A Fan Rewrites Doctor Who: Revolution of the Daleks

[@dwfan91-]

Merry Christmas everyone! Hope you enjoy the video

[@esmeroseknight]

Merry Christmas! That was genuinely brilliant. Hope you make it to writing for Who one day

[@bengregory1235]

Wait wdym the doctor can’t regenerate infinitely?!?

[@JupiterRising3607]

I really did, it was a fantastic job @dwfan91- 👍🏼🌠👏

[@chrispy3369]

Damn a scene like that with 13 going dark is something I think she desperately needed in her run. Also it would be cool to put another 'dark' alternate Doctor to the list next to The Timelord Victorius.

[@stinkynoodles8312]

I freakin loved this. I loved that the Doctor's shock and hurt are more clearly shown. I loved the Doctor's initial disregard and even disrespect to Captain Jack like him appearing to save her was almost a nuisance because the captain disturbed her thought process. It's a portrayal of how people who are hurt can so easily push the people they obviously care about away from them with mere words and little actions. And I loved that Captain Jack stayed throughout all that. I loved the "Here we go again" as well! I loved the fam's whole dynamic when the Doctor was absent since it became so clear that they were only along for the ride because The Doctor didn't want to be alone. I loved that the 13th Doctor being so reserved was shown once again at the end when it took her too long to come up with what to say to Graham and Ryan. I loved Captain Jack waiting just outside the Tardis because of course Captain Jack will. Captain Jack knows how the Doctor can be so kind and caring, and clearly, she had just been in so much shock, and Yaz was right, the Doctor really needed friends at that moment. The way Graham and Ryan departed now gives so much depth to the 14th's "ending" as the Doctor finally finds not just a fam, but a whole family. Also, finding out that you're the timeless child and then being the front and center of the Flux causing the destruction of the whole universe and recreating it? When Captain Jack told the Doctor that she didn't leave him and that her future self picked him up and brought Captain Jack in front of the Tardis, the Doctor was reminded of how she used to be, and who she could be again, the Doctor. Except, when she was finally starting to heal, the Flux happened. The doctor just can't catch a break, and I'm so glad they're erasing all that trauma now from all the way since the 1st Doctor. Everything ends and it's always sad, but everything begins again, too. And that's always happy. Be happy, Doctor!

[@dsdots]

Really excited for this, as someone who thought a lot of Chibnall episodes had some of the most inventive concepts

[@monkeybit100]

Sir, Ima need you to get the BBC to commision this re write so we can all watch it on screen and it be a part of the show forever tyvm. Infact, I'm making this canon in my head. This is SUPERB!

[@sanchuk1]

Incredible work! You really took all the ingredients Chibnall prepared and cooked them to a beautifully scrumptious meal *chef's kiss*! I genuinely loved your ideas and writing sso much, you've got a lot of talent! I almost hope that you'll do more, but the amount of work clearly put into this, my god... 10/10 new canon recieved.

[@dwfan91-]

Thank you!

[@ohdarah]

bro this truly got me and i teared up 😢 I think the initial episode also had me have *some* feels but it always felt like they didn't want to push the companions to their emotional brinks, and the way Ryan and Graham left feels more right in version. And having Yaz help the Doctor pull the lever down really got me. Great job!

[@maniraptavia4008]

I love that not only is there a load of Pokémon music in the back of these videos, but it's some of the more obscure stuff like 'Cyllage City' and 'Boutique'. Loving the representation!

[@dwfan91-]

fellow man of culture🤝

[@maniraptavia4008]

​@@dwfan91-Haha, thank you. Love your stuff, man! Merry Christmas!

[@dwfan91-]

@@maniraptavia4008 merry Christmas!

[@siobhannicolson5566]

oh this is such a good rewrite! i love the way jack's involved, i love the exploration on how certain companions end up becoming like the doctor - often at the expense of their mental health - and i love how ryan & graham departed, it's incredibly painful and hurts my soul but also makes sense for both their characterisation and what the doctor's been going through. captain jack staying throughout the whole episode is also very good!

[@fiftybytes]

you should just rewrite the whole of chibnall's era, this was damn good. the whole timeless child part makes it feel like the timelord victorious ark, which would be quite fun to revisit, even if it's brief

[@dwfan91-]

Thank you!

[@ANIMUS.STUDIOS]

Now we needed the rewrite version of the three specials for the 60th anniversary.

