Editing YOUR College Essays | This Essay Will CHANGE YOUR LIFE

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[@AnhTran-cq6kp]

Something I learned from this video is that for a problem-solution essay, to make sure the solution is portrayed more than the problem! Thank you for making these videos, I really enjoy them and learn a lot for my own essays.

[@ovidiugangalic7163]

It was a really nice video, I didn't expect that starting with a quote was not recommended and I didn't expect the first draft to be a 3, I now understand I need to work a lot on my essay

[@Zvppy]

avoid quotes as ur starting sentence, and problem-solution ratio should be more solution based

[@krithinb4788]

Great video! I learned a lot about structure for problem-solution and specific verbs to make an essay truly exemplary.

[@Taran_K]

I was honestly impressed how such a compelling story was fit into 650 words. I learned more about the problem solution ratio and how paragraphs should be split up.

[@romanoalexa]

And this is why elevat.ed is exceptional-- the first draft was absolutely amazing. It was hard to imagine how this essay could have been enhanced even further, yet with Kevin's astute analysis and recommendations, it was!! Bravo!

[@arielshih9353]

I don't think I could ever get tired of watching Kevin go through essay edits-concise, effective, and extremely efficient! Learning a lot from both the students' essays and how the feedback is provided!

[@zionw1837]

Howwww do ppl write like this I feel like my essay is trash

[@ayomide7931]

fr tho

[@aadikhops_11]

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[@elevatedschool]

Thank you! This made my day! :)

[@arnavsinha5190]

Thank you so much! Having written tons of drafts without making much progress myself, I found that very helpful!

[@ovidiugangalic7163]

Can't wait for a new break dance, very interesting insights on the essay and how it went to extending outside helping his mom

[@karenlu6762]

Wow, I loved your insights here Kevin! Definitely thinking deeply about them!

[@xinixperla8132]

Hi Kevin! I liked that you mentioned extending the student’s sphere of influence beyond their family in the conclusion/takeaway! Top tier advice and video!

[@GladysGerbaud]

Great video, Kevin! Super insightful and useful feedback

[@huntertharpe1917]

Awesome tips (as always)! I love how Kevin incorporates very actionable steps for the student to continuing refining their solution + application of their solution. Keep the great videos coming!

[@tanyazilinskas9457]

I’m also not always a fan of an epigraph, but I love the use of this particular quote-it’s intriguing but not immediately understandable, which gets the reader’s attention (and sparks curiosity). The completion of the quote in the conclusion is so satisfying and thematically resonant.

[@tanmayee3066]

Realizing that using varying syntax (such as parenthesis) throughout an essay can help vary your sentences and make it more interesting to the reader while allowing you to add more snippets of your character. This video was rlly informative and has definitely been helping me with my college admissions process :)

[@lornazhen7228]

Great tips! Love these videos, and how you go in depth into the feedback!

[@VaughnGoehrig]

Awesome edit, Kevin! Such a moving piece :)

[@GabeHoffman-p5m]

Super cool illustration!

[@robzzz8046]

Definitely the structural elements in terms of parallel structure and the concision that was implemented to elevate the essay

[@Sailor-boat]

Flow of the essay through use of literary elements has really elevated! Wow! Unsure if I will receive your help, but, as this video by it self, this video helps enough :)

[@NuryChavez-e3i]

Super helpful review and such an amazing essay!

[@AlexNorris-j2u]

What an amazing essay :0 I was blown away!

[@aileenhdez3433]

Hi Kevin! Another helpful & insightful review of a Common App essay:) If possible, would you be able to read/rate a narrative-like essay rather than a problem-solution essay? Although every essay you've reviewed so far has helped me with my own essay, mine is less problem-focused and more a "story-telling" of what I think best describes me.

[@MechidPodcast]

Both the essay and the dance were top!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[@ReillyMorris-h1d]

Really cool to see how you made an essay that was already strong much stronger! :)

[@PatrickMetcalf-r3p]

Great conclusion example. This is an astounding essay.

[@EthanMiller-n2n]

the breaking clip🔥🔥🔥🔥

[@Ebdnvioqvnonroiwbniow]

This was super helpful! This was a great essay and I loved seeing how you took it to the next level :D

[@Oynsnaa]

I can't even express how much I appreciate you T.T tysm

[@elevatedschool]

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I need a discount 😢 This is almost 1/4th my dads salary…(Cursing the exchange rates)

[@shoutotodoroki4047]

I really love your videos! Thank you very much for such videos. Just recently my mentor told me that my essay was really bad, so now I have to rewrite it. Your videos are really being helpful;

[@AnneFletcher-k9b]

Thanks Kevin!!

[@mihikas5960]

Thank you this was incredible!

[@hunterdhruv2992]

Thanks for the info mate! I really hope i can crush this essay.

[@KalebAklilu]

Top quality video, you earned my sub.

[@Isaac_duek]

Thank you, your videos help a ton!

[@elevatedschool]

Glad you like them Isaac!

[@nyingngum7943]

Oh my! I love your reviews, Kevin. Thank you so much for your work. Whenever I type the link for the website you said we could use to submit our essays for review, it always shows error in my browser. I wish to ask if its possible for international students like me to submit our essays for review

[@elevatedschool]

It should work if you go to www.elevated.school/editmyessay

[@qurbanalihussaini123]

Very great tips! I loved the essay, and it touched me. Is there any possibility to admission officers think of our truly essay written by ourselves edited by ChatGPT?

[@mahtahoseyni2137]

Is it good to write about how my ideas grew aa I grew and Habits became targets?

[@unique6625]

hi ive just done writing my essay, but its 730 words long, is it a problem?

[@HJ-fr6ku]

Hi Kevin , great work as always. I wanted to check out your website but I am getting a server error is it down?

[@kadirimariamdamilola9905]

Please make a video on gap year essay

[@Letslearntogetheruzh7]

3:11 6:29

[@meomeomeomeow]

That’s not a 8 to 9.5, that’s a 5 to 9, amazing edit.

[@lynniefangstudies2120]

what does it mean to be a "scholarship student?"

[@abdulla9886]

Does personal statement essay have to be in narrative form?

[@daluyi]

Not at all.

[@Sailor-boat]

If this is a 9/10, what would make this a 10/10?

[@DinoChen-q8y]

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