Downfall by BronyWriter [MLP Fanfic Reading] (Grimdark)

[@TomsTown]

"Dear princess Celestia, have you ever wanted to kill somepony?" WELL THAT ESCALATED QUICKLY!?

[@wendigostudiosLNandMlp66]

Streaks Yeah...

[@Cosmicthemenace]

What a way to start a story

[@somedudewhodraws9377]

I mean this isnt too far fetched from the Real Twilight. Shes always on edge and constantly stressed out in the show. She rarely gets time to herself when thiers not a world ending threat thiers her stressing over being arranged and in order. Shes like a perfectionest in a way. Dont forget she kinda went insane with the CMC's in one episode. Whos to say thier wont be a day when she just snaps and cant take this stress anymore?

[@annemarieroberts1449]

Looks like she’s going insane on us 😰

[@somedudewhodraws9377]

@@annemarieroberts1449 I know and its scary too :C Twilights one of my top 10 favorite Ponies too.

[@peabody66]

Twilight Sparkle's actions put a new meaning in the term "Curiosity killed the cat."

[@emilylarson8837]

Damn

[@coyotealienss]

Oh wow...... :)

[@cube5337]

peabody66 oh god damnit

[@MultiverseSonic]

in this case it's "Curiousity killed the Pony."

[@AgentAYM]

But satisfaction brought it back

[@CapnJigglypuff]

I can never get enough of Kagome's Twilight voice. She doesn't sound like Tara, but it doesn't seem like she's trying to sound like Tara, and I love that.

[@Rofloflcopta]

It sounds like tara

[@twilight3272]

I think you added a word there

[@somedudewhodraws9377]

I dont think shes trying to sound like Tara. She seems to be doing her own version of Twilight.

[@revaslatts4301]

It sounds like Tara to me.

[@RFToob]

I can just see Princess Celestia shaking her head at the first few letters...and shaking her head turns into shaking entirely...shaking entirely turns into fear...fear turning into panic...panic turns to nightmares...and nightmares into a horrible reality. A reality in witch her 'faithful student' is now a paranoid psychopathic monster, who kills for 'science'. And now the Princess must end her student's torment, once and for all. You can only imagine how the Celestia feels on the receiving end of this.

[@wendigostudiosLNandMlp66]

Russ Ferris Poor Celestia

[@Cuteilation]

*which

[@Avalonest]

@@katelynthewhitewerewolf6376 They feel relaxed...and they make me relaxed as well if i look at them

[@DaniFox10000]

Yeah but hear me out on this...what if Twilight never discovered them after the murder[s]

[@FirestormDDash]

The wild thing is, im sure real life had this play out. At least one time. A mental illness all written out. Clear as day, but nobody ever saw it until it was over.

[@Flowerbarrel]

The worst part of this is that there are people out there who killed the first time from curiosity or kill for the exhilaration. Twilight already had her answer.

[@Jacqueline_Oat]

Yeah for us, but probably not in the magical land of equestria. They dont have murder happen often I'd assume.

[@revaslatts4301]

​​@@Jacqueline_Oat Except for Sombra.

[@budsif]

Thought this would be an "edgy serial killer with no remorse or psychological side effects" story. Was positively surprised. Good reading too.

[@creeperman40]

"Sincerely your faithful student twilight sparkle", never has this been more ironic.

[@schustette4]

This is proof that Twilight is TWISTED. I understand she wants to know what it's like to kill, but there are less extreme methods, like TALK TO A RECENT KILLER.

[@heavenlydiscorded4495]

XD so true but she might wanna c know 1st hand u like... you p wanna know what pain is for yourself... or killing yourself. c.. or a things k like e that s

[@schustette4]

night pony that is true, but apparently twilight was hung at the end, which I do think was a little extreme. Even though she is my least favorite character, she didn't deserve that because she only did it out of curiosity.

