Rewriting Twilight To Suit My Own Selfish Whims | Twilight Rewrite

[@hyleore]

I love the fact that zero change is needed to make that chapter terrifying. It's all there.

[@theDoomedstar]

The sound of your keyboard makes me so happy

[@baintreachas]

11:20 Edward: “Don’t worry” Bella: doesn’t worry Edward: “NO”

[@samkathryn4825]

33:04 I feel like Bella would mentally interject here that what stopped him was his own family, clearly not any concern about ending one or several human lives, or what it would do to his father’s boy toy.

[@micahklassen7151]

the break and reassurance that saya was still there was very much needed at that point in the video

[@HannahLeeKidder]

she pooped in the hallway this morning. don't idolize her, she's just like the rest of us

[@micahklassen7151]

@@HannahLeeKidder i havent pooped in any hallways today so as far as I’m concerned she is an ideal to strive for

[@amitain4254]

But the way I cackle at all the comments. This series is *chef's kiss*.

[@samkathryn4825]

Oh my gosh, the fan fiction thing is totally right. It reads like the Cullens are their own characters in other stories, and Twilight is one of those books where a girl had a crush on a male character (like Draco) and made an OC self-insert to vicariously date him. And the girl hated Jessica and Lauren in the original book so she made her fan fiction validate her opinion of them. Also, can’t wait to see Bella meet Rosalie and be like, #notallCullens lol. Her being like, maybe we should just kill the dudes. They suck. We can fix the girls…and maybe Emmett. 😂

[@HannahLeeKidder]

lmaooo rosalie thing absolutely has to happen

[@VioletNKisHere]

Jessica and Lauren were Bella or Edward’s love interests in the original, so they’re the bad guys, since Jessica likes Edward.

[@litergation]

I mean, Twilight was a fanfiction of Buffy so...yeah.

[@CosasdeAndrea]

rip to the mask of ancient sadness, you were too great for this world

[@samkathryn4825]

7:59 He is throwing such a tantrum. This relic has toddler energy.

[@barrowc]

Excellent video, Hannah! I have no idea what mood that Edward vs. trees was originally meant to convey but your edits improved it immensely

[@HannahLeeKidder]

Thank you!!

[@slimypaws]

45:17 Honestly, that'd be the perfect set-up for Bella to just slowly touch him, ease him in, butter him up, only to finally stab him and get it done with, lol. He's already presenting himself, Bella, girl! You surely have your knife somewhere. Get him. And stop his pretentious monologue. 😂

[@melodybales2038]

Wow I had forgotten how intensely not great the reading is if you aren't reading it at like a page a minute like I did when I was 12

[@dameanvil]

00:00 📖 The video is a Twilight rewrite focusing on Chapter 14, with commentary on the original text and proposed edits. 01:19 🎭 Commentary on character dynamics and potential revisions to convey emotions effectively. 02:33 🖋 A successful rewrite passage maintaining the original tone of the author. 05:15 🤔 Discussion on fear and danger between characters, with edits to enhance clarity. 07:57 📚 Critique of a scene's adaptation from book to film and the portrayal of characters' abilities. 10:48 💬 Dialogue exchange showcasing character dynamics and emotional depth. 12:09 🍦 Analogy explaining the uniqueness of characters' scents and their impact on vampires. 13:32 🍸 Comparison between human weaknesses and vampires' struggles with temptation. 16:38 😨 Intense recollection of a moment of temptation and the struggle to resist. 19:06 🤔 Commentary on character reactions and inconsistencies in the narrative. 20:01 🥔 Edward's behavior mirrored by a character eating a raw potato. 20:55 🦁 Edward's dramatic declaration about being a predator becomes comically goofy. 21:51 🎭 Bella feels like an awkward spectator in her interaction with Edward. 22:44 💔 Edward's attempt at seduction comes off as unintentionally comical and confusing. 23:37 💡 Edward's mood swings and awkward dialogue make the scene unintentionally funny. 25:30 🚶‍♂ Edward struggles with his conflicting desires but is essentially selfish in his actions. 27:08 🍦 Edward compares Bella's scent to heroin, emphasizing his struggle with temptation. 30:25 💔 Edward's dark past and struggle with temptation are revealed, adding complexity to his character. 31:20 🤔 Bella grapples with the revelation of Edward's past and his potential danger. 33:09 🔪 Edward's confession about his desire to protect Bella adds depth to his character. 35:16 💬 Edward struggles with understanding Bella's thoughts and intentions, leading to frustration. 37:26 📝 Bella's internal conflict reflects an alternate universe where Twilight is a better book. 38:45 😰 Bella experiences dread upon realizing the intensity of Edward's feelings for her. 40:05 🤦‍♀ Bella feels foolish for her confession, while Edward prepares to say a significant line. 41:30 🤔 Bella questions her past actions, seeking clarity in her relationship with Edward. 41:56 😳 Edward exhibits seductive behavior, asserting Bella would have followed him if he desired, emphasizing his irresistible allure. 42:24 🤔 Bella attempts to lighten the tension after Edward's unexpected closeness, but his touch and proximity affect her deeply. 42:48 💕 Edward's chilling touch on Bella's warm skin creates conflicting sensations, intensifying their interaction. 43:16 🥶 With deliberate slowness, Edward explores Bella's neck and shoulders, inducing shivers and breathlessness. 43:44 🔥 Edward's intimate actions, like resting his face on Bella's chest, create a scandalous yet tender moment between them. 44:09 😱 Bella and Edward share a prolonged, almost trance-like embrace, highlighting the intensity of their connection. 44:34 🤗 Despite the risk, Bella feels calm and unafraid in Edward's touch, reveling in the momentary peace between them. 45:00 🥰 Edward reassures Bella after their intimate moment, expressing satisfaction with their closeness. 45:29 🪨 Bella delicately touches Edward's face, marveling at his stillness and comparing him to stone.

