Do NOT Submit Your Common App Without Watching This!! | 7 Deadly Sins (by Yale 2020 grad)

Not clickbait. Here are the common application essay 7 deadly sins:
1. weak ash hooks
2. problem-solution ratio
3. things happening to you vs. you making things hapen
4. lack of specificity
5. no contribution to campus
6. no demonstrated personal growth
7. obvious insights
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[@alejandroquinterocashore4603]

Deadly sin #3 is so tempting! At a first glance, it would seem more logical to describe the circumstances and people who got you to where you are today. The 20, 60, 20 ratio is definitely a good way to make sure that you showcase what you can bring to a college.

[@Azizaaly]

These are the 7 deadly sins that I commit in my common app essay. You are doing great work. Thank you so much. Keep it up. You really deserve millions of subscribers. Usually I don't write any comments. I write comments to your videos.

[@jacob-gc8ts]

Thank you Kevin! I'll make sure to watch out for these 7 Deadly Sins when I write my Common App. :)

[@0xNightxade]

It really is clear to me now that I need to be more conscientious about being more specific and detailed in my descriptions in order to really convey my character and processes, thank you!

[@theatregirl7851]

so helpful!! this makes me feel pretty good about my essay, all i’m struggling with is the hook. my essay is about my journey with makeup/eyeshadow palettes and how i went from someone who hid in the background to someone bold and self-confident because of my makeup. my first sentence is “i bought my first eyeshadow palette at the beginning of freshman year.” i kind of like it because it’s simplistic and unconventional, but it’s also not super exciting yk? but the rest of my essay seems to align with your advice though :)

[@Eli-gn3km]

I wish I had your videos when I was writing my applications lol; I'm looking back at my essays and seeing all the edits I would have made.

[@elevatedschool]

I made these same mistakes too lizzy lol somehow we slipped through the cracks haha 😇

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[@brendan.j.chung927]

I can't believe this doesn't have more likes; this is so helpful!!

[@elevatedschool]

Thank you grandchenbun!

[@igntrollington5519]

Hi Kevinnn, thank you so much for your videos! Could you please maybe do one on the current Yale supplements if you have spare time? Alsooo side note, I remember reading your Quora answer about Exeter a few years back and seeing you on that Business Insider article hahahah!

[@elevatedschool]

For sure! That's a great suggestion! I think I can pump one out by this weekend

[@ndindakasyoka5733]

I legit clicked on your video just because of the seven deadly sins but this has been surprisingly insightful I came looking for Copper but I found Gold!! Thank you so much

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[@Jopzip]

I just want to say you are helping me so much with these videos. Columbia is my dream and the deadline is Nov. 1st! This is a long shot but maybe you could look over my essay?

[@elevatedschool]

Hey Aiden, unfortunately I'm absolutely swamped this week and won't be able to look at your essay. I am so so sorry and wish you the best of luck in your journey!!

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Did you get in?

[@SuperDuperNonsense]

hey kevin! your vids have been super helpful to me and the discord server i'm in! would it be cool if we could meet again for last minute CA changes?

[@elevatedschool]

sure :)

[@ayechanphyo6672]

Hello, Kevin!Thank you so much for your advice. Not sure if you remember, I commented and asked you about the college app review session and you sent me a link for that. I was wondering to when I would have my essays ready and tried to register a session today but, found that I couldn’t for this month as it is full.I am sorry I know you must be busy with all the registrations but, I really needed it so I wanted to make sure if there is any possibility for a college app review for this month from u?

[@elevatedschool]

Hi Aye, unfortunately I'm all booked for sessions until the end of the year. So sorry! -Kev

[@ayechanphyo6672]

Ah it’s okay .Thank you, Kevin!

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you're welcome Tilda! :3

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[@elevatedschool]

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[@elevatedschool]

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[@makkeedahmitchell6167]

Hey Kevin I really liked your advice would you mind looking over my essay and giving me couple feed backs because honestly I have been struggling with this essay for months

[@elevatedschool]

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