Alienated: How to Ruin a Good Story

[@Xellos14]

A touching story about how an alien gets the absolute worst first impression of humanity via the worst children lol

[@sweetcinnamonpnchkin]

Kind of like Evangelion? Only we feel bad for the characters (Aska especially- that scene will stay with me for awhile)

[@canisblack]

When the Aliens come to wipe out humanity next year, I'm not sure I can give a reasonable argument for why they're wrong given these shining examples of humanity.

[@moonshinetheleocat1235]

What the fuck............ This story gave me a fucking headache

[@mrmanceres7653]

Children are not raised they are civilized. Which means that last thing you want is children to be your first contact with beings who hand out god powers.

[@harbl99]

ET so tired of being caught in the tangle of their lives. FDS! ET go to Mars.

[@williambennison902]

Alienated: The story of a superpowered sociopath who won.

[@Toetalwar]

that story is the only story these folks seem to tell.

[@wrongthinker843]

@@Toetalwar Well, they are following one good writing advice to the letter: write what you know. They only know themselves.

[@MrKago1]

@@Toetalwar that's because they write what they know. how can you expect people who act and champion criminals to write anything other than villains?

[@colonelautism9957]

@@MrKago1 I wouldnt be able to live with such a paranoid mentality when you think everyone hates you and is out for your job you will do whatever it takes to keep it identity politics help to spread this paranoia across the workplace.

[@todo9633]

Thank god Superman landed in the middle of nowhere, can you imagine if he was raised by city folk?

[@thetimeisninefifteen]

Homelander?

[@Iron-Bridge]

Brightburn?

[@Jar0fMay0]

You probably get Captain Hero

[@QuantumRangerPower]

Wouldn't that just be Red Son Superman?

[@khiryhelms]

@@Jar0fMay0 I wish I could upvote this comment more than once. Drawn Together was an underated classic

[@DemonicAkumi]

How cute that it takes 2 people to have a kid, but only one gets to be blamed and attacked in the story.

[@demomanchaos]

Even more interesting is that the boy almost certainly had zero input on giving the baby up, male reproductive rights do not exist so the only way the baby could have been given up is if SHE made it happen. She is blaming the boy for HER decision.

[@DemonicAkumi]

@@demomanchaos I usually hear that it goes two ways. One is the child is aborted even if the father doesn't want it aborted as it's not his decision. The other is that the child is kept and then the guy gets the blame and/or now forced to pay child support even if he would've wanted the child aborted or not. Both situations are decided by the mother, but the guy always gets the short end of the stick pretty much. Really sad when just how it took 2 to even have the child, the decisions after pregnancy should be decided by those same two as well. But hey, what do I know?

[@Nyet-Zdyes]

We might as well rename this comic "Women are never responsible for their own actions". As Demonic point out, first, there's giving up her kid... but it's the male's fault... Then, the whole ending... look at all that she gets away with... isn't responsible for...

[@davidzimmerman5991]

Damn straight!

[@tuopsy]

@@Snakedude4life haven’t you heard? gender roles are only problematic when they’re inconvenient. ☺️

[@Bizagro]

Can't miss the fact that Leon looks like a teenie bopper trump.

[@adamwelch4336]

I know right!🤦😂

[@filter021comicscomment7]

Being sublime is not part of the DNA of the left

[@Ramsey276one]

Seeing that while hearing “MAGA hat” made it Crystal Clear! XD

[@Greatsword585]

They always do shit like that and I'm getting fucking tired of it

[@enjamessimpson]

So, she tortured the boy for abandoning his kid that she also abandoned?

[@CameronKujo]

We live in a society

[@oformakelvin3568]

Lmao

[@vkak1]

You surprised? Shit like that happens irl.

[@devingunnels3251]

Too be fair, I think the kid was actually taken from her, not given away

[@enjamessimpson]

@@vkak1 Not at all surprised honestly. My mom fought my dad for custody for five years and never wanted my brother or me.

[@jorgemigueltavares6041]

Good art doesn't make up for a massively flawed story.

[@Jar0fMay0]

Works with movies and games

[@Sorain1]

It's a waste for such skilled artists to be stuck with such garbage material. I still respect the professionalism.

[@isaaclee3271]

A comic with great art but shit story is like eating a burger with top quality buns but a rancid patty

[@Evillia462]

good is a over statement, its alright at best.

[@patrickbuckley7259]

I mean I think "mommy moved too much" is a legit problem for a young person, it means they never have a consistent friend group, no consistent home. No consistency at all = no security = major anxiety issues is there a father in the picture? If not that a big issue as well, one which may highly exasperate everything. That can really mess a kid up, in some serious ways.

[@shizachan8421]

Considerin that statistically, most child abusers as well as child sex offenders are men, isn't raised without a man basically safer?

[@ryanrigley2558]

@@shizachan8421 did you really just say that it was better without a father because he could be a sex offender??? The woman can be one too you know. Also, source?

[@despinasgarden.4100]

@@ryanrigley2558 ignore her, she is just the comic author in disguise.

[@paulolucero9864]

Yeah but I think the comic explicitly tried to downplay it as “Hehe whypipo "problems" amirite?” again, it's asking too much for these people

[@Pootis-Spencer]

Bro I hate that people minimize the weight a father figure has in the life of a kid growing up, and is not entirely necesary that is always the biological father. The mind doesn't stop growing until arounf 14-15, where you start to gain more agency on your choices, and having positive influences can dractic affect your view on the world. Clarence (yes, the Cartoon Network Clarence) shows you that you don't need you birth dad to have a possitive father influence that can be with you while you grow. He goes all the show with his stepdad Chad and he's a normal happy kid with normal worries like "this girl really wants to date me?" or "I lost my money, where I left it?". Samuel, by contrast, not only has just him mom in the picture, but the constant moving can make him have some social issues in his teens, that you can assume he cope the lack of friends with youtubers/internet/influencers, especially in this days. He should be the one that relates to the common reader, because is the one that can resonate with the most audiences

[@Soridan]

"Samir, the gay muslim" It's hilarious that I could easily predict this. It became such a trope, my expectations would be subverted if he was straight.

