FNAF: SB REWRITTEN - CH 12 (AO3 WRITTEN VERSION AVAILABLE!)

[@kiwiqueen138]

HOLY COW I’M SO SORRY FOR BEING LATE My iPad was constipated because of how many rewrite episodes were saved on it. And because this one was so big, it wasn’t able to upload it to KZbin. We saved everything onto a flash drive and fixed it, but I’m still really sorry about not posting this yesterday when I was supposed to, I was done with this episode and everything but it just wouldn’t go out. I had no idea that it will be so difficult to get this one posted. But thank you all for being patient, hopefully it’s worth the wait :) Link to next episode: kzbin.info/www/bejne/qojJi4eBaNmkoqs Link to previous episode: kzbin.info/www/bejne/aoazeIZ-rbl7h8U Link to full playlist: kzbin.info/aero/PLKMzqZUiHWUjzZj0jfJym1CTORp4rdEDD LINK TO WRITTEN VERSION: archiveofourown.org/works/45445291?view_full_work=true

[@JTBJacksdeadasschannel]

You do all this ON AN IPAD?

[@kiwiqueen138]

Unfortunately, yes lol

[@squiddyflip3039]

@@kiwiqueen138 I'm actually terrified for when you actually get an upgrade in art programs and supplies. THE UDDER TALENT YOU HAVE ON AN *IPAD* (not demoting other ipad artists, they can be great too!) You're such a great artist already!

[@piecreep]

I'm new to your channel, but I'm really liking everything so far!! Hopefully I'll be all caught up on this series for when the next video is released ^~^ 💞

[@TheSansationalSans]

MUUUUSSSSIIIIICCCC MAAAAANNNN!!! I called it! (lol) I love that little remix of MattPatt. Great episode though! I loved the obvious terror of all involved with not waking music man, and the subsequent rescue attempt. The fight scene between Moon and Music man was great too. The fall shocked me, honestly, but it is far from a bad thing. Definitely kept me invested the whole time! I can't wait to see how the others react to Gregory and a broken Moon waltzing in on Music man's huge hand, lol!

[@cycloneabsol9405]

"It reminded him horribly of being locked in the car's trunk on a hot summer" Gregory my boy HOW DO YOU KNOW WHAT THAT FEELS LIKE?!?

[@Rais-Codex]

Heavily implied his family is HORRENDOUSLY Abusive.

[@cycloneabsol9405]

@@Rais-Codex Yeah... Yikes

[@Alice_The_Person3707]

This doesn’t have much to do with this but I just wanted to share. Once I got stuck in a dresser drawer

[@ultimatedanganronpafan869]

Yea he did the right thing when he ran

[@yeet5830]

Achievement unlocked: MUSIC MANNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNN

[@squiddyflip3039]

54:23 ooo smart move Kiwi! I've gotta say, not only are you creative, you're extremely clever! (I know it's a small thing but I appreciate small workarounds like that, I like how much you put into the little things.) 1:04:17 I actually audibly gasped at this part-

[@sindraile5128]

You know, with all of Jeremy Miller's... policies and actions throughout the correspondences post chapter, it seems that Vanessa motives might be pinning her brother as a heartless murderer for the killings. For some reason. Dunno, maybe to get the ownership and fix things? Can't say I blame her, really. Jeremy is a real piece of work. Or they're both working together trying to copy Afton, who knows.

[@mythicaldrawer7072]

I do hope its the former, but I got a feeling its not that and Vanessa is working on her own

[@mythicaldrawer7072]

Edit: Scratch that. The latter is now probable now that I saw the FULL episode.

[@JoshuaA1307]

I think she wants to gain the ownership while making Jeremy be UTTERLY humiliated…. You know….. sibling stuff 😂😂😂😂😂

[@soupz845]

I can't help but laugh at the fact that DJ can only make the sounnd of a keyboard falling down the stairs

[@cyanide_crow7970]

DRUG CANDY? TINY TUNNELS? GETTING RID OF BONNIE? PUTTING SHOCK COLLARS BACK ON THE ANIMATRONICS? WHAT ELSE HAS JEREMY DONE? IS HE GONNA KICK A PUPPY WHILE HE'S AT IT?

[@koopajuniorsavannah5170]

Jeremy is an antagonist I'm definitely sure

[@Thunderdransword]

45:00 are you sure that isn’t a reference to the song total insecurity

[@gnarlyagent594]

you are amazingly good at making rewrites kiwi, and the background art? Incredible, I love it

[@STARS_SHIMMERS]

I LOVE MUSIC MANN!!!!! THIS EPISODE WAS AMAZING KIWI!! THANK YOU FOR MAKING THIS!!!

[@Analog_Anarchist]

If that tunnel chase isn't nightmare fuel, I don't know what is...also DRUG CANDY FOR CHILDREN??? Wtf else has this company done in this AU, I am scares to find out.

