Such natural dialogue.

#HighGuardianSpice
#Crunchyroll

[@PhotonDragon16]

"I almost smashed your sword." If a sword could be smashed so easily then it's useless

[@sixkicksfightertricks949]

It'd probably make a great jagged knife. Those can be nasty.

[@HyperSonicXtreme]

Sephirioth’s vs her sword Sephiroth: WOW it’s like cutting through butter. Trash sword

[@hobomike6935]

@@sixkicksfightertricks949 it's worthless if you shattered almost all of the blade and it doesn't have enough range to kill someone in a fight.

[@sixkicksfightertricks949]

@@hobomike6935 I disagree. If most of the blade shattered but there was still at least an inch of blade remaining, then it'd be kind of like a box cutter. You can still slit an artery or jugular vein with it, and cut him up pretty good anyway. And you'd still have a few inches of more range than if you fought unarmed. Hold the blade right side up to throw a jab. Hold the blade upside down for hooks and chinese punches. Even with no blade at all, the hilt itself could work like a tonfa. Just hold the hilt in its center and punch in ways that could make either end land.

[@Sparkletta]

Oh gosh, it’s a child. Children say dumb things, of course you can’t smash a sword just by dropping it.

[@flankerbanker1467]

This show puts “awful writing” in “natural”.

[@madisond.4120]

I was *just* gonna say that.

[@blainetate743]

I get it!

[@djlunawolf5228]

But there is no... Oh...

[@whateveryouwannacallme8470]

kzbin.info/www/bejne/r6mxfH-peN2eo8k FOUND KRUSTY KRAB😨🤫 IN ROBLOX PIZZA PLACE!1!1!!1😂

[@brrrrrr]

@The boys upstairs. high guardian spice, it's I'm the tag

[@zodiacuniverse4663]

This sounds like a high schooler’s creative writing essay. “‘I almost broke your sword’. Nah, ‘broke’ is an overrated word. Hmmm what’s a synonym I could use instead? Oh, I got it!” *I almost smashed your sword.* “Now let’s find a synonym for the word ‘sword’. Aha!” *Precious weapon.*

[@blizzard_the_seal9863]

IM DYING CAUSE YOU’RE RIGHT

[@katie15732]

Why is this so accurate 😭

[@A._K.]

Me with my thesis

[@WalerianZ]

"I almost smashed your precious weapon" Now sounds like a euphemism

[@leafymays553]

Ok, I admit I actually have been there 🤣

[@jujublue4426]

I love how this show is always used as an example of bad writing

[@mertensiam3384]

It's a good example of what not to do. And how much companies suck. But mostly what not to do

[@beats0me]

@JJ Graham I bet you don’t charge people a monthly subscription for it tho

[@N_Tertainment7]

@JJ Graham You are one person, This is made by a whole a** writing staff, plus I'm pretty sure your script is actually better

[@thementalorder1233]

​@JJ Graham I mean, I'm pretty sure that just with you doing something decent it would be a lot better than what the hell is this. Plus, you can always learn and be better as a writer.

[@quangamershyguyyz7166]

@@mertensiam3384Why did you mention how much companies suck?

[@umhello9962]

“Mom, lookit. Mummy.” Why does the voice actor sound like she doesn’t want to take part in this? Like damn, that’s so flat.

[@im4ft622]

I mean, can you blame her?

[@umhello9962]

@@im4ft622 Honestly, no lol

[@T_E_G]

Even a self insert sounds like they're tired of the show lmao

[@neoslayerpw8230]

@@im4ft622 I personally think it sounds like buttercup from PPG

[@RogueBulb]

mrrrrrrrrrrrr. and also the thump of the sword when it hits her palm is super soft.

[@OffenT]

when she said "i'm much more worried about you smashing yourself" it legit sounds like an abridged parody

[@SairinEarthsea]

Ghost stories dub?

[@icecreamsundd]

@@SairinEarthsea honestly tho

[@hobomike6935]

this entire show is a parody of anime as a genre tbh

[@AAJillSandwich]

@@hobomike6935 It's like a bootleg Harry Potter with overused and cheesy anime tropes and a 1.0 DnD class system.

[@noriii]

@@AAJillSandwich more leik bootleg little witch academia lol

[@Lesaloote]

I'll never get over the "mum, look it! Mummy" line. It's so obviously a first take of gibberish they didn't bother revisiting

[@theunnaturaldisasters8992]

literally tho

[@tramographyMCR]

IKR NOBODYS TALKING ABT IT

[@c0nstanc393]

it sounds almost like an ai

[@skylarthecat213]

I CAMT BREATHE HELP

[@jasmintea8825]

I feel embaressed about my own OCs and stories, but if people are confident enough to show this and genuenly think it's good it kinda give some hope for my work 💀

[@blacktemplar2377]

If a sword breaks from a meer drop, it's an inferior to a true nord's steel sword.

[@sakuracardcaptor4709]

❤

[@BloodEdgeExtreme2000]

True my friend. Ever since HGS dropped. I had more confidence in my fantasy story.

[@allohtoffbaqphat4547]

"I almost smashed your sword" "I'm much more worried about you smashing that like button"

[@lungaville1219]

GODDAMIT Man LMAO. Thank you for the laugh

[@jatoarkanen4435]

"...like a boss!!!"

[@sophiaredwood5825]

BAHAHAHA

[@coolgaming9868]

“Its free and it helps out a ton”

[@AJTOON-H]

Oh yeah, I smashed that button, what are you gonna do about that hmmm

[@The_Ronster_Drawz]

Mom: “I’m more worried about you smashing yourself” Rose: “Who told you that?” Mom: “What?” Rose: “What?”

[@zacharyteibel8580]

nice

[@kenway.kirigaya]

That would’ve been funny if they actually said that

[@esdeathsenpai5128]

@@kenway.kirigaya In an alternate timeline where this show was good, I'm sure they did

[@antoniobluregard3089]

i dont get it

[@antoniobluregard3089]

@Federal Bureau of Investigation fbi please tell me the joke i want to laugh

[@laurengibbs6940]

“Mom! I’m so sorry! I didn’t-“ “Don’t worry about it sweetheart, it’s alright.” “I almost smashed your sword..” “You can’t smash a sword, however I’m much more worried about you hurting yourself. Who raised you to run around with swords in the house anyway?” “….you did.” “Huh. Then I guess I should finally teach you to hold this thing.” There. Fixed your shit.

