FNAF: SB REWRITTEN - CH 23 (READ PINNED COMMENT FOR MISTAKE IN THE LORE)

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KiwiQueen 13

11 ай бұрын

Link to written version: archiveofourown.org/works/454...

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@kiwiqueen138 11 ай бұрын

ATTENTION EVERYONE! I just realized that I made a mistake in today's lore, and I want to correct that before anyone gets misguided! When Vanessa mentions an incident on December 17th, 2078, that date was incorrect! It was meant to be December 17th, 2080, which is the incident with Chica in today's lore. Here is the link to the video where I correct 23’s lore: kzbin.info/www/bejne/gnS2lmWid8SGgtU Sorry for the continued cliffhanger, but (chronologically speaking) Chapter 23 could not have happened after Chapter 24, because of something important that happens in Chapter 24 :) But anyway, now we get to see Moon and Vannie’s complicated relationship. Moon was not exaggerating when he said he’s known Vannie his whole life. Link to written version: archiveofourown.org/works/45445291?view_full_work=true (Currently updated with today’s chapter!) Link to next episode: kzbin.info/www/bejne/nZXFmZ-qmbimn5I Link to previous episode: kzbin.info/www/bejne/iXjTgXinasatrMU Link to full playlist: kzbin.info/aero/PLKMzqZUiHWUjzZj0jfJym1CTORp4rdEDD

@cycloneabsol9405 11 ай бұрын

Hey, FYI, you might want to put something for the lore mistake in the Notes for the AO3 version as well to point out "hey, if you're reading along with this, it won't match. This is why."

@kiwiqueen138 11 ай бұрын

@@cycloneabsol9405 Did it, thanks :)

@cycloneabsol9405 11 ай бұрын

@@kiwiqueen138 Sweet.

@Thebluemamott 11 ай бұрын

Probably one of the few cliffhangers I can tolerate. You do it in a way that's always satisfying and never feels forced for the sake of keeping the readers/listeners invested.

@thenevo3426 11 ай бұрын

Silly Vanessa forgor to include a sock puppet into equation🤦

@Alice_The_Person3707 11 ай бұрын

I knew there would be a cliffhanger, but I didn’t think this would be it. I thought this would go 1 of two ways. One, Moon beats up Vanessa and all’s well that ends well, or two, Moon gets knocks out and something similar to 20 happens. Idk why, but I didn’t expect for Moon to DISOWN VANESSA! Well, crap. Congrats Kiwi! You made something was beyond my expectations!

@collinlane3893 11 ай бұрын

Well....that explains where she got the idea from 16:40

@whisper_ishere518 11 ай бұрын

Are the Staff bots the same as in the actual game, at least the unbroken ones? And the fact that you somehow manage to come out with these every 1-2 weeks is incredible, you're a great writer, and the fact that you write these with a hand injury is even more impressive. EDIT: What subject numbers correspond to each animatronic?

@kiwiqueen138 11 ай бұрын

You’ll have to find out the subject numbers for yourself :) The clues are laid out in the previous lore’s dates

@whisper_ishere518 11 ай бұрын

@@kiwiqueen138 I know DJ is 1, and I think Freddy and Bonnie are 2 and 3, not sure tho

@whisper_ishere518 11 ай бұрын

Nope Bonnie is 2, I think Roxy may be 3 judging by the names

@bird.brainsss 11 ай бұрын

hey would u be upset if I analyzed this rewrite as a game dev to see how well this would actually work as a game?

@kiwiqueen138 11 ай бұрын

Of course you can do that, I’d be glad to see it! :D

@bird.brainsss 11 ай бұрын

@@kiwiqueen138 epic!! I'll prolly end up posting it just as an unedited ramble on my channel some point in July :)))

@cycloneabsol9405 11 ай бұрын

Ok, few questions, mostly to satisfy my own curiosity, but also some lore clearing-up: How was Moon chipped when Sun wasn't, since they share a body? Do we know yet why Vanessa was demoted? How old is Vanessa as of 2087? Why were the teeth, eyes, fingers, and tongue in the animatronics before? When was Vanessa demoted? Do we know that yet? What happened on December 17, 2078? Has than appeared?

