The Downfall of Rarity's Empire [Pony Fanfic Reading] (Dark/Drama)

[@thelostnarrator]

This is my first fanfiction that I've written based on MLP canon characters. There are themes in this story that I pulled from real life from my beloved grandmother, whose fall 10 years ago and the resulting dislocated shoulder prevents her from being able to sew, a pasttime she loved dearly. So yeah... I hope you enjoy this dark fic!

[@SilverTheNightWolf]

Why does Rarity looking old in the thumbnail? 😅

[@davidharrington4828]

Wait, first fanfic on cannon characters? Then what have all the other fanfics been with?

[@joaovictorabramides9977]

@@SilverTheNightWolf takes place many years later.

[@thenewadventuresofhenry6998]

You are extremely creative when you write. I'm excited to hear this tale!

[@thenewadventuresofhenry6998]

I'm sorry that happened to your Grandma.

[@LewdaCRITS]

15:03 This line really stuck with me. We live in a world where it doesn’t matter how talented you are. It doesn’t matter how talented you are, it doesn’t matter how idealistic or passionate you are about your works, if you can’t profit off of it, then you’re useless. It’s harsh, but that’s the way it is.

[@LolaTheEskimo]

That "Do you *want* your medicine?" made my blood freeze holy-

[@hamakochan375kj]

Ikr? She legit threatened her with her medicine, as if "if you do not apply to what I say or do what I say, I will take your medicine away from you and let you suffer"

[@MissyMona]

That little bit of perspective from Sweetie's point of view was soo good, she doesn't think she's abusing her older sister. This was what SHE wanted after all, and of course she is a recluse. But she doesn't think any part of this is her doing or her responsibility. It hasn't occurred to her that her big sister isn't the caretaker of their relationship who failed her, but rather she failed her sister, and didn't realize it was her turn to take care of Rarity. On top of that, they are both feeling trapped, but ironically the only solution is for them both to stop. There's nothing wrong with not getting along with the elderly, but if that's the case you need to step aside for those who will and can.

[@AmberBolosky]

Why would Sweetie bell do that to her own sister?

[@victorialucas7645]

All diamonds eventually lose their luster, and although the gleam is not as vibrant as it once was with age comes wisdom; even if other Belles are not as sweet. They may ring now with a jagged, jaded edge but as generation gaps widen hold tight to the memories of joy and discard the tatters of unfulfilled orders. This one is a catharsis. I know with the voices giving it life it will be a shining vent to a dusty jewel and will make such an old gem sparkle.

[@okamidragonstudios8551]

I feel like in a way, this did kind of tackle elder abuse.

[@antonrueda1044]

The way Sweetie Belle and Rarity's relationship devolved into something so corrupted. I hope that neither I nor anyone else ever end up in a situation like this. Anyways, great fanfic reading!

[@Duraganthelion]

Damn, so Sweetie became another toxic Clip Trot user.

[@McBean1331]

Yup.

[@katelynthewhitewerewolf6376]

​@@McBean1331 At least she's not dead or something

[@CamobatmanHunter]

Clip Trot? I'm guessing that's the mlp equivalent of Tiktok

[@Crypt-Kitty]

I imagine this is going to be a stand alone story, but im actually super intrigued by the implications in it, and what it might mean for the other characters. Have the other girls noticed shes been missing? Are they still otherwise friends? Is Sweetie still friends with the crusaders? Do they know what Sweeties been doing, or even replicaiting it with their own sisters? What happened to Sweetie, did she just get sour with age, or? She was jealous of her as a kid, maybe her own career path didnt shake out, so she takes it out on rarity now? Anyway, thanks so much for the story, and everyones hard work!

[@daynmclales6502]

Personally, with the last two lines, what draws my attention is "Late rarity line" and "wondering if she should get a lock for her sister's (rarity's) door. I'm thinking sweetie bell explained away her elder sister's mysterious disappearance with claiming she had already passed, which, she could then strategically use her fans and family's grief to upscale stock and increase demand for "limited edition" dresses designed by Rarity's own hoof.

[@Crypt-Kitty]

​@daynmclales6502 Ooooooh I didn't put that together, good eye! I thought they were emailing her regarding like, future plans for after she died, and Sweetie was swayed by them talking about it, and was wanting to "get a lock", so she could just starve her off so she could profit then off the grief and "last edition" dresses. That makes more sense though, so then she can just keep her pumping out dresses indefinitely AND not have people asking questions.

