English Language Paper 1, Question 3: The Awkward Question - Structure 8/8

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If anyone thinks they might need this: 25 Language Devices: Defined & Explained! 1. Pathetic Fallacy Is when the weather or the atmosphere describes the mood. For example, when the weather is rainy people are sad and depressed 2nd example, the dark night could symbolise something supernatural like 3AM Satan etc… 2. Personification Is when a non-human is given human qualities. For example, the tree is waving to John as drives away. 3. Simile When you are comparing two things using ‘like’ or ‘as’ For example, his facial vision looked like a falcon’s eye 4. Metaphor Is when you are comparing two things with is or are Example He is an orc 5. Extended Metaphor Pick a metaphor and explain how --- > turn in to an extended metaphor Metaphor --- > Life is a rollercoaster. Now turning into extended metaphor add explanation so, Life is a rollercoaster you don’t know when you will be at the top or at the bottom, it will all happen in an instance, at the greatest heights you will be at the greatest heights and at times it will crash, but every day is never the same, just like in a turn in a Rolle coaster is never the same. 6. Oxymoron 2 opposite words side-by-side Example, the small giant 7. Juxtaposition You explain an oxymoron. The small giant tip-toing trying to reach the top shelf, however, his small arms and puny fingers prevented him from grabbing the bar of jam. 8. Symbolism Is when objects represent a meaning. For example, moon and the star represent Islam. 2nd Example, if you get a priest you will think someone died. In Macbeth the dagger links to death. 9. Semantic field Is where words are linked to an idea. For example, PPE, 2m and Hand Sanitiser, Head of Year link to COVID. 10. Irony Is when events in the text surprises the characters. Something not expected! Mr Birling offering a 1000. Scrooge changing his nature. 11. Rhetorical Question Question does not require an answer 12. Hyperbole Is when you hype, when over-exaggerating. I am going to eat the whole restaurant. 13. Assonance Is the repetition of the vowel sound. I am too cool for school. Oooooo 14. Alliteration Words in a row begin with the same letter. 15. Sibilance Is when words in a row have the s letter or the s sound Example: the snake was slowly hissing 16. Euphemism Is when you say something in an indirect manner. He is not with us anymore. 17. Emotive Language Is when the writer makes the reader feel emotional. By making them angry. 18. Onomatopoeia Words describe the sound Boom bang skirr pop 19. Ruel of 3 / Power of 3 / Triplets Words or phrases in a row describe something (3) The table is black, hard and wide 20. Facts/ Stats Uses evidence to support their facts. 50 % of the students prefer using email rather than social media . 21. Plosive Repitition of harsh sound Words such as 'P' 'D' 'B' 22. Zoomorphism Is when you give a person animal features. Example John barked at me / John shouted at me. 23. Opinion 24. Repetition Language Device and Structure. Is when the writer uses the words repletely to create an effect. Where is being repeated and why is that important 25. Noun, Verbs, Adjectives, Adverbs Structure Flashback - when you go back in time ,3 days ago etc.. Foreshadowing - when the writer gives clue about future ‘my heart was beating fast’ Zoom in - focus on one thing for example ‘pen’ , ‘specific character ‘ Zoom out - normally used to talk about setting Dialogue - when the character speak ‘hey there !’ New character New setting Change in tone Short sentence - to build up tense Long sentence - add details and slow down the narrative Short /long sentence - may show importance in both Shift in focus - talks about object then talks about another object for example ‘pen’ to ‘table’ Cyclical structure - similar stuff happening with beginning and ending Juxtaposition Extended metaphor Pace List Pov Overall tone Chronogical order Climax Repetition Links Mood , pathetic fallacy 1. Abhorrent/Heinous (means bad) 2. Euphoric/Jubilant (means happy) 3. Melancholy/Morose (means sad) 4. Indignant (means angry) 5. Swift/Rapid (means fast) 6. Colossal/Gargantuan (means big) 7. Minuscule/Microscopic (means small) 8. Bemused/Befuddled (means confused) 9. Astute/Shrewd (means smart) 10. Feeble/Decrepit (means weak) 11. Dash (means run) 12. Plunge (means jump - may not always fit so be careful how you use it) 13. Cordial (means nice) 14. Lackadaisical (means lazy) 15. Paradoxical/Outlandish (means strange)

[@andreamcmahon30]

I would definitely comment on the beginning and the end ,this shows the examiner you read the whole text . Contrast is also always present .

