WE WROTE THE SECOND DRAFT OF OUR SCREENPLAY

[@patrickhwillems]

WHOA GUYS let's clear something up: I wasn't procrastinating, I had to finish editing a 20-minute video I had already committed to releasing that week. I WISH I had been procrastinating. That would've been way more fun.

[@joshuageraldbutler8037]

Yeah, people seems really harsh about it. Anyway, I loved the video. I now have a trinity of writing videos. Now we just need to find out what happened to that short film screenplay you wrote last summer in a week...

[@simonkennedy6116]

Man, I've been procrastinating for three years. I'm only on the third draft. Procrastinating gets nothing done.

[@ChrisOvens51]

First step to fixing the problem is recognising that it is a problem

[@TK_Brainslug]

reminds me of my supervisor, he almost starts three jobs at a time but never finish them properly he just give it to other people to finish. Wh not do one job at a time?

[@namhur8966]

OK THEN. MY BAD

[@rileymoloney2600]

You know you’re procrastinating when you’re watching other people procrastinate on writing their screenplay while you yourself are procrastinating working on your screenplay

[@ikaramvaink6023]

True, true

[@arjunjai1852]

fuck.

[@dxthakid4727]

Is your screenplay finished?

[@a.n.t.94]

Read that comment a year ago, still not finished. Thanks that hurt.

[@bartandaelus359]

So how'd your screenplay come along?

[@griffinh21]

I wrote a screenplay last spring. Spent about an hour a day writing for three months. Got around three pages done a day. It takes a lot of discipline and patience

[@griffinh21]

Also, I realize it may not be feasible for you guy to write together but writing sections of the script separately may cause differences in pacing and voice. Just a thought

[@TheGeorgeD13]

3 months? I find that to be a very long time. My first drafts usually take me about 3 weeks. Though, I may be going faster than most people, so I do wonder what the average is.

[@griffinh21]

George Daugherty Everyone's process is different. I find myself continually rewriting as I go. May spend 30 to 45 minutes on a single page

[@TheGeorgeD13]

Ah, that makes sense. Then your first drafts are probably more polished than mine. I would only do rewriting as I go if I needed a polished draft in a tight deadline on assignment. Personally, I just have to get the barebones story done and out of the way, so that I can go and rewrite and refine the story to the best story I can get out of that first draft.

[@poiesist]

The outrageous eruptions of motivation you guys show ends up inspiring me to work on my stuff, even if only at equal eruptitude, each time. Congratulations, and thank you

[@DanPurcell]

Honestly super impressed that you could make an entire pizza from scratch (under the impression that it's store bought dough) -- would watch a movie that features the recipe to said pizza lol

[@immanuela209]

.....That sounds amazing!

[@SeaMushroom98]

Put the 3 cups flour, yeast, 2 teaspoons salt and 2 tablespoons of the olive oil in a food processor. Turn the machine on and add 1 cup water through the feed tube. Process until the mixture forms a slightly sticky ball, about 30 seconds. If the mixture is too dry, add more water 1 tablespoon at a time and process for 5 to 10 seconds after each addition. If the mixture refuses to come together, add more flour 1 tablespoon at a time and process until it does. Rub a little olive oil or sprinkle a little flour onto your hands and shape the dough into a ball; wrap in plastic. Let rest at room temperature until the dough doubles in size, 1 to 2 hours. Or, if time is tight, let it rest at least 20 minutes before proceeding. Or refrigerate for several hours, deflating if necessary if it threatens to burst the plastic. (Or divide in half, wrap each ball in plastic, slip into a plastic bag and freeze.) Let it return to room temperature before proceeding. Reshape the dough into a ball and cut in half, forming 2 balls. (From here on, use olive oil if you're cooking on baking sheets, flour if on a pizza stone.) Put them on a lightly floured surface (a pizza peel is ideal), sprinkle with flour and cover with plastic wrap; or brush then with a bit of oil and place on a lightly oiled sheet. Let rest for about 20 minutes, while you heat the oven to 500 degrees. Press a dough ball into a 1/2-inch-thick flat round, adding flour or oil to the work surface as necessary. Press or roll the dough until it's as thin as you can make it; let it rest a bit if it becomes too elastic. (Patience is your friend here.) You can do two baking sheets at once, or one after another, as you'll have to if using a peel. If doing the latter, slide the dough from the peel onto the stone. Sprinkle the pizzas with olive oil (just a little), salt and rosemary. Bake for at least 10 minutes, perhaps rotating once, until the crust is crisp. Serve hot, warm or at room temperature.