[@pertuk]

I'd have some classic series monsters in the space prison like a Fomasi and a Terileptil or something, it would have made a nice continuity nod

[@almighty9539]

i didn't watch the whole video, so you may have already mentioned it, but it would be interesting on how YOU would write the timeless children

[@captainsinclair7954]

Honestly, that's a good episode rewrite. Incorporating elements from previous stories like The Trial of a Timelord, that one moment in The Waters of Mars, a lot of The Timeless Children, it's good. I feel bad for Ryan and Graeme given that ending. It makes up for the lackluster status of The Timeless Children, and that moment where The Doctor realizes she kicked herself so much with this new title that she became The Time(Lady) Victorious once again... chef's kiss. It's amazing.

[@dwfan91-]

Thank you!

[@idle_speculation]

26:43 I got 2 ads here so I got to hear the Master tell me about the untold benefits of Downy

[@ManiBatchelor]

Merry Christmas!!! This was sick, great job man this was very very good. This felt much more satisfying and interesting and thrilling. You’ve conjured something up something quite brilliant my friend. I’d love to see more of this!

[@dwfan91-]

Merry Christmas!

[@TheRealPretzelGuy]

100% do more of these

[@dwfan91-]

Yessir🫡

[@TheRealPretzelGuy]

@@dwfan91- I’m a big fan and I’ve always been waiting for someone to make a video rewriting a episode of Doctor who. And you finally did it👍

[@Sirfoxdagreat]

Really smart video idea

[@dwfan91-]

thank you so much

[@samharris266]

If this had been the episode I might have been a bit more hopeful for Flux, and not as upset with the timeless child, I'm over it now but it took a while.

[@idle_speculation]

15:58 The Cartmel Masterplan was basically Timeless Child 1.0, so I’m not sure if it can really be brought up as a counterpoint…

[@frightening_volleyball1231]

YES, YES I DO WANT MORE REWRITES. GIVE ME MORE!!!!

[@dwfan91-]

Yessir🫡

[@squishking]

please make more videos like this i enjoyed it very very much, another banger from dwfan91

[@dwfan91-]

Thank you so much!

[@steve-0493]

Now THATS how u use Capt Jack in an episode!!not just a cpl scenes as bait to pull ppl back in,cause they dont like how things are going (which btw,we all JUST got dealt that hand🤦‍♂️,some 60th,huh?) John hasnt been around in 10yrs,and when i saw he was running into graham,thinking he was the Doc,i was pumped!then hes gone,shows up later in a prison etc..if ur gonna bring in a soldier like him,HE NEEDS TO BE IN A LOT LONGER!! Merry Ho-Hos everyone!!🎀🎁🎄😁✌️🍻

[@cofteaamsr1717]

"I Do not have time for chibnall haters." me: SUBSCRIBED!! this was really awesome.

[@broaisland9003]

Behold! The most underrated channel on this site!

[@ChrisKeziahHyde]

I'm no Chibnall hater (I think there are good aspects and some good episodes of Chibs era) but I'm glad you chose this episode as I felt the same when I first saw this episode. It could've been so much better but I can understand Chibs not having enough time to write out a substantial special.

[@AngieDeAguirre]

Friend! What? That edit... So many frames... That is hard effing work! Well done mate! Fugg! I'm so impressed. I mean. I know you'rd good. And I know you can cook. But I wasn't expecting a 3 star Michellin 7 plates course! No... My effing head is blown. This is really, really beaufiful. I'm moved by your passion for doctor who. And you're damn good at writing! Thank you for creating something so well thought, so well put together and with so much love and respect for the material. Damn! I can't stop praising it! (Praise him 😂) Have a fantastic Christmas man! And I can't wait for your next video. And sorry if my english is all over the place. I'm from Argentina 😅

[@dwfan91-]

Thank you so so much my friend! I'm glad you enjoyed it and Merry Christmas :)

[@poisoncupcake2659]

now as someone who literally adores 13 and her era (I am but a simple lesbian, what can I say) I think this is fucking phenomenal. I'm saying this genuinely: submit some work to the BBC, you could go places dude.

[@JoshPinder92]

I love thst you analysed this eoisode and your details ... Honestky id kill for this standard eoisode right now

[@pinksuithenry7560]

Godamn why couldn’t this be real

[@squishking]

i cant wait to watch this!!! 50 min doctor who video!!! best gift ever!!!!

[@britanimations2002]

Hey if you ever wanna turn this into an audio project, I do a mighty fine Dalek voice. Maybe get the people MrTARDIS worked with on his 13th Doctor audio

[@dwfan91-]

Do you have an email connected to your channel- I would love to reach out!

[@britanimations2002]

@@dwfan91- it... It was a childhood nickname

[@dwfan91-]

@@britanimations2002 😂 if you want you can email me when you're down- I'm working on a project right now if you're interested.