[@MrEverythingEnglish]

Yes excellent point

[@hamaad9247]

@@MrEverythingEnglishin this question, could it be suitable to comment about stuff like similes, personification, metaphors, alliteration or any other device from your 25 devices vid if the writer uses it?

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[@arva1954]

there's 7 stretch devices, not 8, you missed number 5 amazing video though, i feel so much more confident watching you, thank you insha allah i'll do well in my exam

[@loly5166]

Hello, can you please mark this :) The writer emphasises the idyllic atmosphere created by the books and stories of the past highlighting their importance. The writer's use of a list from lines 12 to 14 describes how fast paced the stories were, this also illustrates the action that took place in them. Furthermore, this creates a vivid image in the readers mind of the adventurous atmosphere that is created by stories of the past. Additionally, the writer's use of a long sentence helps in bringing these books to life ; therefore highlighting their importance in every child's childhood. This portrays to the reader the value of the books of the past and alludes to their degradation over the years as children face a lack of interest towards them. (2nd paragraph) The writer shows contrast between Mr Fisher's character in the exposition and towards the rising action. The use of the juxtaposition in lines 34 to 35 highlights the development of Mr Fisher's feelings as he experiences ' a very strange sensation'. At this point in the extract it is made clear to the reader that an unusual event is taking place. Furthermore, the writer zooms into Mr Fisher's breathing highlighting that this could be a 'strange' feeling due to the fact that Mr Fisher hasn't experienced this feeling in a long time. Hence creating interest as the reader is still unsure of what has caused Mr Fisher to feel this way so this grasps the reader's attention into leaving them with feelings of unease and suspicion therefore leaving the reader worried about the following future events forcing them to read on.

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[@dwcLDN]

I would assess it as Level 3, which corresponds to a score range of 5-6 marks in the mark scheme. Overall, the response meets the criteria for Level 3 by showing a clear understanding of the structural features, explaining their effects, selecting relevant examples, and using subject terminology appropriately. To improve the response and potentially reach a higher level, here are some suggestions: Provide more specific analysis Expand on the use of subject terminology Strengthen the connection between structural features and their importance

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@@dwcLDN whats subject terminology about ?

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@@somiaali8628 Using & correctly recognising Structural Techniques

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help i still don't know how to explain the effect of the structures??😓😰

[@cjames.1z]

At 8:41 the stretch is missing number 6?did i get that wrong or did no one notice that?

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Can you please make a video explaining the positive and negative effect of each structure device?

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10:45 anybody else notice how theres only 7 in the strech device because he forgot 7? Well, Great videos as well.

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he forgot the number 6

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[@anaklusmus]

@Mr Everything English Can someone please take a look at my response. This paper is from the June of 2018. q3. in the Mr Fisher text At the beginning of the text the writer uses a short sentence in line 5 to introduce disappointment in the readers. But then the writer quickly switches the focus to Mr Fisher’s flashback of books in the past in lines 9 to 11. This conveys Mr Fisher’s excitement to the readers. The flashback pulls readers out of the present disappointment to the glory of the past. The use of a long complex sentence here clearly shows Mr Fisher’s passion and enthusiasm for old books. Hence readers are also excited about the old books and are distracted from the disappointing term. As the text develops, the writer switches the focus between the magnificent past and gloomy present constantly. In lines 25 to 28, the writer shifts the focus from Mr Fisher’s ‘gloomy train of thoughts’ to ‘Alistar Tibbet’ who represents and symbolizes hope. This change of focus to a student with ‘spark’ gives readers hope. Readers expect Tibbet to be a turning point and make the present more similar to the glorious past. The short sentence in line 27 ‘An amiable boy, this Tibbet’ indicates the narrator’s hope in Tibbet through an appreciating tone. This hope is emphasized through the short sentence then conveyd to the readers. Hence readers look forward to exactly how Tibbet will change the current situation and exactly how much ‘spark’ he has.