[@rowan631]

Pizza is incredibly easy to make, it's just time consuming

[@ThinkStory]

Hey Patrick, I used to be a reader in the industry and now I have my own channel on screenwriting. If you ever want an extra pair of eyes on your script I'd love to read it. For free of course. Cheers, love your vids!

[@aztecr7]

Think Story Cleaver Man

[@scrabdusanproductions2104]

Think Story oh wow your here. cool

[@filiporvik2782]

Love both these channels

[@ChrisOvens51]

Oh, hey ThinkStory -- love your channel! Any chance you'd be willing to look at my screenplay, too?

[@sdb3068]

Chris Ovens I’ll look at it!

[@vernonmeidlinger870]

yes! i love these writing updates. Keep them coming!!

[@austinschollaert6424]

Great video! This has become one of my favorite channels over the last month or so. That heist movie video was great and so was the mission impossible one not to mention that amazing podcast you guys are pumping out every week. Keep it up guys!

[@Karloffpropaganda]

I find it so satisfying to see that you have a similar work process to me (and I presume many others): let the previous job spill into your schedule, goof off even though you know you should be working, smash out some of the work like crazy, don't finish it, goof off again, smash out some more, hope for the best 😩🤞 I should probably get off KZbin and finish my work…

[@FilthyandFree]

Just finished a horror screenplay of our own! Congrats, guys! We know how fucking hard it is.

[@ryanpeters9108]

I’m so proud of you guys! I can’t wait till it’s finished!!!

[@ChrisAkaMastermind]

The Loser Club "... finished?"

[@ryanpeters9108]

As in shot

[@porcupineracer2]

I feel you guys on how long it takes to write screenplays, regardless of quality. It took me 9 months to write the first draft of my first screenplay. I took a break to work on a screenplay for a second story thinking I would be faster now, but it took 11 months to finish that one; it was far better quality. Now I'm finally at my second draft of my first screenplay. It was all worth it, though. That feeling of completing something major really motivated me to keep on it, despite the time commitment. Best wishes to you guys as well!

[@garrett291]

Jake we can hear your PS4

[@TomEyeTheSFMguy]

I feel like he was playing tf2.

[@TRAILERWATCHERP]

That MODOK mug tho

[@Nkanyiso_K]

*I really love these videos* they made me inspired to find a Isao Takahata to my Hayao Miyazaki

[@andyheydt]

As an aspiring writer, this video is so relatable.

[@aids2132]

The first 10 minutes is Pat procrastinating XD

[@TonyQuinn]

You’re one of my role models man! I want to be a writer and storyteller in some form (still not totally sure unfortunately) so watching your journey definitely encourages and inspires me. I also love your video essays as well. Good luck on your endeavors! 😃.

[@spartida3850]

I’ve always wanted to write a screenplay but have never gotten around to it cause I’m too lazy and probably procrastinate just as much if not more than pat. Keep up the good work ! truly inspiring. keep us updated if you can. will you do a recording of the table reading ? I’d love to see your friends reactions and criticisms of your work even if it doesn’t shed much light of what’s actually in the screenplay.

[@Wow-qg2ex]

yesss I was very curious about what happened to that screenplay you wrote in 3 days...

[@CRITstudios]

As someone who also procrastinates with writing and pushing myself to get shit done- this video was healing lol

[@blackhax36]

Patrick being a procrastinating Pattie is just fucking hilarious.

[@MTGRCCS]

jesus christ patrick you even water the garden with sunglasses on

[@namhur8966]

THE PROCRASTINATION IS REAL

[@JNLJProductions]

I've got mad respect for you two. Keep up the good work fellas!

[@bambangsoeharto2256]

Patrick= Ultimate Procastinator

[@shyguyN1CK]

lol I was just thinking about that screenplay. So glad it's still being worked on.

[@redshirts4757]

That is my favorite vid on this channel and I wish you guys the best. I wanna be like you guys.

[@billb4447]

Hey Patrick, I was an assistant to a high level motion picture lit agent and had to constantly be writing coverage. I’d love to take a look at your script and send feedback. If this is something of interest to you let me know!

[@absolutepat]

"Everything hurts, and I'm not even exercising." Put it on my tombstone.

[@ovidioolivo7274]

Love videos on writing!!!! Keep them coming!!!!