[@britanimations2002]

@@dwfan91- Just checking, did the reply with my email actually send because it seems to have vanished?

[@dwfan91-]

@@britanimations2002 Sadly yes, I can't find it, but everything's all fine on my end, I can wait as long as you need🫡

[@tom_4615]

I think I just vetoed this episode from my mind because I saw the title and assumed it said revelation of the daleks and the fact that the 13th dr was in the thumbnail just didn’t even seem weird to me

[@JohnMarston-rt5kr]

It seems bro has too much time on his hands. I respect that to be honest, I would love to write an episode of Doctor Who.

[@JupiterRising3607]

I thoroughly enjoyed this rewrite. To me, it actually makes more sense. If you're able to do any more of these, would you be able to smash another one out before the end of next year..? I know you said they do take a while to get completed. Anyway, this version I'd love to actually see as a full episode. Maybe they might see you as a possible showrunner in the future, you've definitely got the skills for it dwfan91. 👍🏼🍀🌠💞

[@dwfan91-]

Thank you so much for the kind words- I will try to release another one for the summer time, so I hope you stay tuned!

[@golden_gloo]

It's interesting having the Doctor murder a dalek in cold blood be the catalyst for Ryan and Graham leaving, thus 13 and Yaz spending more time together and therefore Thazmin. Perhaps in this unideal scenario that deepens their bond.

[@AngieDeAguirre]

Dude... You need to cook a rewrite to the "Amazon" one. With the infamous phrase that no doctor would say, but Chibi boy made Jodie say. "It's not the systems fault... It's you-fault" (yeah... I'm paraphrasing). You need to cook that... (Doctor seven whispers in your ear: "For the fans")

[@hastyswept5486]

bro so lonely at christmas he rewrote dr who

[@hastyswept5486]

p.s. I love this man for people who think i’m mean

[@dwfan91-]

too real😢

[@andrealiee]

i have contributed to at least 100 of these views istg

[@dwfan91-]

LMAO

[@colinsavage5744]

Another incredible video. Merry Christmas!

[@dwfan91-]

Merry Christmas!

[@HollowBoy04]

please do more videos like this

[@bengregory1235]

Robertson: “I have no idea what a Dalek is but it looks a lot like that precious Metaltron my old friend Van Staten showed me a photo of a while back with a promise to tort- I mean help it, until he stopped answering my calls”

[@fadeldennawi7133]

I'm a film school graduate mainly focused on screen writing and being an acting coach. If you have any other scripts like this that you want a second opinion on I'd be glad to help out even if just as a second opinion.

[@seanhegarty7447]

merry christmas king dwfan91

[@dwfan91-]

merry christmas sean👑

[@ethanriptide]

@@dwfan91- I’ve been meaning to ask is there anything we can call you other then dwfan91

[@dwfan91-]

fred

[@ethanriptide]

@@dwfan91- okay thanks fred

[@idle_speculation]

16:15 The Impossible Girl was honestly just as bad as the TC; Capaldi-era Clara is the one I care about. Series 7b was truly something else… not saying it was terrible, it had some good episodes, but the arc tying it together wasn’t very well done, like an exacerbation of what happened to Series 6, where almost every episode was very good, but the arc tying them together was somewhat lacking.

[@dwfan91-]

I think my problem w the Impossible Girl arc isn’t even anything to do with Clara- it’s the constant dragging of heels until the finale when we can finally figure out what it is. Realistically the Doctor has no reason not to be trying to uncover the mystery in all of the episodes but for some reason he isn’t

[@KismetMulhaneski-to3wg]

0:59 Always love that 'sharing a joke' pic. I wonder what the joke is?

[@andrealiee]

im sorry but the "im the timeless child" line would have gone SO HARD in revolution of the daleks! and i am just obsessed with the decision of keeping her in the red jumpsuit throughout the whole episode because !! yeah, THE VISUAL SYMBOLISM IS KINDA IMPORTANT!! if rtd can have a random arc of ten being like IM TIMELORD VICTORIOUS to be all edgy and angsty, then chibs deserved to add the (well deserved) angst to thirteen claiming this new title as well, especially since its SO devastating. it's not something to be prideful of, it's said in anger and confusion all at once. the scene where she tells the dalek it's wrong for calling her the doctor is reminiscent to me of the scene where twelve says "the doctor is no longer here, you are stuck with me" to ashildr in face the raven. man it just goes so hard during the moments of "the doctor took it too far" and i feel like we were definitely missing that with 13. im so so so glad you found a great way to naturally implant it into her story in an episode that flawlessly could have pulled it off.