[@wahajshahazad4831]

I kinda dont understand it thou

[@wahajshahazad4831]

@@Fully_Certified_Idiot is that sarcasm bc muslims do have a rule.

[@aliallail9874]

@@wahajshahazad4831 I can confirm. My mind can understand quantum physics, but not gays( I mean that I literally can't understand that).

[@randomdude8904]

@@aliallail9874 well, you don't have to understand it, just don't be hateful to them.

[@wahajshahazad4831]

@@randomdude8904 not being hateful but you can't be gay and a muslim

[@austin9568AuraMasterDX]

Holy hell, the Asian chick really should have been the villain

[@AtomicF0x]

At the start of the video, when he asks who we think the villain is, I actually guessed her first. I'm surprised I was right.

[@yoshikagekira3419]

Being a main character doesn't automatically mean being the good guy, I consider the main characters as the villains.

[@artomaton776]

@@AtomicF0x me too, actually! Although now that I’ve watched the video, they all pretty much suck.

[@sergiomatheus3392]

I like your pfp.

[@DwenLang]

Thats racist

[@Maybeyoudorho]

Me: lemme guess it’s the white bo- JSG: DAMN RIGHT ITS THE WHITE BOI

[@Legendary_Detective-Wobbuffet]

Well, to he honest he was blue.

[@wrongthinker843]

@@Legendary_Detective-Wobbuffet Looked more green to me, but of course it is.

[@jamesmooers8430]

The greatest tragedy is the fact that the protagonists had good concepts. Sure, Samuel sounds like the weakest, but the constant movement in childhood is still relatable. If the story gave the kids a better justification, and had them start out reasonable and slowly work their way into self-justified monsters, only to realize the error of their ways, I could see it working. But nope, apparently that's too hard.

[@vlo4829]

In this review, Samuel came off as the most interesting and even the most sympathetic of the three. His discomfort with the other 2 torturing a girl who they called their FRIEND made him the ONLY one who showed actual empathy towards another human. It would have been interesting if being connected to the other 2 psychos screwed him up and led to his own rage. I mean, that's kind of what happened when he killed Samir's dad and then Samir and his own mother...

[@improvwithlions4173]

@@vlo4829 Apparently getting rejected affects him more than seeing people get murdered and tortured by mystical forces. Or even being forced to live through other people's traumas. Yeah, I think KZbin still has the best power to emotionally crush a person after enduring all that.

[@jamesbaggett7223]

Constantly moving can be traumatic if you have issues connecting socially. But this just reads like another "White ppl have no real problems" comic

[@vlo4829]

@@improvwithlions4173 I said "most sympathetic" of the 3 main characters, not that he was a stellar guy. He was just the only one that was depicted with any sign of humanity whatsoever, even if it was fleeting and only one time. The bar was really low, but the singular flicker of humanity he showed was more than the other two, so he won out. Also, the fate that he suffers in the end at the hands of the girl (the most evil of them all) is really cruel...

[@improvwithlions4173]

@@vlo4829 It just gets me that the author crammed in a theme of white people have no real problems, into a story where right off the bat a white person is forced to experience real problems - both telepathically and from what goes down during the comic. And somehow he still cares the most about being famous on social media. Is there even a point in the story where he abuses his powers to bring himself closer to that goal? Or even thinks about how having this power to manipulate others could put positive attention on himself? And yet, losing his chance at that is what breaks him. I wonder if there's some element in the story like, oh, the alien is surpressing their emotional response. But in a way where they can still be upset about stuff that bugged them before they met the alien. Gah, I still don't get it.

[@dandare9055]

"Gay Muslim" oh, so his power is certainly ability to fly!

[@thepraetorian2368]

Or levitate ... with some help

[@GanonGhidorah]

The girl had unprotected sex as a teenager (in highschool), got pregnant, and gave the baby up... _Of Course she wasn't going to be held accountable for the torture and murder she was doing._

[@licasabinaandreea2361]

@@Snakedude4life struggle-snuggle is the best thing i have read today. Thank you internet stranger

[@stephonmanny7555]

I mean they both gave up the baby.

[@tamasrehany6532]

@@Snakedude4life Bro, why is there no "NO step on snek" and the flags? Are you alright?

[@Threadnaught]

@Purple Emerald I prefer the term, forcey fun time.

[@danninmatthews5640]

Of course she wouldn't go for self responsibility. Screw Samantha.

[@EdiTheDon]

There is a troubling lack of redemption in SJW comics. Must come with the narcissistic syndrome they all suffer from. Must come from the chip on all their shoulders.

[@shawnboahene5231]

When someone talks of Redemption you are talking about the things of God: forgiveness, acknowledgment of sin, sorrow for your actions. These people have long turned away from such things. Sjws are taught that nothing is their fault all their problems are based on arbitrary systems rather than their weakness or moral failings. That their hatred is always justified (look at the riots) and the opposition are demons.

[@strawberrybunny.2983]

Looking at Shera I'd rather have them not deal with Redemption at all- They rush it and fuck it up

[@joyc.e.7511]

@@shawnboahene5231 Wait, the protests are a legitimate thing though, don't dismiss it to just "riots". Only seeing that is part of the problem.