[@spectroelectro3772]

Better

[@JaxontheOkay]

every single dialogue rewrite removes "mommy" and i am all for it

[@quangamershyguyyz7166]

@@JaxontheOkaywhy?

[@JaxontheOkay]

@@quangamershyguyyz7166 sadly yucky connotations nowadays and it's a kinda weird and awkward thing for a late teens child to call their mom still anyways.

[@quangamershyguyyz7166]

@@JaxontheOkay My mom calls her mom, mommy still. And so do my young adult cousins.

[@battosaikenshin439]

Love how caraway is power walking by, nobody walks that fast with a book, he's definitely avoiding someone.

[@ghastlygavin]

Probably trying to avoid this entire show

[@kaylaHat]

​@@ghastlygavinhe directed it himself tho

[@arbiterskiss6692]

Carraway did something at Aloe and Anise's party last night and is trying to avoid the consequences, at least until tonight.

[@kaylaHat]

@@arbiterskiss6692 that something was them, he did them

[@aoto8897]

*She

[@redgeoblaze3752]

Any sword that would break from that short fall is not a weapon you can trust in battle.

[@SonarTheBat]

Rosemary jumps off a roof and is fine. She drops her sword on a rock and it breaks.

[@JoanSlugXAkaJerkyBogard]

Thanks goblin meliodas.

[@puss_n_booze]

a pebble broke it.

[@greg77389]

Exactly. All good swords are made from spring steel or fantasy materials with insane properties. Back in the day, metals were theorized to be 1000 times stronger than they actually are, until the discovery of how the crystalline atoms slip past each other, which explains why most metals are stretchy.

[@konoveldorada5990]

Meanwhile Anos Voldigoad fights with a stick and it doesn't break.

[@L337M4573RK]

A sword that can break THAT easily would be "useful" only ONCE during a single, solitary fight!

[@MasterLee2011]

I demand that you show that holy sword some respect, knave. That sword was blessed and passed down by a line of royal knights, starting with the legendary hero of Hyrule Link from Breath of the Wild.

[@tototats16]

@@MasterLee2011 weapon durability can be such a pain

[@Moon07887]

Precisely what i was thinking

[@L337M4573RK]

@Frost E Bear You just gotta hope that the blade and hilt don't simply go flying off on the back-swing!

[@L337M4573RK]

@Novi Rp13 Called an emerald, cut like a diamond, but shatters like glass...is that why it's a "chaos" emerald?

[@mallmann72]

I think it comes down to something Hayao Miazako wrote once. How modern writers aren't influenced by their own personal real experiences anymore - people they met, places they went, things they did. They are influenced by the media they consumed, so they only replicate and mix things like some past netflix show or tumblr fanfiction or tweet they saw, and the end result is... This.

[@phabiorules]

He isn’t wrong, but he was actually was talking about Otaku creators. He believed that Otaku’s couldn’t create great art because they don’t go out and interact with each other, they just try to copy things that they like.

[@talonsandtails501]

Oh crap it’s like ai

[@duckway4733]

Explains why it feels like the script was generated by ChatGPT

[@AriPlayz08]

Girl: *crying* Mom: “I’m much more worried about you smashing yourself. Who raised you to run around the house with swords?” *starts smiling* “You did” That is definitely how we talk in real life

[@jonquilgemstone]

Pity the writers: they clearly never interacted with motherly figures before.

[@TitanKaiju75]

Pretty sure the writers are actually a horde of cave trolls, so that's somewhat understandable.

[@alabamaslammer3921]

@@TitanKaiju75 i think they're aliens. I mean cave trolls probably ran into humans at least once or twice

[@TitanKaiju75]

@@alabamaslammer3921 That's an insult to extraterrestrial life.

[@lgbtqiarights]

@@alabamaslammer3921 that sounds like something a cave troll would say

[@alabamaslammer3921]

@@lgbtqiarights 🏃‍♂️

[@sigma--boss7098]

I like how when Rosemary trips and falls, instead of falling down to her level, the sword is magically teleported 6 feet up by the power of the rule of cool so that her mom can grab it effortlessly

[@mqfii8992]

It was trying to fly away from this god forsaken cartoon.

[@paintbrush3554]

WTF.

[@esdeathsenpai5128]

@@mqfii8992 underrated comment

[@hindelsoft4650]

That's not even the weirdest part. The mom catches her daughter from the back and then the sword from in front of her. AT THE SAME TIME. Then BOTH OF THEM get teleported to floor so she can put her daughter again on the stairs.. I swear when they checked the scenes they realized they did such a piss-poor job that their solution came down to "let's crop down all shots so that they constantly show the characters on close-up and hopefully no one will tell none of this is in sync".

[@The3rdFist]

@@mqfii8992 ACCURATE

[@DespairDoctor]

I love how at the end of the flashback, Caraway is trying to speed walk out of the scene so he doesn't get talked to. It's as if the animators gave him a life of his own and he wanted nothing to do with the shit that was about to go down, but since he was voiced by one of the creators, he knew he was stuck.

[@KirbyIsCute]

"(Just keep walking. Pretend to not notice them-)" "Hey, teacher! Tell me about my mom!" "(damnit!) Hey, yeah, me and your mom were friends - also I'm transgendered. (Why couldn't my character be mute?)"

[@TheRealGuywithoutaMustache]

Oblivion NPC dialogue: “Finally! A worthy opponent, our battle will be legendary.”

[@joeltehguy]

oblivion dialogue is more normal than this

[@Zero_Li24]

Hey, why are you here with only 19 likes for a 6 days ago comment?

[@rugalbernstein5913]

>Harvest Dawn plays in the background

[@Rubidium01]

* proceeds to say long and complicated words *

[@kioskthewarlord9590]

My favorite part is how the sword has virtually no consistent size.

[@renharris6504]

Must be made out of the same material as the sword in Thundercats Roar.

[@lordofluck771]

Dude that comment is fuckin with me. I mean the show is already garbage but now it’s inconsistent garbage

[@darklord884]

Nor do pinkette's arms.

[@markissacs7784]

Maybe that’s it’s power. It’s supposed to be about magic so the MC should have some kind of magic weapon or something

[@joeycarmine3830]

Man, having to consistently draw everything the same is such a pain for me lol

[@sd-kn1br]

is no one gonna talk about how moms voice switched...

