The Emo Common App Essay That Got Me Into the Ivy League (Yale and Princeton)

How do you write a gripping, emotional tale without making it sound like a sob story? Well... it's kind of tricky. My advice is to think of yourself as the protagonist in a fiction novel. Demonstrate growth. Make the story real and authentic. Add layers, use subthemes. I know it sounds complicated but hopefully, after watching this video, you'll realize it's not as difficult as it really seems!
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[@elevatedschool]

Hi everyone! In the two years since we started this channel, we've helped more than 70+ students get into every single Ivy League School, Stanford, MIT and more! If you're interested in working with us, please visit our website: www.elevated.school/getstarted. And if you'd like your essay edited by a member of our team, visit www.elevated.school/editmyessay . Also, please note that we do take on exceptional low-income students every year, so if you identify as part of that group and would like a scholarship, let us know! I hope you found this video helpful and are having a wonderful day 😇

[@Betternotbitter1]

You are amazing

[@hydraelectricblue]

I don’t think the people in the comments are fully grasping. He got into all those schools because his writing sounds like a budding Capote. This is some of the highest quality writing I’ve ever heard. I went to a private school as well and was exposed to all the classics in elementary. In high school, we were writing ten page Shakespeare papers. I’ve been exposed to a pretty wide variety of high quality literature. This essay felt like an old friend from childhood. It felt like the first time I sat in a classroom as a child on a chilly November morning reading Little Women. I can imagine many of the schools reading this essay had this same nostalgic feeling conjured up inside of them. I understand now that these colleges aren’t looking for people who are simply seeking the honor of attending an Ivy League. They are looking for people who will bring honor to their school. Whichever Ivy League you chose is lucky to have you, Mr.Zhensei.

[@elevatedschool]

Wow, thank you so much for this beautiful comment and high praise!

[@izzys9386]

bro ur so underrated. That intro was everything lmaoo

[@elevatedschool]

hahaha I try! (only took me six takes)

[@abhiroopreddy8673]

@@elevatedschool lessgoo kevin world domination!!

[@a.j.20]

I watched the intro because of your comment. I'm so glad I did 😂

[@byshaira3080]

The last line of the essay was everything. Everything. Everything. Everything. Claps👏

[@elevatedschool]

Thank you shaira! 🥰

[@neilkumar2863]

I absolutely loved this. I’m not usually the emotional type, but this essay had me teary-eyed. Thank you Kevin for being such a kind and genuine person!!!!

[@elevatedschool]

you're welcome Neil :)) Good to see you around these parts again!

[@damnlax]

It's literally rubbish if people say this ain't worth it or things. when i listened to this I was like awww and i could easily cry. The lil Kevin would have gone through so much just to shine the brightest!!

[@kobinwakor3581]

This is an incredible essay. It felt like I was in a movie.

[@elevatedschool]

Hi everyone! Just wanted to say a humongous thank-you for your continued support! Even though my channel is the size of a *ribosome,* I want to share everything I wish I had known at the start of high school + the college application process. Let me know what other videos you want me to make so I can continue being useful to you all!! And of course, don't forget to like and subscribe if you found this video helpful 😇

[@nayyy2]

Heyyy, I really liked your video! You have a new subscriber here. A video about financial aid or extracurricular activities would be great. I hope you hit 250 subs and more!

[@elevatedschool]

@@nayyy2 OMG you made my day! Thanks so much!! Yes, I can defs talk about financial aid :)))

[@nayyy2]

@@elevatedschool Yay! You made my day with the reply. :) I will wait for the financial aid video (or any video really) with enthusiasm, and maybe I will bother you in a zoom meeting if it's okay hahaha

[@elevatedschool]

@@nayyy2 yes please do! I don't bite! :D

[@nayyy2]

@@elevatedschoolWell, see you later:D

[@ankuryogi3298]

With this essay, I doubt anyone would reject it.