[@vovabars1234]

Once you did something that they deem bad, there is no going back. They will label you for life

[@telephonepole8366]

@@joyc.e.7511 The protests are a good movement but a ton of the lefts and a Mixed combinationof anarchists hijacked the movement and are using as a excuse to steal from stores in the protest locations and attack people online for not "supporting" / bending the knee to them

[@Grimmijaggers]

I actually like Samuel, I find characters like him interesting. Being nothing special but wanting to do something or become special, and being frustrated when nothing he does works, I like that. He'd be a cool villain, if it wasn't for the other two being way more antagonistic and unlikable than Samuel.

[@youwhat.]

Watch or read Tower of God Avoid spoilers at all costs

[@telephonepole8366]

Tower Of God is good but the power scaling just sucks as they will say this and that is super strong and then later on the "super strong" stuff is apparently child's play now. I feel like the person making tower of god just wants to keep it going on forever since its probably a blast making Tower Of God but its kinda damaging that important aspect.

[@graveboi9710]

They basically ripped off Chronicle, but without the likable characters

[@darkhorseman90]

that's the movie I was thinking about at the start of the vid, thanks for that

[@MysteriousTomJenkins]

Chronicle: Three kids get powers from some unknown alien origin, they mostly play around with it but one of them has an abusive household and this causes him to eventually snap as he uses his powers to hurt his abusive father, kill one of the other kids, steal money for his mother and then finally snap and go on a rampage. The other kid then has to mercy kill him to stop the rampage. Alienated: Three kids get powers from some unknown alien origin, use it to torture and kill people they don't like. All of them do bad shit but only one of them is portrayed as wrong for his actions. They put a kid in a coma, murder multiple people, kill their parents and it ends with the final kid putting the 'bad kid' in a permanent coma instead of just killing him, giving him a fate worse than death while she enjoys her happy life.

[@graveboi9710]

@@MysteriousTomJenkins Matt didn’t even get a good ending either. He was forced to kill his best friend and immediately had to leave his normal life behind to avoid being captured by the military

[@filipvadas7602]

Except the main villain is legitimately sympathetic and we can clearly see why he ended up the way he did

[@filipvadas7602]

@@MysteriousTomJenkins the end of Chronicle was genuenly haunting for me tbh mainly cause we never learn what happened afterwards. Matt promises to find out what gave them their powers and to make sure nobody suffers like they did, so that nobody else is forced to make the decision Matt had to make, that being ,killing one of his best friends. A decision that will haunt him for the rest of his life. But because he leaves the camera at a snowy mountainside and it shortly runs out of battery, we never learn if he succeded or not leaving a black screen as the cresits roll. In Alienated, all three kids are sociopaths. Plain and simple. They all commit heinuss deeds and feel nothing about. They legitimately deal out punishments worse than death and still act like they're the victims of their upbringing

[@amateurcritic6247]

Read the first issue. Perfect character development catalyst is slaughtered in front of my eyes. So much potential wasted, I couldn’t bear to read any more.

[@sshadowtamer]

If one were to use these wasted concepts and transform them into something decent, would there be any repercussions?

[@amateurcritic6247]

@@sshadowtamer Do you mean copyright? Or public backlash? Refusal to publish? Or are you referring to repercussions in the storyline? Please be more specific.

[@theALTF4]

the art is so...PRETTY!!!! whyyyyyyy and how the FUCK you make ME apathetic towards a rejected single mom and a muslim teen is beyond my understanding: technically oscar bait concepts that M.U.S.T make u feel...but NOPE! it almost like the otor is trying to convinve me to resent this populations, smdh

[@jesussaldana4558]

@@sshadowtamer not by the majority of people, the comic would be more successful and find fans, they would only get cancelled by twitter and the left but at this point....it's moot.

[@b3rz3rk3r9]

You know what would've been better for Samuel? Y'know how he feels bad for losing friends every few months due to his mother's job? Make it to where Samuel tries to take care and completely treat the alien, Chip, as a friend, and gets upset when the other Sam's hurt and abuse its powers as a result. Yeah, he'd have some thoughts of using Chip to go through with the whole Waxy thing, but he remembers what his "friends" did and doesn't want to hurt Chip. Even going so far as to call out the other Sam's for their horrid actions and how it's hurting everyone, including themselves and Chip.

[@b3rz3rk3r9]

@@Snakedude4life Fair point, my serpentine friend. But even still, let's ditch the point of the story.

[@b3rz3rk3r9]

@@Snakedude4life Got me there. Also, no step on snek?

[@zxt5148]

Hey man, thanks for being out here talking about real empathy when there's so much hate in the world.

[@comicsgatekeeper9746]

Why do they allow sociopaths to write morality plays?

[@jesussaldana4558]

@@Snakedude4life which is why these comics and this whole ideology is bullshit

[@aaronjohnson1286]

Let give up on reading comics and start reading manga

[@zasekai7537]

That's exactly what I've done I used to love comics but when they're like this makes me wanna burn it all so I've given up on comics until 2050 when hopefully they're good again now I only read manga

[@dragokamikaze2641]

Don't forget manhwa too.

[@officersquarehead]

Just don't start with One Piece or Berserk. Spoiler alert: You won't make it to the end even if you binge read.

[@stonefree7973]

@@officersquarehead One Piece I agree with, Berserk I don't.

[@thanglongnguyenvu3815]

Not really. They just need to step up their writing game. Obviously though, they don't wanna do that.

[@inotaishu1]

Here is another thing: Is Sam's ex boyfriend supposed to be black? He looks the way many comic book artist draw black boys. So the boy who got a teenage girl pregnant and run away is black in the story of this oh so woke comic author?

[@grizzlymelon8376]

Jesus, i don`t know how i keep getting surprised at woke folk making these oversights with in their eyes usually have straight up full bore racist implications.

[@inotaishu1]

@@grizzlymelon8376 Yeah, sometimes it is astounding. Sure, it could be coincidence, but considered how such people are oversensitive, you would think that they would never include that. It is just weird.