[@JohnMarston-rt5kr]

If you got the chance, would you play The Doctor? And how would you want it to be written like, general stuff like this.

[@dwfan91-]

I would but I imagine everyone would😂 I think I'd prefer to be a writer though

[@JohnMarston-rt5kr]

@@dwfan91- Well from looking at this you’d make a damn good writer. You made an episode that a thought was medium to great.

[@squishking]

merry christmas eve, dwfan91!!!!

[@dwfan91-]

Merry Christmas!

[@Legendary3Dgamer]

0:00 funniest intro ever 😂😂😂😂😂

[@pigeon___]

i've never seen that clip with Tennant and the reindeer wtf 😭

[@Budbrothers420]

It was seen before part 1 or 2 for end of time back in the day I still remember the person on the indent telling us it was the 10th doctor’s last adventure 😢😂

[@blockydude2253]

I feel like people had a problem with Clara but moved on, the stuff from the TV movie was just ignored and personally I never watched the episodes concerning the hybrid in order so I still don’t understand it.

[@AngieDeAguirre]

I never moved on. I hate her with passion. A

[@JoshPinder92]

Merry christmas you filthy animal and a happy new season of dr who...awww thr fun is this NYD sprvisl couldve been a whole prison break epic spanmibg 4 parts or something in itself with ribertson vs davros eouldve been so fun ....vut i do love it and miss the daleks on NYD they start the year fsbukously dsrlings hehe i sdmire vhibnall so much snd ehilst moff is my ers the chibnall era i miss right now but alss it is what it is

[@biggc181]

Merry Christmas Jay

[@andrealiee]

still a classic

[@quintessentialquinten-bm4pj]

absolutely goated

[@prestigepea1235]

Writing 12 episodes in a row is not really a positive given he could have handed those stories out to other writers. Any show runners first task should be to make sure the workload is going to be manageable to get the best out of the ideas. Having to present first drafts for acreen is unforgiveable

[@dwfan91-]

I hate to tell you this brother but all 3 showrunners have turned in first drafts💀 I personally think it is very admirable to single-handedly keep the show afloat during the pandemic but that is just my opinion

[@prestigepea1235]

​@dwfan91- yeah, it's admirable to want to keep the show going (I suspect late 80s trauma all three suffered at the original cancellation could fuel that!), but ultimately I feel the whole showrunner setup fails if the show stands or falls on one person's shoulders. Hire more writers and hire a brutal script editor who will kill everyone's darlings, including the showrunners. While I think Chibnall was the weakest of the three, that's mainly due to him not really having a distinct style, but a grab bag approach of imitating RTD and Moffatt at a lower resolution, leaning into their tropes with diminishing returns. So I totally agree TC is just more RTD/Moffatt space Jesus stuff, it serves less of a dramatic role, while being simultaneously more convoluted yey more generic. It most successfully solves Brain of Morbius and it feelslike that's all Chibnall has really thought through. It doesn’t push the character anywhere forward, or create a better backstory (the Doctor is literally a reset to child of another character who also calls themselves the Doctor and has a police box TARDIS - If all Timelords were the Timeless Child (biregenerated off of the original!?), you'd get the same effect without the Doctor falling into the special one from birth trope.

[@dwfan91-]

@@prestigepea1235 I agree with the first part for sure- second part is just going to cause drama like the last time. My biggest problem with the new era is the episode count going down to 8. With RTD writing probably an average 3 episodes per season that doesn't leave much room for new and/or even old writers. The show desperately needs new blood

[@jeremythomaswebb1485]

Gary Russell once said that if he hypothetically became the showrunner for Doctor Who, he would not write any scripts himself but instead focus fully on overseeing the production of the show. Which is a smart move to be honest. I directed a short film project and it takes a lot of energy to oversee the whole production and make sure everything is running like clockwork. Imagine trying to write for the show on top of all that responsibility. It would be a good idea to oversea the production and commission writers to create the scripts. Then you can go through them and see what needs to be refined and changed before giving the go ahead. Allow the writers to focus solely on writing.

[@prestigepea1235]

​@dwfan91- agreed, the show should be trying as many new writers as it can, as well as holding the best finds close to them - if I was showrunner, I'd have given Jamie Mathieson free rein to write as much as he wanted for example. While making every Timelord the product of the Timeless Child would have still had the drama of Ruth Doctor and where they fit, it would avoid the "special child" trope hitting the Doctor. Yes, New Who has always treated the Dr as the most amazing thing ever, but I think that's as much of a mistake as TC, albeit not leaning on the more literal space baby Jesus born a special saviour "Luke/Harry Potter" cliché. It's been a truism for me that the vest stories of each show runners series have been by other writers and I suspect that may stay the same throughout Ncuti's tenure

[@Ericiswaiting]

LETSS GOOO

[@dwfan91-]

ERIC

[@bengregory1235]

Wish this was real 😂😢

[@pietromercurio8298]

Please become showrunner

[@mozz6058]

Do you think you could link a document with the script in it, I would like to read through it.