[@getachewabera487]

couldn't you say that when mr fisher remembers a time when books were 'golden' juxtaposed with the fact that books now were ' black and white' ? golden is seen to be like a colour, which has like connotations of pure and nostalgia which has a semantic field of happiness and joy , contrasting with the words black and white, which has connotations of dull, plain, not seen in other ways.

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[@kyliegates3157]

this is my paragraph for Q3, feedback is appreciated! The writer creates interest within the reader by purposefully introducing an usual event at the end of the source. Throughout lines 34 and 35, the usage of juxtaposition is clear, as throughout the source Mr Fisher is portrayed as a typical habitual teacher. However, this idea is being challenged as the writer notably zooms into the “strange sensation” by describing Mr Fisher’s atypical reaction which emphasises importance. Therefore piques the curiosity of the reader which as a result, creates interest.

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grade 9 response

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@@MuhammadAli-cv3ni No it isn't. This response, I could see it as a grade 7. NEVER talk about interest. Obviously, the writers want to interest their readers. I would have written the last sentence simply like this; The portrayal of Mr Fisher's unusual reaction has the result and effect of piquing the curiosity of the readers specifically within these two lines.

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@@Android_17_ oh thank you for the feedback i wrote the last sentence as a way to link back to the question and to show the examiners that i was still on track, is there another way i could link back to the question?

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@kyliegates3157 “piquing curiosity” and “creates interest” are literally the same two things I wouldn’t worry about it

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when you where listing the structural decivces on the "strech" section you went to number 5 to 7

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I have returned in order to help you with your English! Language paper 1 Q2-5 overview Q2- Marks: 8 Aim (for passing grade): 5-6 marks Quotes: A3 Language analysis question Comment on writer 3 terms Q3- Marks: 8 Aim for: 4-5 Structure: 3 mini what how whys Structure question Do not analyse Language. Use these terms: Beginning, Middle, end, focus, shift, zoom, topic sentence, ect. Quotes: 3 Q4- Marks: 20 Aim: More than 10 Structure: 3 what how whys OR 1 large WHW mini essay style. Length: Aim for a page and a half (varies on handwriting) Language analysis question 3-4 Quotes and terms Writers intentions Preferably don't disagree (But you can consider other view points for more Marks) Q5- Creative writing question 40 Marks Length: Two/Two and a half pages Focus: Descriptions, punctuation and skills Structure: Paragraphing (at least 2 paragraphs per page) Aim: More than 20 Marks. Descriptive writing > Story (easier to focus on the question)

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sir i think there has been a mistake there are only seven (stretch) sturcture techniques, regardless thank you for making this video

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can someone please mark my answer? ik its long and boring but it would be much appreciated lmao -its from 2019 november paper At the beginning of the extract, from lines 1-14, the writer introduces us to zoe and her character and what she is like, he also describes the setting to create a sense of familiarity for the readers. He uses foreshadowing when he says “she could die in that place, and happily”, which not only shows zoes feelings and how much she adores the place, but also hints to the reader what might possibly happen towards the end of the extract, creating tension. However the word” happily” juxtaposes zoes feelings at the end of the extract, dismissing a cyclical structure.The writer then shifts the focus to zoe and her partner jake, and by doing this the writer zooms into their conversations by using dialogue from lines 20-22, and these lines show how eager and ready they are to go and we are introduced to jakes character which makes the text more interesting because now there are two characters which may possibly mean more events and scenarios between them which makes the narrative more important. However there is a change in tone as line 28 starts with the word “but”, showing that perhaps there may be a major shift in focus and that everything may be going downhill. This is later supported when it says that zoe was “irritated by the false start they made”, and this juxtaposes how zoe felt “happily” at the beginning, as it shows that things weren’t going to plan. From lines 33 to 43, the paragraphs also get shorter, showing that there is more tension. This creates a dramatic feel to the audience and this keeps the readers attention so that they can see what happens next and reduces the narrative between the reader and the characters. At line 39, we can see that there is a drastic turn of events as it says “then her smile iced over”, and the short sentences with repetition of jake saying “get to the side”, shows what little time they had, and creates a faster pace which makes the reader more interested to see what happens next, and contrasts the calm, peaceful feel at the beginning.

