Nihilistic Cringe | A Review of Stones to Abbigale by Onision

What does Stones to Abbigale even MEAN? Is someone throwing rocks at the poor girl?
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[@Monique.Marceline]

*Seth is shooting up the school, killing 52 students, making it the second worst mass shooting in American history* James: ROLLERSKATE TIME

[@Connor-jl9gq]

not to nit pick but it would actualy be the WORST mass shooting in THE HISTORY OF THE ENTIRE FUCKING WORLD

[@bitchlasagna1503]

IMAGINE IF SETH WAS WEARING ROLLERSKATES WHEN HE SHOT UP THE SCHOOL SJDBDD

[@GriffinKneesock]

Connor Actually it wouldn’t. That record belongs to the Norwegian Breivik if we are talking about a single shooter. In which he killed 77.

[@Monique.Marceline]

Connor the worst mass shooting in American history was the Las Vegas shooting that killed 59, and as mentioned above the worst in the world happened in Norway

[@fangsabre]

Gotta blade man.

[@wannabeneko318]

di-did he just burn down a school for an unironic punchline

[@Aurakyuki]

Uncreative Name Yes, yes he did.

[@MrCaptainTea]

Raine yes. Yes he am . ~Onision

[@LetsSaboogi]

I- oh my gosh he really did

[@tpatrick7238]

Fucking Nero, here

[@cryogeneric9139]

and that's how it ends! I guarantee, if it was a film (perish the thought) he would've stared into the camera saying that as the credits rolled

[@dailytzeentch1664]

"If you can use anything apart from rape, don't use rape" is advice a lot of authors need to hear

[@Michael97Moore]

Onision once said women can't rape

[@Texasp12]

@@Michael97Moore that's in British law funny enough.

[@Michael97Moore]

@@Texasp12 seriously.

[@katatonikbliss]

@@Texasp12 british law doesn't believe anyone except white males can rape so that's no surprise

[@friendly-nemesis4754]

More pertinent advice would be "Find out what it is that you don't write about well... and then don't write about that thing." Specifying rape in this sentiment is gratuitous; nobody HAS to write a book about ANYTHING, so the option of not writing about rape is always there, so the logical conclusion of this injunction may as well be "NEVER write about rape." I see no reason why any subject matter, however grim, should be precluded as a literary theme. Any thoughts?

[@bibastrashcan9028]

Just a friendly reminder that the "barging in the significant other's classroom to make out in front of everyone" scene had already been done in another story: My immortal

[@ichor2127]

My Immortal is a work of pure art in comparison to Stones to Abbigale

[@None-Trick_Pony]

@@ichor2127 The name "My Immortal" is fitting because it will be alive forevermore. That's because it's not a work of pure art. It exceeds that. It's so brilliant that it is the Übermensch of literature. Calling incredible books like To Kill a Mockingbird Üntermensch when compared to My Immortal is beyond generous.

[@errortryagainlater4240]

@@None-Trick_Pony this is the only correct opinion about My Immortal and I will stand by it.

[@MollymaukT]

My Immortal is actually pretty great if you realize that it is an amazing documentation of pre-KZbin (and pre-socialmedia) internet culture

[@ryokiritani4187]

Also recreated in sonic school

[@freetheinsanity5257]

Stones to Abigail sounds like the name of a terrible emo band

[@eugheh6172]

*Abbigale. Must not disrespect onisions broken wife or whatever.

[@Neo_Geisha]

Right? Lol

[@WhiteBloggerBlackSpecs]

Almost as cringy as Hawthorne Heights

[@nickwilliams6621]

@@eugheh6172 LMFAO! That's savage. Love it.

[@chrismorris6865]

TBH I still don't understand the title. What does he mean by "Stones?" I don't recall there being any stones at all in the book.

[@animatrixl7078]

"But, UNLIKE the school shooting, this actually has an effect on James," Excuse me wHAT-

[@sondor4375]

WAiT A FUcKInG MinUTe

[@fanimeproductionst.v.3735]

@@sondor4375 What ThE fuCk HaVe YoU brOuGhT UpoN thIs CurSeD LaNd?

[@kenthefele113]

“James is a better version of myself” I’m sorry, a BETTER VERSION????

[@mrcephalopod]

A rare moment of self-reflection from Onion Man

[@DrZuluGaming]

Well better times zero is still zero.

[@royallynick]

Considering who he is as a man I can say that yes James would be a better man than onion boy

[@cheyennetrumbos]

Could hardly be worse, to be fair.

[@thequeenofcringe1585]

He says that the main character of his second book is the “darker” (note the use of darker instead of worse) version of himself and I’m entirely convinced that it’s because that character eats meat.

[@caustic9947]

the mental picture of James _rollerskating_ into the school and then having to STOP and TAKE THEM OFF because there's too much blood on the floor is the funniest thing ever

[@loturzelrestaurant]

We need way more Slutshaming, tbh. I mean, nowadas, we legit have masses of people being convinced that theres absolutely nothing wrong and nothing 'telling' about sleeping around; which is of course utter nonsense and objectively wrong, but ok... Many people say it, so it must be right... or whatever... ...

[@friedegg3732]

@@loturzelrestaurant nigga wut

[@SissypheanCatboy]

@@loturzelrestaurant the fuck are you going on about lmao

[@kylenielsen5083]

@@loturzelrestaurant dude any statistics you pull about it ruining relationships or whatever or complicated by birth control, and there's a theorem that since women prefer men by scent and birth control can mess with a women's sense of smell, there's a thrum that birth control, rather than promiscuity, can cause poor relationships. I mean it's unproven, but it's something to look into.

[@loturzelrestaurant]

@@kylenielsen5083 Uhm... if you say so...

[@DonnaCPunk]

"A loser in high school who never got over being a loser in high school". That describes Onion all over. To the point he's still trying to "date" high school girls.

[@aggressivepianonoises813]

Ah, how cuttingly accurate...

[@RedVelvetBlackleather]

Donna C Onion boy: if she breaths she’s good enough to breed.

[@neroquin]

Ew, isn't he like 30?

[@kurestor1603]

He never got over not living out his hero and romantic fantasies during high school, and failed to realize afterward that that's all they could of been. He knows that he peaked in high school, and also knows that his peak wasn't very high. And since that was the peak of his existence, he refuses to mature beyond that point. He is stuck in the mindset of a sophomore in high school, and he is allowed to maintain that mentality through the existence of the internet and the people on it. He lives out his high school romantic fantasies by doing what he does rating, looking at, and talking with his fans. They are mostly teenagers who are just like him: social outcasts at school, who live vicariously through his success online, and dedicate themselves to him because they see themselves in him. Edit: Now that I reread this, it sounds REALLY pretentious, but I spent like 5 minutes on the comment, so I'm leaving it here.

[@HafthorBjornssonFan]

@Lonely Pluto It's True.

[@kiyoushu]

"He doesn't do anything significant for the rest of the book. I mean he dies at one point" is arguably the greatest quote i have ever heard.

[@Blinkersub]

Thats me in life lmao

[@saint.jerome]

kiyoushu fuck I just found my yearbook quote honestly lmao

[@adeer87]

Basically me.

[@sefsprite]

kiyoushu if I was a book character that would be on my Wikipedia page

[@jackthenotsnack7681]

I want that qoute on a shirt

[@Theblaziken2000]

Crazy how everyone who has reviewed Onision's books is super attractive.

[@KrimsonRogue]

Thanks for the ego boost. XD

[@chloechen2185]

I agree. I agree. I agree. :)

[@Xehanort10]

That's probably another reason why he hates them.