[@VioletNKisHere]

Can Bella and Lauren kill Edward together? And Jasmine could be there too. And Lauren could have a crossbow or other long-ranged weapon to contrast with Bella’s knife.

[@chilledkarl]

I'm sat. Mother Hannah always knows what we want.

[@firedforfighting]

Is this your only channel? Gosh i love your everything

[@HannahLeeKidder]

I stream on twitch and post extra videos on Patreon! If that helps! Thanks so much 💜

[@firedforfighting]

Will look out for you on twitch!

[@graynight3478]

Can you do more?? This is really good!

[@firedforfighting]

Have a Happy New Year Hannah, to you and your family..we won 2023 woohoo!! lets go 2024...cant wait to feast my eyes and ears next vid!!

[@WHATRadioNickSembrat]

"There's something so cold about a semi-colon". Got it, so that's what Edward is. Man the scene of him just popping around the forest doing random stuff is so bizarre. It seems like it must be parody or something.

[@WHATRadioNickSembrat]

*TAKING THAT OUT* Maybe I am really close. Now I'm 200 yards away. Now I'm throwing my couch off my roof. What are you gonna do? sToP mE?

[@kaitlingerber1261]

We're back!!

[@albertlopez2237]

Just wondering if you have a vdieo tip or tips on how to write characters who do not speek correctly so publishers get its not lazy writing its part of the characters makeup. Pefect example Burt Ward better known as Paulie in the Rocky series does not phrases his staements correctly. So Stallone ended up rewriting his lines the way he talks.

[@Gees.Journals]

Wait. We're just over looking the "idk I'm on Prozac???" 🤣💀

[@HannahLeeKidder]

thanks for being here 🙏

[@NonPlayerCharacter44]

I LOVE the new movie clips

[@luckyday1407]

That was fantastic.

[@HannahLeeKidder]

thank you friend 🙏

[@abime_quillan]

This is such a hilarious reading/narration

[@dmartin00]

this video sounds really good. did you get a new mic?

[@HannahLeeKidder]

what's so funny is that I went back to my old mic lmao. sometimes, things that are expensive...........are worse.

[@franzim6668]

Dear god, this was agonizing. Please do it again.

[@reyestavia9097]

QUEEN I MISSED YOU

[@HannahLeeKidder]

And I, you

[@EastBayG209]

Where did you go?!

[@HannahLeeKidder]

I'm here!!!

[@KandiWethers]

Not soaking 😂😂😂

[@HannahLeeKidder]

tell me i'm wrong

[@shebreathesingold8043]

Are you still doing your own original writing? I used to follow you years back and remember you were writing a novel for Nano. Is that published anywhere?

[@micahklassen7151]

Can i nap with Saya

[@HannahLeeKidder]

if you're quick

[@Karma-back08]

God, you are beautiful ❤

[@Follyfullidiot]

Does anyone ever here you make a joke and go “haha you’re such a kidder”?

[@HannahLeeKidder]

and tragically I've been funny my whole life

[@LuckyGoulash]

3/10 needs more Charlie

[@HannahLeeKidder]

I'm hearing ya