[@demonman905]

Went from "Ara Ara~" to "I'm an eager mom"

[@stupido-um4xo]

Oh god it just hit me, damn

[@NicoletteandEmma]

That was so blatantly two different voice actors

[@daddysenpai408]

@@NicoletteandEmma or just one inexperienced voice actress who can't set a steady tone for a character

[@sittingcrowd912]

Not to mention the audio getting distorted

[@ballcockfiend]

No mother would just start randomly teaching her child how to use a sword simply because they tripped. So I made my own scene. >A blur of pink skids into the scene. _Rosemary._ Mommy, mommy, mommy! Can I learn how to use a sword like you? >Her mother, Lavender, is sitting down at the table with a cup of tea and writing something in a journal. She looks up at Rosemary, and looks thoughtful. _Lavender._ Sure thing, but you had better pay very close attention, Rose. _Rose._ Of course I will! _Lav._ Alright, then -- we'll be- >A split second later Rosemary dashes off, to the exasperation of Lavender who wasn't finished speaking. >Rosemary grabs the sword and runs down the stairs, then trips. Lavender bolts up out of her chair, bumping the table and spilling her tea. She catches Rosemary. The sword falls to the ground with a loud clatter. [Cue a second-long scene of the tea dripping off the table, the cup smashed on the floor.] _Rose._ M-mommy, the sword! Is it broken? _Lav._ No, sweetheart. It's a lot tougher than you think it is. >Lavender picks up the sword, and instead of unsheathing it or setting the sword in Rosemary's hands, she moves to hold it underneath her right arm. She huffs and sets her left hand on her hip and takes a stern voice with Rosemary. _Lav._ What have I told you about running around with scissors? _Rose._ You shouldn't be so overzealous. It's not a toy. It could hurt you really badly. _Lav._ The same applies to this sword. But this isn't like scissors -- this is a fully fledged weapon. I've taken many lives with this, and I don't want you to suffer the same fate. I don't know what I'd do with myself if you died. >Rosemary looks down, crying. Lavender scoops her up in her arms and holds her. _Lav._ Oh, baby, don't cry. Everything's alright. _Rose, blubbering._ But I made you worry. I keep doing these stupid things and making you worry. I'm so sorry. _Lav._ Shh, shh. No apologies necessary, sweetheart. We all make mistakes. >Lavender takes a handkerchief from her pocket and wipes Rosemary's face. She looks to the table with the spilt tea, broken cup on the floor, and sighs. _Lav, calling._ Chicory, would you be a dear and clean that up for me? _Chicory, from the other room._ Ugh, fiiiine. >Lavender rolls her eyes. _Lav, to Rose._ Why don't we go outside now, and I'll teach you how to use a sword? _Rose._ Really? _Lav._ Of course. And... by the way, we are going to be using wooden swords, not a real one. _Rose._ But- _Lav._ No buts, Rosemary. I'm not chancing on you getting hurt. >Rosemary is visibly downtrodden. Lavender sets Rosemary down, and they walk off towards the door to their backyard. As they walk, the scene fades, and we hear: "Every weapon is dangerous, so you must treat them with the utmost respect... even an arrow without its bow can cause significant harm..."

[@76o90]

It’s surprising that you, a single person, could create so much better dialogue than an entire team of “professional” writers. This is really well done!

[@Funkadelic_Zach4579]

​@@76o90you call them "professional" writers 😂😂 They were chosen based on their gender and sexuality

[@Solar3clipse1]

bet your the type of highschooler who could write better essays

[@Yes_U248]

👏👏👏👏

[@rzanalsayegh3054]

this was so satisfying to read, kudos to you😊

[@work90]

"I'm more worried about you smashing yourself" the writing is definitely a writing.

[@TheActualRealDrPepper]

Hmm... Yes, the writing was probably written. Petha by a person (debatable).

[@crowfoot8059]

I’ve seen wattpad fan fiction by 14 year olds with better dialogue

[@nala7783]

HELP WHY IS THIS TRUE

[@musicboxtoxic]

When I was 9 I wrote FNaF fanfiction on Wattpad with better dialogue 😭

[@l0rrow288]

@@musicboxtoxic bro what were you doing on wattpad at 9 years old 💀 Bruv I was eating crayons

[@glitcheddragongal3402]

As a now older than 14 year old wattpad fanfiction writer I appreciate it Thank god someone didn't compare this dialogue to our skills (which aren't the best but cmon, cmonnn, this dialogue wasn't even dialogue it was words mashed toghether)

[@glitcheddragongal3402]

@@l0rrow288 bestie why do you think them 14 year olds are able to write something like "my immortal" at their age😭✨ we start at like 1st grade the moment we learn how to write n read It's an instinct that pulls you in Ur either born a wattpader or ur not 😭

[@crow3467]

HOW COME NO ONE IS TALKING ABOUT HOW THE TEACHER DUDE WAS LIKE SPEEDWALKING AT THE END THAT SHIT WAS HILARIOUS

[@blu3soda]

S p e e d

[@lemon-pop2923]

OH MY GOSH YES. The way he just SLID over looks so weird!

[@PrivateDaisy]

Comments under videos about this show give me life

[@aniasthompson4569]

0:32

[@kya_spectre]

man had places *to go* lmao

[@AspenBrightsoul]

Man that is an absolutely amazing first draft, can't wait to see the finished product.

[@gabriellemos2491]

"The dialogue is very human"

[@jackson3475]

The entire conversation feels like when a player is mashing through a game's dialogue.

[@s0me_Weirdo]

Me trying to read hollow knight dialogue while my cousin uses the mouse:

[@pumkin610]

I'm imagining listening to songs on my playlist, but every other word is missing lol

[@aaliyah.williams9628]

I be mashing through that shit like im trying to do combos

[@pumkin610]

@@aaliyah.williams9628 mashing?

[@aaliyah.williams9628]

@@pumkin610 typed wrong

[@shelbyg.8867]

I love how the professor just kinda glides into frame at the end

[@Strawberrymilkdrink]

Literally Tokyo drifts into the scene

[@mqfii8992]

He walks faster than most characters run In this show.

[@zoruamaster2495]

Please tell me that the professor was moving fast to get infront of those 3 to get their attention, and not because the show can’t even animate background characters properly

[@hobomike6935]

they still haven't figured out how to animated walking cycles / movements that don't feel supernatural or forced.