[@katatonikbliss]

strange aeons for sure, and krimsonrogue is cute, but that one british guy (i think?) was meh... 6/10 at best

[@bisexualblueberry]

Is this just a reunion of bisexuals

[@peggy3095]

He tried to legally change his name to James Jackson. To recap, he tried to legally rename himself after his self insert And he named his daughter after said self insert’s love interest

[@kedamono6282]

The... W H A T ?

[@shortgiraffe700]

He did WHAT?

[@LegacyKnight-zm6vz]

WTF?!

[@larsfrisk6658]

Onision has a daughter?!

[@ellicedarkblue2541]

Ew Ew ew

[@TheCrimsonIdol987]

This book is a lot like a naked banana. It lacks appeal.

[@lurkinlikeaboss]

TheCrimsonIdol987 take my like you punny monster lol

[@GameTavern2224]

Okay thats actually a good one

[@StellaStarfall]

TheCrimsonIdol987 Fuck you, take the like and go.

[@dawngrove7053]

That was one of the greatest puns I ever heard

[@nathanmaxon1]

Well, he is... Uh... .. A banana

[@ingasparrow]

Onision bragged-yes, bragged-that he hadn't read a book in fourteen years when he wrote Stones to Abbigale.

[@AutumnSage98]

Who brags about that? I don't read very much, in fact I wish I read more. Is it supposed to be impressive that he wrote a book? A book I assume he thought was "great", that he didn't read for fourteen years? That's... That's sad

[@ingasparrow]

@@AutumnSage98 I used to consider book reading a sign of intelligence, but not anymore. There's all sorts of intelligence that don't relate to that. Onision displays none of them and it shows.

[@RibbonVintageGirl]

My English Lit major heart shattered when I heard that...and the fact that his fans still adored him for that fact.

[@jerrymccullough4565]

It really shines in his work.

[@epicjoyfulcreations4580]

That...actually makes sense. Studies have shown that reading makes you a more empathetic person. My god, this explains so much!

[@phoebe2675]

I feel like a book called “Stones to Abigail” could be a mystery novel about the protagonist being close with a girl named Abigail, and then she suddenly goes missing. The protagonist then receives some weird notes attached to rocks, and the notes give the protagonist hints on where Abigail is and how to find her(aka Stones leading to Abigail).

[@royallynick]

Thats way too cool of a story for onision to write. But it does sound interesting! Id actually read something like that.

[@KrimsonRogue]

I really like that idea. Sounds like it could be a vibrant story with the potential for some really dark twists, like The Lovely Bones or Bridge to Terabithia.

[@phoebe2675]

@@KrimsonRogue Also, that weird puzzle thing to get abbigales phone number in the original can be used to show that they have an affinity for puzzles in this idea, so it sets up that they both like puzzles and maybe even lay the groundwork for any future puzzles

[@frootsnacc6790]

In my head I just came up with a possible mini arc for this hypothetical rewrite: James goes to Abbi’s father when the notes reveal to him about his abusive nature, and his wife who apparently abandoned him and his daughter. James decides to interrogate her father, who is still like this hateful drunkard, but we soon learn that Abbi’s mom never left. She was an alcoholic like her father, only she had unfortunately died thanks to her addiction. He did his best to have the funeral pass under the noses of anyone else involved in her life, and twisted a lie that she ran way, because he was aware they were addicts, and didn’t want the last memory her friends and family to have be that she was an alcoholic. And it has a sorta chilling line like, “Ya see James, Abbi couldn’t have left to find her mom...because she really didn’t go that far,” implying she’s buried in the local cemetery

[@phuongthaotrinh6390]

when i heard about this title it first reminds me of a rock grave Abigail is already dead but her death is violent and mysterious ( probaly cause by a serial killer that on the loose and the police fail to catch). MC is someone close to Abigail and try to solve her death and revenge the killers. Each piece he able to solve is like a stone set to build her grave and let her soul and himself really rest in piece.

[@srbrant5391]

I'm half-convinced that Onision was a science experiment to create the most socially radioactive human being on the planet.

[@justwannafreefx9419]

"And Matthew doesn't do anything significant for the rest of the book ...He dies at one point"

[@mathewricafrente5984]

Story of my life

[@YouW00t]

@@mathewricafrente5984 Can relate. The dying part was specially terrible.

[@RobynReanimates]

Nihilistic Cringe would be a good name for a band

[@Invisiblelad]

Nihilistic Cringe is the folk punk band your ex made after you got in a fight because of his dislike your hobby (knitting)

[@tintinismybelgian]

As an early/pre-nihilist, Kierkegaard had pretty good writing.

[@jamesrolfe9747]

Sounds better as a sub reddit

[@RobynReanimates]

@@jamesrolfe9747 That's amazing and I agree fully

[@TerranceDaBuddha]

@@tintinismybelgian He wasn't really a nihilist

[@Alexander59059]

Onionsan has done the world a great dead with his books. He's given countless writers the confidence to publish their own work by setting the bar infinitely low.

[@badger6728]

A great dead? I suppose he does make one die inside.

[@carolyns4519]

I know you meant to say "deed" but "dead" is so fitting with him lmao, please never correct this comment

[@scribesorcerer4967]

@@carolyns4519 Agreed.

[@floskywalker6220]

Unfortunately his books are so bad using them as junk journal fodder would be giving them too much attention

[@ewwstraightppllol]

​@@badger6728 32d 39:03 èr

[@buttonstheturtle1843]

As someone who was actually accused of and interrogated as a "possible threat to the school" for liking a song- saying "I wish everyone would disappear" is 100% something a teacher would report you for. (The song was The Balled Of Sarah Berry from 35mm, my teacher reported me for talking about the plot of it and not only was I interrogated, so we're the kids who sat near me)

[@amaiodayaka8926]

I love that song SO much. It’s brutal, but the fact that it could happen irl is even more terrifying. The fact that so many people died over a dumb little school contest basically, that don’t even do anything in a long run, is actually very interesting. I’m pretty sure it’s about just how much the person can be pushed to literal murder, purely in attempt to be this “perfect” person. THE prom queen. Anyway, I could talk about this song for a while, it’s so good

[@Melissa-zh3zl]

I was threatened with potential expulsion in high school because someone I knew anonymously said people jamming up the hallways while everyone else is trying to get to class makes them murderous. Like, typical and definitely not actually threatening high schooler talk. So I got in trouble because the comment was on a website I helped run that was critical of the school administration and I potentially knew who posted it (I did in fact know, but the administration wasn’t aware that I knew). Really, I’m pretty sure it was just an excuse to shut down dissent because the website made the admin’s shady actions publicly available

[@corahtheskeleton8062]

True, on my last year of high school I was accused of being a shooter threat and had my locker checked for... doing a presentation condemning gun violence in schools... High school teachers are just so so dumb sometimes

[@buttonstheturtle1843]

@nathannightmare1604 what??

[@arandomtoad480]

​@corahtheskeleton8062 "gun violence in Schools is bad." "Omg, you're a school shooter!"

[@tatumfowler8362]

i'm sorry but i haven't thought of something funnier than "man roller skates into school to stop a mass shooting, but the floors are too sticky, so he takes them off and continues" in a VERY long time

[@mojoforthewin3069]

*Heelies through door* “I’ll save you, Milady!”

[@grungecrunge]

I looked at the comments just to see if someone noticed this. I'm not disappointed

[@Nerobyrne]

@@mojoforthewin3069 oh god the image of a trench coat wearing fat man with an MLP shirt riding heelies is way too much!

[@MrSuperbeast92]

@@Nerobyrne 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣💀

[@lelice01]

@@grungecrunge dont forget the fedora

[@kiri7809]

Is it bad that I love how the internet gangbang hates Onision? Mainly because he deserves it

[@DavidRodriguez-zp3ib]

Ur just jEAlouS ThAt hE HAs aLL thE FaCts!