[@dizzydots4786]

The fact that - both these sisters are suffering in this arrangement, but both are grossly misunderstanding one another is so sad Like, talk, just *talk*, people (well, ponies) Because it's mutual neglect I started off thinking "oh shit, this is elderly abuse" Then realising, no, Sweetie's distracted because all she wants is her sister who seemingly won't give her time of day. Sweetie's responses are short because she feels like there's no point in a convo, if Rarity just ignores her Rarity is desperate for a meaningful interaction, but she's scared of her sister and regrets the lifestyle. I also feel like there's an underlying guilt somewhere. Rares feels like "i dragged sissy into this. I'll shut up and sit down" There *is* an understanding for one another, but because no one's talking it's like... they're stonewalling each other because they don't know how to communicate any more

[@kaijunasan4497]

I need to say this, the line: JUST CREATE is more often way too hard for me to do when it comes to drawing but still it's not at all as easy as ppl think it is. It's all about motivation which isn't always there. Nonetheless it's sometimes the push you need ❤ Aside from that amazing work as always TLN 👏👏

[@jamiekagemori1299]

Oh damn sweetie is too addicted to that phone ain’t she…

[@vilet5257]

The thumbnail has rarity looking like a sopping wet cat, she’s so sad bro what happened 😭😭

[@Thelastmanalive565]

@@vilet5257 Age and her sister

[@allisonfacchin3239]

The intense detail in commentary always gets me so into the video, I love it so much even tho seeing rarity loose her shine as a diamond and her being aware that she won’t be able to gleam much longer and put the same youthful energy time care and love into her creations in dresses as she once did. Her disbelief that age is getting to her breaks my heart but it’s unavoidable and inevitable sadly, such a good video like wow. Perfectly executed, good job lost you almost had me at a loss for words

[@calamitykate1982]

This is such a beautiful and dark story! Poor Rarity..🥺

[@StormPheasey]

this is your first fanfic based on canon characters? you'd never tell such a good story, hits all the right spots of creepiness and sadness

[@zenny7479]

I've been starving for dark pony fic for many moons... Thank you for uploading

[@baliyae]

Great story, Lost. I loved it. Poor Rarity, I felt so bad for her.

[@gravelordnito38]

For being a multi-billionaire with expert skill, she has somehow entered a much more depressing state.

[@dylanterry3421]

This was really good and the fact that you based some of it from things that happened to your grandmother in life. It made it much more darker for me, well done

[@dragoncross42]

OMG..... This story was amazing, the music and voice acting really set the mood for this dark story. I got to say i was getting slapped in the feels ever second the story was going seeing what was happening to Rarity. I got to say Lost this was an interesting story, really love seeing these dark tales. Thanks for this Fanfic reading!!!

[@SilverTheNightWolf]

Can we appreciate the time and effort they put into theirs video's for us ❤

[@thenewadventuresofhenry6998]

Yes.

[@MKG-2033]

Okay, I’m convinced this phone is listening to me. I was talking about the lost narrator a lot yesterday and then this shows up in my KZbin recommended.

[@alexaistrying]

This is the first fanfic i've actually sat down and listened for a while, maybe a few years since this is new. Man, i'm glad the mlp fandom's been coming back recently. Now i gotta go back and listen to your other readings. Amazing work on this one!

[@hkh4-onehandedvidya]

Crippling pain somthing can relate to nerve pain keeps me stuck in my bed alot. Great reading

[@SCP-1762-BOL]

All that shines shall fade in time

[@MarianneStudios]

This was an incredibly powerful narrative, and an interesting spin on the future of Rarity’s entrepreneurship! There’s some really powerful real world allusions in here, such as sweatshops and the misery of minimalism within the fashion and fine art industries…

[@TheCommenterDragon]

This was yet another masterpiece of a fanfic reading Lost! As usual I absolutely enjoyed every second of this vid, And everyone did such a sensational and phenomenal job bringing this vid to life. The voice acting and art was all done ever so incredibly and phenomenally you all did such outstanding and brilliant work make no mistake about it!!!

[@Jerkwad152]

Poor old woman deserves a hell of a lot better 😢

[@dariustucker1690]

Downfall was going to happen to Rarity!? Hey thelostnarrator!! That was a pretty tent I love the story and the details and the graphics. It makes real life 🥰

[@1989JROG]

This story is definitely heart wrenching when you listen to this. I definitely enjoyed the story.