[@James12387]

4/8 abissmal effort i am an aqa english examiner and can see that you have not analysed specifically structure

[@fizzylizzy3718]

the last line for the first paragraph and last paragraph feels unecessary, use phrases like "it captivates the reader." u definitely could've talked about focus shifts in a lot more detail, for example the focus at the start of the extract where zoe is admiring the beauty of nature, is cotrasted by the focus point in the last paragpah where she is paralysed in fear of nature. this shows the examiner that ur using the whole source for ur answer. also, the repition of "get to the side" could have been explored upon more, for example, the repitition creates a frantic rhythm which reflects the build up of fear and terror in zoe. overall, it was good, i would give it a level 3/4 so minimum 5 marks.

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[@Positiveb223]

Hi, Love your videos, I just notice in this video while I was writing structure devices down , there is number 5 missing in second column . Thanks

[@thesoapstop]

What do you mean by 'new' when you talk about the bullet-proof structural devices?

[@pipsnadprofits01]

New things in the extract e.g writer introduce a new character

[@zabihsafi6782]

I'm not too sure but i thought of a paragraph that can be used in any q3 answer, i think you could possibly talk about pace and then talk about long sentences and paragraphs if its a slow pace or short( if u want) and the fast pace would be short sentences and paragraphs. idk what do you guys think

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i feel like this could work for short sentences not too sure abt long sentences

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[@EdwinSimby-ur9ek]

8:18 the order of stretch is 1,2,3,4,5,7,8

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I just did a practice paper in the exam in school and whatever you said about the structure techniques they all come up

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At 7:40 the stretch is missing number 6 !!!! lol What did number 6 ever do to you :D

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[@teutawhyman3974]

Very well explained but isn't it that this question should start with the beginning, in the middle and the end?????

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yes it is, I'm super confused because you must write three paragraphs and all of them stayed two is enough

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[@user-cf1lj7gd1s]

yo can someone read this and rate this/offer improvements? at the beginning of the source, the writer uses listing in lines 12-14 through the flashback "there were heroes, dragons and dinosaurs, space adventures" to illustrate mr fisher's elation and fascination of books of the past. the writer accentuates mr fisher's excitement as it is evident he is immersed and captivated by such stories, although they were purely fiction, places great importance on books as it foreshadows to the reader that they will be a key subject throughout the extract. the focus then shifts as the writer employs a long paragraph including short sentences in line 19, "dickens was boring." "shakespeare was boring." which juxtaposes the gleeful and ecstatic ambience at the beginning of the source, as the reader can infer that stories of the past no longer spark and engage the boys at the grammar skl. this creates an arid and monotonous mood to the source, and considering this is the longest paragraph in the extract from lines 16 to 24, this further expresses mr fisher's disappointment and gloom in which the reader can feel pity for him as it is clear that books do not hold the same meaning and prevalence now as they did "in those days". by the end of the extract the writer introduces a new character in lines 27 and 28, "this tibbet" to foreshadow that not all hope is lost. the use of the new character could be symbolic of hope and renewal as seen through the short sentence in line 36, "he began to sweat" suggests the greatness of mr fisher's awe that he can't grasp what he's reading before him. the final line "something entirely original" leaves the reader feeling elated and relieved as mr fisher's reminiscence of the past seems to be coming to life once again.

[@FellowSouls]

Is this good response --The writer use language structure to intrest us as a reader. by an unusal event which occurs with Mr fisherman, at the end of THe source. Point it can be seen from the line 34-35. Where the writer use Juxtaposition, and shows Mr fisher with an unusal event taking Place with him. as he is experiencing something different, from what he usually do. something out of his daily life. furthermore " The writer zoom in (z) into the sentence “tighteng in his disgraph" which shows Mr fisher is experiencing something, which he has not experienced long time ago. and shows mr, fisher as he is evolving and changing from the Start of the source. Therefore as you can see the writer has suddenly change mr fisher And bring focus on him and Kept the readers in a pique curiosity of what’s happening next.

[@MalikSaim143]

Nice

[@user-xe1mx1fc9i]

Amazing vid but for stretch structural devices you only put 7. You missed out the number 6. Thanks for everything though

[@YSMustiYT]

I just wanted to ask can every paragraph start with in source a, the writer creates interest?. but obviously starting each paragraph with either moreover, subsequently.