[@MinhNguyen-ix9uo]

I love watching Onision fail.

[@RockZombieIAm]

Same. The fact that he deserves it makes it much more satisfying. He also loves to act like he's above it all, and everyone that talks about him is obsessed with him. He doesn't take any criticism and just rants about it so its even better.

[@cai3886]

Completely off topic but you’re so pretty! 😋

[@sugarveins]

Not at all. because he deserves it.

[@purplehaze2358]

Him having a tantrum when Abby confessed what she said is one of the few things in the book that seemed real. The actual Onision is a complete sociopath who lacks any form of empathy, sympathy, and remorse, so he probably would react like that. Especially considering how abusive he is to those in a relationship with him.

[@librasuperstar3779]

The letter James sent to Abbi reminds me of the anti cyber bullying PSA my school forced my class to watch where a guy gives a love letter to a girl and she sends it to her friend, who then posts it online, but the letter was so creepily detailed and stalkerish (I don’t remember the whole thing but apart of it was like “I’ve sat behind you for years, when you walk through the halls I feel faint”) that when the PSA was done my entire class was like “he deserved it”

[@librasuperstar3779]

@Babba Yaaga that’s not what the teacher made it seem like

[@eldron29-a54]

Do not tell another people if a creepy guy stalks you, it's bullying? Just insane.

[@m72860]

How did the teacher react?

[@bisexualblueberry]

HUNTER PFP SPOTTED

[@alexjewett7455]

Why did your teacher think that was a good psa to show? There are probably better ones out there.

[@mommawolf6932]

Those colour coded tabs took you from "I'll bring your daughter home by 8" to " I'm your daddy now"

[@jongreenleaf1000]

Think you had enough internet for a few decades

[@mommawolf6932]

@@jongreenleaf1000 I've had enough internet for a life time but I'm not complaining (:

[@bh7969]

I'm half way through the video and i really hope this is hyperbole

[@mommawolf6932]

🙄

[@CarlsCozyCorner]

@@bh7969 No He was being completely and utterly serious There was not one bit of hyperbolic humor in that line. 😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑

[@trixxsaurus2386]

A kid rollerskating into a school shooting and taking off the rollerskates because there's blood on the floor sounds like a really funny 4chan comic strip

[@terrrario1014]

Did he also wear his rollerskates while on the Bus? That must have been looking interesting, seeing him getting off the Bus with rollerskates on.

[@katmchenry]

It sounds like something out of a green text story.

[@MadeOfConfusion]

>be James >be epic sk8r boi >Roller skates onto the bus >Is the coolest dude but everyone hates me >be angery >Realize school is being shot up >gottagofast.gif >Mfw my epic skates can't go through the blood >Sk8r boi life ruined

[@dodojesus4529]

@Ryan Pitts why only into a Coma, punch him until there's just Marmelade left

[@antthegord9411]

@@MadeOfConfusion u forgot everyone clapped

[@quakywacky8048]

There’s nothing wrong with having an protagonist with a superiority complex and more than a chip on his shoulder. Flawed characters are interesting characters. However, if their flaws aren’t treated as such or they down change then you have a shitty self insert at best. All of Gregs protagonists are like if Peter Parker was bitten by the spider but never lost uncle ben and never learned that important lesson of responsibility, just abusing his power to take what he wants.

[@k.morningstar7983]

imagine *The Big Lebowski* from Walter's perspective and told straight faced

[@fishpickles7316]

The worst part is that Abbigale was a real person and this is Onision writing a fantasy about her.

[@acatcalledthunderstar7]

It's even worse that IRL they never even dated, she turned him down and they had no relationship and apparently he can't let that go

[@ScythGrizz]

When your book handles mental issues, abuse, and bullying worse than 13 reasons why, You screwed up.

[@zarraelliott4159]

:0 XD

[@misery8264]

We get a third season.....

[@Darkcyndermaya]

The 13 reasons why book is way better. Screw the Netflix version.

[@misery8264]

Please tell me where the book was better than the series? It literally hits all the same points and gave twelve year old me some awful ideas about suicide.

[@Darkcyndermaya]

@@misery8264 I'm just saying that the series on Netflix is a shit show. Can't I just express that I'd rather read the terrible book than watch the even worse show about a teen who was abused by the people she called her peers but then discovered everyone was just trying to use her?

[@truecrimerip7936]

the abbi character portrays every teenage girlfriend onision ever had (and all his gf's were underage when he met them). broken emo girls who desperately look for a lead in their life and then find him to controll every aspect of it and belittle their broken soul and feed them to be even more sad, not fixing them

[@sunchasericeserawings7166]

They’re not emo and they’re not goth. They’re traumatized. People whom are abused often fall right back into another abuser’s wiles and charms.

[@seigeengine]

And that's why James is our hero. He's still kind of abusive, but he's obviously the good guy because he isn't "beat your pregnant girlfriend then shoot up her school when she dumps you" abusive.

[@Snoogen11]

@@TwoBs The feels when: you dump your boyfriend and he DOESN'T shoot up a school. It's like: did you even love me?! (sarcasm btw). Greg completely understands the nuances of adult relationships, he is a well rounded completely stable individual, with monk like discipline..... NOT.

[@LadyLuck-rd5vi]

The worst part about the firearm misclassification is that Greg was in the military

[@WillieManga]

"You had one job!"

[@DonVigaDeFierro]

Pretty sure he dropped out of basic training. He was in the military as much as I was in the Red Cross by taking a first aid course in high school.

[@thisissparta789789]

@@DonVigaDeFierroSadly no, he did three years in the USAF

[@zephyfoxy]

@@DonVigaDeFierro No, he got booted after filing for conscientious objector status because he knew it'd would get him kicked out, and he was a weak-willed little bitch boy who didn't like that being in the AF was actual work, and this was his way of getting himself kicked out without committing a crime. Also worth noting that he faked suicidal tendencies as his first try at getting booted. When it didn't work he immediately went for the previously mentioned idea, as well as making YT videos *in uniform* speaking ill of the government and military, because that's a violation of the UCMJ and he thought he'd get booted for that too. Dude was the definition of a scumbag airman. Makes me sick that he thinks he deserves respect for his shit "service".

[@gens8013]

To be fair, I’d say the school guidance counselor character is actually pretty realistic - one time I had to miss school for a week because I had to go to a mental hospital bc I tried to kill myself and when I came back to school I learned that my school counselor had told a bunch of kids’ parents where I was and by the time I came back other kids were making fun of me for having to be hospitalized 😭

[@KolchaksGhost]

That’s terrible, but not exactly the same

[@chainsawtotheheart]

Oof, major HIPPA violation on the counselor's part. Could probably sue them for that.

[@goosegas2087]

It still isn't really realistic. Not denying your experience, but how many councilors are being gossiping assholes or beating up school kids for being raped? Not a whole lot, I'd imagine. It's one of those things where it could happen, but it's still contrived and it's practically cartoon villain behavior.

[@sweethysteria8737]

I’m very sorry about that, but don’t do all school counselors like that, Mine saved my life back in sixth grade so 🤷🏾

[@None-Trick_Pony]

My high school guidance counselor was one of the most uncaring and unsympathetic faculty I'd ever dealt with in school. Probably second only to some of my gym teachers. I'd refuse to see her-the mark of a good counselor, of course. Pretty much everybody assigned to her felt the same way. It's baffling how these people get these jobs. While your experience is far, _far_ worse than anything I went through, it's depressingly unsurprising to me.