[@cupio-stardust]

Lmao it looked so funny.

[@Arcjaw]

This show is the perfect example on how not to write dialogue. Considering I'm writing my own book, I'm taking it to heart

[@flamingowriter4072]

I’m a writer too, and this sounds like something someone on the staff has never wrote anything before. Meanwhile, I’ve been writing for over a decade, and I’m more confident in my writing skills than whatever this is.

[@BloodEdgeExtreme2000]

As a fellow writer, same

[@ShadyDoorags]

This is the first clip I've seen of High Guardian Spice outside of someone reviewing it. Despite the entire internet warning me how bad this show is, I was still shocked by what I just witnessed. The animation, the character designs, the voice acting, the writing, the editing, the cinematography... they're all AWFUL! The girl was running DOWN the stairs and she dropped the sword FORWARD! How on Earth did the mom (who I thought was a guy) catch the daughter close to the ground but catch the sword on its way up into the air!?!? How does one "smash" a sword by dropping it? Is it made of glass? If a sword is that smashable, it's not a very good weapon. Did no one realize how clunky "smash" was as a word choice? Why not use "ruin" or "wreck"?

[@hob_channel]

And you hate this show just for little things like that? There's something wrong with you

[@dullike]

@@hob_channel details matter and build up. this show is terrible

[@nickyheart]

the only fault i have with your analysis is saying you thought the mom "was a guy". especially about a show that features trans characters.

[@blueflare3848]

@@hob_channelThere’s something wrong with you if you can’t see this show’s blatant flaws.

[@duckway4733]

​@@hob_channel little things like that add up when you combine them all into a 35 second clip. Almost makes you wonder if they even tried making it good.

[@TeamFriendship8600]

"I'm much more worried about you smashing yourself." Wow, that was a-that was a sentence that someone was paid to say.

[@1805movie]

Seriously, who talks like that?

[@SilliesrShark109]

What’s wrong with it?

[@vak.o]

I’m much more worried about how little that someone is getting paid to say that line in such a horrendous way, come on, Oscar Isaac has said even worse lines but delivered them in a somewhat tolerable way.. if it weren’t for the writing.. of course..

[@SoggycereaI]

@@SilliesrShark109 It's just.. awkward. I think it'd be better if the sentence was "Well I'd be more worried over you getting hurt" along with a better delivery va-job

[@SmashTheAdam]

@@SilliesrShark109 another meaning could come to mind whe she words it like that

[@gabriellelagachatuber]

As a person who english is not her first language, watching this series is so difficult to process that I even understand the parodies of the series better.

[@scottydu81]

Your english is okay from where I sit!

[@BrickMaezo]

You’re a bit off on some grammar but you’re still learning so it’s pretty good! Keep going :)

[@curedreamfandubz4116]

Same 😭

[@horusschnopp1882]

It's sad but true that even ESL people are better at writing than this.. monstrosity.

[@wolverineminer]

I believe it. This dialogue is awkward and weird. Nobody talks like this.

[@BeanKally]

I don’t know why but the way Caraway just speedwalked at the end made me burst out laughing

[@aquaplush7531]

The mom went from sounding asleep to angry in like 2 seconds.

[@tristynd.8]

I love how the mom suddenly transitions from a gentle mother with a soft voice to a sassy tomboyish teenager during her dialogue

[@aesiddoway]

That’s what I noticed too! When she says, “hush” she’s all musical, soft, round tones… but then one sentence later, her voice is all sharps and flats

[@ma.cristinasaavedra7432]

I honestly thought it was just me

[@superplaylists1616]

This could be great if done right ngl

[@drewlemley6313]

This show is 1% better than my 1st bully's horrible stories on his facebook. The stories are so horrible they make me wanna gouge my eyes out then then light my cellphone on fire.

[@ojo2475]

"Hushh swAgheart"

[@jojidubi4]

Man, this AI-generated dialogue is pretty impressive. It almost feels like a human wrote it.

[@isaaca.garcia8958]

Technology man, I'm telling you. It's some pretty neat shit.

[@GweeenLala]

Yeah, I think it's kinda awkward tho. Human's writing still much better

[@callme4nth0ny34]

Not

[@quanghuyvu2649]

At least AI doesn't discriminate between men and women

[@yee1704]

Pokemon

[@sonofpears4691]

I rewrote this in about 15 minutes *The kid is at the top of the stairs swinging around the mighty great sword with both hands* Child “mommy look I’m a warrior like you *immatating swooshing noises*” *child trips and falls down the stairs dropping the sword, Mom catches her but the sword falls to the ground beside her* Mom: “Are you alright baby?” Child: “I’m fine but what about your sword” Mom: “Swords can be repaired, you can’t. What did I tell you about running around the house with swords?” Child: “I’m sorry, I just wanted to be a warrior like you” Mom: “I understand baby, but you need to be careful. I suppose it’s time I taught you how to hold that sword properly” *The mom hands the child her sword and the child immediately goes into the same exaggerated warrior pose* Mom: “your stance is all wrong, see your legs need to be further apart for maximum balance, probably explains why you fell down the stairs” *The mom demonstrates the stance and the child copies as we fade out of the flashback*

[@FlowerGriffon]

This show feels like making a series at 12 years old and not changing anything over the years

[@Dinahsour]

"iM Much More worried TO SeE you smashing YouRseLf" Why was that so funny?

[@supagb7700]

Because her voice went from gentle and soothing like a mother to cranky and fluctuating like a teenager

[@Dinahsour]

@@supagb7700 ah yeah I guess that makes sense

[@bananabutter8162]

She changed voice actors mid line

[@trashbug4843]

eh becauseeee eee

[@seventeenseventythirteen7465]

Because all I could think about was something dirty.

[@joewill8415]

I think I found the problem. This show was clearly made with a heavy emphasis on storyboarding, but the people involved aren't very good at translating those images into a proper animation with proper sounds. The establishing shot is only one second, but when she's running down the stairs we don't hear loud footsteps or wood creaking or anything. Sounds like she's just walking. The sword makes a "woosh" sound from traveling in the air, but we don't hear the smack of the handle in her hand. We don't hear a gasp from the MC or her going "woah" when they cut to a shot of her face, and when her mom lowers the blade we don't hear any sound from the blade. The dialogue's bad, but the sound design and mixing is atrocious. That sword may as well be a ball with how little sound it makes.