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Thank you so much Sir!❤️

[@blazeuchiha2314]

can anyone please create a list of sentences which you could use to finish your paragraph to show the effect on reader. e.g the writer does this to create anticipation within the reader

[@potatopie7778]

good luck everyone!!!

[@AsheCroft751]

Do you need a point or can you drive the paragraph with a technique instead? I know the PRTEZEL paragraph shows to start with a point but in the exam could you just incorporate your point into the technique?

[@meditationandrelaxation-mu2005]

can someone read through if you've got time and grade it? im working towards a 6. Q5) Write a story about a new beginning As the sun dipped below the horizon, casting an iridescent glow upon the quaint village, a sudden flashback enveloped Eleanor's mind. There she was, a vivacious young woman, embarking on the most arduous journey of her life; a new beginning awaited her. In the bustling city, she found solace in the cacophony of sounds: the honking of cars, the laughter of children, and the murmur of conversations. Brimming with aspirations , Eleanor was ready to face the world; little did she know the challenges that lay ahead. A whirlwind of emotions consumed her. Outside her window, a torrential downpour mirrored her tumultuous thoughts - the raindrops pounded against the glass, as though they were trying to break through. "What if I fail?" she pondered, her heart pounding in her chest-doubt seeped into her very core, smothering her confidence. With unwavering determination, she embraced the unknown: the late-night study sessions, the seemingly endless job applications, and the constant self-doubt. Would she succeed in this newly forged journey? Only time would tell. And then, it happened.... "You did it!" her friend exclaimed, the pride in her voice palpable. "Your hard work paid off!" Standing in the heart of the city, Eleanor felt an indescribable surge of elation, as though she had conquered the world; she had finally achieved her dreams. Looking back, the trials she faced seemed almost insurmountable. The journey had been like scaling a mountain without a safety harness, but it was all worth it in the end. The sun broke through the clouds, casting a warm, golden light upon the city. From that day forward, Eleanor never looked back. The city became her sanctuary, a place where dreams were born and nurtured. She had found her purpose, her raison d'être, and she would never forget the struggles that led her to this moment. As she stood on the rooftop, gazing upon the city that had become her home, Eleanor realized that her new beginning was both a beautiful dream and a haunting reminder of the challenges she had faced. "I made it," she whispered to herself, the warmth of the setting sun caressing her skin like a gentle embrace. And as the sun dipped below the horizon once more, she knew that her journey had come full circle.

[@lilyoungp2370]

Grade 5 or 6 forsho Good luck!

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[@MJVShadow]

I'll say like between grade 5 and grade 7

[@meditationandrelaxation-mu2005]

If you guys still got time, could you mark/provide feedback on this aswell? Q5) Write a story about a new beginning Once upon a time, in a quaint village nestled amid verdant hills , a weary traveler named Eloise stumbled upon the opportunity for a new beginning. As she ambled along the cobblestone streets, a feeling of déjà vu washed over her; memories of a past life began to resurface. The village, with its ivy-covered cottages and picturesque gardens, felt like a long-lost home. The air was redolent with the scent of roses and lavender, and the sun cast a golden hue upon the buildings, making them appear celestial. Her heart swelled with an ineffable sense of belonging; she knew she had found her sanctuary. Time seemed to slow down as she crossed the threshold. Eloise found herself in a cozy little room, filled with the warm, flickering light of a crackling fire. The flames danced and leaped, casting a mesmerizing glow on the walls. A gentle breeze whispered through the open window, carrying with it the laughter of children at play. Eloise sighed with contentment, feeling the weight of her past life finally lifting from her shoulders; a new chapter was beginning. Outside, the vibrant village buzzed with activity: market stalls overflowed with fresh produce; artisans showcased their exquisite wares; and the townsfolk chatted animatedly, their laughter and conversation filling the air. Eloise marveled at the scene, struck by the harmony and camaraderie that seemed to permeate every aspect of village life. What secrets did these people hold, she wondered, that allowed them to live in such blissful peace? And so, she decided to stay.... "Welcome to our village, dear traveler," said a kind-faced woman with twinkling eyes. "We are a close-knit community, bound by the simple belief that happiness is found in the smallest, most ordinary moments of life". Eloise felt a warmth envelop her heart; she knew she had found her tribe. "Thank you," she replied, her voice brimming with gratitude , "I am honored to become a part of your community". Eloise immersed herself in the daily life of the village, quickly discovering that its magic lay in the unyielding optimism and generosity of its inhabitants. They approached even the most mundane tasks with a zest and vigor that was both inspiring and contagious. She watched, awestruck, as they transformed the ordinary into the extraordinary, like alchemists spinning gold from straw. A sense of wonder enveloped her. As the days turned to weeks and the weeks to months, Eloise found herself flourishing in her new environment. Her heart swelled with love for her newfound friends, and she reveled in the simple pleasures that life in the village offered. Her laughter became more frequent, her spirit lighter, and her soul more at peace. She knew, without a shadow of a doubt, that she had found her home. Years later, as she sat on her porch, watching the sun rise over the hills, Eloise reflected on her journey. The village had not only given her a new beginning but had also taught her the true meaning of happiness. "Life," she mused, "is a beautiful tapestry of seemingly ordinary moments that, when woven together, create an extraordinary masterpiece". And with a heart full of gratitude, Eloise knew that she was living her own masterpiece, one golden sunrise at a time.