[@chumbucket6989]

Oh my god Obama was literally there and then everybody clapped for Greg

[@pennyw2226]

“Yeah Obama totally came to my school” “And everybody cla-“ “EVERYBODY CLAPPED”

[@MyahCat824]

He didn't even do anything loll just looked for the girl xD

[@bongosmcdongos4190]

Thanks greg

[@anemone7005]

Yay for Greg- I mean James! And then all the girls in the school walked up to Greg- I mean James, and then they all asked him if he could rate their appearances out of 10. And then all the 10s had sex with Greg- I mean James

[@TheElectricCheeseProductions22]

I wouldnt clap for either of them

[@perciusmandate]

The protagonist never refers to anyone as a person because Greg is a narcissistic sociopath. He doesn't view other people as actual people. Every other character in the book is either an obstacle, tool, or object of sexual desire.

[@allyportman8009]

Though, that would make an interesting antagonist worldview.

[@joshkaid]

What's bizarre is that, if the book were INTENTIONALLY written from that perspective, it would've been WAY better.

[@punchyboi6915]

@@allyportman8009 hold on you just made the character better

[@tafua_a]

I love how either Greg or his self insert characters routinely do every single thing they hate other people doing.

[@jtallen6406]

If you look at his response to Strange ÆONs review of Stones to Abigail with this mindset, it makes a lot more sense. It actually really explains his attempts to demonize her with the whole “dead friend” thing, when really, he was just getting pissy over the fact that someone dared to mock his writing.

[@wolfzilla8973]

It’s a shame because “stones for Abigail” would be a pretty sick band name. Too bad it was taken by captain onion man.

[@sarahamira5732]

"I was kind of a loser in highschool and *I* wanna beat this guy up" As a girl who is currently kind of a loser in highschool, I concur.

[@niemehrcdu380]

Hope your better today.

[@usrnewxnew5227]

bruh hope you're alright, school can be hell

[@justsomerandompersononthei1773]

As a fellow highschool girlfailure, Greg- Sorry, James is absolutely the kinda guy I would've kicked under my desk. Hope you're doing okay.

[@thequeenofcringe1585]

I was bullied in middle school and I would still kick the shit out of him

[@Nixahma]

I feel like no matter how much of a loser you are or aren't, everyone has a moderate desire to beat this guy up

[@attentiondeficitsquirrel7660]

What I learned from this video: So Onision wrote a book and *AWWWW KITTY*

[@janeyjpg911]

Me

[@bleachchugtidy2178]

Greg is in his 30s, his target /main audience are girls 14 and under and he's writing teenage sex scenes. I'm not saying anything but draw from that what you will taking into consideration his "alleged" past.

[@FG-hp1lm]

I knew something felt off... I now understand why the thought made me uncomfortable... Yikes...

[@grungemudd]

Lmao yeah. The dude basically groomed a 14 y/o named Sarah

[@missanthropy6060]

reconsider this including the underage sex scenes he writes between his 11/12 year old self insert with his 16 year old sister in the third book... greg is a little fucked up to say the least

[@AsdfAsdf-mi6ks]

Suck Me Greg is a gross and weird dude. However, a lot of YA authors are in their 30s and are writing some sex scenes for kids with kids.... (kids meaning teenagers)

[@theteethburglar4716]

Remember this guy has a kid.

[@AvengerAtIlipa]

44:48 I performed music for the FLOTUS when she made a campaign appearance at my university back in 2016. Secret Service was there 48 hours in advance and locked down the sports arena. We couldn't bring our instruments with us on the same day but instead had to check them in and leave them with the Secret Service 24 hours before the event started. The ONLY things students (including us) were allowed to bring to the event were our wallets and our cellphones (both of which were checked again upon entry). And of course, there was the general rule of thumb that for every Secret Service Agent and canine we could see, there were three that we couldn't. TL;DR The President and the First Lady don't just "go" places.

[@asrieldreemurr1988]

What’s flotus

[@AvengerAtIlipa]

@@asrieldreemurr1988 First Lady of the United States

[@Ryu1ify]

For real, does Greg think it's the 19th century

[@roadbreach]

It's funny, how he made fun of people who cut themselves and here he's sexualizes someone who does it.

[@zawrator4457]

Yea because he sees women with mental illnesses as prey to stalk: if you go through his relationship history, he makes a point out of specifically selecting for women with mental issues.

[@doctorgrubious7725]

@@zawrator4457y’know it’s extremely crazy how many times people say “don’t judge a book by it’s cover”, and yet here we are, a dude who looked and talked like a creep, is a creep

[@maf7742]

As a writer, this was really helpful because it's a guide on how not to write on basically every level. I feel illuminated.

[@ksprdotexe]

I submitted myself to reading that abuse of English literature just so I could see what not to write. thank god my writing wasn't that bad ^^;;

[@nootnewt9323]

If you ever need to feel better here’s two more terrible titles: “Empress Theresa” and “Handbook for Mortals” both are godawful. Enjoy :)

[@milomilo55]

@@nootnewt9323 Omg..... _Handbook for Mortals_ is so embarrassingly bad, and this coming from someone who hunts down Grade B movies, loved _The Room_ and _Reefer Madness_ and can never read enough bad science fiction! I'm gonna have to give _Empress Theresa_ a try lol.

[@whatteamwildcats4033]

Also one that's partially charming and really bad go for Insanity: a Jeff the killer fanfiction

[@milomilo55]

@@whatteamwildcats4033 Ok...just googled that, re: Jeff the killer, and it looks like it might be on par with Handbook for Mortals and what's a few imploding brain cells, right? I think I'll give that one a try as well. Thnx for the suggestion.

[@BlueSpiritFire1]

It didn't hit me, until you reached the 'poopy poo poop' line from Davis, that you - and others - actually had to go into this book blind and read things like that with your own two eyes. Thank you, and I am _so sorry_

[@abigailmccarthy9982]

I think everyone watching this video who hasn't done such a thing beforehand feel sorry for these people.

[@Jmoney32689]

The part when James is beating the shit out of a bunch of jocks is hilarious because at one point, someone claiming to be one of Onion’s classmates recalled a story of how he decided to piss off a group of emo kids who then beat the fuck out of him. I imagine that was a pretty common occurrence, knowing Onision’s personality.

[@umairashraf5167]

Yeah that unironically sounds like something that would happen

[@aethertoast4320]

The idea that he drew upon "personal experience" is the most terrifying thing about the book.

[@SeymourDisapproves]

I love how Onision got all heated about Aeons criticizing the annoying best friend character he wrote because he's supposedly an homage to his real-life dead friend, and yet in the book he's just killed on a freeway. Some homage, huh?

[@QJ89]

"... He screamed back 'Oakie Dokie, Captain Derp!'" Poor choice of words. Please stop Screaming.

[@selestielwolf7949]

Maybe his friend died exactly like that? Still a shitty homage whether that theory is true or not

[@dirkjehovah4731]

@@selestielwolf7949 if I remember correctly, his friend died on a mission trip. He may have been hit by a car, but I'm not certain. Still, it is an incredibly bad homage, and using that as an argument against criticism is ridiculous.

[@NateVHVT]

Onision using manipulation to avoid criticism? Shocker.

[@cashthecurator666]

@@QJ89 Wait, was that shitty line actually in the fucking book?

[@amakel4365]

Me: *insecure about my writing* Stones to Abbigale: *exsists* Me: I am the God of literature and you shall bow to me.

[@thedoorman6940]

Amen *bows*

[@softcrab3361]

"All hail our new writing god!"

[@garretwoeller7669]

What kind of artists doesn't feel insecure about their art being bad

[@chechiegaming7627]

I’m insecure about my drawings but damn I know this is a book and all but it was so bad it assured me I was at least good at what I do

[@dontaejones7419]

You shouldn't base your self-worth or the quality of your work/craft on belittling someone elses or the person who made it. But this is Onision and what he wrote should be a sin. So I'll allow it... 😂🤣

[@gabriellegoodwin4422]

Onision roller skating into school but having to take them off because there's too much blood is incredibly grotesque, horrifying, but mainly hilarious.