[@thanhdinh2971]

this is really different from all the other essay, from both the story pace and the end ( which doesn't conclude in a heartfelt lesson but a slow realization in the reader) I really enjoy it and thank you for what i have learn from you today.

[@ryanli3265]

Wow, I am amazed by your simple and butter smooth writing that really worked well in conveying your story. I am also a first-gen student, whose parents also worked strenuously long hours in restaurants (except none of them cooked fried rice haha) due to their limited education. This video really helped me think back to potential personal elements that I can sprinkle into my statement - It is nowhere as personalized as yours, but I think it will get me far this year for my last year of high school. Thx!

[@saadben2930]

You finished the essay when I was starting to get hungry, but it was amazing

[@elevatedschool]

thank you! hahaha

[@rayananjiba7071]

The essay is not only beautiful but I loved how beautifully you read the essay. You are a great storyteller

[@soygolpista]

That was incredible man

[@invisibledonut7009]

You're an excellent writer and an engaging speaker. I couldn't help but smile when you finished reading your essay!

[@0xNightxade]

The writing of this essay was amazing; I really think that the variation in the flow and sentence structure was extremely well-chosen and effective!

[@jacob-gc8ts]

Cheers Kevin - thank you so much for the inspiration! I absolutely loved the skilful weaving of your qualities in such a gripping story! :)

[@Caroline-mu3qf]

This hit close to home and I think I know how to write my own emo essay without it being so depressing. I remember i went to work with my dad and had similar thoughts, except he never said I love you which made me cry more

[@kaimemes]

That insight about the link between the length of sentences and the mood is really useful!

[@alejandroquinterocashore4603]

The use of dialogue throughout the narrative really helps bring the story to life, and complements the descriptions really well! To hear you read the essay yourself makes it so much more real and impactful.

[@joannaisasleep]

wow the show instead of tell parts of the writing are amazing, descriptive but not too abstract, thanks for the tips!

[@gantumantu503]

i'm so glad i found this it gives me general idea for common app essay i have less than a month left with me luck. I hope everybody reading this goodluck on the essays.

[@sarthak1448]

Wow, Kevin that was such an amazing essay. Here is what I learned that I can make my essay more Personal so that I would be unique as you share your personal story about working in your parents' Chinese restaurant during the summer, creating an authentic and relatable narrative. I also learned that the essay should utilize powerful writing techniques, such as showing rather than telling, with vivid descriptions, sentence structure manipulation, and unique details, contributing to the creation of a forlorn atmosphere.

[@adrianadepaz3374]

Thank you for posting this Kevin!

[@elevatedschool]

you're so welcome Adriana!!

[@vincentlin5754]

Wow! I never thought someone would experience something so similar to me. Thank you for this.

[@elevatedschool]

You’re so welcome Vincent!

[@JoeChok]

Damn, that was a great essay! Thank you for this video!

[@elevatedschool]

glad you enjoyed it Joe!

[@martinnavarro4757]

So many good advices, Thank you so much!

[@elevatedschool]

You are so welcome!

[@erpollock]

Interesting how you were totally aware of technique - short sentences that show, not tell, ending with a long sentence that sums up your feelings but without sentiment. When I write, I am totally spontaneous within what I know is effective style and impact on the reader. I am experienced as a writer, so I know what works for me. It's like putting on makeup, which I've done since I was 13 or 14. At first I had to think about it. By now it's totally automatic. So for your audience of first gen students toiling in grape fields in California - I see you have to show your technique so they can apply it themselves. You bring out the elements of an effective essay. I have no idea what I wrote for college - I think they'd have taken anybody, as I saw when I attended that waste of time college. But when I was interviewed by two professors for grad school at a high quality university, I was careful to include essential facts. I mentioned I was accepted by Columbia but couldn't go due to finances. I said I hadn't had the intellectual experience in college that I needed. I emphasized I wanted to study Political Science in their department. I mentioned I could live at home so it was financially feasible. Most important, I emphasized my love of learning which had not been fulfilled in college. I indicated without saying that I was intellectual, a serious student. I think if you mention these factors, you don't have to worry about your writing style. You are the student they need - serious and focused and accepted by the Ivy League - and I had rejected the Ivy League!