[@DonVigaDeFierro]

Hah, that's not even the worst of audio mixing problems of this show. I was expecting it to be bad, but HOLY FUCK... Just listen to Squid Boy talk. They really just have him a headset or something. What was the budget again?

[@Onyx1987]

@@DonVigaDeFierro There was a budget?

[@nekosaiyajin8529]

Dude swords don't actually vibrate in the air with every little movement making that *swing* metallic sound you hear in shows. That's usually just a media trope and I'd be much better off without it.

[@BlackDragon-tf6rv]

@@nekosaiyajin8529 The sound was so light and abrupt that didn´t make sense either

[@jet_set8648]

80% opacity bread PNG. Enough said.

[@shojodraws3399]

I'm more captivated by how quickly the voice acting on the mother shifted, like she just experienced backwards puberty.

[@sinfullyy]

I broke when this black haired dude speedwalked passed them so fast

[@OGQuaranTEEN]

"It's time I taught you how to hold this precious weapon" *Doesn't hold the sword by the hilt, learns nothing*

[@thoroughlucidstream5146]

Cuts own hand off, dies from sepsis in front of rosemary

[@jxxy666]

@@thoroughlucidstream5146 good

[@veryinactiveukmapping]

yeah why is she holding the sword like that, are her hands invincible or something

[@jackb3822]

@@veryinactiveukmapping I’m pretty sure it’s in its sheath

[@coolestdino]

@@thoroughlucidstream5146 **Credits roll**

[@beefykeith48]

somewhat fixed dialogue: "sorry, mom!" "don't worry about it." "but i almost broke your sword!" "it's fine. besides, i'd be more worried about you breaking a bone. but you can't go running around the house with a sword!" "but you do that all the time!" "hm. then perhaps i better teach you how to hold this thing."

[@spheal608]

Dude this is significantly better

[@beefykeith48]

@@spheal608 tyy!! the scene all together is kinda awkward, so it's somewhat hard to write convincing dialogue for it to begin with lol

[@thefoundationagent61]

This does exactly what dialogues like these are supposed to. 1. Establish the relationship between parent and child. 2. Show the temperament of the character in their infancy. 3. Establish the background behind how and why she has this sword. i.e. Source of inspiration. 4. A basic, but believable reason why the MC might be gifted. Simple, but good stuff. It shows you understand people.

[@voidfulunarxecularity8726]

not me having an existential crisis because im already bad at plot writing and the way i write dialogue writing is like the show's way of writing dialogue, so therefore, I HAVE NO DIEA HOW TO IMPROVE MY DIALOGUE WRITING PLEASE HELP

[@beefykeith48]

@@voidfulunarxecularity8726 hey! don't worry :) i guess just maybe think about what YOU would say in that situation? channel empathy lol. edit: even if the character has a different personality to you- channel what an appropriate response would be. i think knowing who your character IS as a person helps you make dialogue unique and interesting while still being realistic.

[@Ararycann]

"I'm much more worried about you smashing yourself" Who tf thought of this

[@shujinkoMK]

I love how she’s alone in the stairs, falls forward and her mom just teleports behind her to grab her

[@justyarn9939]

A much less weird way of saying that is “I almost broke your sword” “I’m more worried about you breaking your face” Smash isn’t really a good choice of wording!

[@VueiyVisarelli]

True, but children often use _technically_ correct terms in places that normal adults _wouldn't._ My guess is they were trying to approximate that, but didn't account for the fact that a loving parent would _also_ correct the way a child speaks so they grow up to sound _normal._ "I almost smashed your sword!" "You can't smash a sword, and it wouldn't be worth much if it broke from just that. I'm much more worried about you hurting yourself." Something like that.

[@Sparkletta]

@@VueiyVisarelli exactly. someone gets it.

[@yasi420]

"Breaking your face" doesn't really sound right either

[@Faux_Sunlight]

@@yasi420 unless she said it in a joking/flippant tone

[@user-tr3jw1df6q]

@@Faux_Sunlight why would the mom be joking about the child busting her head wide open

[@zeo4481]

Zukerberk to his human speech coach: ,, Write that down! Write that down!"

[@iriedo5216]

have the writers never had a genuine conversation with another human being before

[@TheRisky9]

Okay, I'm here to be that meanie again who takes apart the dialogue and tells you why your brain just feels like it wants to turn off. Here is my explanation as to why the dialogue is objectively bad and how you can advoid such problems. For starters, let's ignore all the dangers of catching falling (floating?) sharp objects... And this dialogue has a problem with pacing. It knows where it wants to end up, but it doesn't give itself time to get there. So it short cuts a lot of essential moments that could have enriched the scene. You have no idea how many times I've read or heard bad dialogue and said, "You know that could have been fixed if you added one more piece of dialogue." And that's what this is suffering from. So what does a properly paced scene look like? Probably, more like this: Spice Girl (I don't know their names...): Mommy, mommy look what I could do! ***Spice girl trips*** Mom: What are you doing? I told you not to play with that! Spice Girl: I'm... I... Mom: This isn't a toy. You could have hurt yourself. Spice Girl: I'm sorry... I just wanted to show you something. I-I didn't mean to almost break it. ***Mom sighs.*** Mom: Honey, it's not the sword I'm worried about. It's you. You mean far more than this ever will. ***slight smile*** And I think this is a little my fault. I think maybe its time I show you the right way to do things. How about it? See how mom reacts appropriately, first with worry, then anger and then with realization that she does have a duty to ensure her daughter stays safe with weapons in the house? That's far more relatable than what happened here. Yes, they end up the same place, but one takes it time. Go through this message board. Others on this board took their take on the dialogue and it's amazing what a few extra words and lines do to change the meaning into something of substance! But that's just this scene. I want to switch gears and address the bigger picture of why this scene doesn't work in context to the rest of the show. What does this scene do for the show? Well, in the next scene, she's looking at the sword like she has a respect and a reverence for it. That's good. It means whatever mom taught her really sank in. But then a few other scenes, she's recklessly swinging it around showing that what she learned didn't. Which is it? That's character inconsistency! Either she respects the sword as the only thing she has of her mother or she doesn't. Neither of these are bad approaches, but they have to be consistant. What does this sword represent to this character? If she feels reverence towards it, she needs to show that throughout the show and not be so reckless. If she wants to feel revence towards it, but slips up because of her own human flaw, then she needs to feel remorse and these scenes not be played up for the lol's. If she thinks she feels reverence, but lacks the maturity to show that in her actions, then at some point be forced to own up to that. The lesson here: Pacing. Pacing your dialogue and letting it develop naturally and organtically is really an art. But it's worth doing. The second lesson is to carefully think of objects and props meaning in a wider context. Don't just throw things in there and only has meaning when you feel like it. Consistant characters are of the utmost importance.