[@avocadobe]

Hey Krim, you'll never see this, but I watched you all throughout my early and late teenaged years. You were like a cool nerdy older brother when I was struggling with depression and an addiction. Now I'm in a stable marriage with a little baby. Thanks for being there, buddy!! You kept me going.

[@SoVidushi]

If that is you and your baby in your profile pic, y'all are beautiful

[@jayncoclassic]

Don't apologise for the kitties making noise they're just running around because they're happy

[@abigailmccarthy9982]

Or just feeling the need to zoom around loudly.

[@somethingotherthanmyrealname]

Abigail McCarthy z O O m

[@magicmon]

I can not thumbs up. So here you go 👍

[@randomaccount313]

@@abigailmccarthy9982 the cats are zoomers lol

[@reloadpsi]

Apologise for not giving them enough screentime. Not allowing people to see your cats enough is a serious crime.

[@grainasalt1174]

Onion boi: like it’s your fault for being abused. If it were me I wouldn’t let it get to me. Also Onion boi: WAAHH!!! Someone online criticized my book!!!😭😭😭😭

[@inkslaboratory3010]

@Dam Jackass He's a bigger train wreck than a foul-beaked abused cockatoo. At least the latter is deserving of love and a second chance.

[@thesleepydot]

GrainA Salt lmao the HYPOCRISY IM DYING

[@NateVHVT]

And let's not forget he alleges that Sarah raped his wife/husband. Didn't go to the police, didn't get her to go to the police, didn't even make a phone call.

[@Fuzy2K]

1:02:59 - 1:03:23 -- I love the implication that Onision forgot the word "down", replaced it with "poopy poo poop", then forgot to change it later.

[@lotus2647]

one of the greatest lines in literature "how can I turn that frown upside poopy poo poop" really thought out and is greatly symbolic for the entire story.

[@_b_e_a_n_s_]

I hate it when writers like onion use really formal language to sound smarter or edgier. "Inspire some acknowledgement of my existence" ???? who says that? like just say "I wanted her to notice me" or something geez

[@lisasingslikeadyingmouse3580]

Hi this comment is two months old but I'm just now watching these reviews But anyways that phrase sounds like something I'd use for a psychopathic character or for an angry character in the middle of an argument.

[@crowdemon_archives]

The only time I can find use for a sentence like that is when my character is for some reason a walking thesaurus. But even then, it's situational.

[@sefsprite]

hi hungry I'm rat I feel like that line would be a joke in every other book

[@insanityspokentheluniticplayer]

Lmao he sounds like a cheesy ass villain

[@shadowbunny7892]

Sounds like something I would say tbh

[@ravenwinter6984]

Normally I'm not really into long book reviews, but your delivery, observations, and explanations are excellent, informative, and entertaining. And, unlike Onion's book, you give a lot of personality and are rather relatable. :) Great job and well done! I am off to watch more of your videos!

[@KrimsonRogue]

Awesome! Glad to hear it. :D

[@Sakacarottes]

Well to be fair to the school administration, after the deadliest school shooting AND an ex-teacher burning the building down, in the same year, i would close the school too. Shit's haunted man

[@Adv--ho7lc]

*onision while writing this book*- “Reality can be whatever I want”

[@cheshiregamez303]

Adv1269 *Krimson reading said book* reality is often disappointing

[@Therathmataz]

Funny that's the plot of his third dumpsterfire.

[@opeygopey227]

Me to Onision: your reality is bland and disgusting

[@baste3750]

Book 3 really makes this comment come to life

[@CynningSeline]

Cue the Onision version of the Phineas and Ferb opening (doesn't exist I don't think)

[@calebjohnson7592]

"He took his rollerskates off because the floors are sticky with blood." You could have made the entire review about that one line, and we would have gotten the whole picture.

[@sambibambi5409]

i paused for a second, letting the surrounding smells enter my receptors. my senses were heightened, pristine, cutting the air like a blade. i begun to remove the heely from my left foot; my whole being... whimpering, shaking, letting my toesies kiss the atmosphere, almost like an awakening, or a nightmare. i was already fighting back a violent orgasm as i moved onto the right foot heely, wrapped around my member, choking me like an erotic death serpent. the sin milk spilled from my third eye as i slowly slipped out of the shoe that was now blinking it's neon led lights passionately, as if to say, "thank you gre... jim... James. for our time together." i shed a single tear as i left the sweet lullabies of my rolling shoesy-shoes further and further behind. now wasnt the time to cry. now was the time to run up and watch a big buff man punch someone in the face and get jacked off by Obama

[@sambibambi5409]

im so sorry everyone

[@TheBournPL]

@@sambibambi5409 what have you done :'(

[@wastebin996]

@@sambibambi5409 what the hell, it’s like a copypasta but it isn’t copied from anywhere…

[@sambibambi5409]

Wastebin direct paste from my heart...

[@gelusvenn5063]

"The boy who nearly saved the day" That's the most left-handed compliment, which is made even funnier by the fact that the author probably didn't intend it that way. Addendum: "Like a muscle reflex" well his natural, automatic response kicked in, he might've started not to be the center of attention.

[@k.morningstar7983]

everything ends with "and everyone clapped", in spirit

[@SpecialBlanket]

"[T]he speed at which she attaches [etc...] suggest prior sexual abuse"-- good for you for knowing that BPD etc. are trauma disorders. It's amazing how few people see any connection between early trauma and lasting behaviors / personality traits / etc.

[@doeeyed7498]

Yes and victims are often shamed (you "wh0re") or left alone and the cycle of abuse goes on. It is easy for a group to mock vulnerable people- especially when they are isolated and don't speak up due to severe trauma, guilt and shame.

[@gracekim25]

It’s also worrying when people interpret this as love

[@lmrpirate5273]

Partly blame the people that lie about having those sorts of disorders, or at least use those disorders as sympathy romps and for exploiting other people. It really is a vicious cycle because both sides suffer because of people like them. The latter lose their empathy (and likely other things like cash) to con artists who prey upon them, and the people who actually have disorders and aren't entitled end up being pushed away because of it. Then we try to spread awareness, but we can't get enough of it right and hurt the cause. And then when we finally gain back empathy for those sorts of people, the con artists come right back to start the death spiral all over again, but worse each and every time. The only way this bullshit will end is it people like Onision are put in their proper place and aren't allowed to keep milking the public while driving the people they're impersonating to suicidal depression or homicidal rage.

[@SpecialBlanket]

@@gracekim25 on the flip side, it's not fair when people act like it means one can't love / their love is fake / etc (if you mean from the victim).

[@kentknightofcaelin4537]

BPD can manifest in people without significant trauma, or with trauma unrelated to sexual abuse.

[@DraconicScribe]

This books sounds like it was written by the entirety of r/incel

[@meowtherainbowx4163]

At first, I was tempted to disagree, but I think I get it. The main character, like an average incel, simultaneously loathes himself and blames society for all his shortcomings.