[@a.j.20]

Hi, Kevin! I just watched some of your videos and you are an amazing person. I look forward to learning a lot from you!

[@elevatedschool]

Wow! Thanks for your kind comment AJ: :))

[@sammichaels3463]

Great stuff Kevin! Love the new content

[@elevatedschool]

Thank you Sam!!

[@MeOfcourse12]

Guy! You are a Legend!!! Your essay is heavenly

[@elevatedschool]

Thanks Miracle!!

[@patmoh4204]

Wish you greater success in your future, Kevin Zhensei. Jia you & be encouraged.

[@elevatedschool]

thank you Pat Moh!

[@hiyundai6768]

I don’t normally comment, but your video really spoke to me. As an Asian American whose parents own a Chinese restaurant, your essay brings so many memories - from the clanging of the wok, the yelling as orders are passed along, to making sure I don’t walk on the wet, mopped ground at the end of the day. Since I was young, I’ve wanted to pursue my dream with the foundation my parents laid for me. They would tell me to work hard so I wouldn’t end up like them. Currently, as a prospecting junior, I hope to maybe make it to Mit or the latter. Obviously, I haven’t started writing my applications yet, but I’m scared that I’ll let not only myself down, but my parents too. I’m so, so thankful for this video, as all the other ones I’ve watched felt so superficial and distant. If you could, can you offer some advice for me?

[@ashleylourenco9439]

so unique! loved this

[@elevatedschool]

Thank you!!

[@juliaxia5262]

Nicely written! Yes it does feel like a movie scene. Is your essay different for each applied school?

[@elevatedschool]

Nope! This essay was my common app essay, which I used to apply to all ten schools on my list.

[@youtubeuser1946]

@@elevatedschool which schools did you apply to? How many did you get into?

[@austinlai9670]

Awesome tips!!

[@pumpkinnutmeg279]

I listen to a ton of college app essays for an idea of what these top schools are looking for, and only two have ever moved me. This is one of them. I am continuously amazed at your ability to build such a poignant story in a mere 650 words. Everything I want to compliment you on is mentioned in your own analysis, so it seems more realistic to compliment your awareness and skill which were purposefully applied instead of specific aspects of the story. (However, even though you mentioned it briefly, I still want to mention it here: I’m particularly amazed by your ability to evoke an emotional reaction in your readers without relying on a sob story.) Fantastic work. I can only hope to write one half as good as this for my applications.

[@lamp2208]

what was the other one?

[@anthonyb7472]

This is the most helpful video on college essays I have found! Thank you, I was wondering if you have any tips for finding topics to write about. I don't know if I have any stories that can hit with the same amount of emotion that yours does, but I feel like it would help my essay immensely.

[@pastelcardigan]

I'm crying. I genuinely hope you try your hand at writing.

[@elevatedschool]

Thank you!! I'm currently working on a fantasy book :) This comment is great motivation!

[@randomperson-de1rs]

Basically this dude write like J.D. Salinger. He uses the stream of consciousness technique and syntax.

[@XinFloridaLife]

It's actually a really good story. It's not just because it is emo you got in. I loved it! I don't even know why I am watching this video because I graduated college almost 20 years ago lol. The rare hug was a surprise but it's so awesome.

[@elevatedschool]

Wow, thank you for the compliment Xin!

[@orlehmann-6177]

Hi Kevin!! I'm an international student and I've been struggling to put together my Common App essay, but your videos are SO helpful!. This particular video really helped me understand the problem I had with the eureka problem and the problem-solution ratio. Your advice on how to end the essay was really helpful as well and I will definitely implant it in my essay. I would love to hear your input and take on my essay! I'm pretty proud of how it turned out but given the fact I have no one to help me with my application (it's not very common to apply to US universities where I live), it would be extremely helpful if you could take a look at my essay

[@arnava.9405]

The music perfectly complements the essay. Thanks for the essay.