[@heavenlydiscorded4495]

Sarah Schuster true but you killed a living pony bc of curiosity.... and i dont see why it toke so long for her to do something about it when she could have stopped her from the start... i would not even do that but i do understand .... also yes the punishment was extreme but she did get what was coming bc she was going to kill more pones... the next one could have been me or you

[@heavenlydiscorded4495]

also one more thing SHE WAS GOING TO KILL FUTTERSHY FOR CRYING OUT LOUD MY FAVORITE CHARACTER

[@Guidingsonar]

The story stated that it had been decades sence a pony killed another- there is mo recent murderer for her to talk to-

[@jeweltara]

this was pritty good thank god you avoided the whole "I killed all my friends" thing seems like since "cupcakes" every grimdark that involves the mane 6 has them turning on eachother,this had only snipits of that and was a natural conclusion for Twilight's slow decent into madness,nicely done

[@emotikontruck491]

Twilight's logic in short: "I'm going to report all of the details about my fantasies and actual murder, so the Royalities can prosecute me for murdering, having hard evidence against me." *After a half of the fic* : "Well, now I'm gonna stop that". *Later* : "I'm gonna write letters anyway.". Pure genius. XD

[@Clyburn9057hi]

Great.... Twilights a murderer, Pinkie Pies insane, Rainbow Dash is a rocket to insanity, Apple jack will bake you into pie like pinkie, Fluttershy is creepy and demented, and rarity wants to makes dresses.... with your flesh. Man if I could get all these animated (which might be a good side project when um into animation with my art) I think it would be fascinating....

[@mrboerger1620]

and the crusaders are there assistants and spike moved to back to canterlot

[@Clyburn9057hi]

SSJ Mikey Pinkie pie is the only lucky one since she would just watch and eat popcorn while all hell breaks lose UAU;

[@mrboerger1620]

+Clyburn Wubz (The Unboxing Artist X3) I'm pretty sure spike is the only lucky one here since he hasn't turned insane

[@Clyburn9057hi]

SSJ Mikey True but being with twilight and having his mother figure lose her mind probably would cause some trama but he still gets away scott free. :)

[@mrboerger1620]

+Clyburn Wubz (The Unboxing Artist X3) heh yeah but being safe is better then being trap with twilight I could imagine what spike was said when he left it'll probably be between the lines of oh god yes or sweet celestial thank you 😃

[@lukecolumbus13]

[Music used (In order of appearance)] 0:00 Myuu -- Scent of Night 2:17 Myuu -- Walk into Darkness 4:37 Myuu -- Not Tomorrow (Silent Hill 2 Cover) 5:25 Kevin Macleod -- Quinn's Song (A New Man) 7:17 Myuu -- True (Silent Hill 2 Cover) 8:41 Kevin Macleod -- Classic Horror 1 10:27 Myuu - Hitsujigamine (Catherine Cover) 18:49 Myuu -- Angst 19:35 Myuu -- Something's Wrong 20:05 Myuu -- Misconception (Piano Version) 21:10 Kevin Macleod - Unnatural Situation 22:10 Myuu - SAW Theme (Charlie Clouser Cover) 23:01 Myuu -- Bad Encounter 25:42 Kevin Macleod - Controlled Chaos 26:52 Myuu -- Nebula 27:55 Myuu -- Erinnerung 31:07 myuu - Mein Herz Brennt (Rammstein Cover)

[@littlepip4014]

Doing god’s work 🙏

[@babythecupheadlikesRPS]

huh, most of the music is from Myuu.

[@I_Eat_Lemons]

... you literally took this from the description.

[@roboticspider4554]

my little grimdark, creepiness is magic

[@Cyber_Horse_Studios87]

(Twilight) “What goes through a ponies mind that makes them want to kill innocent ponies? Hmm...” “...LETS FIND OUT!🤪”

[@anthonyporche8110]

Twilight: Okay. So, the good news is that I finally discovered what it's like to to take a pony's life! A little disappointing if I'm honest. The bad news is I'm gonna get arrested and then executed.

[@jnoone2099]

WOW.....this got dark extremely quick lol well Twilight always showed signs of psychotic tendencies in the actual show lol

[@Minebuilder12]

Dear princess celstia, I will stop giving you incriminating evidence..... Next week Your fathful student, Twilight sparkle

[@puppyhowler]

she never sent the letters

[@SenpaiHoran]

puppyhowler Twilight was evicted, Celestia is reading the letters in the end and it mentioned she couldn't get the image of Twilight being executed from her head.