[@MrDainemudda]

I always print everything big I have to write or rewrite. You take a red pen and go crazy, crossing out, reshuffel, spellchecking, note-taking. Because nobody can write as quick on a computer as one is thinking. And it's fast, two to three minutes a page on average. Later on you get started writing and typing, the best? You don't have to remember anything because it's written down already and if you are good on taking notes you will have an easy time explaining changes to your superiors or coworkers.

[@bengalcat34]

Great job guys, im excited to see what happens.

[@oscarrosenwald4001]

This is very well edited.

[@TyroneBruinsmaFilms]

Not gonna lie-I write like you Patrick, procrastinating and then spamming out a script in a short time (like I am with a short right now) and just tell myself I can do it. Awesome to see you guys develop a project that sounds really good. I wrote my first feature script in April this year (100 pages in 22 days as a challenge to see if I can write one in a month) so I'm going to try and get the second draft done in September while I'm writing treatments for other screenplays. Watching you videos Patrick genuinely inspires me to create and I love seeing your work so thank you for being awesome

[@Nerd101]

This is amazing to see!

[@PabloSanchez-oc5fb]

I watch this wayy too often.

[@cenedra20]

Would love to see the first reading with your friends! Please make a video of it when you do...

[@sufyansheikh6192]

I love how how you can see Patricks deterarating physical and mental state through the video

[@lawrencecalablaster568]

Why am I not surprised that Patrick's first two days of film involved him never once working on the thing he is supposed to do, but nervously working on something else?

[@squachotic7000]

Great video! Very inspiring.

[@souljairfan]

Can’t wait to see the finished project such an interesting way to write a screenplay lol

[@fanboydee]

I lost it when he started watering the garden, King of Procrastination.

[@radovanmatula6068]

I write in the same way. I say I'm gonna be working the entire day and then if I'm lucky I write for two hours

[@indycinema]

Kick ass and write true fellas.

[@afonsolucas2219]

Black Hole is amazing. Great atmosphere.

[@daltonriser1125]

A video a week plus the podcasts

[@Mr_Movie_Fan]

I fix problems in my scripts while it's in the works

[@brendanfogg7791]

I love the Stewart's shout-out!

[@ShadowManV3]

this video is full of procrastinating lol

[@LBAW]

For a creative person, the best motivators are bills and a deadline.

[@Jango2811]

This is the most relatable video I've ever seen in my life

[@rubiperez9797]

I love how comfortable Pat is with his sexuality to do the walk of shame, twice, from his friends house. And I only use the term walk of shame with love and because maybe thats what it looked like from a neighbors prospective. 👍

[@Luke-kv2ot]

"it's going...slowly..." Big Mood

[@samuelmineiro9416]

Advice for scriptwriting specifically? I’ve done a lot of prose work, but it’s a different art form.

[@collinsmith7078]

that pizza looks so good holy crap

[@thereccher8746]

It takes about eight months and several hours of rewrites a day to get that product to perfection. Good luck.

[@edgarcarvajal167]

wow its been a dam year since you wrote the first draft?! time flies, i felt like i watched that video a few weeks ago

[@PrograError]

Maybe use the method the expanse's writers, James S.A Corey, used for the writing of the books... one write, then send to the other guy the manuscript to edit and write. it sounds easier than to write that... I think it was a google talk...

[@Wombat2020]

It was definitely procrastination, know when I see it as I am a procrastinator.

[@masterhook]

ok, here is a idea, don't know if it is a good one but here we go. When you have your final screenplay, do something like that fan made star wars film. I mean if its 120 pages put it out to the world and take the best, funniest, or what ever version and use them to make the film. So what would happen is each team would pick a page, you could have someone let up a discord server as the made place for people to talk about what pages they are want to do and what people are working on. use this as an experiment in community film making. There are a ton of people out there with the want to do this and its a way to see the film done and see how it changes team to team (see the star wars fan films for what I am talking about). Yes, it will still be a good bit of work on your end but in the end you get the film made, posted to youtube, lots of people get there shot of being part of it and who knows that could happen. the whole thing from start to finish would be fun to watch. Like I said, just an Idea.

[@IAteFire]

MasterHook So basically the robocop remake

[@masterhook]

IAteFire Wow, ok. Please explain to me how after reading what I said did you get that, I am really curious how you got to that conclusion.

[@SeekingMediaProductions]

I understand that a screenplay takes a long time to finish. It takes me 3 weeks just to finish 15 pages.

[@KamenOOORider]

That Pizza looks delicious!!!!!!