[@elevatedschool]

You're very welcome!

[@arnava.9405]

@@elevatedschool thanks, do you know the song name?

[@sabeennawaz5830]

I'm amazed by the beauty of this essay. Thank you so much for sharing this. Love watching your videos! I'm going to share this with my friends. (Sabeen)

[@elevatedschool]

Thanks for your compliment Sabeen!!

[@dazc]

Thank you for inspiring me.

[@itschristinamoon]

I somehow came across this video. I am a first gen, non-traditional student from an immigrant fam who withdrew from college due to the stress of fear of going into debt, working, and depression. I returned when I was in my late 20s and I just transferred to a university that has one of the lowest acceptance rates in my state. As a still broke student, being finally accepted to a university, and with life experience, I am now dreaming of going to a top school (even Ivy League) for my grad degree. This video means a lot to us who don't have luxurious access to genius tutors even if we are brilliant, hardworking, or talented students ourselves. Thank you for what you do!

[@elevatedschool]

Hi friends!! For the next month (until 11/1/23), we’ll be selecting 1 of the commenters on THIS video for a FREE essay review! To qualify, all you have to do is like and reply to this comment with something you learned from this video :) FYI normally, we charge $225 for a professional common app review with feedback from two of our ElevatEd consultants!

[@ivanpaiewonsky]

I learned that being unique is not about having a crazily creative topic, but about telling our stories in the way they impacted us (maybe with a lil drama ngl), thank you so much!

[@verdaaydin2143]

I learnt a lot in this video and watched it a few times to digest every point you touched on. The most important thing (besides the technique and importance of storytelling) for me as someone from a low income background with no one undergoing the same experience was there's still hope. You showing not telling was so impactful too.

[@Clararx4mm]

I saw an amazing example of show, don’t tell. I didn’t realize that level of detail was even possible. Thanks for sharing!

[@badralbeity4645]

The amount of specific details in your essay is crazy!! It comes to show what you always preach - how important specificity is to our common app essays. I also really like the idea of using the element of surprise, especially when crafting our conclusions. I honestly can't wait to see elevated reach 100k subs. It's gonna happen soon!

[@nancyzhang5410]

i learned that i should include way More detail to make it more engaging and imagery packed

[@weeson]

this was amazing

[@JadeJewels]

Thank you for this advice-👍🏼 I guess my issue won't be that serious once I get it finished but i kept stressing on every topic/situation I could write about.. feeling like the message would always come off as negative. But it's alright, I'm just avoiding it.. as long as I stop being a Debby Downer ofc! 😅

[@elevatedschool]

You got this Jade!

[@ceejay1684]

very helpful. thank you

[@JD-dh2cu]

Wow! Kevin, you are an inspiration...Was this the same essay you did for Questbridge? I've been looking at a few of your videos and they are so helpful. I really like the conversations with your former Exeter friends and how they are finding their ways thru life.

[@elevatedschool]

Thanks for the kind comment JD! It was the same essay for QB, yes. Also, I can't believe you've been watching my old interviews with classmates haha

[@annaheloise9838]

This is my first common on KZbin. I HAVE to say that this essay is really touching. Besides, thank you so much for putting the text on the screen. btw what's the background music?

[@ruthkudadji6795]

Thanks Zhen.Thanks.

[@IceCream-ey2kg]

i was scared watching this (i was afraid i’ll be discouraged from long complicated beautiful sentences and themes) but honestly this gave me a lot of hope. i plan on using a “movie” narrative style of writing for my last few longer supplements for yale and northwestern. and yeah i know i procrastinated 😂

[@i123456987654]

thanks for sharing your story

[@andrewchen861]

Thank you so much!

[@sonychka]

yo, this made me cry.