[@BlackMoonHowls]

Thank you for including the music in the video itself.

[@CamobatmanHunter]

As someone who's never been a big fan of Rarity, this story made my heart tug for her. Beautifully written story, LN~❤

[@caelusprime5278]

Old Mare Rarity.

[@TheOnlyPonyAnonyous]

The lost narrator returns? My day just got 20% Cooler✨

[@Bayden-Bluedash]

You can count on me to join you for this Lost! I imagine this one with Rarity will be interesting! Consider my curiosity peaked! I'll leave my afterthoughts in the comments later! Afterthoughts: Man poor Rarity being an old lonely dress designer! I also found it cute hearing that Sweetie Belle was one of those girls that just loved texting on her phone! I enjoy the creativity you bring to a certain character in your stories Lost! Your talent still shines!

[@queenwishieluck1359]

Well technically, Sweetie Belle is no sweetie anymore. She’s a possible adult (acting like a spoiled teenager.)

[@Bayden-Bluedash]

@@queenwishieluck1359 Pretty much. I can half imagine Sweetie as a spoiled teenager

[@seanlinwall2332]

@thelostnarrator You have a real gift for writing, I wish it went longer...but I understand some hesitation especially when touching on RL. Thank you for making this!

[@keinenbockmehr1749]

As someone, who values his parents above all this fanfic hit me unbelievably hard. I know it is just that: a fanfiction. But I can feel Rarity's pain so clearly. Being essentially betrayed by her own sister. Seeing her life's work destroyed in front of her... That hurts... Let me be clear: I love... LOVE a good fanfiction where the MCs face sad or tragic things. Where they are absolutely destroyed, maybe even by their own decisions. But this was somehow too much for me... I had to pause reading somewhere in the last quarter, because I needed to clear my head of the pain and despair I felt for that poor mare! So... I guess congratulations for completely breaking me? There are not many things who manage to do so!

[@SavannahTheSlytherin]

That was an amazing fic lost! It was very well put together and you could even tell that it must've took a while. Very Amazing👏👏👏👏

[@DannyNWRE2]

My word. This story really hit me right in the feels. Great job Lost!

[@AMirrorCat]

Absolutely amazing work dear creators!

[@RadRedStudios]

Awesome story and great narration Lost, you all did an amazing job. :)

[@crystalcrystal6266]

Yay so excited been craving a new dark fic! one of the world's best spooky write I love your work hope your feeling better ♥️

[@dollgrimoire]

Currently relistening to Apple 🍎🤍 love your readings lost and mag!! Would love if you could do the candymare stories sometime 🤍

[@zanyreptiles]

I’m so excited for this, Losty!!

[@oneofnone7947]

Both you and your beloved in the same day amazing

[@WolfX1120]

That was dark as all hell... Great job,,, /)

[@UnsaidLies]

15:30 oh my... I don't think this is going to end well

[@LaNgAs420]

Poor Rarity...Sweetie Belle turned into such a jerk.

[@leidyramirez7822]

We’re almost at 160k subs can’t wait for the next blooper reel!!!

[@actuallymiu]

love all your content 🥺💞

[@Vixnarts]

This is so good and sad! Why would Sweetie Belle do that to poor ol Rarity 😭. I was so peeved with Sweetie

[@charleswalker8262]

Another Lost Narrator Masterpiece..............I Love It🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩

[@Greg44348]

Can't wait

[@johnrandolph1989]

Man, this one got me.😢

[@quintonjones2699]

Amazing job Lost

[@detectiveAsherglintStone]

I stopped scrolling on my tv knowing i stopped on this story and i was like you know what this sounds like the person who makes the best horror mlp storie's and i Checked the subscription and i was like Yay a other horror mlp storie by you mostly i was happy but i went through other horror mlp storie's oh and yeah i Rewatched the horror mlp stories again about the weeping tree's i like that storie

[@jonathanpierrelouis1267]

this was sad :(

[@michaelbuono4007]

This brings a whole new meaning of beating a dead horse

[@priyasall]

So, is Sweetie Belle enslaving Rarity? That's what I'm getting from this story. Or is there something I'm not understanding?