[@zig1134]

M.O.D.O.C. - Mug Organism Designed Only for Coffee

[@matthewgilpincom]

8:30 - Someone took some time off to play on the playstation ;P

[@VertigoDefinitivo]

So many sponsors by beverages.

[@rossjennings8264]

@Patrick (H) Williams home many story beats or beats do you write down for a full, feature narrative screenplay? There are considered 15, according to the internet. What’s your take? Who do you consider an influence on story structure and character arcs?

[@bobunitone]

Feel your struggle. Currently writing or editing my 2nd feature. It's taken me 2.5 years, on draft 12 and I work a 9-5.

[@hendersonlamar]

Wow, that pizza looks good.

[@WorldWideWong]

Jake saying that he feels weird about people looking at him like he's weird...IN NEW YORK CITY!!! I live in Canada and EVEN I know that NYC is FULL of characters...I don't think vlogging is very weird there

[@marcus_brown95]

Is it crazy past the 9:00 mark I can tell the music in the background is the PS4 login theme lol

[@henryguzman5161]

I love these videos

[@radovanmatula6068]

Hi, how do you approach writing second and other drafts of your scripts? Do you start almost entirely from scratch with the previous draft serving as a blueprint of sorts, or do you just simply rewrite and tweak the already existing pages?

[@cheaprockfilms9754]

Victorious music 19:38

[@verkoprod5591]

“creative juices” does sound too moist.

[@BadKarma714]

That's apple for you lol

[@joshuageraldbutler8037]

Could we get a recorded tableread of this?

[@giovannivieira2454]

What screenplay writing program do you use?

[@akshaybhatia8971]

Jake is using Fade In Pro. I don’t know what Patrick is using. I use Fade In Pro, and it’s a really great program, that is also industry standard, so I’d recommend checking it out if you don’t already have it

[@khoenbell1804]

How do you get your screenplay produced. I'm a rookie and don't know how to do this stuff.

[@ronmaguire]

Nice PlayStation in the background Jacob.😏

[@jacobtorpey8357]

Thanks I'm playing far Cry 5 on it and blasting cultists

[@jacobsaul]

two sponsors in one episode ?! congrats my dude 😉

[@andycahill2972]

Stewart’s!!!!!!!!!! Yes.

[@theaddictofgaming9174]

The 26 people who disliked are the only people with good work habits

[@Threeli]

LOVE black hole

[@jpvoss]

For the second draft, did you write everything from scratch or did you take the scenes you already had and just tweaked them, so did you in the end write the entire script a second time or just changed stuff in the first draft? I struggle with second drafts because Im never quite sure on what I should do.

[@naramoro]

Anyone know what happened to the screenplay. Would love an update

[@chuk9036]

no tomato juice in your pizza?? huhh??

[@sydny909]

aw i wanna read it so bad!!!!!!! im sure its rad. love your videos :)

[@rishivaja1733]

Which screenwriting program are you guys using? I’m a Final Draft guy but thinking of switching over to Fade In

[@almightydouchebag9453]

Amazon Storywriter

[@ThatWrestlingHound]

Nani?

[@Evan-nx9ng]

Wijaya

[@EmileFeik]

Nani.

[@sciencecharity]

Wrestling fans on Patrick’s channel? Wooo

[@robonick3607]

Charles Burns fans rise up

[@ChristianSpliess]

08:06 - Best shot of the video: Patrick standing in the garden. With sunglasses. Looking cool.

[@JustLukeMorgan]

Any update on this?

[@connornyhan]

So one draft every year?

[@jasonsizzler4869]

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[@idoazo6528]

why only 720p? 1

[@sebastiancarthy2188]

What’s gonna happen with this script?

[@JamesLawner]

Are Patrick and Jacob related? They look like they could be cousins.

[@julianayala03]

kzbin.info/www/bejne/r3uQi5J6jJV0q6c HAHAHA

[@JHallenbeck]

Setting an arbitrary one week deadline to draft or re-draft an entire feature screenplay is counter productive. It makes for a cute video idea but that is not a good way to write. Take your time. Set a deadline for yourselves for sure - one month, two months - but forcing yourselves to speed through the writing process is not the stepping stone to a good script. It's like you just want to get it out of the way so you can get to the part you like - a table read. I find this whole thing very dubious. p.s. no one wants to steal your work. Stop being so precious. Christ, you even have a video in which to prove the copyright if you had pitched the idea. I bet you even added that little copyright symbol onto the front of your screenplay. A word from someone who does this for a living - this makes you look like amateurs.