[@Minebuilder12]

When the letters were found they would have been a huge amount of evidence even if she hadn't exposed her self. And for some reason she kept the letters instead of burning them. So she knew that if she committed the crime she would eventually commit and kept the letters to her self it would ether be incriminating evidence and a good record of what not to become a psychopath or the ramblings of a mad pony. So she knew what the letters would do and kept writing them on purpose so she could probably keep them to herself. So in the end she knew it could be the end of her if she kept writing and she did it anyway. So she knew that she was digging her own grave and she eventually did. The way my comment comes into play was that I was saying what course of action she should have taken and I was representing that by using Twilight to act as if was writing it herself. And if you made it this there is cookies and punch by the door.

[@cube5337]

The Doctor ha

[@carastone1897]

Why didn't Luna witness these dreams

[@moistmikutoy9110]

Cara Stone that is a reasonable question

[@maxmyzer9172]

i was gonna ask to

[@roboticspider4554]

Cara Stone probably it was made before we knew that luna could go in dreams

[@sethnowac8564]

"Hello, everypony. Did I miss anything?"

[@lynx3950]

wow... i never thought of that...

[@satanscat2333]

My entire thought process during this keeps switching from “damn twilight” to “poor twilight”

[@superlemonsama8794]

"dear princess celestia, have you ever wondered what it's like to kill another pony?" kek, im pretty sure celestia KNOWS what its like to kill another pony. also you could get plastered taking a shot for everytime twilight says "well". i love this fic and its narration, but once i noticed it, hooboy.

[@McPrince-cl4to]

"What I read... it disturbed me... as well as fascinated me." Me too Twi, that's why I am here

[@cursed_korbun]

God, your voice as twilight gives me chills!! The emotion in your voice is so haunting! And the way Scribbler sounded in the recording!!!

[@MidgeArts]

great voice acting!

[@stevelosee7022]

did I just listen to emogak kill scribbler? I honestly don't know how I feel about this... thanks emogak for keeping me awake for the rest of the week

[@Strawberry_Cubes]

Celestia: my dear sister what is wrong Luna: your student is FUCKED, I AINT GOING IN THAT DREAM WORLD AGAIN FUCK THAT SHIT

[@TotalFreakZoid]

This is the first time I will ever put a dramatic reading into my favourites. You are amazing and I don't know if you already do more of this, but I would love to hear more of this!

[@hadesunderword6926]

First it was pinkie now it is twilight this fandom is getting better and better

[@CrystalPawProduction]

Dont you mean worse and worse

[@leechbucket]

hades underword well My favorite pony is AppleJack because she hasn't killed anyone... Little miss RarityButcher shy PInkamina diane pie and Twilight

[@RedPirateMercenaries]

I must say fantastic; truly one of the best readings ever. The story itself is only part of the actual emotion this fic represents, you filled the rest with an exceptionally stellar performance. You perfectly captured all that she was feeling; despair, fear & helplessness, that a killer in the shoes (or, better, hooves) of Twilight would feel if they were truly scared of themselves. I've been listening to other readings for several different grimdark/gore pony fics but by far you defiantly have done the best. Please give yourself a pat on the back, I hope you actually become a voice actor (as your channel states), I'm sure you will do a fantastic job.

[@onealone-jt8oi]

Wow, this has a similar Gothic horror feel to Poe's "The Telltale Heart" Good work, author! And good work, reader, you gave Twilight the right almost bland, almost regretful tone that was just right for the reading. Thanks!

[@thezambambo2184]

I just imagine her eye becoming more and more like it is in the picture with each letter

[@lunawyse]

Shouldn't Princess Celestia have done something when this all started

[@NoobFish23]

I don't think she sent them. She said she wouldn't be in the first letter.

[@roboticspider4554]

ya at 0:12 she said she wouldn't

[@nnova4036]

she only sent them after the entire thing.

[@lonireve8329]

This is the best fanfic i ever listened. You put so much emotions in this, that I it just feel like Twilight was reading this.