[@turk88]

aye, girl with more options at birth control goesd raw with BF and then blames him for getting her knocked up. But you know it is not her fault and she is the "victim"...

[@wrongthinker843]

@@grizzlymelon8376 Why are you surprised? These people are deeply racist. The only times they cry about racism is when they need to look good, in their own twisted minds.

[@Christopher-eq1rn]

Never forget that they are just white supremecists with a guilty conscience

[@hiddenunderhatse8094]

It's bad when the villains in Adams Family are better written then the one in your comic book

[@Thomasmemoryscentral]

You mean the films or cartoon?

[@hiddenunderhatse8094]

@@Thomasmemoryscentral the film's i.mean even festers wife had.some backstory

[@SnipingIsFun]

@@Thomasmemoryscentral Sad when it can be both

[@TheRisky9]

I remember reading an X-Files comic with kind of sort of this theme. A guy finds a coat that absorbs people's... energy... I guess... It's X-Files. Just roll with it. Anyway, as it absorbs their life force or chi or whatever, his ugly scarred face begins to actually heal. What was really interesting about it is that the guy is killing these people with a supernatural force, at first he's in complete denial. He disassocates from it as though it didn't happen. It was basically "Well, there's nothing on the news or radio, so it must not have happened." Then the second person he kills was a homeless guy with a mental disorder and he rationalizes it like, "Oh no one will miss him." There is mention of a third killing, but it's never shown. It basically stating that at this point, that all the people he's killing are now just a means to an end and killing them has become a matter of routine. So you really start to question the character. You're sympathedic to his motive, but you can't excuse his actions and you start to realize how he's almost becoming less human. But that was written in the 90's. I really miss writers who can precariously straddle between motive and actions; condemning the actions while remaining sympathetic to the motive.

[@sirapple589]

Do you have a link to the story? This sounds super interesting.

[@Sensei.Of.Kivotos]

Got a link? Sounds interesting

[@Tunade5]

“Hey! Look at this new comic! The art is really nice!” “Okay, so what’s the deal?” “So the white guy is the antagonist-“ “Yeah no.” *goes back to reading Witch Hat Atelier*

[@ALDAL]

that is a manga? its good?

[@RunyaEithelNar]

@@harlannguyen4048 Manga series written and illustrated by Kamome Shirahama. It's about girl without magic [in magical world] who wants to be a witch ;)

[@bushidog6915]

If thats the first thing someone tells you about the comic its complete dog.

[@Tunade5]

I just really got into it and it’s amazing! I’m on book 3 and I’m hooked!

[@patrickfrost9405]

@@ALDAL I personally think its store is ths weakest part, but the art is spectacular. It's fantastic, read it.

[@vlo4829]

Their lack of empathy or willingness to admit the humanity of white people ironically often makes their white characters the most sympathetic and likeable. Even in this comic, all of the 3 main characters were horribly selfish and malicious, but showing that small moment where Samuel the white boy felt uncomfortable about the glee the other 2 felt over torturing a girl they called their FRIEND made him appear the most redeemable and therefore likeable. He was the only one in the group who showed any concern for another HUMAN, even if it was just one. Not to mention, what the girl does to him in the end is so messed up, it's hard not to feel bad for him (and despise her).

[@newtpondskipper]

Hey she got pregnant and the boy ran away. Also don't forget that boy was white.

[@1SpicyMeataball]

This is like a horror story. And ironically enough, Samuel is *the most sympathetic* of the lot.

[@Mexican00b]

havent purchased a comic in 10 years... i dont regret my desicions! also, the part of "not seeing people you hate as people" is widelly used by countries in war times... "they are this and that and will do this to you!" cough cough nazis cough cough

[@urt1202]

Bro, why you must do Ma boy zack that dirty

[@DocWolph]

This more like that Ironic story where everyone is a victim only because the assumed "Good Guys" are the actual villains. Also this is how most Leftist comics read. There are not Heroes. Only Villains and Victims... mostly villainous victims. All you would need is an actual hero to step in and resolve everything, like someone who had been watching the whole thing unfold, realize they have to be stopped, by any means necessary, before they go "evil gods" on the town. And in an real ironic, to the Left, twist the white boy survives to feel genuine remorse for what he did.

[@MachineMan-mj4gj]

It's because leftists are bug people without empathy or self-reflection.

[@Lupirio23]

@@Snakedude4life I read the first half of your comment and said "That earns a 'like'". Agree with the rest too.

[@donutbevil9669]

I once read a "Common Grounds" comic book that had a black super heroine who was a staunch idealist, with uplifting speeches and everything. She ended up telling a cynical group of Americans after stopping a crime that she was proud of being American and that the dream wasn't dead. They reject her and walk away, only for a Cuban boy to approach her, with tears in his eyes, about how happy he was when his family got to leave Castro's regime for a better life in the country they now lived in. The woman smiles and hugs the boy to comfort him. That's how you write a hero.

[@CowCommando]

Dang though, what if an emotionally mature adult who found another alien shows up and stops them during the finale. We find out they've sensed the kids using chip and tracked them here, only arriving to late to save everyone. There could be a whole plot about how the aliens need symbiotic relationships with humans and something went wrong for Chip to end up in the woods and cause this whole tragedy. The remaining two kids then get to have a redemption arc where they get to fix the stuff they screwed up as much as they can and send Chip home. You could even roll that into a sequel series where they get new symbiotes as mature adults now that they've proved themselves and see all the adventures they get to go on as they try to help these aliens and fight the ones who go bad or get bad hosts. Culminate that into a finale where they get to eventually fight what they would have become if they had continued down the path they were originally on. Shoot, I'd have bought the heck out of a book like that.

[@mrmaxwell346]

@@CowCommando why buy it when you can WRITE IT! If you dont then I will.