[@Alex-gw5et]

That’s not even a real subreddit

[@starbars96]

@@seuvoro670 he is a cucc a very self righteous one

[@DraconicScribe]

@@Alex-gw5et it was, I believe reddit had to take it down because it was promoting hate speech (like actual hate speech, not Tumblr hate speech interpretation)

[@Alex-gw5et]

spyro2060 LAJ you’re probably thinking of r/braincel

[@ZackBenedict]

I flew through the nondescript halls on my Heelys through a sticky sea of blood. There was no time to put on my knee and elbow pads as Abbi's life was maybe, possibly on the line. I arrived at the cafeteria to see carnage. There were body parts everywhere and I could hear the sounds of the crazed monkeys that escaped from the Zoo getting ever closer; there was no time to waste. So I wasted time, and decided to watch my teacher almost get shot, the raging, sociopathic, hate-boner growing in my Jeggings. Mrs. Stanley screamed at him again, "You are an embarrassment! A disgrace! How dare you, you scum!?" Upon hearing her verbal condemnation without hesitation, I watched her increased perspiration and agitation turn to desperation, as she saw his perturbation; she couldn't see the differentiation of her irrationalization within this provocation that would lead to her life's discontinuation, or at least result in hospitalization. I stood by to watch this altercation on a distant table, the elevation giving a better acclimatization for the coming domination that filled me with jubilation. Seth whipped his MP5-N toward her like a sword being unsheathed, time again felt like it had drastically slowed as his weakened arm struggled to steady his aim. Anyway, Jason at this point runs in and beats Seth into a coma and stares intimidatingly at the aforementioned, unrelated monkeys and they decide to leave calmly, giving a polite, synchronized bow before exiting. All in all, I can definitely say that it was a pretty eventful Tuesday.

[@KrimsonRogue]

That was amazing! XD

[@jadedragon6222]

My favorite comment ever. Hilarious!

[@Light-fi1mj]

Zack Benedict that was the most “ations” I’ve seen used in the same couple sentences.

[@xenngu3424]

OMG if that's actually how the book was written I would read it!

[@thesleepydot]

Zack Benedict this is a masterpiece 😂😂😂

[@PebkioNomare]

You can't have a "guns make school into a living hell" scenario *and* a "badass saves the school" scenario. If the main character can take out the shooter without *also* having a gun... then that suggests that anyone can take out a shooter without a gun (and just didn't because they weren't the main character). No: to drive home that guns should be controlled, you have to present them as *overwhelmingly unfair.* That, no matter how much of a badass a person is, they lose to *anyone* with a gun. Present an extremely fit sports star, with training in multiple forms of martial arts, and yet they're reduced to the status of "everyone else" when faced with a machine designed to inflict lethal damage at long range.

[@ericgaw113]

They didn't get "A"s, they got "passing grades". A passing grade is a "C". There should be tons of students that would be screaming about this demotion in their grade point average.

[@slevinchannel7589]

The USA is radicalizing Itself; please inform yourself and dont just limit yourself to Onion-Fun/Cringe-Science. Try Telltale Atheist.

[@weneedaladder8384]

​@@slevinchannel7589I feel like I should be thankful I don't understand what your comment means.

[@michjean2297]

Seth: has fight with girlfriend "BeTtEr ShOoT uP tHe ScHoOl!"

[@TrackpadProductions]

Well, to be fair, that's how many school shooters are motivated. They think women collectively owe them romance, and get angry when they don't get it.

[@rpgluvr1358]

@@TrackpadProductions at least there's that

[@sierotkamarysia4199]

@@TrackpadProductions name one schoolshooter that actually did that because of a girl

[@TrackpadProductions]

West Nickel and Virginia Tech come to mind. I didn't say one girl in particular. And hoo boy, if we drop the "school" part and talk about mass shootings in general in the US, the list goes on and on.

[@sierotkamarysia4199]

@@TrackpadProductions You said it like all of these people died because some guy couldn't smash. Good examples, fair enough, but still saying that "list goes and goes" isn't convincing anyone.

[@nikhilkapoor428]

First video of this guy I’ve seen, and I’ve learned three things: 1. Greg wrote a book 2. Greg wrote a bad book 3. Greg wrote more bad books

[@excellent8105]

That's what I have learnt after finding out about him yesterday, that and he has a You Tube channel.

[@brittneybrisbin744]

4. He absolutely hates when anyone critiques it.

[@myquest666420]

The more you learn about him, the more you’ll hate him.

[@Jrez]

Don't bother learning anything else, ignorance really is bliss in this case.

[@kylebear8101]

Jrezky agreed :(

[@royallynick]

Apparently he actually wrote an email like that to a girl irl. And she told him it was creepy and to never talk to her again.

[@monarchschwoop52]

“Turn that frown poopy poop poop” I don’t even think that’s ironic humor, like when PewDiePie named his pig in Minecraft peepeepoopoo

[@crowdemon_archives]

The thing is, Pewdiepie is actually likable lol

[@TheHeroOfTomorrow]

Krim...honey, it's not worth it.

[@flamehazesflamegang3788]

TheHeroOfTomorrow no it isn’t and hi are you gonna make another review soon? Love you’re work!

[@gildartswinters4984]

yeah it really isn't. He's gonna try anyways...bless em.

[@TheHeroOfTomorrow]

MCU Shue Well, I just put up a new one, so there’s that.

[@gildartswinters4984]

@@TheHeroOfTomorrow He's determined though.

[@idongesitusen5764]

Agreed, my friend. it makes first drafts look like Austen or O'Conner

[@jakemiller2507]

>rolls up on a school shooting wearing roller skates

[@wareforcoin5780]

_B A D A S S_

[@GhostOfBilly]

*railgrinds in crushing fear

[@peterfabian1415]

*rolls around traffic cones In a serpentine manner*

[@thomsonvan9002]

After riding the bus

[@Nerobyrne]

+2 dodge bonus to ranged attacks

[@EmiliFaust]

49:01 "What if a younger person tries to read something like this, because they hate themselves and they want to hate reading" got me 😂

[@dededeedles]

"How can I turn that frown upside poopy poo poop?" That is the worst dialogue I've ever heard.

[@user-ks1gb1ud3l]

Abbie has a bad home life? Sounds like Mr. Struggle to me

[@DJ-by9oe]

Did you just

[@blue-or7co]

Oh dear God... Mr struggle... He shouldn't date her

[@noticeable_difference7340]

dude that’s sugar gay

[@faith7718]

As long as she's seeking insight from a godlier woman at church then she's totally dateable!

[@Shartydyke]

Dude you're being sugar gay right now

[@grosebud4721]

“Howdy, love the glasses” Is my new pick up line, even for people who don’t wear glasses.

[@Dysanii]

Gracious Rosebud Howdy, love the glasses

[@n0odles86]

@@Dysanii Howdy, love the glasses

[@ryokiritani4187]

@@n0odles86 howdy, love the glasses

[@Phoenix0F8]

ESPECIALLY for people who don't wear glasses.

[@GOFFBITZH666]

Howdy, love the glasses!

[@ange4154]

Not gonna lie he couldve called Alex Piss Jar Boy the rest of the book and that would've made things more interesting

[@Daggeira]

All it takes is an Onision book to turn you into Cringin' Rogue lmao 😂😂😂 I'll see myself out.

[@KrimsonRogue]

Damn, now I'm not sure if I'll ever be able to unsee that. XD

[@Daggeira]

@@KrimsonRogue I'm not saying you necessarily _should_ make my horrible joke into a character, but.... I wouldn't complain lmao

[@misery8264]

If Onision is your son, you're going to pay for a second house if that means you can get rid of him that way. Let's just be realistic here.

[@bogczarkrollevowski2509]

If onision is anyone's son, physical abuse is actually fine.

[@stick-itproductions.3307]

I agree with Joshiro. This might even be a result of what happens when you abuse your child.

[@weirdwhitepfpguy6457]

Nah just kill it

[@johnjohnthetauntaun]

matthew garcia I was going to make a joke about getting an abortion 417+ months after conception, but I couldn’t think of anything funny. To make up for it, here’s a comment saying I was going to make a joke about getting an abortion 417+ months after conception but couldn’t think of anything funny.

[@TheCrimsonIdol987]

Maybe that's why his mother is insane. If Onision was my son, I'd admit failure as a human being.

