Round two of the publishing game: Who will survive the slush pile?

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@eggggsbenedict 6 ай бұрын

Story 9’s writer here. Thanks so much for the feedback! You managed to articulate a problem I’ve been struggling to pinpoint in this first page for a while now, and it sparked the idea for a much better, less info dumpy alternative for some key exposition! As for the prosey first person, that was actually intentional (although I definitely overdid it here). A major part of the POV character is that he relies on folk stories as a form of escapism. I wanted to play around with style and make his voice feel ‘storybook-like’ at times because it’s a big part of how he processes things, especially the conflict between his more paranoid/imaginative side and his more grounded/logical side.

@releasingyourinnerdragon 6 ай бұрын

Fantastic to hear that it helped :D I know that these first page reads can sometimes seem brutal, but it helped me enormously when I submitted my first page to a convention when I was just starting this journey.

@markrheaume925 6 ай бұрын

Congrats on your work so far! A 3rd person pov would let you occasionally dip into the POV's internal thoughts, and those could always be highly stylized, as you described, to be strangely antique or brothers grimm or william morris even. Then your writing enjoys three depths: the actual 3rd person prose, the POV's dialogue, and then last, their private fairy-tale themed inner monologue.

@geologyjohnson7700 4 ай бұрын

The premise of that last story sounded really interesting and I started to get hooked.

@markrheaume925 6 ай бұрын

Thanks to all the brave authors!

@catreadingbooks 6 ай бұрын

As a writer - this was incredibly helpful! Thank you for doing these! ❤ As a reader, I'm drawn to 8 and 9, hope to see them both in print one day. 😊

@shlomiksilbiger 5 ай бұрын

Thank you Marie and Drake!

@releasingyourinnerdragon 5 ай бұрын

Thank you very much!

@indiegamechris4759 5 ай бұрын

I love these videos. Helps me see where I need to strengthen my writing.

@releasingyourinnerdragon 5 ай бұрын

Always great to hear our content is appreciated :D

@suvilienee 6 ай бұрын

This one I've been waiting for, thank you! ❤

@releasingyourinnerdragon 6 ай бұрын

Hope you like it!

@philipdouglas842 6 ай бұрын

Thanks for the advice.

@releasingyourinnerdragon 6 ай бұрын

You're welcome :)

@Ray.E.Cullen 6 ай бұрын

Excuse the adverb, but this was immensely helpful advice. 😄 Thank you Marie and Drake!

@releasingyourinnerdragon 6 ай бұрын

Our pleasure!

@EvenStarsBurnUp 6 ай бұрын

Interesting the first story I think was a re write of the edit vide you made on 5/30. You commented that you didn't understand the MCs response/tone to the death and that there was too much showing. It seems the author shortened it alot to be direct about the death and added the details about items poking her on the bed you suggested.

@releasingyourinnerdragon 6 ай бұрын

I agree, it's much more intense and to the point. But grammar, grammar, grammar.

@crimewatcherii9309 6 ай бұрын

If there's a preface or prologue, would a literary agent consider that the first page? or from chapter 1?

@releasingyourinnerdragon 6 ай бұрын

I think they would likely consider the prologue the first page, but a preface (if it's not part the story) probably isn't page 1.

@crimewatcherii9309 6 ай бұрын

@@releasingyourinnerdragon thank you very much

@saxbend 6 ай бұрын

Tried to send an email to the address you gave near the beginning of the video, hoping to send you a first page. Unfortunately the email bounced. Fortunately, however, I spotted a redundant sentence right after sending. I have since fixed it. So I have already benefitted from you!😂

@releasingyourinnerdragon 6 ай бұрын

Hope you got it through okay now?

@saxbend 6 ай бұрын

@@releasingyourinnerdragon I didn't try emailing a second time, but now you mention it, perhaps that's all it would take! Will resend now.

@saxbend 6 ай бұрын

@@releasingyourinnerdragon ok, seems the reason it bounced is gmail's security filter blocking mail from my author address. I've sent it from my musician Gmail account instead (this account), so with any luck you'll find it easily.