[@JohnnyMcJim]

"You are awful and don't deserve love! Why am I so unhappy?" - The Left

[@patrickgowen324]

I guess your following what your saying I guess it’s about time you follow some of your own words

[@JohnnyMcJim]

@@patrickgowen324 These aren't my words, I am doing an impersonation of the person who wrote this book you silly. Also, try to word your comment a little better. I can't understand what you are saying too well.

[@patrickgowen324]

@@JohnnyMcJim No I’m replying to there quote like my response to that

[@JohnnyMcJim]

@@patrickgowen324 Ah, I see. My mistake.

[@thebigidea9659]

I like the art.Probably the only compliment I can give this.

[@IMO-e7v]

So the other two go through a trauma, and use chip to get petty revenge by assaulting and violating other people's headspace. Then the most peaceful of the group by far just kills a guy out of nowhere with no build up? And the worst one by far gets to "live happily ever after"

[@KingAtheist]

I'm so tired of the black/POC victimhood story. Can we please move on..

[@hombreg1]

As a latino, I concur. I'm tired of every single example of my culture, as represented in geek media, being either an oppressed, misunderstood but oddly psychopatic prick or a walking Mexican/Puerto Rican stereotype. Sometimes I wonder if these npc writers realise minorities are just people... In my case, people who just put lime and avocado on stuff and tend to be catholics.

[@pentelegomenon1175]

It's become a tool of politicians at this point, so they will never move on. They've introduced it in Europe now, where they never even had Jim Crow laws.

[@TheGreyWolf757]

Agreed, and it sucks because I used to go back and forth in thought on whether I wanted to create a comic/webtoon because I love manga and I've always wanted to take a shot at making one to see my ideas converted into a comic format based on some of the manga/video games that inspired me but I couldn't help but wonder that if I do will people avoid it due to repetitive ass "All Non-Whites are oppressed victims" narrative being peddled around and see a Black creator or Black MC and avoid my work... I didn't want to waste my time and I certainly didn't want a bunch of goofy ass leftist hitting me to include more diverse characters in my creations so I just gave up on the thought of making my own comic even though I have no intentions at all of creating anything as divisive/racist as this comic shown in the video. I don't read western comics - I prefer manga (and I hope that manga doesn't get ensnared in this political bullshit of western entertainment) - but I'm certain these far left type of comics can't be selling much... aren't the majority of comic book consumers White?

[@shawnculpepper4589]

The sad part is that the people who want to make minority characters without the victimhood stories or politics aren't given a chance to. Not unless they crowdfund of course.

[@strawberrybunny.2983]

Im partially self publishing because i don't mind/ want to have minorities in my stories but haaate having it be the only thing people give a shit about. At least when self publishing i can have as much control i can in how my story is presented.

[@satan2872]

I think Samuel has a reason to be angry. Yeah, I get it. Getting abandoned by your dad is tough shit. Having a baby then having to give it up is tough.(Not to me, it is just there for 9 months.) Making a relationship with people you can trust and having to suddenly move and break all those years of trust and friendship down for a job is tough.

[@despinasgarden.4100]

All of them have pretty good reasons to be angry, but the comic only take serious 2 of them

[@jojokingson6605]

Again? damn that sad.

[@Kal_g]

Bruh, when you said "Guess who is the villain is", I legit thought it was the girl. Not even lying.

[@sweetcinnamonpnchkin]

Same. Before he said that though, I thought the middle guy was the main character while the two on the sides were his friends. In my brain I thought they would be with him on a journey and reach main character status as well. Boooooy was I wrong.

[@nottoofast]

Same with me, honestly.

[@Kal_g]

@@sweetcinnamonpnchkin Kind of like your typical "travel the world in search of a higher cause" type of story. I think watching DSP trying to read the nutrition facts on the back of a cereal box would be more entertaining than reading "Alienated".

[@freedomkirax1020a]

Funny enough, by the end of the story... She kinda is... 😅

[@petriew2018]

you were arguably right...

[@adventuresteamstudios242]

Remember these words: Good art cannot save a bad story or vice versa Good Story cannot save a bad art

[@balasaashti3146]

Tell that to One. He's the author of one punch man and Mob psycho 100 his art improved over time of course but damn he knows how to write in general.

[@rolkflameraven1483]

I'm going to have to disagree. A bad story, no matter how well you dress it, is still bad, but a good story can make even stick figures amazing.

[@Mnoitte]

Disagree, if only because of the aforementioned One, and also Ryukishi07. Most of his stories I find have good concepts, and at the very least decent writing. There are like several series I can think of that have a creator that can write well, but can’t draw, or improved over time lol

[@-o-dq7nd]

I can look past bad art... But a bad Story ...nope

[@Soridan]

Good story doesn't save bad art, but it's a lot easier to deal with bad art if the story is good.

[@eldestgruff]

So it's Dollar General Chronicle.

[@Sorain1]

Who would pay a full dollar for this?

[@Mixinnitup]

Yeah another irony with stories like this is that it further dissuades people whose minds they might actually be trying to change from picking it up. BECAUSE there is no attempt to understand a perspective outside their own. Doubly ironic is that you, someone who very much disagrees with this ideology still routinely engages with it. Literally showing more willingness to look into and understand those whose opinions differ far more than stories like these ever do.

[@pentelegomenon1175]

According to that channel The Fourth Age that was supposedly the point, to create a "safe space" where they can just preach to the choir endlessly.