[@gerythionargarys7848]

"Why don't you call them people!" Cuz Greg doesn't think of others as people.

[@AsdfAsdf-mi6ks]

Gerythion Argarys and he’s a sociopath

[@gerythionargarys7848]

@@AsdfAsdf-mi6ks True.

[@Lucifersfursona]

“There are a few good things about this book” it’s flammable :)

[@afrouniverse9149]

I love how you're dragging Onion boy through the mud but also talking about how his ideas have potential to be used in different ways and not just diss anything he writes immediately with no explanation as to why it's bad. It's refreshing and makes for great writing advice

[@tiacat11]

Same here tbh, looking at examples of what not to do actually helps me a lot more than looking at positive examples, because with positive examples, I just feel like I'm copying someone else's good idea, whereas with a negative example you can kind of take it apart, figure out _why_ it doesn't work, and then experiment with how to make it work if done differently.

[@nxdiuh]

"James comes across as a sweaty neckbeard guy who uses the term 'm'lady' unironically." YELLING

[@aarontheperson6867]

HOLLERING

[@greenbeans995]

*BELLOWING*

[@RibbonVintageGirl]

WHEEZING

[@michelsand5399]

Nadi B SCREECHING!

[@markhirsch6301]

Reeing

[@devonkelly44]

"a sweaty neckbeard guy who uses the term 'm'lady' unironically" LMAO

[@cjparsons9730]

I love how Onision had the shooter place explosives in the school that failed to go off just like the Columbine Shooting. He then made his next main character (the book: This is Why I Hate You) dress up in a black trench coat just like the 'black trench coat gang" that Columbine shooters used to do.

[@zawrator4457]

Tbf it was the biggest news story in the 90s, I think its fair to say it may have made quite the impression on him growing up.

[@cjparsons9730]

@@zawrator4457 I can get that but he shouldn't write the main character of his story trying to emulate two mass murders. Especially when he states that both main characters of these two books reflect him.

[@MollymaukT]

This is Why I Hate You main character would def be in the Trenchcoat Mafia

[@megib901]

@@zawrator4457 don't get me wrong that's def true but in 3 books that he's written he has had 2 school shootings (both used in horrible ways)and has referenced Columbine in both which I feel is a bit excessive.

[@papazepp1279]

After watching a recent video on greg's written web rants about his highschool years it made me realize that he's more unhinged than some would've thought. He got rejected one time for a creepy letter he sent to Abby and instead of moving on, he decided to make up a fanfic where they got together, and as a form of revenge, he made Seth, an abusive douche. No wonder one review mentioned a "continuity error on someone's vocabulary", yikes

[@ep3908]

what's up i'm greg, im like 40, and i never learned how to write (edit: every time someone likes this comment I lose a day off of my life)

[@sondor4375]

I uNDerStoOd tHat RefeReNCE

[@ZENGHAKTIV]

Is that from vine? Lol XD

[@bequemm]

Lmfaoo

[@enriquecabrera2137]

@@ZENGHAKTIV its the "hi im steve , im 16 and i never learned how to read" vine

[@LK-xk4nh]

@@enriquecabrera2137 It's actually "Hi I'm Jared, I'm 19 and I never learned how to read"

[@Suplexduplex]

His dialogue isn’t split up into separate lines when a new character talks??? Bro we learned to do that in 7th grade. That’s just common sense. Has onision never read a book?

[@iSaraSeantae]

It's literally been a couple decades

[@Suplexduplex]

Doodle Doodle Nope and a simple google search could hav refreshed his memory. Don’t defend the idiot. The book is bad

[@iSaraSeantae]

@@Suplexduplex I wasn't defending him wtf I was answering a question It's literally been a couple decades since he's opened a fucking book

[@snflwrchan8019]

@@Suplexduplex you really should improve your reading comprehension

[@beefcakesmchunkerson9079]

Tk Bandele not for fourteen years

[@spencerthestupidsamurai7326]

This is like he tried to write Looking For Alaska and Catcher in the Rye at the same time but he was too busy self pitying to do a second draft.

[@ryanlorenzo5003]

"Writing from a personal experience can save a book." Onision: This OC is me but is better in every way.

[@gemstone4264]

56:08 "I am enjoying this book!" *_there is no war in ba sing se_*

[@MJTheFaeVA]

Exactly, and nothing happened in Tiamen Square

[@steinmaniac7920]

The Armenians just went on an extended vacation.

[@bengaltiger8790]

"Hello, my name is Joo Dee, and I will be your tour guide around our lovely city!"

[@tartagliatheharbinger8744]

“I am happy to accept.”

[@RibbonVintageGirl]

"Seth found out that Abbie was pregnant, which resulted in him punching her stomach several times." Ngl I screamed at that part WTF

[@grosebud4721]

SayaKuro12 that’s so awful. One way to establish someone as an abusive jerk I guess, but it’s not like James is any better than Seth so it doesn’t really help anyway. Oops Greg!

[@chaoticcake390]

i thought that part was really unnecessary and frankly just too much. i don’t understand why abbi has to have every possible abusive thing happen to her so greg can ‘save’ her. and it’s really insensitive to anyone that has been unfortunate enough to have that happen to them. especially since that then leads the guidance councillor to believe abbi got an abortion and hate her for it, which is extremely unprofessional and unrealistic. much like anyone being unfortunate enough to have all of this happen to them before they’ve even graduated high school. using all of that trauma as a plot point to fulfil your own saviour fantasy is frankly sick

[@razan8308]

@@chaoticcake390 I don't like the shite story but everyone should write whatever they want since its fiction. If you read the warnings and still complain then I'm sorry for you. Stop policing fiction.

[@TheAdrift]

@@razan8308 that person isn't "policing fiction," they're just stating THEIR OPINION about how gross it is that a 30-year-old with a fetish for teen girls wrote a miscarriage subplot into a savior fantasy story. You realize that you're actually policing another person's opinion, right?

[@razan8308]

@@TheAdrift If you go by that; then you're policing MY opinion too. So how about you take several seats now?

[@thetherrannative]

Honestly, I'm glad Onion Boy wrote these books. Any time I need inspiration for my own stories, I rewatch one of these reviews. They never fail to fill me with creative fire, because no matter what I do with my worldbuilding and storytelling, I will _always_ be better than this.

[@teslashark]

Reminder: He's supposed to be pronounced like "one vision but without v in the middle" or "omission with n in place of m"

[@thetherrannative]

@@teslashark Onion Boy can try to correct us all he likes, but his name is Onion Boy, and there's nothing Onion Boy can do about it.

[@barborabazalkova5535]

As a person who was struggling with mental illness for majority of my teen years (and who is still struggling) im so tired of authors using different types of illnesses and traumas as a convenient plot device. Its so disrespectful to view a person only as an object - something to be fixed or saved, especially when this person is still a child and the world is still very confusing. Being mentaly ill teen isnt pretty or mysterious or emo... Its fucking tiring, neverending nightmare and it would be great if authors could recognise it for what it is and participate in destigmatizing mental ilnesses.

[@dodeedo9824]

You go sis

[@crowdemon_archives]

@Babba Yaaga Considering his history, unfortunately yea

[@Zaxerman2]

Idea: r/anythingbetterthanonision where everyone posts their writing with confidence, because the only requirement is that it must be better than these books.

[@spacekitty6568]

That would be really awesome

[@Horvath_Gabor]

That... would be a pretty low bar to clear. That said, I have actually read at least one actual book that was even less coherent than this one, and coincidentally it was also self-published. At least the author of that one had the excuse of being seventeen.