[@babington4394]

love this guy

[@iliveanincognitolife372]

also, love for the doggie in the video..he's soo cute

[@streamawake2871]

My king deserves everything❤️

[@elevatedschool]

thanks fam

[@streamawake2871]

@@elevatedschool anytime

[@abhiroopreddy8673]

Kevin world domination!!

[@alexandros815]

Criminally underrated

[@elevatedschool]

😭

[@yiyunyyyy]

omg i cried listening to this

[@craigcoughlin1834]

Amazing.

[@y2kona]

woah nice intro!

[@clashwithbidhant4853]

You are the best man! I truly appreciate your altruistic effort to help low-income students which I believe that many other youtuber overshadows. Cheers!!

[@elevatedschool]

Thanks so much Clash!!

[@peacearobieke]

What are the 5 categories for grading CA essays? U mentioned show and tell was one

[@gvbe_9718]

NGL I was thinking about writing an emotional essay, but i realized I have had the most boring life. No struggles, nothing exciting just average.

[@nirajgupta7386]

I learned that the writing quality should be good, show don't tell technique. essay should be so specific that it should be related to student only. The most important thing is writing about what you bring to college. Also adding sub themes to main theme is a good idea.

[@bublegurl3324]

Your dog is so cute🥺

[@elevatedschool]

awww thanks!

[@amyhurst6177]

Man, your dog is tiiiirrrred.

[@hannahchu8394]

That b boying (i think) in the beginning was sooo cool

[@elevatedschool]

Thanks Hannah! Yea, that's what it was haha (flare to chair freeze)

[@realazim]

Can you make a video about your rewritten college essay with the part of “what you bring to the college”

[@cristoferarellano1909]

Me finally finding how to write an emotional essay that explains my life

[@elevatedschool]

hahahaha

[@cristoferarellano1909]

@@elevatedschool Hey Kevin! Are you still offering essay edits/feedback for low-income students. I can pay if that's necessary

[@elevatedschool]

@@cristoferarellano1909 I am! send me an email at [e-mail]

[@elevatedschool]

🎓 How to get into an Ivy-League College 2021 [playlist]: bit.ly/ivyzhensei ✏️ My Common App Essay: kzbin.info/www/bejne/maaUfH2fgaeUg68 ✍️ My Yale Supp Essays: kzbin.info/www/bejne/pKjHk4WoiLitg80 😱 My Yale Admissions File: kzbin.info/www/bejne/kKDRpompprWir5o 🙋 Interviewing Friends in College: bit.ly/collegewinterviews 🙏 SUBSCRIBE to my Microscopic channel so I can teach you everything about college, life and college life pls: bit.ly/kevinzhenytsub 😩 Buy me a coffee lmao: ko-fi.com/kingkev98 If you feel overwhelmed during the college apps process, check out go to collegeadvisor.com/kevin-zhensei to get a FREE Ivy League Strategy Session! This a great resource for helping you strategize your narrative, craft your essays, and boost your extracurriculars! 100% free people!!

[@elevatedschool]

Also a link to my common app essay: kevinzhensei.medium.com/the-emotional-common-app-essay-that-got-me-into-the-ivy-league-ad81334ac861

[@emnamajdoub8090]

you are a role model

[@elevatedschool]

Thanks Emna :3

[@AhanaAMajeed]

Wow Woww Wowww! This is gold

[@ngwuemeka1838]

Ok, so when I watched this essay the very first time, I skipped the intro which I believe is really underrated 😅

[@destinyofforji6318]

Dang you almost made me cry 😭😂

[@elevatedschool]

😭😭

[@user-zx7cr8qp2t]

Hi Kevin. I have watched too many of your videos now and I'm supposed to be working on my prospectus. I was wondering though do you have any insights on getting into an Ivy for a doctoral degree. . . as someone who's working on their masters considering if I could ever go back for my Ph.D or doctoral degree but am not sure I could swing it (even going for my masters and BS was a huge leap of faith as a lower income mom to two boys and as someone who's been poor my whole life) I dream about it but dont know if it's even possible. I am already in student debt and will be working for the state to pay it off anyways so I figured there's no harm in dreaming and doing a little research.

