10 college app essay mistakes to AVOID

I edit A LOT of college application essays, and these are the most common mistakes I see. Plz avoid them at all costs. Your admissions officer will thank you.
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[@danielledupreez]

Hey guys! If you're interested in having me edit your college essays at an affordable price ($20 for a standard Common App essay), then please check out my website: danielledupreez.com/

[@danielledupreez]

Good question! Right now it’s pretty manageable, but December last year was insane. If you submit before October you will miss most of the rush!

[@sophieye630]

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[@riyam01]

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[@Kyle-uv2br]

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[@joanesperanza7519]

1. Learn to use em dashes 2. Learn to use parenthesis functionally, instead of replacing commas with them. 3. Avoid etc. It is used informally, and you should avoid putting general details, or assume that the officers are going to tacitly understand. 4. Avoid broad statements about life, (e.g in life we should enjoy the simple things). Because they are probably cliche, your experience in life is limited, and for a adult is a little hard to read. 5. Avoid perpetually, continuously or similars.Your life experience is limited, and you probably haven't had much time to do something like that. Focus on the intensity to which you do it. 6. Avoid breaking the fourth wall. It might take the reader out of the immersion in your story. 7. Use proper nouns. It gives the noun weight. Saying the specific number amounts on hours is also useful. 8. Avoid being too positive. Bring complexity and communicate maturity. 9. Avoid leaving out critical content to understand your story. Do not count on the fact that the officers will figure out where do you come from. 10. Make emphasis in the fact that your story illustrates just one step in your continuous growth. Also, communicating humility is useful.

[@EyeLean5280]

Thanks!

[@Majestic469]

No spoilers

[@AleighaNicole]

Continuously. Perpetually. We just was tryna sound smart. Lol

[@talulahsafir]

"Furthermore" and "Thus" are my personal favorites

[@nailahhuq1238]

Best vid of its type! Currently working on a lot of college essays

[@SmileyEssie]

love these great tips and advice for the common app essay! these are so useful! thanks danielle! :) good luck on your exams!!

[@giannigiovful]

I'm not sure the em dashes matter, since when I enter it into the common app, it turns back into a single en dash. Maybe if I upload from google drive it's different, I haven't tried that. Either way, it means they'll be getting a ton of essays with en dashes even when someone does it correctly.

[@calvin2681]

Wow, these are amazing tips. No wonder Stanford accepted you! Your video provided so many insights and essential help, especially during the last part. Thank you so much!!!

[@rimikabanerjee314]

what sucks is on UC you can't do the em dash

[@msugal]

I was hesitant about using an admission counseling, but you changed my mind. I’ll be contacting you and will definitely use your editing services. Awesome video.

[@wkifas]

Thank you Daniell, the tips are simple but will make a difference in my essay.

[@gcincinnati]

Thank you for posting this! I also edit college/MBA App essays and I really wish I could hand students a list of DOs and DON'Ts before they start! 100% on the 'passion' usage - ugh. In Japan, it is 'hardworking'.

[@moochistacy2425]

Best advices I've ever watched! So amazing! Thank you very much!!! Very unique and direct to the point. Also love your personality! Thank you for sharing!!! You are amazing👍

[@_Gaby_950]

This is super helpful. Thanks a lot

[@raymondzhao6015]

Any tips for students who haven't started their essays?! I'm completely screwed...

[@hannahcluff9717]

Start out by making a list of what to include in your essay. Take all of those items and summarize them for your opening and closing paragraphs. Then expand on each item by 50 to 100 words. It cuts down the time of actually writing your essay in half.

[@sakumollyinter]

Love this video!!! Although I know you put your focus mostly on freshman admission, but would you be able to give some advice for transfer common app essay, which is a totally different beast!😂

[@bryantomp7298]

does anyone know how we can send her our essays to edit

[@keyserthegeyser4031]

Video on choosing major and college please

[@miannalov9559]

"You Can’t Wait for Inspiration. You Have To Go After It With a Club"-Jack London.

[@gabrieltawiah1113]

can you please help me

[@davisjohn1517]

Which website do you write essays to college on

[@erik6276]

I'm afraid. I don't know what to write. I'm in junior year, I have some topics but I cannot manage to either be concise enough to get my point across or I get no ideas on what to write. HALP

[@Beautyfreax1]

How did that end up resulting?

[@michellelekas211]

Just do NOT use dashes at all. Why do that? They look juvenile unless you are a french philosopher.

[@lilialola123]

"Mostly done"?! I am screwed if I haven't really started? The deadline is January 1st so in less than a month, I still have quite some time no?

[@nityanair9788]

Ideally, if you want to apply to a lot of selective colleges, you want to write and rewrite, cater your essays to the interests of each college, and get tips from people who are close to you who can give you a second opinion. I would allot 3 months to really honing on your essays, but given your capabilities, you may need more or less.

[@lifeandstuff599]

Would writing about my neighborhood with a minimal emphasis on myself be a bad idea?

[@danielledupreez]

Yes. The essay should always be about you.

[@SuperKatlou]

For future reference, I would suggest that you should give written examples of each problem early on in your explanations so your advice will have much more impact on the listener. It was hard to follow at times.

[@speedcubesam]

My essay refers a lot to both my brother and my dad, but I'm not sure whether or not to use their names and or just keep it to "my brother". I feel it would be weird to use their names and my name never comes up

[@danielledupreez]

It’s fine to make familial references without names!

[@maxwang6561]

Hi! Your videos are very helpful and I really learned a lot from them! As a junior, I want to ask that if it is ok to talk a little bit about race in the essay(no radical views involved, I am up for racial equality) and some of my ideas after reading diverse opinions about the topic. Hopefully you see the comment and are able to give me an answer! Thanksss

[@missjaay1707]

Dude you kill me !!! This girl has has enough!!

[@samuelzih7858]

pls i want to ask if ican send some essays to you so you can go through for me ... will that be possible

[@sam17577]

gonna cry ✌️😳

[@evanolsen7446]

I am an American living in China 😂 (whole Junior year of high school). But I went cold turkey and didnt mention it at all in my essay.

[@danielledupreez]

Nice! But thats pretty cool

[@vincentvangoghaway7778]

Is mentioning that your parent is a drug dealer inappropriate if it's an important factor in the development of the story?

[@jstanovic]

Why does she remind me of an old girlfriend who thought she knew everything... and saw the world through her own lens?

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She looks like Jonas from dark 🙈

[@cjneppey2053]

Edits essays but there's a typo in the description. Not a lot of credibility

[@danielledupreez]

haha thanks for pointing that out! but also this is my youtube channel...I don’t even use capital letters on here half the time. it’s just a difference in the level of formality of business vs. social, and yt is a social network to me not a job