[@Prismatix]

Sooooo... the POC's in this book/comic are the "good guys" regardless the fact that they torture people, killed people, have no sympathy or reflecting over their evil doings, they caused physical and psychologically trauma, are so selfish/narcissistic that they can't look past themselves to see/understand that the people they harmed/killed might struggle as well, they are irrational, and they are not sorry at all. To me this comic/books sound more like portraiting people, who happends to be people of different races/gender, and they have some form of personality disorder/sociopathy since they go through with all this and doesn't learn anything or reflect over they horrible actions. And lacking any form of sympathy, empathy or moral code. Yeah, this isn't a book/comic about poor POC's and bad white people. I is a story about murderes with peraonality disorder/severe mental health issiues. Good job Just Some Guy! I enjoyed it :)

[@mattc.8839]

Man I feel sick just listening to this story. Everyone is mentioning Chronicle (good movie btw), but I remember as a kid feeling this way after I watched the old Twilight Zone episode where the kid had the special powers and the whole town was afraid of him so they had to pretend to be nice all the time. I remember feeling not only bad for those people, but hating that kid so much for how awful he was to people. Funny how this is basically the same story except the kid(s) with the powers is presented as good. Plus the TWZ episode ended with the people having to tell that evil kid that everything he did was "good". Kind of prophetic now.

[@Nemo-Nihil]

Nice Naruto nod. The sad thing is the concept or rather the theme that people just want to be accepted, validated and loved and trying to achieve that can twist a good person into a bad one - is a really interesting one. That can make for a really interesting story. Especially when you add into it an weird power like telepathy via an alien. It's sad that the premise of the story was clouded by bitter hatred.

[@benwest3223]

SJWs are the villains that the Golden Age heroes tried to warn us about.

[@mrmaxwell346]

Explain.

[@Sensei.Of.Kivotos]

How?

[@telephonepole8366]

@@mrmaxwell346 I think he might come from an alternate reality where heroes do exist

[@JSAst]

I'm pretty sure the moral of the story is if you find an alien life form in the woods... put it in the furnace and get on with your life.

[@nickmojo3697]

I’ve never seen such an aggressive compliment as his comments on the art near the end.

[@dime-a-thousand8002]

I read a Manhua (chinese manga) where the main character was the son of 2 cops and had to move away a lot when he was young because he was almost kid napped by some people who had a grudge against his dad. This is the kind of backstory I thought the white kid would have when it was shown that his mom was a cop so at 5:38 when I herd that he was constantly moving because of his mom's job my brain deflated to this background for him. But he need to be Darth Evil McWhiteBoy, so he was more sad about losing his friends than something interesting.

[@TSPH1992]

At least they got the name right. They "Alienated" the potential customers

[@robando2922]

I thought this was gonna a be cool comic but I dropped it after the "racist trump supporter" character. Now I basically only read power rangers XD

[@Toetalwar]

how has it come to just power rangers being readable? O.o

[@robando2922]

@@Toetalwar I mean to be fair I was reading a few others like Undiscovered Country, DIE, etc...but I always went back to power rangers. They are doing some crazy cool stuff with that franchise, especially with the dark multiverse power rangers stuff.

[@rickrogan2355]

@@Toetalwar Power Rangers comics go nuts most of the times.

[@MaddesG1]

Manga even tho most of it is crazy is in my honesty...way better

[@darthgamer9861]

Things have gone so far south that Power Rangers is the new high standard...I don’t know if I should be sad or impressed

[@bobi200samatar6]

The worst part is that the art is so so pretty, I'd want to read it.

[@Bacchian]

This sounds extremely similar to Chronicle...

[@despinasgarden.4100]

But chronicle was way better

[@spookzer16]

Is no one else terrified with the prospect that the, "kids", are supposed to be good people?

[@tomspiegel5322]

"You can walk right past this and you won't miss a thing." So, it's the same as 99% of Marvel and DC's current output.

[@Trollificusv2]

Man, I'm slow. Your analysis is not just "spot on sometimes", it's genius-level insightful every single time. I'm just now realizing "Hey, that's what I said about the last JSG video I watched. And the one before that..." And then some dim 25-watt lightbulb goes sputtering on above my head. "Hey, this guy might be worth following more closely!" Derpty durrr....anyway, thanks for the good work.

[@meccob.5927]

I was laughing the whole time as you described the story. I definitely agree you on give each character background and motivation. Where I disagree with you is when you mention the left. You are doing the same thing, you villainizing, and generalizing the left

[@edwinvanderhaeghen2221]

In a way it was generalization. But the writer of the story itself was clearly left leaning basing it on how he wrote his story and the message he brings. (of course this is not to say he represents all left leaning people). But it does point that people of far-left ideals tend to make the same mistakes in writing as the author does as this comic is not the only one that makes these mistakes, and there's a noticable pattern to be found.

[@Awesome_Pichu]

The comic should've ended with the alien being angry about how they hurt it, and vaporized the girl before leaving.

[@samwhary5498]

Why is it so hard to have good characters these days...? On that subject, I've often wondered.. if my life were a comic book, and you reviewed it, what would you think of me? Would I be as shallow and terrible as this lot? Would i be so mundane that I drive you mad? Have I any real virtue, or is it a beautiful lie? I suppose I could always... make it true. Make myself better today than I was yesterday. Aspire to be something more. To be the hero that we no longer see in comic books. To inspire others.

[@anghbalahr2971]

Let's call this story-writing the Abby-effect: when the writer wants everyone to symphatize with sociopaths. Edit: and fails to do so.

[@evanjrclarke1079]

Animal Farm the comic book. Some people are more worthy of equality and empathy than others

[@wiidlbeetle3857]

The art in that comic is superb! Love these videos.

[@MrSandmanTBB]

It takes two to make a baby but only one to blame for the pain

[@abigailslade3824]

You always hit the nail on the head JSG nicely done yet again.

[@thatdeliveryguy8975]

It's so fun and refreshing being portrayed as the villain again... One day people will look past something as simple as skin colour....