[@dwfan91-]

I wish I could (I originally intended to) For some reason it doesn't work with the formatter I used to write in.

[@mozz6058]

@@dwfan91- ahh that’s a shame, i get it though. the video is lovely

[@dwfan91-]

@@mozz6058 Thank you!

[@VuddyProductions]

merry chrim

[@dwfan91-]

merry christmas!

[@zacbob1149]

I always thought about the fact that the Doctor CAN DIE! If he or she got shot or fatally wounded/attacked/damaged or whatever, during their regeneration, they can no longer regenerate. I don’t get how the Doctor doesn’t have infinite regenerations though? Does that still not apply to Ncuti because he formed from bi-generation?

[@dwfan91-]

The limit on regenerations wasn't undone- it was put on him after he lost his memories

[@zacbob1149]

@@dwfan91-yeah, that makes more sense

[@dwfan91-]

@@zacbob1149 merry christmas :)

[@zacbob1149]

@dwfan91-And a happy new year! Your videos are class btw. I really enjoy watching them! They’re so good! Especially this one, the rewrite sounds so different in a good way! I was thinking the whole Timeless Child thing would have been so much better if they had more time to explore it.

[@kylerees3491]

Very good rewrite, Flux rewrite next? 👀😂

[@dwfan91-]

You kid but the scripts are already written😂

[@annbarrios7391]

So many people have issues with Clara actually....

[@dwfan91-]

i like her :)

[@annbarrios7391]

@@dwfan91- Me too! But a lot of people have issues with her character. Many of the same people that have issues with the timeless child

[@dwfan91-]

@@annbarrios7391 My message to "those who have issue with the timeless child" is aimed moreso at those who blindly hate it for being "new thing" TM than people who genuinely have real criticisms for it. A couple years ago "new thing" TM was Clara but people have moved on and forgotten all about that. I'm trying to call out that hypocrisy, in a jokey manner ofc

[@VaguelyRowlet]

Good video!

[@oao814]

should of have abzorblof

[@Rocksteady72a]

"I'll leave a link to this in the description below" Liar..

[@dwfan91-]

Oh no what did I forget to do😭

[@SG-qx9ko]

#dwfan91forshowrunner

[@dwfan91-]

SO TRUE

[@Dynasty954]

It's Christmas Eve not Christmas day.

[@dwfan91-]

no way :00

[@Dynasty954]

@@dwfan91- At the start of the episode you said you would release it on Christmas day.

[@sinom]

Depends on the timezone. For people from NZ it was already Christmas day

[@dc6521]

idk how you stretched "the toymaker did it" into such a long rant

[@dwfan91-]

me neither lol

[@benjamindurden481]

It only had so much potential as an era, because it was so sorely lacking in any worthwhile content.. so lacking in character development, so lacking in clever concepts, so lacking in compulsive stories, and worst of all lacking in emotional depth!

[@SG-qx9ko]

Not sure about how I feel about the "I am the timeless child" line but wow that exit was so much better. Gut wrenching but not overplayed, gave me Tegan exit vibes.

[@dwfan91-]

It is a little corny I must confess but gotta hammer home the emotional beat ykwim

[@vskane]

My dude, do not present convincing arguments to me about the timeless child origin. The Doctor Who purist in me is having a crisis of confidence right now. In the context you present the timeless child could be a really interesting arc. Nope! Not going there. The Master is a lying bastard and Tecteun is his puppet. How else would she know what the Master told the Doctor on Gallifrey - she wasn’t even there. I’ll shut up and watch the rest of your video now.

[@dwfan91-]

When the Master is revealed as the Timeless Child🙏

[@JohnMarston-rt5kr]

@@dwfan91-That’s what I think should happen, it just feels right if The Master is the timeless child. In a way it explains why The Master is the way he is, he definitely has a motive to lie about it, unless he doesn’t know himself, but doubt it though.

[@vskane]

@@dwfan91- Please don't threaten me with a satisfying payoff. The Master is the seed of Timelord society, hence their tendency towards self-destructive violence and in-fighting. If they did that I'd happily emerge from the sacred waters as a born-again Doctor Who fan.