[@potatoe_7055]

@@meditationandrelaxation-mu2005 dont start with once upon a time and start in the middle of a tradegy

[@jabocig]

Abe sat on the pier beneath the mangrove trees and chirrup of birds. He had familiarised himself within the time he was beneath them it was beautiful. The pier itself was not the pinnacle of relaxation he deemed to be early in life; its ecosystem loudly filled the vast emptiness around him. However, it was quite relaxing and his only source of consolation from an otherwise tedious, concerned, distasted hopeless day. He had been waiting for aeons. Abe reached into the pits of his pocket shrouded with darkness and retrieved his phone rescuing it from the comatose isolation it endured. Not long ago, his son bought him a phone to lighten his otherwise companionless life. “Surely”, he thought “surely, he has sent something”, he so hopelessly assumed he could find some sort of contact from the mysterious gentlemen whose fortunes had been pledged to him… Emptiness. Abe was bewildered; he’d assumed that with the experience of his old age that he could never be so deceived and know whom to trust. They had been so genuine at first. Their bond had been immediate with an airspace of jubilance and enthusiasm being patronage wherever they went. Abe promised to rejoice with him again and reinsured that he would be present at a moment’s notice to fulfil his dreams once more by being in his presence. He had never imagined what occurred, upon his arrival, he was greeted by the same despair he felt previously. Emptiness. As he stared into the mould-dampness that plagued the once pearlescent lake, with his distorted reflection mirroring him. He contemplated the past few days (his reflection represented his emotions) Abe understood that there would be no shock arrival. No time to come. No happiness to feel. Emptiness. Abe was consumed with the past choked with nostalgia as he sat there. Abdicated to the pier. Abandonment.

[@AzraJ]

Is this meant to be q5

[@infinity8362]

really good :)

[@jabocig]

@@infinity8362 thanks

[@the3ofthesquad996]

Is this not the fen story?

[@jabocig]

@@the3ofthesquad996 no comment sir

[@cousins725]

Have my test soon...... Thank you

[@HM-gd7gw]

InshAllah trying to do well.

[@AlanShinoj-i4h]

Can we use normal language techniques in this question

[@HarmanKahlon-xz3lm]

Can anyone please explain to me what is effect? Like what is that ?? How to explain it ?

[@FunkyFunnies24]

Am confused as well if you find out please let me know too 😉

[@HarmanKahlon-xz3lm]

This is how my teacher taught me A student said, This part of the story, where the men encounter the Tyrannosaurus Rex, shows Eckels is right to panic. The Monster is terrifying!' To what extent do you agree? In your response, you could: • consider your own impressions of Eckels' reaction to the Tyrannosaurus Rex • evaluate how the writer describes the Monster • support your response with references to the text. Steps to take before answering: 1. Look at the question carefully. 2. Highlight the key points in the statement that you need to respond to. Then look at the bullet points to help you answer the question and gain maximum marks. How to answer the question Part one - Your own impressions of Eckels' reaction. Is he right to panic? Why? Use quotes and explain what they show / suggest Part two - How does the writer make the monster sound terrifying? What words / phrases / techniques does the writer use to describe the monster? What is the impact of using them on the reader? Every single question on P1 Q4 will be a 2 part answer. Make sure you cover both parts - your own response and then zooming in on language choices and their impact.