[@PB-tr5ze]

I expect that stories like this will become even more prevalent over the next 4 years. The promotion of being violent towards people who disagree with "progressive" politics, painting race as a virtue or a sin and raising up one group on the back of another... It's funny how similar this current movement is to the one that we, as a country, fought so hard to dismantle not 60 years ago... If history is any indication... Things can and might become a lot worse, not just in media, but in society.

[@AscendantStoic]

Except it (Progressivism a.k.a Communism a.k.a Marxism) wasn't dismantled, it ran away leaving behind an empty shell, then it changed its colors like a chameleon and hid in collages and schools brainwashing entire generations before leaping back into action full force around the time for 2016 election (and it's being championed by China now instead of Soviet Russia, and given the success of China it makes a much more dangerous threat than Soviet Communism).

[@thelaughingrouge]

How to ruin a good story? Publish it in 2020. Remove all mention of race, sex or background and tell me who the "good guys" are in this book.

[@andrehashimoto8056]

Step 1: publish it in 2020 or future years; Step 2: publish it IN THE US/EU Step 3: the publisher is a Marvel/DC level of Woketard company. Step 4: Make sure to make changes EXACTLY to SJW/Karen/Woketard/West Taiwan simps say to Step 5: enjoy a wasted story, paper/digital memory and money, including yours

[@TSPH1992]

@@andrehashimoto8056 West Taiwan simps. I am so going to use that against the wolf warriors

[@andresanguianozuniga6798]

@@andrehashimoto8056 Step 6: See how all falls And how the SJW cry cuz the product was a chance to make a change but they were so focused on being opressed than they stayed on the same.

[@zhee1236]

You know i have a similar story like Samir "Father leaving and starting a new Family blah blah" But I Wouldn't Instantly Murder him But Merely ask a question Like "Why Leave us" You Know the Classic Stuff Like what's the point of killing him anyway that wouldn't have achieve Anything

[@thatgirlateri]

As I am never going to buy this comic, I'm going to optimistically view this story (as relayed by you) as a look into the mind of people who legitimately feel this way IRL and take this as a testament of how insane they sound and act. I've also added an extra ending to this. "Chip" decides these folks cray and brings its folks back to eradicate the entire town because it did not sign up for this.

[@thatgirlateri]

@@Snakedude4life >shrugs< It'll fit right in with the canon story.

[@plantemor]

aaaaaaahhhh the art

[@qwertyman321]

Reminder that zealot need constant reinforcement to stay sane.

[@PrivateAccountXSG]

Appreciate you, man. Love your channel!

[@Rakshiir]

Honestly, these days im just done with "entertainment" we get. Mots of it is just badly written. And I am damn tired of getting told I just got where I am because I am a white man. What I did to get my job? Nah, that was just a gift. The fact that I was cheated by several girls? Propably JUST my fault. And I also propably deserved it becuase of reasons. The fact that I was victim of bullying in school? Propably also never happened. I just went from an open energetic child to a shut in introvert is just my fault. Oh and I propably also deserved it. And since I am a man, I am for sure also a sexist, rapist and whatever busswords they can come up with. The funny thing is that I these days think some of the things I could have changed. But while they happened, I didn`t know how, and no one cared. And right now it also feels like no one is talking about those things that propably still happen to this day. I am also aware of the fact that there are alot of people who have bigger problems in their life and also experienced way worse things. I just hate the fact that some people don`t want to see that those are real issues for kids of that age. And it can change a person for a long, long time. I want to see three dimensional characters. I don`t want to be force fed some agenda someone has. You can have political statements, but make them make sense, write them intelligent in a way the reader/viewer/player (depending on media) can decide for themselfs what they think about it. But that would be actual work.

[@austin9568AuraMasterDX]

Darnit, i thought the Asian chick was the villain, the Single Mom status must've given a +10 Oppression mod

[@Nyet-Zdyes]

+10 for being a minority... +10 more for being female +10 more for being oppressed by a male +10 for virtue signaling her fake care for the alien.

[@Zhtrik]

(Sigh) Another great idea destroyed by people using there ideology as a bludgeon to beat the reader over the head. Just Read Black Clover or something.

[@akwardshark7621]

@@Snakedude4life CHAINSAW MAN! CHAINSAW MAN! CHAINSAW MAN! WE LOVE YOU CHAINSAW MAN

[@darthgamer9861]

Can’t go wrong with Berserk or Rurouni Kenshin

[@donutbevil9669]

@@akwardshark7621 You fool! Don't love him. *FEAR HIM!*

[@donutbevil9669]

@@walterwhitecookingchannel8912 It also shows how resentment, revenge and hatred can perpetuate a seemingly endless and inescapable cycle. While the Marleyans had every right to defeat and even overthrow the Eldians once upon a time, outright enslaving and oppressing them in turn was the absolute worst thing they could have done that still ended up out of control because of natural human corruption. It didn't help that Marley and the rest of the world were all too eager to dehumanize Eldians as demons.

[@joyc.e.7511]

My Hero Academia is pretty good too. Actually tackling discrimination (with kinds of quirks) and the issues their hero-dependent society has. It's leaps and bounds above whatever the fuck Alienated was supposed to be. And the art's fantastic

[@LordVodka313]

This was so well done and articulated I just had to subscribe!

[@VoltitanDev]

Who needs villains with heroes like these

[@babulbi]

Jesus, the way the girl got a happy ending and felt no remorse for any of the events is just awful.

[@Happyisboss]

Gay Sam was literally incorrect... like he assumed his dad hated him for his sexuality when that was literally never the problem, also this book plays with people's lives way too much, like people seem to just deserve to die at any given point it's really sadistic and sociopathic with how far the brutality murder people

[@brendancoulter5761]

Its so sadistic. Its less a story about fighting evil and more torturing any one you dont like. It delights in the suffering of characters who increasingly do not deserve to be forced to suffer.