[@TheShanicpower]

This is the best comment in the section, why is it so far down

[@user-zc8tk7pl3n]

this is an incredible comment

[@duh367]

Like the people above me said, this is a great comment. It's a shame that it's an underrated one

[@leafyclone1176]

@@TheShanicpower Probably because not a lot of people want to read this long youtube comment.

[@TheShanicpower]

@@leafyclone1176 Yeah, much easier to read copy-pasted 9gag meme templates

[@kurochan1911]

I like how Rosemary doesn't even sound like a child.

[@feliz695]

@@ploonette222 I mean, I still do the same, but with a Spanish accent. (Same spelling, but pronounced "Mami") But she doesn't even sound like a kid, so it's just cringey to hear.

[@ploonette222]

@@feliz695 yeah!

[@Autz64]

Nice avatar

[@alineortolan6110]

@@ploonette222 Cultural differences I think. "Mommy" isn't the informal, "mom" is. The formal is "mother". In portuguese we get Mãe, mamãe and mamãezinha. It looks like the same, but both the formal and common informal is "mãe". Only very very small children (2 years and younger) will use "mamãe", and "mamãezinha" is the stupidly dorky affectionate you only use when you want to fake affection in a jokey/ironic manner (translates roughly to "my little mom").

[@ploonette222]

@@alineortolan6110 oh sorry, I just thought it was weird lol

[@z34n18]

THIS IS HOW I TALK IM SO CONFUSED

[@laylineart]

“I’m more worried about you smashing yourself!” I DOUBLED OVER LAUGHING

[@kingagrabowska9366]

There is so much wrong, alright, let's do this: - Rose is walking down the stairs and like a typical protagonist trips over nothing - From the way she falls and let's go of the sword, it should land flatly on the ground and she on top of it. - The mom catches it in the air as if her daughter have thrown it upwards as she was falling down, which she didn't. - Mum catches her daughter from behind, Rosemary should be hanging from her arm, not in this awkwardly romantic position and blushing. This creator put anime cliches in random places to full you that it's not just a cartoon, but did they seriously put a mother and a daughter in a ''characters falls but is saved at the last moment, blushes and falls in love/develops a crush''. With their high difference, the mum character should be doing splits right now. - How old is supposed to be Rosemary in this scene, how come this conversation never come up before ? - What a great mother and a guardian ! You never talked about sword safety with your daughter or just put it somewhere safe so she can't get it. I assume when Rosemary was running screaming ''look'' with a sword in her hands, she probably tried to show of some new trick she pulled of. That's what children do. It's the equivalent of a police officer, living a gun for his/her kids to play with. - The idea of a sword being so fragile is so stupid. It's supposed to be a weapon, not some useless accessories for celebrations. There could have been a plot point that the sword is practically indestructible, but there is one or two things that it can't cut or there is a way to erode it with time if not taken care of. If it was some magic wand, staff or gem that is powerful but can be easily destroyed, that would've made sense. I come up with a better idea for a plot in a minute then a room full of ''writers'' in who knows how long, but probably more then that.

[@NeonAnt]

Head canon - Mom was doing a split. XD

[@Sparkletta]

I love this comment

[@meganmeowcat]

I’ve never seen this show or know anything about it and I did not think that was her mother who caught her… because of the gross way they portrayed it lol the romantic arm catch and blushing. I was like is this her new crush and than it’s her mom lmao like what? Why, did they make it like that..

[@MashaMallowplaylists]

@@meganmeowcat Same. I had no idea this show existed till now and thought the girl fell in love with a stranger who saved her lol

[@geekygamergirl7259]

I have literally never seen this show and when Rosemary's mom caught her I actually thought it was a pretty boy she was going to develop a crush on until she announced it was her mom. Very bad idea!

[@pandepipas7854]

"I almost smash your sword" "The sword is going to be alright, you are the one I'm worried about sweetie" You could "fix" the most notable dialogue's "errors" just by making a little effort on how word your phrases it man.

[@GlimpsofDay]

Please don't try fixing their shitty show. It's funnier this way

[@hobomike6935]

"You could "fix" the dialogue" no, you couldn't. this show is beyond saving.

[@anonymousapproximation8549]

@@hobomike6935 You can fixed the dialog, but you can't fix the show.

[@KawaiiBabyTragon]

It would still be "smashed". I'm guessing English isn't your first language, because you made it a little worse lol.

[@issovaidaumtrabaaaaaalho8987]

@@KawaiiBabyTragon No, i don't think they did. They typed smash instead of smashed, it happens, but the rest of the sentence does look better.

[@omegavolta]

Gotta give props to the writing team for having early access to ChatGPT as early as 2018

[@kkelseym]

This has the same feeling as one of those voice dub crack videos. Like it feels unnatural enough that my brain just refuses to believe this is the show’s dialogue.

[@azul1457]

The part at the end with the professor guy fastwalking to the front in complete silence is funnier than any of the actual jokes in the show

[@azul1457]

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[@heropath34.vaselisc.35]

Hey you are heard about of.......,............... Transition potions? 0o0

[@mehrsami9026]

PFFFFFTTT

[@peach6648]

i’m less worried about the dialogue here and more worried about the dude at the end walking at the speed of light relative to everyone else in the frame

[@Whysp]

almost seems like they don't want him to be seen

[@seasoaper]

Looks like Walmart Yuno ngl

[@HenryAnzzplayer]

@@seasoaper BRUH, I HATE THE RESEMBLANCE NOW!

[@gateway2hell]

maybe he’s walking normally and those girls are slow walkers

[@cupio-stardust]

@@seasoaper never thought I’d ever see a black clover reference.

[@yoshie4242]

This is mobile-game-ad level dialog and quality.