[@BANANASROCK31]

Its kind of scary how well this was done. I'm literally sitting in my room trying not to make any noise as to what I am listening too 😯 it may have been a shocking reading, but the acting and sound effects were amazing. All I can say is wow

[@chromechaser8775]

Twilight:Disturb me... Me:Twilight...You disturb me :\

[@angelofdeath9477]

Holy shit this was intense...I have to wonder if the writer of this fic has had similar thoughts and urges. It just seemed to real to be entirely made up. Still though, this was beautifully done. Spot on voice acting and chilling narration. 10 out of 10!

[@kowhaifan1249]

That’s kinda mean

[@emmy8308]

26:21-26:44 Okay, Twilight, this is really scaring me now. I wasn't really scared until this came up.

[@revaslatts4301]

I know, right? Obviously, this story was scaring me enough, but the tone of her voice in that moment is enough to scare the hell outta me.

[@darknessmohag6181]

best music ever to choose at the start, it really set the tone for this fanfic!

[@envynoson]

12:18 Damn it Twilight why do you still sound so nerdy.

[@nonamenoname9322]

Wow, I haven't felt disturbed like that in a REALLY long time. The screams. Oh gawd. Wow. Just. Wow. Bravo. I'm officially unnerved.

[@princeeverfree4422]

About 70% sure Scribbler is a changeling. Mostly from the voices (nopony does that many so well). That and she is so well loved. Great story by the way, is it wrong that I enjoyed this as much as I did O:-)

[@Rofloflcopta]

Downfall...this reminds me of something. FEGELEIN!!!(search it on KZbin or untergang)

[@jjcinnaberry]

This could a actually happen in this world. Someone gets excited by death and how it works. This is why this scares me.

[@coldhaixx1905]

Welp time to rejecc humanity

[@stuffandthangs9893]

@@coldhaixx1905 and return to monke

[@coldhaixx1905]

@@stuffandthangs9893 return to horse

[@oakenshadow6763]

Going on a spree of relistening to MLP fics. This one always left an impression on me.

[@SpecialInterestShow]

Twilight's out here like: "therapy? I don't know her."

[@Alpha121198]

It is hard to listen to the "tape" of subject no. 1's death. It feels sickening, and those screams… I think most of us have wondered, "What is it like to kill another living thing?" Most of us don't do it, I hope, simply because the actually thought is intriguing but when we actually start thinking about possibly doing it we feel sickened by the thought. Some don't commit the act under threat of incarceration. Personally I feel like crap for lying to a friend or having a spider killed because of my phobia. If I were to kill another person, I don't think I'd be able to continue on with anything after the fact. I was honestly flinching and shuddering through this reading. And I'm not even done yet.

[@FirestormDDash]

Wish I found this channel earlier. Really solid. Really convincing VA.

[@steel58836]

The monsters we hear about, don't live on the outside... They reside inside of us.

[@ThePastelPestilence]

i listened to this so many times u have no idea! i love this so much ur voice is amazing and this story is just ah yes u know XD i am in love with ur twi voice its so perfect !

[@redactedtoon7420]

Is this some kind of sick joke? Twilight: do you see me f****** laughing my n**** I ain't f****** laughing!

[@FHBStudio]

Awesome! We passed by this story a few times on the livestream but narrating in character is quite taxing. You did an excellent job!

[@joshuaklatka9591]

well, brony writer knows the ins and outs of a serial killer, they are mostly of high intelligence, first they experiment, for a while they are caught in conflict with their emotions until they feel the confidence to kill again and then we all know what happens from there.

[@Ieatpaste23]

I would have said to Twilight, "Well, if you're going to kill me could you be a lamb and kill me with kindness?"

[@chrischalmers3984]

Twillights voice is VERY good!

[@Autistic_Changeling]

Ok, it's four in the morning and I need to go watch some official MLP so I can sleep.

[@unnamed1613]

First time?

[@Autistic_Changeling]

@@unnamed1613 what do you mean?

[@maddragon1568]

Omg my hands are shaking why!! 😖😰Anyways great voice on twilight

[@maddragon1568]

God dammit it's 4:09!! "Crap"

[@Wirehead18]

Awesome! I loved it! Best reading of one of my stories yet.