[@aminahanjum3592]

the dog in the corner thooo

[@abhiroopreddy1948]

Egg fried rice!!! Uncle roger!!!

[@elevatedschool]

OG roger!!

[@julianalim4777]

That is an amazing essay! Just wondering how long did it take you to finish your essay?

[@elevatedschool]

Thanks Juliana! It took me around 15-20 hours I think

[@vhpersonal3385]

i relate to a lot of this but instead with a nail shop

[@elevatedschool]

word

[@geoffreyreeves7213]

I love this brother go get it

[@elevatedschool]

Thank you brother 😎

[@seki4707]

I saw your tiktok!

[@audreynaadubanie9802]

Great insight. I finally what i was missing in my essay. Is the offer still up or 20 minute consultation?

[@elevatedschool]

Sorry! I don't do free 20 minute consultations anymore. But if you're interested in getting feedback, please email me at [e-mail]

[@audreynaadubanie9802]

@@elevatedschool Awesome. I will. Thanks

[@phlinhng3375]

Hi, you mentioned that you have not answered the question of how u gonna contribute to the uni community? I wonder if u could rewrite ur essay, how would you answer that? Cause I feel like this is a really personal essay, it's hard to add that element. Thank you!

[@elevatedschool]

I actually think this essay does answer that question, but in a bit of a roundabout way. Through my narrative, I indirectly show my selflessness, empathy, authenticity and work ethic - those are the traits I'd bring to a uni community. Hope that makes sense!

[@anastasiaanautodidact9856]

subscribed .

[@ambercoulter4522]

Do you still help people write essays for Yale?

[@fevenzeray8264]

Is there a problem tha cause to me if I use ur essay for my common aop

[@benjaminli7861]

Since you were a QuestBridge finalist, why didn’t you apply to colleges through QuestBridge app instead of Common app? Did Common app give you more advantage?

[@elevatedschool]

I did apply through Questbridge app but wasn't matched

[@czarindelacruz5288]

So is this your common app essay or questbridge essay? (I know the word count is slightly different)

[@elevatedschool]

@@czarindelacruz5288 my common app essay

[@czarindelacruz5288]

@@elevatedschool did you apply both using common app and questbridge app to all your schools?

[@elevatedschool]

@@czarindelacruz5288 no, just QB app to Princeton only

[@sofiamusgrove5630]

Thank you for making this video, it was very insightful! Is there any way you could review my common app essay?

[@elevatedschool]

Sorry, but unfortunately I'm booked until mid-January :////

[@sofiamusgrove5630]

@@elevatedschool it’s ok thank you so much though!

[@abdullahtariq5521]

which prompt did u select

[@Yash-Pratap]

The Dog is me.

[@ryankim7338]

You’re probably not going to see this, but why didn’t you indent your paragraphs?

[@heider9779]

I have never seen a dog as unbothered as yours haha. Anyways, your essay is soooo good

[@elevatedschool]

Hahahahah thanks man!

[@Laxmi.Narayana.]

What was your extracurricular and your stats by the way

[@elevatedschool]

I think they're in one of my other videos, the one about revealing my admissions file!

[@hannayu2395]

hi kevin quick and random question are you still attending yale or have you graduated already?

[@elevatedschool]

I graduated! I'm class of 2020

[@hannayu2395]

@@elevatedschool ooh nice! go check out your Instagram = )

[@bluegreenblur6276]

Tell your dog i love him/her

[@elevatedschool]

Unfortunately Cooper passed during the pandemic, but of course I still think about him. I'll pass on what you said spiritually

[@PeterHuson]

Dude. I love this. Great essay, what is Yale gonna do when they get hella essays like this from your subscribers 😍🧐 #botherkevin20

[@elevatedschool]

lmfao Peter when did you infiltrate my subscriber base

[@abhiroopreddy8673]

They will feel kevin dominating the world!!!