[@koopajuniorsavannah5170]

It's in the real game the drug candy, it just makes the kids sleep

[@CassetteTapestry]

OH MY GOD I LOVED THST SO MUCH LIKE YOU ARE ABSOLUTELY AMAZING!!!! a few questions! Yippee! 1- is the pizzaplex based in America? (Assuming asl means American sign language) 2- does moon/sun or all the animatronics know any other languages? Like Spanish or French? Are they limited to a certain amount? What about other sign languages? If there's a clash between languages, do the attendants have a smaller memory bank for them? 3- what has vanny been doing whilst this episode happened? Did she hear the crash? What is she doing about her defeats? 4- For the parts and services, is it like the game where there's a cylindrical room the animations go into and an employee helps them outside? Or something different? What about roxy's arm? Are there copies of body parts? 5- what is sun thinking about moon helping Gregory? Is he able to see what his brother is doing? 6- Where's Bonnie's.. er, body? Endoskeleton? 7- do you have any reference sheets/ body charts for the characters? I'd love to draw some fanart but also be kinda anatomically correct per se? No pressure of course! That's all the questions I have right now, please don't overload yourself trying to answer these, it might be a handful 😅 Anyways, can't wait for the next episode! I'm glad you were able to upload! Really enjoyed MMMMMMMUSIC MAN! ALSO GET THAT CHILD THERAPY-

[@kiwiqueen138]

I’m glad you’re so excited about my series! I’ll answer all the ones that I can, without giving too much spoilers :) 1 - Yeah, it’s in America. I haven’t decided on a specific place, but the location isn’t significant or anything so you don’t have to worry about it. I guess around the same area that the original series was in, but I don’t know if we actually got a confirmation on where all that went down 2 - they are programmed with pretty much every language, Yep 3 - I won’t tell you exactly what she’s doing, but she is planning on what to do next and preparing for things she’ll start doing in the future. Vanessa is not just standing there waiting for the episode to end lol 4 - I do have a different way of conducting parts and services, you’ll get to see it once the episode comes out 5 - I guess I can answer this one, since it’s something that’s implied later but not really a big secret. Sun is kind of out of it right now, he’s been awake for frickin 29 days straight, so he’s just going in and out of consciousness trying to get back in control. He’s pretty freaked out right now. 6 - :) 7 - I could probably post the references soon, once I have time to put a video together I don’t mind answering questions, I’m glad that you care enough about the series to ask me stuff about it! I hope you enjoy the rest of it!

[@CassetteTapestry]

@@kiwiqueen138 thank you again for your answers this means so much to me and also I am scared of your 6th answer Holy shit

[@koopajuniorsavannah5170]

Hmm you didn't answer 6... It's definitely a lre reason I like your videos

[@twist_ending7545]

@@kiwiqueen138 idk if it's like.. fully canon but from what I can remember from reading the novels several years ago I think the events taken place in Utah?

[@spiritofchaos58]

GOODNESS, this was a heartpounding chapter! So many parts of this story would be PERFECT for a game. I love how your story is both really interesting narratively, but also considers how the events of the story could also be game mechanics

[@enderniffler628]

WOO WOOO! GET YOUR EARLY POPCORN HERE EVERYONE! NEW CHAPTER ✨✨

[@bloopstheduck]

Can my popcorn be buttered

[@enderniffler628]

@@bloopstheduck of course! What monster doesn’t butter they’re popcorn? /J

[@jackusy3414]

I love how this series properly portrays Gregory’s fear. like, he’s a kid in a life or death situation, of coarse he’s gonna cry.

[@Jadinite-2006]

Who has the idea to let Fazbear Entertainment build DJ Music Man as a giant?

[@Wee_Mewon]

MatPat would like this episode

[@Alice_The_Person3707]

All of this stress almost made me puke but this was AMAZING!!!! WONDERFUL JOB Edit: thank you for making this so GOOD! This is my favorite episode by far because of how intense it is. I’ll be rewatching this while I wait for the other episodes to come out, thank you very much

[@Sageknot]

MUSIC MAN I love music man in here, I do feel like moon would be smart enough to take the chip out while music man was still asleep

[@kiwiqueen138]

I originally wanted to write it like that, but DJ would’ve definitely woken up before they actually got the chip out. They would have to pry his mouth open and reach inside, so as I was writing the rough draft of that scene I realized that there was no way that I could pretend that he would sleep through that haha

[@Sageknot]

@@kiwiqueen138 ok fair, i do think you shouldve had one of the characters bring that up and then dispute it though

[@bloopstheduck]

Gregory language

[@cycloneabsol9405]

Having finally finished the episode, may I just say: MUUUSSSICCC MAAANNNN!!

[@malinok4889]

This is my favorite chapter yet!