[@scarykid101]

please for the love of celestia do not turn up your volume when shes screaming, your ears shall break.

[@scarykid101]

Bundt head Lmao

[@saphiriathebluedragonknight375]

Fortunately for me I saw it coming and turned it down ahead of time.

[@wandaroger1688]

WadewGAME true................................ I learned that the hard way 😐😐😐😐😐😐😐 and twilight say hi to doctor hooves for me 😏😏😴😏

[@jakeb526]

Too late

[@101wolfanime]

That poor mare, I'm glad I turned down my volume ahead of time. And Twilight freaking out about the blood.

[@somedudewhodraws9377]

Jesus! Poor Twilight! Makes u wonder how long shes had these insane thoughts in her head? Also Scribblers really good at screaming in pain and her screams legit made me feel disturbed too!

[@aphache619]

around 17:30 i took off my headphones yelling "hell to the no" while in extreme terror

[@lautarogomez176]

Madness has made twilight fall into the darkness and sins

[@maximstuckert9274]

...perfect

[@ahrimain4eva]

WOW it's actually been 10 years since this released, time really flies. i watched this when i was a kid, literally like 12 or 13 years old, and even after all these years it's stuck with me. it's so unlike other grimdark fics, it feels so grounded and realistic (if you ignore the pony parts lol). i am especially fond of how twilight is written in this, her way of think resembles an exaggerated mix of psychosis and OCD, i suffer from this combination so maybe thats why this story captivated me, her freakouts throughtout the story remind me of the panic attacks i suffer from (over dumb shit, not candy colored pony murder obviously). thank you so much emogak for narrating this ! i never would've discovered it on my own !

[@saigakiragami]

This is brilliant!

[@saigakiragami]

@_- Dim light -_ "Insert okay face" *responds to comment from 5 years ago

[@psiphi8065]

This is one of the best readings I have heard... You just got a subscriber! :D

[@NightcoreLAStartingANewWorld]

The monsters we all can be

[@heiscute4207]

Including Tinky Winky Tank (Slendytubbies)

[@TsuriaDragon]

I was listening to this very early in the morning before going to bed I hope I don't develop a habit desire to kill my friends lol wow ms.emogak you bring so much emotions into Twiley it's beautiful loved it

[@MakiNishiguchi]

bruh

[@woolynchlightemerald]

Twilight: 0:06 Celestia: “spit out of her drank” WHAT!?

[@Yoshachu]

Too bad Twilight never took into account the sheer guilt that would slowly consume her after the deed had been done.

[@Catboi9000]

T: "Have you ever wondered what it's like to kill another person?" C: "Who the f*ck starts a conversation like that I just sat down."

[@StopChangingMyNameYoutube1]

Thiis fic reminds me of Edgar allen Poe's Tell Tale Heart for some reason.

[@luckystar9279]

Ooh! I've read the telltale heart. I guess their both about someone wanting to kill someone, though the tell tale heart's character was a little more specific about who the mc wanted to kill.

[@merrygowrong5866]

KZbin, All I want to do is watch a video, stop making me update. I remember that Tell Tale Heart as well in my english class we read it

[@Rofloflcopta]

Yes. It is

[@randominternetman8177]

holy shit you're right

[@SLB94]

Well.... It was bound to happen eventually..

[@Dusk-Spark]

Very nicely done. ^-^ *listens to it again*

[@Herobrine-vh8lv]

Princess Celestia: Oh another letter about her dreams should I do something? Nah it's probably nothing. Me: You are the worst teacher ever

[@101wolfanime]

What if Twilight never sent the letters?

[@benjaminwilson-ripsom8474]

First guess, minute 27, she figured out why ponies kill. She's going insane.

[@jameskitt15]

for your first fanfic reading you did an awesome job

[@wahwah4404]

my all time favorite!!!! GREAT JOB you earned a subscribe

[@wahwah4404]

this reading made me sick to my stomach

[@as-yr2fk]

+Emma Backer what happened to all time favorite...?

[@droidcommanderthespinosaur689]

This is definitely one of my favorites. No i am not saying why.