[@whatteamwildcats4033]

Tf was she even going to show her mom? Her own damn weapon?

[@josephjoestar4413]

I love how the "instructor"? at the end was just sliding and walking instead of just walking. 10/10 animation

[@NathanielStorm]

No kidding

[@orbitboy937]

She's the mc's mom

[@ShadowSorel]

that's the best part

[@FortunAdlaich]

He was wearing heelies

[@johnnickfanaccount3492]

No she's like a groomer in the show or something

[@nightmareplays6203]

This sword is really magic! It changes it's size every second I'm glad that the animators had everything planned

[@MothMedusa]

and it can teleport and fly

[@Avatarbee]

And it can apparently fly. A child drops it and yet an adult needs to reach over their head to grab it.

[@AnShiraishi_]

@@Avatarbee Literally😭- Like the pink kid dropped it downwards but the mom literally caught it in the air 😭😭😰😰

[@un_known5895]

it has more detail than anything else shown on the screen

[@rboots121]

No no, you've got it all wrong. The mother is a giant.

[@theunnaturaldisasters8992]

"im much more worried about you smashing yourself." that just sounds so wrong in many different ways lmao

[@DefeatedMelon]

"Who taught you how to hold this sword?" "You did" "Let me teqch you again!" Bru

[@sno4426]

Everyone else is here talking about the writing while I'm here baffled at the first five seconds where the sword goes from falling out from in front of the character to somehow both above and behind her to be caught by a person moving diagonally in from behind, presumably through the railing and/or stairs. And then the characters are teleported into different positions. The mother stands protag up so that protag is now facing away from the stairs when she was facing that way before the cut. They haven't even started talking and I'm losing my mind.

[@lisalegato0109]

They need a continuity supervisor

[@ohyeahchannel439]

I even thought there was another person in that room

[@AverageWagie]

Nobody told the animators that spatial reasoning is an essential skill in their field.

[@lavenderplace8591]

I kept replaying this clip over and over again to see how that works.

[@bloblovlalalulu3422]

I thought there were 2 people but nah, they teleport I guess

[@one2ahhh614]

I will edit this in a way like that girl that died because of umbrella kun. This will be funny. And it's finished

[@electric_cat_101]

Sheeeeeesh 😭

[@TheKeksadler]

thank you for your hard work

[@kyubbikcat2281]

Literally the first thought I had when I saw this the first time. My neck still hurts just thinking about it after all these years…

[@sixkicksfightertricks949]

???

[@jasendrileck2322]

@@sixkicksfightertricks949 The anime “Another”. It’s definitely worth a watch. Can’t get into the plot too deep without spoilers, but it’s a thriller if you’re into the genre

[@HEraMp-mq3eb]

Gotta love the SFX team, they really made that "dangerous" sword sound like a cheap plastic toy

[@umbrella_party5549]

I re-made the dialogue, sorry if it sounds unnatural still haha "Mom, quickly come, lookie!" (Trips) "AH!" "Mom! Mom! I'm so sorry, I didn't mean to!" "Shh, Rosemary. Its fine, no worries." "I could have broken your sword though, isn't it basically a relic?" (Chuckles) "It had the scabbard on, calm down. Besides, I'd be more concerned if you broke a bone." "Still, don't run around with weapons! You could seriously hurt yourself, dear." "Is that not what you do pretty much everyday?" "Hmph, I suppose you're right." "Well then, I probably should teach you how to hold this old thing."

[@sweetlydrc2052]

“Smashing yourself.” Doesn’t hit the ear right with a mom and daughter dynamic here 🤣🤣🤣

[@ashtheintroverted7204]

Yeah I was like there wasn’t ANY other phrase or word they could use 💀

[@hobomike6935]

"Oh yeah. it's all coming together." -Kronk 2001

[@Sparkletta]

@@hobomike6935 kronk is a legend, ngl

[@roboraptor9270]

Not a very good sword if it smashes when you drop it

[@dumbnamemala]

(the plot for an episode)

[@jackb3822]

Guess it just a wall hanger lol

[@TestAcct46]

maybe its a glass sword or something

[@roboraptor9270]

@@TestAcct46 well then it’s a REALLY bad sword

[@arumaka3662]

And aperently its enchanted somehow

[@nikolasderosa]

When your dialogue makes the Star Wars prequels sound like Shakespeare

[@Rosewater2]

wait, lemme try fixing this real quick- "Mom! Look! Look, look, loo-!" *falls* *GASP* "Mom, I'm so sorry! I didn't mean to-" "Oh hush, sweetheart. Don't worry, it's alright." "I almost dropped your sword though..." *chuckle* "A sword like this won't break if you just drop it." ":(" "Now who taught you to run around the house with a sword like that?" "Well, /you./" *chuckle* "Hah! You're probably right! Maybe it's time I teach you how to hold this correctly then."

[@cheese.6412]

Absolutely died at the dude walking past like he was on a tredmill

[@aoto8897]

*Dudette

[@Lego_Spidey120]

​@@aoto8897*dude

[@76o90]

@@Lego_Spidey120 That guy’s actually trans

[@APRILartz]

@@76o90his whole personality trait

[@thepinkelephant2520]

Bro fr he’s GLIDING

[@jakeroku6494]

Uhh… let’s consider that ONE LINE… “I’m more concerned about you smashing yourself.”

[@Player-jh4ko]

NNN

[@nyarlathotep9622]

Let that sink in

[@ArtseyHayton06]

@@nyarlathotep9622 playing with yourself..

[@nyarlathotep9622]

@@ArtseyHayton06 TwT

[@MasterLee2011]

@@nyarlathotep9622 Or let that slick in.

[@klimp856]

why does mom lowkey seem like a predator 😭

[@tea.crystal727]

the mic they use makes them sounds like a video game cutscene from 2001

[@kellikantaloupe9467]

HOW DID THE TEACHER JUST QUICKLY ZOOM INTO THE PANEL GDKHFOYD

[@GlassesnMouthplates]

Side effects of the "trans" potion.

[@mqfii8992]

The dude legit walks faster than most anime people run.

[@Gabrielbarsch]

why is rose looks like a female version of shiro from voltron?

[@reygenne1]

still better grammar than "smashing yourself" from the video lol

[@laurenbonner2393]

Because this show is about as original as one of those shameless Scooby Doo rip offs from the 70s?

