who resents the player for abusing his service. I have just posted it onto mahdrybread.freeforums (the link in your description)

[@LukasKnife]

I love how it's one massive paragraph.

[@1mortalkombatlover]

since when does a character sprite show detailed stuff like the girl swinging at stephano or stephano grining while chewing food?

[@MinerzSlum]

also thats supposed to happen and if you go into the long alley on the top floor and go into the room straight ahead of you at 8'o clock and press a on the tv a rotom will come out.

[@lpsicydiamond7104]

also this pokepasta gets a thumbs up from me👍

[@FallenAngelz21]

I don't know if this is true but the story is a bit different as in X and Y, it is the first gym leader who killed the little girl and the butler to get the position of gym leader

[@lpsicydiamond7104]

I think that the Pokemon Creepypasta I wrote is ok I guess

[@huntinghuntail7262]

dont you find the antidote in the sinnoh games in the trash can when you get there also isnt the old man normally there

[@spacehunternebulanm7003]

Wow, Winter just made Stefano infertile. Shocking and appalling.

[@ChloePHMineCraft]

part of the story is in actual game play........which I find sad that they actually put game play into the story...instead of the earthquake. The Earthquake wasn't there.

[@thedemonkingcornerdr.midni3635]

there is only one thing I really find appalling about this story is how the butler is treated most people who have them treat them right they are not babysitters as he said .

[@nickbrennan8979]

You skipped a sentence! Namely, " The next thing I knew he gave me a wicked, twisted frown and blood came out his nose"

[@wakingseafoam7459]

What happens is normal the girl and the butler do what was said and the tv just has rotom in it.

[@RavynKarasu]

A present tense story can be done...but it has to be done just right. I try to avoid using present tense all together to avoid the bother. I'm too dependent on past tense terms to confidently pull off something like that.

[@dylancross1039]

The guy in the Old Chateau? That's not Creepypasta material... That happens in game.

[@Megamanexe]

That and the fact these ghosts only appears at certain in real time logic, late at night. Though don't remember what those times were ^^;

[@qowueusish4069]

Isn't the old butler the grandfather of the little girl, and the story in the game is based on a real story that happened in japan.

[@morgangoss3621]

is there anyway I can send you my own story. Mine is somewhat true

[@harukabusujima5731]

I liked your story! ^-^

[@FalconBetrayel420]

So where was that potion? I wanna see if this is real.

[@caseyreed99]

@medraut567 No language can possibly be correct in any word because every word from a new language comes from an old language. For example Latin is the root of many common languages. Speech itself isn't always correct. So saying colour isn't always correct, but neither is color. Someone just came up with the word as a generalization of red, blue ,green, etc. The fact is it has nothing to do with the American education system. Its just Americans english. Its not a typo.

[@superpaytonmars8852]

Mister mahdrybread, huge fan of yours and I'd like to know, would you be interested in reviewing a Pokemon creepypasta called mutant future? I guarantee you you won't be disappointed it's actually rather interesting. At least that's how I remember it. Get back to me if and when you can and thank you for your time.

[@MahDryBread]

Sorry, I stopped doing Creepypasta readings years ago.

[@superpaytonmars8852]

@@MahDryBread Fair enough. I still recommend you give it a read even if you don't make a video out of it. whoever wrote it was pretty good from what I recall.

[@Abcdefghijklmnopqrstuvwxyz1024]

10:08 the (co-lore) first you call Meganium (mag-ne-tree-um) now CO-LORE

[@krystalthesquirrel4973]

He's from Canada, and in Canada, they spell it as "colour".

[@TheFatpattycat]

this is the first creepy pasta ive seen with a butler in it :D

[@EpicHyrule24]

Style of speaking is natural, and human.

[@Grey_Warden_Invasion]

This also could have been better if it actually played in the Pokemon universe instead of a game altered by a gameshark.

[@jasonantonucci8003]

there is also too much details about the characters for a pokemon game before x & n. Its pixelated. Also, how can some of those things happen in 2d pixelated game?

[@yoshister]

X and N? You mean X and Y? Plus, what happens in this story that can't happen in 3D?

[@jasonantonucci8003]

Dino AndAllen I meant the descriptions. They were too detailed for pixels

[@jasonantonucci8003]

And yes I mean x and y. Thank you for catching that

[@instantramen122]

NOOOOO no pick on Stefano NOOOOO No pick on Stefano

[@kingryujin2955]

dun ass

[@DesolateMood]

Max W look who's talking!

[@cholo_instinx6423]

I wish that code was real

[@IzanamisBurden]

It is. My friend had it. He made it online and downloaded it on his action replay

[@MyL10Productions]

@@IzanamisBurden lies

[@TheGreenBomb3r]

i always name my character ash and my rival gary

[@megabeat98]

its a magical creature that lives in computers and gives free laughs

[@whitethunder1800]

this CuteEevee sits in background. Me: I saw another geodude. Red: die geodude, go ghastly!! excuse me Mr ghost butler, ice scream please. Me: ohh a ghost butler better follow red. +red runs past+ Me: wait up red.