[@wolfyhesengaurd4469]

her downfall was knowledge

[@lpsjewel324]

The worse version of Midnight Sparkle.

[@MarMarshy2020]

LPS Jewel shhhhh

[@MJ-ns1uc]

From a person who listened to wayyy too much pony over the last several years: I’ve listened to this several times over the last few years and I know that it’s just a fan fiction, but I can’t help but realize in recent years about how badly mental health and the psychosis of psychopaths and sociopaths is presented. I know twilight tends to want to understand all about a thing in order to comprehend it, but I think her descent into madness happened way too quickly and I appreciate the idea behind the story, I just wish it was portrayed better and that the author had taken more time with it. Also Emogak you did absolutely fabulous and I think you are absolutely fabulous!

[@StygianIkazuchi]

honestly... I didn't like this. Not because it was a bad reading, but because it was too WELL read. the recording part alone kept me up until 4 in the fucking morning, I was so disturbed! Scribbler scares me with how painfully real those screams sounded...

[@Wobbles789]

This is another one of my favorite grimdark fanfics and I have a lot XD but this is definitely in my top 10

[@midnightplayz7998]

how come princess luna hasn't seen or got some sort of warning about twilight's dreams at the beginning.

[@fatecosmic923]

I believe this fic was made before it was revealed that Luna could traverse dreams.

[@jamesallen1679]

@Joanna Blue i don't think they found them until after she was arrested

[@djbeowulf2630]

ITS THE INFLUENCE OF THE TWI-CANE ....XD

[@bradtheclaustrophobicxenomorph]

The saddest part is at the end I asked my self what it would feel like to kill someone.

[@Sal-oh7tb]

Pinkie pie just walks off after seeing a dead body like "Yup. Same *shit* as always."

[@maximstuckert9274]

Exactly

[@Quinty-Imara]

You should do more of these!

[@frostywings]

that was really awesome in the.voice reading that made my feel what the F and the FEELS also think what luna was thinking about as she is the nightime princess

[@dpr4891]

ughhhhhhh best fan fiction evaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa i cant get over how awsome it is

[@prettylittlepsycho1073]

that was.......wow........that was real deep......great voice acting by the way

[@Ieatpaste23]

"It's for science!" It's the same line I use when I try to pick up a lady. Never works though... :P

[@sleepystarspider5217]

+Ieatpaste23 Smart ladies...

[@Ieatpaste23]

+Sleepy Starspider Yeah, well think of the damage they are doing to the scientific community though!

[@coldhaixx1905]

Bruh I'm very Concerned for you :/

[@julianab03]

@@coldhaixx1905 Ikr, what a moron :(

[@rachelegbune1646]

SHE WAS GONNA KILL DERPY -*pulls out ban hammer*

[@crankydoodle3019]

this is so.... AMAZING!!!!!!!! Its my frckn favourite!!!!

[@projectz1363]

it's like intrusive thoughts with someone who didn't know that was a thing and was just like "well OBVIOUSLY the only way to stop thinking about it to just do it!" which is like..alright...

[@hypedragon2197]

1:02 - 1:05 every grimdark mlp comic reader ever

[@wendigostudiosLNandMlp66]

Anyone found it ironic how Pinkie Pie is the first to leave Twilight considering she is the first mare Twilight meets in Ponyville?

[@TheRealDJHitchcock]

So well made!

[@coolname3926]

"end it quickly" after the first stab it took her 2 minutes and 33 seconds to fully kill her, doesn't sound quick to me

[@luminouslight9677]

Oh G!! Oh G!! Wow....I'm actually lost for words at this one. I mean....AWESOME!!!!

[@luminouslight9677]

Thnxs for the entertainment and keep up the great work

[@kowhaifan1249]

celestias just reading this like "i see nothing wrong with this"

[@emmy8308]

The ending is so very saddening and poor Twilight is now a murderer?!?!?!?!

[@artgirlgammer4662]

"They say... curiosity killed the cat... I killed the cat... Curiosity only brought her to me" - In sound mind

[@Silence6969]

a lovely creepy birthday gift, thx Emogak! :3

[@raeabronski5189]

MY EARS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[@cherrydreamblastartsandrea4507]

I feel ya man