[@m_rceleen]

Pated from a delerious 3 am notes app thing after watching this lol Yall theres an animatronic, possibly bonnie, likely bonnie, behind vanessa. Did she steal bonnie and torture him, testing the chips on him and essentilly running him insane. I dont think bonnie is surviving this series, atleast not with severe recoding. Also, theres this ever present theory since we learned of james and vanny, and now especially with the new art, that the experiments involve them. Maybe an attempt to bring her father back through bonnie and remnant? Im not sure how far from the original timeline kiwi is going but yeaa- if not im fine with it lol And another thing, vanny realy taking after afton with murder in her fursuit

[@m_rceleen]

Unsure if my bright ass hell tv just ahoqwd that when it wasnt sipposed to be seen oops

[@cycloneabsol9405]

This is probably too spoiler-y, but in case it's not: Is Gregory right about Moon getting hot and out of breath just a machine overheating?

[@cloudyz..editz_]

1:09:16 What do you mean,, Gregory. How could you possibly know that,, Gregory. 🤔😕 Anyways,, I’m finally caught up on this yayy !!

[@Mr.encore]

I hope jermey at the end of the rewrite gets fired and get more information about why jermey is such a jerk and hes the son of Victor so why

[@koopajuniorsavannah5170]

Certainly I really like these videos

[@_Plut0_]

MUUUSSSIIC MANNN (the amount of repair money the pizzaplex needs atp 😭😭😭)

[@wildwinter1971]

THERES SOMETHING BEHIND VANNYS NECK

[@crimsonsilvermoon]

YES THERE IS Think it's a bow

[@Nonsense-Is-Everywhere]

Looks like a deranged bird

[@coffetrueno9791]

@@crimsonsilvermoon a bow?

[@crimsonsilvermoon]

@@coffetrueno9791 maybe, I can't really get a good look at it due to where it's placed

[@WizardRails]

I saw freckles and a nose behind Vanny. I think it’s Bonnie somehow. I don’t know how she’s gonna do it, but she may bring back Glamrock Bonnie in some twist final battle.

[@squiddyflip3039]

Kiwi, I gotta know. The incident report happened on April 10, 2082. In America, that is siblings day. Was this intentional?

[@thecolorfulscholar1365]

I have a question, are the chips based on those mind control chips from She-Ra or were the something that existed in the original game. I never played FNAF SB so I wouldn’t know

[@kiwiqueen138]

Oh, I forgot those chips were a thing in She-Ra, they weren’t based off of that. They weren’t something in the original game either, the chips were just me :)

[@joninasigurardottir2824]

31:47 music starting.

[@Astro_noi5678]

I WILL SKIP ANY OF MY ANIMATIONS TO SEE THIS

[@t34tim3]

Love this chapter, just one question: On the background picture, who’s the person behind Vanny?

[@Monroecookie24]

WAIT I didnt even someone behind vanny. It looks like a Bird?? Maybe Jeremy also has a animatronic suit?? Or maybe is a scrapped animatronic?

[@t34tim3]

@@Monroecookie24 I'd originally assumed it was Bonnie or Burntrap, but it does look a lot like a bird!

[@lumisherbert5682]

Post ep, Kiwi: MUSICCC MAAAAAN Me, automatically: *gremlin cackling* hehehehehehe music man. man of music. music man C:

[@cycloneabsol9405]

DAMN IT. I'M SO EXCITED TO LISTEN TO THIS BUT I CAN'T YET BECAUSE IT'S SO DAMN LONG!!

[@mythicaldrawer7072]

CHAPTER SPOILER!! . . . Chipped MM: I'mma put this child in my mouth, that way he can't escape me while I take him to Vanessa. Gregory, pulling out the chip: Are you sure about that!?

[@gladisseabrook3309]

I LOVE MUSIC MAN ALREADY!

[@LIZZANIMA1]

Love it!!!

[@wildwinter1971]

My finger hurts I clicked so fast

[@koopajuniorsavannah5170]

Oh that's terrible I like your profile picture it looks nice

[@Thebluemamott]

MUSIC MAAAAAAAN

[@CatFoxHybrid]

🐻🎩This is very cool, it would be awesome to a FNAF cartoon show.

[@BaneOfMyExistence1929]

YIPPEE

[@cookieandme23]

MMMMMUUUUSSSICCCC MANNNNNNNNN!!!!!!!

[@masonmarquina6705]

Please make a Steven universe video about his trauma or somthing? I miss Steven universe

[@Timyngo]

MUSIC MAN!!!!

[@denominator4663]

I AM SPEED

[@RobloxKaren420]

I CLICKED SO FAST

[@Lophiid]

REEEEEEEEE

[@CacaoDrawzStuff]

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[@astrumcat64.mp4]

I AM SPEED

[@bloopstheduck]

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