@kiwiqueen138 11 ай бұрын

1 - The chip was meant to work only on Moon because Moon would have an easier time taking a child after hours than Sun would, since he is usually out all night. 2 - that was answered in today’s lore :) 3 - Moon mentioned it before, so there's no reason to keep it a secret or anything: she's 29 4 - That is something that can be inferred later, but it was for an actual reason, not just to be creepy 5 - Also answered in today's lore 6 - Whoops - You actually just helped me find a mistake that I made in the lore. December 17 was supposed to be in 2080, which is the incident with Chica in today’s lore. So sorry about this, that mistake just slipped through, I’ll probably have to address it in the next episode.

@cycloneabsol9405 11 ай бұрын

@@kiwiqueen138 Thanks! Also, a few quick followup questions: When was Jeremy born? Based on what you said about him being two years older than Vanessa, it would make sense for him to have been born in 2056, but you previously said that the lore begins in '55, so from a narrative standpoint it makes more sense that that's when he was born. Without knowing their exact birthdays I can't know for sure. Just to clarify: In late December of 2080, Vanessa was demoted to Behavior Tracker because she wanted to restart Project Security? Right? Also, when was Vanessa originally hired? Just to clarify things a bit.

@kiwiqueen138 11 ай бұрын

1 - The lore’s timeline doesn't start when Jeremy is born, it just started when Project Security was launched. But, counting backwards from 2087, he was born in 2056 :) 2 - Yup, that's what happened w/ Vannie

@cycloneabsol9405 11 ай бұрын

@@kiwiqueen138 Cool, thanks.

@roxyfoxczyt3424 11 ай бұрын

I am here. third. YAY. I WAS WAITING FOR THISSSS. I do miss the even automatically made text/lyrics thing. it helped me know some of the words a bit sometimes- BUT AMAZING

@mythicaldrawer7072 11 ай бұрын

Wait....if Vanny wanted to get away from Moon....wouldn't she just put the mask on?....Something's fishy here. Good reason my ass! If you ask me, immortality is overrated! Moon, get her ass. Do not hesitate, not for a second! The second you have change to grab her and make her pay for what she's done, take it.

@fallenxnova2469 11 ай бұрын

This is really well written. And I really admire your dedication to it. I’m curious about something tho: Can’t Roxy just get a set of eyes from one of the maintenance bots like she did before?

@kiwiqueen138 11 ай бұрын

They would have to go back to parts and services to do that, and the door to get out of the storage room is locked anyway, so she’s kind of stuck like this now

@fallenxnova2469 11 ай бұрын

Very sad for her, also makes sense. Hindsight 20/20

@fallenxnova2469 11 ай бұрын

Oh dang. You know what I just noticed? How did Roxy replace her eyes the first time if she’s not allowed to know her own maintenance procedure? Sorry if this sounds nitpicky I just find your work very interesting.

@kiwiqueen138 11 ай бұрын

When she took the eye out of the staff bot, she was able to examine how the wires worked and where they connected to the socket. Once she was sure she knew how a mechanical eye worked, she was able to do it to herself. It was very painful for her, but Roxy has never had a problem with hurting herself, so she was able to do it through trial and error :)

@felipeamezquita7827 11 ай бұрын

Here we go again

@orangesbeyond9824 11 ай бұрын

LESS GOOO

@whisper_ishere518 11 ай бұрын

Dang this came out early today

@ThienNguyen-in6gx 11 ай бұрын

29:49 she is just delusional now I guess.

@wildwinter1971 11 ай бұрын

Buckle up let’s go

@intothewoodsatdark 11 ай бұрын

YESSSSS

@Tarpick 11 ай бұрын

👍

@Thunderdransword 10 ай бұрын

It’s official vannie has gone off the deep end I mean immortality has she gone cuckoo well I mean she has been working at fazbear entertainment so that’s understandable but killing kids just for the sake of what building reminat and I’m going to assume FNAF vr is not cannon anymore here but hey I’m not complaining I never played that in the first place as I cannot stand vr games I just hope moon gets over Vanny for James’s sake bcuz under no circumstance should killing a kid be the answer if I were moon while Vanny was monologging which speaking of which I thought we were past something like this when incredibles can out rlly no one just me but oh god oh mighty if Vanny survives this hats off to her she deserves to be in hell along with good ol Willie