[@HarmanKahlon-xz3lm]

And u can watch his video it’s on effects I think this will be helpful

[@FunkyFunnies24]

@@HarmanKahlon-xz3lm thank you so much

[@FunkyFunnies24]

@@HarmanKahlon-xz3lm it really helped thanks

[@mir5710]

In your next video can you please tell us that. instead of saying long sentence, can we say compound or complex sentence

[@mexermoes5772]

How am I meant to make a point, when I will just repeat myself when talking about the effect

[@kexinguo9810]

the effect can be about the tone created and why - what does the structural device cause the reader to do (eg. anticipate what happens next or feel an emotion for the character)

[@parthmarathe4036]

Can you talk about sentence structure such as declarative sentence?

[@bober804]

this guy the goat of english

[@MrEverythingEnglish]

🦍

[@leahpatel-g2t]

how does a long and short paragraph interest the reader?

[@mspkplayz4012]

hi sir. will you get marks if you analyse some language features in your Q3 or is it better to stick to only structural techniques?

[@blugiampy8647]

Thx for helping us this is every helpful ❤

[@haleema_x1]

Is sibilance language or structure?

[@ayeshahayat2455]

you accidentally gave us 7 structural devices for stretch not 8

[@blCTspa]

thank you so much ,this helped me so much as a forgien language student

[@SirGoole-dz6kw]

I relate omg

[@SophieWoodhead-rt4ul]

Does anyone know if the methods such as parallelism or polysyndeton are credited in question 2 or 3? Cause I've always seen them as structure but could I write about them in the language question?

[@planespotter05__45]

Could you please explain what they mean?

[@dwcLDN]

​@@planespotter05__45 Polysyndeton is when you list using the same conjunction such as "and". e.g. "We lived and laughed and loved and left"

[@SophieWoodhead-rt4ul]

@@planespotter05__45 yeah ofc! Parallelism is hard to explain as it covers a whole range of things but its similar to repetition except it focuses more on structure rather than meaning. It's basically just using the same pattern of words (repetition of adjacent sentences/ clauses). For example, he did... he ate... he sang. That's parallelism as it's 3 past tense verbs in the same sentence and it's often used in persuasive texts for dramatic effect. However something like she sang, he eats, they played is not as it's 3 different tenses so they're not really parallel. Does that make sense? It's quite complicated to explain but easy to spot in a text which is why I like using it in this exam. Polysyndeton is conjoining clauses with adjectives such as and/ or/ nor etc. Asyndeton is the exact opposite; it excludes conjunctions. So any list that is joined with commas not conjunctions would be called asyndetic listing. I hope that helps! You don't need to be able to use either so don't be stressed if it doesn't make sense, I've just found that they're used quite often in extracts and quite easy to spot! :)

[@planespotter05__45]

@@SophieWoodhead-rt4ul thanks very much. I’ll try to spot this in the exam, and if I’ll do, I’ll defo let you know. Good luck man!

[@SophieWoodhead-rt4ul]

@@planespotter05__45 no problem glad it helped! And you :)

[@Idkwhothisis12342]

Is pace also a structural technique?

[@joyigiehon4466]

Pretzel is the best structure is easy to use

[@YeshwanthNandakumar]

Hi sir could you please check this answers for me The writer has structured the texts to interest you as a reader, this is evident from the line "12-14" the writer has used a list to create an building up books form the past as this is an history which is never ending. Furthermore, this is evident from the line "34-35" the writer has used juxtaposition to create a symbolic meaning of how strange is Mr fisher been form the past and the writer is making the events more usual as the source develops and Mr fisher is using diaphragm to breathe in all the books that he has read from the past, this reminds him from the past memories, the past as a past memories, the writer is highlighting how these book's had something for everyone, they were not just limited to one or two more qualities and this can further seen by the writer highlights through the the long sentences which mimics the Idea that the goodness of the books and like the sentences is going on and on it is never ending

[@SirGoole-dz6kw]

You have quite a few spelling errors and unstructured sentences, make sure AQA doesn’t catch you out for your SPAG! I’d say go in more depth for the first paragraph and perhaps add one more structural device.