[@proonv5513]

9 months late but this is a great idea imo

[@victoriabell1398]

I would make a reddit account just for that

[@Zaxerman2]

@@proonv5513 nice to see this comment gaining traction again 😂

[@newsystembad]

Just from the first fifteen minutes, this sounds like Onision tried to cast himself as the protagonist of a high school harem anime. Except that even the most awful high school harem anime protagonists are infinitely less vile than Onion-senpai. Their worst crime is usually utter blandness, not sexualizing preteen girls.

[@diamondtrapeze]

For some reason I read “utter baldness”

[@sernoddicusthegallant6986]

*sexualizing preteen suicidal abuse victims

[@ZlayaZayah]

Onision High School Host Club? xDD

[@Soaring_lizzard]

Rohan D I watched Strange Aeons’ review, and as soon as I saw the first paragraphs I knew the book was written by a textbook sociopath, without a doubt.

[@charliejones3272]

so basically Onion created Masters of Ragnarok crossed with School days (without the ending where Makoto/Greg dies and subtracting the isekai of Ragnarok)

[@BewareTheLilyOfTheValley]

Around 19:00: "And then we're introduced to Matthew...who never does anything for the rest of the book. I mean, he dies at one point!" You said that like his death was just temporary but then he comes back to life to continue adding nothing else to the story 😂😂😂

[@natashamcconnell2292]

I’ve watched this video and Strange Aeons video on this book multiple times, and I am still very confused every time I hear how early the school shooting happens in the story. I just can’t convince my brain that such a climactic event doesn’t happen at the climax.

[@loturzelrestaurant]

Risking to be called a bot, i ask around just to spread some Fun and Education: Anyone wants some Book-Recommendations or KZbinr-Recommendations about those that entertain whiel allowing you to learn from Other's Mistakes (just like Onision-Roasts)?

[@kayway3938]

Ok...but like....is NO ONE going to talk about why the hell he had rollerblades....at all...??? Wasn't he planning on going to school...??? Didn't he ride the bus...???? How did he even have room....????? I have a pretty decently sized backpack...all I can fit in there is books...maybe a waterbottle...(if I'm feeling determined) So how did he fit rollerblades in his backpack...??? Did he just not have any books in there...??? Did he have a part time job at Sonic....??? Why even write in a rollerblading scene.....????

[@ahniandfriends123]

*Plays Escape From The City in earrape*

[@whydidannahavetokillsam1705]

How did he get off the bus without falling?

[@bthsr7113]

Now I have this image of the idiot faceplanting out of the bus because he was trying to look cool with his rollerblades.

[@chaoticcake390]

Bthsr71 if that doesn’t sum up onision i don’t know what does XD

[@Slipknotyk06]

You can tie the roller blades to the exterior of the backpack.

[@OnlyMichaelJackson]

he refers to people as "humans" or "creatures" to detach himself from everyone else and to seem "woke" by looking at everything from a broad "philosophical" (if that makes sense) perspective instead of a focused social or cultural one. he wants to relate everything he observes back to the way he thinks the world works and the way the FoOLiSH people around him act. it makes him seem DiFFeReNT.

[@GaudialisCorvus]

*EDGELORD*

[@animeluchia5405]

I don’t know why Onision calls others humans, though I imagine he’s looking down on them, but I can personally say why I call people humans in my head or to other people. It’s because I’m on the spectrum and as such I feel so out of place with those around me. I don’t understand neurotypical people and categorise them as something that’s not me. The people I *do* understand are people, those I don’t are humans. It’s hard to define but basically… I don’t see myself as similar enough socially to consider myself “human”, at least from a social standpoint. Now don’t get me wrong, I’m nothing like those otherkin folk, but I recognise myself as exceptionally abnormal. And there are times when it *is* a derogatory term, but only insofar as that I’m frustrated that *I* don’t get why other people do the things they do. It’s a jab at me in an indirect way. Anyway, I just felt the need to defend my strange way of talking, despite knowing my reason for saying humans has nothing to do with why James/Greg/Onision says humans.

[@tharunsankar4926]

In other words, it sort of reveals his sociopathic tendencies.

[@OnlyMichaelJackson]

@@animeluchia5405 i like picking up on a lot of our (mostly social) behaviours and relating them back to animal instincts in my head as a way of relieving myself of social pressure, 'cause sometimes we take those standards WAY too seriously, but the way greg is doing it is just so condescending, like we're still more than that. we're still more than just those "human creatures." its interesting how you see the word "human" as a social thing instead of a scientific thing. i always saw it as the other way around.

[@bluebirb7418]

He’s that one kid that was DiFFeRenT frOm oThEr KiDs and he never grew out of that edgy megacringe stage of life, then infused the Essence of that into an incomprehensible fever dream of garbage topped with a sprinkle of atrocious grammar and spelling.

[@PointsofData]

3 years late but police do not take their K9s for walkies. They are kept at the station until they're dispatched. Also K9 units are not trained to be aggressive. They are trained to take down suspects in a very specific manner; they latch onto their arm and drag the person down. Once they're on the ground, the puppers do shake, but that's to inflict enough pain to decrease the chance of the suspect fleeing. Again, a well trained K9 is _not aggressive_ (some have a lot of fun with their tasks) and will back off when given the command. They also are only used for very specific tasks. A drug sniffing dog is a drug sniffing dog. A dog used to run down suspects is only used for that. There is no dog that will be sicced on someone because they're abusing another person...that opens up way too fucking much liability.

[@zawrator4457]

Yea for liability you've got the bodycams who conviently have technicaly issues at the right times lmao.

[@megib901]

@@zawrator4457 LMAO always somehow.

[@johnfaber100]

My mother temporarily worked as an editor, and she got a couple such books. One such book was about a guy, sitting in his bathtub, contemplating dropping his hair dryer in, while reminiscing about his life. The book apparently describes, in excruciating and anatomically incorrect detail, how he shits in the bathwater. Another such book was written by a man who she claims to know for a fact has literally only read one book in his life, called "Robbi und Robba", a book that I couldn't read far in, despite being a children's book. In any case, he tried to write a children's book of his own, with predictable results. Run-on-sentences and words that a) are far too advanced for children b) probably haven't been used in a couple of centuries plagued the book. Those books now seem leagues better.

[@litaraduodox5799]

Honestly the first one CAN be a good concept of well executed. If you go as far of a subject as to contemplate suicide and being so hurt that there's no way out, might as well go full on reader disgust and throw the ugly parts of suicidal thoughts out there (yes, every part of suicidal thoughts are bad; but some people romanticize the sleepless nights and social awkwardness, not thinking about the lack of hygiene or self care, for example). If this was overall well written, it'd be a disturbing reading experience that would stick with you. This guy is so hurt and broken that he can't manage to get up from the bathtub. He just figures "well, I'm gonna die right nkw and no one will see me. Maybe I deserve this filth and this hurt. I deserve to suffer more and die alone, forgotten and surrounded in my own filth". This is something that can be well done. It scars in the readers mind. They can have some sense of understanding what the final, depressed thoughts of a dying or suicidal persons thoughts are. They may have never thought or considered taking their lives, but this superlative level of self abuse is a good introduction to how altered a suicidal person's thought process is. Thay being said, if it's bad written, it's just a guy bathing in shit and i'm not about that lmao

[@KelseyDrummer]

The sentence about the bathwater had me belly laughing for a good minute. Thank your mother for me please!😂

[@johnfaber100]

@@KelseyDrummer She says, "Tank [sic] me for what - having read that truly horrible Text til the end?"

[@KelseyDrummer]

@@johnfaber100 I admire her for finishing it. She's strong.

[@MetaFanWing]

@@litaraduodox5799 I initially read it as “*shifts* in the bathwater”, so this gave me a double-take.

[@salem7276]

Abbigale: Slightly interesting character, too many tropes. Abuses the "damsel in distress" cliche to HELL. James: S c o o t s c o o t