Live Edit: Tips on immersing your readers.

[@coffeecreateconnect]

Live edits are my favorite! Even if I'm watching the replay. Always learn so much. Looking forward to watching this 🍿🥤

[@shlomiksilbiger]

Hi Marie and Drake. I am the author, and I really appreciate your kind feedback and the time you took to review my work. I certainly don't believe the "camera" version of "show, don't tell", but I do tend to use introspection and internal emotions sparingly. Probably too sparingly. I learned a LOT from this video, for this chapter and my writing in general. Thank you!

[@releasingyourinnerdragon]

You’re very welcome and I look forward to reading your work someday 😁

[@jfferallian]

"it's an echo if it sounds the same when read aloud" thank you! that is a great way to put it. My preferred reading method atm is audiobook, and sometimes I worry that makes me picky in a different way during editing, but I feel like an echo is and echo.

[@justwritenaomi4792]

@38:43 Perhaps using feeble is a way to tap into Ven's emotions. The thing that caused her pain in this humiliating situation is feeble. Feeble to describe the hose brings a sense of Ven grasping for a thread of more power now.

[@ОльгаВолкова-к7э]

Спасибо!

[@TinieMassive]

The smaller hose might hurt more but the larger hose will deliver a larger volume of water that is more likely to knock someone from their feet... Just found this podcast and I think it's for me 😁

[@snickerbobble]

I think the smaller hose would have more water pressure as the water has to shoot out faster and the pressure is more centralized. The bigger one may be more likely to knock you over though. Imagine a cat sitting on your lap. If they sit up straight, or stand up, they feel heavier since their weight is more focused on a smaller area, but when they lay down on you, they feel lighter, despite being the same weight.

[@davidbishop5359]

Personally, I think the fact that laymen are reading this and debating how the aperture/pressure would work means it is a distracting detail, and unless the rest of the story is about water pressure it's not necessary imho. I think chains vs no chains is much easier to visualise. It's startling that having chains is better than no chains, but as the writer explains why it makes sense, we've been in positions where we were falling and wanted something to grab onto.

[@releasingyourinnerdragon]

That is probably the best take away 😆

[@escobaradrian6876]

Here we go!

[@NickSmith-qp2yu]

You will have higher pressure and flow rate on a larger hose. Higher velocity with less pressure on a smaller hose. "Bernoulli's Principle: This principle explains the relationship between diameter and pressure; as the diameter decreases, the water velocity increases, leading to a decrease in pressure." More of an argument of stinging pain vs blunt force pain.

[@jamesalexander958]

You make this sound like the most confusing thing in the world. A smaller hose creates backpressure that opposes the pressured source

[@jfferallian]

The best opening paragraph read on the show? I was actually thinking this (yes, as someone who's been read on the show). I don't know the blurb or where it's headed, but I was in and hooked

[@shlomiksilbiger]

Thank you! ❤

[@proveit5813]

hello

[@CharlieTosh]

Help they give, mabey i one day write gooder /s