[@passingaassasin]

in diamond pearl and platinum if u go into the rooms u can actually see the little girl idk if u can see the butler though i have only seen the little girl

[@sunsetbridge322]

-yawns- just the old chateau and things that occur regularly in it. (from what I've read so far.)

[@shadythehedgefox1]

i was hoping to finish this video without comments about pewdiepie...guess not.. good vid tho. love how you give your final thoughts.

[@ctfxcfangurl]

I've seen the ghosts in the mansion, it scared me when I first saw it too xD they show up randomly

[@XOXTheFunnyBunnyXOX]

I must say this exact moment happened to me with that butler when I was like 10 at midnight and for the first time it was horrifying I almost threw up XD

[@BlueStarSonic]

there is no ghost in the platinum pokemon game.

[@MRDestructionmd]

I am American however colour sounds better than color

[@zoriusth]

color is a correct spelling of colour though, so that was a bit on your side

[@universalcasey905]

I read the screen. I stopped reading off the screen after a few pages. I can't STAND grammatical errors!

[@mercyisdead2467]

Ha, I hate gastly: So one day I was at the football. I got my ds out because I was bored. I had a Quagsire. It was the one left that wasn't fainted, apart from Azuazu who was lv 78, because I was training. Basically Gastly used mean look. Wow. I had only ground type moves, and water sport or extrasensory, and extrasensory had 0 pp. So I had to turn it of or just keep fighting. So i fought, and eventually got to the pokemon centre. From that day on I hated Gastly.

[@doorknob3535]

I remember this from pokemon pearl it was pretty cool

[@fizzfizz5634]

My charicter was named red in pearl (until it got coruppted)

[@Cruisingriolu]

If I were in that situation being in the past... Oh, the temptation to help winter... But I can't. I could never mess with the personal timeline of another person. I wouldn't save her, even if I wanted to... It could cause a paradox that could possibly wipe out the universe... Sorry, myl10. Red should have thought it through. Never mess with the timeline.

[@ReeperGirl21]

that butler bit is true I own Diamond and that happened to me as well it's an actule place in the game

[@Mistfyre]

Wow everything is the exact same In the game I remember the TV and how there was a rotom in it :) cool story overall

[@Cha0x110]

Honestly though, it's just Color. Forcing the annunciation on "Koh-Lor" just sounds ridiculous.

[@NeverwascooL]

I usually imagine these stories in the pokemon sprites. And this story lost me with all the detail on the abuse of stefano. It does add to it a tiny bit but there's no way to animate 99% of that in the game so it kinda took me outta the story personally.

[@PkDooM95]

are you Canadian?

[@dylancross1039]

As with the damn T.V. The stupidity pours from this one... That is around where you get Rotom.

[@gotomyotherchannel8744]

ah.... me and finn explored the old chautu~* i found tons of ghost~* growing stronger in are bond~* till action replay took it away! action replay killed him!

[@GodfreyGames]

What's a PewDiePie?

[@ElectricPikachu64]

19:11 wow you like to insult writers don't you I mean yes some do miss spell a lot but you don't have to insult the writers no wonder I like that one KZbinr that insults the Creepypastas and not the writers "I only criticize the stories and not you as people keep writing and keep improving"

[@pokemon4582]

Guys this is really in the game

[@PyroTheBadgerlord]

You should be an English teacher, just saying.

[@1mortalkombatlover]

dont you mean "WoW"? :P (your warcraft icon.)

[@whitethunder1800]

I don't blame Stephano.

[@isaiahdooley5953]

Wtfff!!! Why is my keyboard doing this!!!

[@mikerogers1019]

Stephano? is that you?

[@michaeljfan9720]

The butler's name reminds me (and a lot of the PewDiePie fans) of Stephano, the golden statue.

[@yaboililbill6303]

WHY DID SHE HAVE TO PICK ON STEPHANO!? HE WAS SO GOLDEN,

[@ThatOneGuy0006]

JESUS MYL10! Pick a tense and stay with it!!

[@Retrah22]

You stole that phrase from Jacob Sherwood, didn't you? Not that I blame you. He's amazing.

[@Retrah22]

+Retrah And yes, I did just reply to a 3 year old comment to ask a pointless question.

[@TechShowCanine]

Stephano waited for you :D

[@devinh.5320]

only read stories that dont have bad grammer to make sure people dont keep doing this. thumbs up so he can see

[@acefletcher2524]

this has has happened in my game just the buttler and ghost pokemon that's all

[@mrniceguy29100]

Bedew - (Bu-Duu) not (Buduu) Roselia - (Ro-Se-Lia) not (Rose-Lia)

[@zoriusth]

... well you are witnessing the birth of a language, starting with a single letter, becoming whole words, then turning into something no one but the group that created such will understand, that is merely how language works, there is no "Real" just different, no right way to say, or spell a word, just different, ^^

[@amandaromaine1999]

I still think its a good story since all the other ones I have read aren't that great. Even if the grammer sucked and all it was still a really good story. I even tried to do that in my game it sounded so real. :3

[@chance3320]

and this guy is better then pewdiepie

[@stechelin64]

Awesome story