[@LadyLeomon]

She’s literally working her to death 🥺🥺🥺

[@priyasall]

@@LadyLeomon Why? Does she want to proffit off of her own systers life?

[@LadyLeomon]

@@priyasall honestly I’m not entirely sure what’a going on myself. My best guess is Sweetie Belle is the new “face” of the Company while Rarity is the talent behind it … honestly that last line about a lock made me wonder who’s going to ice who first 😰😰😰

[@priyasall]

@@LadyLeomon We can only guess. Also, what do you mean by ice?

[@LadyLeomon]

@@priyasall in older media “to ice someone” means to kill them

[@Archiver_Studio]

All diamonds have their spikes, all roses have their thorns, all beauty has some kind of ugliness to it. Rarity is trapped in yet another abusive loop, first it was the fashion world, now it is her own 'darling' sister who is keeping her at arms length to continue this level of 'creativity' Sweetie Belle has a serious ego to believe she could truly understand beauty when all she releases is hatred and ugliness, I can already imagine what she looks like at this stage of her life, either spoiled, or cold and professional. Maybe all three? Either way, Rarity is trapped in yet another abusive relationship, if only she had honoured AJ's words and surrendered herself into her golden years She could've been so peaceful with Applejack if she had let herself be free...

[@tobiasneal9284]

The Diddy empire!

[@darkreflection9087]

These are really good

[@senatorarmstrong1233]

Lets go!

[@Akira-MonomiOriginal]

The ending tho- was sweetie bell THAT bad that Rarity would need a literal lock?

[@Saria-io5fx]

Sweetie Belle, give your sister a break, geez 🥺😒

[@LilaHubert-jl9zd]

I've seen you're trying to stop me from listening to Al your readings by adding more ..but beware! I'm not easily deterred!

[@JeseCaba-t4p]

What rarity should do: *blasted sweetiebelle to the sun*

[@s.little4706]

Cool story

[@alyssagriffin9180]

15:25-15:42 Girl RUN!!!! Or at least write to Twilight and use your magic to transport the letter to her. Your sister has devious plans for you and can no longer be trusted!! 😳😳😳

[@juriskaulins6724]

This is scarry!

[@kethamined7129]

7:50 I literally spit out my drink

[@Fückcoldraven]

Wasn't expecting this

[@johnynoway9127]

my actual question is how does a pony use a phone... And its stated that shes holding it in hand lol

[@harrypottergod5164]

Hi I know I have to wait for the full audio of the another apple sleep experiment so when are you going to upload it sorry I hope you not mad at me for asking about it

[@gamingwithjosie]

Another Apple sleep experiment is completed though. Are you talking about the podcast?

[@harrypottergod5164]

​@@gamingwithjosie like full not in parts

[@jordanhicks3094]

Dark/Drama/Depressing

[@Synthen]

I don't think Apple Bloom and Scootaloo would let this slide! 😡

[@tsunsu]

graye story it hit just the right way.

[@princessladypirate]

cool

[@JazmyneAlderman]

What happened to rarity 😨

[@legendsofshyrin8149]

I’m not sure I understood the very end?

[@djfoxygaming8203]

Is this a grimdark or normal fanfic

[@not_mana]

Dark/Drama fanfic, not grimdark :)

[@djfoxygaming8203]

@not_mana ehhhhh good enough, I have a Playlist of all the dark/grimdarks from lost

[@katelynthewhitewerewolf6376]

Poor Rarity

[@snowcone9444]

So do you take requests?

[@keystorm3646]

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[@Traumatizedartist]

I hate sweetie bell in this fan fiction

[@queenwishieluck1359]

Well Sweetie Belle is no Sweetie in this story.

[@JeseCaba-t4p]

Sweetie belle more like bratty belle

[@SabrielGamarra]

No sap

[@thesouthernotaku9004]

Story telling is truly an art form, loved this. I really felt bad for Rarity, once we get too old to do the things that we love, what else is there? It can't be easy to give up your legacy and the "Face" of your brand. The phone buzz actually made me jump a little bit, haha. I was so engrossed in the reading I wasn't expecting it. Lol. Sorry about your grandmother as well. You and Mag keep up the great work.

[@innocentassassinawdvw]

More mlp horror!!!!!!!

[@LilaHubert-jl9zd]

Hiiii

[@MPJBD-MLP_2nd]

🙁

[@Dewdropster]

29th comment lol