[@Dz-nn9gt]

Should we not be doing Beginning, middle and end?

[@sinapourkhojasteh6984]

Thankyou it was really helpful👍🏼

[@niayla8182]

Can you talk about zooming in on a edxecal paper?

[@niayla8182]

You should do edexcal because I was ready to watch this only to find it it’s AQA

[@revision-sk8iv]

have a go at your teachers for them choosing Edexcel bc wtf

[@msh1380]

AQA is for the OGs. Edexcel English is for the NPCs. No offense

[@theshopjust4u436]

just a quick question, would 'new' be accepted by the AQA exam board as a structural device

[@solinpk6587]

Ig if u be more specific for example new character or new setting it would be acceptable

[@hanifasstartips7375]

You numbered the second list

[@krane5649]

He Is the paper - Metaphor

[@Analev]

If someone has time please could they mark this or suggest how to improve ? Q3 paragraph 2 In addition to this, the writer creates interest by presenting Mr fisher to have an unusual experience. This can be seen from lines 34 -35 where the writer uses Juxtoposition to present the change in his emotions thought the extract, compared to when Mr fisher experiences a 'strange sensation’. He all of a sudden gains back the joy and liveyness he once had , leaving the duil , compact and isolated feelings Mr fisher had behind. furthermore the use of Juxtaposition hilights how everyone can change, no one should have to give up their imagination to try and create a new one . This is further hilignted through the zooming in of Mr fishers 'diaphragm' which creates the idea that his breathing is changing as he becomes excited and encapsulated by the story. Therefore, the writer creates interest by hilignting the mysterious and unusual sensation Mr fisher experiences, as a story makes him gain back the feelings and life he once had.

[@kyliegates3157]

there are some SPAG mistakes but that can easily be fixed by rereading i’d say ur looking at a grade 6

[@patrick_gaming3033]

I appreciate what you're doing bro these videos have taught me so much my mocs are this monday and thanks to you I'm feeling much more confident. Keep it up

[@hazeyhazey289]

Repition of ‘guys’ has the effect of pissing the listener off 😂

[@HarmanKahlon-xz3lm]

hi sir i am new in uk i don't know anything about gcse how do i get atlest passing grades i am no fluent in English

[@ariuo1000]

Same

[@alfiedelves-payne9594]

does anyone know if sentence lengths comes under language or structure as my teacher said it comes under language?

[@calico_moth7049]

I’d say it could be either? depends on context, like if you’re talking specifically about the length it’s structure, but if you’re more analysing what’s written then it’s language? I dont know for sure because I’m not a teacher, but that’s my best guess :) good luck

[@-A7.]

10:55 I'm glad you do English not maths bc you cannot count lmao you made 5 and 6 become one number 😂😭😭

[@FatimaSaeed-f7p]

10:50 you missed out number 5 STRETCH DEVISES

[@anik-g380]

does the examiner gives mark by looking at your work wt u wrote or everything like wt u wrote and like if u have read whole source?

[@bosskrman4600]

YOU forgot number 6 in the stretch structural devices

[@alinedealmeida8572]

Thank u for the amazing video😊

[@menuchasampson2421]

You missed number 5 in the "stretch"

[@Shmuck2006]

ok menucha sampson female doggg or a btch

[@car4367]

dont leave man!

[@user-cl7ru3sy4v]

This is some work for 1 of the paragraphs I've done for question 3 I've done from a past paper if someone wouldn't mind giving feedback, From the very first sentence, the writer builds references to this "stranger child" hooking the audience in as it adds to the mysterious and supernatural vibe especially starting off with an enigma build around this girls character as we don't know this girl or how she got in the garden, this is seen in lines 11-13 where the focus is shifted from Rosie suddenly onto the girl as "another child was there" and as this was the "first day at the house" this further builds mystery, intriguing the reader. At the end of the extract when the girl suddenly disappears this completes the circular structure of the mysterious plot.

[@faizan7343]

you need to include a technique. also a link back at the end and more analysis

[@imadchowdhury1936]

The shift is the technique

[@faizan7343]

@@imadchowdhury1936 oh yh my bad

[@Seyad07]

Good luck 👊🏽