[@kiebahow442]

When the cliché is so obvious: Android 13: “Look at ma trucker hat!” *Imperial March plays with truck noises* “I SAID look at ma trucker hat.”

[@sirapple589]

“I’d tip my hat to ya, BUT I LOST IT!” DBZA and TFS as a whole are filled with great quotes.

[@egcooper3800]

I already wasn’t a fan of this book, but the part of them torturing that girl by using her religion ticked me off. I personally don’t think there is any worse (or better, I guess) way to break someone than to turn their own religion against them. I think that’s whole new level of messed up, I can’t believe it didn’t change those other kids at all. It irks me especially as a Christian myself, and that scene hit a little too close to home for me.

[@ericbreen4340]

I am the Villain of this Comment Section .

[@mr.midnight1997]

I'm a white, straight, cis man! I'M the villain of this comment section!

[@DD8842]

@@mr.midnight1997 me to brother

[@arthurmorgan2861]

Darn you, your devious machinations' have finally born fruit

[@dougdonelson9471]

I am Spartacus.

[@dimmest88]

@@dougdonelson9471 no IM Spartacus

[@emperortrevornorton3119]

Comic books are supposed to be a way of escapism not oh political views, political ideas, and political bullshit even though character development for most part is really awesome they could not maybe have the good "friends" could have practiced peaceful conversations to deal with some of the problems that is from a former racist until I realized how much of moronic ass brain I was everyone is human no matter what color they are we all need each other

[@rancidcorpse6690]

yknow, if they had these three caracters equal and there being an adult outer force manipulating chip this comic would have worked and it could be as an example of how diverse people can still work together.

[@edwinvanderhaeghen2221]

Based. And you're right.

[@AmuroRay007]

It is no goddamn coincidence that they drew Leon looking like a kid version of Trump.

[@woventales9880]

These stories would make great super-villain origins but that’s just me.

[@Sorain1]

The kind where when they die screaming in agony, you cheer instead of feeling any sympathy. This is dead on the kind of thing you use to set up utterly vile villains for stories.

[@viewofuranus8190]

When all mainstream media is monolithic in their message everything is stagnate and route. One of my favorite things I have written was an SJW Democratic senator's daughter who was shallow, self centered, racists with low expectations and white savior guilt...in other words the last person I would want anything to do with in RL. However, she faced adversity, learned how the world really works and developed depth and nuance! Empathy...sympathy are just as important to a writer as grammar!

[@wrongthinker843]

"Kind who feels persecuted when anyone else gets a win" Hmm, now why does that sound familiar?

[@asherkosmos4312]

These... these aren't comic book stories. These are the very fantasy of the writer wants to be a reality

[@raven800plays]

We live in an era where comic book writers are turning heroes into villains and getting absolutely shocked that people are getting upset or even outright continuing to support said heroes after they've become the villains (hail Hydra). So they figure they'll make the good guys look like bad guys and give the bad guys absolutely no backstory because we're just supposed to assume that they're bad. It's brilliant (sarcasm).

[@sandymcmahon984]

Another on-point review, even though you're Just Some Guy. Thanks for your hard work and great writing too.

[@Luminus2]

It's basically far-Left creators telling stories to themselves as usual. Don't expect this to stop anytime soon.

[@hisdudeness8328]

"If the world is only ever going to see a fox as shifty and untrustworthy, what's the point in trying to be anything else?"

[@rulfurus2162]

"nice story wont save bad porn" Good style wont save this comic.

[@TheJpmuzz]

So the single mother has all the rights but torments the father

[@oliveravery9575]

Wym "all the rights"? She's a teen mom. This wasn't a custody battle, it was a guy abandoning his child and its mother.

[@WarriorDan]

"And the last two issues are completely ridiculous..." wait, hold up, the previous issues WEREN'T already ridiculous? :D

[@Arendelft]

Just Some Guy, you really need more subs, you deserve more. A channel like yours easily deserves to be up there with HeelVsBabyFace, Nerdrotic and even Critical Drinker. You're reviews are art in and of themselves, the breakdowns pointing out every flaw with excruciating detail, and in that dismantling people can see the sadness of it all, what could have been. Had these "writers" not been consumed and blinded by their own ignorance and hate they could have made truly meaningful stories that had impact, instead, they made this, an empty, hollow attempt at going with the mainstream narrative, at playing it as safe as they could to try and appeal to a crowd of people who will never buy their book. Oh what I would do to get my mind as tuned as yours JSG, you're skills are legend. The only videos I arguably look forward to more than your own are Critical Drinkers, and both of you sometimes have long bouts of not publishing videos and then, on awesome days like these, you both publish videos on the same day. Now stay safe out there! The world is so busy eating itself through stupidity that anything can happen and believe it or not, the world needs more like you JSG, not less, so stay breathing, and stay you. Toodles.

[@misssamira7686]

Samir commits suicide? Does the writer realise that is the biggest sin Arabamic Faith's? Oh wait...

[@miriamreinhardt8939]

This review is a great guide on what NOT to do when writing a story. Keep up the good work!

[@bravotone6637]

Thank god, "Kamen America" and "NamWolf", and like ANY MANGA exist. This is bottom of the barrel alongside 99% of DC and Marvel

[@Sorain1]

@@Snakedude4life Can't say it's unhealthy with alternatives like this...

[@Steven9567]

@@Sorain1 in truth it never was flooding your nation with foreign people is just going to crate conflict actually japan its not the only country every country is like that

[@treythegamerwolf551]

@@Snakedude4life can you blame them

[@thedarkwolf9423]

I stopped collecting comics about ten years ago, mostly because they just started getting too expensive... now I get the feeling I haven’t been missing much... :(