[@SeeUMusicKat]

My brain said Adora first, but no, you're right. It's Shiro.

[@person-pl5ie]

She looks like final season shiro

[@WettSokks]

Lol, so that is why I recognized her😆

[@dynamodigitaldesign8293]

I love how rather than the dialogue giving us info on their relationship it just raises more questions.

[@grimshock6983]

I thought someone was fan dubbing in this clip. Which is impossible, because it has no fans

[@calowenby1654]

That delivery of, “Sweetheart,” sounded so exasperated and pained. Also, I love how much silence there is after the clip ends.

[@Cocoterpi]

I just love that guy who's just running with a book on it's hand

[@sai_darkbu11et61]

more like a jpeg of a guy sliding in existence

[@Cocoterpi]

@@sai_darkbu11et61 more like dream speedrunning

[@soleil7259]

@@Cocoterpi You can run in your dreams ? For me it's the complete opposite. 😂

[@hobomike6935]

He unlocked the exploit secret that lets you increase your move speed without actually running, which drains your stamina over time.

[@aoto8897]

I think you mean she. It’s trans character.

[@jv12376h]

Everyone complaining about the dialogue meanwhile the only thing I’m able to focus on is the absolutely GRATING quality of the audio it actually hurts my brain

[@bodhi1762]

This is such peak writing, a single tear rolled down my cheek as this scene played out.

[@silvermushroom-gamifyevery6430]

It’s like the editor just cut out a minute of dialogue, then said “screw it” and moved on.

[@GlassesnMouthplates]

The editor saw the infamous flower shop scene from The Room and thought, "I can top that!"

[@333Rich33]

@@GlassesnMouthplates they weren’t even bad enough to top that.

[@dallasdull5808]

THE PROFESSOR SPEEDWALKING LMFAO

[@korova.mp3321]

the way that “mo-“ literally cuts off before she falls

[@Aerial_Arsenal_Ship]

Virgin "Professor" Caraway speedwalking vs Chad Dr. Livesey stroll

[@ArtseyHayton06]

I'm sorry I-I almost broke your sword!" "It's alright sweetie, I should've been more responsible in teaching you how to wield it." her mother chuckled nervously as she's relieved that her daughter is alright including the sword but mentally scolds herself for not being responsible enough. "Then I might grab another one because this sword is fragile." "Fragile?" Rosemary asked her mother. (Y'all can add the rest. Subtract if you want.)

[@D.Ark-0]

Very well written 👏

[@hornetsilksong]

when fanfic writers write better than the original creators did lmao

[@Lilac_Lilith]

“Yes.” Her mother replied. She casted her gaze down to the sheath, and gently grazed her fingers over the worn embellishments and engravings. “This one has seen many battles over the years. It was very handy back then, but after so much use it’s become quite fragile.” She lifted her head to once again lock eyes with her daughter. With a gentle grace, she moved the sword out of the way, and reached out to ruffle Rosemary’s hair. “We can go and pick up a new one for you. You can even choose what you want engraved and decorated on it-“ A light danced in her daughter’s eyes as she spoke, so she continued, this time a little more stern. “-but that means you better think carefully! We can’t have you burn through everything we have on a dysfunctional sword, now can we?” She grinned, only slightly joking.

[@seventeenseventythirteen7465]

Please stop trying so hard, this show doesn't deserve the effort. You could have just let a cat walk across the keyboard and you'd get equal to or better than the writing in this show.

[@QueenSydon]

"Yes...fragile, brittle...just like YOUR CHIN!" She rips a sudden haymaker from the hip but Rosemary slips the punch before curling her body inwards and sending her own missile of a hit straight into her mothers solar plexus. The impact of crunching bone seems to rip the air of the room as well as her lungs, and for an ice-cold moment of nothingness the follow through catches up with reality and rockets her entire form spinning through the air and blasting through the side of the house. Rosemary is hovering ominously a few feet above the stairs, empty eyes rolling over to the most grim of blacks, an aura of rippling unlife rotting every surface in her presence, decaying everything. The plagues of Father Nurgle had manifested in her at last...

[@dednetnait8008]

"Do you believe in gravity?" Sword : Hell No *Fly*

[@raptorensueur8997]

Is that a JoJo reference ?

[@rcarfang2]

its fantasy. Swords kinda do that in fantasy.

[@Quacktivate]

sword : You just gotta ignite the light And let it shine Just own the night Like the Fourth of July 'Cause baby, you're a firework Come on show 'em what you're worth Make 'em go, "Aah, aah, aah" As you shoot across the sky Baby, you're a firework Come on, let your colors burst Make 'em go, "Aah, aah, aah" You're gonna leave them all in awe, awe, awe

[@jonasl9068]

@@rcarfang2 fly upwards when a child falls?

[@MinorLife10]

This is how this dialogue feels: _"Mother, forgive me for the irrefutable damage of your weapon I almost commited" "What cconcerns me nore, my child, is you receiving irrefutable damage from yourself"_

[@tyrantking9000]

"I was worried about you going around smashing yourself." *R34 artists in the corner* "Wright that down, wright that down!"

[@SonarTheBat]

Is her sword made out of porcelain? Why is it so easy to break?

[@kingagrabowska9366]

The idea of a sword being so fragile is so stupid. It's supposed to be a weapon, not some useless accessories for celebrations. There could have been a plot point that the sword is practically indestructible, but there is one or two things that it can't cut or there is a way to erode it with time if not taken care of. If it was some magic wand, staff or gem that is powerful but can be easily destroyed, that would've made sense. I come up with a better idea for a plot in a minute then a room full of ''writers'' in who knows how long, but probably more then that.

[@MaverickChristian]

_Why is it so easy to break?_ Because otherwise the mom's line wouldn't make any sense.

[@IcyBune]

"i'm much more worried about you smashing yourself" Let's don't take that out of context

[@enkelegy]

SELFCEST BAYBEEEE

[@mee091000]

Let's don't huh

[@IcyBune]

she almost smashed the sword too smh

[@BeyondDrawings]

This just made me so much more confident in my dialogue writing skills.

[@tomboysupremacist]

guy at the end looks like he's on one of those treadmill things at the airport

[@neoslayerpw8230]

She sounds like an "Ara Ara" mommy and then turns to hyper soccer mom in a matter of seconds.

[@Ceeeeee451]

Oh my god